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AnteUp
03-26-2008, 10:15 PM
nemz-wow. i was wrong... looks amazing with color bro, keep it up, and i loooove the throwwwwww :)
capo-simples...
funerals-nice and simple, looks purty nice :)
dim-you know i like your work, but the add-ons look waaaay to jam packed. the arrow on the left is to much.
roa-keep the simples, on the first one make the bars more consistent.
sake-i dont know anything about throws or i would crit.
kraft-dont make the o pointy at the bottom.
tamk-try to move your marker faster, it bled the ink to much, but the simples are nice :)
evasion- judging by your name its supposed to be eva? but it looks like eua, the colors are nice but the letters are inconsistent.
pie-the letters look tasty :) maybe an exchange when i get better?

REMOVED THE ADD-ON.
http://i157.photobucket.com/albums/t66/AnteUp14/03-26-08_2149-1.jpg
CRIT?

IlikePie
03-26-2008, 10:20 PM
I'm doing names right now actually, you write What, right?

Capo Izi
03-26-2008, 10:20 PM
capo-simples...


All but the first piece are simples?

I mean it bends a little, but it's still flat straight blocks

AnteUp
03-26-2008, 10:24 PM
I'm doing names right now actually, you write What, right?
yes :) or whats.

and capo, you gotta use the same thickness of bars.

Kraft561
03-26-2008, 10:25 PM
http://i159.photobucket.com/albums/t144/imronburgandy/Mygraffiti002.jpg
the handstyle didnt turn out how i wanted but whatev. Crits?

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-26-2008, 10:27 PM
http://img264.imageshack.us/img264/5976/dscn0376ir5.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

Capo Izi
03-26-2008, 10:39 PM
yes :) or whats.

and capo, you gotta use the same thickness of bars.

Yeah I completely failed on the ARK one, but on the CAPO one, isn't it fairly the right thickness?

Also I always wonder why you guys tell us this, since most advanced graffiti all the bars and lines, etc are all different widths?

SPRAY yoface407
03-26-2008, 10:42 PM
nemz thats nice
capo i like the second one sept the bugger on it and the first ones 3d needs some work
Lock try makeing all letters same size and keep practicing on your tag

sex without condoms
03-26-2008, 10:44 PM
From back in the day negros!
exchanges!
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/better.jpg
http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y158/AlexheartsJennifer/iokp.jpg

JETPACK!!
03-26-2008, 10:46 PM
ante, that looks so much better without that thing on it. gimmie an e-pound for that.
lock, stop doing what your doing with your L, dont make the bottom bar go out that far cuz then you have too much dead space above it. fix your K, keep the backbone straight. an dont put the letters are side by side in every aspect like how your doing.
tare, your A and R are kinna small compared to your T and E, make them wider. and i dont like your R whatsoever, that line you put halfway through the backbone of your R dosent look good, and for the leg of your R keep it going straight down, the hook up into the E kinna looks wack

one

JETPACK!!
03-26-2008, 10:49 PM
Yeah I completely failed on the ARK one, but on the CAPO one, isn't it fairly the right thickness?

Also I always wonder why you guys tell us this, since most advanced graffiti all the bars and lines, etc are all different widths?

my bad for double posting. capo, the reason everyones tellin you to keep them all the same width is because its easier to learn when you keep them all the same width. and im pretty sure that in "advanced graffiti" the bars and lines that arnt the same width are extensions rather than the actual letters (at least for the most part)

atlok7
03-26-2008, 10:54 PM
tare- your getting better really fast cuz. keep sketching every day

Capo Izi
03-26-2008, 11:10 PM
my bad for double posting. capo, the reason everyones tellin you to keep them all the same width is because its easier to learn when you keep them all the same width. and im pretty sure that in "advanced graffiti" the bars and lines that arnt the same width are extensions rather than the actual letters (at least for the most part)

Oh ok...thanks.

AnteUp
03-26-2008, 11:14 PM
http://i157.photobucket.com/albums/t66/AnteUp14/03-26-08_2308-1.jpg
throw...

seywhat
03-26-2008, 11:29 PM
im diggin that wa! throw ante, u should try to develop a peice out of it

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-26-2008, 11:30 PM
tare- your getting better really fast cuz. keep sketching every day

thanks man, I will

Duct Tape & Death Threats
03-26-2008, 11:40 PM
http://img209.imageshack.us/img209/8593/image0124nk4.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
Zofism for Zof teh Horse. Because I'm bored. Lulz.
The Z is wayy to skinny. =[


EDIT:
Chump. I'll hook you up with a simple only if I get the vibe that you're a cool kitty cat. And If I feel kinda sexually attracted to you.
That goes to all.

Rhyseitup
03-27-2008, 01:10 AM
some random doodle i made yesterday
CRITS?
http://i39.photobucket.com/albums/e192/sitimoako/CHARACTER.png

-Leski
03-27-2008, 01:23 AM
Your plan to post it in three threads worked. I didn't post, then didn't post, and now Im posting because its everywhere I go.

The scribbles in the hair look kinda messy, make them more the same size loops for a better scribble fill. Guys got one thick neck on him, but it fits. The simples are gritty in a good way though the structure could be better. Don't like the heart.

Constructive stuff outta the way, I like it.

Rhyseitup
03-27-2008, 01:29 AM
thanks man.. yea the heart was just a random thing.. lol and the simples on the side were just doodles..

Duct Tape & Death Threats
03-27-2008, 01:32 AM
http://img209.imageshack.us/img209/8593/image0124nk4.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
Zofism for Zof teh Horse. Because I'm bored. Lulz.
The Z is wayy to skinny. =[


EDIT:
Chump. I'll hook you up with a simple only if I get the vibe that you're a cool kitty cat. And If I feel kinda sexually attracted to you.
That goes to all.


Bump from bottom post.

IlikePie
03-27-2008, 01:34 AM
http://i73.photobucket.com/albums/i217/Supermanexists/98e1d8b4.jpg

Crayon style!

Capo-Keep working
Peor or Peur? Fix that 3rd letter
Dim, the leg of the R is coming out of the wrong place
Ros- Simples are nice
Nemz-Mindgem misses you :p


Bump before I go to bed...

Duct Tape & Death Threats
03-27-2008, 01:41 AM
I like it a lot, the letters are good. Nice and clean too.
Rhyse, I like how you've tried to go with a comical/illustrated approach, but just fix up some anatomy things, like the neck, far too think.
Otherwise it's sweet.

the end
03-27-2008, 02:31 AM
for the girl<3
the outline of the letters were freeform... what ive been working on and the fill is some sloppy ass shit
http://img340.imageshack.us/img340/9063/32708marciewn5.jpg

the end
03-27-2008, 02:32 AM
for the girl<3
the outline of the letters was free-formed... what ive been working on, and the fill is some sloppy ass shit
http://img340.imageshack.us/img340/9063/32708marciewn5.jpg

fonone
03-27-2008, 02:56 AM
http://img187.imageshack.us/img187/5279/mar27126id1.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img182.imageshack.us/img182/1323/mar27127tc2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

some shit i did during mathematics 2nd one is completely experimental

ESKiMO2
03-27-2008, 06:34 AM
http://img187.imageshack.us/img187/5279/mar27126id1.jpg (http://imageshack.us)


some shit i did during mathematics 2nd one is completely experimental

I don't like the extension on the leg of the R but it looks kind of good on the K. Take away the bar on the bottom in the N

Rhyseitup
03-27-2008, 07:54 AM
http://i39.photobucket.com/albums/e192/sitimoako/CHARACTER.png[/QUOTE]

Fazed
03-27-2008, 09:22 AM
http://img187.imageshack.us/img187/5279/mar27126id1.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img182.imageshack.us/img182/1323/mar27127tc2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

some shit i did during mathematics 2nd one is completely experimental

your vanishing points are pretty good, and letter structure too...I like it all except that retarded E in the first one :]

aloha416
03-27-2008, 10:28 AM
yo just wondering if this is considered "toy" any thoughts?
http://i14.photobucket.com/albums/a344/Sojizzle/n501310312_2492533_743.jpg

fonone
03-27-2008, 10:45 AM
your vanishing points are pretty good, and letter structure too...I like it all except that retarded E in the first one :]


haha thanks man, yea first time doing an E like that :P

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-27-2008, 12:53 PM
http://img178.imageshack.us/img178/839/dscn0378tr9.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

wordsrlazy
03-27-2008, 01:27 PM
runchi, clean, sum dope pieces

vowels
03-27-2008, 02:51 PM
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v332/jesseismessy/moveddd008.jpg

the character is an influence from my friend bien's characters but it doesn't really look like his cause his are good hahahaha

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-27-2008, 03:53 PM
Vowels- keep it simpler man

like this

http://img505.imageshack.us/img505/1927/dscn0381zp6.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img505.imageshack.us/img505/1927/dscn0381zp6.39f11244ac.jpg (http://g.imageshack.us/g.php?h=505&i=dscn0381zp6.jpg)

JETPACK!!
03-27-2008, 03:55 PM
kay honestly, you kids really really really need to crit when you post flicks. this is gettin ridiculous, 6 or 7 people have posted pictures without giving any crits.


GIVE CRITS TO GET CRITS!!

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-27-2008, 03:59 PM
kay honestly, you kids really really really need to crit when you post flicks. this is gettin ridiculous, 6 or 7 people have posted pictures without giving any crits.


GIVE CRITS TO GET CRITS!!

If your including me, I wasn't asking for any, I know the rules

Techkanuck
03-27-2008, 04:15 PM
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b159/civichatch2005/Picture188.jpg


Quickie

Zofism piece is nice, feelin the concept just needs some space and consistency

pie- I always like this style, only thing i can say is it'd look better with the highlight in the 3-D imo

the end- delete one of the posts and maybe fix up the M and resize the I next time

fonone- i like them but i feel the N is weak on the big one, maybe make the extension smaller and the right leg taller a bit

Rhyse- looks like a good start, it'll be interesting to see how you elaborate on that, there's a lot of potential in doing a person

Aloha- It's got some really good parts, but some of it is kinda off, so idk, it's good at any rate.

Cyto- A little more time checking the angles of the 3-D and keepin things cleaner would help it out a bunch

Vowels- I like some of it but the letter structure is kinda week, the tag is nice but it's kinda off on the end with the L-S lookin like a K

vowels
03-27-2008, 04:57 PM
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v332/jesseismessy/moveddd011.jpg
though I would add a little bit of like tattooish-ness to it lol
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v332/jesseismessy/moveddd009.jpg
itchy and scratchy comic book, wooooooordd.

MY CRITS, SO PEOPLE DON'T BITCH

Duct Tape - The "ofi" are different than the z,s, and m but I still like it.
The End - I like your handstyle but not how the m and a are facing upwards and the r and t are facing down.
Fonone - I like it all except for the block letters on the first page. So sick though.
Rhyse - King read says it's wack, but I love your shit, always. Rock band tn! hahah
Aloha - Shit's bangin'
Cyto - I'm not really feeling the SUPER simple letters but they are clean and look nice at least.
Tech - It reminds me a lot of hepos because of the colours and the fact that the outline is similar to fill so it doesn't really pop out at you. Keep sketching though, I can see you being a west-coast style kind of person in the future.

Techkanuck
03-27-2008, 05:09 PM
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b159/civichatch2005/Picture188.jpg


Quickie

Zofism piece is nice, feelin the concept just needs some space and consistency

pie- I always like this style, only thing i can say is it'd look better with the highlight in the 3-D imo

the end- delete one of the posts and maybe fix up the M and resize the I next time

fonone- i like them but i feel the N is weak on the big one, maybe make the extension smaller and the right leg taller a bit

Rhyse- looks like a good start, it'll be interesting to see how you elaborate on that, there's a lot of potential in doing a person

Aloha- It's got some really good parts, but some of it is kinda off, so idk, it's good at any rate.

Cyto- A little more time checking the angles of the 3-D and keepin things cleaner would help it out a bunch

Vowels- I like some of it but the letter structure is kinda week, the tag is nice but it's kinda off on the end with the L-S lookin like a K

Bump

JETPACK!!
03-27-2008, 05:20 PM
If your including me, I wasn't asking for any, I know the rules

nah, i was just throwing that out there in general. but, it would be cool if you threw one or two half ass crits even if your not lookin for any in return.

vois, your letters are getting better. but id watch the red filling on the inside of your O and S, if your gonna fill up the holes with the same color as your outline, id add a shadow for the rest of it too, cuz what it kinna looks like to me is that the middle of your letters are shadowed while, the outside of your letters arnt. i'd also watch your flow just a lil bit, your OIS is cool but id bring up the left bar on your V a bit to match the flow

good job on the amount of crits :)

vowels, the only reason im bitch is cuz no one else is, an ive noticed the crits have been gettin mad wack an lazy.
for your first sketch, id keep all the letters the same size , and i wouldnt make the bottom of all of your letters smaller than the top, that leaves you with a lot of deadspace on the bottom half of your piece, makes it lack if ya get what im sayin.
your second sketch is much better, thats what you should be aiming for. decent concept on bars and lines, but with your O id put a hole in there. just to clarify that it is an O.
EDIT: i fucked up lookin at your sketches, the first ones good, where the second one needs work. put it together from there:)
good job with the critiqing too

cheers

:RAVE:
03-27-2008, 05:32 PM
im rave905 but my old account is fuct so idk
http://i275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/raveoh/Picture.jpg

vois - i dunlike the scratch force

vowels - that icey 1 is dope id like 2 c that painted but i think ur shine on the o shouldnt go under the w

rhyse - nice pen charac love the lips but not that hair so much

aloha - nah thats dope

foneone - yeah i like the top one most

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-27-2008, 05:40 PM
:rave: I like the colors but the peice lacks structure in the Rs, try making all bars the same

and heres a skeleton of something im working on, crits wanted pweese
http://img142.imageshack.us/img142/711/dscn0383wk2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

Techkanuck
03-27-2008, 05:59 PM
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b159/civichatch2005/Picture189.jpg

Cyto- I like it but you might want to bring the A out some

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-27-2008, 06:15 PM
yeah fo sho, I think im going to make the A pop out instead of being overlapped by both the T and R

vois- ok I like it, just make the bubble bars cleaner and fix the s

Techkanuck
03-27-2008, 06:53 PM
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b159/civichatch2005/Picture190.jpg
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b159/civichatch2005/Picture191.jpg
only have a few markers

silentchaos14
03-27-2008, 07:06 PM
vois- start over with straight letters, use bars. read the new 2 graff if u havent.

http://i186.photobucket.com/albums/x65/silentchaos14/Morne9.jpg (http://i186.photobucket.com/albums/x65/silentchaos14/Morne9.jpg)
most recent thing in my book, started sketching again.
crits?

seywhat
03-27-2008, 07:22 PM
http://i46.photobucket.com/albums/f105/shaggydopeg/fableexchangedone.jpg
http://i46.photobucket.com/albums/f105/shaggydopeg/camerexchangedone.jpg
EXCHANGES!!! fuck 3d

morne- i'm likin that, maybe just make the bottom leg of ur r come off of the top one more if u get what i mean
vois- listen to morne
cyto- really feelin that except for the squiggly line on the r, but other than that dope! i also just posted our exchange in the exchange thread
raver- go even simpler, just like straight bars. alson work on ur structure cuz it lokks likt it says rayer
vowels- i dig em both, just not the banner on the first one
irekn- great use of bars, really fresh man

JETPACK!!
03-27-2008, 07:48 PM
see how much better it is when every crits everyone! we all improve! :D:D

raver, work on keeping your lines and letters straight, your letters kinna bob up an down. keep them in a straight line, if you cant do that, than before you start sketching, grab a ruler an draw a faint line, an draw ontop of that. fix your V, it looks like a Y, take out that tail at the bottom. and id fix your last R, it dosent look as clean as the first. what markers do you use?

tare, id take it a slight step backwards. dont add as much steeze, id work on your A and R the most. your T covers too much of the left bar on your A and id also bring the right bar of your A down a bit more. id also try bringing down the left bar on your R just a bit. your E's tight though.

vois that looks better, but honestly, id start thinking outside the box a bit. your letters arnt making that much improvement because youve been chasing the same style. fuck curves until youve got nice lookin lines. keep your letters the same size, and start adding a drop shadow to it, workin on that will make your overrall sketch better.

silentchaos, im not feelin the sharp edges, try smoothening them out and see how that will look. an loose those hook things you got on the bottom of your M, try making it more like the legs on your R. good job on the bars, you kinna fucked up the bars on the R a bit with the widths, but other than that it looks good.

seywhat, that fable piece looks pretty ill, but imo you should sketch near the bottom cuz then it could cut off parts of your letters, like your B. also watch the height of your letters, the A is much shorter than the E.
the camer piece is a nice set of simples too, if your gonna have one leg longer than the other though on your letters, make sure the right leg on all your letters is the same length, rather than different lengths.

i rushed the camer crits cuz i need to shit

one

Mr. Octane
03-27-2008, 07:49 PM
seywhat- damn bro...im really likin those fills...those r clean man
morne- pretty dope structure u got goin, maybe u should try adding a lighter color around the outside tho to make it stand out better
vois- listen to the guys above, start out simpler bro
cyto- that sketch is DOPE man... definitely gotta see that when its done, the only thing i was thinkin is maybe changing the round top of the R to something that would match the rest of the letters a little better
vowels- those r nice and clean, the only thing i would suggest is to make the letters on the second one closer to eachother

anyway, heres a throwie-ish thing i jus did today...

http://i112.photobucket.com/albums/n188/HighOctane89/Dozin-1.jpg

crits? thanks

:RAVE:
03-27-2008, 08:44 PM
JETPACK - good old decos my man

mr. octane - way 2 skip right by me...
lose the bubbles

hazetheone
03-27-2008, 08:44 PM
some school shit
i realy don't like the second one
http://i25.tinypic.com/qovk1v.jpg
http://i26.tinypic.com/15ohufo.jpg
vowels-get a scanner and dont put shit over your letters
tech-just do straight letters dont point the bottoms
rave-coneect everybar in one letter dont do them seperately
cyto-i realy like that style man keep it up
silent-nice simp nothing special to crit tho
seywat-the fable fill is way off but mine is on point ill do you one tomorrow at school
mr octane-spread out your letters a little bit but just enough where you can see all of them not too much

atlok7
03-27-2008, 08:47 PM
haze- that second one is dope! the E is bangin

JETPACK!!
03-27-2008, 08:54 PM
haze, im diggin the first one a lot. ill flow an im diggin the tail on the A and R.

*e-pound*

im diggin the M on your bomb too

Mr. Octane
03-27-2008, 08:58 PM
oh damn, my fault rave sorry bout that...i like how u have the 2 different shades of green in the letters tht shit is fresh, i suggest that you follow haze's advice tho and dont overlap the bars. other than that tho ur doin pretty good so far

haze that second one is dope...how do you not like that lol

Techkanuck
03-27-2008, 09:05 PM
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b159/civichatch2005/Picture193.jpg

I know it sucks but it was quick to show I'm not an idiot i was just trying stu[pid ish

JETPACK!!
03-27-2008, 09:12 PM
vois that looks a lot better than everything else youve done. keep the letters the same size bro, your gettin it. bring your V up a bit and your S down a bit. all your letters are kinna on a slight slope upwards

headsick123
03-27-2008, 09:33 PM
http://i16.photobucket.com/albums/b32/headsick123/cashpiece.jpg

roa
03-27-2008, 09:47 PM
voiss and cash--- spread your letters out and do simple simple simple stuff... dont worry about anything fancy. make them all the same width and heigth

http://i271.photobucket.com/albums/jj130/argh-/DSC00740.jpg
http://i271.photobucket.com/albums/jj130/argh-/DSC00741.jpg
http://i271.photobucket.com/albums/jj130/argh-/DSC00742.jpg
http://i271.photobucket.com/albums/jj130/argh-/DSC00730.jpg

emel
03-27-2008, 10:02 PM
vois- start over with straight letters, use bars. read the new 2 graff if u havent.

http://i186.photobucket.com/albums/x65/silentchaos14/Morne9.jpg (http://i186.photobucket.com/albums/x65/silentchaos14/Morne9.jpg)
most recent thing in my book, started sketching again.
crits?
it looks likes your learning to use bars better now, but try to keep a consistent widgth of the bars and lose all those little extension/curly thingies
just start tryin to get a little flow with your letters now, simples just bend em a bit and experiment with that

JETPACK!!
03-27-2008, 10:06 PM
#2 pet peeve, when people repeat crits

vowels
03-27-2008, 10:09 PM
Thanks guys and I have a scanner but I'm not going to rip shit out of my book for you guys. Nice crits btw.. pfft.

meetermaid
03-27-2008, 10:11 PM
old n new, mostly old, can't remember if i've posted some of this shit or not
haven't been sketching too much latelyyyyy

http://img259.imageshack.us/img259/976/picture119gy7.jpghttp://img406.imageshack.us/img406/8573/picture92ry6.jpg
http://img406.imageshack.us/img406/7573/picture90un7.jpghttp://img297.imageshack.us/img297/261/picture85wk0.jpg
http://img257.imageshack.us/img257/4931/picture78uo1.jpghttp://img257.imageshack.us/img257/193/picture75pv1.jpg
http://img257.imageshack.us/img257/4750/picture77hr3.jpg

crits greatly appreciated - seems like whenever i post i just get dickriding compliments but nothing of real substance?

RFI. SPit
03-27-2008, 10:48 PM
silent- you're improving... maybe lose the things at the bottom of the M though..

http://img208.imageshack.us/img208/9348/photo314jn7.jpg

edit:
bump this one too
http://img259.imageshack.us/img259/5057/photo313xc9.jpg

IlikePie
03-27-2008, 10:49 PM
First one is helluvva sketchy, not very good, I don't suggest doing that one anymore. Your hands are pretty nice, I like um. The Orange Meet, the M isn't flowing with the E's at all, and the T is a tad low. The Yellow and Orange one, I like it, but the center bar on the E, I think it would look better if it was fatter, if you know what I mean and I'm not really feelin' that last one too much. Any questions, just PM me 'cuz I don't like to clog up this thread with chitchat.

Roolete
03-27-2008, 10:51 PM
the first one is not so great, handies are all good, the bottom three are ok except on the orange one dont do the colon thing with the bottom of your t.

zof really feelin that, euro pacman

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-28-2008, 01:21 AM
Zof- I like them, but those pacman look off

and Im really disappointed wiht how this came out, I dislike my corrections

http://img172.imageshack.us/img172/9445/dscn0388lm4.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

:RAVE:
03-28-2008, 08:31 AM
http://i275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/raveoh/Picture008.jpg
k i know the force is wack i just felt like tryin that steez out

cyto - yeah i liked the it much better in pencil

rfi - yeah it looks nice but i dun like the pacman thing

meet - id say ur bakcwards one is the nicest but i dun like the red n yellow 1 with the spirals

roa - i like the top 1 best

cash ur gettin 2 tricky go simpler

vois - gettin better

haze - what r u talkin about i like the bottom one better then the top

NEZ89
03-28-2008, 08:42 AM
rave- that style doesn't seem to work to well
tech- dope simples
head- lose the add-ons
haze- that throwie is fuckin dope

atlok7
03-28-2008, 09:40 AM
tare/sonic- damn your getting gooder faster. keep er goin

Mass Appeal
03-28-2008, 10:17 AM
roas...very nice !

D E M O
03-28-2008, 11:05 AM
http://img141.imageshack.us/img141/6428/demo32ji0.jpg

Chump
03-28-2008, 11:18 AM
http://www.tinypic.ir/files/jbe93xjlnk9dqk31s341.jpg
^something my gf did... didnt think it looked to bad...what yall think?
Demo- im diggin it... the only thing i dont like is how the E curls back up into its self on the top part..

Thrice
03-28-2008, 12:15 PM
shit dude, you gf is good, real good. Better than me.

Chump
03-28-2008, 12:22 PM
and shes been messin around for maybe a week... makes me mad lol

B1ue
03-28-2008, 12:26 PM
Sup everyone, my tag is "Blue"...I'm new on the site...this is my first post. So hope I'm not posting in the wrong area. But anyway, here is a few of my ish!
"ONE"

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v69/BlueBoyCivic/Blue2.jpg

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v69/BlueBoyCivic/BlueBlackPen.jpg

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v69/BlueBoyCivic/BluePiece.jpg

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v69/BlueBoyCivic/BlueThrowie.jpg

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v69/BlueBoyCivic/FinishedBGPiece.jpg

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v69/BlueBoyCivic/QuiccBG.jpg

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v69/BlueBoyCivic/BluePiece2.jpg

:RAVE:
03-28-2008, 12:51 PM
http://i275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/raveoh/Picture009.jpg
just threw this down
i suck at extensions tho

Blue - that last 1 is nice whats that on??

chump - yeah ur girls gettin it

demo - yeah i like it except the curl thing 2

B1ue
03-28-2008, 01:08 PM
Rave: looks ok, the V actually looks like it could be a j though, try not doing extensions just yet. And as for my flix...which one were you talkin about? The simple BLUE one? the FIRST ONE?

Chump: I agree w/Rave...your lady has got some poetential...tell her to keep at it!

B1ue
03-28-2008, 01:12 PM
http://img141.imageshack.us/img141/6428/demo32ji0.jpg

Demo...this is clean as hell bro! Props!

"ONE"

hazetheone
03-28-2008, 01:16 PM
some school shit
i realy don't like the second one
http://i25.tinypic.com/qovk1v.jpg
http://i26.tinypic.com/15ohufo.jpg
vowels-get a scanner and dont put shit over your letters
tech-just do straight letters dont point the bottoms
rave-coneect everybar in one letter dont do them seperately
cyto-i realy like that style man keep it up
silent-nice simp nothing special to crit tho
seywat-the fable fill is way off but mine is on point ill do you one tomorrow at school
mr octane-spread out your letters a little bit but just enough where you can see all of them not too much

http://i29.tinypic.com/als17l.jpg
blue-the first ones are good but the last few are bleh
demo-i dont really like it but it isnt bad
rave-dont do extensions if you suck at them

B1ue
03-28-2008, 01:18 PM
Haze, I like that one. I would like to see it as a finished piece though, with a nice fill or something.

:RAVE:
03-28-2008, 01:19 PM
demo i was talkin about ur last flik the orange one with red dots

B1ue
03-28-2008, 01:21 PM
demo i was talkin about ur last flik the orange one with red dots

I think you're talkin bout me? LOL but yeah bro..that piece was just done in my blackbook, paper.

Fazed
03-28-2008, 01:29 PM
http://img141.imageshack.us/img141/6428/demo32ji0.jpg


oh man this is so chill and clean I love it
the colors are great

:RAVE:
03-28-2008, 01:30 PM
opps yeah i did mean u
http://i275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/raveoh/Picture-1.jpg
i just finished this i know its a sticker but its on my blackbook
i think ill slant one of the sticks on the v next time...
just 2 crit myself lol

Chump
03-28-2008, 01:35 PM
not fillin the letters....Have you done simples?

hazetheone
03-28-2008, 01:37 PM
wow
crits just keep coming
this influx of junior members need to be put in check
i critted or have helped 99%of this page
give crits to get crits
i gave em
wtf

Chump
03-28-2008, 01:39 PM
Haze i would crits you but my comp at work is gay and doesnt show some pics sometimes...so i cant see yours...

hazetheone
03-28-2008, 01:42 PM
i wasnt talking about you dude
you know how things are supposed to work in here

sketch3
03-28-2008, 02:01 PM
wow
crits just keep coming
this influx of junior members need to be put in check
i critted or have helped 99%of this page
give crits to get crits
i gave em
wtf
real talk i bump every thing i post about 4 times and dont get shit,
i stoped uploadin shit.
demo i like it but letters overlap abit much, an get rid ofthe exteion on the d

JETPACK!!
03-28-2008, 02:17 PM
honestly what the shit, a page or two ago kids were givin out like 5 crits each. now they forgot how to again. shits wack

raver, your shits wack, i cant read it. can you honestly see rave in that yourself? the closet i can see outta that is PDD=.. but the = is fucked up, maybe a wack C. block letters. go on microsoft word, pick a font. expand the width of the letters.
and give some god damned crits

demo, dont highlight the the whole outline of your letter, with the 3d you have, highlight the bottom an a bit up the sides.
give some god damned crits

camer i already critted your other two, but your recent sketch, dont have that tail on the top of your A going to the left, it kinna makes your C look like an E

wassup blue. rule #1, give crits if you want em. im being nice this time only cuz i feel line crabbin out with some crits. your fourth sketch is your best. dont mix lowercase and capital letters. pick one an stick with it for that sketch. your 3rd last sucks, make it simple letters and add some 3d to it. try not to have so much deadspace in the middle of your letters
give crits to get them

B1ue
03-28-2008, 02:45 PM
wassup blue. rule #1, give crits if you want em. im being nice this time only cuz i feel line crabbin out with some crits. your fourth sketch is your best. dont mix lowercase and capital letters. pick one an stick with it for that sketch. your 3rd last sucks, make it simple letters and add some 3d to it. try not to have so much deadspace in the middle of your letters
give crits to get them


That's coo...but if you look back up on my posts...I did give crits. My bad if it's not good enough. And thanks for the crits as well bro...I'll b sure to look more into my ish!

"ONE"

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-28-2008, 03:30 PM
yeah blue man, you hide you L's in like 90% of your shit thats you've posted, it'd look a whole lot better is you spaced your letters man

Techkanuck
03-28-2008, 04:03 PM
http://i19.photobucket.com/albums/b159/civichatch2005/Picture194.jpg

I'll crit when there's more on the page and I have more time.

Kayel
03-28-2008, 04:07 PM
Hey everyone this is my first post in the forums, so i hope i landed in the right area. I've just started writing a few weeks ago, and I wanted some feedback on my work. This is the best thing i've done so far so i'm ready to take the heat (i really don't expect anyone to be kind )

It says Sear ( btw. is this name taken? )
I did the coloring with highlighter and 2 fine tip sharpies for the green areas

http://img227.imageshack.us/img227/2989/0327082121kx2.th.jpg (http://img227.imageshack.us/my.php?image=0327082121kx2.jpg)

I also understand i should give some feedback but i really don't think it's my place as a totally new writer to give criticism... i'l wait till i know how bad my work is

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-28-2008, 04:15 PM
vois- that would be alright throwie the v seems shakily drawn

something like this http://img241.imageshack.us/img241/5656/dscn0396fq5.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

idk

here a new tare peice

http://img228.imageshack.us/img228/6931/dscn0390jw5.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

Techkanuck
03-28-2008, 04:17 PM
V had some issues so the weirdness was the fix

Mr. Octane
03-28-2008, 05:43 PM
My crits for this page....
Vois- i like that throwie i dont see anything really wrong with it, personally i would choose a different fill color buts thats all personal preference so i cant really crit u on that overall good job
Tare- pretty nice simples, the only thing i would suggest to make the piece flow better would be to angle the bottom of the R down so it would match the curve of the A, and then move the E closer
Sear- not a bad start, since ur jus starting out tho id say to worry less about fills and work on making sure all ur letters are the same size and flow good. For example i would suggest moving the A up so it doesnt drop below the other letters and making the bottom of the R to go in the same direction as the bottom of the A, you want eveything to be even and clean


bumpin my stuff up for any other crits...


seywhat- damn bro...im really likin those fills...those r clean man
morne- pretty dope structure u got goin, maybe u should try adding a lighter color around the outside tho to make it stand out better
vois- listen to the guys above, start out simpler bro
cyto- that sketch is DOPE man... definitely gotta see that when its done, the only thing i was thinkin is maybe changing the round top of the R to something that would match the rest of the letters a little better
vowels- those r nice and clean, the only thing i would suggest is to make the letters on the second one closer to eachother

anyway, heres a throwie-ish thing i jus did today...

http://i112.photobucket.com/albums/n188/HighOctane89/Dozin-1.jpg

crits? thanks

Kayel
03-28-2008, 06:01 PM
@ Octane

Thank now that you mention it i realize that the A kinda dipped low. Il get to work on it :)

About your work i was gonna say that the N looked a little sketchy. The middle connector looked off . And even out the Z. The top part looks to skinny compared to the bottom.

@ Tare

I like it, but the R looks off. The leg looks weird way up there . Just my 2 cents


Edit : I'm working on a modified on to make those changes. Check out this skeleton, wanted some feedback

http://img252.imageshack.us/img252/545/0327082205wq2.th.jpg (http://img252.imageshack.us/my.php?image=0327082205wq2.jpg)

Bmx516
03-28-2008, 06:49 PM
http://i159.photobucket.com/albums/t144/imronburgandy/FriendsGraffiti.jpg
alright i think this is better than "love"

NEZ89
03-28-2008, 06:59 PM
kayel- stay simple, style comes once you've got the basics down

BMX- start with block letters, they are easier than bubble letters.
And step away from fills until u get better with your letters.

Octane- keep your bars the same width, the D and N are a bit off

Cyto- like oct said, drop the leg of the R so it flows better

Tech- the S needs a bit of work but it's nice overall, keep it up

amberTrichome
03-28-2008, 07:01 PM
Are you on crack bmx? Try doing something straight so you can get your coloring down...
Octane if it was even across it would look good the I and cross bar of the N are a lil off too...
Nice simple tare
Blue feelin that vertical one you did that shit is sexy.
Kayel does it say star or something? try keeping stuff even and simple not all over the place if not like flowing properly...
http://i164.photobucket.com/albums/u26/amberTrichome/Photo0039_002.jpg
some shit from today think ima put a purple outline around it later...
http://i164.photobucket.com/albums/u26/amberTrichome/Photo0036_001.jpg
^my sativa :)

.D.H.
03-28-2008, 07:09 PM
http://img172.imageshack.us/img172/7800/vermontdp3.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
school is boring..

ambertrichome: charac's not lookin to good, but your letters are solid simples. lose that blood drip fill though. handstyles could use a little work too

Kayel: not good... cant read it, its overlapping bars all over the place, no structure, bars arent same thickness, no sense of direction. pretty much definition as wack. sorry. go to simpler letters

Dozen: letters overlap too much, try an keep consistent thickness through a letter, and the sketch for that matter. keep practicing

cyto aka: the TARE is the best. the bottom of your e loses some thickness though

vois: forget that coloring and fix the top part of the S and it aint so bad. very generic. keep at practicing.

keep laboring away

RFI. SPit
03-28-2008, 07:30 PM
Bump from bottom post.

Hahah word thanks!

Sundowner
03-28-2008, 07:31 PM
my first piece up here. lemme know what you think


<a href="http://s2.photobucket.com/albums/y10/kidfantastic/?action=view&current=IMG00006.jpg" target="_blank"><img src="http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y10/kidfantastic/IMG00006.jpg" border="0" alt="Photobucket"></a>

NEZ89
03-28-2008, 07:32 PM
my first piece up here. lemme know what you think
http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y10/kidfantastic/IMG00006.jpg

fixed

never do a wildstyle for your first peice, i learned that the hardway
start with basic block letters and work your way up

Sundowner
03-28-2008, 07:34 PM
thanks

Sundowner
03-28-2008, 07:36 PM
not my first peice ever, just my first peice on this forum

Kayel
03-28-2008, 08:19 PM
Hey everyone this is my first post in the forums, so i hope i landed in the right area. I've just started writing a few weeks ago, and I wanted some feedback on my work. This is the best thing i've done so far so i'm ready to take the heat (i really don't expect anyone to be kind )

It says Sear ( btw. is this name taken? )
I did the coloring with highlighter and 2 fine tip sharpies for the green areas

http://img227.imageshack.us/img227/2989/0327082121kx2.th.jpg (http://img227.imageshack.us/my.php?image=0327082121kx2.jpg)

I also understand i should give some feedback but i really don't think it's my place as a totally new writer to give criticism... i'l wait till i know how bad my work is


I'd like more critiques on this one mostly, the other one was crap :D. Want to know if the leter structure is good and any other tips. Right now i am working on making the A be on the same level as the rest

Mr. Octane
03-28-2008, 08:30 PM
Bmx516- listen to Nez, start with block letters
amberTrichome- im feelin those letters man, it should b lookin fresh when u outline them
D.H- thats dope bro...im thinkin if u maybe threw some 3d on there it would b lookin better tho
Sundowner- I like the colors and its pretty damn clean, but i suggest u try it a littler simpler

this is jus a sketch i did...tried to seperate the letters more like people suggested...

http://i112.photobucket.com/albums/n188/HighOctane89/dozin1-1.jpg

any quick crits b4 i finish it up?

silentchaos14
03-28-2008, 08:30 PM
vois- start over with straight letters, use bars. read the new 2 graff if u havent.

http://i186.photobucket.com/albums/x65/silentchaos14/Morne9.jpg (http://i186.photobucket.com/albums/x65/silentchaos14/Morne9.jpg)
most recent thing in my book, started sketching again.
crits?
bumpity bump for better crits.

JETPACK!!
03-28-2008, 08:40 PM
iunno if its just me, but seeing cats give out more than 2-3 crits is more beautiful than any picture in this thread.

silent, draw something new, your next sketch, i would say not to chase the diamond like shape of your letters, imo it dosent look that good. also i noticed the top of your letters are on a slight path upwards. not signifigantly, but just a bit. the top bar of your E dosent flow with the rest of your letters, you may wanna make that flow a bit and add a little hook on it like the bottom bar of your E. and the width of the bar on the right leg of your R is slightly thinner than the rest of your bars, so give it a doublecheck before you color it.

iunno how many of those may have been repeated, but i think thats all your gonna get for that piece. sketch something new. if you finish it by tonight ill give it a thoughout critiqing

Mr. Octane
03-28-2008, 08:45 PM
Bmx516- listen to Nez, start with block letters
amberTrichome- im feelin those letters man, it should b lookin fresh when u outline them
D.H- thats dope bro...im thinkin if u maybe threw some 3d on there it would b lookin better tho
Sundowner- I like the colors and its pretty damn clean, but i suggest u try it a littler simpler

this is jus a sketch i did...tried to seperate the letters more like people suggested...

http://i112.photobucket.com/albums/n188/HighOctane89/dozin1-1.jpg

any quick crits b4 i finish it up?

bump to the next page...

JETPACK!!
03-28-2008, 08:51 PM
dozin, good job with spacin out your letters a bit, makes it look a lot better. your lines are kinna shaky, keep them straight rather than kinna in an out. your Z and N are good, work on your I, just keepin it straight. and watch your bars on your D and O, the width of them is a lot smaller than your Z and N. also keep your letters the same size, your bottom line kinna goes like __-- if you get that im sayin. keep sketchin bro, your gettin it.

man, my crits have improved more than my actual steeze. the fuck is up with that:P

Mr. Octane
03-28-2008, 08:55 PM
yea i dont know what is wrong with my D's and O's and other letters with spaces in the middle like R's, B's n A's...i jus cant seem to keep the bars the same size as the rest of the sketch..

JETPACK!!
03-28-2008, 09:10 PM
itll come bro, ive been sketchin for a minute an my bars only started lookin good a couple weeks ago. iunno if you look at the tip of your pencil or not when you draw, but look where your drawing too, thats how i do it. if that dosoent work, grab some lined paper an follow the lines.

started a new steeze, only have two letters so far, but im throwin it out there for crits.
http://img262.imageshack.us/img262/4540/tamk10wj3.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

Soboe!
03-28-2008, 09:16 PM
http://i246.photobucket.com/albums/gg102/CircaDrummer/20080328_2.jpg
crits would be nice :P

ibomb__atm
03-28-2008, 09:16 PM
http://i116.photobucket.com/albums/o1/rage11_photos/hgkuy001-2.jpg

new piece

critz?

JETPACK!!
03-28-2008, 09:27 PM
until you give crits back, both your pieces will remain wack as fuck. once you give a crit, ill give a bunch back

seywhat
03-28-2008, 09:44 PM
http://i46.photobucket.com/albums/f105/shaggydopeg/fableexchangedone.jpg
http://i46.photobucket.com/albums/f105/shaggydopeg/camerexchangedone.jpg
bump cuz i aint sketched nothin new since

jetpack- props on tryin to get these cats to crit, with ur peice lose the loops on the t and make the a without the gap, just keep that style simple and it will look straight man, keep it up
dozin- keep bars the same width (mainly on the d and o), keep with the straight simples letters with no indents just yet, but your gettin there
morne- i already critted that peice, but just listen to jetpack and keep sketchin
seck- im really diggin that, add some 3d and color that ish up
kfr- lose everything except the letters, those are lookin good

Soboe!
03-28-2008, 09:47 PM
until you give crits back, both your pieces will remain wack as fuck. once you give a crit, ill give a bunch back

if you are also refering to me, i do give people crits, therefor i deserve to get crits.

Camer- keepin it fresh like always

JETPACK!!
03-28-2008, 09:58 PM
yeah i know you soboe, i wanted to crit you, but im tryin to get cats to crit everytime they upload a picture. im tired of seein people not gettin crits when they deserve to.

your shits lookin ill, that S is gully as fuck, dont overlap the N so much with the S though, if that circle is supposed to be an O make it as big as the other letters and put a hole in it, it kinna makes the whole piece read SN.T if you get my drift. the T is dope too. keep all the letters the same size. my piece of advice is that when your workin on the top bar, do the top line first at its highest point, make it even with the other letters than bring it down from there, cuz i can tell you start from the bottom of the bar an were left with no room when you brought it up. and get rid of that little drop in the N. its lookin ill though.

camer, ive already given you crits on them, i cant see anything new to crit about em, look back a page or two if you wanna see my crits again

SAID
03-28-2008, 09:58 PM
camer, nto feeling your r man.
that extra line going down, i'd take that off.
id also avoid to make the outside of your m curve on the inside, doesnt look good.

seywhat
03-28-2008, 10:05 PM
thanks for the crits, but i write esole, those are exchanges with fable and camer

SAID
03-28-2008, 10:09 PM
aiight, just trying to help out, general tips.
good start though dude.

Mr. Octane
03-28-2008, 10:13 PM
Soboe- that 3d is dope man...that shit is nice
jetpack- that throwie sketch is lookin good, what do u write normally tho?

anyway heres my finished sketch from b4...tried 2 fix it as best i could

http://i112.photobucket.com/albums/n188/HighOctane89/dozinfill-1.jpg

seywhat
03-28-2008, 10:13 PM
no worries man, just wanted to let everyone know it was me and not camer
thanks bro

JETPACK!!
03-28-2008, 11:17 PM
dozin, it looks a lot better than your first. by the time you sketch your 20th, your simples will be ill son.

http://img440.imageshack.us/img440/8398/tamk10xc0.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

finished the outline. gonna start the 3d if theres nothing i should fix

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-28-2008, 11:32 PM
Jetpack- best stuff you've done nice simples

heres an outline of something, id disreguard the wack add-ons lol

http://img207.imageshack.us/img207/1667/dscn0398zk1.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

seywhat
03-28-2008, 11:32 PM
jetpack- that looks good man, maybe add one of those little extensions on the bottom right leg of the k to even it out with the t
tare- im likin it except the e, try makin it more round like your r

*cept*
03-28-2008, 11:37 PM
Bmx516- listen to Nez, start with block letters
amberTrichome- im feelin those letters man, it should b lookin fresh when u outline them
D.H- thats dope bro...im thinkin if u maybe threw some 3d on there it would b lookin better tho
Sundowner- I like the colors and its pretty damn clean, but i suggest u try it a littler simpler

this is jus a sketch i did...tried to seperate the letters more like people suggested...

http://i112.photobucket.com/albums/n188/HighOctane89/dozin1-1.jpg

any quick crits b4 i finish it up? Finally! someone that took crits well and went simple.
I like it, though it looks like the letters get smaller from left to right. Straighten that shit up, clean up those lines and post it up.

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-28-2008, 11:49 PM
jetpack- the M might be a lil too thick

JETPACK!!
03-28-2008, 11:53 PM
!! Fuck Fuck Fuck Fuck Fuck Fuck Fuck Fuck I Didnt Even Notice I Forgot To Put An Extension On The K Fuck Fuck Fuck God Fucking Dammit I Just Did It With Markers Too Fuck!!!


christ dammit, oh well, next sketch i guess..

seywhat
03-28-2008, 11:54 PM
post that shit anyway man, fuck it lol

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-28-2008, 11:56 PM
!! Fuck Fuck Fuck Fuck Fuck Fuck Fuck Fuck I Didnt Even I Forgot To Put An Extension On The K Fuck Fuck Fuck God Fucking Dammit I Just Did It With Markers Too Fuck!!!


christ dammit, oh well, next sketch i guess..

I get stoned and fuck up my sketches all the time lawl but I also make some of my best shit while high as well lol

exhale
03-28-2008, 11:56 PM
Dozin, after you get bored with that, try to make 'em roundier. You can spot whether they're evenly sized or not easier.

some exchanges but won't be expecting any back.
http://i188.photobucket.com/albums/z192/sewr11/File0127.jpg

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-29-2008, 12:01 AM
Jetpack- best stuff you've done nice simples

heres an outline of something, id disreguard the wack add-ons lol

http://img207.imageshack.us/img207/1667/dscn0398zk1.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

bump for new page

JETPACK!!
03-29-2008, 12:05 AM
exhale change your sig, thats fucking gross. the fuck are the parents feeding that kid

tare, that looks hot bro. i like it a lot better than your other shit. the only thing i dont really like is the courve on the spine of your T, try making it a bit straight an see whatsup with it

heres my sketch anyways, i like the shading though

http://img182.imageshack.us/img182/6909/tamk10in5.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

IlikePie
03-29-2008, 12:07 AM
The K's bottom kick is too stiff, give it a curve instead of a kink.

JETPACK!!
03-29-2008, 12:08 AM
yeah, i got lazy on the K and tried to squeeze it in the paper:( oh well, tomorrows another day. thats tonights sketch

BaddaBING
03-29-2008, 04:13 AM
Cyto Aka Son1c, I don't think the extensions are wack at all...looks good.


anyway, let me know what you guys think of my last sketch. went for a much simpler, slightly curvy look. i cut the tops at 45 deg. angles for added flair...or whatever.

http://i172.photobucket.com/albums/w18/ralphwader/dfd.jpg

i swear i'll comment on your guys' pics later, but i gotta be on my way. peace.

Dying to live
03-29-2008, 08:31 AM
fucking hell what is it and this forum with fucked up sigs
gah
http://i266.photobucket.com/albums/ii245/aerosol-dreams/AWA.gif
http://i266.photobucket.com/albums/ii245/aerosol-dreams/ohateee.gif

Mr. Octane
03-29-2008, 08:54 AM
Soboe- that 3d is dope man...that shit is nice
jetpack- that throwie sketch is lookin good, what do u write normally tho?

anyway heres my finished sketch from b4...tried 2 fix it as best i could

http://i112.photobucket.com/albums/n188/HighOctane89/dozinfill-1.jpg

bump from the last page

dim
03-29-2008, 09:37 AM
akel make your inner out line thicker bacue the high light cover it for the most part

:RAVE:
03-29-2008, 09:54 AM
http://i275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/raveoh/Picture012.jpg
disragard the red marks i dropped a slice of pizza on it lol

octane - i like it exept the yellow force doesnt highlight it the way it should maye if did a fill with it idk

dyein 2 live - im diggin that last 1

baddabing - the cut tops flow on the a and the e but not so much on the w n k

jetpack - i like that k

cyto - thats nice but ur e is 2 skinny at the top

SAID
03-29-2008, 10:09 AM
id take off those random squares.

:RAVE:
03-29-2008, 10:13 AM
yeah i wanted 2 add something n i didnt feel like fuckin with the structure it was simple n i liked it

SAID
03-29-2008, 10:14 AM
bring your letter closer together too.
and the middle line of your, try to make it come out straight.

Desipher
03-29-2008, 10:41 AM
.

emel
03-29-2008, 11:14 AM
jetpack try taking your own advice before coming on here and giving kids crits like you know what your talking about, please.

JETPACK!!
03-29-2008, 12:32 PM
i give crits to others to they can improve. maybe if you little cockfags would learn to give crits back then i could do that. but its cool, where do you think i should take my own advice?

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-29-2008, 03:10 PM
akel and wake - both sick stuff, no crits

just colored this

http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v489/Ruddell/DSCN0406.jpg

Soboe!
03-29-2008, 03:32 PM
tare: work on your R's a bit more, try diff stuff with the top loop of the R.
ill pm you with sketches of R's of what i mean later on today.
other then that your improving alot

headsick123
03-29-2008, 03:55 PM
http://i16.photobucket.com/albums/b32/headsick123/newcashpiece.jpg

i havnt been writing long, appreciate what people have to say.

Cyto Aka Son1c
03-29-2008, 04:03 PM
headsick- simples

I need help finishing this

http://img410.imageshack.us/img410/1957/dscn0412pi4.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

:RAVE:
03-29-2008, 04:30 PM
http://i275.photobucket.com/albums/jj292/raveoh/Picture012.jpg
disragard the red marks i dropped a slice of pizza on it lol

octane - i like it exept the yellow force doesnt highlight it the way it should maye if did a fill with it idk

dyein 2 live - im diggin that last 1

baddabing - the cut tops flow on the a and the e but not so much on the w n k

jetpack - i like that k

cyto - thats nice but ur e is 2 skinny at the top

bump 4 sum crits
i know the boxes r fuct n i dun like my r
cyto - make ur a taller, make ur t n first stick on r skinnyer n make the e consistant in thickness n maybe lose the curl at the bottom

cash - same 4 u make the thickness of ur letters consistant

desypher - maybe lose ur extensions on the 3d

JETPACK!!
03-29-2008, 04:48 PM
rave thats a lot better than your other stuff, at least i can read it. an to be honest, i like the boxes, i think its a fresh idea. i just dont think it looks good with the steeze of your letters. keep the idea for when you progress more. thicken up your bars and bring your letters closer together

tare, make your A bigger, i dont like how its smaller than the rest. its lookin good bro

i know its wack, but i think it could have potential if worked with. any crits before i had the shadow to it??

http://img186.imageshack.us/img186/9040/tamk11lt5.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

:RAVE:
03-29-2008, 06:31 PM
lol i think the top box came out nice but the bottom one is gay

jet take out the top 2 extensions on ur t n maybe the 2 at the bottom right of ur m lookin letter
n what does it say tamk or tamc or w/e??

letsg0skate
03-29-2008, 06:32 PM
bump 4 sum crits
i know the boxes r fuct n i dun like my r
cyto - make ur a taller, make ur t n first stick on r skinnyer n make the e consistant in thickness n maybe lose the curl at the bottom

cash - same 4 u make the thickness of ur letters consistant

desypher - maybe lose ur extensions on the 3d

shouldn't you be better by now?

:RAVE:
03-29-2008, 06:34 PM
obvi i can do better shit i just felt like doin sumthin really simple
im not tryin 2 impress ne1

bloot
03-29-2008, 06:41 PM
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v189/zweenk/hereyougo.jpg

vowels
03-29-2008, 06:44 PM
obvi i can do better shit i just felt like doin sumthin really simple
im not tryin 2 impress ne1

shit doesn't make sense, not hatin' it just doesn't make sense.

ickis3
03-29-2008, 06:52 PM
just messing around with colors, really. kinda fucked up the Y. Rave, just work on letters before you add anything like the boxes.

http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2086/2372573366_9d6da4eeb4.jpg?v=0

Seek139
03-29-2008, 06:56 PM
ickis work on your letters before wasting color and straighten your hand up.

http://i108.photobucket.com/albums/n32/zinone/NARgraffiti1.jpg

:RAVE:
03-29-2008, 06:57 PM
how doesnt it make sense vowels i dun get it??

RFI. SPit
03-29-2008, 07:21 PM
just messing around with colors, really. kinda fucked up the Y. Rave, just work on letters before you add anything like the boxes.

http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2086/2372573366_9d6da4eeb4.jpg?v=0

Please god don't use letters from Mr. Wiggles then tell somebody else to work on their letters.

Eack
03-29-2008, 07:25 PM
jet pack i would stop connecting the letters 2gether... it makes it hard to read

seek139 id drop the random huge extensions around the letters

critics plz

http://img135.imageshack.us/img135/3238/pict0006tl6.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img444.imageshack.us/img444/5369/pict0005kx5.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

bloot
03-29-2008, 07:35 PM
Not digging the "T" in the first one, the second piece is tight.

JETPACK!!
03-29-2008, 07:35 PM
yeah im working on the last two now, havin a bit of trouble with it, but its gettin there. any suggestions on what would look good with the M and the K at the end?

erase, im diggin your steeze, that one were the letters head downwards is ill. your steeze has kinna an azn feel to it. nice color choices as well. the only thing im not entirely feelin your R. maybe try spacing out the kick and the loop of it just a bit

cheers

Seek139
03-29-2008, 07:57 PM
[quote=Eack;1054960]

seek139 id drop the random huge extensions around the letters


[/qote]


And why is that, I can rock simple styles for miles I'm expiramenting?

http://i108.photobucket.com/albums/n32/zinone/NARgraffiti3.jpg

JETPACK!!
03-29-2008, 08:12 PM
seek, try making more of your extensions actually connect with the letter. it kinna looks like your letters are sitting on top of your extensions rather than being a part of them

this anymore legible?
http://img442.imageshack.us/img442/8892/tamk12jt9.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

Seek139
03-29-2008, 08:17 PM
seek, try making more of your extensions actually connect with the letter. it kinna looks like your letters are sitting on top of your extensions rather than being a part of them



Ohh thx You see that I actually understood I'll keep sketching.

Capo Izi
03-29-2008, 08:24 PM
New stuff..
http://a771.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/7/l_f74b20aa2ca3601e57931bc575d52532.jpg
Crits?

Seek-not too bad man, but color all of it
Eack-SHITS TIGHT, dude love the 3d, and the effect of it, it looks so realistic, especially the first one
Rave-Work on Simples
Ickis-umm, eww colors, and awful Mr.Wiggles bite
Jetpack-nice man, gettin' pretty cool. Throw in some 3d, and it'll be like 30 times better.

SenTheFirst
03-29-2008, 08:29 PM
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v189/zweenk/hereyougo.jpg

not really..

youve never seen a slanted line through and a?

Eack
03-29-2008, 08:30 PM
capo izi...

not bad.. 3d is effective..sum little extensions are weird + in ur word Worry ur 2 Rs are bad.... + drop the snow or w.e on the letters or atlease work it abit more so that it looks better

emel
03-29-2008, 09:08 PM
seek, try making more of your extensions actually connect with the letter. it kinna looks like your letters are sitting on top of your extensions rather than being a part of them

this anymore legible?
http://img442.imageshack.us/img442/8892/tamk12jt9.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
Ok, seriously, This looks like it says TAM(upside down)>Y

dont try to do any kind of "style" right now, its not gonna work out, i still havent seen any good simples?

JETPACK!!
03-29-2008, 09:16 PM
http://img262.imageshack.us/img262/9566/tamk9qv4.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

theres your simples

any coloring ideas?
http://img156.imageshack.us/img156/8257/tamk12zq2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

emel
03-29-2008, 09:18 PM
dude dont color that

start over and do a dope simple, that green shit is hurtin, especialy the line in the straight up middle of the M

again, take your own advice

JETPACK!!
03-29-2008, 09:21 PM
i bumped that from like 10 pages back to show you some simples. i know the lines were wack, but i added them after i colored it and regretted it. i cant rewind time. thats why its qouted

and again, tell me where i should take my own advice, tell me your advice, ill work from that.

im concerned about what i just did and how to improve on that, not something i did last week

emel
03-29-2008, 09:26 PM
lose the extra bars at the end of your letters and just keep each letter one piece for now
i wouldnt overlap your letters so much right now until you get some sort of flow, try to keep ANY extensions or little add on shits not too noticable so they dont take away from the letters.

JETPACK!!
03-29-2008, 09:31 PM
cool, ill do that for my next sketch. its a lot easier when you just give me crits, cuz then i can actually do something with that.

seywhat
03-29-2008, 09:46 PM
yo jetpack u had a nice simp back a few pages back that were nice, the exensons were good too

tgc!mtown
03-29-2008, 11:07 PM
[QUOTE=Capo Izi;1055009]New stuff..
http://a771.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/7/l_f74b20aa2ca3601e57931bc575d52532.jpg
Crits?

pretty sweet man.. some of the letters need a little work as far as form but dope colors and phrase

rayseone
03-29-2008, 11:13 PM
k jetpack here is my advice to you seen as though you sound like you are actually treying to progress. drop coloring, hide your markers, coloring only makes letters look better, if you cant rock a letter in balck and white, color is gonna make it look a bit better but if you can see throught the color, its still the same letter, that on simple you did is pretty good, and even though you have heard this many times, you still have to work on simples, now dont worry im not saying complete block letters, you gotta have simples with style, try varying the sizes of letters, different lengths of bars, different ways to tilt them etc, dont try aand force extensions, if you have to force extensions, or think where to put them, then you are not ready for them, you can have a complex peice without having any extensions,look at fezats work for example, he does not have many true extensions at all, its mostly his main bars of his letters bent in different ways, another thing i would say is try to keep your bars the same thickness for now, aND dont have extensions of other letters making main parts of another letter, like your T and the cross bar of the a, your m is not too bad, but look at the size of it compared to the k, imma do you a sketch just to show u some ideas, hope i helped a bit

Capo Izi
03-29-2008, 11:19 PM
pretty sweet man.. some of the letters need a little work as far as form but dope colors and phrase

Thanks man, and yeah my T, and O, and A, and the R's degree of rotation all need work, and I'll work on them, but thanks for a good critique.

tgc!mtown
03-29-2008, 11:24 PM
Thanks man, and yeah my T, and O, and A, and the R's degree of rotation all need work, and I'll work on them, but thanks for a good critique.

anytime man

tgc!mtown
03-29-2008, 11:27 PM
http://i28.tinypic.com/j14mlh.jpg

tried to kep it simple... lemme know.... but dont say it sux cuz thats useless to me

Capo Izi
03-29-2008, 11:33 PM
^NICE, love it man. Maybe make the dot over the I go to the upper right, to flow with the piece, rather than the upper left, but otherwise. Pretty steeze.

tgc!mtown
03-30-2008, 12:31 AM
thanks guys.
ctso- im lovin that first pic and the fact that your already into different aspects of art might help you along in graff. keep it up

D E M O
03-30-2008, 12:34 AM
Capo: like the sahdow on the letters, play around with more colors.

tgc : nice and simple I like it, work on the letter E, use bars.

ctso: very creative, put some color.

http://img301.imageshack.us/img301/6727/demoh25qz3.jpg

tgc!mtown
03-30-2008, 12:34 AM
just did this peice for an upcoming battle.
http://i26.tinypic.com/mb3g94.jpg

tgc!mtown
03-30-2008, 12:36 AM
demo- im feelin the colors on yours, thanks for the crits too, E's have always given me trouble

BaddaBING
03-30-2008, 12:37 AM
RAVE - My advice...work on an overall consitency in letter thickness, make them slightly overlapping. and imagine the bars as a single stroke from a fat chisel tip marker. you generally wanna keep it at the same angle throughout. I think your e looks silly as well. the drop shadow is all wrong, but keep doing it on your sketches even tho people will say ignore it for now. that's the only way to get better.
stop bumping that shit and post a new one!!

Headsick/cash. You havent been writing long and you're better than 80% of the kids in here. i'm gonna go robotic on your ass and suggest you improve your structuring, but thats a given eh. bust out a simpler style for us.....and The bits on the end of the H looks too much like a cock. hahah

Seek - it says nar, right? too many extenstions, and they're fat as hell. i appreciate the style, it just needs work.I agree with jetpack, connect some of the ext. with the letters.(talking about the first one.)

ickis....busted bro. cmon.... nothing wrong with taking someones work as a guidline on how to make a letter, but there's nothing special in acting like a copy machine. your fill is crap too.

Eack - Get the fuck outta the toy thread. showoff. :)

Capo - the 3d is good. it actually all goes towards a single point. lettering ain't that bad, but it could use some work. make the width consistent

Jetpack, i'd say make the top of your A connect in the same way as the middle of your K. make the bars go through each other. I think it'd look better if all the letters were the same size, but I understand you didn't do that on purpose.

tgc- i have nothing to say, but i like the style.


anyway, all i did was add some 3d and outline to my last sketch. my dumbass got high opiates before i did it, so it's not as clean as i like, but whatever i learned not to do that anymore. and yea, the e's shadow goes to high.
http://i172.photobucket.com/albums/w18/ralphwader/wab.jpg

peace...

tgc!mtown
03-30-2008, 12:41 AM
baddabing- im feelin the letter structure alot, just add some color

jersOneTIC
03-30-2008, 01:09 AM
Demo - nice colors
tgc - work on letter structure...
badda - yeah, the e shadow is TOO high
meh..its all crooked.
http://img525.imageshack.us/img525/7342/bbokja7.jpg

Capo Izi
03-30-2008, 01:11 AM
Capo: like the sahdow on the letters, play around with more colors.

http://img301.imageshack.us/img301/6727/demoh25qz3.jpg

You mean the 3d? And yeah I was using the Rasta colors there, as those were lyrics to Three Little Birds by Bob Marley....

Also that piece is REALLY fresh, did you use a white paint marker for the weird "inner-outlines" on each letter?


consistenthttp://i172.photobucket.com/albums/w18/ralphwader/wab.jpg

Nice and clean, except the E, the top of it is weird, and in so you messed up the 3d, JUST ON THAT LITTLE LETTER LINE, but it s'ok, don't fret, it's nice, maybe color it and put a force field around it, and you won't notice it as much.

Otherwise good, good =)


just did this peice for an upcoming battle.
http://i26.tinypic.com/mb3g94.jpg

I like it, the colors and form, but lol, what does it say??!?



New stuff..(Crits?)

This one is for a forum I'm in..
http://a667.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/127/l_6c5637b7ed02771b8010a83f9c018302.jpg

And then this...
http://a89.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/15/l_74862187f931f10bab110b7b90b83880.jpg

tgc!mtown
03-30-2008, 01:15 AM
hahah its for the weekly sketch battle and this weeks word was prostate lol so it says prostate

and capo -as for those new peices im feelin the second one but that first one needs alot of work as far as the letter form but it looks like your goin in the right direction, keep it up

jers- thanks for the crits andtight peice but definanetly not toy

remos
03-30-2008, 01:19 AM
demo i like it
the colours are really sick too

Capo Izi
03-30-2008, 01:27 AM
hahah its for the weekly sketch battle and this weeks word was prostate lol so it says prostate

and capo -as for those new peices im feelin the second one but that first one needs alot of work as far as the letter form but it looks like your goin in the right direction, keep it up

jers- thanks for the crits andtight peice but definanetly not toy

Oh hha, I see the prostate now, lol...

And yeah the first one came out awful in my opinion, it's just really hard to do that long letters really straight, without a ruler or anything. What sucks is that the chrome took forever to color in, ahh well.

And yeah Jers, that's not a toy piece, except maybe that tiny little weird drip thing of Jers in the upper right, but the main piece is dope as hell, get out of here, bump up to the big leagues =D.

Soboe!
03-30-2008, 03:08 AM
http://i246.photobucket.com/albums/gg102/CircaDrummer/20080330_1.jpg

:RAVE:
03-30-2008, 03:09 AM
RAVE -
stop bumping that shit and post a new one!!



wtf r u talkin about thats the first and only time ive bumpt that and that was cuz i only got 1 crit on it b4

and iv only been posting in here for like 3 days and iv posted liek 5 diff pics so u clearly dont know what ur talkin about

Seek139
03-30-2008, 04:38 AM
Fucking Eraser Burns On cheap racked books suck.

http://i108.photobucket.com/albums/n32/zinone/NARgraffiti4.jpg
http://i108.photobucket.com/albums/n32/zinone/NARgraffiti2.jpg

fonone
03-30-2008, 05:18 AM
just did this peice for an upcoming battle.
http://i26.tinypic.com/mb3g94.jpg

dont listen to them, this is pretty darn terrible. back to simples for you son.

ShhImACop
03-30-2008, 06:13 AM
agreed.

DeDo1
03-30-2008, 07:42 AM
http://216.252.110.31/us.f562.mail.yahoo.com/ya/securedownload?fid=Inbox&mid=1_29199_AN9u%2FNgAAGkPR%2B99Lwg6%2BSdOs6s&pid=1&tnef=&YY=1206884392406&newid=1&clean=0&inline=1&cred=9g2xnXN2PY5GDHhI4.o.nHk2XGo7ygEDQVvYjJ7ioJ1RM RPb5fd7ZabzrvF3NamYtqDP8afB30bcixmk_2H8JlMhtVj2r.3 eBNoq49Y1OMGQJ9IDWQ--&ts=1206880832&partner=ymail&sig=M_GpdUyu7bwaAlgTU4x9Jg--

tgc!mtown
03-30-2008, 09:06 AM
dont listen to them, this is pretty darn terrible. back to simples for you son.

see i respect your opinion and all and i know it kinda sux but i just went for somthin a little crazy and it didnt work out, but cmon man like i said earlier gimme somthin other than its horrible, gime somthin i can use other than go simple, thanks anyway though man

tgc!mtown
03-30-2008, 09:07 AM
Fucking Eraser Burns On cheap racked books suck.

http://i108.photobucket.com/albums/n32/zinone/NARgraffiti4.jpg
http://i108.photobucket.com/albums/n32/zinone/NARgraffiti2.jpg

some color on these would help alot

:RAVE:
03-30-2008, 09:12 AM
some color on these would help alot
what r u talkin about??

tgc!mtown
03-30-2008, 09:24 AM
what r u talkin about??


it means what it says. they look like rough sketches. i like them but if he put some color in them they would look better. now that i walked you through it do you get it?

:RAVE:
03-30-2008, 09:34 AM
yo my bad when i red it i saw same not some it didnt make sence 2 me
but u didnt need 2 a prick about it
even tho it was a stupid question

tgc!mtown
03-30-2008, 09:37 AM
ha arite dude my bad wasnt tryn to come off as a "prick"

remos
03-30-2008, 10:34 AM
http://i255.photobucket.com/albums/hh139/remos905/remos6001.jpg
http://i255.photobucket.com/albums/hh139/remos905/remos6002.jpg
http://i255.photobucket.com/albums/hh139/remos905/remos6003.jpg
http://i255.photobucket.com/albums/hh139/remos905/remos6004.jpg
http://i255.photobucket.com/albums/hh139/remos905/remos6005.jpg
http://i255.photobucket.com/albums/hh139/remos905/remos6006.jpg
http://i255.photobucket.com/albums/hh139/remos905/remos6008.jpg
http://i255.photobucket.com/albums/hh139/remos905/remos6007.jpg

IlikePie
03-30-2008, 12:11 PM
Fucking Eraser Burns On cheap racked books suck.

http://i108.photobucket.com/albums/n32/zinone/NARgraffiti4.jpg


I like this one, but the arrows under it, I dunno....

Drakula
03-30-2008, 12:12 PM
REMOS-Go to the new to graff thread.Do some simples etc.
Seek-That's nice.Keep it up.Maybe cut down on the extesions on the outside of the piece.
Soboe-That SNOT is nice too.

Heres my most recent piece:

http://i86.photobucket.com/albums/k90/dspimage/Picture1-6.png

Just RAB for this one.

IlikePie
03-30-2008, 12:34 PM
Hey, that's me :D


I <3 your A, B.

atlok7
03-30-2008, 01:19 PM
http://img245.imageshack.us/img245/4026/caisyelloworangeel0.jpg

Drakula
03-30-2008, 01:42 PM
Haha thats me I like Pie.I write RABY but sometimes I shorten it down to RAB.Sorry if you thought it as an exchange or something.

IlikePie
03-30-2008, 01:46 PM
Haha, I know this, I just like your letters, which happened to be my word, nawwmean?

Mass Appeal
03-30-2008, 02:46 PM
wtf Atlok ? ... its fucking abysmyl. you shud do simples.

nd ilikepie...wtf is up with your sig ?

Seek139
03-30-2008, 02:50 PM
Seek-That's nice.Keep it up.Maybe cut down on the extesions on the outside of the piece.


Thx I'm at that experimenting stage where I'm done with simples Extensions are a bitch lol.

JETPACK!!
03-30-2008, 03:10 PM
wtf Atlok ? ... its fucking abysmyl. you shud do simples.

bump x10000

no hate, but i think ive seen one legible piece from you. the rest have been some illegible calligraphy. actually not even, calligraphy is letters.

your pieces are a bunch of pretty lines and circles that are nicely colored

wolsley
03-30-2008, 03:54 PM
Playing with a few styles...

http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/bb80/mosleysphotobucketofjoy/Graf/DSC00316.jpg
http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/bb80/mosleysphotobucketofjoy/Graf/DSC00356.jpg
http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/bb80/mosleysphotobucketofjoy/Graf/DSC00450.jpg

http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/bb80/mosleysphotobucketofjoy/Graf/DSC00422.jpg
http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/bb80/mosleysphotobucketofjoy/Graf/DSC00424.jpg
http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/bb80/mosleysphotobucketofjoy/Graf/DSC00309.jpg
http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/bb80/mosleysphotobucketofjoy/Graf/DSC00311.jpg
http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/bb80/mosleysphotobucketofjoy/Graf/DSC00414.jpg
http://i206.photobucket.com/albums/bb80/mosleysphotobucketofjoy/Graf/DSC00428.jpg

giganticCrane
03-30-2008, 04:08 PM
I havent posted in so damn long. heres some random stuff, crits?

http://i38.photobucket.com/albums/e130/onemorethentwice/nuance.jpg
nuance

http://i38.photobucket.com/albums/e130/onemorethentwice/petersart003.jpg
Trusound Festival (colors suck, but i was just using random markers becuase i knew the color would be taken out of the picture later)

http://i38.photobucket.com/albums/e130/onemorethentwice/wtm.jpg
WTM (bloot, i didnt know you came on these forums)

http://i38.photobucket.com/albums/e130/onemorethentwice/strongrobot.jpg
characters

Capo Izi
03-30-2008, 04:11 PM
This one is for a forum I'm in..
http://a667.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/127/l_6c5637b7ed02771b8010a83f9c018302.jpg

http://a771.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/7/l_f74b20aa2ca3601e57931bc575d52532.jpg

And then this...
http://a89.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images01/15/l_74862187f931f10bab110b7b90b83880.jpg

Bump for crits?

Abide-good simples, awesome scrawl, but the 2nd piece down is downright ugly, work on letter structure. 3rd down is awesome though, nice coloring effect too. And the rest of it is pretty damn tight too.

Atlok-Love all your shit, I say you bump up to the big leagues now =P

Remos-eh the outlines and colors are terrible, and I really only like your bubble stuff

Drakula-haha nice ginger kid, and pretty tight piece all around

Seek-need some color, and maybe less arrows, otherwise not bad.

wolsley
03-30-2008, 04:26 PM
Abide-good simples, awesome scrawl, but the 2nd piece down is downright ugly, work on letter structure. 3rd down is awesome though, nice coloring effect too. And the rest of it is pretty damn tight too.

Thanks, second one down was a quick sketch I did in a lecture when an idea that didn't really work out popped in my head. Iv been messing with that style for a while now trying out different things and I have pages of progression.

Capo Izi: Those simples need a little progression but you might be able to progress them into something good with a bit of work. I think the first two have a little potential..

giganticCrane: I really like the 3rd one down and the characters are pretty good too.

Samp1e
03-30-2008, 06:01 PM
damn i'm extra rusty.

http://img340.imageshack.us/img340/1378/49529873pv9.png
http://img256.imageshack.us/img256/3020/16400487gh5.png
http://img256.imageshack.us/img256/4809/96115120mc5.png

slick chars ctso, keep workin on em letters though.

capo, follow the trend that your 2nd pic has going on, your best simples are there.

t-bur
03-30-2008, 06:08 PM
REMOS-Go to the new to graff thread.Do some simples etc.
Seek-That's nice.Keep it up.Maybe cut down on the extesions on the outside of the piece.
Soboe-That SNOT is nice too.

Heres my most recent piece:

http://i86.photobucket.com/albums/k90/dspimage/Picture1-6.png

Just RAB for this one.

No one think to tell this cat his shits way to good for the toy forum?
Old school U.k head i take it?

Lose the character though.

emel
03-30-2008, 06:15 PM
you have no idea what your talking about, its raelly nice, but seriously, think before you speak(or type)

atlok7
03-30-2008, 06:18 PM
wtf Atlok ? ... its fucking abysmyl. you shud do simples.

nd ilikepie...wtf is up with your sig ?

extensions dont count as letters buddy. and i was studying my sketch and i dont know how the hell you saw abysmyl

t-bur
03-30-2008, 06:19 PM
you have no idea what your talking about, its raelly nice, but seriously, think before you speak(or type)


So your telling me its toy? Or its not toy but still not good enough for the big boy thread.

Think before you type fool.

silentchaos14
03-30-2008, 06:23 PM
damn i'm extra rusty.

http://img340.imageshack.us/img340/1378/49529873pv9.png
http://img256.imageshack.us/img256/3020/16400487gh5.png
http://img256.imageshack.us/img256/4809/96115120mc5.png

slick chars ctso, keep workin on em letters though.

capo, follow the trend that your 2nd pic has going on, your best simples are there.
onio peel effect goin on with those first two. someone was saying the same thing about AMK awhile back.

JETPACK!!
03-30-2008, 06:50 PM
extensions dont count as letters buddy. and i was studying my sketch and i dont know how the hell you saw abysmyl

a·bys·mal /əˈbɪzməl/ –adjective
1. of or like an abyss; immeasurably deep.
2. extremely or hopelessly bad or severe

im assuming this is what mass means

atlok7
03-30-2008, 06:56 PM
;) aight

JETPACK!!
03-30-2008, 06:58 PM
http://img245.imageshack.us/img245/4026/caisyelloworangeel0.jpg

no hate bro, but i honestly dont know how that can read caiser or whatever it may read. i dont even see letters. maybe O's and U's

emel
03-30-2008, 07:15 PM
So your telling me its toy? Or its not toy but still not good enough for the big boy thread.

Think before you type fool.
I was saying i dont think its good enough for the "big boy" thread.

And that you have no fucking idea what your talking about.

atlok7
03-30-2008, 07:27 PM
yo jet u wanna battle?
and here are the letters to help you out
http://img249.imageshack.us/img249/1269/caisyelloworangecopycq6.jpg

giganticCrane
03-30-2008, 07:28 PM
I havent posted in so damn long. heres some random stuff, crits?

http://i38.photobucket.com/albums/e130/onemorethentwice/nuance.jpg
nuance

http://i38.photobucket.com/albums/e130/onemorethentwice/petersart003.jpg
Trusound Festival (colors suck, but i was just using random markers becuase i knew the color would be taken out of the picture later)

http://i38.photobucket.com/albums/e130/onemorethentwice/wtm.jpg
WTM (bloot, i didnt know you came on these forums)

http://i38.photobucket.com/albums/e130/onemorethentwice/strongrobot.jpg
characters

bump for crits.

JETPACK!!
03-30-2008, 07:59 PM
http://img206.imageshack.us/img206/5771/caiser1dk1.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

thats what i see, connect your letters an itll look a lot better, itll be legible at least. an im not down for a battle, cuz your shit may be illegible, but im not frontin like my shits any good. maybe in a couple days when i find a steeze i like and wanna work on.

giganticcrane try not to overlap your letters too much like in your second picture, the S on festival is covered too much imo. on your third sketch id work on your M, the T kinna looks like an H since half your M is small. make the bars a similar width to those of your W and see how it looks

something i did earlier, i dont like it, but i dont really hate it either.
http://img406.imageshack.us/img406/1706/tamk13mk4.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

t-bur
03-30-2008, 08:00 PM
I was saying i dont think its good enough for the "big boy" thread.

And that you have no fucking idea what your talking about.


Battle me then you crazy pennsylvanian pikey.

IlikePie
03-30-2008, 08:05 PM
Are you seriously about to try and battle over someone else's work? You're really stupid aren't you?

giganticCrane
03-30-2008, 08:05 PM
i don't usually jump into other peoples arguments, but i've got to agree with jetpack. your shit looks like you just drew a bunch of pretty lines, regardless of letters. i bet i could spell a hundred different words with that drawing.

but i have to admit, legible or not, its attractive to look at.

atlok7
03-30-2008, 08:07 PM
http://img206.imageshack.us/img206/5771/caiser1dk1.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

thats what i see, connect your letters an itll look a lot better, itll be legible at least. an im not down for a battle, cuz your shit may be illegible, but im not frontin like my shits any good. maybe in a couple days when i find a steeze i like and wanna work on.

giganticcrane try not to overlap your letters too much like in your second picture, the S on festival is covered too much imo. on your third sketch id work on your M, the T kinna looks like an H since half your M is small. make the bars a similar width to those of your W and see how it looks

something i did earlier, i dont like it, but i dont really hate it either.
http://img406.imageshack.us/img406/1706/tamk13mk4.jpg (http://imageshack.us)


hahahaha thats ridiculous. but what ever. just pm me when you wanna battle

t-bur
03-30-2008, 08:07 PM
Wouldnt battle someone posting in the toy forum anyway, waste of time.

And did it look like a serious post ilikepie cocksucking fool?

Bazer
03-30-2008, 08:10 PM
Silencio.
>=|
Odio tu esposa.

emel
03-30-2008, 08:11 PM
lol, someones taking an internet forum about graffiti with 80% of the people on the website never touched a can before/actually do shit a little too seriously now....

JETPACK!!
03-30-2008, 08:11 PM
im not beefin you atlok, im just telling you my opinion. you dont need to listen to me. and if your getting uptight over what i say, then you shouldnt listen to me. saves you the gray hair. ill pm you when im confident enough in my own work to battle. but ive wanted to the past couple of days

you'll be my first battle;)

t-bur
03-30-2008, 08:14 PM
lol, someones taking an internet forum about graffiti with 80% of the people on the website never touched a can before/actually do shit a little too seriously now....

My post was a joke about battling, and i would battle anyone from anywhere any level. Just dont tell me i dont know what im on about raby is too good for the toy forum.

Atlok- Take the crits tone down the extensions and extra add ons.
Tamk- make the bar om the middle of the A connect normaly not overlap it looks fucking stupid like that. Other than that its getting there.


And mr.rosa, zotos, 2zeks, baze you got a link to any painted shit from you?

giganticCrane
03-30-2008, 08:14 PM
im not beefin you atlok, im just telling you my opinion. you dont need to listen to me. and if your getting uptight over what i say, then you shouldnt listen to me. saves you the gray hair. ill pm you when im confident enough in my own work to battle. but ive wanted to the past couple of days

you'll be my first battle;)

what kind of bong is that in your avatar? looks dope.

i'll battle you if you want. i'd like to battle someone, and im probably a bit more on par with your skill than atlok. he'd slaughter us both in a battle.

emel
03-30-2008, 08:15 PM
i wouldnt count putting up pictures on an intenet forum and having some kids vote on which they think is the most visualy pleasing and not on letter structure(few do) as battle.

Thrice
03-30-2008, 08:17 PM
no offence jetpack but you are at the graffiti illiterate stage. Atlok is sick as fuck, he has style, flow, and structure.