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osnapizzel
11-11-2008, 12:10 AM
http://img91.imageshack.us/img91/3189/fckmyjb5.jpg

bumps train

SANEKONE
11-11-2008, 12:39 AM
ohsnap - lazy fill... but letters keep getting better. you sketch wayyy more than me :/ cant wait to see you start trying new things.

rootpl
11-11-2008, 06:10 AM
exitus : nice Obama :)
osnapizzel : bump

somethink new from me :

http://i33.tinypic.com/2qathsk.jpg


its HAE... E looks like P :) what you think about this ?

rootpl
11-11-2008, 06:11 AM
exitus : nice Obama :)
osnapizzel : bump

somethink new from me :

http://i33.tinypic.com/2qathsk.jpg


its HAE... E looks like P :) what you think about this ?

TastySesamcrew
11-11-2008, 06:14 AM
Zof: likin' it dude, great job
Root: I can't read it even after I know it says clea

http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3026/3020186408_11376172b6.jpg

Bump

Love the way that looks Oh snap!

_ORGAZM_
11-11-2008, 07:07 AM
osnap- i personally like the grungy fill, and great letters man
tastie- looks good, the E does look a little out of place with the 2 thin parts coming off.


i just drew this one (says NECRO), its all sloppy but i have run out of erasers, crits anyway.
http://i225.photobucket.com/albums/dd308/Zelve/Graf/graf11.jpg

revid!
11-11-2008, 07:31 AM
JETPACK!
damn man its been some time!
haha i remember when you first started doin simpleee ass straights, youve gotten so much better!
keep it up man!
zase shit is lookin dope too and fube, shit is mad steezy!

wrekstyle
11-11-2008, 07:59 AM
rasek- the r,a are dope i dont think u put in as much effort on the sek, they kinda a diff style, maybe you should work on them a lil

lawl- simples bro with bars.

bump...been trying to get some crits or atleast some1 say something! say its ugly!! idc lol
http://i51.photobucket.com/albums/f367/Dewster88/165058.jpg
wow looks even better with colour...what kinda marker u use, touch twin??

SANEKONE
11-11-2008, 10:29 AM
osnapizzel : bump


what kind of crit is just saying the word 'bump'?
anyways.... new to graff thread. come back in a few weeks when you can do straight letters and 3d and your lines arent shaky.

WoeInfinite
11-11-2008, 10:55 AM
when you bump something, that means its good, and you like it, and you wanna keep moving it along for other people to see..
its a good thaaang

rootpl
11-11-2008, 12:42 PM
bump = like it

bump isnt a crits or somethink this

osnapizzel
11-11-2008, 06:14 PM
keep your bars the same width

Scare2
11-11-2008, 07:05 PM
Dews, your D isnt as dope as the other three letters which are off the hook. and i like the funky style and coloring.

Tastie the coloring looks good but the letterform could use a bit of work. I personally think it would look better with the a and i the same size as your other letters and maybe space them out a tad more. i like the way you do your Ts its simple and works well. your S needs some work. It lacks the flow that is expected from an S. the curves of it are a bit jerky and dont flow as well as they could. Your E would look better without the tail off the bottom leg of it and maybe shrink the bottom leg too and give the middle one more space. as it is it looks wierd because the middle leg is like a little shrunken noodle. maybe give the center leg more of a rectangular shape. its lookin alright though i like it.


I haven't posted on here in forever. just some pen sketches from class the last few days.

http://i92.photobucket.com/albums/l8/IanCasserole/ACEONE1.jpg

http://i92.photobucket.com/albums/l8/IanCasserole/DIMOS1.jpg

http://i92.photobucket.com/albums/l8/IanCasserole/MASTer1.jpg

http://i92.photobucket.com/albums/l8/IanCasserole/METH1.jpg

http://i92.photobucket.com/albums/l8/IanCasserole/WIREd1.jpg

-Wings-
11-11-2008, 07:39 PM
Drew this last night when I was really high and drunk, and scare 2 besides that first one I like most them, although that mast one.. that s bar is to small.
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e357/LockDown2/100_0199.jpg

Czar One
11-11-2008, 07:54 PM
http://i159.photobucket.com/albums/t136/czar1one/fin.jpg
retouch of an old sketch. I know that it's wack, especially the stars.

scare: I really like the ACE and METH sketches. Keep that meth style progressing man.
Wings: I think that the arrows on the S kind of throw that piece off balance.

GIzUrD
11-11-2008, 07:55 PM
WINGS- youve got a bunch of little doo dads and extensions in there but they hardly match. might be something to think about in the future.

S4d3n
11-11-2008, 08:08 PM
Scare2 and Wings, if Wings' 'S' was a bit more simplified, I wouldn't mind seeing your stuff on a wall, keep it up, the one with the power lines is dope as fuck Scare.

osnapizzel
11-11-2008, 08:09 PM
scare good letters but no color?

wings i like the letters but hate the extentions

-Wings-
11-11-2008, 08:21 PM
Ill try to lay it loose on them :). Good to see people dont hate my stuff as much any more. :p

Scare2
11-11-2008, 08:41 PM
thanks guys, yeah those are all pen sketches with just a bic ballpoint so i didnt do any color, haven't for a while, i like the way you just commit to your letters and style when you cant erase and not worrying about color keeps my focus on the letterform and flow as apposed to flare and color.

Wings, everyones hating on your S but its dooope. the extensions on the left have hella nice flow. the rest of your piece isnt as wild which kinda throws it off but your letters are solid and the style is really dope. the only part that i dont like is the extension off the bottom left of the N, you can barely see it and it doesnt have much flow with the shape of the letter so it just kind of adds clutter.

-Wings-
11-11-2008, 08:59 PM
Here you go, something with a little less extentions (that K was an accident waiting to happen).
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e357/LockDown2/100_0200.jpg

Maste
11-11-2008, 09:16 PM
http://i537.photobucket.com/albums/ff335/climbinkid/skatemoz.jpg

lose the I

osnapizzel
11-11-2008, 09:18 PM
skin the s should have been up as high as the rest of the letters


maste im not diggin any of that man, keep your letters straight in line with each other, even bars, screw the crazy fills, consistant outline, dont use tape either if you need to add something get a glue stick

klic
11-11-2008, 09:20 PM
for a battle that still hasnt been aproved after a week

http://i430.photobucket.com/albums/qq26/klic1/MARCESimplesBattle.jpg

skin - you could make that look really nice if you did what people told you and got rid of all that crap on your s and got rid of the cracks

czar - the c and a dont go with the z and r at all, just keep all the letters the same style and size

scare2 - looks good but in some of them it would look better if you kept all the bars the same width, and the backgrounds are a nice touch

osnapizzel
11-11-2008, 09:33 PM
lose the shit on the bottom of the c and e

NoCanControl
11-11-2008, 10:00 PM
http://i159.photobucket.com/albums/t136/czar1one/fin.jpg
retouch of an old sketch. I know that it's wack, especially the stars.

scare: I really like the ACE and METH sketches. Keep that meth style progressing man.
Wings: I think that the arrows on the S kind of throw that piece off balance.

are you a faggit? turn those stars upside down.

Kofin
11-11-2008, 10:04 PM
http://i537.photobucket.com/albums/ff335/climbinkid/skatemoz.jpg

lose the I

Iz dat some Bastien Salabanzi?

exitus
11-11-2008, 10:18 PM
wow it kinda sucks to post after you guys but here it goes

http://i34.tinypic.com/2z9cniv.jpg

ShIfTeD
11-11-2008, 10:46 PM
damn this joint moves fast as hell, im gone like a year and shits changed

it was just yesterday i posted and now thers like....6 more pages :/

smooth_nuts
11-11-2008, 11:00 PM
edit*BULLSHIT!
i dont wanna be the first one on a new page :(

scare-fresh,keep it up
scare-keep your letters the same size
exitus-read the new to graff thread....

been slacking lately :/
http://i361.photobucket.com/albums/oo54/doapuno/Picture1149.jpg
http://i361.photobucket.com/albums/oo54/doapuno/Picture1148.jpg
http://i361.photobucket.com/albums/oo54/doapuno/Picture1166.jpg
de for dope :/
http://i208.photobucket.com/albums/bb207/doap1/Picture1168.jpg
shitty quick marker freestyle

ShIfTeD
11-11-2008, 11:02 PM
just some steez, the throw is garbage, i was kinda fucked up when i did it

http://img206.imageshack.us/img206/9850/dscn0133py3.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img206.imageshack.us/img206/dscn0133py3.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img206/dscn0133py3.jpg/1/)

http://img265.imageshack.us/img265/3760/dscn0127bw8.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img265.imageshack.us/img265/dscn0127bw8.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img265/dscn0127bw8.jpg/1/)

this ones just a rough ass sketch so noone judge it on piece status :D

http://img147.imageshack.us/img147/3844/dscn0129kz5.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img147.imageshack.us/img147/dscn0129kz5.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img147/dscn0129kz5.jpg/1/)

Infoe
11-11-2008, 11:26 PM
http://i361.photobucket.com/albums/oo54/doapuno/Picture1166.jpg
de for dope :/


OOOOOH YEAH
Do a full name like this

osnapizzel
11-12-2008, 12:45 AM
nuts that "shitty quick marker freestyle" are the best letters you came up with so far imo

smooth_nuts
11-12-2008, 01:23 AM
those are in NO WAY the best letters i've came up with...
specialy not the ugo fucking p :/

C3ZR ONE
11-12-2008, 01:53 AM
are you a faggit? turn those stars upside down.

Gayest thing said in toy forums in 2 months and 6 days... Bombing Science will soon have to be renamed triple six dickriders.com thanks to kids like you.

MareImbrium
11-12-2008, 05:48 AM
http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/picture.php?albumid=174&pictureid=1063

messing about . any crits much appreciated

NoCanControl
11-12-2008, 10:40 AM
Gayest thing said in toy forums in 2 months and 6 days... Bombing Science will soon have to be renamed triple six dickriders.com thanks to kids like you.

hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha hahahahahaha.

1. i don't dick ride anyone. at all. not even the people who deserve it.
2. you have fucking stars in your peice. (you lose)
3. it was a joke.
:rolleyes:

klic
11-12-2008, 11:05 AM
http://i430.photobucket.com/albums/qq26/klic1/JASKALExchangeandUncleanLooseleaf.jpg
http://i430.photobucket.com/albums/qq26/klic1/SchoolSketchingandLEAKSThrowExchang.jpg

mare - i dont really like, the letters just arent very good in my opinion

smooth - that de one piece looks so fresh, do a full dope piece with the same style

shifted - that kwake sketch looks nice except the a is to wide

exitus - go simpler, keep the bars the same width

wackattack
11-12-2008, 01:48 PM
http://i81.photobucket.com/albums/j216/J301/044.jpg
mareimbrium, go a bit simpler but i like the way you move

chloroformic.
11-12-2008, 07:04 PM
dope- don't ever do that 2nd peice's e ever again. please. lol but i agree with snap, the marker style is the best one.
shift- the 3rd ones a has alot of potential. i like it alot actually.
mare- don't waste your time on coloring yet. get your letters down first.
klic- the first one is nicely done, i like the simple look you have to it. looks good. keep that up.
wack-... simples bro. that funky shit isn't working

so.. i was listening to "life's been good to me so far" by joe walsh... hence...
http://i157.photobucket.com/albums/t66/AnteUp14/11-11-08_2213-1.jpg
joe walsh.
critiquessss?

Cyto Aka Son1c
11-12-2008, 08:08 PM
http://i33.tinypic.com/29er4ew.jpg

librelikespie
11-12-2008, 08:36 PM
been trying some new shit lately
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/LemonMeringuePie340.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/LemonMeringuePie341.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/LemonMeringuePie342.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/LemonMeringuePie343.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/LemonMeringuePie344.jpg

progression thingy

rasar- looks good, weird name though, got double repeated letter

klic
11-12-2008, 08:42 PM
raysar - i like it, kind of remind me of a simpler version of raseks style

chloro - thanks for the crit, i like the simple funky kinda style you got going there, just maybe make all the letters the same hight i dunno. and i havnt really done much coloring so i was wondering if theres like any specific pattern you use for your fill in or if its all just random

chloroformic.
11-12-2008, 08:47 PM
haha. no, it was all random. i never do fills either.

smooth_nuts
11-12-2008, 08:54 PM
dope- don't ever do that 2nd peice's e ever again.
WOOOOOOOOOOOOOAH WAIT!
please,state a reason anti !

chloroformic.
11-12-2008, 09:00 PM
in that e you dropped all that you know about bars. you alternated the bars width where the middle part of the e forms. that just through it ALL off. :(

IlikePie
11-12-2008, 09:16 PM
been trying some new shit lately
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/LemonMeringuePie340.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/LemonMeringuePie341.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/LemonMeringuePie342.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/LemonMeringuePie343.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/LemonMeringuePie344.jpg

progression thingy

rasar- looks good, weird name though, got double repeated letter

Hey I like Pie too :)
And yer steeze

sank.
11-12-2008, 09:47 PM
fresh shit mista monsta. that last handy is fire. the first piece is my fav, but i think the letters get progressively worse imo. would love to see you incorporate some of your sick characters into a sketch. o and the cocs made me lol. stay up man.

haven't had any motivation to sketch in a long time, hopefully taking some shrooms will change that.

aleph8890
11-12-2008, 10:02 PM
Runci... those are dank! I love the raw outline, its real sick.

http://img396.imageshack.us/img396/8941/img0212hx9.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img396.imageshack.us/img396/img0212hx9.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img396/img0212hx9.jpg/1/)

Ive been working on some simples to get posting again and this is what i liked out of the six I did... Crits?

BEAS one
11-12-2008, 10:07 PM
some really good shit in here...
newest...crits?


http://i273.photobucket.com/albums/jj217/JuggaloSk8er4life/SAPD-1.jpg

Nem
11-12-2008, 10:15 PM
you have the right idea, i would take out that star first of all. Your P looks halfway decent right now, but the bars on the S and the O (D?) need to be reworked. Just try different angles, lengths, curvatures, etc. maybe make more of the center bars more horizontal, rather than slightly angled (if you get what im sayin) I dunno, i think your A has the right idea too, but maybe just tweak it a tad bit. just work on making it cleaner, and keep practicing. not too keen on the color combos either. but good attempt.

klic
11-12-2008, 10:16 PM
http://i430.photobucket.com/albums/qq26/klic1/JASKALExchangeandUncleanLooseleaf.jpg
http://i430.photobucket.com/albums/qq26/klic1/SchoolSketchingandLEAKSThrowExchang.jpg

mare - i dont really like, the letters just arent very good in my opinion

smooth - that de one piece looks so fresh, do a full dope piece with the same style

shifted - that kwake sketch looks nice except the a is to wide

exitus - go simpler, keep the bars the same width

bump

Nem
11-12-2008, 10:20 PM
beas, you have the right idea with bars and all. and your P looks halfway decent right now, but i think the S, A, and O (D?) need to be re worked a bit. I suggest making the middle bars more perfectly horizontal. and working from there. if you get what im sayin. Aside from that just try different angles, curvatures, lengths, bar ends, etc. until you get something that really looks GOOD to you. Theres a lot that can be done with the letter S so dont be afraid to get experimental. despite what people say on this forum...

but i do suggest taking out that star. and im not really too keen on the color combo. maybe if you kept it all blue with the green outline. it also looks a bit rushed.

Cyto Aka Son1c
11-12-2008, 10:36 PM
That Monster tag is dope sauces

NoCanControl
11-12-2008, 10:44 PM
http://photos-c.ak.fbcdn.net/photos-ak-snc1/v372/129/20/1193550161/n1193550161_30331098_4213.jpg

http://photos-d.ak.fbcdn.net/photos-ak-snc1/v372/129/20/1193550161/n1193550161_30331099_7377.jpg

http://photos-e.ak.fbcdn.net/photos-ak-snc1/v372/129/20/1193550161/n1193550161_30331100_550.jpg

Nem
11-12-2008, 11:10 PM
beas, you have the right idea with bars and all. and your P looks halfway decent right now, but i think the S, A, and O (D?) need to be re worked a bit. I suggest making the middle bars more perfectly horizontal. and working from there. if you get what im sayin. Aside from that just try different angles, curvatures, lengths, bar ends, etc. until you get something that really looks GOOD to you. Theres a lot that can be done with the letter S so dont be afraid to get experimental. despite what people say on this forum...

but i do suggest taking out that star. and im not really too keen on the color combo. maybe if you kept it all blue with the green outline. it also looks a bit rushed.

Nem
11-12-2008, 11:11 PM
wow i posted three times. what a fag.

hal.cyon
11-13-2008, 01:39 AM
http://img515.imageshack.us/img515/3907/p1000855kx9.jpghttp://img515.imageshack.us/my.php?image=p1000855kx9.jpghttp://img515.imageshack.us/my.php?image=p1000855kx9.jpg

some pens for the grame thing. eh.

kans - i actually think those are pretty kool. nice job.
shpel - not bad. good simps overall.
sapo - its the right idea, just needs a little work on the execution. move some of your bars around. play with em.

AdRe*
11-13-2008, 02:28 AM
clean lines HAL.CYON
http://i224.photobucket.com/albums/dd201/adre89/Pic0131-1.jpg

FullTimeFugitive
11-13-2008, 03:57 AM
http://i186.photobucket.com/albums/x155/rezn2007/1113080429.jpg
http://i186.photobucket.com/albums/x155/rezn2007/1113080430.jpg

smooth_nuts
11-13-2008, 04:15 AM
bumpors!

edit*BULLSHIT!
i dont wanna be the first one on a new page :(

scare-fresh,keep it up
scare-keep your letters the same size
exitus-read the new to graff thread....

been slacking lately :/
http://i361.photobucket.com/albums/oo54/doapuno/Picture1149.jpg
http://i361.photobucket.com/albums/oo54/doapuno/Picture1148.jpg
http://i361.photobucket.com/albums/oo54/doapuno/Picture1166.jpg
de for dope :/
http://i208.photobucket.com/albums/bb207/doap1/Picture1168.jpg
shitty quick marker freestyle
enac-the t seems out of place
adre-simples man....
kans-that first green one is dooooooooooooope
monster-fresh
klic-your s is looking descent but the h needs work...for orange throw that is

MareImbrium
11-13-2008, 06:24 AM
http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/picture.php?albumid=174&pictureid=1093

Just messing bout Last letters messed up but thought i would share.

Dewster_OnE
11-13-2008, 12:21 PM
i filled it haha

http://i51.photobucket.com/albums/f367/Dewster88/131806.jpg

Dewster_OnE
11-13-2008, 12:57 PM
cans- shit is fresh

simps real quick

http://i51.photobucket.com/albums/f367/Dewster88/135349.jpg

Cyto Aka Son1c
11-13-2008, 01:50 PM
http://i38.tinypic.com/2q06r2f.jpg

DankArtWork
11-13-2008, 02:35 PM
just started so i know i am toy but crits please

Cyto Aka Son1c
11-13-2008, 02:53 PM
keep working with bars

b SQUARED 08
11-13-2008, 03:15 PM
Rasar: Looks pretty good. Careful with those A's though; they've got potential to look like other letters if you tweaked it much more. Other than that, lookin' pretty decent.
Monster: I like what I see. Very nice handies too.
Awol: Stay away from connecting your letters and doing all of those in-and-outs until you can put basic letters together. Good consistency in your bar thickness though.

Here's my second sketch from my new name I've been playin' around with. Tell me what you think:
http://i86.photobucket.com/albums/k98/BBp8ntballaLP508/VideoSnapshot-3-2.jpg

Edit: Accidentally gave crits from the last page... whoops lol.

ignorance is bliss
11-13-2008, 03:47 PM
that saje is fucking so fly dude keep it up

GIzUrD
11-13-2008, 06:59 PM
http://img145.imageshack.us/img145/1474/eggpeachst4.jpg (http://img145.imageshack.us/my.php?image=eggpeachst4.jpg)

a new one and an old one. marker was getting dry on the old one :(

B SQUARE- not my bag, but the E looks out of place
SMOOTH- thou shall not bump thine post lest god wills it
RASAR- keep going
ANDRE-... wtf, 3d is off, looks like someone jizzed on your paper
HAL- looks pretty cool like everything else, says GRA, i think? idk like i said "looks" good
CAN- the characters on the second one look pretty fly.
SHPEL- theres just something weird about your stuff to me.

chloroformic.
11-13-2008, 07:05 PM
http://i157.photobucket.com/albums/t66/AnteUp14/11-11-08_2213-1.jpg
joe walsh.
critiquessss?
hump a bump.
CRITS. PLEASE.

Scare2
11-13-2008, 07:09 PM
saje. its really clean which is good and its pretty simple which is also good. i think it would look better if your bars were even sizes throughout though because the way they change thicknesses doesnt really help the letterform or flow of your piece.

Rasar, the simplicity of yours is dope too. i like the way your R's are done. your S and As could use a bit of work. I think the A's might look better with an angled top, maybe try it out in one of your sketches? and i think the S would look better without the blocks on top and bottom, just simplify it to a normal S as its typed, that would fit nicely with your R's. Then once thats dialled start manipulating the curves of your letters while keeping the flow. also work on getting clean lines. but i like where its going keep it up.

Dewster, fill in the first is nice but almost too distracting from the letters. and in the simples one i like what your doing, its a really dope funk style. your Z and Y could use some work though. but i dig.

Mare Imbrium, your using bars well, but your lettters are WAAAY too complex, your jumpin the gun on wilder style. simplify down closer to what some of the dudees right above me are doin, just keyboard letters. You have to learn the concepts of letterform and flow before you can get wild.


These are partly bitten i think. not totally sure. i was on yesterday and saw an S in this sort of shape and wanted to try some so today i changed up the way i was doing S's a little. just working in some more wild stuff, let me know what parts work and what parts dont.

*edit* these are both pen sketches, no pencil.

http://i92.photobucket.com/albums/l8/IanCasserole/S2.jpg

not done coloring but you get the idea

http://i92.photobucket.com/albums/l8/IanCasserole/SMM2.jpg

Scare2
11-13-2008, 07:17 PM
sorry bout the double post but

chloroformic, i like it the letters are solid and the fill is interesting but not too distracting. i think you should flatten the bottom of the J and maybe fatten up a few of the bars on the right side of the piece, they seem to get a bit smaller, maybe its just because of the O on the left though. i like it.

Gizrd, im personally not down for that style so take everything i say as opinion. but i dont think its got a lot of flow and the letters dont feel natural to me. it seems like a forced style. but its hard for me to judge it or critique it cause im not familiar with it.

GIzUrD
11-13-2008, 07:24 PM
take into consideration that i am a robot, and its hard for me to be natural.

Scare2
11-13-2008, 07:32 PM
and cred to wings on the S. i didnt really bite it but i thought the S in a piece he posted like four or five pages back was dope so i took mine a little more in that direction.

LeaksOne
11-13-2008, 07:34 PM
scare that shits raw man. keep it up.

http://i521.photobucket.com/albums/w335/jokster004/Graff032.jpg
crits?

-Wings-
11-13-2008, 08:13 PM
*edit* these are both pen sketches, no pencil.

http://i92.photobucket.com/albums/l8/IanCasserole/S2.jpg

not done coloring but you get the idea

http://i92.photobucket.com/albums/l8/IanCasserole/SMM2.jpg

Looks to close to match of my s. Despite the extentions.
(edit oh I seen the cred to me. :P)

DankArtWork
11-13-2008, 08:19 PM
crits

Baron
11-13-2008, 08:33 PM
You're like the fourth person on here to write DANK

DankArtWork
11-13-2008, 08:44 PM
really??? wtfff lol .. i just started like two weeks ago

librelikespie
11-13-2008, 09:31 PM
hey *****s
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/DSC03249.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/DSC03250.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/DSC03251.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/DSC03253.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/DSC03254.jpg

crits?

osnapizzel
11-13-2008, 09:44 PM
sweet characters, the rest would be a lot better if it wasnt so sloppy

LeaksOne
11-13-2008, 09:44 PM
give em to get em

ESKiMO2
11-13-2008, 10:11 PM
I was in a shitty mood so I wrote fuck. Simple as that.
http://img83.imageshack.us/img83/1340/dsc01236rm0.jpg

*Crits*

Monster- You're doing a nice original style but you might want to go back to simples for a while. (That's what I'm doing to build my structure)
Scare- I won't crit the bite because it isn't yours but stay away from lined paper.
Chloro- Keep consistent with the size.

Scare2
11-13-2008, 11:03 PM
while i realize i bit the shape of that S pretty hard, that piece isnt a bite, the letter is. the rest is mine for sure. the rest being two Ms... ahaha i forgot i had already made an M until id finished the second. its also a pretty common shape of S though. its not an unheard of style. but wings i give you props, youve got a dope style.

eskiimo, its simple but not too simple and the letters flow. i like it.


i think every writer on earth must of done at least one hellla toy sketch of dank at some point. no worries, just do it and move on to a new word thats less toy.
liberal dude, make it cleaner but your letters and charachs look tight.

Infoe
11-13-2008, 11:32 PM
I never wrote dank...
And a word that's toy???
A WORD ISN'T TOY.

Scare2
11-13-2008, 11:44 PM
yeah, the word itself isnt toy. but it is often written by toys. not to say dank cant be written well or by a legit writer. what i meant by the comment is dont critisize the word like baron, let him know how to make his pieces better. thats what hes here for. no hate on baron though. i prolly woulda made the same comment

hal.cyon
11-13-2008, 11:50 PM
eh.

http://img517.imageshack.us/img517/3843/309ck5.jpg

http://img291.imageshack.us/img291/7092/310zv2.jpg

http://img508.imageshack.us/img508/4024/308nx0.jpg

eskimo, looks smooth per usual. i like that style a lot.
libre, i like the style of it. even messy really. looks good.
leaks, keep working on it. not quite there yet. you've got the basic outslines down.
joe walsh, eh kinda, blah. alright for simps i guess.
gizurd, i just don't get the style man, but to each his own.

jersOneTIC
11-14-2008, 12:38 AM
librelikespie- that "a" reminds me of sexwithoutcondoms(no beef)
eskimo2 - nice simple
halcyon - on the second one, make your "t" skinnier
first time using acrylics on a sketch...crits?
http://img508.imageshack.us/img508/2595/1221bp2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

hal.cyon
11-14-2008, 02:05 AM
some mo.

http://img221.imageshack.us/img221/2562/001en6.jpg

jers, not bad, i always like your letters. little sloppy on the colors, but they pop.

timeless progress
11-14-2008, 02:22 AM
Times-I like it but the E is hidden behind the m too much and that bottom bar on the T makes it look too much like an I.
Heres a rough pencil sketch I just did(at work so no colors) I usually only use pen but figured we actually have a pencile here for once so Imma give it a try.
http://i333.photobucket.com/albums/m395/geyaboi/1226649836.jpg

klic
11-14-2008, 07:52 AM
some shit i did yesterday

http://i430.photobucket.com/albums/qq26/klic1/SHPELPaperSketchin.jpg

i know my e looks like shit (and the rest of the letters for that matter), just experimenting with it

vunk? - looks good but the firrst two letters look the same and its hard to tell what the third letter is

ilmes - that looks fresh, just make your e and l a little bigger

jersOneTIC
11-14-2008, 09:54 AM
librelikespie- that "a" reminds me of sexwithoutcondoms(no beef)
eskimo2 - nice simple
halcyon - on the second one, make your "t" skinnier
first time using acrylics on a sketch...crits?
http://img508.imageshack.us/img508/2595/1221bp2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

bottom page bump

tempest
11-14-2008, 10:09 AM
the bar on ur j looks weird.its much skinnier than the other ones. try to keep ur bars the same size

Eack
11-14-2008, 10:56 AM
shpel = stick to straight letters for now... like on ur keyboard... ur purple E is rly wack (no offence )
jers= nice colors...

http://img222.imageshack.us/img222/2861/img0038si1.jpg
http://img222.imageshack.us/img222/332/img0056cr4.jpg
http://img66.imageshack.us/img66/433/ersrwithcaracur2.jpg

ESKiMO2
11-14-2008, 01:54 PM
Eack, those first two remind me of my old style. I would mess around with the length and width of the bars if I were you.

synps
11-14-2008, 02:04 PM
halcyon-make your e and your l as big as the rest of the piece
shpel- that e in the puple one is gross
jers- dope, just lose the swirly extension on your j it doesnt look right
eack- dont like the last one but the first two are mad dope

http://i5.photobucket.com/albums/y180/kennysphotos/asst015.jpg
crits?

hal.cyon
11-14-2008, 02:33 PM
http://img523.imageshack.us/img523/1938/003xq7.jpg

http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/557/004hr0.jpg

last night before bed shits.

synps- looks good, colors pop. i don't really like the ends of your letters tho.
eack- i like your style. keep knockin it out.

<J-one>
11-14-2008, 02:57 PM
monster- shits tight even if it sloppy
hal - stuffs lookin less jumbled man, keep it up
eak - pretty dope, i dig the last one.

haven't posted in a while, here's a bic pen freewheel
should really start puttin shit actually in my blak book, not on scrap papers.
crits anyone?
http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3212/3030602350_f9da2fcd84.jpg?v=0

LeaksOne
11-14-2008, 03:04 PM
halcyon what do i need to add or do different to get "there"?

aleph8890
11-14-2008, 04:03 PM
Jers I like the acrylic a lot man, the colors jump out hard. Good matches too.

Still tryin to get bars and flow down... old previously posted simple.. crits please?

http://img396.imageshack.us/img396/8941/img0212hx9.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img396.imageshack.us/img396/img0212hx9.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img396/img0212hx9.jpg/1/)

hal.cyon
11-14-2008, 04:06 PM
halcyon what do i need to add or do different to get "there"?

just keep workin on the letters man, that looks like the basic start for workin on throw ups. the middle of the e shouldn't protrude further than the other two ends. the extension at the top of the a is a bit too big. IMO.

aleph8890
11-14-2008, 04:16 PM
J-One I really dig the layering of GKK on the piece, it flows real nice and the character is orig. which is cool. Dank piece.

Dewster_OnE
11-14-2008, 04:22 PM
synps- some of the extensions look like they dont belong but the fill and the letters themselves are good

J- interesting style man shits dope

crits?
http://i51.photobucket.com/albums/f367/Dewster88/171830.jpg

Eack
11-14-2008, 05:37 PM
aleph drop all the connections

exitus
11-14-2008, 05:43 PM
wtf is this, this is the toy blackbook.

well i can see that we have one more "oner" in the world too

klic
11-14-2008, 06:01 PM
[QUOTE=Eack;1253248]shpel = stick to straight letters for now... like on ur keyboard... ur purple E is rly wack (no offence )
QUOTE]

that was purrely experimental and i accept that it came out as shit, but with all due respect i dont think i need to go back to keyboard letters, correct me if im wrong though

heres some stuff i just did, sorry about the shitty webcam pics

http://i430.photobucket.com/albums/qq26/klic1/SHPELFunk.jpg
http://i430.photobucket.com/albums/qq26/klic1/FUCKYEAH.jpg
first thing that came into my head lol i think the fuck turned out alright but the yeah turned out crappy
http://i430.photobucket.com/albums/qq26/klic1/SHPELBlockbuster.jpg
http://i430.photobucket.com/albums/qq26/klic1/SHPELKeyboardLetters.jpg

crits please

deka - it looks nice but i dont like how you connected your k and a

awol - make it simpler, keyboard letters

j-one - i like it, it reminds me of mass apeals style

halcyon - looks fresh as always, except i think some of the arrows on the bottom piece are unnecessary

synps - looks good but like i told you before, it would look a lot better if you rounded off the ends of your bars

Dewster_OnE
11-14-2008, 06:46 PM
last time i checked this was the toy blackbook....

update: crits plz
http://i51.photobucket.com/albums/f367/Dewster88/194416.jpg

GIzUrD
11-14-2008, 07:39 PM
SHPEL- when i saw the second one from the bottom, i was dangerously close to getting out of my chair and doing the robot. (that means i like it)

JETPACK!!
11-14-2008, 07:55 PM
good simples on this page. its nice to come in the toy blackbooks and see a dope page of simples.

shpel? what kinna name is that, how do you pronounce that?

aleph. do not connect your letters.
deka. check the flow on that D. the bottom is too far to the left
times. first post, get rid of that bar under your T. second, define your I more. like the style.
synp. the S is weak. try another.
jers. thicken the bars on the extensions a little bit. also, the bottom of the K. as said earlier.
sunk. id work on the flow of the letters so it dosent trick people into misspelling your name.

klic
11-14-2008, 08:04 PM
shpel? what kinna name is that, how do you pronounce that?



i dont know i just liked the letters and im misspelling spell which i kinda like

and its just pronounced like spell exept with a sh shound

ESKiMO2
11-14-2008, 08:08 PM
Black Label

http://img374.imageshack.us/img374/4392/blackmarketqh5.jpg

Dewster- I like the flow of the individual letters.
Shpel- Nice simples.
Awol- Don't try to put the letters together.

I wrote Fuck and now everyone else is doing it. Satisfying word eh?

remos
11-14-2008, 08:59 PM
http://i255.photobucket.com/albums/hh139/remos905/meds2.jpg
http://i255.photobucket.com/albums/hh139/remos905/meds.jpg
about a month and a half old

timeless progress
11-15-2008, 12:20 AM
sunk. id work on the flow of the letters so it dosent trick people into misspelling your name.
its Junk actually but Tis all good, was trying something different than my usuall JUNK. Il work on the flow

Sizzuurp
11-15-2008, 12:47 AM
Eack- letters are tight nice colors
Synps- shits clean. but im not feelin the letters. maybe cuz the y doesnt really match idk
Hal- im likin the flow of the second one, nice letters
j-one- real ill. unique as hell keep it up
aleph- cool simp i like it. the o needs work
meds-i like the colors in the first one, not really feelin the second
dew- keep sketchin, i like the a a lot in the first one



http://img99.imageshack.us/img99/9199/rukis1ui5.jpg (http://img99.imageshack.us/my.php?image=rukis1ui5.jpg)

http://img160.imageshack.us/img160/6759/idk1di0.jpg (http://img160.imageshack.us/my.php?image=idk1di0.jpg)

tryin to progress on rukis. first time doin letters that arnt real simple throwies. critz plz thanks

osnapizzel
11-15-2008, 01:02 AM
rukis have you checked out the new to graff thread yet? cause tahts garbage

Infoe
11-15-2008, 02:41 AM
Pen freestyles from today
http://img234.imageshack.us/img234/1529/picture1ul2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)

aleph8890
11-15-2008, 03:31 AM
Eack-Your characters are dope as hell and I love the color scheme on the first piece.
Hal.Cyon- The downward flow on the second is really nice

http://img397.imageshack.us/img397/9767/img0156lh0.jpg (http://img397.imageshack.us/my.php?image=img0156lh0.jpg)
http://img397.imageshack.us/img397/img0156lh0.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img397/img0156lh0.jpg/1/)

ok so heres the keyboard letters... I really feel like a lot of the time just black and whites with keyboard letters is just too simple... i guess i want to move a lot faster... crits please?

Queezy
11-15-2008, 04:02 AM
Infoe: Dope freestyles, I like the arrows on the IE.
Awol: Try makin the edes of your letters a little more roundish, not bubble, just rounding the edges.
RAN OUT OF ROOM
http://i133.photobucket.com/albums/q68/JuicinIt/QueezyPiece.jpg

tempest
11-15-2008, 05:25 AM
Words of wisdom from a toy:

Eack- second ones my favorite. the first one is kind of confusing bc of the colors. still tight though

synp- your p looks sorta like an o. also the bottom of your s is a little off. get some pictures of cracks and work from there if thats what you are trying to do. i really like the colors though.

hal.cyon-the bottom bar of your e is strange. try out a capital e instead? or maybe just not as long. I do like your extensions. theres alot of them, yes, but i like the way the arrow is broken off. ive seen itbefore but its still cool. the "fuck" just needs work. period.

j-one- that karak is crazyass. your letters (well, one of them) looks kind of like mass's stuff but the characters and the sketchyness of the pen makes the peice look real tight. idk how u would paint this and still have the same effect tho.

awol-FirstPeice: no dude, don't interlock your letters like that. pureemotion does that really well. you mite want to look at some of his work. but until then work on letter structure. SecondPeice: much better. keep sketching simples. also your letters get smaller as they progress from the a. try to work on that.

deka-your d needs some work. the rest of the letters are nice tho. i mite suggest you don't stick your a and k together. and there is a deka in philly. tho it mite b deca. i just remember seeing it on infamy. deka, dekastar. but watever

shpel- straight...letters....just like your keyboard bro. take it slow. saber didn't rock shit in a day ;)

Black Label- sweet. did u do that? looks like a logo. the 'a' in black looks a little strange with the top all sticky-outy like that.

Meds-the second one is better. try switching the top e for the bottom one and see what it looks like.

rukis- new to Graff. simples. straight letters. like your keyboard. you know the drill.

infoe- thats a cool name bro. i like em all. the middle one is my favorite. only thing i kinda don't like is the arrow in the o.

queezy-q is the most unappreciated and underused letter in graffiti (imo). its good 2 c someone using it. just some thots: the two ends of the bar that intersects your q don't match up. disconnect your letters for now. work on your yz so u can get it up to speed with the rest of your name. o, and please, please, please, work on your handstlye. book into the toy tags....only thread for a couple weeks

........whew
OK. now you get to tell me whats wrong with my shit.


http://img232.imageshack.us/img232/2184/dscn4358un0.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img232.imageshack.us/img232/dscn4358un0.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img232/dscn4358un0.jpg/1/)

http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/1792/dscn4359ps8.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4359ps8.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4359ps8.jpg/1/)

http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/5064/dscn4360jj0.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4360jj0.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4360jj0.jpg/1/)

Favorite:
http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/4770/dscn4361rf3.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4361rf3.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4361rf3.jpg/1/)

http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/2750/dscn4362wp6.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4362wp6.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4362wp6.jpg/1/)

Crit harshly please. Even if you're a stupid ass toy like me.

got no decent markers, so there all in pencil. also, i always rite too big so the letters get smaller as i realize im running off the page.

Yellow Haze
11-15-2008, 06:20 AM
How do i upload my designes to here?

Infoe
11-15-2008, 06:22 AM
http://imageshack.us/
Use the 'Forum Code'

ESKiMO2
11-15-2008, 07:26 AM
I get one criticism. Great.

tempest
11-15-2008, 07:54 AM
and i get none. wtf?
black label- i dont really like the fade on the top of the b now tht i look at it again. c wat its like with a solid outline. and get rid of the extension on the bottom of the b. hav u thot about adding a forcefeild?

EDIT: oh fuck yes!, im finally a senior member muthafuckas.

Dewster_OnE
11-15-2008, 09:01 AM
eskimo- shits dope cuz u have a diff style the letters are decent but the comp shyt u did is hott

temp- you need to work on your proportions

still sketching.. crits plz idk if i shud ink this one up
http://i51.photobucket.com/albums/f367/Dewster88/095536.jpg

tempest
11-15-2008, 09:39 AM
ty 4 the crit. nd dont ink it up till uv sepearted the a and the k

b SQUARED 08
11-15-2008, 10:34 AM
Eack-Your characters are dope as hell and I love the color scheme on the first piece.
Hal.Cyon- The downward flow on the second is really nice

http://img397.imageshack.us/img397/9767/img0156lh0.jpg (http://img397.imageshack.us/my.php?image=img0156lh0.jpg)
http://img397.imageshack.us/img397/img0156lh0.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img397/img0156lh0.jpg/1/)

ok so heres the keyboard letters... I really feel like a lot of the time just black and whites with keyboard letters is just too simple... i guess i want to move a lot faster... crits please?

Much better. Keep crankin' simps like these until you feel like you know every nook-and-cranny of your letters. Then, and only then, should you begin to progress your style.

-Wings-
11-15-2008, 11:13 AM
Dewster I love your letter styles soooo much! :) Keep up the good work, and fill your next actual piece ;)!
Anyways new one for ya guys!
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e357/LockDown2/IMG_2407.jpg

NoCanControl
11-15-2008, 11:28 AM
http://photos-c.ak.fbcdn.net/photos-ak-snc1/v372/129/20/1193550161/n1193550161_30331098_4213.jpg

http://photos-d.ak.fbcdn.net/photos-ak-snc1/v372/129/20/1193550161/n1193550161_30331099_7377.jpg

http://photos-e.ak.fbcdn.net/photos-ak-snc1/v372/129/20/1193550161/n1193550161_30331100_550.jpg

bump for exchanges

tempest
11-15-2008, 11:32 AM
Dewster I love your letter styles soooo much! :) Keep up the good work, and fill your next actual piece ;)!
Anyways new one for ya guys!
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e357/LockDown2/IMG_2407.jpg

thats fucking progression right there. nice job. i remember the old skin :). unless this is an exchange....

-Wings-
11-15-2008, 11:38 AM
Nope mate its pure me just sketching non stop lately. Ive been doing it now for a while and its showing. Thanks! :) Now all I need to do is go out and paint the stuff.

tempest
11-15-2008, 11:45 AM
yeah. tho imo u want some simples. i was sektchin crazy shit, extensions nd all. then i went out 2 paint nd realized tht i cant do tht shi yet. so i went back 2 square 1 you kno.

crits tho, the k is kinda strange with its little thingy. mayb fick that. then color it if u hav markers

-Wings-
11-15-2008, 11:51 AM
No markers and I can paint extentsions only problem is sometimes I cant calculate the right amount of paint I need...

Eack
11-15-2008, 12:45 PM
no can control = i love your caracs man, dope as fuck, not sure bout the letters... im just not fond of that style...

Awol = thank you for the crit and ur last post is way better... keep it simple

dewster = check ur 3d, some parts are off, not bad letters tho

http://img133.imageshack.us/img133/8725/img0034kk9.jpg

http://img385.imageshack.us/img385/2553/img0033ie7.jpg(not clean at all i know)

http://img385.imageshack.us/img385/6422/img0035do0.jpg


Tattoo design
http://img114.imageshack.us/img114/4989/img0047yy2.jpg

Couple of caracs (i dont remember if i posted em already but w.e)
http://img120.imageshack.us/img120/8683/yarkcartoonyz0.jpg
http://img120.imageshack.us/img120/7807/tortue2rr2.jpg
http://img404.imageshack.us/img404/40/img0037rz8.jpg
last one not very clean, it was when i was waiting at an airport. i just wanted to waste time... i think ill do it again but cleaner cuz it style came out pretty good

wone121
11-15-2008, 01:34 PM
wone 254
qick shyt in mi black book tel meh wat you think




http://i215.photobucket.com/albums/cc274/nawlige_is_stupidity/wone254014.jpg
http://i215.photobucket.com/albums/cc274/nawlige_is_stupidity/wone254005.jpg
http://i215.photobucket.com/albums/cc274/nawlige_is_stupidity/wone254010.jpg

wone121
11-15-2008, 01:42 PM
more black boko shyt


http://i215.photobucket.com/albums/cc274/nawlige_is_stupidity/paintckan003.jpg
http://i215.photobucket.com/albums/cc274/nawlige_is_stupidity/graffiti008.jpg
http://i215.photobucket.com/albums/cc274/nawlige_is_stupidity/graffiti006.jpg

Baron
11-15-2008, 01:58 PM
Go back to the basics and stay there for a while. And take those damn crowns off your tags. Your 3D is off, your structure is terrible and your handstlye is lacking.

tempest
11-15-2008, 02:03 PM
Words of wisdom from a toy:

Eack- second ones my favorite. the first one is kind of confusing bc of the colors. still tight though

synp- your p looks sorta like an o. also the bottom of your s is a little off. get some pictures of cracks and work from there if thats what you are trying to do. i really like the colors though.

hal.cyon-the bottom bar of your e is strange. try out a capital e instead? or maybe just not as long. I do like your extensions. theres alot of them, yes, but i like the way the arrow is broken off. ive seen itbefore but its still cool. the "fuck" just needs work. period.

j-one- that karak is crazyass. your letters (well, one of them) looks kind of like mass's stuff but the characters and the sketchyness of the pen makes the peice look real tight. idk how u would paint this and still have the same effect tho.

awol-FirstPeice: no dude, don't interlock your letters like that. pureemotion does that really well. you mite want to look at some of his work. but until then work on letter structure. SecondPeice: much better. keep sketching simples. also your letters get smaller as they progress from the a. try to work on that.

deka-your d needs some work. the rest of the letters are nice tho. i mite suggest you don't stick your a and k together. and there is a deka in philly. tho it mite b deca. i just remember seeing it on infamy. deka, dekastar. but watever

shpel- straight...letters....just like your keyboard bro. take it slow. saber didn't rock shit in a day ;)

Black Label- sweet. did u do that? looks like a logo. the 'a' in black looks a little strange with the top all sticky-outy like that.

Meds-the second one is better. try switching the top e for the bottom one and see what it looks like.

rukis- new to Graff. simples. straight letters. like your keyboard. you know the drill.

infoe- thats a cool name bro. i like em all. the middle one is my favorite. only thing i kinda don't like is the arrow in the o.

queezy-q is the most unappreciated and underused letter in graffiti (imo). its good 2 c someone using it. just some thots: the two ends of the bar that intersects your q don't match up. disconnect your letters for now. work on your yz so u can get it up to speed with the rest of your name. o, and please, please, please, work on your handstlye. book into the toy tags....only thread for a couple weeks

........whew
OK. now you get to tell me whats wrong with my shit.


http://img232.imageshack.us/img232/2184/dscn4358un0.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img232.imageshack.us/img232/dscn4358un0.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img232/dscn4358un0.jpg/1/)

http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/1792/dscn4359ps8.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4359ps8.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4359ps8.jpg/1/)

http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/5064/dscn4360jj0.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4360jj0.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4360jj0.jpg/1/)

Favorite:
http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/4770/dscn4361rf3.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4361rf3.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4361rf3.jpg/1/)

http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/2750/dscn4362wp6.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img407.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4362wp6.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img407/dscn4362wp6.jpg/1/)

Crit harshly please. Even if you're a stupid ass toy like me.

got no decent markers, so there all in pencil. also, i always rite too big so the letters get smaller as i realize im running off the page.


Bump for crits

and 2 new ones to contemplate:
http://img75.imageshack.us/img75/7373/dscn4371sq4.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img75.imageshack.us/img75/dscn4371sq4.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img75/dscn4371sq4.jpg/1/)

http://img75.imageshack.us/img75/6892/dscn4372rb4.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img75.imageshack.us/img75/dscn4372rb4.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img75/dscn4372rb4.jpg/1/)

Baron
11-15-2008, 02:07 PM
Remove every single arrow and it would look better. Switch up you N and K a little bit. Something about the over lapping legs is killing me.

MsKo
11-15-2008, 02:27 PM
http://img401.imageshack.us/img401/5470/image000dz2.jpg (http://img401.imageshack.us/my.php?image=image000dz2.jpg)
http://img401.imageshack.us/img401/image000dz2.jpg/1/w320.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img401/image000dz2.jpg/1/)

http://img98.imageshack.us/img98/2563/image025tr7.jpg (http://img98.imageshack.us/my.php?image=image025tr7.jpg)

<J-one>
11-15-2008, 05:15 PM
thanks for the crits guys.
i don't quite understand how that looks like mass's stuff....but what vere, his shits good so i'll take it as a compliment.

skin, it keeps gettin better man.
dank, baron know's what he's talkin about with that overlapping business
wone, take it easy bro. work on proportions and structure.
erase, i can see that stuff goin somewhere. maybe simplify it a little bit. show me solid letters with a few extensions that flow. lets see what you got.
msko, i think i like it... maybe toss some 3D in there man...

another one on printer paper instead of in my book....
http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3270/3032372437_2c108e90d9.jpg?v=0

whahappen?
11-15-2008, 07:32 PM
http://img440.imageshack.us/img440/1356/aaasi8.jpg
lasr philly short

Fube
11-15-2008, 07:59 PM
im about to start deleting your shit if u dont crit at least the person above u. u mother fuckers just walk all over. its a toy forum, if your posting in here your posting for crits. if u give none i will delete your shit.

Baron
11-15-2008, 09:05 PM
Whahappen- That looks like death in a fleshlight

-Wings-
11-15-2008, 09:12 PM
True dah. I needa do my part now :). (Except eack, he never crited on me)
Wone > Your stuff is very messy, and its all over the place. Your handstyles are wack, and you need to work more on your letters now. Go simpler then what you are and spend some time on the letters. Its not a race.

Dank > Your letters are ugly, you should make the length longer maybe, and you should stop this overlapping thing (baron does know what he's talking about). And man no more arrows for you. Also make your letters the same width, not all over the place, your n usually shows where you go wrong. And man dont fill a pencil piece with pencil.. it doesnt work.

Msko > Letters would look hella of alot better if they were all the same size. And that 2nd sketch, I dont like it (the characters ugly).

J - One > Thats some sexy shit there man, I love the right side alot. Keep it up man!

(What happen doesnt get crits if he doesnt crit anyone).

Cyto Aka Son1c
11-15-2008, 09:40 PM
http://i33.tinypic.com/11tn1ih.jpg

http://i35.tinypic.com/2a0dkb5.jpg

http://i34.tinypic.com/2gwz4m9.jpg

http://i37.tinypic.com/2hnm2j9.jpg

timeless progress
11-15-2008, 11:01 PM
J1 I love that style you do, so much infact I might try some shit like that, no bite just inspiration right

-Wings-
11-15-2008, 11:30 PM
Rasar > Ugh.. your letters are really ugly there maybe to wide? And theres no flow really.
Them a's all look ugly, go more simpler and dont overlap your letters that much, theres a limit. So write this just in block letters. R A S A R. Try it with out those funky edges/extentions or whatever.

Queezy
11-15-2008, 11:34 PM
Work on your A's Rasar

wone121
11-15-2008, 11:52 PM
gewd look on the ed vice baron

wone121
11-16-2008, 12:52 AM
http://i357.photobucket.com/albums/oo13/wone254/morefreehand006.jpg
oneliner
http://i357.photobucket.com/albums/oo13/wone254/wone254022.jpg
http://i357.photobucket.com/albums/oo13/wone254/wone254025.jpg
quick trowie
http://i357.photobucket.com/albums/oo13/wone254/wone254023.jpg
http://i357.photobucket.com/albums/oo13/wone254/wone254017.jpg
http://i357.photobucket.com/albums/oo13/wone254/wone254018.jpg

wone121
11-16-2008, 12:54 AM
tell meh wat you think bout it ^

timeless progress
11-16-2008, 02:55 AM
the 1 liners not horrible but you need to work on it , especially the N connection to the E and also the E looks like a Z.
look up Bars in the new to graff section and start using them religiously cause that piece is really bad, go simple for now.

heres a 10 minute quicky from here at work
also thats not meant to be a R and the end of the handy the paper slipped on me
http://i333.photobucket.com/albums/m395/geyaboi/1226824643.jpg
what do ya think(I was gonna try out J1's style but forgot when I started)

RFI. SPit
11-16-2008, 03:18 AM
Remove every single arrow and it would look better. Switch up you N and K a little bit. Something about the over lapping legs is killing me.

Do you post any of your work?

MsKo
11-16-2008, 03:32 AM
@wone121

U should train some straiht letters and then try to evoule them in some wack a** S**t

mtown
11-16-2008, 04:14 AM
here´s a carac made with http://img255.imageshack.us/img255/7875/caraccua3.jpg

timeless progress
11-16-2008, 05:08 AM
heres a 10 minute quicky from here at work
also thats not meant to be a R and the end of the handy the paper slipped on me
http://i333.photobucket.com/albums/m395/geyaboi/1226824643.jpg
what do ya think(I was gonna try out J1's style but forgot when I started)

bump for crits

mtown
11-16-2008, 05:17 AM
timeless: idont like it keep it on 1 line and simple

wone121
11-16-2008, 10:34 AM
yerp gewd looks wit the crits
btu the one thing im not new to graffiti iv been bombing for lik 4 years i juss found out about this site nd nicekidnice.com
nd were i live ther r no gewd righters so i have no one to look up to
so im juss finding gewd people on line nd studdyin ther shyt

kp123
11-16-2008, 10:42 AM
heres one I finished in pencil. crits.

http://img243.imageshack.us/img243/8638/sevin1ub4.th.jpg (http://img243.imageshack.us/my.php?image=sevin1ub4.jpg)http://img243.imageshack.us/images/thpix.gif (http://g.imageshack.us/thpix.php)

Dewster_OnE
11-16-2008, 10:52 AM
i know your not saying theres no good writers in RI because if i remember correctly nicekidnice is a site for RI graffiti

wone121
11-16-2008, 11:13 AM
um nah dawg i live in woonsocket the litelest city in ri nd the only gewd graffiti is dwel nd ryle nd they dont even kome around here no more the last peac is from 04 nd ery no nd then soem sloe free hands pop up outa nowere nd some perm shyt alog wit it

Dewster_OnE
11-16-2008, 12:07 PM
well u shud take a trip to prov mah doode seaz is gettin up again and slo's been fuked up the city u needa come thru and look at the traks

Baron
11-16-2008, 01:03 PM
Do you post any of your work?

Camera comes in Tuesday or Wednesday :)

tempest
11-16-2008, 01:07 PM
True dah. I needa do my part now :). (Except eack, he never crited on me)
Wone > Your stuff is very messy, and its all over the place. Your handstyles are wack, and you need to work more on your letters now. Go simpler then what you are and spend some time on the letters. Its not a race.

Dank > Your letters are ugly, you should make the length longer maybe, and you should stop this overlapping thing (baron does know what he's talking about). And man no more arrows for you. Also make your letters the same width, not all over the place, your n usually shows where you go wrong. And man dont fill a pencil piece with pencil.. it doesnt work.

Msko > Letters would look hella of alot better if they were all the same size. And that 2nd sketch, I dont like it (the characters ugly).

J - One > Thats some sexy shit there man, I love the right side alot. Keep it up man!

(What happen doesnt get crits if he doesnt crit anyone).

Wow, one compliment and suddenly your Mr. bigshot :D. ayt. listened 2 u all. less overlap. the letters r pretty much the same "your letters are ugly" docent tell me what to fix. and i didn't fill my pencil piece with pencil. though if you fill a pencilpeice with something other than pencil its not a pencil piece. its a mixmedia or ink piece. so not sure what you meant there. ;). just messing. and for the critoris.

Wone - every1s sayin it, straight letters bro. there all the rage apparently.

RASR-the letters on your blu nd yellow peice r the best structured ones, though the overlap is just too much. i personally believe (that us Americans) that overlap is OK in small doses. but if u have 2 draw the outline of ur letter on another letter uve gone too far.

timeless-whatever is in the speech bubble is wack. if that's a handy then work on it. the black stuff isn't horrible. the character is cool. the piecing needs work, but u mainly just need to disconnect them and make em legible (not running up the side of the page).

Sevin- thats right! fight the POWA. fill your pencilpeice with pencil man. just dont tell skin. Anyway, draw some straight letters like on ur keyboard. S-E-V-I-N. u could try practicing an R just so it gives u the freedom to do a SEVIR wen ever u feel like it. And when you post and your at image shack choose the option at the bottom that's called "Hotlink for Forums 1" Then you dont get that thumbnail

OK.......heres the boring flick ur crits produced:

http://img205.imageshack.us/img205/6807/dscn4374jc2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img205.imageshack.us/img205/dscn4374jc2.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img205/dscn4374jc2.jpg/1/)

tempest
11-16-2008, 01:11 PM
um nah dawg i live in woonsocket the litelest city in ri nd the only gewd graffiti is dwel nd ryle nd they dont even kome around here no more the last peac is from 04 nd ery no nd then soem sloe free hands pop up outa nowere nd some perm shyt alog wit it

is your keybord broken? why would you write kome or gewd? its no faster to type and it looks stupid. :D

Double post, my bad.

Baron
11-16-2008, 01:11 PM
Your K is just like an adjusted copy of your N, try curving either the N or K more/less to differentiate. Top D and A are looking very nice. Glad to see some bars, keep up the good work!

Cyto Aka Son1c
11-16-2008, 01:36 PM
Tempest- I meant for the red in that peice to be part of the fill and outline the overlapped letters so the reader could still see what it said, I guess it doesn't work.

Dewster_OnE
11-16-2008, 01:38 PM
i would try to go more straight lettered temp i think wahts killing you is the fact that where the letter bends isnt exactly proportional or they bend at a place where they arent supposed to. it is gettin better tho. keep'em coming man

crits suggestions..etc
http://i51.photobucket.com/albums/f367/Dewster88/141531.jpg

jupsick
11-16-2008, 01:46 PM
Rasar > Ugh.. your letters are really ugly there maybe to wide? And theres no flow really.
Them a's all look ugly, go more simpler and dont overlap your letters that much, theres a limit. So write this just in block letters. R A S A R. Try it with out those funky edges/extentions or whatever.

look whos talking bout no messy extentions and shit
-_-
anyways
rasar i saw 1 thing i liked from u abit ago
this shit is really guly tho 0.0 try using more stable bars
dont bend them so much and try going strait

Eack
11-16-2008, 01:49 PM
bump for crits (didnt it get a single one)

no can control = i love your caracs man, dope as fuck, not sure bout the letters... im just not fond of that style...

Awol = thank you for the crit and ur last post is way better... keep it simple

dewster = check ur 3d, some parts are off, not bad letters tho

http://img133.imageshack.us/img133/8725/img0034kk9.jpg

http://img385.imageshack.us/img385/2553/img0033ie7.jpg(not clean at all i know)

http://img385.imageshack.us/img385/6422/img0035do0.jpg


Tattoo design
http://img114.imageshack.us/img114/4989/img0047yy2.jpg

Couple of caracs (i dont remember if i posted em already but w.e)
http://img120.imageshack.us/img120/8683/yarkcartoonyz0.jpg
http://img120.imageshack.us/img120/7807/tortue2rr2.jpg
http://img404.imageshack.us/img404/40/img0037rz8.jpg
last one not very clean, it was when i was waiting at an airport. i just wanted to waste time... i think ill do it again but cleaner cuz it style came out pretty good

tempest
11-16-2008, 02:05 PM
lookin gud bro. the handstyle is verr impressive. the 3d is well done, makes it jump off the page. colors pop. in terms of conructive critiscism, the bottom character could use sum playin with. especiall with the wings. they look like theyr made out of stone not feather.

Eack
11-16-2008, 02:07 PM
thx and i completly agree for the wings... i hadn't noticed tho

Cyto Aka Son1c
11-16-2008, 02:43 PM
http://i33.tinypic.com/2lc5teo.jpg

-Wings-
11-16-2008, 02:46 PM
I meh about this sketch, I have no markers so I decided to use a pen :)!
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e357/LockDown2/100_0202.jpg

MsKo
11-16-2008, 02:50 PM
@wings

Hmm U got nice letters and a good style but I think U should use some colors man and it will be heeeeeelll yes :)


@RasaR

I Think it's a lil tooo simple for me don't like the style and work on the outline...

Mine:

http://img514.imageshack.us/img514/4159/image009mr5.jpg (http://img514.imageshack.us/my.php?image=image009mr5.jpg)
http://img514.imageshack.us/img514/image009mr5.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img514/image009mr5.jpg/1/)

-Wings-
11-16-2008, 02:59 PM
No markers mate :(!
Also your sketch looks fine, but on the k the bottom right leg should be made longer and out a bit more maybe?
The coloring job is boring. Bubbles never please me :P. But good sketch! :) (& Thanks for the comment)

Eack
11-16-2008, 02:59 PM
msko, if i was you i would try to work on a style like rasar, simple...

mmmburgers
11-16-2008, 04:20 PM
http://i237.photobucket.com/albums/ff286/mmmburgers/sketchlololol.jpg
just a Maloer piece i sketched the otherday
my R is whack i know, i know.
crits?


msko - its a alright sketch although maybe fix your M and your K next time
wings - lookin great man, it looks dope in pen
rasar - nice and simple. keep it that way

tremulant
11-16-2008, 05:40 PM
anyone else enjoying these insightful little commentaries placed right next to the sketches?

mexico
11-16-2008, 06:32 PM
Cyto_ dude i would love to see that big on a freight car or a truck
wings_ dope letters man, has good flow
msko_ good letters, but the 3d is wierd
mmmburgers_ I like that it's wicked long

trying something new.
http://i217.photobucket.com/albums/cc242/ibenpwnzed/DSC01678.jpg

librelikespie
11-16-2008, 06:43 PM
hey fag gets :D

I saw a vid on youtube with sum down syndrome kid in it, very inspiring.

http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5925.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5926.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5928.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5929.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5930.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5931.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5932.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5933.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5934.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5935.jpg

balance42020
11-16-2008, 06:56 PM
msko, tight immortal technique quote, the piece is pretty sick but i gotta agree i dont like the bubbles
mburgers, that shit looks dope from far away, but i can't even tell what those letters are most of the time
mexi- it looks real wack to me, and the 3d going into the center could be good but its lookin inconsistent, vanishing points man

heres some of my shit, i know i just talked some shit so you can shit talk my shit now, shit

they say CACHE

http://i127.photobucket.com/albums/p127/dannymanmancanman/pipe2001-1.jpgthe outline looks a little shaky i know but i just want to know about the drips

http://i127.photobucket.com/albums/p127/dannymanmancanman/pipe2002-1.jpgsame style, i made connections in the c's and e's, what do u think

mmmburgers
11-16-2008, 06:58 PM
use bars man
go check the new to graff thread

librelikespie
11-16-2008, 07:04 PM
forgot to crit!!!

erase- cant really see the letters well because of the fill, but i think structure needs to be looked at.
rasar- looking good
skin - I would start to work on flow if i were you, but mad clean shit, im a fucking mess
msko - O looks like a D
RCK - loose the c-k connection, dont overlap the c and brink the K's leg up, straighten it up and then work on some flow.

cache - second pieces C looks like an O, other then that, structure looks good.

mmmburgers
11-16-2008, 07:19 PM
you gave crits to everyone on this page but me
:(

Scino & Spank
11-16-2008, 07:24 PM
http://i37.photobucket.com/albums/e96/ScinoandSpank/PICT0124-1.jpg
and a lil something extra...
http://i37.photobucket.com/albums/e96/ScinoandSpank/PICT0121.jpg
Crits. eh.

wone121
11-16-2008, 07:39 PM
msko, tight immortal technique quote, the piece is pretty sick but i gotta agree i dont like the bubbles
mburgers, that shit looks dope from far away, but i can't even tell what those letters are most of the time
mexi- it looks real wack to me, and the 3d going into the center could be good but its lookin inconsistent, vanishing points man

heres some of my shit, i know i just talked some shit so you can shit talk my shit now, shit

they say CACHE

http://i127.photobucket.com/albums/p127/dannymanmancanman/pipe2001-1.jpgthe outline looks a little shaky i know but i just want to know about the drips

http://i127.photobucket.com/albums/p127/dannymanmancanman/pipe2002-1.jpgsame style, i made connections in the c's and e's, what do u think

.................................................. .................................................. ....
be honist do you lik tht r you prod of it kus it sucks lik not being mean it haribel ..







-WONE-
-254-

Duped
11-16-2008, 07:55 PM
balanced: the c's on the second cache are kinda weird with that extension on the end

some stuff.. just started
http://i195.photobucket.com/albums/z278/bendyarms45/stuff/IMG_9223.jpg
http://i195.photobucket.com/albums/z278/bendyarms45/stuff/IMG_9220.jpg

"Riot"
11-16-2008, 07:58 PM
.................................................. .................................................. ....
be honist do you lik tht r you prod of it kus it sucks lik not being mean it haribel ..







-WONE-
-254-

shut the fuck up.

Baron
11-16-2008, 08:01 PM
http://i37.photobucket.com/albums/e96/ScinoandSpank/PICT0124-1.jpg
and a lil something extra...
http://i37.photobucket.com/albums/e96/ScinoandSpank/PICT0121.jpg
Crits. eh.

Cile much?

Scino & Spank
11-16-2008, 08:12 PM
whats cile?

tempest
11-16-2008, 08:22 PM
Wow, one compliment and suddenly your Mr. bigshot :D. ayt. listened 2 u all. less overlap. the letters r pretty much the same "your letters are ugly" docent tell me what to fix. and i didn't fill my pencil piece with pencil. though if you fill a pencilpeice with something other than pencil its not a pencil piece. its a mixmedia or ink piece. so not sure what you meant there. ;). just messing. and for the critoris.

Wone - every1s sayin it, straight letters bro. there all the rage apparently.

RASR-the letters on your blu nd yellow peice r the best structured ones, though the overlap is just too much. i personally believe (that us Americans) that overlap is OK in small doses. but if u have 2 draw the outline of ur letter on another letter uve gone too far.

timeless-whatever is in the speech bubble is wack. if that's a handy then work on it. the black stuff isn't horrible. the character is cool. the piecing needs work, but u mainly just need to disconnect them and make em legible (not running up the side of the page).

Sevin- thats right! fight the POWA. fill your pencilpeice with pencil man. just dont tell skin. Anyway, draw some straight letters like on ur keyboard. S-E-V-I-N. u could try practicing an R just so it gives u the freedom to do a SEVIR wen ever u feel like it. And when you post and your at image shack choose the option at the bottom that's called "Hotlink for Forums 1" Then you dont get that thumbnail

OK.......heres the boring flick ur crits produced:

http://img205.imageshack.us/img205/6807/dscn4374jc2.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img205.imageshack.us/img205/dscn4374jc2.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img205/dscn4374jc2.jpg/1/)

no crits....at all

NoCanControl
11-16-2008, 08:31 PM
dank and spank. go back to simples. and ciles is a person on bs.

-Wings-
11-16-2008, 08:45 PM
Dsub exchange.
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e357/LockDown2/CCF17112008_00000.jpg

Baron
11-16-2008, 08:46 PM
whats cile?

http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2016/2494978685_52aa26f924.jpg?v=0
For some reason when I saw your picture I thought it looked alot more like this one than it did, Cile is a mod here.

And Tempest, stop crying, 3 people gave you crits including myself, don't get all pissy, not everyone gets a whole page of crits.

Infoe
11-16-2008, 08:49 PM
hey fag gets :D

I saw a vid on youtube with sum down syndrome kid in it, very inspiring.

http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5925.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5926.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5928.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5929.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5930.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5931.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5932.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5933.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5934.jpg
http://i160.photobucket.com/albums/t175/mud_aura/IMGP5935.jpg


MONSTER I LOVE YOU MA NIGGRR
Those simples are fire and the characters. Dope shit dope dope dope!

Wings;
The extensions you use on your S, you should put them on the N too.. It would make it flow better.. Mirror them

tremulant
11-16-2008, 08:54 PM
Dsub exchange.
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e357/LockDown2/CCF17112008_00000.jpg

just me, but that extension to the far left is making the "D" look alot like an "M"

also, the way the D,S and U touch isn't working for me either.

Baron
11-16-2008, 08:58 PM
Your D also looks kinda like a semi-welded W. Like Wasters W's

-Wings-
11-16-2008, 08:59 PM
Just you.. :P I cant pick out a m even with you saying it. I think you guys just like picking on me :p:D. But yeah Its a d fellows :)!

Dose.onek
11-16-2008, 09:12 PM
liking it wings... you just gave me some ideas for a crew peice..

Desipher
11-16-2008, 09:13 PM
wrong thread but o well
http://i33.photobucket.com/albums/d99/-syke-/Picture104-1.jpg

Dose.onek
11-16-2008, 09:14 PM
im feelen it.. gave me an idea for a crew peice

-Wings-
11-16-2008, 09:23 PM
Is that all you can say :P? And desipher, wrong thread.. Thats dope as fuck.

CreetchaFeetcha22
11-16-2008, 09:27 PM
http://img505.imageshack.us/img505/5678/sellthistruck008va1.jpg[/URL][/IMG]
http://img266.imageshack.us/img266/5347/sellthistruck007ow2.jpg[/URL][/IMG]
http://img505.imageshack.us/img505/7295/sellthistruck006px1.jpg[/URL][/IMG]
http://img266.imageshack.us/img266/2372/bs011ye3.jpg[/URL][/IMG]

Dose.onek
11-16-2008, 09:29 PM
Is that all you can say :P? And desipher, wrong thread.. Thats dope as fuck.

no i clicked post n it didnt redirect me but said i made a dupelicate post.. so i guess it was just a firefox problem...

MareImbrium
11-16-2008, 09:53 PM
http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/picture.php?albumid=174&pictureid=1099

http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/picture.php?albumid=174&pictureid=1100

Monster- im diggin those characters. they remind me of characters ive seen else where. not saying your bitin i just cant put my finger on what it reminds me off all in all there sweet.
Dank- your simps are good just seems like your struggling to find your style for your letters work on it and find something that feels right for you not just for the crits and work on that. tis good to see you really trying to progress. means my efforts arnt pointless as your getting more comfortable with writing dank.
i wouldnt normally say shit as im toy and no ego but dank wanted crits and no response. so leave or take anything i say as my opinion which is worth nothing.

garbage down tha way
11-16-2008, 09:55 PM
I dont have a scanner or a camera. :(

http://i15.photobucket.com/albums/a390/lunchdrunk/reoh.jpg
marimbruimism- dont do handstyle pieces, they never look good, ever. just do simples son.

pbar- dont make your bars get fatter as they go down, just keep them the same width, also try an uppercase A.

swore- its visually appealing but some structure could be better not to mention many extentions are uneccesary.

libre- i like all that.

Duped
11-16-2008, 10:02 PM
balanced: the c's on the second cache are kinda weird with that extension on the end

some stuff.. just started
http://i195.photobucket.com/albums/z278/bendyarms45/stuff/IMG_9223.jpg
http://i195.photobucket.com/albums/z278/bendyarms45/stuff/IMG_9220.jpg

bump for crits please

balance42020
11-16-2008, 10:32 PM
you need to work on letter structure, i cant really tell thats an A at all... the only reason i know that says ALSO is because of the one above it.

but it looks like your trying to be creative and original so props... but work on it

balance42020
11-16-2008, 10:35 PM
you need to work on letter structure, i cant really tell thats an A at all... the only reason i know that says ALSO is because of the one above it.

but it looks like your trying to be creative and original so props... but work on it

peace89
11-16-2008, 11:02 PM
MareImbrium- fucking loving the first one... dope as fuck
the second one need some work but really liking your style

MareImbrium
11-17-2008, 04:26 AM
http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/picture.php?albumid=174&pictureid=1101

just messing bout inbetween working on simps.

Queezy
11-17-2008, 06:03 AM
Also- Start out simple man, just think about what you'll be painting once you get your drwing down, simples...4 now at least. The throwie could use some work on every letter, try to balance out each side of the letter so it has more flow to it. Take your time.
^^^^^^
I like the style, what's it say though? Sahlpa? haha
http://i133.photobucket.com/albums/q68/JuicinIt/QuickQueazySketch.jpg
Cant spell Bombing...And all my handstyles suck.

MareImbrium
11-17-2008, 06:40 AM
haha yeah it became a little sketchy in translation after i finished .
meant to say slothrop.all in all just messing about with styles finding something i like or that works.

Queezy
11-17-2008, 06:44 AM
The style is cool so i'm sure if you made your letters more in place it would look just as dope.

tempest
11-17-2008, 08:40 AM
deka - nice. u unattached your k. looking much better. id like 2 see one that wasnt all slanted like. now c about less overlap in your ka. i really like the n on that pice on the right. the othe letters ar meh. the r i would say you hav another go at. the top peice is nice nd simple though whatever the second letter is, its a different style so it doesnt fit and its not very legible. but look real nice. when you hav time, work on your d.

Rasr-its good you got simpler and got rid of the crazy slant. i realize what you were trying to do with the red in the last peice but it just looks toy. uve gotten rid of the unnecessary overlap. huge improvemtnt from before. keep playing with simples and mayb drop the 3d for now. i dont add 3d unless i need it 2 add umph to the peice. you can crank out a lot more simples if you're not sketching the 3d each time.

skin-do you have two s's? or is that a huge extension. either way, clarify it. good structure for everything els tho. just some things. the square on te bottom of the k has to go. same with the break in the n. the cracks in the s and i need to b reworked. look at some google images of sidewalk cracks. the i almost has it, the first s is a crack fail. and the bg needs to go as well.

msko- "I Think it's a lil tooo simple for me..." yeh he has the idea. take a page out of rasr's book and go back to simples bro.

mmmburgers - Follow the reaper. and nice handstyle

PRK-new 2 graff. keybord letters. all that stuff. don't connct your letters, not now.

monster- the red nd silver needs work. alot of it. the black silver is alrite but your s and r arent. the characters are cool and the bombing letters in the first few pics are your best letters. my favorite part of the whole thing is the simple handy at the bottom. i wuld sugest you just work on your redsilver one.

cache-bars bro.

sank- it looks good 2 me, but im a punk ass toy. it doesnt look like your using bars and that throws your entire letter structure off. the hand is kick ass though. the nail coming off the thumb is kinda odd.

wone-dont be an ass "be honist do you lik tht r you prod of it kus it sucks lik not being mean it haribel .." your a noob ass toy as well. this is the toy forum. i prefer his work 2 urs. so stfu.

duped- sketch....letters.....like......your.....keyboard!

Baron- "And Tempest, stop crying, 3 people gave you crits including myself, don't get all pissy, not everyone gets a whole page of crits." didnt refresh the page cuz im a dumass. looked like i dint get any crits. ty for urs. id like 2 c some of ur work man. i havent seen any of ur pictures......

dsub-u looks like a 4. and the extension the d doesnt look like an extension. makes it look like wsub

pbar-not feelin it. at all. and i cant figure out y. u used bars and there simple. it just looks weird. try mixing up the placement a little. everything after the first one just loses it though.

mareimbrium-siiiiiiiiiick. dude can u help me out? my handy is weak as fuck bro. i loveit. the colors work 2gether so welll.in terms of constructive critiscism get rid of the black squiggles on the bottom of the first flick. and rotate it counter clock wise ;). your peice isnt as strong as the hand stlye though. the s needs to be at the same level as the other letters. and the letter before the p (nother p?) is illegible (to me). keep at it bro.

garbage - buy yourself a camera. or learn to use ms paint.

queezy-why did i bother crtting u last stime? did u listen to me? use bars bro. fix your e, you can look at other artist's e's for inspiration (not for biting). my favorite letter of yours is the u. but please please please use bars. i see u saw my comment on your handstyle :P. develop it bro. i destroy around 40 odd pages riting dank/dask and mine still sucks balls. just go nuts.






i think.....thats everyone (unless u didnt hand out crits).

k. sketched this before i saw the advice about changing up my n and k. and who sed i should sketch simples? i thot i was sketching simples? meh.

http://img116.imageshack.us/img116/8533/dscn4375cz1.jpg (http://imageshack.us)
http://img116.imageshack.us/img116/dscn4375cz1.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img116/dscn4375cz1.jpg/1/)

lemme kno if i dint crit u.

jupsick
11-17-2008, 12:45 PM
http://xs133.xs.to/xs133/08471/1117081927232.jpg
crits?

tempest
11-17-2008, 12:51 PM
crit others

jupsick
11-17-2008, 01:14 PM
every post i posted i crited others
and last 3 times i posted i didnt get even one crit -_-

tempest
11-17-2008, 01:28 PM
*sighs* i shuldnt but.....
says mebzter right? i like the M. the flare on the rite leg adds pop to it. i like the sketchy fill too. mayb cuz it reminds me of spray paint? i dont kno. just looks good. after the m the letters loose their insane steez. it doent mean they're bad. they're better developed than mine by a long shot. its just that your m is far more advanced than the rest of the peice.
ok, things to fix: the slime on the right of your m and your t. from the top bit to the flared leg. just take it out. with the bottom e and r the circular top is hella different from the other letters. its just a diff style and it looks strange. i like the first e except for the sticky out bit at the end. mite look good in a more advanced peice as a prelude to a larger extension.
other than that its pretty sweet. reminds me of Eack. again, i really like the ballpoint fill. and i would tell you to get rid of the drips coming of your letters, but i think someone else will.

EDIT:forgot to say, i also like the solid white outline, works well with the smoggy cloud shit as a contrasting element.

garbage down tha way
11-17-2008, 01:52 PM
Tempest you can't afford to be cocky yet..

seywhat
11-17-2008, 01:55 PM
word^^^

jupsick, you should do a peice goin left to right. all your stuff i see is up and down, you got decent letters though, keep it up for sure

jupsick
11-17-2008, 01:56 PM
geez dude thats the biggest crit i ever got here XD
anyways
hmm
the m most developed? dont think so...but all the other letters lame true XD
hmm well tnx yea and the drips uhg i dont know how to do drips ts like 2nd time tryin so ummm ok
well tnx for the crit mate

whahappen?
11-17-2008, 01:59 PM
@wings

Hmm U got nice letters and a good style but I think U should use some colors man and it will be heeeeeelll yes :)


@RasaR

I Think it's a lil tooo simple for me don't like the style and work on the outline...

Mine:

http://img514.imageshack.us/img514/4159/image009mr5.jpg (http://img514.imageshack.us/my.php?image=image009mr5.jpg)
http://img514.imageshack.us/img514/image009mr5.jpg/1/w640.png (http://g.imageshack.us/img514/image009mr5.jpg/1/)
that song is fucking creepy
like in a good way, but shit
neways
hands are pretty bad, the last d on died looks like a backwards r with a broken leg

ESKiMO2
11-17-2008, 02:01 PM
Crits before I color it?
Canibus (Mic Club)

http://i33.tinypic.com/11gka39.jpg

I'm getting rid of the quotes.

Jupsick- It's pretty nice for a freestyle.
Dank- Change the N and K. They still need work.
Queezy- I'm not really feeling it.
MareImbrium- SAVE THAT IN YOUR RECORDS and when you get really good letter structure look back to it and use the style (not completely).

Dewster_OnE
11-17-2008, 02:29 PM
yoo the style is dope, its coming along nicely, you lost it on the u and s
maybe collab sometime?

Dewster_OnE
11-17-2008, 02:32 PM
dank- personally i think you should thinkin about switching up your style completely, seems like your stuck on these letters that look exactly the same, maybe you should experiment with different styles and techniques until you develope one of your own

-Wings-
11-17-2008, 02:49 PM
Dsub exchange.
http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e357/LockDown2/CCF17112008_00000.jpg

Bump :)!

Dewster_OnE
11-17-2008, 03:19 PM
crits
http://i51.photobucket.com/albums/f367/Dewster88/161553.jpg

ESKiMO2
11-17-2008, 04:34 PM
That flows real well but the a kind of interrupts the flow. Try to make the A out of 3 bars instead of 2 with one bent.

Dewster_OnE
11-17-2008, 05:28 PM
i just havent figured out what to do with the bottom of the legs on the a

ESKiMO2
11-17-2008, 05:35 PM
http://fc51.deviantart.com/fs38/f/2008/322/f/7/Canibus_2_by_Rhino_fish.jpg

Dewster- You should try making the left leg go into the N.

Dewster_OnE
11-17-2008, 05:48 PM
you shoulda fixed the u and s =[
http://i51.photobucket.com/albums/f367/Dewster88/184409.jpg

NoCanControl
11-17-2008, 06:27 PM
dewster im the only kansr around here....


anddddddddddd....

dank . stfu. and get straight bar letters. >:o

eskimo. your a looks like a h.

ESKiMO2
11-17-2008, 06:39 PM
Yeah, I thought about connecting those bars. Seems like a good idea :/

NoCanControl
11-17-2008, 06:48 PM
Yeah, I thought about connecting those bars.

WELL THINK AGAIN. hahah. jk man

b SQUARED 08
11-17-2008, 07:39 PM
Eskimo: Looks pretty good overall, but as already said, connect that left portion of the A so that it isn't mistaken as an H, and make your U and S a bit bigger to match proportions.

Dewster: Make your C's look more identical and something about that R doesn't look right to me... can't put my finger on it...

Third sketch of my new name:
http://i86.photobucket.com/albums/k98/BBp8ntballaLP508/VideoSnapshot-4-2.jpg

klic
11-17-2008, 08:16 PM
exchange with smooth
http://i430.photobucket.com/albums/qq26/klic1/IMG000207.jpg

dewster - your letters look so fresh, keep it up, the only thing i would change is maybe tilting the right bar on your n more to the right so its not connected to the rest of your n (if you know what im saying)

eskimo - that looks sick except im not really feeling the long ass bar on your B

wings - thats probably one of your best pieces ive seen, cant say im feeling the attachment on your d though

crits?

SANEKONE
11-17-2008, 10:38 PM
eskimo... nice simple. i like it. keep it up. B and N needs some work though.
klic... almost on the right track try changing your bars up and bending more.
saje... same thing
Dewster.. im feeling some of your letters. but that A E R and W need a buuunch more work.. try to keep them in the same family and not look so foreign to the rest.... pluss work on your spacing.. and add 3D that Kills looks sick except the K and the S is kind of out in space..

bored at work.
15 SK throwies
and 2 SANEK simples.
more junk up tonight.
maybe a rough sketch of a Christmas piece ill hopefully paint.
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y63/ByronAVC/SDC11377.jpg

hal.cyon
11-17-2008, 11:51 PM
http://img440.imageshack.us/img440/6258/001sw6.jpg

sanek, hard to tell from the photo.
klic, good simples, but your letters never really seem to flow. work on that i guess.
saje, nice simple.
dewster, looks good, maybe work on the r as stated earlier.
eskimo, i like that one. the color are understated but look nice.

SAEK
11-18-2008, 12:19 AM
eskimo - not feelin the top of the b either
sanek- those look dope
klic- make the a in DOAP straight and lose the bump on the e in DOPE

ok heres my garbo

http://i36.tinypic.com/2czptg8.jpg

SANEKONE
11-18-2008, 01:02 AM
welp....
better pictures.
crits welcomed and appreciated.

SK throwies :)
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y63/ByronAVC/SDC11378.jpg

http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y63/ByronAVC/SDC11379.jpg

Christmas ROUGH sketch..
needs a bit of work.
should i make the tips of the main bar on my E round so it naturally looks more like a candy cane?

http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y63/ByronAVC/SDC11380.jpg

what the N should have came out like.

http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y63/ByronAVC/SDC11382.jpg

MareImbrium
11-18-2008, 03:14 AM
Tempest- thanks for the crit but in regards to handstyle mine is pretty fucked only thing i really noticed that worked was when i held my wrist angled like i broke it haha which kinda let all letters flow and made it a little less controlled so i could explore how to write . that probably doesnt make any sense but to eacch his own just keep writing is my main advice.
Saje- i liked the first piece you did alot more not quite sure why the only thing i can point out is the overhang of the s on the A makes it seem a littlle to squished compared to the other overhangs.

just messing bout as usual.
http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/picture.php?albumid=174&pictureid=1103

<J-one>
11-18-2008, 05:00 AM
dewster- that slow definenlty outshines the cancer in my opinion. looks good though

saje - nice simples but work on proportions

halcyon - there's somethin about your layering of the M, E, and S that just look too squished to me, spread em out a bit or something.

sanek - i dig that throw up man, and your christmas peice, i think the E and K look a bit small and the N looks like its a bit far away from the A. there's just a little too much space there i think. Also the second N is def. better.

mare - i'm down with those faces. i'd like to see them with a piece instead of a hanstyle next to them please :)


my newest, will update you with colour as soon as possible....
crits?
http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3181/3040067615_9267b5b6d5.jpg?v=0

AntEater
11-18-2008, 07:01 AM
Times 2 - Im diggin the layout its looking pretty tight but lose the bits off the T. Other then that tight shit.
Sane- Theres somethin bothering me about the extension of the a. But I feel you on the N.
Keep up that shit.
Mare- Diggin that right there. Handstyle needs a lil practice.

Some shit ive been workin on for a bit.

http://i32.photobucket.com/albums/d39/Lithium_theory/asikcombo1.jpg

http://i32.photobucket.com/albums/d39/Lithium_theory/asikbw1.jpg

Crits plz.

AntEater
11-18-2008, 07:02 AM
double post.

SANEKONE
11-18-2008, 10:29 AM
ASIK- the first piece is crap.. sorry. but the second one has potential... just keep drawing it over and over and over.. and once you've done that do it more and try to bend things differently.. trial and error really.. try making all the bars on your A connect too. it doesn't really flow with the rest of the style. and separate your 2 bars on your K make the top one at and angle.

peace89
11-18-2008, 11:03 AM
sanekone- loving the pink outline

wone121
11-18-2008, 12:56 PM
(riot) um lissen bicth ***** im juss critin lik im not tryin to be roudf to the kid but lik its garbo nd fck you *****