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Fube
03-14-2008, 02:48 PM
i like it atlok but other then some things its a bunch of sticks mashed together. im not seeing meny letters there.

but who am i to judge? eh?

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/S6300831.jpg
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/S6300827.jpg
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/DSCF1186.jpg
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/DSCF1236.jpg
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/11-30-07_0927.jpg
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/09-13-07_2125.jpg

a lot old, some new. crits welcome.

Cozmo
03-14-2008, 02:52 PM
Evasion, I like the second one. Did you use a ballpoint pen for that? I like the way it looks like Gumby or something. Isn't there some unwritten rule though about putting a crown in your stuff?

Fube, I especially like the second one. The rabbit ears on the O is cool.

Hey, everyone, is there a trick to having a really cool tag at the bottom? Do you figure that out the same as you do for your pieces, or is that more whatever you feel like?

Evasion Of Invasion
03-14-2008, 02:54 PM
friend wanted the pic to have a crown (its for his locker) so I threw it in

LOPe_GCI
03-14-2008, 03:05 PM
http://i260.photobucket.com/albums/ii37/comatoastoner/100_0384.jpg
bumping this for crits one last time...

fube that first one is hot fiyah

Chump
03-14-2008, 03:11 PM
lope... looks sick... yet see some color

Cozmo
03-14-2008, 03:15 PM
Lope, I meant to comment on this earlier. I like it a lot. I like that the letters are readable, but they still look good, and I really dig the head on the I. It's a nice change from people doing spray caps on their I's. Well done. Can't wait to see a coloured version.

Thrice
03-14-2008, 03:17 PM
lope-nice shit, cant wait for some color. only crit i guess is the E seems a little top heavy, as in i wouldn't mind the bottom of it being a bit larger and the top a little smaller.
new throwie, crit please
*ADJUSTMENTS MADE*

beyondyereyes
03-14-2008, 03:44 PM
dhem? Make sure it's level. Go with straight blocks first. Lose the tumor on the H and the M. Practice basic letters before you add extensions. http://i250.photobucket.com/albums/gg278/unholygrave/ouch.jpg
http://i250.photobucket.com/albums/gg278/unholygrave/blackness.jpg

Chump
03-14-2008, 04:06 PM
http://i31.tinypic.com/21e0yea.jpg
first try on kinda 3d...lol
http://i28.tinypic.com/2pynblh.jpg
A name im messing with....
Crits suggestion?
Agony? im lovin the style...i dont like the upside cross most of the time but it looks dope on that A...

Thrice
03-14-2008, 04:46 PM
ehhhh agony not feeling it so much, seems it's missing flow. Thanks for the crit.
Jinx-Nice stuff man, the J doesn't work so great in the first one.
http://i31.tinypic.com/2dgs3cz.jpg

a maze
03-14-2008, 06:27 PM
Lope- I'm really feeling that, cept for that 'i'. Real nice.

Thrice- Keep trying with that throw, make sure all of the letters appear to be slightly the same size.

I took a little more time with this one-

http://i274.photobucket.com/albums/jj241/mazeonerr/mar7.jpg

roa
03-14-2008, 06:44 PM
mar- your letters are so balanced!!!
ahem- try making all your letters either lower case or all uppercase. keep your letters the same width and height and try and make them symetrical, keep working on it
exchange with aker


http://i271.photobucket.com/albums/jj130/argh-/roa_aker.jpg

color.coated
03-14-2008, 06:52 PM
new name, quick little sketch. what do ya think
http://img221.imageshack.us/img221/1482/memosg8.jpg

Thrice
03-14-2008, 06:54 PM
Thanks, and is there a reason why you have to use all caps or all lowercase, no beef or anything, but always wondered that. *You have a capital A and a lowercase E*

Mar-sick, very proportional, you have that letter embossment down.
Roa-nice simple

sketch3
03-14-2008, 06:58 PM
its graffiti u dont have to do anything,
just do wat u feel

anemptyswishersweet
03-14-2008, 08:21 PM
first try at this new name
http://img340.imageshack.us/img340/3746/image0011yp4.jpg

NEZ89
03-14-2008, 08:57 PM
^^^ just not hip-hop enough, fix the hook of the G

Desipher
03-14-2008, 09:04 PM
mar definately feeling that 3d

Mass Appeal
03-14-2008, 09:26 PM
I took a little more time with this one-


it looks like all your others....seriosuly mate..change up your lettering abit...add more bends etc...you clearly have the simple MAR down...but chu aint doin nutting with it...:P...but like i said...try some newer more complex letters !

and if yall are bored..

check dis out..

http://www.redtube.com/10443

oh yyeahhhHHh ooHhOOO

Cozmo
03-14-2008, 09:29 PM
Mar, excellent use of colour. I really like what you did on the tops of the letters.

Thrice, it's coming along. I'd like to see it with some 3D...I think that may help a bit.

Roa, nice and simple. Very clean. I like the outline outside of the shadow.

Jinx, I like the blue with the pink spots. This is not meant to be a back-handed compliment, but it reminds me of someone's truck I saw about 15 years ago, where the body was kind of a baby blue and the front was painted to look like a massive wad of bubblegum had just smacked the hood. It was actually pretty cool. Are you old enough to remember the GI Joe action figure by the same name?

Agony, nice and simple. Your A looks like the shoulder patch for the US Army Special Operations Command:
http://content.answers.com/main/content/wp/en/thumb/6/6c/180px-USASOC.patch.jpg

Memo, nice. I'd be forced to think about the origins of a writer named "Memo." Disgruntled office worker? :D

Huge, it's clean and simple. Not flashy, but who said everything has to be?

a maze
03-14-2008, 09:30 PM
it looks like all your others....seriosuly mate..change up your lettering abit...add more bends etc...you clearly have the simple MAR down...but chu aint doin nutting with it...:P...but like i said...try some newer more complex letters !

and if yall are bored..

check dis out..

http://www.redtube.com/10443

oh yyeahhhHHh ooHhOOO

EW, PEWRNOE!

Haha, I get you AMK, I took a little time with the coloring. I want to get my simples down perfectly before I move on. But thanks... I'll move on to more complex letters in the future.

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-14-2008, 09:47 PM
http://img291.imageshack.us/img291/5517/dscn0230vl8.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

http://img292.imageshack.us/img292/4995/dscn0228xj2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

http://img291.imageshack.us/img291/8733/dscn0233wq1.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

NEZ89
03-14-2008, 09:54 PM
nice, work on your R's and make the bottom of the E the same size the top on the second one

"Riot"
03-14-2008, 11:46 PM
blitzed.


SCK
Stupid cocky kids crew.
http://i87.photobucket.com/albums/k148/RideBmx23/DONTKICKCATSHIT005-2.jpg

"Riot"
03-14-2008, 11:51 PM
http://i87.photobucket.com/albums/k148/RideBmx23/DONTKICKCATSHIT007-3.jpg

one for mommy:)

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-14-2008, 11:55 PM
blitzed.


SCK
Stupid cocky kids crew.
http://i87.photobucket.com/albums/k148/RideBmx23/DONTKICKCATSHIT005-2.jpg


nice simples man I like it

"Riot"
03-15-2008, 12:02 AM
thanks:)

Xyk
03-15-2008, 12:23 AM
TARE - The R is fine imo. The E needs work thoh.

SCK - I wanna be down with that crew haha. Nice simps.

Derogatory9o5
03-15-2008, 12:35 AM
Just some sloppy two letter character bomb I tried on paint Critzzz
http://i138.photobucket.com/albums/q242/vungoh1/sketch.jpg
and yo that sck simple is dope just work on the k's

Capo Izi
03-15-2008, 01:04 AM
I'm trying to get this style damnit...lol

http://a856.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/4/l_6f6972486b1c3db4eee9c7d3c40c022f.jpg

And Tare-NICE....

blunttokes
03-15-2008, 01:52 AM
BOREDM

http://img231.imageshack.us/img231/4645/roalxum5.png (http://imageshack.us)
http://img231.imageshack.us/img231/6613/roalxs4.png (http://imageshack.us)

-CAIN-
03-15-2008, 03:37 AM
thanks. i meant like to just make them more blown up like. like wider and more circular at the bottoms.

ps it reads CAIS

Theres already a CAIS on PureGraffiti.com

addicted
03-15-2008, 05:31 AM
Capo - Im Lachlan001 from skaterscafe, read what I wrote on SC.

SAID
03-15-2008, 10:38 AM
http://img526.imageshack.us/img526/3315/throwlt4.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img526.imageshack.us/img526/3315/throwlt4.55987b82d5.jpg (http://g.imageshack.us/g.php?h=526&i=throwlt4.jpg)
http://img258.imageshack.us/img258/8814/penfreeuv9.jpg
all freestyles.
trying a new grimmy, throwie.
beger.one

TaskOne
03-15-2008, 12:21 PM
i like it said, i really havent seen much of your stuff but from what i've seen its pretty cool stay up.

Darkeist
03-15-2008, 12:22 PM
Damn i love your throws said.

c.n.k
03-15-2008, 01:46 PM
http://i116.photobucket.com/albums/o6/pokoman/neuroooooooo.jpg

SAID
03-15-2008, 02:02 PM
thanks man,
cnk, thats shits pretty freshhh!

sex without condoms
03-15-2008, 04:38 PM
For round robbin' battle number 2
Goddamn, my one eye that snuck into this picture looks fucking demonic

http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/sketch/163603.jpg

The_NaMEz_BaNKz
03-15-2008, 04:42 PM
funny how this thread has over 1 million views...but not even 100,000 post ??

BUCKNASTY!
03-15-2008, 05:15 PM
That looks a bit like my boy ar4's shit....

Evasion Of Invasion
03-15-2008, 08:03 PM
Sex if its possible that pic made me want to make love to your buttocks even more
C.N.K - I thought that said "Negro" try to make ur U look less like a G
http://i145.photobucket.com/albums/r231/zinkery90/DSC00775color.jpg
http://i145.photobucket.com/albums/r231/zinkery90/DSC00819.jpg
blazed as hell for the last one

Desipher
03-15-2008, 08:12 PM
some wack shit but w.e im done i quit
http://i33.photobucket.com/albums/d99/-syke-/picture175.jpg
http://i33.photobucket.com/albums/d99/-syke-/picture174.jpg

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-15-2008, 09:28 PM
http://img512.imageshack.us/img512/3078/dscn0235ja3.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img512.imageshack.us/img512/3078/dscn0235ja3.75c9b5e884.jpg (http://g.imageshack.us/g.php?h=512&i=dscn0235ja3.jpg)
http://img207.imageshack.us/img207/3157/dscn0239vd0.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img526.imageshack.us/img526/967/dscn0240zy5.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img526.imageshack.us/img526/967/dscn0240zy5.35e56d923a.jpg (http://g.imageshack.us/g.php?h=526&i=dscn0240zy5.jpg)
http://img207.imageshack.us/img207/5927/dscn0241ax2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img207.imageshack.us/img207/9450/dscn0242mv3.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

supremechris
03-15-2008, 09:43 PM
http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q180/_TwIzTiDMaNiAc_/lastscan-2.jpg
started writing 2 months ago

Desipher
03-15-2008, 09:54 PM
the last tare looks like a j loose the extension

mosezone
03-15-2008, 09:57 PM
evade-that orange E looks fucking tiiiiight
desipher-E in the second looks pretty dope, but the bars are a little uneven
tare-feeling that first simple
supreme-not feeling the P, R, M, or last E. but work on the letters, i think it has potential

some wack shit from earlier. crits?
http://i84.photobucket.com/albums/k6/flipskater2215cc/IMG_0613.jpg

Darkeist
03-15-2008, 09:59 PM
fix the E but other than that moes that shits dope

supremechris
03-15-2008, 10:57 PM
thanks for the crits
http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q180/_TwIzTiDMaNiAc_/premesketch2.jpg
is this better?

mosezone
03-15-2008, 11:02 PM
yea man, the R and M are still a littttttle weird, but it's definately better. also, try getting rid of those little loop things on both the E's. know what i mean? oh and btw, i'm loving that U.

Darkeist
03-15-2008, 11:08 PM
yeah foreal, i agree with what mose said. just make the M's little swoop down thing even out.

supremechris
03-15-2008, 11:25 PM
what about the character

mosezone
03-16-2008, 12:24 AM
haha, i'm kind of feeling it. has a funny vibe. the shadow on the speech bubble is way off, though.

sheltr
03-16-2008, 12:31 AM
i say ditch the S, M and R

supremechris
03-16-2008, 12:36 AM
http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q180/_TwIzTiDMaNiAc_/premekarak1.jpg
new character.
http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q180/_TwIzTiDMaNiAc_/premesketch3.jpg
new piece.
not feeling the r cause it looks like the p
is it better though?

Darkeist
03-16-2008, 12:39 AM
the curly things on the P and R bug me.

FlipOneSon
03-16-2008, 12:42 AM
keep working on it
stay in the books

ibomb__atm
03-16-2008, 12:57 AM
http://i116.photobucket.com/albums/o1/rage11_photos/hgkuy003.jpg

i know ima wicked toy
i just started like 3 weeks ago
need some crit.....dont be to harsh

Evasion Of Invasion
03-16-2008, 01:08 AM
k everybody but moze needs to learn somethin important for BS ...GIVE CRITS TO GET EM!!
Therefore only mose deserves crits, dude try droppin the middle part of the E and you'll have some killer simples on your hands
now that thats been established heres a slap and some backgrounds for future slaps
http://i145.photobucket.com/albums/r231/zinkery90/feb182008009.jpg
http://i145.photobucket.com/albums/r231/zinkery90/feb182008007.jpg
http://i145.photobucket.com/albums/r231/zinkery90/feb182008008.jpg
crits?

ibomb__atm
03-16-2008, 01:29 AM
nice..

5Funerals
03-16-2008, 01:53 AM
eva - those dont belong in this thread. Your simple letters are unproportionate.
Mose - I like it all

mosezone
03-16-2008, 01:59 AM
supreme-a little better, but i'd choose a shorter name if i were you. 7 letters is a lot of letters.
atm-ssssiiiiimmmmmppppplllllleeeeessssss
eva-feelin the purple, black, and green backrounds

here's basically that same sketch, but colored. crits?
http://i84.photobucket.com/albums/k6/flipskater2215cc/IMG_0615.jpg

supremechris
03-16-2008, 02:00 AM
http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q180/_TwIzTiDMaNiAc_/premekarak1.jpg
new character.
same page bump

ibomb__atm
03-16-2008, 02:08 AM
i do simples all day in class but im not gonna post that shit

"Riot"
03-16-2008, 02:28 AM
http://i87.photobucket.com/albums/k148/RideBmx23/DONTKICKCATSHIT001-7.jpg

grimey.

whatadizaster!
03-16-2008, 02:31 AM
cut that chord on the left side of the O and define the B some more
that F isnt half bad though

ibomb__atm
03-16-2008, 02:34 AM
riot thats pretty tight

"Riot"
03-16-2008, 02:40 AM
ahh whatever. idc.
im coloring it now:)

"Riot"
03-16-2008, 02:52 AM
http://i87.photobucket.com/albums/k148/RideBmx23/DONTKICKCATSHIT003-7.jpg

sex without condoms
03-16-2008, 12:42 PM
For round robbin' battle number 2
Goddamn, my one eye that snuck into this picture looks fucking demonic

http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/sketch/163603.jpg
pmub

5Funerals
03-16-2008, 12:51 PM
i do simples all day in class but im not gonna post that shit

then dont post anything.


Sex - I dont like the right leg of your A because it doesnt flow with the other letters. You have good style though (as if you havent heard that 10000000000000000 times).
Supreme Chris - get better markers. Your character reminds me wayyy to much of toothpaste for dinner.
OFB - there is almost no structure in that. You dont have any bars that are relevant to each other and those weird connections dont look very good. Also, loose the extension on the O because it makes no sense at all. The fill isnt very good either and I dont like the dots in the forcefield.
MOES - that is soo dope. Burns the whole page.

Darkeist
03-16-2008, 02:04 PM
Sex - that shits pretty fresh, i love your filling and style.
OFB - I like the F but thats pretty much it, you should have made the line in the middle of the B look less like a little slime thing.
Moes - Gave ya crits on sbc but, its pretty dope to me, loving the fill but the middle line of the e seems crooked, it looks better than before but it still sort of bothers me.

remos
03-16-2008, 02:05 PM
http://i255.photobucket.com/albums/hh139/remos905/remos11.jpg
heres an R im working with but i dont wanna add anything till i get similar letters that look good
http://i255.photobucket.com/albums/hh139/remos905/R.jpg

00-made-00
03-16-2008, 02:07 PM
Do simples scrap that idea.

HipHopdontstop
03-16-2008, 03:36 PM
sloe

HipHopdontstop
03-16-2008, 03:38 PM
i do simples all day in class but im not gonna post that shit

cud u post one or two, just so i could see? i have 2 work on them

"Riot"
03-16-2008, 03:40 PM
hahah dude there simples.
like the keyboard letters.
do those for a while.

Fube
03-16-2008, 03:48 PM
Remos-stay simple like me brotha. when u hurry it turns out bad.
sex cool throws as always. hard to crit the same stuff over and over. but your good people and its a cool style to stick with.


anyway, the top shitty flick is for the battle but im not feelin it. might try again.

the next was a word of a different battle but i like the letters so much i did a few. debating on changein up my shit.

i know im hoein out these flix and im sore u nukkas are sick of seein em, but i like them and i want REAL crits on them. destroy me.

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/S6300862.jpg
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/S6300863.jpg
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/S6300831.jpg
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/S6300827.jpg

sex without condoms
03-16-2008, 03:57 PM
on the last sketch the shadow on the left bar of the U is messed up
but all your sketches are on point.
i like the 1st and 2nd the most

Abeone
03-16-2008, 04:34 PM
Fube - you're killin except for that last one. its good, but a bit too hectic, just clean up the o and the last r , and that'd be best kind too.

Remos - work on that R and the M, and itd be a decent throwie...

Hiphop - please stop...ill give you some good advice somebody gave me about a month ago..they work so well..SIMPLES!

Riot - not feeling it at all

SEZ AND MOZE KILLL! sex, your style is one of the most original ive ever seen

Abeone
03-16-2008, 04:34 PM
edit: sex*** and moze

HipHopdontstop
03-16-2008, 04:35 PM
am i doin wat i should be doing??

HipHopdontstop
03-16-2008, 04:55 PM
Hiphop - please stop...ill give you some good advice somebody gave me about a month ago..they work so well..SIMPLES!



SEZ AND MOZE KILLL! sex, your style is one of the most original ive ever seen

is the blue ones not simples?

Teez-EmM!!!
03-16-2008, 04:56 PM
first one is ok second one u need to space out them letters all so give crits to get crits

mosezone
03-16-2008, 04:57 PM
supreme-a little better, but i'd choose a shorter name if i were you. 7 letters is a lot of letters.
atm-ssssiiiiimmmmmppppplllllleeeeessssss
eva-feelin the purple, black, and green backrounds

here's basically that same sketch, but colored. crits?
http://i84.photobucket.com/albums/k6/flipskater2215cc/IMG_0615.jpg

bump to new page. fube, those are all dope as hell, especially the second. super funky.
and hiphop, the first is alright, just fix the O.

HipHopdontstop
03-16-2008, 05:01 PM
are those not simples

HipHopdontstop
03-16-2008, 05:02 PM
first one is ok second one u need to space out them letters all so give crits to get crits

thx

HipHopdontstop
03-16-2008, 05:11 PM
mose i realy like it

Street Wize
03-16-2008, 05:15 PM
Moes- Looks great. Pretty simple. But what did u do to put the white glimmer? I use a thin paint white deco color but it sux. U got to keep going over it or it will just dissapear.


Did this just a min ago. Hurried up on the stars thats why they are so crooked.
http://i91.photobucket.com/albums/k303/lil_boxer09/03-16-08_1604.jpg

Teez-EmM!!!
03-16-2008, 05:15 PM
i ment like some thing help full. like somthing that u notice that maybe the writer wouldnt necicarly notice

HipHopdontstop
03-16-2008, 05:21 PM
yae i know wat u mean, but didnt really see anythin other than those 2 blue peices at the bottom, i dont think they really work tehre, on the ends with the arrows is okay, but dont know if i like em randomly at the bottom

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-16-2008, 06:50 PM
Moes- Looks great. Pretty simple. But what did u do to put the white glimmer? I use a thin paint white deco color but it sux. U got to keep going over it or it will just dissapear.


Did this just a min ago. Hurried up on the stars thats why they are so crooked.
http://i91.photobucket.com/albums/k303/lil_boxer09/03-16-08_1604.jpg

work on the K
http://img512.imageshack.us/img512/3078/dscn0235ja3.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

bump for crits plz

IlikePie
03-16-2008, 06:53 PM
http://i73.photobucket.com/albums/i217/Supermanexists/Picture129.jpg


Drunk 2 days ago.....
Feelin' that a lot Tare.
Everyone on this page is on the right path.

Fube
03-16-2008, 07:40 PM
tare that shit is 30 times better then any of that other shit u posted. 3d is all fucked up tho, dont let sex see it;)

Fixion
03-16-2008, 07:55 PM
Depres, make the hole in you R smaller.

sex without condoms
03-16-2008, 07:59 PM
tare that shit is 30 times better then any of that other shit u posted. 3d is all fucked up tho, dont let sex see it;)


oh pfffft

exhale
03-16-2008, 08:00 PM
moes the curly part on the m doesn't seem to fit in
otek(?) do as tare said work on the k
tare the e doesn't seem to fit in but feelin the t and the a
pie the gap between the p and the r seem weird. maybe it's just me.

tryin something new. says wage.
http://i188.photobucket.com/albums/z192/sewr11/File0116.jpg

http://i188.photobucket.com/albums/z192/sewr11/File0117.jpg

hazetheone
03-16-2008, 08:15 PM
that does NOT say wage
you should make it a lot more legible

SAID
03-16-2008, 08:17 PM
agreed.
allot more legible.

BUCKNASTY!
03-16-2008, 08:22 PM
Has potential, but stick to simples for a bit, simples are hot anywy

Capo Izi
03-16-2008, 08:48 PM
exhale-kinda cool, but I can't read what you're name is...color would make it thirty times better.
Depres-NICE....*clap*
Tare-nice, but same as usual, try more colors, or different bends.
Otek-pretty cool, but yeah work on the K, I like those white color flashes though
Moes-BEAUTIFUL

New stuff

http://a601.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/3/l_fef3faaed064b8dd6931f7b7a4481800.jpg

http://a176.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/82/l_e3d7ac5f1cff68bad1c1b1f836b4c0f7.jpg

http://a79.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/37/l_f70060ae785113459aed18777f68d34e.jpg

Backalley Abortion Doctor
03-16-2008, 08:54 PM
I dont even know anymore

http://i185.photobucket.com/albums/x123/dumbfux/scan0001-5-1.jpg

http://i185.photobucket.com/albums/x123/dumbfux/scan0003-3-2.jpg

mosezone
03-16-2008, 08:59 PM
that 2nd one is fucking hooootttttt.

hazetheone
03-16-2008, 09:03 PM
i thought jesus had a new york flat bill made of thorns?
my mistake i guess
rots always dope

Capo Izi
03-16-2008, 09:21 PM
exhale-kinda cool, but I can't read what you're name is...color would make it thirty times better.
Depres-NICE....*clap*
Tare-nice, but same as usual, try more colors, or different bends.
Otek-pretty cool, but yeah work on the K, I like those white color flashes though
Moes-BEAUTIFUL

New stuff

http://a601.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/3/l_fef3faaed064b8dd6931f7b7a4481800.jpg

http://a176.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/82/l_e3d7ac5f1cff68bad1c1b1f836b4c0f7.jpg

http://a79.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/37/l_f70060ae785113459aed18777f68d34e.jpg


bottom page bump

5Funerals
03-16-2008, 09:26 PM
rots - glad you are back
capo - new to graff thread

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-16-2008, 09:29 PM
moes the curly part on the m doesn't seem to fit in
otek(?) do as tare said work on the k
tare the e doesn't seem to fit in but feelin the t and the a
pie the gap between the p and the r seem weird. maybe it's just me.

tryin something new. says wage.
http://i188.photobucket.com/albums/z192/sewr11/File0116.jpg

http://i188.photobucket.com/albums/z192/sewr11/File0117.jpg

I like it but you gotta work on structure a bit more

and heres another simp, I don't like it that much

http://img338.imageshack.us/img338/7215/dscn0254or5.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

5Funerals
03-16-2008, 09:31 PM
tare all of your letters should have the same base bar. Thats how they flow. You cant have each letter curve in a different direction like that.

Capo Izi
03-16-2008, 09:32 PM
capo - new to graff thread

Lol...yes?

Actually like 8-9 pages back I was BRAND new.

But yes, please state the obvious..:p

knewsince.
03-16-2008, 09:34 PM
work capo.
makes me laugh because it reminds me of myself when i first started
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e387/x_casper/Graffiti/MASEpeice.jpg

Capo Izi
03-16-2008, 09:40 PM
work capo.

On?

Capo Izi
03-16-2008, 09:43 PM
makes me laugh because it reminds me of myself when i first started
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e387/x_casper/Graffiti/MASEpeice.jpg

...ewww...That, I'm sorry doesn't look like my stuff....is that crayon?

knewsince.
03-16-2008, 09:45 PM
Well, lookie.
Go here.
This is the new to graff thread.
that guy wasn't asking you if you were.
http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/showthread.php?t=2185

And
I dont know what it is.
But we dont need to get into my olden days.
Cuz the past is the past, and you can't beat me now so.
whatever.

Fube
03-16-2008, 09:49 PM
pay some dues, put in some work.

keep it simple and it will progress naturaly.

u should go through at least 3 sketch books before u get something u like.

rotten keepin the page alive!

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/S6300866.jpg

Capo Izi
03-16-2008, 09:55 PM
Well, lookie.
Go here.
This is the new to graff thread.
that guy wasn't asking you if you were.
http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/showthread.php?t=2185

And
I dont know what it is.
But we dont need to get into my olden days.
Cuz the past is the past, and you can't beat me now so.
whatever.

I'm not dissin' you, I mean you're probably good now, but I don't see the resemblance sorry.

And I've been on here a while, I've read a lot of stuff before posting. I've ton simples for 4 months now. and I've posted stuff just like the stuff I just posted. And they just said it was ok, I just need to thicken bars, and make them all the same size. Which I did.

knewsince.
03-16-2008, 10:01 PM
dont make them poke out n shit

Fube
03-16-2008, 10:04 PM
I'm not dissin' you, I mean you're probably good now, but I don't see the resemblance sorry.

And I've been on here a while, I've read a lot of stuff before posting. I've ton simples for 4 months now. and I've posted stuff just like the stuff I just posted. And they just said it was ok, I just need to thicken bars, and make them all the same size. Which I did.



man, this is not a math problem, theres no 100% way of going about it. face it, when u started this shit u thought u could get it down in about a month of workin on it. but this shit is gunna take some dedication. a lot of this your just gunna have to figure out for yourself man. anything that is said in this forum is strictly someones opnion. but u need to look at your own shit and crit it before u post up here.

knewsince.
03-16-2008, 10:08 PM
fube
i love you.

Fube
03-16-2008, 10:14 PM
sig'ed!

b SQUARED 08
03-16-2008, 10:15 PM
work capo.
makes me laugh because it reminds me of myself when i first started
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e387/x_casper/Graffiti/MASEpeice.jpg

The 3d needs work, consistent bars, and cleaner lines my friend. The char is kinda messy as well. Keep at it.


pay some dues, put in some work.

keep it simple and it will progress naturaly.

u should go through at least 3 sketch books before u get something u like.

rotten keepin the page alive!

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/S6300866.jpg

This is hot. Very nice work.

MESN[905]
03-16-2008, 10:17 PM
pay some dues, put in some work.

keep it simple and it will progress naturaly.

u should go through at least 300 sketch books before u get something u like.

rotten keepin the page alive!

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/S6300866.jpg

eh

3 is wayyyyy too low of a number of sketchbooks

knewsince.
03-16-2008, 10:18 PM
Dude read the fuckin' words.
Thats from when I first started.

OfesOfor
03-16-2008, 10:20 PM
Fube- always love everything you do man.

roa
03-16-2008, 10:21 PM
http://i271.photobucket.com/albums/jj130/argh-/roa1.jpg

OfesOfor
03-16-2008, 10:27 PM
that does NOT say wage
you should make it a lot more legible


that first one definetly says wage......

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-16-2008, 10:30 PM
fube- have you painted anything yet?

another simple, trying to work out that flow

http://img341.imageshack.us/img341/9193/dscn0260op0.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

PureSole
03-16-2008, 10:47 PM
rots and fube, looking good
TARE..better but keep the R staight...also the t could extend into the A imo, if u wanted
roas, nice and simple but u need to organize the silver highlights (inside the letters) a litte more

Maste
03-16-2008, 10:57 PM
tare- put a space inbewteen that R.s legs(?) itll flow more
roas- the top part of the s should be smaller than the bottom imo and think of highlights as light shining on something...it shouldnt shine from all angles
fube-i like your style and haha mesn i agree 3 is still way too little
capo...i know its a pain in the ass but the new to graff thread does help

some of my more recent stuff:
http://img525.imageshack.us/img525/407/age001pe4.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img525.imageshack.us/img525/6761/sivlized003kf1.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
ugh stupid scanner bit off the top a bit...oh well

crits please
oh and i know my hands a bit blah on the top there... i just wanted to write something there haha...it seemed like a good idea at 4 in the morning

Fube
03-16-2008, 11:00 PM
fube- have you painted anything yet?
i have, im not much for pieceing but i hit chill walls. getting into benching as of late but the yards are pretty heated with beef on rights to paint. i dont feel like getting my head bashed in over some yard.

i try to make sure i can paint anything i put on paper tho. its workin pretty good.

maste- try not to over lap your letters so much. also, fills dont make letters, letters should always come first, id rather see a nice hollow simple then a sick fill on horrible letters. keep at it.

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-16-2008, 11:01 PM
thanks for the crits guys

maste-

The AGE doesn't really work, theres no flow
but I like the SIVLIZED, I dont know if you intentionally left out an I (so it would say SIVILIZED) but I like it except that you should make the ZEand D the same size as the rest ofyour letters.

ok heres the same peice but with some bubbles
http://img357.imageshack.us/img357/9541/dscn0262gs1.jpg (http://imageshack.us)



and I intentionally made the R bend but if you guys think it'd flow better I'll straighten it out


oh and FUBE you got flicks of your painted stuff?

Maste
03-16-2008, 11:04 PM
yea the i is left out cause i wrote sivl first and then added the ized and the zed are smaller cause i was running outta room on the paper haha

i like the bubbles now just go rewrite it with w/e crits you got and yea i forgot where i was goin with this

Fube
03-16-2008, 11:05 PM
my computer crashed an all i got is the whack older stuff. but i dont like to post a bunch of my painted stuff.

personal reasons.

why do u ask?

also, the only over laping letter u got there is the r, throws the shit off.

Capo Izi
03-16-2008, 11:12 PM
man, this is not a math problem, theres no 100% way of going about it. face it, when u started this shit u thought u could get it down in about a month of workin on it. but this shit is gunna take some dedication. a lot of this your just gunna have to figure out for yourself man. anything that is said in this forum is strictly someones opnion. but u need to look at your own shit and crit it before u post up here.

Dude I've been doing it 4-5 months, and I sucked I know, I never thought it'd take a month. And I'm truely dedicated, but that piece I did, I really, honestly liked it, and also it met the standards, or so I thought, of the people given me advice about it. I did one before and they said thicken the bars, well I did, then added my flair, and I like it.

I know it's someone's opinion, but hey, help from experienced writers, help a lot.

I know I suck, which is why I posted my stuff. But now I'm confused why people dislike it, since it seem's pretty good.

IlikePie
03-16-2008, 11:16 PM
http://i73.photobucket.com/albums/i217/Supermanexists/7415316e.jpg

Tare, Good stuff
Maste, The first one, the E's bottom leg is way too far out, and it's the only one curved like that.
Roas, nice.

Probably finish later tonight, just bored and trying different things.

emel
03-16-2008, 11:38 PM
http://i73.photobucket.com/albums/i217/Supermanexists/7415316e.jpg

Tare, Good stuff
Maste, The first one, the E's bottom leg is way too far out, and it's the only one curved like that.
Roas, nice.

Probably finish later tonight, just bored and trying different things.

looks pretty RADical there buddy...

IlikePie
03-16-2008, 11:42 PM
Haha, it's gonna say Rab, gotta figure out what I'm gonna do for the top part of the B...

supremechris
03-17-2008, 12:11 AM
http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q180/_TwIzTiDMaNiAc_/premesketch4.jpg
crits

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-17-2008, 12:18 AM
my computer crashed an all i got is the whack older stuff. but i dont like to post a bunch of my painted stuff.

personal reasons.

why do u ask?

also, the only over laping letter u got there is the r, throws the shit off.

Idk I was interested in seeing your shit on a wall and how well you make the transition of writing on paper to walls..

yeah the R was intentional I try that peice again and fix the r


yea the i is left out cause i wrote sivl first and then added the ized and the zed are smaller cause i was running outta room on the paper haha

i like the bubbles now just go rewrite it with w/e crits you got and yea i forgot where i was goin with this

oh I see, I hate running out of room

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-17-2008, 12:20 AM
http://i73.photobucket.com/albums/i217/Supermanexists/7415316e.jpg

Tare, Good stuff
Maste, The first one, the E's bottom leg is way too far out, and it's the only one curved like that.
Roas, nice.

Probably finish later tonight, just bored and trying different things.

thanks man, and i like your peice I just can't make out the letters, im stoned off my ass but umm is it.. K R D?

IlikePie
03-17-2008, 12:37 AM
R A B, I just finished it, but too lazy to upload it, added little holes to make it less confusing.

Fube
03-17-2008, 12:48 AM
not many crits i can give that yall aint herd before.

added highlights
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/S6300874.jpg
another simple with a fill, sence i never seem to do them.
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/S6300870.jpg

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-17-2008, 03:01 AM
Fube- Loving the fills and highlights

tried to fix the R but messed up the other letters in the process, so kinda sloppy but w/e last flick for the nite

http://img297.imageshack.us/img297/2336/dscn0266du2.jpg (http://imageshack.us/)

"Riot"
03-17-2008, 04:11 AM
nevermind.

Fube
03-17-2008, 04:55 AM
tare, thats the same shit. the secret to simples is make EVERYTHING the same. if u end a letter flat, dont bevel something else. your t overlaps your a and fucked your 3d. too much empty space. to me drop shadow 3d looks the best on simps. dont worry about all the bubbles and add ons here. work on your thickness, try to be PERFECT. if u start a sketch and fuck up. dont finish it, fuckin start all over. till u get it.
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/th_S6300879.jpg (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/S6300879.jpg)

even my thickness is fucked up. but theres a touch of style in it i guess so ill be ok. keep workin.

AEK
03-17-2008, 08:56 AM
http://i235.photobucket.com/albums/ee46/aek_2007_/STA60080.jpg

crits???

NEZ89
03-17-2008, 09:04 AM
AEK-It's too hip-hop, lose the arrows, make the bars the same size, and work on the N and U
cyto- nice start, keep it up

Cozmo
03-17-2008, 11:25 AM
Bump for crits...this is only the third I've ever done...

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v299/E5Elvis/09759c51c72f.jpg

Chump
03-17-2008, 11:26 AM
cozmo ive seen this like 3 times....
looks good lets see some color...

Cozmo
03-17-2008, 11:55 AM
You've seen it three times because I posted it, changed it, and reposted it, and then I only got one crit. I'm trying to get other opinions as well.

Thank you, by the way. The colour is in progress.

Chump
03-17-2008, 12:24 PM
Bump for crits...this is only the third I've ever done...

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v299/E5Elvis/09759c51c72f.jpg

not a big fan of the nautical star....

Cozmo
03-17-2008, 12:35 PM
It's, ah...[clears throat]..it's a Commie star...that's why there's a backwards R, to play on the Russian/Communist thing (the star will be red).

Chump
03-17-2008, 12:40 PM
oh ok... well looks like a nautical star
http://images.funadvice.com/photo/image/15773/nautical.jpg
other than clean your lines up alil... i like it...

Thrice
03-17-2008, 01:25 PM
chump, still sick man, add colors.
from a while ago. (2 weeks into graff)
http://i31.tinypic.com/2uif1u1.jpg

AnteUp
03-17-2008, 01:34 PM
http://i157.photobucket.com/albums/t66/AnteUp14/03-16-08_2245-1.jpg
CRITS?,yea...SAYS AIR
tare-keep the simples, doin good, but on the paint splatters, change em up they dont have to be teh same pattern.
aek-rock simples, try what tare is doin, you'll get there.
cosmo-i like it, im not so sure why.
dino-you got the right idea, but keep the letters seperate for a while

Thrice
03-17-2008, 01:39 PM
AIR-sick stuff man, and ya thanks, it was a while ago, but now i keep everything seperated.

supremechris
03-17-2008, 02:14 PM
http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q180/_TwIzTiDMaNiAc_/premesketch4.jpg
crits

bump for crits

AnteUp
03-17-2008, 02:21 PM
crit to get crits...

Cozmo
03-17-2008, 02:54 PM
Dino, I like the spider webs. It's got the old-school Spiderman feel to it. Question, though...how easy would it be to actually spray that up on a wall?

the jippo
03-17-2008, 02:56 PM
Supreme you need to work on your letters and the handy on that tag. try to not have as much space between the letters. :) ;)

MarOne...
03-17-2008, 02:59 PM
Lope- I'm really feeling that, cept for that 'i'. Real nice.

Thrice- Keep trying with that throw, make sure all of the letters appear to be slightly the same size.

I took a little more time with this one-

http://i274.photobucket.com/albums/jj241/mazeonerr/mar7.jpg

bumping from a looong way back. Hadn't been on since my other acc. was bannded. :(

Mass Appeal
03-17-2008, 03:02 PM
for the love of god..try new letters !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
and say when you get banned yea....you dont make a new account and post again....you serve you e-time like a real writer !

AnteUp
03-17-2008, 03:05 PM
NO MORREEEE BEEEEEFFFF, we all must become like vegetarians, start having tofu and shit...

MarOne...
03-17-2008, 03:05 PM
Real writers don't do e-time... Hahaha


but yeah, beef is for carnivores.

Mass Appeal
03-17-2008, 03:07 PM
who said anything about beef ?
my lord.
beef is when i call your shit meaningless stuff :)

Wtf with beef anyway
its a forum ! :winkys: :wub:

AnteUp
03-17-2008, 03:09 PM
http://i157.photobucket.com/albums/t66/AnteUp14/03-16-08_2245-1.jpg
CRITS?,yea...SAYS AIR
tare-keep the simples, doin good, but on the paint splatters, change em up they dont have to be teh same pattern.
aek-rock simples, try what tare is doin, you'll get there.
cosmo-i like it, im not so sure why.
dino-you got the right idea, but keep the letters seperate for a while

BEEF BUMPIN...WELL NOT BEEF BUT, ANYWHO...CRITS

ESKiMO2
03-17-2008, 03:10 PM
Why do all the people keep getting banned???

http://i27.tinypic.com/2zfucg4.jpg

CALZE (crits?)

MAR- I like it, But the color in the 3d kind of don't work with the ones in the fill.
Supreme- I'm not really feeling it. try simpler bars.
Air- looks pretty cool. nice style but it should have less of those sharp things.
Dino- it's okay I guess just get some stuff in proportion.
Cozmo- that's pretty cool with the bricks. Good for a third piece.

Thrice
03-17-2008, 03:29 PM
Dino, I like the spider webs. It's got the old-school Spiderman feel to it. Question, though...how easy would it be to actually spray that up on a wall?

The webs themself? Not long, i wouldn't think, just use a thin cap and it's easy.

fOrSaQeN
03-17-2008, 03:48 PM
http://i32.tinypic.com/mvp3d4.jpg

some quick fill cause i was lazy to color...in my mini blackbook

-AbSrD
03-17-2008, 03:58 PM
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/th_S6300879.jpg (http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/S6300879.jpg)


definetly diggin this!

Fube
03-17-2008, 05:03 PM
sweet, thanks for the bump. look u crit hungry fools. the most problems i see in this forum is u fools are following the wrong path for faster development. graffiti is the art of letters. so in turn u MUST master the basics of the letter form. u cant go out and buy your 20 dollar black book and bust wild style like heads that been in the game for 20+ years. just like u cant pick up a base ball bat and start playing with the pros. start out with some T-ball, home in on your skills, play in the minors, then maybe, just maybe u will go pro. t-ball for graffiti is simples. get it?

so, get on your computer, look at good SIMPLES and try to hit that shit right. simple fills, simple letters, simple path to the complacated shit. once u get your simples perfect, flex them, bend them, experiment with them. wild style will come naturaly after that.

SAID
03-17-2008, 05:06 PM
fube, thats megaaaa fresh !
eskimo, try and straighten out your letters, but im really digging it, i wanna see it filled man !

AnteUp
03-17-2008, 05:06 PM
i hate when people dont crit :(

Backalley Abortion Doctor
03-17-2008, 05:07 PM
Come on now Fube, lots of cats rock simples on par with the dopest of wildstyles ;)

atlok7
03-17-2008, 05:12 PM
sweet, thanks for the bump. look u crit hungry fools. the most problems i see in this forum is u fools are following the wrong path for faster development. graffiti is the art of letters. so in turn u MUST master the basics of the letter form. u cant go out and buy your 20 dollar black book and bust wild style like heads that been in the game for 20+ years. just like u cant pick up a base ball bat and start playing with the pros. start out with some T-ball, home in on your skills, play in the minors, then maybe, just maybe u will go pro. t-ball for graffiti is simples. get it?

so, get on your computer, look at good SIMPLES and try to hit that shit right. simple fills, simple letters, simple path to the complacated shit. once u get your simples perfect, flex them, bend them, experiment with them. wild style will come naturaly after that.

exactly

SAID
03-17-2008, 05:14 PM
anteup:
feeling the highlights and the bubbles.
should of dropped some 3d on it though, woulda looked real tight.

MarOne...
03-17-2008, 05:14 PM
Come on now Fube, lots of cats rock simples on par with the dopest of wildstyles ;)

shutup backalley, it's not like you're rots or something. Sheesh.


































;)

Fube
03-17-2008, 05:30 PM
na your right rot, but its like the blind leading the blind here. no ones got a mind for there own, always carin what other fucks thing to much to figure this shit out for themselves and im sick of seeing the same bullshit go on here.

u dont need crits, when your shit is up to par u will know it.

ibomb__atm
03-17-2008, 05:30 PM
http://i87.photobucket.com/albums/k148/RideBmx23/DONTKICKCATSHIT003-8.jpg

yeah the fill is hi-lighters
still a toy dont be too harsh

crit?

SAID
03-17-2008, 05:34 PM
na your right rot, but its like the blind leading the blind here. no ones got a mind for there own, always carin what other fucks thing to much to figure this shit out for themselves and im sick of seeing the same bullshit go on here.

u dont need crits, when your shit is up to par u will know it.
that so true dude.
everyones got an opinion of their own and everyone likes different styles so who's to say who's toy and who's not. I'm 100% sure if some of the biggest writers in montreal come on here and lay down some throws most of the people would be like, uhhh hit the toy forum.

and for ibomb..
the lines look abit shaky.
work on your letter structure.
as fube said,
basicsssssssssssssssss man.

AnteUp
03-17-2008, 05:40 PM
this is a graffiti forum... why is everyone on if there not looking to improve?

SAID
03-17-2008, 05:44 PM
cause some people take it the wrong way when you give crits.
accepting the fact that you're toy is the first step.
some people just don't get it.

hazetheone
03-17-2008, 05:50 PM
[QUOTE=Cyto Aka Son1c;1040616]
http://img357.imageshack.us/img357/9541/dscn0262gs1.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
QUOTE]
i cant look at this without thinking of getting up the game and trane
idk

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-17-2008, 05:53 PM
[quote=Cyto Aka Son1c;1040616]
http://img357.imageshack.us/img357/9541/dscn0262gs1.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
QUOTE]
i cant look at this without thinking of getting up the game and trane
idk


what u mean?

IlikePie
03-17-2008, 05:58 PM
http://i73.photobucket.com/albums/i217/Supermanexists/c3d21ed6.jpg

I like new pages, no one to crit :D Tare, you were already told everything needed.

AnteUp
03-17-2008, 05:58 PM
hes talking about "getting up" the game marc ecko made, this looks like something he would do

hazetheone
03-17-2008, 06:03 PM
i cant find the picture but if youve played the game you know wich piece im talking about

mosezone
03-17-2008, 06:03 PM
anteup-maybe make the letters a liiiittle more structured, and the bars not quite as slanted
eskimo-not really feeling the Z or E, but it's pretty decent
forsaqen-chill out with the colors and all that other shit and get some nice solid letter forms down
atm-it all kind of blends together, and you should smooth out your letters instead of adding all those bump things coming off.
tare-nice simple. maybe get some good fills in there or something
rab-funky, i like it.

shitty sketch from school. crits?
http://i84.photobucket.com/albums/k6/flipskater2215cc/DSC01605.jpg

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-17-2008, 06:15 PM
ilikepie- thats looking pretty dope an although the A definitly works it bugs me for some reason... idk have you done any other A's in that style?

Mosezone- I dont tthink the E fits very well, you might want to try and move the base of the E at an angle that flows better with the peice

and I think I'll take the other comments not as insuation of biting but as a compliment :) thanks guiz

Fube
03-17-2008, 06:20 PM
http://i87.photobucket.com/albums/k148/RideBmx23/DONTKICKCATSHIT003-8.jpg

yeah the fill is hi-lighters
still a toy dont be too harsh

crit?

i feel like im talking to myself when i just spill a bunch of shit out my brain and then u post this. dont want to be to harsh, but dude, u have already critted yourself, what more can we say?

the 3d should not be the same color as your fill. looks sloppy. thats about all the crit i can give u that u aint given yourself.

mose, all i see there is a hurtin o and a hurtin s. just an opnion.

keep it up.

supremechris
03-17-2008, 07:09 PM
chump, still sick man, add colors.
from a while ago. (2 weeks into graff)
http://i31.tinypic.com/2uif1u1.jpg
im lovin those webs man.
i just dont like how the d sticks to the i
i like the spiderman theme too

jersOneTIC
03-17-2008, 07:50 PM
St patrick's day...sketch.
http://img213.imageshack.us/img213/9647/stpoiukr0.jpg

5Funerals
03-17-2008, 07:51 PM
the webs look good but the letters are gross
Moes - the last one burned that one
I like pie - mhm yeah
Tare - stop bumping. Use consistent bars.

I already posted this in stickers thread but most of you guys dont look there.
http://i105.photobucket.com/albums/m223/ShanestaGangsta/poop-1.jpg

SAID
03-17-2008, 08:08 PM
shmexy. i'd just make the higlights abit thinner.
jers, thats dope!

Cliff
03-17-2008, 08:10 PM
Jers- That leprechaun is sick

5Funerals
03-17-2008, 08:10 PM
JERS - too bad your leprechaun cant see all of the dopeness that is your piece

hazetheone
03-17-2008, 08:10 PM
the webs look good but the letters are gross
Moes - the last one burned that one
I like pie - mhm yeah
Tare - stop bumping. Use consistent bars.

I already posted this in stickers thread but most of you guys dont look there.
http://i105.photobucket.com/albums/m223/ShanestaGangsta/poop-1.jpg

haha
i think it says jers man

5Funerals
03-17-2008, 08:15 PM
what are you talking about? I didnt even crit jers there.....

hazetheone
03-17-2008, 08:19 PM
oh
my bad
i looked up and i can read webs out of jers's piece

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-17-2008, 08:28 PM
Jers- love that and the char is awesome

back to trying to get my shit consistent

http://img178.imageshack.us/img178/6226/dscn0273ut2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

Capo Izi
03-17-2008, 08:33 PM
messing around with a crew name, "Lazy Ass Toys"....and trying out the shiny "spark" effect thing...

http://a13.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/110/l_c6b01f1dc235a884388e1241e9d9f524.jpg

Crits please?


Also

Tare-You're stuff is pretty good, try cool colors, you've done the yellow/orange/green alot, also try some different bends, your stuff is pretty nice, try to make it better and play around a bit now.

Ilikepie-LOOKS 300 TIMES BETTER COLORED...THAT'S BEAUTIFUL...seriously
Jers-PIMP, love it man, lol, the leprachaun is a good little twist too.
Moes-pretty good, I like how the bends are different. But the S is really weird, almost like a backwords two. Try to raise the bottom up so it's all equal, you know what I mean?

supremechris
03-17-2008, 08:39 PM
http://i73.photobucket.com/albums/i217/Supermanexists/c3d21ed6.jpg

I like new pages, no one to crit :D Tare, you were already told everything needed.
this peice is the sex. i love that a.
thinking of shortening my name to supr
http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q180/_TwIzTiDMaNiAc_/premesketch5.jpg
crits please.

hazetheone
03-17-2008, 08:41 PM
thats a lot better tare
every base bar doesnt have to be the same just have a complementary bar for each letter
like the t can bend one way and have the r bend the same way
same with the a and e
know what im sayin

Capo Izi
03-17-2008, 09:00 PM
messing around with a crew name, "Lazy Ass Toys"....and trying out the shiny "spark" effect thing...

http://a13.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/110/l_c6b01f1dc235a884388e1241e9d9f524.jpg

Crits please?


Also

Tare-You're stuff is pretty good, try cool colors, you've done the yellow/orange/green alot, also try some different bends, your stuff is pretty nice, try to make it better and play around a bit now.

Ilikepie-LOOKS 300 TIMES BETTER COLORED...THAT'S BEAUTIFUL...seriously
Jers-PIMP, love it man, lol, the leprachaun is a good little twist too.
Moes-pretty good, I like how the bends are different. But the S is really weird, almost like a backwords two. Try to raise the bottom up so it's all equal, you know what I mean?

Bottom bump.

SAID
03-17-2008, 09:02 PM
basics.
stick to basics for now.

MarOne...
03-17-2008, 09:02 PM
^check out the new to graff. thread.

New shit, Happy St. Patty's Day-

http://i274.photobucket.com/albums/jj241/mazeonerr/marpattysday.jpg

SAID
03-17-2008, 09:03 PM
sickkk dude.
i just find theres no flow in your a.
illl!

MarOne...
03-17-2008, 09:05 PM
Yeah, I'm really starting to hate my A... But thanks. :D

hazetheone
03-17-2008, 09:09 PM
thats realy nice mar

SAID
03-17-2008, 09:18 PM
this is what id do with it.
instead of making it curl on the inside,
continue it to the outside and make a sharp turn on the instead. id do it to the m also. sorta like this..
http://img205.imageshack.us/img205/3156/maronebd8.png (http://imageshack.us)
just my point of view.

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-17-2008, 09:24 PM
that MAR handy is perfect

I totally fucked up this peice but does it look like it could flow if I fixed someshit up?

http://img258.imageshack.us/img258/7690/dscn0278ca1.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

SAID
03-17-2008, 09:25 PM
bring your t closer in.

MarOne...
03-17-2008, 09:28 PM
Jers- love that and the char is awesome

back to trying to get my shit consistent

http://img178.imageshack.us/img178/6226/dscn0273ut2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

In my opinion, this was way better. It's nice to see you using consistant bars.

SAID
03-17-2008, 09:29 PM
agreed.
be ncie to see it painted!

dim
03-17-2008, 09:47 PM
St patrick's day...sketch.
http://img213.imageshack.us/img213/9647/stpoiukr0.jpg
jers the end product of your peices all ways look fresh as fuck at first glance to me but when i look into it in further detail i notice things that dot really flow in it.
i think that if u made ur out line more broad then it will make the letters in the peice more bold and pretty much overall clean the peice up because you do have some shakey lines.
and im really not feeling the random things that take up the empty spaces in the peice that acctually dont connect to the peice at all. like the thing in the J and the thing in between the r and the s and the thing at the end of the s if u can find a ways to fully incorperate these thigins into the peice or even just to bend the letter a certain way so you dont have that much of any empty space your peices will look much fresher to me.
you deffinattly have a handle down on your style thats for sure but these are just the things that I think would make the peice better. this is only my opinoin.

atlok7
03-17-2008, 09:59 PM
http://img99.imageshack.us/img99/8160/caiserpinkorangebluede6.jpg

tell me what you think

reads caiser

sex without condoms
03-17-2008, 10:00 PM
your I is so small compared to all your other letters, I'd go back to the older style, it looks like you're getting to ahead of yourself

atlok7
03-17-2008, 10:04 PM
i would bro but this is pretty much what my style has always been

sex without condoms
03-17-2008, 10:13 PM
but i mean i see all your letters they can just look like other letters as well.
your C can look like an A, your A can look like an S, and the S can kind of look like an A

atlok7
03-17-2008, 10:15 PM
haha yeah i c what u mean. the C would make a dope A

cerex89
03-17-2008, 10:20 PM
http://i61.photobucket.com/albums/h48/vexinglight/bb.jpg

Techkanuck
03-17-2008, 10:24 PM
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b159/civichatch2005/Picture140.jpg

Trying something new, I know the V is off but anything else?

Mar- Hot as hell, agree on the A fix

Tare- I like the offset top on the T's nice beginning

atlok7
03-17-2008, 10:27 PM
^ i like that/

atlok7
03-17-2008, 10:30 PM
http://img99.imageshack.us/img99/8160/caiserpinkorangebluede6.jpg

tell me what you think

reads caiser

bump

Techkanuck
03-17-2008, 10:33 PM
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b159/civichatch2005/Picture140.jpg

Trying something new, I know the V is off but anything else?

Mar- Hot as hell, agree on the A fix

Tare- I like the offset top on the T's nice beginning

Bump

Jenz- I like it, maybe do a lil different Z to flow more

Atlok- I'm not sure what I could say to crit but it's definitely bad ass

intaout
03-17-2008, 10:40 PM
http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2209/2342334550_500d56b318.jpg?v=0
Vois- Do the 3D pen shading in black marker as well so you can see it and it feels part of the peice.
Atlok- No critiques for you, looks great
Jens- Looks good, maybey a lighter fill would look better

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-17-2008, 10:41 PM
techkanuck- just make the left bar on the V thicker and make the entire letter as tall as the others, pretty dope man

http://img301.imageshack.us/img301/8517/dscn0281lw4.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

Its not finished, I need a good color scheme anyone got any advice?

sheltr
03-17-2008, 10:44 PM
http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2346/2338877217_5df79467d7.jpg?v=0
tell me what u gangstaz think

remos
03-17-2008, 10:46 PM
intaout- try and make them closer together and mabye shadow would look good
cyto- not really feelin the way you made your letters look but thats just my opinion
i like purple and yellow so mabye you could try that..
sheltr- that looks pretty rad

IlikePie
03-17-2008, 10:58 PM
http://i73.photobucket.com/albums/i217/Supermanexists/c3d21ed6.jpg

I like new pages, no one to crit :D Tare, you were already told everything needed.

Bump 'cuz I'm a whore.

Sheltr-Looks visually appealing, but I dunno what the letters are supposed to be.
Tare-The top bar on the T is too slanted
Intaout-Take a few steps back
Atlok-I don't really like your style, but it looks good other than the bars are kind of everywhere.
Techanuck-I like it.

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-17-2008, 11:03 PM
well other then being a lil too slanted the whole thing works no?

IlikePie
03-17-2008, 11:08 PM
The R looks a bit off sitting next to the A and E, which are very pronounced, they're standing out, and then your R is kind of just taking up space, kick it's leg out a bit.

Street Wize
03-17-2008, 11:10 PM
sheltr- What does it even say? But i guess it looks good to me.
http://i91.photobucket.com/albums/k303/lil_boxer09/03-17-08_1624.jpg

sheltr
03-17-2008, 11:14 PM
sheltr- What does it even say? But i guess it looks good to me.
http://i91.photobucket.com/albums/k303/lil_boxer09/03-17-08_1624.jpg
..says sheltr, hence the screen name
the S starts on the bottom left and its on its side if that makes it any bit easier

IlikePie
03-17-2008, 11:17 PM
If I squint my eyes to make out the letters, it says ShFH and then the last letter looks like an I, K, and R all at the same time...

sheltr
03-17-2008, 11:20 PM
yeah...theres little connections off of the E, comes up from the bottom to make the E, same with the L, the T is a giant stick, with lines connecting the supposed to be top part of the T and the R, just yeah squint or some shit

and im done explaining, sorry for making it unreadable :(

IlikePie
03-17-2008, 11:38 PM
You officially hit "lame" in my book...

ibomb__atm
03-17-2008, 11:40 PM
http://i87.photobucket.com/albums/k148/RideBmx23/DONTKICKCATSHIT004-6.jpg

my 1st character crit?

exhale
03-17-2008, 11:40 PM
wtf supremechris

-otek fix the e and k and reduce the size of the o
-sheltr i can't make it out
-tare i liked the old ones you did a couple pages back but yeah like pie said the t is too slanted
-atlok i can't see the s.
-aim you should focus on letter for now?

legible? says wage
http://i188.photobucket.com/albums/z192/sewr11/File0118.jpg?t=1205811589

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-17-2008, 11:41 PM
http://img201.imageshack.us/img201/5297/dscn0289kt2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

colored it =\ for some reason im in love with it


WAGE- I LIKE IT A Lot

Backalley Abortion Doctor
03-17-2008, 11:43 PM
http://i185.photobucket.com/albums/x123/dumbfux/scan0004-3.jpg

KASP, by rots

"Riot"
03-18-2008, 12:11 AM
wtf supremechris

-otek fix the e and k and reduce the size of the o
-sheltr i can't make it out
-tare i liked the old ones you did a couple pages back but yeah like pie said the t is too slanted
-atlok i can't see the s.
-aim you should focus on letter for now?

legible? says wage
http://i188.photobucket.com/albums/z192/sewr11/File0118.jpg?t=1205811589

uhhhhh.
gooo back to simples.

seywhat
03-18-2008, 12:13 AM
wage- that shits fresh as fuck, the only thing i dont like is that it is all compressed
wanna exchange?

IlikePie
03-18-2008, 12:30 AM
uhhhhh.
gooo back to simples.


I think not.

Animal
03-18-2008, 02:08 AM
uhhhhh.
gooo back to simples.

he's already using bars and his style is decent.

EMAK
03-18-2008, 02:12 AM
http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m295/EMAK_2006/1219071010-1.jpg
http://i107.photobucket.com/albums/m295/EMAK_2006/EMAK032-2.jpg

shookone
03-18-2008, 02:16 AM
http://a22.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/13/l_92f553297aa4c0c3ae99efb699888585.jpg

did this for a little battle between me and a crew member.
critics?

i hate my two o's btw

smooth_nuts
03-18-2008, 02:20 AM
^^^both of you fools do simples,NOW!!!

SAID
03-18-2008, 07:45 AM
emak, really feeling the simplicity of your first one.

atlok7
03-18-2008, 07:55 AM
http://a22.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/13/l_92f553297aa4c0c3ae99efb699888585.jpg

did this for a little battle between me and a crew member.
critics?

i hate my two o's btw

work on simples. too many cats try to advance too quickly. work on letter structure wayyyy before you bust out some type of crazy style

brunorod
03-18-2008, 11:16 AM
shookone- I'd try to work on a good letter structure, the caracs are good though.
EMAK- I really like the first one. I'm not digging the style for the second one, it's very clean though.
Backalley Abortion Doctor- There's too much shit going on, go for a simpler style. Looks good though.
Cyto Aka Son1c- The outline and bubbles are great but I'm not digging the letter structure, specially for the R. Keep practicing.
exhale- I can't see what it reads, try something more simple.
-----------------------

Here's mine guys, I did it last night cuz I couldn't sleep.

http://i36.photobucket.com/albums/e38/brunorod/Imagen026.jpg