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Scare2
08-16-2007, 12:36 AM
sevwon keep ur bars same width, especially in ur S's.
sucka. dope style but the one arrow is outa place.
Scare2
08-16-2007, 12:44 AM
good handys tho. color it. thats nice n clean.
Edward"Sezer"Hands
08-16-2007, 12:55 AM
deff lose the arrow.
for now though keep all your bars to form your letters the same size.
lose the little nub things on the end of the letters.
scooot your o in closer to the n and lean it more to the left.
what I circled in the red lose.
the green is an example of what i mean keep all your bars the same width.
http://i41.photobucket.com/albums/e276/DannyHartu/Photo94-6.jpg
http://i41.photobucket.com/albums/e276/DannyHartu/battle2.jpg
http://i41.photobucket.com/albums/e276/DannyHartu/battle1.jpg
http://i41.photobucket.com/albums/e276/DannyHartu/tezer4.jpg
Hoostein
08-16-2007, 02:31 AM
My friend wants me to post this for crits. http://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c338/canuckboy321/dram.jpg
Sou - Mvd
08-16-2007, 03:29 AM
aka I drew this but dont want to admit to my toyness. It's ok, go to the new to graff thread and drop the arrows.
tez - the second one is hot, I like it's flow and that character is pretty cool too. Keep working with fun stuff like that slime, with basic pieces like that, it's what gives it some life and individuality.
http://img365.imageshack.us/img365/419/009zz7.jpg
some nonsense and a ridiculous A
repsSDN
08-16-2007, 05:26 AM
Sou - looks sick.
Teze - your style is no nice and clean.
Did a not so good looking sketch but may aswell post it.
http://img362.imageshack.us/img362/8125/eurotingfh1.jpg
Crits?
inkbits
08-16-2007, 07:20 AM
Reps - whole thing starts off kinda chunkier and good but it looses a bit mid M and A by going too thin imo.
Hoostein - he/she needs to ditch the arrows and get some structure down more before trying extensions too much. go with much simpler basic letters and work with getting thickness even etc. use bars.
Asma - top buster on left looks allright. Last A on the handstyle looks good aswell. You loose the 3d in the bottom left one by trying to cross over sections and lines that are too thin.
Sezer - the first one looks good but the E's could suit the other letters better imo. the E's in the the second one though are decent, you should tilt them more to the right and flow them out more. dodgy examp..
http://209.85.48.9/8780/128/upload/p11587801.jpg
hoodrich - your handstyles rippen. The W on the sketch though should be wide to suit the style of the S rather then leaning over imo. Structured to match your W handstyle shape if that makes sense.
sevewon - i'd try and work on letter thinkness/bars before trying to add too much style to them like you have on the S.
canvas and not finished but I'm pic deficient..
http://209.85.48.9/8780/128/upload/p11587598.jpg
jesus its been a long time since i have been here
so i have been working on my euro style and this is my first real attempt, looks better on paper but scanner acting screwy so here it is through vandal lol
http://img256.imageshack.us/img256/6771/untitledko3.png (http://imageshack.us)
Shot at 2007-08-16
MUSEone
08-16-2007, 11:48 AM
Reps-overall nice work, but work on shading.
inkbits-ill canvas bro, can't w8 to see the outcome
*OsBaGoSh@
08-16-2007, 12:09 PM
inkbits-- that canvas lookin ill as hell.. you should add sometotem poles or something to add to that border if you know what i am talking a bout.
SOu-- the bottom one that looks like metal supporters for buildings is pretty cool work with that.
sezer-- the black and white ones with the green are cool .. i really like the character though.
scare= thoose simples are way coool
new one done with sharpies :/
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b152/F-Flat/quickie-4.jpg
c.n.k
08-16-2007, 12:43 PM
http://i116.photobucket.com/albums/o6/pokoman/neuroe.jpg
Bazer
08-16-2007, 12:58 PM
who cares if theyre just sharpies?? i use sharpie most of the times... neuro your r an e look funny man.. iono... heres a sketch i did in a homies book yesterday...
http://i190.photobucket.com/albums/z227/bazer6_ebook/SP_A0963.jpg
looks pretty gay..
glass
08-16-2007, 01:05 PM
yeah i don't really think letter size matters but graffiti is basically just peoples opinions as with all other art so just do what seems to fit.
anyhoo, haven't been too active because of vacation and my job so here's an idea i had for an S. crits?
http://i17.tinypic.com/6gx3oyw.jpg
bump
ill crit you guys later cause im in a hurry
thanks in advance for crits
bouncingsoul
08-16-2007, 01:16 PM
Heeeey Baze, want to exchange sometime? Been digging your shit for a while
http://i59.photobucket.com/albums/g314/poopdepants/IMG_0922.jpg
Unfinished, by far... My first canvas..
jesus its been a long time since i have been here
so i have been working on my euro style and this is my first real attempt, looks better on paper but scanner acting screwy so here it is through vandal lol
http://img256.imageshack.us/img256/6771/untitledko3.png (http://imageshack.us)
Shot at 2007-08-16
Bump for critz please
BouncingSoul: Dud i liked your old stuff better way to much going on in your piece, take it down a bit make the letters maybe a little thicker and less bouncy :P
Glass: Sorry man not feelin it i guess its not to my liking i say scrap it and try again
Fube: Love it dont like the top extension on the E
Drakula
08-16-2007, 02:18 PM
Bouncingsoul-sick can't wait to see it finished!
Bazer-lookin good.The only thing thats killing me is the extension on the top of the E.It's wobbly.
Code-I'm feeling the R and the N and the last letter but I can't tell what it is.The O is a bit boring compared to the other letters.
New throwie:
http://i86.photobucket.com/albums/k90/dspimage/good267.jpg
Does the D look a bit too much like a B?
neukr
08-16-2007, 02:30 PM
http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa168/neukr/baaatttllee.jpg
http://i203.photobucket.com/albums/aa168/neukr/summo-2.jpg
alive
08-16-2007, 02:34 PM
Bump for critz please
BouncingSoul: Dud i liked your old stuff better way to much going on in your piece, take it down a bit make the letters maybe a little thicker and less bouncy :P
shut the fuck up
do you live in europe?
drak get urs letters the same size.
neukr, work on consistancy
neuker i will give you a crit since your new, but next time crit the peoples work above you, like mine for instince :P
neuker: Your letters have no flow they just have random chops you need to find when to use those bumps, also your letters just overall need work.
sKeeLo
08-16-2007, 02:54 PM
http://209.85.48.9/8780/128/upload/p11587598.jpg
bumps for my man . . not feelin the candle thoo but it aint finished yet
an exchange with WERS, feel like im fuckin it up so i decided to take a pic now before more damage is done . . . think i will have to add alot of black with the 3d and outline . . . just dont know
http://img61.imageshack.us/img61/9246/1282809kn6.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
alive
08-16-2007, 02:57 PM
sky5! last time i heard from u u were sitting in a 3rd world country crack whore house with maggots crawling on the screen or some crazy shit. howve u been?
the piece is dope, but u kind of sank after the WE. always dope as fuck tho.
AnteUp
08-16-2007, 03:33 PM
omen sketch...
http://i157.photobucket.com/albums/t66/AnteUp14/Picture008.jpg
erape...
http://i157.photobucket.com/albums/t66/AnteUp14/Picture007.jpg
master of distaster...
http://i157.photobucket.com/albums/t66/AnteUp14/Picture006.jpg
god...please crit guys....
edit: skeelo fuckin crazy mane...i feel like i've seen this style before...wat do you write?
ink-fuck im not worthy of crittin...its awesome
boncin-fuck the haters, i love the addons an everything
sKeeLo
08-16-2007, 03:47 PM
walkin the streets of TJ gettin treated like norm from cheers in every brothel i visited yes, maggots on a computer hell no . . . nice to see your still on here, pm me if u want a cardboard paint marker joint done and ill mail it to you . .
amok - heres a quick joint i did, top one is just straight letter . .. in teh 2nd one i normally look for teh dominant bar of a letter tehn bend it so here i bent teh left bar of the A left bar of M (to replicate teh movement in A) i suck at simple Os then bend teh left bar of teh K . . on teh bottom one you can see how u can add lil tabs (i fucked up every tab on this one) and what not to compliment and fill in some open areas . .its pretty shitty but i hope u get the idea = look to bend/curve 1 bar of every letter
http://img250.imageshack.us/img250/3151/1282810ju5.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
paste
08-16-2007, 03:50 PM
Anteup- Not too psyched about the orange piece, i dunno, just not very striking, I like the feeling of the humanoid throwy thats pretty sweet. Pretty cool handies going there too, nice and flowy.
Amok-Not too keen on that A or the k for that matter, but k's are rough so I'll cut you some slack on that. :P cause I know you desperately care what I say.
Inkbits-Real nice. Cant wait to see that beast finished.
Skeelo- Its nice, but the black will make it pop more and give it some dimensional feel.
Dracula-Ehhhh, not too sure, its decent. Give it a good fill to make it stand out more.
Bouncing Soul- I know I already said this in the canvas thread, but that thing looks real promising right now, I cant wait to see that finished.
There, now you all have some crits, cause I'm just such a great guy.
-Paste
I write quake
PM for trades/exchanges.
HoodRichSucka
08-16-2007, 04:02 PM
for a buddy. didnt know where to post
http://i78.photobucket.com/albums/j106/hoodrichsucka/DSCN6385.jpg
Sumoe
08-16-2007, 04:04 PM
bumps for my man . . not feelin the candle thoo but it aint finished yet
an exchange with WERS, feel like im fuckin it up so i decided to take a pic now before more damage is done . . . think i will have to add alot of black with the 3d and outline . . . just dont know
http://img61.imageshack.us/img61/9246/1282809kn6.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
canvas and not finished but I'm pic deficient..
http://209.85.48.9/8780/128/upload/p11587598.jpg
Bump...
and some dirty ass, shitty, sketch. Not done, by the way, gotta make it less pointy and shit but, whatever, haven't posted a flick in a while.
http://img258.imageshack.us/my.php?image=dsc0099af8.jpghttp://img258.imageshack.us/my.php?image=dsc0099af8.jpghttp://img258.imageshack.us/my.php?image=dsc0099af8.jpghttp://img258.imageshack.us/my.php?image=dsc0099af8.jpg
Knews-That "S" is crazy good. Not sure about that shit on the left of the "K" but. as you said, it's not done as of now, so I won't judge it yet.
Edit: (Because imageshack too long and Hoodrich posted some shit) Hoodrich, your handies are dope, but you need to do something about the "N"s and the "Y". The "A" could use a little work, too. Not bad, though.
http://img258.imageshack.us/my.php?image=dsc0099af8.jpg
speak1er
08-16-2007, 05:21 PM
those last 2 are hot hot fire
http://i84.photobucket.com/albums/k37/speakaa/IMG_0409.jpg
yooo Skeelo feeling em maaan
speaker...dude ... chill man. .. draw basic lettyering..no colour...aighttttttt...use bars like skeelo did for AMOK.
heres a Scife sketch for sum dope head.
http://i191.photobucket.com/albums/z248/amkah/sciferrrrrrr.jpg
The E is small but im changin up my style ..
bouncingsoul
08-16-2007, 06:55 PM
"Caer" exchange for alive
http://i59.photobucket.com/albums/g314/poopdepants/IMG_0923.jpg
http://i59.photobucket.com/albums/g314/poopdepants/IMG_0924.jpg
Akshun
08-16-2007, 10:19 PM
speaker go way more simple it makes doing styles alot easier
amk-i think u should seperate the e and f cuz all ur other letters are spaced so it just dont look right
bouncing good shit i like it
http://img297.imageshack.us/img297/4131/40790904gb4.jpg
new throwie style just trying a bunch of shit out tell me wat u think of this
sex without condoms
08-16-2007, 11:40 PM
my daily grime while studying binary.
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0815071608.jpg
closer up
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0815071609.jpg
new style? its gonna say meat your smile when its finished. idk what to do with the T though it totally fucks it up.
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0815071609a.jpg
and stickies cause i <3 you ppl.(thats why im posting them here, in the bbooks)
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0817070025.jpg
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0817070024a.jpg
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0817070024.jpg
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0817070023.jpg
Ace shit bro, that throw gets better everytime I see it.
Personally I'm not feeling the new style, if I was you I'd stick with what you're doing, it's hot.
canvas i just did.
im hoping someone thinks im decent and wants this.
im asking for $15 and shipping from ohio,
but the price in negotiable.
and im down for trades of almost any type.
http://i114.photobucket.com/albums/n276/joshumms/MVC-087S-5.jpg
Billburg
08-17-2007, 12:46 AM
hoodrichsuka- the "ant" look like there almost discontected from the rest or somthing
amk- yo "ife" look really close compard to the first letters and your f looks weird for some reson
sex without condoms- the one tht you said is your new stlye or w.e. im likin that alot but your right yo t is kinda fucked up lookin
now heres a throwie im workin on so crits please
http://i137.photobucket.com/albums/q203/Bleep36/snap007.jpg
KASE2
08-17-2007, 01:01 AM
CITER - i lyk it man it jus looks nice
SNAP - i wuld add tha lil thing on top of tha '"S" on tha top of tha "A"
snap-i dig the p
senior, done for my senior crown at school
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b152/F-Flat/quickie-5.jpg
...AMOK...
08-17-2007, 02:24 AM
snap- it looks good man i think u should add those bumps to the S and the A though
iris- idk go simple bro and try to make it a lil cleaner
http://i44.photobucket.com/albums/f21/holdentitties/graff_amok048.jpg
better?
yeah i guess i can make it cleaner, idk i think thats pretty simple
ehh i have a sloppy hand
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b152/F-Flat/q.jpg
rayseone
08-17-2007, 03:13 AM
amok, your shit looks too forced, let it floww mann
iris - with some tweaking thta style could be ill, keep working with it
rela - simple dope character man, props
kovr - ill shit too, i say keep with your style you got not feeling the new one as much, that binary ish is good too
bouncing -- fooking ill shit
so i ofunda buncha markers decided to go to town and fill a sketch hardcore aha, yes the fill pretyty much likcs balls crits?
http://img150.imageshack.us/img150/4235/seyarhq9.jpg
KASE2
08-17-2007, 04:13 AM
http://i137.photobucket.com/albums/q226/D_510/kswhiteblueorange.jpg
SEYAR - im feelin that fill homie. stay up
crits on my shit por favor
Akshun
08-17-2007, 07:21 AM
kase i like the letter style only thing with ur white paint marker fill try and use the same strokes to make it look clean. so if u go vertical stay vertical yadadamean
reyseone- i cant make out the letters cuz ur outline isnt thick enough. thicken up that outline and ull be straight. nice fill though.
iris-that style would be dope if the letter structure was there. but i can barely make it out. just keep sketchin that style and make tweaks here and there to give it form
now bump for crits
http://img297.imageshack.us/img297/4131/40790904gb4.jpg
repsSDN
08-17-2007, 08:11 AM
Akshun - try to fill in the negative space and sort out the shadow.
Kase - the S isnt to bad but the K doesn't look right cos of its jagged edges.
Seyar - your shits so nice.
http://img410.imageshack.us/img410/8093/extensionexpxk8.jpg
Critiques?
alive
08-17-2007, 09:34 AM
snap- it looks good man i think u should add those bumps to the S and the A though
iris- idk go simple bro and try to make it a lil cleaner
http://i44.photobucket.com/albums/f21/holdentitties/graff_amok048.jpg
better?
not only are you not using bars properly (keep them all the same width!)
do not just bite sky5(Skeelo) that will not help, trust me, ive tried that shit no lies, youve gotta devolop every fucking nuance on your own or it just doesnt work. use sky5's help just for basic form to try to morph your letters to, or as pure inspiration.
next, dont bother with 3d, forcefields, or 3d until ur much better, focus on the LETTERS.
pez ss
08-17-2007, 10:32 AM
http://i243.photobucket.com/albums/ff27/qust/pencilwsave.jpghttp://i243.photobucket.com/albums/ff27/qust/averburngreen.jpghttp://i243.photobucket.com/albums/ff27/qust/ave.jpghttp://i243.photobucket.com/albums/ff27/qust/nsws.jpghttp://i243.photobucket.com/albums/ff27/qust/greenws.jpg
F.R.A.T.
08-17-2007, 10:38 AM
pez- i love the black on oragne, great colour combo
new ish
http://i84.photobucket.com/albums/k18/thebucketofphotos/Piece2.jpg
late night doodles
http://i84.photobucket.com/albums/k18/thebucketofphotos/PeanutforaSeanut.jpg
Coloured
http://i84.photobucket.com/albums/k18/thebucketofphotos/PeanutforaSeanutColoured.jpg
hungr
08-17-2007, 10:51 AM
iris i would try developing yer own style instead of using other peoples styles.. there are enough people who do that kinda stuff, fat spots with skinny bars linking out places, like ensoe.. but theirs have structure and they most likely developed the style themselves... but yeh id start with basics
FRAT the ME is noice.. just need more space for a K
knews and i are doing a canvas exchange,
heres the background for his..
http://i114.photobucket.com/albums/n276/joshumms/MVC-090S-1.jpg
the drips in the middle left, i did something like it on another canvas, but the can was almost out, so i didnt get enough paint there for it to do what i wanted.
and heres another canvas that i would just love a few bucks for.
http://i114.photobucket.com/albums/n276/joshumms/MVC-089S-2.jpg
the reds more vibrant in person, its the same red as knew's background.
repsSDN
08-17-2007, 12:06 PM
Akshun - try to fill in the negative space and sort out the shadow.
Kase - the S isnt to bad but the K doesn't look right cos of its jagged edges.
Seyar - your shits so nice.
http://img410.imageshack.us/img410/8093/extensionexpxk8.jpg
Critiques?
Bump cos i got no crits...
F.R.A.T.
08-17-2007, 12:08 PM
new ish
http://i84.photobucket.com/albums/k18/thebucketofphotos/Piece2.jpg
late night doodles
http://i84.photobucket.com/albums/k18/thebucketofphotos/PeanutforaSeanut.jpg
Coloured
http://i84.photobucket.com/albums/k18/thebucketofphotos/PeanutforaSeanutColoured.jpg
bump for critz, uhh i love that charac, and nice backrounds
dizzle_d
08-17-2007, 12:16 PM
damn Frat that character is illen
I love it
the piece is nice too but Imo I think you should move the K down even it out more but don't even it all the way
if that makes sense
alive
08-17-2007, 12:26 PM
http://i55.photobucket.com/albums/g121/coercethemasses/DSC03396.jpg
http://i55.photobucket.com/albums/g121/coercethemasses/DSC03397.jpg
http://i55.photobucket.com/albums/g121/coercethemasses/DSC03398.jpg
Akshun
08-17-2007, 12:31 PM
alive-man use a nother camera i cant see the top one but the throwies are nice though and from what i see of the top ur the c is nice
frat-dope shit i like the color scheme and character is dope
repsnd- i told u i like the shit homie
hungr
08-17-2007, 12:37 PM
alive u might wanna make the top bar of the O come across to take up the negative space between the L and O.. does it say GLO or CLO? ..in the case thats its a G make the middle bar more visible
alive
08-17-2007, 12:40 PM
its GLO to be GLORY. ill work on that, and i know abt extending the O but so far i havent been able to figure out a way to do it so it looks decent. ill keep going and post it up. peace.
ps.
http://i55.photobucket.com/albums/g121/coercethemasses/DSC03399.jpg
better?
Alive...nice...when you gonna paint those throwiesssss....you live in NY man...paint that isssshhhh !!!!! ;) :) ... feeling that GLO too..
FRAT...char is illllllll ... love elephanty !! .. aajaj//nice letters too..
well..
repost cos i need crits other than shit i alrady know about * E is too small and the distance varys from each letter *
http://i191.photobucket.com/albums/z248/amkah/sciferrrrrrr.jpg
dayummmmmnnnn
peaceeeeee
bouncingsoul
08-17-2007, 01:08 PM
"Killin' in the name of..."
This will be fun to color... I just need more Decos
http://i59.photobucket.com/albums/g314/poopdepants/IMG_0925.jpg
ninja_303_763
08-17-2007, 01:21 PM
http://i101.photobucket.com/albums/m50/ninja_303_763/5015.jpg
an adjustment from the other style
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b152/F-Flat/quickie-6.jpg
AMK- i like your style to me it looks like it should be sharper and maybe work on the F
Bouncing soul- ridiculous man cant wait to see it done
sky_one
08-17-2007, 02:07 PM
iris-dope shit man
ninja-fix your E
bouncingsoul-do it more clean
more shit crits please
http://img66.imageshack.us/img66/2984/graffiti1pw0.png
Chalk
08-17-2007, 02:19 PM
hey sky. nice to see you never improve.
do some simples before you do bends and extensions. you don't know your letters at all and you draw them enough. may as well make it worth your time.
hungr
08-17-2007, 02:19 PM
knews looks throwback.. by any chance are u addicted to guitar hero 2?? or just a fan of rage?
alive looks better.. id make the top extension on the O only go towards the L to take up that negative space and stop it instead of having that little nubbin come off the other side
amk not really feelin it..scarp it and start again (thats just what i think)
Sou - Mvd
08-17-2007, 02:33 PM
You can never do enough simples. Your main problem though is learning where to bend your letters, work on that. A few pages back the better sky posted a pretty decent tutorial.
a quick 5 minute practice scribble for a battle
http://img267.imageshack.us/img267/3252/002fm2.jpg
Stinky
08-17-2007, 02:48 PM
Ahhh yea man, Rage. Great choice Bouncin. I think it would look pretty shnazzy if you added as a background perhaps silouhettes of each member. Not sure how much room you are workin with that would be great, even if you just added the lyrics on to it. Whatever you do have a good time doin it.
not feelin in sou-myd.
you can do much better
but it was quick.
http://i191.photobucket.com/albums/z248/amkah/uku.jpg
bleeeh
canvas for knews..
http://i114.photobucket.com/albums/n276/joshumms/MVC-088S-3.jpg
sKeeLo
08-17-2007, 03:54 PM
http://img444.imageshack.us/img444/2839/1282812jf6.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
finished WERS exchange, bad color scheme/fill. . . alive ill be workin on your joint soon
chalk - sky's sketches look pretty basic/simple to me, i think its just a matter of practice and time doing exactly what hes doin . . i kinda remember what some of your sketches look like and you got room to improve on the basics too like all of us down here . . .
knews - for canvasses and stuff i like to do a rough/sketchy outline too but i try to keep my pencil marks light so if you use a light color paint marker it wont smear/dirty your nib and ruin your markers . . . looking nice, id love to color that thing so many options
alive
08-17-2007, 04:11 PM
beautiful sky. love the cardboard. ha.
http://img444.imageshack.us/img444/2839/1282812jf6.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
sick skeelo. just work on that color fill. ick.
also i dont like the boxes sticking out of the top and bottom. i like when the piece stands more alone, but i guess thats just me.
nice!
i just drew this one up......
http://img524.imageshack.us/img524/356/stereopr5.jpg
ick i hate scanners. every little mistake shows. lol
yoyoyoyoyoyoyoyoyo
skeelo dopeio
Uuuuuuh your style is so nice matey!
well..
http://i191.photobucket.com/albums/z248/amkah/g-1.jpg
i feel an improvement..and i personally like how it looks...
wutchoo.think.adoo ?
BIGel
08-17-2007, 05:20 PM
You can never do enough simples. Your main problem though is learning where to bend your letters, work on that. A few pages back the better sky posted a pretty decent tutorial.
a quick 5 minute practice scribble for a battle
http://img267.imageshack.us/img267/3252/002fm2.jpg
i cant see alot of letter structure in here, but i really really like where you're going with this. keep working this organic style i cant wait to see where it progresses to in a few months.
HoodRichSucka
08-17-2007, 07:07 PM
http://i78.photobucket.com/albums/j106/hoodrichsucka/Photo95-1.jpg
bored at work..
BIGel
08-17-2007, 08:06 PM
http://pic20.picturetrail.com/VOL1202/4129875/15355407/272355235.jpg
silentchaos14
08-17-2007, 08:46 PM
bigel- looks sick keep up the good work
http://i186.photobucket.com/albums/x65/silentchaos14/MorneSketch2.jpg
turned a tag i did into a piece. i dont like the R cuz its so small but oh well it was a first attempt. and my M is fucked too
crits?
sir.one
08-17-2007, 08:56 PM
needs structure.
bouncingsoul
08-17-2007, 10:43 PM
"Asma" starter sketch. I don't feel like doing anymore tonight so I just flicked it. Oh yeah sky, hah, I think I got so used to using ballpoints and pressing down hella hard on the page... I really have no idea how to make my pencil lines lighter without losing control in a way, because my hand just goes crazy when it's off the page
http://i59.photobucket.com/albums/g314/poopdepants/IMG_0927.jpg
po3rk
08-17-2007, 11:46 PM
i think its dope AMKWHA
Sou i agree with El
San, sorry idk what to say
bIgEl- bigILL
Morne, you suck balls. dont pick up a pen again :o
i didnt want to post this but eQust told me to.
this is my bus ride home. it says phatz, and i know the Z sucks pig dick.
and i fixed the 3d afterwards.
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e387/x_casper/1187328693.jpg
Hoostein
08-18-2007, 01:19 AM
wat do you think? been writing for 2 weeks. i know my letters and shading shxt are messed up. what do i need to work on the most?
http://www.fenixupload.com/files/7t8aa50o84n2svzgepwm_thumb.jpg (http://www.fenixupload.com/viewer.php?file=7t8aa50o84n2svzgepwm.jpg)
(click to make bigger)
Just do simple letters, draw the letters on your keyboard. This will help you learn lletter structure. I filled 8 or 9 notebooks doing straight letters.
BIGel
08-18-2007, 01:32 AM
more crap.
http://pic20.picturetrail.com/VOL1202/4129875/15355407/272422266.jpg
Hyperactiveness?
08-18-2007, 03:43 AM
Aww give Morne a chance. Trust me.. I did worse shit back then o_O.
Uh.. yea i've been surfing the forums as a stranger for a couple months.. finally decided to join BombingScience.
I know the deal so yes, AMK! Awesome, just an opinion but its kinda hard to tell the K is a K. Just my stupid opinion. Dont listen to me.
And im familiar with the respect BIGel got around here and I cant disagree with why yall respect him. The man has got it down!
http://a587.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/124/l_c288460e26eae547af3366ae141a939a.jpg
Im nothing much. Just been about 10 months. Slow progress. But I hope im getting there? What do you think? >_<"
glass
08-18-2007, 10:43 AM
yeah dude po3rk, dont come in and start flaming peoples stuff on your first fucking post its annoying as hell. Plus you could use some structure work yourself.
Morne: good job working with simples, you're going in the right direction.
BigEl: sick handstyle dude
Bouncing: always like to see your stuff man
hungr
08-18-2007, 11:07 AM
AMK that is much nicer than yer last shit..only things i would change is the K. the random line at the bottom looks odd cause none of hte other letters have it, and the extension u have from the top to the M looks forced
morne make yer letters the same size... yer R looks pretty tiny
bigel u provide me with material to touch myself to every night
bouncingosulds maybe extend the leg on the last A and do some arrows or shit off it instead of having it small with arrows still.. but looks nice. how did the other one turn out?
yo hoodrich..
keep on with those handys man.
they will evolve into letters..dope dope letters..
alive
08-18-2007, 11:48 AM
"Asma" starter sketch. I don't feel like doing anymore tonight so I just flicked it. Oh yeah sky, hah, I think I got so used to using ballpoints and pressing down hella hard on the page... I really have no idea how to make my pencil lines lighter without losing control in a way, because my hand just goes crazy when it's off the page
http://i59.photobucket.com/albums/g314/poopdepants/IMG_0927.jpg
id suggest instead of just cutting the leg of the last A off, do what you did on the first side, except flipped upside down. does that make any sense? if it doesnt ill explain it better on AIM or some shit. haha. or ignore me. thats valid too. haha
peace all.
http://i80.photobucket.com/albums/j193/afekt_1/104_1207.jpg
old
havent sketch for weeks some new stuff coming
hiepur- looks alright to me, seems you know most of your letters, i would change the E to make it flow more though
sKeeLo
08-18-2007, 01:13 PM
never understood the gay compliments like "you make my panties wet" . . .hopefully i never will
http://img409.imageshack.us/img409/3038/1262663ul8.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
so i aint picless
afek - not bad but id move the U alil more left so the E kinda overlaps it instead of having 2 bars run along the same path and share alot of space hiding crucial parts/letter structure of your U
repsSDN
08-18-2007, 01:26 PM
Skeelo i like it nice fill.
Afek good simples man.
http://img513.imageshack.us/img513/1543/noncolourug7.jpg
My bro sed it looked better without the 3d filled in.
http://img513.imageshack.us/img513/2125/colourpeicezb3.jpg
I feel like im improving...
crits?
skeelo- looks sweet man
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b152/F-Flat/quickie-7.jpg
repsSDN
08-18-2007, 01:48 PM
Skeelo i like it nice fill.
Afek good simples man.
http://img513.imageshack.us/img513/1543/noncolourug7.jpg
My bro sed it looked better without the 3d filled in.
http://img513.imageshack.us/img513/2125/colourpeicezb3.jpg
I feel like im improving...
crits?
Bump got bottom the page...
Iris i like it but there is a few little bump bits i dont like.
dizzle_d
08-18-2007, 01:55 PM
Afek- I like it, ... I geuss I just like that kind of lettering.
Skeelo- thats illen,... I love it. colors and letters are real nice.
Peor- the E and R are your best letters in that, try using bars that are the same width for now, and the O looks pretty half assed, as does the right side of the P, so try and work on that. keep it comin
Emac - I see some improvement, only thing though is you should focus more on your letters, I mean imo I think you should get rid of the Zigzag extensions, it just doesn't look good. also it looks better with the 3d. keep sketchinnnnnn................
yeah I changed my name
alright I haven't posted anything in a minute so just let me knoe what you think.
http://img252.imageshack.us/img252/8897/img1842vb0.jpg
yeah I tried fixin the U and started outlining it but i got pretty sloppy after the B so I'm gonna have to fix that up .
http://img530.imageshack.us/img530/8937/img1845ac5.jpg
constructive crits please
dizzle - what he said^, but the letters are pretty solid, with a nice forcefield and maybe some bubbles it wud look fresh!
havent posted in a while, pushing my style into the 3d recently, came up with this this evening, still needs a drop shadow tho
says "bare forti to"http://img401.imageshack.us/img401/8871/pic050uj7.jpg
Sumoe
08-18-2007, 02:28 PM
http://fc03.deviantart.com/fs20/i/2007/230/8/4/Eh____by_SUMOE.jpghttp://img524.imageshack.us/my.php?image=dsc0100io4.jpg
sumoe thats so clean its gross.. so jealous. love your style
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b152/F-Flat/quickie-8.jpg
dizzle_d
08-18-2007, 03:08 PM
Sumoe- that looks so nice. really clean
Iris- that looks better. a lot better. still, the o looks a little bit odd
00-made-00
08-18-2007, 03:19 PM
iris- i really enjoy looking at that, with progress it could be quite a stunner.
Sume- Yes Yes Yes, That S make me happy.
rXIII
08-18-2007, 03:30 PM
http://streetcollege.net/meet/Attachments/Image255sc.JPG
Check my last nigth work up!
Edward"Sezer"Hands
08-18-2007, 04:09 PM
New handstyle battle
Word-Buenos Aires.
Due-When I get 10 entries.
Mod-Edward"sezer"Hands, PM me your entries.
-ShAmEE-
08-18-2007, 04:28 PM
"Killin' in the name of..."
This will be fun to color... I just need more Decos
http://i59.photobucket.com/albums/g314/poopdepants/IMG_0925.jpg
just like to point out that u started to used non-lined paper and pencil and rubber, still i liked ur style in blue with the old skool pen. ur dope, and u should kno it...
finished canvas for knews.
the stencil was last minute, i jsut made it and had to put it on something,
i think it looks alright..
http://i114.photobucket.com/albums/n276/joshumms/MVC-088S-4.jpg
sky_one
08-18-2007, 05:33 PM
wow nice canvas man
sumoe-looks dope man
rpssdn-dope
heres something i did 10 mins ago i thinke my Y its alot better....crits please
http://img242.imageshack.us/img242/6818/47293632bp5.png
Socrates
08-18-2007, 05:47 PM
sumoe thats so clean its gross.. so jealous. love your style
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b152/F-Flat/quickie-8.jpg
kaer?
Peder means faggot in serbian
and because you bitches always ask for proof, though i dont really blame you for biting. If i was a biter i would bite kaer
http://img171.imageshack.us/img171/4710/kaerpinkfuckyou06censorgp5.jpg
http://img297.imageshack.us/img297/8751/imgp1614rx4.jpg
http://img171.imageshack.us/img171/294/greeeneryyw9.jpg
http://img159.imageshack.us/img159/3968/kaerky6dy6.jpg
http://img441.imageshack.us/img441/2087/kaerpieceofshittk5.jpg
repsSDN
08-18-2007, 05:57 PM
Uhhh - the canvas looks sick.
Sky - try thicken up your K cos it ent as fat, and try overlap your letters more.
Im off on holiday so ill hopefully imrpove tht style when im gone and post pics when im back.
http://fc03.deviantart.com/fs20/i/2007/230/8/4/Eh____by_SUMOE.jpghttp://img524.imageshack.us/my.php?image=dsc0100io4.jpg
Bump.
great to see sumthin new form yah man
good call Socrates...that was eaten for fuckign lunch !
sky.keep using bars and bending them a little more everytime man.
no addons yet !!!
well..i could say the same for myself..
http://i191.photobucket.com/albums/z248/amkah/rg.jpg
i got carried away listening to Jurassic 5 and did twirls everywhere...i then realised all those twirls add up to sumthing good..
a key to where i can place addons.
but does it look good anyways.
im just tryna advanced more and more with this style of addon that suits this style of letter
..
This was far far better
http://i191.photobucket.com/albums/z248/amkah/g-1.jpg
i need too chilllll and let shit like this floowww
" we be te crew guess who the J U R A double S I C .. where in the place to be we got the rythym that makes yah fingers snap crackle pop fizz fizz "
Drakula
08-18-2007, 07:16 PM
Amk I'm not feelin that one with all the swirls but you admit that it was bad so I'll just crit the second one.Pretty sick man.I like it.just a few extensions I'm not feeling.I would lose the extension on the bottom left of your A.I don't think you need to join bits up aswell.Lose all the joining bits.Finally I think you should get rid of the extension coming off the right leg of the K.
http://i86.photobucket.com/albums/k90/dspimage/good268.jpg
Sheeeet.That K is small.
A little simple London style thing.Took me about 10 minutes.
Hoostein
08-18-2007, 07:45 PM
The D really doesn't go with it, and like you said the K is a bit small. I like that 'a'
though.
...AMOK...
08-18-2007, 07:57 PM
sky- try and make the letters the same length apart from another... like teh S and the K are pretty close and then the Y is away from the K a bit more try and bring it in closer
sume- shit is dope as hell that S is mad crazy and it's soooo clean
AMK- i like that shit u went all out with those squggly's though huh? lol
Drak- work on that K and the D is huge wrok on that too
crits.... just workin on the basics...
http://i44.photobucket.com/albums/f21/holdentitties/graff_amok049.jpg
kelio
08-18-2007, 08:08 PM
iris: liking your style.
Sumoe: gawwwd thats dope.
uhhh: i like the canvas. little overspray with the stencil.
amk: Just throw some color at it, i also like the squiggles.
Drakula:i only like the a the rest of your letters are different sizes and whatnot.
AMOK: too bendy, go just a bit simmpler.
new name, starting over. "ICHE" Pronounced icky.
critz? :D
http://i181.photobucket.com/albums/x108/hoop_blah/Drawing0002.jpg
Hoostein
08-18-2007, 08:55 PM
http://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c338/canuckboy321/each3.jpg
-Sinn-
08-18-2007, 08:59 PM
Each - just go for straight letters
Iche - like the second one on the right the one with all capitals
http://i145.photobucket.com/albums/r231/zinkery90/Picture405.jpg
couldnt figure out how to get the rest of my name to match it crits?
D E M O
08-18-2007, 09:07 PM
Each - work on the "E" kind looks more like a C.
Iche - you should also work on your "e"
Sinn - thats dope
http://img171.imageshack.us/img171/4292/demo5fz2.jpg
Hoostein
08-18-2007, 09:07 PM
Each - just go for straight letters
I got owned...
Is this ANY better?
http://i30.photobucket.com/albums/c338/canuckboy321/each4.jpg
-Sinn-
08-18-2007, 09:34 PM
dont put the 3D over top of one of ur letters makes it look un organized
...AMOK...
08-18-2007, 10:26 PM
sinn- i'm feelin it thats pretty sick but why didn't you finish the forcefield?
each- your 3d is messed up man try to focus more on the letters
demo- thats sick bro forcefield could be a lil cleaner but nonetheless i still liek it
crits?
http://i44.photobucket.com/albums/f21/holdentitties/graff_amok054.jpg
Clowney-Cakes
08-18-2007, 11:12 PM
the new book....
http://img461.imageshack.us/img461/538/yoyoyo009ck5.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
Shot with hp photosmart 720 (http://profile.imageshack.us/camerabuy.php?model=hp+photosmart+720&make=Hewlett-Packard) at 2007-08-19
CRN-one
08-18-2007, 11:30 PM
I bought a six pack of prismacolor markers tonight (fucking expensive,) and wanted to break them in, so I made this. It's my first non-blockbuster piece that I've tried to color.
http://i4.photobucket.com/albums/y142/ZygoteSix/crn-onepiece1.jpg
Crits / comments appreciated.
CRN-one
08-18-2007, 11:39 PM
sinn- i'm feelin it thats pretty sick but why didn't you finish the forcefield?
each- your 3d is messed up man try to focus more on the letters
demo- thats sick bro forcefield could be a lil cleaner but nonetheless i still liek it
crits?
http://i44.photobucket.com/albums/f21/holdentitties/graff_amok054.jpg
I like the overall design, but I'm not really feeling the color scheme. I'm not all that great with color myself, so I can't recommend anything, but to me it looks incomplete. Maybe try filling in the white with a contrasting color? idk.
Clowney-Cakes
08-18-2007, 11:41 PM
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anything good?
silentchaos14
08-19-2007, 12:09 AM
not really, id say use simples if u havent already. and when u colour only go one direction no matter the bends
HoodRichSucka
08-19-2007, 12:14 AM
http://i78.photobucket.com/albums/j106/hoodrichsucka/myelmer.jpg
not done. for a buddy
The_Sheep
08-19-2007, 12:26 AM
DEMO- Get rid of those weird overlapping parts, its unflattering and throws the piece off, also, its apparent that you use bars but good letters need bars and structure, you lack structure, study it
Hoodrich- The bottom part of your E sticks out way too far, either that or the top doesnt stick out far enough, fix one of them, that R has bad structure as well, the rounded part looks awkward, its too diamond shaped
Been a while since i posted, been working on improving my style:
http://img484.imageshack.us/img484/6872/dsc00180nw1.jpg
Critiques? Peace
-Sinn-
08-19-2007, 01:19 AM
sheep i like ur style and i dont know why i didnt finish the force field
...AMOK...
08-19-2007, 01:41 AM
CRN- try and make sure all your bars are the same size
EL- on your third one the EL is big then you go kinda skinny on the AK fix that
hoodrich- i'm feelin everything but the R idk maybe just me
sheep- that's dope man i like that style
just thought i'd mess with it a lil more for shits and giggles
http://i44.photobucket.com/albums/f21/holdentitties/graff_amok057.jpg
Dying to live
08-19-2007, 01:53 AM
CRN- the letters are too thin fatten them up and go simple
Clowney- make you letters all the same with n junk will look dope then
hoodrich- i really like that but not sure about the "M" n "R"
sheep- that just really dope really like the "S"
http://i161.photobucket.com/albums/t216/Dying3k/Untitled-2-2.gif
http://i161.photobucket.com/albums/t216/Dying3k/vn.gif
http://i161.photobucket.com/albums/t216/Dying3k/vs.gif
Stuffed up the k on the last one
Critiques please =]
RFI. SPit
08-19-2007, 02:10 AM
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anything good?
Naw don't listen to Silent, these are alright, just try making them a little straighter maybe... the curves are alright, but straight stuff may look better. Keep it up
sick skeelo. just work on that color fill. ick.
also i dont like the boxes sticking out of the top and bottom. i like when the piece stands more alone, but i guess thats just me.
nice!
i just drew this one up......
http://img524.imageshack.us/img524/356/stereopr5.jpg
ick i hate scanners. every little mistake shows. lol
*bump* nvr got crits.
i know the drips on the left side are bad.
-GuEs-
08-19-2007, 07:26 AM
Sinn thats fuckin fresh man..
Demo thats a real nice style..
any1 got crits 4 this?
http://img256.imageshack.us/img256/8535/mygraff050sw9.jpg
Naw don't listen to Silent, these are alright, just try making them a little straighter maybe... the curves are alright, but straight stuff may look better. Keep it up
what the fuck are you talking about
that shit isnt okay.
look at the A and the K..
he goiing for different bar widths already when he doesnt even have bars down...does he even do them
RFI i seriously wanna see your graffiti.
Harmoner
08-19-2007, 09:36 AM
http://img409.imageshack.us/img409/374/dsc00033jr2.jpg
http://img125.imageshack.us/img125/1408/dsc00192xg2.jpg
http://img125.imageshack.us/img125/9051/dsc00194yu7.jpg
am i ready for paint...lol
cardboard..
http://i114.photobucket.com/albums/n276/joshumms/MVC-090S-2.jpg
"it's not butter" for the handy tournament..
http://i114.photobucket.com/albums/n276/joshumms/MVC-089S-3.jpg
am i ready for paint...lol
who are we to tell u if your ready for paint or not? i started painting because i wanted to. i dont need aproval from anyone. its all about where u paint if u get ill feeling twards it. keep hittin the books and if u must paint, find chill spots. or get a scrap board and hit that up for a while. i think u need to paint on something so u can see how important it is to have structure before u get can control.
CRN-one
08-19-2007, 11:52 AM
@everyone who gave crits: thanks, I appreciate it, and I'll post my next effort soon.
@amok: that shit looks diesel with the green in it, that's what I thought it'd come out like. Nice work.
@hoodrich: I like it, post a pic when it's colored
@cold: try keeping everything proportional, use bars, blah blah I'm sure youve heard it all before. Also try making it larger. The paper is 8.5 x 11, use it.
kelio
08-19-2007, 11:52 AM
iris: liking your style.
Sumoe: gawwwd thats dope.
uhhh: i like the canvas. little overspray with the stencil.
amk: Just throw some color at it, i also like the squiggles.
Drakula:i only like the a the rest of your letters are different sizes and whatnot.
AMOK: too bendy, go just a bit simmpler.
new name, starting over. "ICHE" Pronounced icky.
critz? :D
http://i181.photobucket.com/albums/x108/hoop_blah/Drawing0002.jpg
im bumbing cause i got like 1 crit.
and heres another character, painted him in illustrator just learning how to use it.
http://i181.photobucket.com/albums/x108/hoop_blah/Red-Monster-1.png
CRN-one
08-19-2007, 11:59 AM
@iche: I like it. it's simple, it's pretty obvious you've been using bars for most of them and that's good, I like the bottom center one - the I is too short and the bottoms of the letters curve a bit downward, but other than that it's got potential. The bottom right one is nice too, the letters are all evened out and pretty proportional but it's kinda squished and lacks any real flow. I'd say keep practicing, make the letters bigger, get a ruler, and go fuckin nuts.
eMJayBee
08-19-2007, 12:03 PM
kelio- well the bottom one look ok, the thing is your starting with simples which is good, but you need to take your time and not be so sloopy.
something I did at school I dont really like the blu so i didn't finish it.
http://i51.photobucket.com/albums/f364/mechwarx/graff087.jpg
well here are my letters in "simples" form
The letters in the drawin are similar in structure but modified to fit the extensions in.
http://i51.photobucket.com/albums/f364/mechwarx/graff.jpg
Sou - Mvd
08-19-2007, 12:09 PM
If I could see a single letter in there I would be more impressed, and it's not because I can't read graffiti very well trust me. I think I see a e,t, and k but you really have to tone down on the extensions. Do a piece with just pretty much letters and well see how they are.
^^ yeah but it dont look bad. i think its sick. good luck reading it.
sKeeLo
08-19-2007, 12:25 PM
feelin that emjay, shit im gonna try some wild shit like that . . i would finish with the blue then run a red forcefield . . if u aint liking it mail that shit to me and ill return the favor . . .
i see an E as first letter, J in teh middle (last letter with blue fill) and a K at teh end????
harm - id do what fube said, find a chill spot or something to paint on around your pad . . use thin caps to help with control/drips
~GraffiC.EstatE~
08-19-2007, 01:36 PM
HARM- If you think your ready to paint go paint and like fube and skeelo said find a chill spot or somewhere where it wont get alot of attention.
Emjay- Your wildstyle looked pretty dope although nobody can read it. and even after you showed the form without extensions i still cant make out half the letters in the wildstyle..
http://img517.imageshack.us/img517/7071/project11jg4.jpg
http://img517.imageshack.us/img517/7711/project10xb5.jpg
http://img517.imageshack.us/img517/7690/project8xv5.jpg
A couple simples...
Crits??.....
glass
08-19-2007, 03:00 PM
graffic: looks like you're trying too hard on the handstyle, loosen up and let it build itself over time. your simples arn't too bad but in the last photo the K looks a bit like an R, which may be because of the dark color bleeding the lines. just keep making those clean.
The Sheep: always like to see your stuff, the straight lines are something i like.
critique this simple?
if i can fix my A so it isn't hiding too much behind the L i think it's pretty paint worthy
http://i16.tinypic.com/523z21d.jpg
Scare2
08-19-2007, 03:50 PM
harm- theres no harm in painting just dont put anything out where ull still be seing it in three years and ulll be ashamedd u did it. but painting is tooo fun to not do. in terms of ur sketches tone it down and go simple simple simple. the fill in the first one is hot but the letters arent there so it doesnt work.
sheep the p, s and the O are all fuckin fire!> and wutev anything i see of urs i know its urs cuz of the way u do it i dont think you really need to do anything to that u dont want tto it.
uhh. those charachters are super fresh keep pumpin em out. they wood be dopee on a wall somewhere.
Kelio- keep ur bars same width. especially middle of ur Es. but its a good simple start keep practicing.
emJB. shits super fresh. u have ur wildstyle dialed man. it flows reall nice. i see all the letters but the M u only have one E at the end right?
but just keep doin the same that blue is looking nice. skys got something goin with the red outline. if it was sky that said that?
nok. no offense man but the letters are whack. go check out the new to graff thread and read it all. use bars and just do simple letters from ur keyboard. graff isnt about making your Es with 3s and stuff. its about letterform. uv got good colors. but u gotta get ur letters better before u worry about that too much. also work on ur hand styles their the foundation of graff and a better handy will make ur pieces better.
glas the bits dont work with the simple style. the way the leg of the L angles up into the A makes too much overlap. if u made it go under the shorter left leg of the A, itd fit realll nice. the S is fire. for sre best letter. nice and simple and precise. and the bottom of ur G is too fat in relation to the top. the A would be good if it wasnt so hidden. props for the S though. its really hard to get ur lines right so the propotions are equal and look nice.
wow long.
kelio
08-19-2007, 04:20 PM
The_Sheep: you are now my favorite.
uhhh: like the character on the cardboard.
eMJayBee: damn, Thats ill.
~GraffiC.EstatE~: keep working on those simples.
glass: work on your g, i like that a tho.
Scare2: props for all of the critz.
i tried some 3d and just kinda tweaking the letters.
were do i go from here?
http://i181.photobucket.com/albums/x108/hoop_blah/img004.jpg
work on your letters more, theres jus sumthin with that h an e, n def get a tag goin
DeadSheep
08-19-2007, 05:03 PM
Graffic: For your bubbles go easy on the dots man. Also for the first the letter structure is bad. I like how you used bars in the last two but dont overdo it
(like in the K)
Glas: Lose the little bits and straighten up the A and the L. Otherwise its nice.Im diggin the S , very clean
Iche: The 3D is way off. The I and the H are good. The C and E look too funky.
Heres a new style im tryin out. Tell me what you think .
http://img517.imageshack.us/img517/2743/afb000fe8.jpg (http://img517.imageshack.us/my.php?image=afb000fe8.jpg)
Mo152
08-19-2007, 05:07 PM
^^not really a new style but if your gonna do that take a calligraphy pen and write letter with that, not sure if you know how to use the pen proporly but it will show you where the thin lines and the thick lines go
The_Sheep
08-19-2007, 06:58 PM
I feel you Alive, I think another thing that kids arent understanding is using bars doesnt mean you magically have good letters, way too much kids are using bars incorrectly, Bars AND Structure = Good letters, Nok you're using bars its obvious, but your using them completely wrong, the bends and connects are all wrong, go back to simples so you can figure out what works structure wise, peeps need to be more patient, progress was never instant, it takes time and practice, baby steps
Scare2
08-19-2007, 08:04 PM
^^the sheep props for that one. thats what i was gettin at.
yeah alive said it allot better than me. my comment about bars was directed more at ur first one but i see what ur saying. i guess what i ment kinda was focus on ur letter structure allot more. and i was the same way when i first got a fun set of markers. ignore the thing about Es and 3s ahaha.
Kelio- ur kinda on the right track your I and H are the best letters there because their structure flows better. for the E i would say simplify it to something more resembling this >>> E << and a C is relly hard to do without curves. try to keep ur bars equal thickness. your on the right track though. keep ur pieces simple until you naturally progress to wilder stuff.
dead sheep- im not really sure how to crit that... like mo said check a calligraphy pen and see where the thins and thicks should be. and try putting together a piece of those letters so you can see how they flow together.
this is the sketch i went from.
http://i201.photobucket.com/albums/aa170/iancarroll7/jenalll2.jpg
and i changed the colors and bubbled parts of it out to make it a little fore feminine.. i like the way the word came out but i really dont like the background.. wut do ya think?
http://i201.photobucket.com/albums/aa170/iancarroll7/P8190009.jpg
http://i201.photobucket.com/albums/aa170/iancarroll7/P8190008.jpg
capo93
08-19-2007, 09:24 PM
The_Sheep: you are now my favorite.
uhhh: like the character on the cardboard.
eMJayBee: damn, Thats ill.
~GraffiC.EstatE~: keep working on those simples.
glass: work on your g, i like that a tho.
Scare2: props for all of the critz.
i tried some 3d and just kinda tweaking the letters.
were do i go from here?
http://i181.photobucket.com/albums/x108/hoop_blah/img004.jpg
ich- ichabod?? i doubt you should write that, that guy kills freights. i unno if it makes a difference but your style right now just resembles his alot
KASE2
08-19-2007, 09:40 PM
The_Sheep: you are now my favorite.
uhhh: like the character on the cardboard.
eMJayBee: damn, Thats ill.
~GraffiC.EstatE~: keep working on those simples.
glass: work on your g, i like that a tho.
Scare2: props for all of the critz.
i tried some 3d and just kinda tweaking the letters.
were do i go from here?
http://i181.photobucket.com/albums/x108/hoop_blah/img004.jpg
ey fix tha "c" and the "e" kuz notice how tha "i" nd tha "h" r str8 nd then tha other 2 hav slants. nd i jus dont lyk that "e" no h8 tho man.i seen ur other stuff nd its koo.
EMJAYBEE: that peice iz sick, nd that Blue go's u shuld finish it
scoot
08-19-2007, 10:15 PM
http://smg.photobucket.com/albums/1003/bodycount/?action=view¤t=cardboard.jpg
some new ish
(incase the pic aint working heres the link .. http://smg.photobucket.com/albums/1003/bodycount/?action=view¤t=cardboard.jpg)
Chalk
08-19-2007, 10:17 PM
iche your 3d goes in all directions...
scare 2 - i love that E in your sketch a whole lot
bleh, i just combined some letters that i liked and other elements from my pieces which i thought were sucessful.
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v495/k_vandal/chalk_tbf.jpg
sex without condoms
08-19-2007, 10:18 PM
http://i86.photobucket.com/albums/k90/dspimage/good268.jpg
Bump this sheeet
alive
08-19-2007, 10:20 PM
NOT MINE
NOT MINE
NOT MINE
THIS IS FOR SCOOT.
use the DIRECT link
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/1003/bodycount/cardboard.jpg
AnteUp
08-19-2007, 10:23 PM
iche your 3d goes in all directions...
scare 2 - i love that E in your sketch a whole lot
bleh, i just combined some letters that i liked and other elements from my pieces which i thought were sucessful.
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v495/k_vandal/chalk_tbf.jpg
3d...is fuckin awesome...so innovative...and beautiful...amazin bro keep it up
CRN-one
08-19-2007, 10:24 PM
Here's my attempt for the night. I took everyone's advice and made the bars slightly more uniform and made the letters larger. First image is about 90% finished. Second image was my attempt at using a Pentel 100w-s to highlight. For the record, the Pentel white's do not cover colored ink for shit when it's even remotely wet. I had to do something like fifty passes to get it as white as it is, and then reoutline most of the piece to make up for it bleeding over. But the 100w-s did a fanfuckingtastic job of lightening the Primsacolor ink, so if you wanted to do a more discreed highlight it'd work great. I was going for whiteout-striped highlights haha
Image 1 (no highlight):
http://i4.photobucket.com/albums/y142/ZygoteSix/crn-onepiece2nohighlight.jpg
Image 2 (w/ highlight):
http://i4.photobucket.com/albums/y142/ZygoteSix/crn-onepiece2withhighlight.jpg
Crits / Commends very welcome and always appreciated.
alive
08-19-2007, 10:34 PM
are these by any chance the letters? anyway, to be honest, i dont really like it, nothing personal. too much extranious shit that the letters get lost, and theres not that much structure to begin with, and then the extensions get lost within more extensions, and all of it is kind of flailing, theres no cut, no pop to the moves of the letters. you also missed some 3d. then the fill is so hectic, it just distracts you more, and you lose the letters more. and it just ends up sitting there.
http://i55.photobucket.com/albums/g121/coercethemasses/graff087.jpg
Roolete
08-19-2007, 11:14 PM
http://i170.photobucket.com/albums/u264/man0frice/th_MVI_0235.jpg (http://s170.photobucket.com/albums/u264/man0frice/?action=view¤t=MVI_0235.flv)
clickit!
AnteUp
08-19-2007, 11:26 PM
whoopsie, where did the post go? i dunno
Naysayer
08-19-2007, 11:38 PM
cher. I like the last one the best but none are really doing it for me.
Ok I thought I would try to sketch something a little more complicated. http://i68.photobucket.com/albums/i23/croberts_12/0819072214.jpg
Then I started to make changes... I know a lot of my extensions and things are done improperly. I didn't ever really get letters that I was happy with for the s or e so those are especially bad but I am kindof happy with my d and a. sorry the picture quality on these are bad. I was too lazy to go downstairs and use my scanner.
http://i68.photobucket.com/albums/i23/croberts_12/0819072230.jpg
crits are always appreciated. And I am not a noob I just felt like a needed to change my username for security reasons.
jersOneTIC
08-19-2007, 11:43 PM
crn - use bars
roolete - the third one
naysayer - i think it would look better(2nd pic) if you wouldn't connect all letters together.
some quick shit...
http://img528.imageshack.us/img528/3996/13016zh7.jpg
Naysayer
08-20-2007, 12:05 AM
I hated the S and the E so much I them. How bout this...
http://i68.photobucket.com/albums/i23/croberts_12/0819072301.jpg
Naysayer
08-20-2007, 12:07 AM
jers I like the R the most. I dont like really like the bottom of the S so much.
Akshun
08-20-2007, 12:36 AM
yeah jers that shit is nice but id loose the arrow on the bottom of the s.
naysayer-eh im not feelin any portion of that piece
roplete- id say the last one is the best ur throwie should be quick and thats the one that looks like it was quick and easy to day
ight new shit got tired of doin bars so im trying some shit out crits
http://img186.imageshack.us/img186/6046/38797064il1.jpg
glass
08-20-2007, 12:38 AM
Chalk: i like your stuff dude, great color and 3d but the right side of the C looks like its starting to mold into a G. the K looks like it's coming along better though.
graffic: looks like you're trying too hard on the handstyle, loosen up and let it build itself over time. your simples arn't too bad but in the last photo the K looks a bit like an R, which may be because of the dark color bleeding the lines. just keep making those clean.
The Sheep: always like to see your stuff, the straight lines are something i like.
critique this simple?
if i can fix my A so it isn't hiding too much behind the L i think it's pretty paint worthy
http://i16.tinypic.com/523z21d.jpg
bump but it'll probly get lost at the bottom again lol
...AMOK...
08-20-2007, 12:46 AM
scoot- not feelin that at all it looks really bad... try to get everything the same size and work some better bars
chalk- i'm diggin that shit bro especially the background the A is a lil small though
jers- i'm feelin that pretty nice flow... just the part on the E on the top of it where it flicks back up idk about that i think it's look better w/o but idk just my opinion
akshun- the C and the E are the only ones i like try and make the other letters flow a little better
crits please = )
http://i44.photobucket.com/albums/f21/holdentitties/graff_amok059.jpg
i got bored...
http://i44.photobucket.com/albums/f21/holdentitties/graff_amok063.jpg
Scare2
08-20-2007, 01:32 AM
and i dont get the comment really ^^ is that negative or just funny?
chalk amazing as usuall.
Drak. i really dont like that piece. did u even do that?? cuz ur way above that.
CRN do simples. dont extend ur letters. dont add anything to them just do the letters. fills and 3D dont even matter right now.
alive i see em different uhh.... how to explain.. the right of the top cross on YOUR J looks like the Crossbar of his A. in the upper center of the whole piece. like his simple version he posted. and i think thers a B and an E in there but its hard. i personally really like it.
NaySayer- its not working. go simple and streghten em all out. none of the structure is working. if u havent check the new to graff thread.
Jers its good but the top right of ur E gets too thin i think. and the bottom right arrow coming off the S is whack. for a quick one tho its siick. you have a reallly nice style.
Aksun- that R is deffenitely not working. the hole is huge and it makes all the bars around it too thin. the rest has potentiall but honesttly i think bars would still help it out. but i know what u mean by it gets repetitive.
Glas like i said before the S is fire. the bits arent working tho.
amok. go simple dude. the bits dont work and niether do the extensions you need more solid letter form before you get complicated id also work on the Handy. one thing that does work tho. is the central body structure of ur K. minus the extensions and bits that K would be rocking.
is this wild working or should i hold off on wilds for a little more.
http://i201.photobucket.com/albums/aa170/iancarroll7/abc.jpg
Cougar Slyth
08-20-2007, 01:43 AM
http://i94.photobucket.com/albums/l109/Chaotic_Thunder/Picture20.jpg
Scare2
08-20-2007, 02:23 AM
next step.. im not sure whether i shoulda solid colored it or not. but emjay inspired me.
http://i201.photobucket.com/albums/aa170/iancarroll7/abccolor.jpg
you shundlt be colouring at all.
and you sure as hell aint ready for wildstyle lmaooooooooo.
dude.
tone that shit all the way down.
didnt you read what alive wrote ?.
god damn.
STAR01
08-20-2007, 08:52 AM
Amok that looks pretty tight i like the colors
Glas that looks allright but fix your G a bit, it;s a nice simple
Jers looks tight,Dase need to go simpler if you ask me
something i made last night crits??
http://img249.imageshack.us/img249/5578/1002168eb7.jpg
South-Pole
08-20-2007, 08:57 AM
Looks alot like sky5's style,just go simple and loose all those arrows,extensions and colouring ey
Cougar-Don't try to move on so fast give it some time
a shit load of pics
http://aycu40.webshots.com/image/25199/2000116641438731361_rs.jpg
http://aycu26.webshots.com/image/26185/2000134853215514788_rs.jpg
http://aycu35.webshots.com/image/22554/2000104211235613546_rs.jpg
http://aycu37.webshots.com/image/24876/2000105547632772469_rs.jpg
Got more,
Some catalogue that i sketched on,
http://aycu03.webshots.com/image/22402/2000631645744327886_rs.jpg
Aa
http://aycu21.webshots.com/image/27020/2000664401790707634_rs.jpg
ahem crits?
oh and star1-Use bars man
Akshun
08-20-2007, 11:07 AM
star- use bars seriously. that structure is weak just do basic blocks for a bit
southpole-fix the e in the top one. and the others are just ok. i like the a though its dope
ight trying out some shit. CRITS POR FAVOR
http://img33.picoodle.com/img/img33/9/8/20/f_untitledm_9eec7db.png
poepomhoog1
08-20-2007, 11:56 AM
akshun...looks decent...don't really like the N though...I like the extensions on the C and E but I think you should make the YLN fit in with a bit more flow...
Recent sketches....crits? Second one is with ma bro Cyde
http://img528.imageshack.us/img528/8508/birthdayboyqc8.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img340.imageshack.us/img340/3815/collabofinalnb4am5.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img522.imageshack.us/img522/3072/penshizzlell6.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img522.imageshack.us/img522/5873/ufo1jj0.jpg (http://imageshack.us/)
http://img516.imageshack.us/img516/6589/rokitpenflowal4.jpg (http://imageshack.us/)
alive
08-20-2007, 12:28 PM
thats beautiful poepom, you should move over to the other blackbooks thread. its wierd, ur a "senior" member but ive never seen ur shit.
can i be that annoying twit for once and asked what you used for the outline and byline of the first sketch?
ninja_303_763
08-20-2007, 12:40 PM
akshun- it needs some work but its iight.
poepomhoog- dope work man, keep it up.
http://i101.photobucket.com/albums/m50/ninja_303_763/scan0004.jpg
Akshun
08-20-2007, 12:46 PM
ninja work on your 3d if ur gonna do 3d on the bottom draw all ur lines down and then connect them. if u want em on the side then draw ur lines horizontally straight then connect as far a s letters not bad u should keep working on em though maybe do a few straight letters and thats my 2 cents. o thanx for the crits.
akshun-i thinm maybe try something different with the extension on the C. I see a g when i look at it. and fix the N.
poepom- SICK
heres a mspaint version of my last post.
http://img254.imageshack.us/img254/5952/stereodigitalsy1.png
critz?
i know its definetely clean. =P
alive
08-20-2007, 01:36 PM
ninja work on your 3d if ur gonna do 3d on the bottom draw all ur lines down and then connect them. if u want em on the side then draw ur lines horizontally straight then connect as far a s letters not bad u should keep working on em though maybe do a few straight letters and thats my 2 cents. o thanx for the crits.
wait, why the fuck cant he have diagonal 3d? lol. but seriously
learn your fucking letters first. thats what matters. drop the bullshit 3d, color, and effects until you have dope letters.
sky_one
08-20-2007, 03:32 PM
poepomhoog1-wow dope shit really like the colors
star do simples dude
heres something i did for a battle on the mindgen forum CRITS PLEASE
http://i191.photobucket.com/albums/z270/sky_oner/2-1.jpg?t=1187640978
Scare2
08-20-2007, 04:05 PM
Sky i think thats one of ur best things yet. tone down the coloring. if ur gonna do fills do em solid and maybe an outline. good P and i like the way you made the structure of the R similar. top of the T changes thickness and the bottom leg of the R is too thin. its pretty good tho. keep at it.
yeah akshun diagonal 3D is perfectly alright?? as long as its uniform.
Ninja i Reallly like your F. the rest could use some work tho.
Robot. i really like the first one and the charachters are all nice.
allright so i finished my first attempt at wildstyle in a while. should i keep with the simpler stuff or run with this for a while. and is the fill overkill??
ignore the wack handstyels.
http://i201.photobucket.com/albums/aa170/iancarroll7/abc.jpg
http://i201.photobucket.com/albums/aa170/iancarroll7/abccolor2.jpg
sky_one
08-20-2007, 04:43 PM
wow nice fill scare i fix the lower part of the r and the t do you think this is better???
http://i191.photobucket.com/albums/z270/sky_oner/2-2.jpg?t=1187646082
poepomhoog1
08-20-2007, 04:59 PM
thanx for all the positivity people, really apriciate it.
Alive - I don't really post that much...work
I don't know if I should go to the bigboys, I hardly ever paint and if I do it looks like total crap :)
And ehh for the yellow outline ....this flurosent cheep toystore marker....but it comes out as plain yellow when I scan it..for the black outlines cd marker edding8400 and the white lines paintmarker...didn't know witch ones you ment so yeah hopes this was what you needed to know
peace
whahappen?
08-20-2007, 05:19 PM
wait, why the fuck cant he have diagonal 3d? lol. but seriously
learn your fucking letters first. thats what matters. drop the bullshit 3d, color, and effects until you have dope letters.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
LISTEN TO HIM HES BETTER THAN ALMOST EVERYONE HERE AND ONLY GOT THAT WAY BY PRACTICING LETTERS
sex without condoms
08-20-2007, 06:43 PM
idk.
not finished.
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0820071920a.jpg
better picture?
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0820071920.jpg
Cathi!
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0820071917.jpg
part of a canvas
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0820071916.jpg
question.
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0819071648.jpg
DeadSheep
08-20-2007, 07:15 PM
^^I like that style. Keep it up
eMJayBee
08-20-2007, 07:36 PM
yo, I am only posting this again to show you the letters. peace
http://i51.photobucket.com/albums/f364/mechwarx/graff087.2.jpg
thesilentvandal
08-20-2007, 09:11 PM
paste = learn proportions.
emjabee- thats some mad wild steeze you got there, keep it up, but, took me some fucking time to find the letters, on the last page, without the letters in red.
col- use bars plz
Scare2 - reminds me of sky5.. stop biting plz.
my burner
http://i118.photobucket.com/albums/o82/elemerica/DAWSEKBURNERMADFLOW.jpg
not sky's shit. looks to me like mr wiggles. scare, just dont bite mr wiggles. please. if your going to bite, bite someone that deserves it. kids have been bitin mr wiggles since day one.
http://hobbies.learn-everything.com/images/grafitti/style-hookups.gif
http://i201.photobucket.com/albums/aa170/iancarroll7/abccolor2.jpg
sex without condoms
08-20-2007, 10:50 PM
idk.
not finished.
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0820071920a.jpg
better picture?
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0820071920.jpg
Cathi!
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0820071917.jpg
part of a canvas
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0820071916.jpg
question.
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/0819071648.jpg
bump for last post.
Clowney-Cakes
08-20-2007, 11:11 PM
sex without condoms- really feeling that purple piece, nice shit
trying some new simps...
http://img454.imageshack.us/img454/2198/newsimp001rd7.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
Shot with hp photosmart 720 (http://profile.imageshack.us/camerabuy.php?model=hp+photosmart+720&make=Hewlett-Packard) at 2007-08-21
Sersk
08-20-2007, 11:28 PM
first like real sketch...
http://img248.imageshack.us/img248/8797/simplehh1.jpg
glass
08-20-2007, 11:36 PM
those are the words of a wise man youngin's, dont ask questions as to his meanings O_o
and ill post this up, it was an exchange but i think its decent
http://i14.tinypic.com/4u4wfi1.jpg
Bazer
08-20-2007, 11:45 PM
sersk...shits precise. nice.
thats not nice man. be honest or open your eyes.
sersk man your lines straight dude. know what i mean? loose the bumpyness
Scare2
08-21-2007, 02:05 AM
aight wutev if u gguys wanna find someone i bit that last piece from wutev. but that chart of letters that fube posted isnt that from an online graff creator??? like the lame kind. i dont really see allot of similarity in it anyway. i could almost see the C as a bite. but anyway
i did this one and made it a hat but im too lasy to take a pic.
its allot less smudgy on the hat.
http://i201.photobucket.com/albums/aa170/iancarroll7/money2.jpg
shred til ur dead
08-21-2007, 02:34 AM
http://img441.imageshack.us/img441/1690/dscn0218cs2.jpg
crits please
skar, thats really bad dude. your structure is lacking a lot. lines are really shaky. S is fatter than the other letters. no flow. i could go on man. sorry, but work on it.
scare2, i like it, but the Y is lookin a bit off for some reason. maybe its too small, i dunno. too late now for input i guess.
glass, thanks for the throwie! i like it. yours should be out of the microwave soon.
sersk, lose ALL BUMPS AND CROOKEDNESS. (for now). make all your letters the same size. and. umm. make me a pie.
clowney, awesome simple sketch, but the A seems like a different style. match the other letters to it. by doing stuff like the horizontal bar of the A.
dawsek, thats beautiful! i love the style you got goin there. kinda euro-ey? its cool. your W is ill.
http://i95.photobucket.com/albums/l145/mblavis777/blockbuster.jpg
so according to you guys this is benefiting me.
here ya go.
and a quick exchange.
http://i95.photobucket.com/albums/l145/mblavis777/quakeexchange.jpg
rayseone
08-21-2007, 02:50 AM
no no no, it doesnt, even throwies have to have some sort of structure, and thats got none, your new so im guessing you should check the new to graff thread, read it over, learn your stuff, if its supposed to be a throwie, check out the real throw up topic, look what real shit looks like, dont bite tho, just gain some inspiration from them, if its a piece, its good that u kinda started smple, use some bars, just slant them and shit until you get good letters down, fuck colors, hide em or something, all you need is a pencil and a marker to outline.
South-Pole
08-21-2007, 03:34 AM
Looks alot like sky5's style,just go simple and loose all those arrows,extensions and colouring ey
Cougar-Don't try to move on so fast give it some time
a shit load of pics
http://aycu40.webshots.com/image/25199/2000116641438731361_rs.jpg
http://aycu26.webshots.com/image/26185/2000134853215514788_rs.jpg
http://aycu35.webshots.com/image/22554/2000104211235613546_rs.jpg
http://aycu37.webshots.com/image/24876/2000105547632772469_rs.jpg
Got more,
Some catalogue that i sketched on,
http://aycu03.webshots.com/image/22402/2000631645744327886_rs.jpg
Aa
http://aycu21.webshots.com/image/27020/2000664401790707634_rs.jpg
ahem crits?
oh and star1-Use bars man
Bump!!11
dark2
08-21-2007, 04:17 AM
437
438
any crits?
i know i didn't give any but all has been said
437
438
any crits?
i know i didn't give any but all has been said
ok, where do i start?
honestly i could say STOP doing that and go back to simples, which you should still do, but itd also be helpful to be more specific.
on the first one.-ouch. well frist off, dont have arrows comin out of nowhere like that. you shouldnt put an arrow anywhere u feel like it and u definetely shouldnt end letters with arrows.
second, dont have your letters connected like that. it just looks bad and makes it hard to read.
you just need a lot of practice, but dont worry weve all been there. when i first started i couldnt even do bubble letters.
on the second one- its all basically the same, except that if the letters were actually good, the 3D would be quite nice. do that with straight letters and youll be making progress (hopefully)
just go back to doin simples, bud.
minor crimes
08-21-2007, 06:50 AM
http://i81.photobucket.com/albums/j230/a2b_01/burner001bire003.jpg
new sketch. i know the E is out of proportion. and i kno the bit on the R is a little too thin.
hungr
08-21-2007, 07:25 AM
everyone who posted on this page needs to start off with simple letters (except sexycondoms & southpole).. lose any random add ons and just go for the letter, the most basic letters.. the throwies that i saw were whack and the "peices" were even whacker.. the neon yellow straight letter is going in the right direction
i also find it slightly odd when people say "nice shit" to something that isnt nice shit.. giving people false hope that their shit is good will just make their shit worse in the end, cause they started on whackness and progressed on more whack artistry
DeadSheep
08-21-2007, 07:31 AM
Minor crimes: go easy on the addons. Go back to block letters
Dark: Lose the arrows. and the 3d should never go all the way to the vanishing point, it looks ugly, cut them off little before.
http://img254.imageshack.us/img254/9287/afb000ed1.jpg (http://img254.imageshack.us/my.php?image=afb000ed1.jpg)
Crits?
Dying to live
08-21-2007, 07:38 AM
CRN- the letters are too thin fatten them up and go simple
Clowney- make you letters all the same with n junk will look dope then
hoodrich- i really like that but not sure about the "M" n "R"
sheep- that just really dope really like the "S"
http://i161.photobucket.com/albums/t216/Dying3k/Untitled-2-2.gif
http://i161.photobucket.com/albums/t216/Dying3k/vn.gif
http://i161.photobucket.com/albums/t216/Dying3k/vs.gif
Stuffed up the k on the last one
Critiques please =]
didnt get any crits bump =]
dead- i think you should use your own advice but in reverse its to plain fattern the letters and add some stuff
minor- clean it up a bit and should look dope
DeadSheep
08-21-2007, 07:47 AM
I like the K in the first, but the rest of it is ugly. You need to lose the little bits and arrows, and straigten up some letters.
The second is Ok, the arrow in the A is not good, but i like how its kinda symetrical .
The last needs to be straightened out asswel, especially at the bottom of the K.
Its weird some parts look really well, and some look like shit
Thanks for your crit man ;)
STAR01
08-21-2007, 08:24 AM
i know i got told to do simples but this one is from before, crits??
http://img265.imageshack.us/img265/7932/1002165nk8.jpg
and a simple, tell me what i need to improve
http://img204.imageshack.us/img204/3906/1002161ji6.jpg
http://img211.imageshack.us/img211/752/200807vp8.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
Shot with Canon EOS DIGITAL REBEL XT (http://profile.imageshack.us/camerabuy.php?model=Canon+EOS+DIGITAL+REBEL+XT&make=Canon) at 2007-08-20
Akshun
08-21-2007, 10:15 AM
star-the simple is nice just make sure all ur bars are the same width. and keep doing those
eack-give crits and ull get em
star:
First one, make sure u do ur 3d or shadowing behind de letters
Ex: ur 2d of ur R shouldnt go over ur A
second one is better even tho ur letters seem to bcome smaller and smaller from left to right, when u do block letters like that use a ruler to make sure thye form a straight horizontal line
Naysayer
08-21-2007, 10:50 AM
South-Pole - carry the bottom of the e over on the first one so it lines up.
dark - go simpler. forget the arrows. on the second one half of your letters have straight lines bars and the r and k are like bubble. be consistant.
minor crimes - In my opinion it looks fine.
dead sheep - it looks pretty good except that the e and a on dead, on the top of the letters, slant upwards. make them straight across.
dying to live - it looks fine to me keep at it. you might want to get rid of the blocks the k is standing on, in the last one
starone - keep doin what your doin.
eack - I dont really know how to crit a wildstyle like that. in my opinion it looks great.
Too bad I have nothing worth posting right now.
thesilentvandal
08-21-2007, 10:52 AM
paste = learn proportions.
emjabee- thats some mad wild steeze you got there, keep it up, but, took me some fucking time to find the letters, on the last page, without the letters in red.
col- use bars plz
Scare2 - reminds me of sky5.. stop biting plz.
my burner
http://i118.photobucket.com/albums/o82/elemerica/DAWSEKBURNERMADFLOW.jpg
didnt get any crits:(
i dont get what fucking toys dont fucking understand, they post something, without giving crits, and get more crits than i do, wtf?
1) your an idiot, the blue in the background is there for a reason, the shield goes around the outside of your letters, it can also be called a final outline.
honestly, ive never thought about why you color in the blank parts inbetween letters, its just what i was taught, plus it looks good, and you always see it done along with a shield/final outline.
also, the wave in the sketch, gives it a little extra soemthing, instead of just a straight line, plus, his styles kinda flowy, os a straight line COULD kind of pull everything together, but with something this simple, i think itd just look bland.
dawsek, i like that, and your more complicated stuff.
statik-sorry, your picture didnt show up a first..
yes, i can.
people who say you add 3-d and a more fancy fill to that, are seriously mistaken.
it doesnt look like hes using bars, and if he is, hes not doing it right. the structure is lacking, the size is messed up throughout it, and he honestly shouldnt be worrying about colors yet.
and adding 3-d and a fancy fill wont cover that up to anyone who even slightly knows what their talking about.
so im not flickless..
http://i114.photobucket.com/albums/n276/joshumms/MVC-089S-3.jpg
my god,
im so sick of kids like you.
im trying to help you and him.
i mean, no i dont like your crits, why?
because theyre bad and will get him and anyone else at the same place to nowhere good.
if you always wanna be wack, then go ahead, take your own advice.
add whatever the fuck you want to bad structure, itll get you so much fucking respect in real life. who doesnt like wack tags, throwies and pieces all over their city?
last night..
http://i114.photobucket.com/albums/n276/joshumms/MVC-092S-1.jpg
Sersk
08-21-2007, 12:38 PM
silentvandal- good consistent letters which i like and pretty good fill
exhale
08-21-2007, 12:52 PM
silent vandal - it's nice i like but the d looks a bit like and o?
akel - on the bottom one, maybe make the l's leg not so round?
stak - make the a's hole bigger
theone and chers
http://i188.photobucket.com/albums/z192/sewr11/File0026.jpg
http://i188.photobucket.com/albums/z192/sewr11/File0028.jpg
larsson719
08-21-2007, 01:16 PM
silentvandal - i really like the letters, the e is sick.
exhale - dont know if thats yours or one of your friend's stuff but it looks good i just can't read it.. :o
Here's my stuff, can i get some critz on it please.
http://img515.imageshack.us/img515/6756/image300fw6.jpg
Mr Tasty
08-21-2007, 01:16 PM
need help...paiting this tommrow
(cant do a good T...)
crits plz
http://i15.photobucket.com/albums/a356/MrTastie/Picture152.jpg
From the Ground Up
08-21-2007, 01:28 PM
Dying to Live - Last ones decent
- Lose the arrows in the first two
Star01 - Hate the first one
-Second one is nice, good place to start from, liking those simples
Eack -Damn im feelin that one, just don't like the extension on the E
Thesilentvandal- Why does the middle part of the W overlap the right side of it? seems outta place in my opinion
-Other than that, looks dope
ASB_ONE
08-21-2007, 02:09 PM
this page is fresh apart from 'the ground up' piece. sorry dude ya need to work on ya proportions and bar widths.
hello bsc if any of you are still around..........watsup alive homeboy!!
dark2
08-21-2007, 03:03 PM
442
i tryed to do simple block letters is it any better ?
DemonicKronik
08-21-2007, 03:27 PM
Jus Trying Out The Name Sucks But this is like my 3d mabey finished lil peice so it's simple
Any crits Would Be Good
http://i195.photobucket.com/albums/z150/Blazed-On3/DSC00159.jpg
http://img211.imageshack.us/img211/752/200807vp8.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
Shot with Canon EOS DIGITAL REBEL XT (http://profile.imageshack.us/camerabuy.php?model=Canon+EOS+DIGITAL+REBEL+XT&make=Canon) at 2007-08-20
Bump! i only got beef, can sum one give crits
dark2
08-21-2007, 04:01 PM
i think its prety sweet i don't like the c though
dark2
08-21-2007, 04:06 PM
443
and i didn't get any crits so ill post it again i never gave any last time so might be why but ya i went simple with it cause other wise it jus looks fucked up lol
skar, thats really bad dude. your structure is lacking a lot. lines are really shaky. S is fatter than the other letters. no flow. i could go on man. sorry, but work on it.
scare2, i like it, but the Y is lookin a bit off for some reason. maybe its too small, i dunno. too late now for input i guess.
glass, thanks for the throwie! i like it. yours should be out of the microwave soon.
sersk, lose ALL BUMPS AND CROOKEDNESS. (for now). make all your letters the same size. and. umm. make me a pie.
clowney, awesome simple sketch, but the A seems like a different style. match the other letters to it. by doing stuff like the horizontal bar of the A.
dawsek, thats beautiful! i love the style you got goin there. kinda euro-ey? its cool. your W is ill.
http://i95.photobucket.com/albums/l145/mblavis777/blockbuster.jpg
so according to you guys this is benefiting me.
here ya go.
and a quick exchange.
http://i95.photobucket.com/albums/l145/mblavis777/quakeexchange.jpg
are my posts invisible? shit.
ASB_ONE
08-21-2007, 04:41 PM
na ur post aint invisible holmes, your at a very early stage a real test of your dedication to graff. your starting out right bro wid the simple letters keep at it and u will get better.
aint posted in ages - GUEST bsc
http://i142.photobucket.com/albums/r104/asb_one/SP_A0423.jpg
Drakula
08-21-2007, 04:44 PM
Fuck me that is sick guest.Nice structure and flow.
http://i86.photobucket.com/albums/k90/dspimage/good272.jpg
Not sure if I'm feeling this one.I might keep working at this style.Crits?
pez ss
08-21-2007, 04:47 PM
eack the only thing i like is that blue line runing thou case its fairly unique ur letter ar lacking go simpler and keep em the same size scab ur c is a little wide mr tasty looking goood here sum sketches i did http://i243.photobucket.com/albums/ff27/qust/zoomininpiece.jpghttp://i243.photobucket.com/albums/ff27/qust/focusingonthefill.jpghttp://i243.photobucket.com/albums/ff27/qust/blackbooksketchandcaracter.jpg
443
and i didn't get any crits so ill post it again i never gave any last time so might be why but ya i went simple with it cause other wise it jus looks fucked up lol
ok, try to make all of your letters the same case. and dont have those spaces like that.
i did a quick one for ya to help you out.
heres a simple blocked one.
http://img511.imageshack.us/img511/1268/darkshs1.jpg
its not too clean but it should give you the general idea. thats the direction you should be going.
also, if i were yo, id pick a different name. im reasonably sure dark is taken and K's are just murder to do, at least for me. the way i did it was to draw out a whole alphabet, and the 3 letters that i did the best/easiest, i made a word out of them.
attempt number 3
http://img254.imageshack.us/img254/8918/newsketchkq5.jpg
sry abt how light it is. my scanner is ghey.
should i color it?
are my posts invisible? shit.
nice. keep at it.
i really like that second one.
larsson719
08-21-2007, 05:05 PM
silentvandal - i really like the letters, the e is sick.
exhale - dont know if thats yours or one of your friend's stuff but it looks good i just can't read it.. :o
Here's my stuff, can i get some critz on it please.
http://img515.imageshack.us/img515/6756/image300fw6.jpgDidn't get any critz for it :(...
Drakula - you started out nice with the d but then the other letters arent so good
@ larsson
very nice, except for the D.
try opening up the hole in it, maybe?
something abt it just isnt right.
the style doesnt seem to match the other letters.
attempt number 3
http://img254.imageshack.us/img254/8918/newsketchkq5.jpg
sry abt how light it is. my scanner is ghey.
should i color it?
bump for critz.
also critz on the new style im trying to work out.
http://img125.imageshack.us/img125/6194/newstylesti8.jpg
i know its dirty.
critz?
na ur post aint invisible holmes, your at a very early stage a real test of your dedication to graff. your starting out right bro wid the simple letters keep at it and u will get better.
aint posted in ages - GUEST bsc
http://i142.photobucket.com/albums/r104/asb_one/SP_A0423.jpg
Buuumppp Guest is hurrrrr
kelio
08-21-2007, 05:52 PM
Eack: i like it but i cant rly read the a.
DemonicKronik: blocks. go to the new to graff thread its a sticky.
GUEST: damn that delicious.
Drakula: i like the letters maybe make the a bigger and more inline tho. and lose a couple arrows.
pez ss: nice coloring i like it.
larsson719: i wouldn't worry about coloring work on your letters some more. looking pretty good so far tho.
new name "escobar" critz please :)
and i know the bar part is bigger i had to use two diff pieces of paper and it got all un even. but whatever.
http://i181.photobucket.com/albums/x108/hoop_blah/1.png
pez ss
08-21-2007, 06:09 PM
eack the only thing i like is that blue line runing thou case its fairly unique ur letter ar lacking go simpler and keep em the same size scab ur c is a little wide mr tasty looking goood here sum sketches i did http://i243.photobucket.com/albums/ff27/qust/zoomininpiece.jpghttp://i243.photobucket.com/albums/ff27/qust/focusingonthefill.jpghttp://i243.photobucket.com/albums/ff27/qust/blackbooksketchandcaracter.jpgbumping 4 crits i never get em geust thats the best stuff ive seen in i while on this thread keep it up drak i like the eye in the d i would make ur A bigger
capo93
08-21-2007, 07:41 PM
http://i148.photobucket.com/albums/s7/mek2_2007/mekpiececardboard.jpg
http://i148.photobucket.com/albums/s7/mek2_2007/elephant.jpg
drak- go back to what you were doing before that shit was funky
aver- a and v need work more structure more flow
guest- u burn me
escobar- thicken up dem letterssssss
Clowney-Cakes
08-21-2007, 07:51 PM
capo- wow...that is sexy + sex...i dont know what that equals, but i like it
Mr Tasty
08-21-2007, 07:57 PM
painting tommrow...need crits...which one should i paint...or what should i change in the sketchs...
http://i15.photobucket.com/albums/a356/MrTastie/Picture157.jpg
http://i15.photobucket.com/albums/a356/MrTastie/Picture159.jpg
http://i15.photobucket.com/albums/a356/MrTastie/Picture160.jpg
http://i15.photobucket.com/albums/a356/MrTastie/Picture161.jpg
http://i15.photobucket.com/albums/a356/MrTastie/Picture156.jpg
@ capo-dope
still workin on the new style....
http://img440.imageshack.us/img440/7480/pinkstylemz1.jpg
also this is a repost of something i did a while back. i was thinkin abt picking up this style again.....
http://img248.imageshack.us/img248/7255/imag0003op9td0.jpg
should i?
i know the blue is bad.
critz plz
From the Ground Up
08-21-2007, 08:45 PM
ok i didnt really get any crits on the last page so bump....what do you like/dislike (apart from asb)??
silentchaos14
08-21-2007, 09:31 PM
from the ground up- yur P and H are too small.
http://img483.imageshack.us/img483/4135/moresimplesep2.jpg
i always fuck up the sizing of my letters
more simples, crits??
edit:MY 3-D SUCKS APE DICK
MORNE its not too bad.
try making the r the same width as the rest.
also make sure the middle connecting part of the M is straight.
and try using a ruler lol.
critz on these plz?
ve been critting all day but havent gotten any yet........
old style im thinkin abt goin back to....
http://img248.imageshack.us/img248/7255/imag0003op9td0.jpg
out of all the ones with the new style, i like this one best.
http://img529.imageshack.us/img529/1406/newsty2xr2.jpg
whatcha think?
critz plz.
rayseone
08-21-2007, 09:54 PM
tasty - ill shiiit, thats what having a good handy does to you kids, honestly, ive never really seen anything from you apart from handys and i gotta say that stuff is illll
ground up - well you should maybe use bars, it will help you alot more, and if you are using them, which it kinda looks evident in some cases, reread how to use em cuz they honestly look fucking shit right now, just kepp gonig you will get it.
cold- you really dont even need a style where you are at, do some blocks get structure down, lean em left lean em right experiment with sizes and overlappin and stuff, if anything go back to your so called old style its 50 times better than the shit your doing now. but forreal you dont nned a style for a long time, quit it with the new shit it fucking licks balls
morne - keep wokring with them blocks, you are getting better, your R is a bit small but the structure is okay on it, i would say try getting some curves or some shit in just make it a lil bit more stylish
guest - where the fuck were u man i missed your stuff, oh well dope shit none the less, the S is kinda wierd tho
capo - im kinda likin that top one, but the bottom one haha, im in loveee with that elephant
Dr. Kazer
08-21-2007, 10:49 PM
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v482/nickwells/DSC02027.jpg
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v482/nickwells/DSC02030.jpg
Working on some new letters. Crits please
ticonderoga
08-21-2007, 10:59 PM
AMK nd Tasty sick shit man nice styles
Captain
08-21-2007, 11:12 PM
- morne, do that without having sketchy lines; make full strokes. try out some letter tweaks too, it looks like you know structure. learn flow.
- cold, keep going, little more flow and structure.
- kazer, go back to bars and semi-simples.(flow 'em, don't do extensions though)
- aver, it looks good, work more on flow though.
- drak, scrap that. period.
- larrson, see my advice to kazer.
- guest, your shit destroys mine. 'nuff said.
- ground up, don't color shit or really finish shit for now, finish up at a final lining, and show us that. Use bars.
- taste, paint the last one IMO.
It would seem that my sketch skills have gone to hell over the summer.
To demonstrate my point, penstyle with some highlighter:
http://img210.imageshack.us/img210/7854/masvx1.jpg
ignore the whack handie, my friend did that.
painting tommrow...need crits...which one should i paint...or what should i change in the sketchs...
http://i15.photobucket.com/albums/a356/MrTastie/Picture157.jpg
http://i15.photobucket.com/albums/a356/MrTastie/Picture159.jpg
http://i15.photobucket.com/albums/a356/MrTastie/Picture160.jpg
http://i15.photobucket.com/albums/a356/MrTastie/Picture161.jpg
http://i15.photobucket.com/albums/a356/MrTastie/Picture156.jpg
I would either paint the 2nd one down or the 4th one down. the 2nd one because its nicely proportioned, and just overall sick.
or the 4th one because each letter there is just executed beautifully. maybe try to make the first T on that one a bit taller.
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