Blackbooks

[cocacola]

http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2497/3956887667_bf253898ba.jpghttp://farm3.static.flickr.com/2464/3957666464_c7670195e0.jpg
http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3425/3950433198_9942f6267b.jpghttp://farm4.static.flickr.com/3495/3949654499_2e0dded6d1.jpg
http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3506/3942525627_d961bdea2c.jpg

[Schizz]

I did actually, I just spent more than 5 minutes on it... Thanks anyway.

[Graffyk]

taz, the first one is good. nice simple letters with a nice shine efffect. Just lose that red stuff at the top.

the rest needs some work. The bars arent consistent width and some the letters are too far apart. The exodus at the bottom is pretty good. I would just say bring the top part of the S up. it doesnt really match with the rest.

cocacola that shit is fresh. I dont see anything wrong with them

[EST2007]

http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2497/3956887667_bf253898ba.jpghttp://farm3.static.flickr.com/2464/3957666464_c7670195e0.jpg


dude u got arrows coming outta nowhere. arrows should be used as extensions of letters to balance out a piece

[BigBlueViolence]

That 1line hand is pretty weak, Zarb.
you should bring the leg around the other way so it doesn't look like a retarded star.

http://i37.tinypic.com/i1i5h0.jpg

[Schizz]

Cheers bloke.

- cokacola your characters are great but the other dude is right, they arows look like kind of an after thought.

http://i108.photobucket.com/albums/n8/Zatoichi_01/P1000875.jpg

Simpley..simple ..simpleton...

[-Empty-Can-]

http://i713.photobucket.com/albums/ww131/pics4bscience/MIchael-Random-pics721.jpg

Bump for crits.

Taz- THe first one is ok but i don't really like the details. THe rest are arent very good but i like the purple one. the last two you posted are pretty good.

cocacola - those are nice. the characters are pretty good

[STFUPPERCUT]

Bunch of shitty webcam flix of my BB

http://i27.photobucket.com/albums/c171/m0rph3d/graff/Picture021x.jpg

http://i27.photobucket.com/albums/c171/m0rph3d/graff/Picture020x.jpg

http://i27.photobucket.com/albums/c171/m0rph3d/graff/Picture019x.jpg

http://i27.photobucket.com/albums/c171/m0rph3d/graff/Picture018x.jpg

http://i27.photobucket.com/albums/c171/m0rph3d/graff/Picture017x.jpg

http://i27.photobucket.com/albums/c171/m0rph3d/graff/Picture016x.jpg

http://i27.photobucket.com/albums/c171/m0rph3d/graff/Picture015x.jpg


Bump.

3rd one down was the result of a night with a bag of mushies.
ill get a better pic when i got a good camera.

[cocacola]

actually the arrows. i thought up of makin them come off the outline instead of the letters cus idk where to put them on the letters

[EST2007]

actually the arrows. i thought up of makin them come off the outline instead of the letters cus idk where to put them on the letters

if you don't know where to put them, then don't use them. misuse of arrows and extensions can/will make a decent piece lame

[remos]

first sketch in a while crits are welcome
http://i255.photobucket.com/albums/hh139/remos905/ATT00003.jpg

[-Empty-Can-]

Its a small pic kinda hard to say anything

[remos]

i know my phone takes small pics i cant get it bigger

[suparjafar]

taz- getting better i like it stay simple.

havent written in a few days, no longer using guidelines. halp,crits anything

[drOping]

Taz- the plain block one with no color except for the orange outline is fucking cleannn
Snaw- Dude, your getting better...the top one the S N and A go real well together, the W is close too. Keep it up!

[b SQUARED 08]

Taz: (first post) the top pic is pretty good, but work on cleaning up your coloring a bit. The letters are simple, so there isn't much to crit. The orange one in the second pic would be better if your lines were cleaner. The purple one in the third pic isn't bad either. The letters in the fifth pic look good other than the additional bar on the left side of the E and how the top of the S curves inward. The 3d fill needs some work, but the 3d itself looks pretty good. The backround seems to be a bit over your head in terms of style, but just try to ease your way into that the same way you'd progress letters- start simpler. (second post) The one with the red forcefield looks good. That one is your best. The rest I didn't mention need a lot of work.

Empty Can: What's that say? STOT? Go simpler and stay away from cursive lettering for now since it has so many curves. You need to work on straight letters before you can move into that territory. The 3d looks pretty good though. It's never good when you have to be asked what it says in this thread.

STFUPPERCUT: It's really hard to tell from the quality of those pics, but from what I can see, it looks good. Come back with some better pics if you want some real crits.

Playing around with these letters for a battle on another forum:
http://i86.photobucket.com/albums/k98/BBp8ntballaLP508/Photo51.jpg

[Loki X Sho]

not bad dude, I like your R and the way you colored it.

[Queezy]

Serk- Way to keep it clean and not try to do to much. Letters are pretty good, just keep sketching and getting better. Also work on spray paint control so you can eventually be able to paint this almost as clean.

[drOping]

Ya the serk is lookin clean cut

http://img42.imageshack.us/img42/7245/1003101.jpg

Tried to keep it basik with the colors, as for the letters trying to stay simple with some flow.

[Queezy]

Slek?- Not feeling the upward drip on it. It kind of feels like the sle are unified in a not so great way and the k is just chilling on its own.

http://i133.photobucket.com/albums/q68/JuicinIt/Image006-1.jpg
http://i133.photobucket.com/albums/q68/JuicinIt/Image011.jpg
http://i133.photobucket.com/albums/q68/JuicinIt/Image007.jpg

[FrEEk_nine-o-fizzle]

http://i15.photobucket.com/albums/a364/hedbanger/Picture.jpg
ayo taz man looking good...keep working with simple styles.
sleck, try and do smaller, less awkward connections, if any. arsen keep doing what your doing.
so how bout some crits? im gonna ink and color it soon but i suck at fills and dont know what do do with it

[sdroW]

http://i351.photobucket.com/albums/q459/clenetics/092709_183100.jpgSchizz on ur top one you should buy a blender marker to blend the colors and make it flow better. Also if your not trying to watch out for the black outline running. Like be careful when you fill in and shit or ull like make it all runny and shit

[cose1]

I am just getting back into graff after about 1.5 years of not actively painting and i'm not yet where i was before. I'm not really feeling this sketch so far, but what do you guys think?

http://i24.photobucket.com/albums/c36/schonevelds/piece28-09-09.jpg

I think the s and e have part that are disproportionate, the c is a bit fat and i've never been good at o's.

I'll work on it some more tomorrow.

[sdroW]

Cose: It looks good, it will look better when you erase though. (obviously) But like the o doesnt really look like an o but it sort of does. Like connect the bottom of it maybe. Also that C is super fat at the bottom. it doesnt look bad but you might wanna be careful or whatever. you should go with this though it could look sick when ur done if u do it well.

[cose1]

i agree, the o looks a bit like a d to me and i'll make the c a bit thinner at the bottom.
Thanks sdroW!

edit: also i wasn't too sure about the positioning and connection between the s and e, mainly at the bottom with the two parallel lines.

[ryser]

New names ive been playing around with
http://img143.imageshack.us/img143/6643/photo28b.jpg
http://img82.imageshack.us/img82/2567/photo29t.jpg
http://img82.imageshack.us/img82/426/photo30.jpg
I also was using some new prismas im not used to so some of my lines may seem a little choppy
Crits?

cose - looks like you got the right idea for lettering structuring, and you seem to realize what could make it look better
serk - looking good, nice and clean. do you write LEIN as well? because ive seen a lein that has very very similar letter style to that.

[FrEEk_nine-o-fizzle]

yo critts? ^^^^^^

[Schizz]

Arden, That's cool mate, maybe try putting some of your biuldings at an angle as aposed to a straight up end elevation. City blocks are messed up. Probably be more fitting in a graff piece too, haha.


freek nine-o-fizzel, That's a pretty sweet outline, Just make sure you don't let your letters vere off and get bigger and bigger as they go. Don't be afraid to draw a straight line under that fucker to keep him going at an even hight. Maybe have a look at that if provided the pic isn't just at an angle then fill it in and post it up, it's tight.


Yeah, amp, i hear you about the markers. I've only got some cheap shit to work with, suppose it's probably a good thing, it stops my going mental with the fills. Your sketch is comming on there man, I'd maybe tidy up that force field and make it a bit thinner. Remember to keep the right hand bar in that A matched up and maybe bring the P in just a little closer, kinda looks like he's just out there by himself.


Cose, that sketch is looking good so far man, let's see it finnished, what are you thinking about for a fill?


Ryser, That top one is my favourite, looks like it took you a bit longer than the others too, looks like you have a nice champfered effect going there. The colours contract pretty good. I don't like the name nyber so much, maybe it's just me but it doesn't flow aswell. The splatter effect on the middle one is nice too but maybe try doing somthing to highlight the letters a bit more? Same for the bottom one, the colours are all too similar. You have like blue, purple and like, aquatic green, you need one of those to be contrast the others. Like, bright yellow or some neuclear reactive green, somthing brighter. Still clean shit though.

http://i108.photobucket.com/albums/n8/Zatoichi_01/P1000879.jpg
http://i108.photobucket.com/albums/n8/Zatoichi_01/P1000881.jpg

Some groggy little mistakes and shit here, now that i look haha. Any crits, or ideas? I'm haveing a shitty time thinking of fills just now. Am I better just leaving them for now or what?

[EST2007]

that cake is solid. dont worry about fills. get ur letters down first

[-Empty-Can-]

Empty Can: What's that say? STOT? Go simpler and stay away from cursive lettering for now since it has so many curves. You need to work on straight letters before you can move into that territory. The 3d looks pretty good though. It's never good when you have to be asked what it says in this thread.


Yeah thats what i write. I have a few simple block styles. I made this style like 3 months ago and thats the first time i drew it since. Personaly i like it alot and think it looks good. But everyone is gonna say their piece is good:p

some crits: droping - i think it looks good but the K is away from the other letters. theres a little gap. and the other letters are slightly slanted and i think the K should be slanted too

queezy - looks good. nice background

cose- nice sketch.except maybe round out your O because it looks like a D. id like to see it finished

Nyser the first one is the best

[sdroW]

Schizz: thanks a million for that comment about the forcefield. Helps a shitton especially because that is like my 2nd one. With ur little white shiny parts be careful with how they look and shit and keep em balanced. just be careful with all the white shit. They look good as fuck all 3 of them. In the green taz one you have. The a-z shadow and stuff is different than the t-a. Like how it falls below on one of them and shit.

[suparjafar]

nyser/ryser, nice handstyle on the first one. i think its also the best in general. dont really like that splatter effect though on i think the second one im too lazy to go back up and look.

crits, should i move on to things besides keyboard-straight letters yet? or keep practicing this..?

[cocacola]

space each letter out a lil and make em all the same lengh makes the pics bigger sheese
http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3454/3963250649_fdc334419e.jpg

[Queezy]

http://i133.photobucket.com/albums/q68/JuicinIt/QueezyQZBasrPage.jpg
bottom right is the homie

[KidReny!]

all these on this page look nice except urs snaw practice more with bars

[Queezy]

Snaw it's very sloppy, it should look EXACTLY or very close to your keyboard letters. Except with a drop shadow, or 3-d. Which is something you'll have to work on to do well. I still haven't got 3-d down perfect and I've been writing a year and a half.

[Sucre]

Wassgood everyone - im new to the forum.

Been writin a couple of weeks posted these for some crits:

http://i38.tinypic.com/23jixhf.jpg

http://i38.tinypic.com/2s6xcmp.jpg


whattayall think?

[Graffyk]

queezy, nice letters, i just dont like the huge gap in the middle.

cocacola, like it. just that part of the S at the bottom seems to sharp while all the other extensions are more blocky.

cose. nice letters. Just thin out the C or fatten up the S and E. I feel like the S and E are a bit too far apart. But i like to notice the little things so maybe it's just me.






http://img21.imageshack.us/img21/7081/p1000524r.jpg
Yes i know reallly messy. I only had a Pen on me and did this in like 15 minutes.


http://img25.imageshack.us/img25/1296/p1000525v.jpg
Still need to work on my Rs


http://img42.imageshack.us/img42/678/p1000526e.jpg
Some characters i drew up. Once again, only had a pen on me (which worked nicely for shading them) so it's kinda messy.

[suparjafar]

Snaw it's very sloppy, it should look EXACTLY or very close to your keyboard letters. Except with a drop shadow, or 3-d. Which is something you'll have to work on to do well. I still haven't got 3-d down perfect and I've been writing a year and a half.

i know what you mean, i was originally told to use guidelines to construct my letters to make them proportional. is the structure there, any better?

[StayHyE]

http://i33.tinypic.com/2uoq2wp.jpg

[Graffyk]

queezy, nice letters, i just dont like the huge gap in the middle.

cocacola, like it. just that part of the S at the bottom seems to sharp while all the other extensions are more blocky.

cose. nice letters. Just thin out the C or fatten up the S and E. I feel like the S and E are a bit too far apart. But i like to notice the little things so maybe it's just me.






http://img21.imageshack.us/img21/7081/p1000524r.jpg
Yes i know reallly messy. I only had a Pen on me and did this in like 15 minutes.


http://img25.imageshack.us/img25/1296/p1000525v.jpg
Still need to work on my Rs


http://img42.imageshack.us/img42/678/p1000526e.jpg
Some characters i drew up. Once again, only had a pen on me (which worked nicely for shading them) so it's kinda messy.

bottom page bump

and delae the D is looking much better.

[UpstateHate585]

http://i35.tinypic.com/2iswo69.jpg

[-Empty-Can-]

Viral -those characters are really nice. THe first piece is pretty bad. Your lines are different sized and it looks like you tried to make lines go random places. THe second one is better but make the top of your R even to your V. And lose the curve on the top of the R

upstate -i like that stlye but i don't like the black line going through the middle. The 3D on the right side of the O looks off

[UpstateHate585]

yeah i always have trouble with o's lol. and i meant to do a red line or something but then started with the wrong marker. lol. o well

[Black Flag]

bottom page bump

and delae the D is looking much better.

You may become a good artist, but i can promise you won't get anywhere in graff if you keep focusing on coloring, fills, effects, and characs like you are doing.

Your ignoring the most fundamental and important part: letter structure.

Take any color away from your "pieces" and you have complete shit. Honestly, all you need to start is a pencil. Work on your tag and some simps.

[Graffyk]

alright. i'll stop coloring them for now, thanks for the advice.

[drOping]

http://img29.imageshack.us/img29/226/1003102f.jpg

INSO-I like everything about that!

[cose1]

think i'm done, happy with it but not 100%.

http://img25.imageshack.us/img25/6727/piece290909.jpg

[LeaksOne]

too much dead space. make your C and E closer to the OS. and even out your bars.

[cose1]

decided to ditch that e as i thought it was a bit weird and too similar to the s. think i'm done now, atleast for tonight.

http://img59.imageshack.us/img59/6727/piece290909.jpg]

[LeaksOne]

your e is funny lookin now. and when you pencil sketch draw light first so you wont have any pencil marks on the finished piece.

[Schizz]

Snaw, that's looking ok, mate. Get comfy doin' those then maybe try adding a 1 point perspective 3D or somthing and you'll have some nice block letters. Know what I mean by that yeah? Like, when you mark a point and trace all your 3D back to that single point. But yeah, keep doing what you're doing.

Delae, that first one you posted looks alright for an experiment and stuff looks like it's make a good handy y'know. I much preffer that second one you have there though. The letters look a bit more solid and defined. Just be carefull with the fills, like on the yellow letters, the green blocks could do with being a bit cleaner.

Viral, all that's looking good. I'd go and maybe re-do that top one when you have a bit more time, it could be a nice piece. The second one is just all around solid, I might have made the horizontal bar in the L a little shorter myself but again, that might just be opinion, haha. The characters are looking good too, reminds me of that creepy shit Hera does.

Inso, that's good, but I would have put the large group of bubbles in the same place but on top, just to kenp of balance it a bit more. Not sure what else to say there.

Slek, that vertical handy is fucking nice man. Watch that sivler outline, did you use a valve marker or somthing for it? You have a nice kinda grimey thing going there.

Cose, you could try making the back of the E more vertical then the top morizontal bar would kind of balance out with the hook on the C. If that doesn't make any sence ignore that shit, haha.

http://i108.photobucket.com/albums/n8/Zatoichi_01/P1000882.jpg
Ignore that bottom right hand shit, that never really developed beyond an idea.

[La Coka Nostra]

too many toys use those huge quotation marks on their tags.
it looks horrible.

the most important thing is having a solid handstyle.
from there, you can thicken the bars of your handstyle, and you'll have a simple piece.
then you can go from there with different styles or whatever.

[StayHyE]

http://i38.tinypic.com/28tvq6o.jpg

better picture

[DUNSY]

taz i really like the one with the orange outline, not really much to crit on it but i wouldn't have bended the lines of the top of the letters

cose if everyone would listen to crits like you do everyone would improve way faster, nice work like the letters and i like your second "e" best

slek i think you overdid it with those silver big drips

upstate the second "leg" of your N should come a little lower, other than that i'm loving it

grafyk i totally agree with black flag
- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -
trying out a new name: nova

http://i36.tinypic.com/1et1qv.jpg

http://i36.tinypic.com/iyo0ih.jpg

http://i37.tinypic.com/307rw20.jpg

[SirBigO]

http://img25.imageshack.us/img25/7865/img0002hr.jpg
http://img2.imageshack.us/img2/4870/img0001vb.jpg

tips or pointers?

[SirBigO]

sorry for double post

[suparjafar]

dunsy dny at the bottom of second one is solid.

[Gam]

Getting back into graff with a new name,
Crits please.
ill crit you guys also once i get onto my computer.
http://i33.tinypic.com/69kh0z.jpg
Very Bad one i think hte brown shading in hte back looks horid.
but crits anyone?

[<<Fathem>>]

New to the game, I've got a tag (i think) and a first piece to show....anyhow, here they are, straight from my blackbook.

[PegCityBoy]

New to the game, I've got a tag (i think) and a first piece to show....anyhow, here they are, straight from my blackbook.

jeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeesus christ
don't mean to be rude but i'll be blatant it's awful check out the new to graff thread

drop all arrows an go simple

[suparjafar]

fathem, lose arrows, learn about lettering/bars, go simple.

anyways

crits, should i develop a style yet or stick to writing basic letters...either way im staying simple until i get basics...when should i develop a throw?

by the way i know i fucked up on second w bad and s is a lil big and comp...

[funhouseXcast]

snaw stick to basics, you're improving though.

[Gam]

New to the game, I've got a tag (i think) and a first piece to show....anyhow, here they are, straight from my blackbook.
If your just starting try to start out simple, i like your style so far, just work on your tag its a little sloppy.

Snaw- ill help you out and give you advice this weekend or later but so far so guud.

[BigBlueViolence]

This page makes me cry.

[Gam]

This page makes me cry.
? are badness dont amaze u?

[BigBlueViolence]

It amazes me as much as your grammar does.

[rewz]

http://i37.tinypic.com/2ld7toh.jpg

critssss

[<<Fathem>>]

well, i kinda thought thats the feedback id get...just figured id give it a shot. thanks for the help, ill be postin in a while for more help.

[<<Fathem>>]

OH and gam, thx for at least being respectful....hope that youll help me out a little more in the futuer?

[Gam]

OH and gam, thx for at least being respectful....hope that youll help me out a little more in the futuer?
Dont worry about it, just keep trying, remeber you cant get worse if you practice. Just keep posting your stuff.

[funhouseXcast]

http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/picture.php?albumid=294&pictureid=2528

i tried hard. i posted in intermediate but i feel like it's in between here and there.

[Graffyk]

Sir go way simpler. The S on the first one is hurtin. it gets way too skinny in the middle.

Gam use bars to make your letters. They go from really skinny to really fat. and i can tell you didnt use bars for your letter structure.

Fathem, what mostly everyone says, go simpler and start off really basic. your lines are also a bit sketchy and choppy. Someone told me to use your wrist as a hinge to draw cleaner and straighter lines.

Snaw you're really working on it a low eh? Glad to see you keep trying over and over. But you should fatten up the S

keep it up

[l3monade]

gam- use bars, and cover up some white space, and lurk some threads to get leter structure inspiration keep it simple though

[408Bomber]

http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/picture.php?albumid=294&pictureid=2528

i tried hard. i posted in intermediate but i feel like it's in between here and there.
dude that is raw seriously... don't post in this thread lmao... that is pretty tight.

http://c1.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images02/25/l_a0c34f0ec01e43f580b3c8ec5133cb54.jpg
I suck with simples. >.>!

P.s. any bay writers in sj pm me.

[<<Fathem>>]

Ok, so I've worked on it for a while, I think this is an improvement...but ill see what you guys have to say...

[suparjafar]

dude write straight letters same size write your name over and over until u get a style developing.

[<<Fathem>>]

suparjafar: yeah, thats what i did for the past like hour haha....ok, so basicly your sayin that my letters should be an equal size to make this look better? And as for the style, whats making it look like, well there isnt any? (in your opinion)

[suparjafar]

for now, yeah and i really dont get the second part..lol but im gonna guess you mean developing a handstyle..you just gotta keep practicing and writing it over and over and it'll start to tweak over time and just keep writing it and you'll develop a style i dont know how to explain it

[Graffyk]

I dont know too much about handstyles, but yours is decent. The A doesnt look too much like an A rather than a N. try to point the top of it more. Also the Arrow on the left is totally unnecessary.

[KJay]

http://img59.imageshack.us/img59/5761/renob.png

[suparjafar]

^use bars
trying to improve...

sticking to basics
crits

[BigBlueViolence]

Lol, ***** said use bars.

[408Bomber]

dude that is raw seriously... don't post in this thread lmao... that is pretty tight.

http://c1.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images02/25/l_a0c34f0ec01e43f580b3c8ec5133cb54.jpg
I suck with simples. >.>!

P.s. any bay writers in sj pm me.bump for crits.

[<<Fathem>>]

After litterly 4 double sided pages of writing my name, i think i got the tag down...correct me if im wrong

[Epoc]

test
FUCK TITS SHIT HELL
CUNT FAG WHORE SLUT
FUCKER
end test

conclusion: i dont get BBV's post at all.

snaw: looks good (left especially) keep those simps up. use uppercase N. dont let the curls of the S touch its middle. and the W in second is too bubbly compared to rest and use bars. actually. let them overlap instead of guessing where they should meet

krump. your getting the idea. straighter letters

fathem - no arrows, no unattached mid E line, no attached A to F, have Cross bar for A, have consistent height + width pls, and straighter simpler letters for now. :) and dont use your sketch pad for tag practice (if that is what it is) and for the love of allah dont put that in the street

[BigBlueViolence]

dawg, YOU AREN'T CHANGING ANYTHING.
letters made of arrows = WHACK.
letters made from parts of other letters = WHACK.
letters that are smaller than other letters = WHACK.

[eel2]

http://img59.imageshack.us/img59/5761/renob.png

YA! FAG!

and bump this

[<<Fathem>>]

test
FUCK TITS SHIT HELL
CUNT FAG WHORE SLUT
FUCKER
end test

wtf?

[<<Fathem>>]

dawg, YOU AREN'T CHANGING ANYTHING.
letters made of arrows = WHACK.
letters made from parts of other letters = WHACK.
letters that are smaller than other letters = WHACK.

well fuck, i got four different ppl sayin four differnt things...you say no arrows someone else says improve a letter and its good...i cant fucking please everyone, and besides in the end its my tag.

[408Bomber]

Ok... what's your tag name? I'll do a quick simple tag for you >.>!

[BigBlueViolence]

YA! FAG!

http://img59.imageshack.us/img59/5761/renob.png


and bump this



http://4.bp.blogspot.com/_UYl8S-FS0bg/SWucKK6uHLI/AAAAAAAAABA/jZDwYUkmp9o/s320/Futurama_Fry_Looking_Squint.jpg

[<<Fathem>>]

test
FUCK TITS SHIT HELL
CUNT FAG WHORE SLUT
FUCKER
end test

conclusion: i dont get BBV's post at all.

snaw: looks good (left especially) keep those simps up. use uppercase N. dont let the curls of the S touch its middle. and the W in second is too bubbly compared to rest and use bars. actually. let them overlap instead of guessing where they should meet

krump. your getting the idea. straighter letters

fathem - no arrows, no unattached mid E line, no attached A to F, have Cross bar for A, have consistent height + width pls, and straighter simpler letters for now. :) and dont use your sketch pad for tag practice (if that is what it is) and for the love of allah dont put that in the street

ok then... at least someones making some sense. and being helpfull instead of just chirpin.

[Epoc]

took me way to long to edit. fuck.

read previous post for crit shit ^^

fathem. much better already. remove curl top of F mid of F top of E. keep letters in straight line like VAGINA below. gotta wet dream before you fuck. Iffff yo know what i mean. yeh gotta marry before you abuse you spouse.....if ya see where im going.

[<<Fathem>>]

Ok... what's your tag name? I'll do a quick simple tag for you >.>!

Fathem

[<<Fathem>>]

took me way to long to edit. fuck.

read previous post for crit shit ^^

fathem. much better already. remove curl top of F mid of F top of E. keep letters in straight line like VAGINA below. gotta wet dream before you fuck. Iffff yo know what i mean. yeh gotta marry before you abuse you spouse.....if ya see where im going.

like so? and its in a practice cheapo depo sketchpad...and its not hittin the street til its done, no worries. and that arrow at the bottom is from anonother, not really supposed to be there lol

[Epoc]

now do that like 30 times a day for a year.

then slowly you'll develop your own style.

get fatter marker. it helps

[408Bomber]

Fathem
do you realize how annoying that name is to write.....

[<<Fathem>>]

now do that like 30 times a day for a year.

then slowly you'll develop your own style.

get fatter marker. it helps

lol trust, i have mad markers,pens etc...got a fatter one, prisma....but forgive me for sounding like an idiot. wasnt the other post basicly my own style, like, if i just keep writing fathem over and over, chances are that the end product comes to that...like im going to go ahead and try it...just confusing is all..

[BigBlueViolence]

http://img268.imageshack.us/img268/10/90438952.png

[suparjafar]

get a chisel tipped marker or something or something fat and just write your name over and over. but fathem is a bit long

[Epoc]

no. its not style when you cant do it any other way and cant make clean solid basic font letters. its just whack. or i guess you could consider it a wack style vs. a nice style. either way. it takes a while. after you realize how much dick it sucks, it is much easier to improve.

[shem]

yo im feelin that name. i messed with it for a few minutes so many ways to make it flow.

[<<Fathem>>]

408 bomber: yeah im starting to...but what did you end up with?

suparfajar: <-aint that a bit long:S

Epoc: its not that i cant do it any other way...but im just going to take advice, and start just writing it...

Big blue violence: um, but thats not lookin very nice...haha, guess thats the point of rewriting 8000000 times..

*note that ive been at this for maybee three days...

[BigBlueViolence]

Well i did it on MSpaint with a laptop mouse,
and it still looks better than what you are coming up with.

[<<Fathem>>]

yo im feelin that name. i messed with it for a few minutes so many ways to make it flow.

i like it too....oculd you give a couple examples?...i wont bite, just curious.

[<<Fathem>>]

Well i did it on MSpaint with a laptop mouse,
and it still looks better than what you are coming up with.

the book is thick, so i had no wrist support on the M. so its still kinda fucked...but this seems to be what your looking for.

[suparjafar]

supar jafar is a username not my graff name..

http://img19.imageshack.us/img19/9198/pic0097y.th.jpg (http://img19.imageshack.us/i/pic0097y.jpg/)

dont bag on terrible 3d im aware.

[shem]

much better homie.

i dont have my camera right now maybe tomorrow.

[<<Fathem>>]

suparjafar: ok. clearly not.

shem: much better to who? and yeah if you could, that would be greatly appreciated.

[shem]

to you. stay simple like that and just keep writing it. things will ineveitably change on their own and the steez will come.

[Graffyk]

Snaw your Ws look a lot better.

[<<Fathem>>]

to you. stay simple like that and just keep writing it. things will ineveitably change on their own and the steez will come.

fuck...seems like a long ass process...but since im only 3 days in...gunna take the advice.

[suparjafar]

Snaw your Ws look a lot better.

thanks. question...when is the time to move on to developing a throw?

[BigBlueViolence]

it's a REALLY long process.

[<<Fathem>>]

So basicly been at it for a while, this is what i have now that i started at a simple FATHEM. and just kept writing it over and over...I'm going to continue tomorrow... about an hour past when i thought i was gunna go to bed.

[BigBlueViolence]

Dude, I give up.

[DUNSY]

taz i really like the one with the orange outline, not really much to crit on it but i wouldn't have bended the lines of the top of the letters

cose if everyone would listen to crits like you do everyone would improve way faster, nice work like the letters and i like your second "e" best

slek i think you overdid it with those silver big drips

upstate the second "leg" of your n should come a little lower, other than that i'm loving it

grafyk i totally agree with black flag
- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -
trying out a new name: Nova

http://i36.tinypic.com/1et1qv.jpg

http://i36.tinypic.com/iyo0ih.jpg

http://i37.tinypic.com/307rw20.jpg


bamp !

[DankNC]

http://img59.imageshack.us/img59/1259/0929090202.th.jpg (http://img59.imageshack.us/i/0929090202.jpg/)
http://img38.imageshack.us/img38/6144/0929090205.th.jpg (http://img38.imageshack.us/i/0929090205.jpg/)
http://img14.imageshack.us/img14/2137/0929090155.th.jpg (http://img14.imageshack.us/i/0929090155.jpg/)


i haven't been on here in forever, and the word comin out of the blue ones mouth is just a sound effect, not my "name"
i posted this in the character forum, but no one has been on there all day, so i figured id try and get some crits here, and i rushed tryin to color around the pink one, you think they'd look good on shirts?

[suparjafar]

nova and character are nice. 2nd is fav.

fathem go simpler.

[suparjafar]

nova and character are nice. 2nd is fav.

fathem go simpler.

[<<Fathem>>]

Dude, I give up.

well wtf? i write it over and over and over, just lettin it go itself, no changes done on purpose....and this is what i had....like wtf is supposed to happen the letters just stay fucking straight and fat FATHEM. likee?

[<<Fathem>>]

nova and character are nice. 2nd is fav.

fathem go simpler.

I did start simple....thats the thing, i started with square normal letters...wrote that about 8000000 times, and then some changes just made themselves, i didnt purpously add anything to it....

[DUNSY]

fathem please stop spamming this topic and go post in the handstyle section, once there look at others. get influenced by them but don't copy it

[dreaken1993]

http://i438.photobucket.com/albums/qq101/dreaken1993/scan0001-9.jpg
http://i438.photobucket.com/albums/qq101/dreaken1993/scan0001-8.jpg

[suparjafar]

aenok solid throw and nice simp below it keep doing that. nice handstyle too

[Gam]

Aenok-Drop the A alittle lower your getting there just keep working.

[suparjafar]

havent tried this idea with simp yet..no 3d just basic letters, fucked a and w. but whatever bored in study hall

[mmmburgers]

@suparjafar Just make your letters staight, looks like you got a mad shaky hand haha.

Long time no post, been awhile since i been in here.
http://i237.photobucket.com/albums/ff286/mmmburgers/kemistsketch.jpg

[suparjafar]

kene (?) i like the idea of it but it kinda looks like kesve.

[StayHyE]

http://i438.photobucket.com/albums/qq101/dreaken1993/scan0001-9.jpg
http://i438.photobucket.com/albums/qq101/dreaken1993/scan0001-8.jpg
get the symmetry down...make the letters the same size

@suparjafar Just make your letters staight, looks like you got a mad shaky hand haha.

Long time no post, been awhile since i been in here.
http://i237.photobucket.com/albums/ff286/mmmburgers/kemistsketch.jpg

same goes for you...if you have two e's try and make them look similar...














http://i37.tinypic.com/293826s.jpg

now crits please :D

[mmmburgers]

Its actually a horrible attemp at makeing a M.

[StayHyE]

thanks but horrible is a word i would use for your work...but yeah it is an ugly m.

and lol @ making having an E in it

[RedEyes]

http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f327/olredeyes/Photo16.jpg
http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f327/olredeyes/Photo2-1.jpg
http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f327/olredeyes/Photo6-1.jpg
Flipped it. Crits?

[BigBlueViolence]

Everything but Aenok is a bad deal.
Kem- You really need to work on hands, dude.
Stayhye- Your shit is all off, man. Some of your stuff looks alright,
but that definitely does not.

Redeyes- I meant to post this before you posted your shit. I'm kind of feeling it, but you should really flip it.
You can set your Photobooth preferences to flip images automatically.

[suparjafar]

weee simpler...not really idk

[headsick123]

like the sico and aenok.

http://i16.photobucket.com/albums/b32/headsick123/JOINS1.jpg

CRITTS PLEASEEE!

[suparjafar]

j's a bit big, but thats really clean

[headsick123]

thanks man, ill have more to come later tonight hopefully!

[Graffyk]

Fathem. I think what BBV means is that it takes more than just 2 hours a day for just 3 days. You need to keep practicing for a long time. Don't worry. I'm a bit unclear about how long one should really spend on regular block letters. But i would think 1-2 months minimum. What I've learned from these guys is that just because something appears to look good, to profressional writers who know what they're doing, it looks whack and you just look like a wannabe. Try talking to some of the skilled and experienced members on this board and see what they have to say, find out how long it took them to stay on block letters.

lol sorry for that long ass thing, i guess i got carried away

DankNC, i like the second one the best.

Aenok looking good and simple. The last one's E looks kinda weird though.. not sure why though

Kem, that looks like a Kejve or Kelve, Don't seperate the bars in one letter unless you make it apparent that it actually is a single letter.

StayHye the E needs work. And lose the single bubble at the top. it's too lonely D:

Sico: nice solid letters. But the Arrows seemed forced on. They dont come out at a spot so that it flows. get what im saying? also is it pronounced sicko or psycho?

Join: i like the Face on the J


there
crit'd the whole fuckin page

[milk boxx]

aenok - throws decent, straights need work, take off the little extensions and stuff from your K and try to just simple it out a bit more till you get it locked.
Kem- at first i thought that said kene.. work on that m, and idk what the fucks up with that handy haha
Armen - make that shit simpler and work with the bars the same size for now..
sico - looks like it would be decent if you dropped the arrows

i havent posted here in a long ass time... first sketch in like a month

http://i621.photobucket.com/albums/tt300/2wayducttape/seid.jpg

can i get some decent crits on this, i know i needa somehow make my "I" and "D" flow.. any help?

[suparjafar]

well your 1000X plus better than me, but your i is tilted kinda weird IMO

halp

[-Empty-Can-]

thats probably one of the best ones you've drawn

[StayHyE]

http://i35.tinypic.com/wsrc43.jpg

[gumOnShoe]

snaw, your lines are getting cleaner, try to make your middle W bar higher, it fucks w/ the flow. so remember, keeps those lines clean!

Milk Boxx, not digging the lean your put on your last two letters, stand em' up straight.

Stay Hye, looks tough, maybe clean up the lines.

got crits?
the main focus on the page was the simp on top.
http://i177.photobucket.com/albums/w203/_zEt_/Photo2-1.jpg

[Jokz]

i dig your S altho im not too fond of the E

[408Bomber]

bump for crits.
bump!!!

[suparjafar]

snore i like that s alot, but i feel like it doesnt flow with the rest of the letters. i dont know then again you are better than me X1000 but just my input

bored...raised w bar

[RedEyes]

Milk-i like the S to E symmetry just dont like the top of the E.
Graff-thanks i see what u mean by forcing the arrows, n its sicko

[gumOnShoe]

snore i like that s alot, but i feel like it doesnt flow with the rest of the letters. i dont know then again you are better than me X1000 but just my input

bored...raised w bar

cool, raise it just a tad bit more, also, how would i make it flow? not a wise ass comment, i'm just asking.

[408Bomber]

dude that is raw seriously... don't post in this thread lmao... that is pretty tight.

http://c1.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images02/25/l_a0c34f0ec01e43f580b3c8ec5133cb54.jpg
I suck with simples. >.>!

P.s. any bay writers in sj pm me.

i need crits dammit!!!

[shem]

http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3485/3970479455_332c46dd2d.jpg

i suck. ignore that fill tried it, shouldn't have.

[BowlesNuevitas]

Okay fuck the guys in the pieces thread no help form those jerks :rolleyes:

maybe someone here can help me

http://img22.imageshack.us/img22/5240/dscf9719s.jpg

[suparjafar]

cool, raise it just a tad bit more, also, how would i make it flow? not a wise ass comment, i'm just asking.

well im no expert but i think the s is like long and skinny and the nor in the middle of the also skinny e is kinda dumbfounding. i dont know how to explain it. i feel like theyd be from two different pieces. maybe make the nor in the same style as the s,e

[dreaken1993]

Everything but Aenok is a bad deal.


uhh i dont know what you mean lol

[headsick123]

SHEM- keep it simple and straight, make all your letters the same size and dont worry about fill or background yet. get rid of that long ass tail on the S and get rid of the tail thing on the H and just keep it simple i think it would look 100X better.

[Epoc]

Okay fuck the guys in the pieces thread no help form those jerks :rolleyes:

maybe someone here can help me

http://img22.imageshack.us/img22/5240/dscf9719s.jpg

big boy thread. too good for us to crit.

[StayHyE]

lol

[StayHyE]

http://i35.tinypic.com/2uy3oee.jpg

cleaned up some of the lines..

[headsick123]

dont mind the writing, but heres another JOINS simple i did.

http://i16.photobucket.com/albums/b32/headsick123/JOINS2.jpg

[suparjafar]

fuck the arrows. looks solid though

[headsick123]

ARMEN- you need to make your letters the same thickness, and stick to caps, you got one lowercase and it looks wack, also your shaddow is all screwy, i know nobody likes to hear this, but you gotta keep it simple. it looks the most clean and it will eventually develop into something better you like a lot more.

[RADAWG]

Some pen shit I did in class
http://i207.photobucket.com/albums/bb33/skateboard23/Photo175.jpg

[RedEyes]

Head-I like the ins but the J n O need to go, try n make all your letters the same size n chill out on those dots on ur highlights.
http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f327/olredeyes/Photo10.jpg
Sketching High..
http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f327/olredeyes/Photo11.jpg

[StayHyE]

ARMEN- you need to make your letters the same thickness, and stick to caps, you got one lowercase and it looks wack, also your shaddow is all screwy, i know nobody likes to hear this, but you gotta keep it simple. it looks the most clean and it will eventually develop into something better you like a lot more.

'keep it simple..' that all i hear theres no description of exactly what i need to do...keep to simple could mean anything can you be more specific plz

[BigBlueViolence]

What ever you were high on when you did that top piece,
stop doing it forever, that shit can't be good for your health.

[gumOnShoe]

well im no expert but i think the s is like long and skinny and the nor in the middle of the also skinny e is kinda dumbfounding. i dont know how to explain it. i feel like theyd be from two different pieces. maybe make the nor in the same style as the s,e

oh, i tried to make the S E biggest btw, so it'd be SnorE sort of, is that what you ment?

[RedEyes]

What ever you were high on when you did that top piece,
stop doing it forever, that shit can't be good for your health.

Lol it was just an idea i had to put down on paper nothing special.

[suparjafar]

oh, i tried to make the S E biggest btw, so it'd be SnorE sort of, is that what you ment?

yes

[LeaksOne]

ra your throw is fine but that simp is out of whack.
sico the bottom piece is better but the o on it is oddly shaped
joins dont do that heart over your I unless your a girl or its for a girl and that random arrow on the o is terrible. lose it. and make all your letters the same size

ive been fuckin around with my new name.....
http://i521.photobucket.com/albums/w335/jokster004/STP60048.jpg

http://i521.photobucket.com/albums/w335/jokster004/STP60049.jpg

http://i521.photobucket.com/albums/w335/jokster004/STP60050.jpg

http://i521.photobucket.com/albums/w335/jokster004/STP60051.jpg

its amazing how you never notice how bad your shit is until you post it...crits??
and i didnt ink any of these becasue im not very satisfied with any of them
and this is my new method of sketching. fuck clean lnes for now

[RedEyes]

The second last one has the most potential.

[cocacola]

^ yess i dont like the way the s is shape 0.0
valley of golden death
http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2603/3972292919_d9b8383d8a.jpghttp://farm3.static.flickr.com/2657/3972292985_1c89d1e147.jpg
aint done yet

[BowlesNuevitas]

Got some ideas from siron his shits pretty dope anyone got crits???


http://img42.imageshack.us/img42/4619/dscf9725e.jpg

[-Empty-Can-]

who the fuck are you? Stop posting fake wack shit. its pretty annoying.

[LeaksOne]

why did you steal that from me? i never gave you permission. fucking trolls

[thatguy<~]

'keep it simple..' that all i hear theres no description of exactly what i need to do...keep to simple could mean anything can you be more specific plz

just use stright letters, with no arrows on weard spots.

[cocacola]

whos all this goin to
?>

[BowlesNuevitas]

why did you steal that from me? i never gave you permission. fucking trolls


your shit was sooo dope, i could not resist, sorry my man.

[LeaksOne]

im not your man. my shits not dope. stop trolling please.

[suparjafar]

are you deaf? or in this case blind since you cant hear words on a forum...but whatever fuck...seriously write simple letters that are the same size proportion LOOK at your keyboard and bite those letters not sirons because thats not gonna get you anywhere if you dont know how to write a basic letter. i cant say shit because i just started too but listen to the advice people give and start simple. my 2 cents

by the way siron i love that 2nd to last one and the last one is good. mess with your i a little

[LeaksOne]

wow everyone seems to like that one. i guess ill go back to it and fix it up more. i personally dig my first one.

[thatguy<~]

http://i54.photobucket.com/albums/g116/dorandoran2323/004.jpg

http://i54.photobucket.com/albums/g116/dorandoran2323/003.jpg

http://i54.photobucket.com/albums/g116/dorandoran2323/002.jpg

http://i54.photobucket.com/albums/g116/dorandoran2323/001-1.jpg

[thatguy<~]

aenok - throws decent, straights need work, take off the little extensions and stuff from your K and try to just simple it out a bit more till you get it locked.
Kem- at first i thought that said kene.. work on that m, and idk what the fucks up with that handy haha
Armen - make that shit simpler and work with the bars the same size for now..
sico - looks like it would be decent if you dropped the arrows

i havent posted here in a long ass time... first sketch in like a month

http://i621.photobucket.com/albums/tt300/2wayducttape/seid.jpg

can i get some decent crits on this, i know i needa somehow make my "I" and "D" flow.. any help?

I like that style looks good

[-Empty-Can-]

rave - i think those all look pretty good.

[Graffyk]

Rave i really like that last one. If you're any good at fills you should try coloring that.


I'm thinking of switching up my name. Is it bad that i want to change my name because i cant work with Rs or should i quit being stubborn and stay on it till i get it down?

[KJay]

i just wanted to put extesnions all over the world it makes king right?
http://img44.imageshack.us/img44/3058/sdc10772y.jpg

graffy- i dont really care and im sure noone else does

[gumOnShoe]

Rave i really like that last one. If you're any good at fills you should try coloring that.


I'm thinking of switching up my name. Is it bad that i want to change my name because i cant work with Rs or should i quit being stubborn and stay on it till i get it down?

you could honestly do whatever the hell you want, i'm terms of names.
that's the beauty of it i guess, lol.
i've personally've gone through like 4 names.
Rs are really though cool Imo (hate mine, but i've seen some fresh ones), so idk, if you don't like the letter, atleast learn the structure so you can fall back on it later. so to properly answer your question, rather than yapping, no it's not wrong if you switch up.

[OOPS!]

Hey guys. I write OOPS! Used to write Cauz. Here's some crap I drew in class over the past couple days. Trying to get my OOPS a little more stylish before I get it up. Crits please.

http://i496.photobucket.com/albums/rr328/LuderAlex/008.jpg

http://i496.photobucket.com/albums/rr328/LuderAlex/oops.jpg

http://i496.photobucket.com/albums/rr328/LuderAlex/oops2.jpg

http://i496.photobucket.com/albums/rr328/LuderAlex/oops3.jpg

http://i496.photobucket.com/albums/rr328/LuderAlex/oops4.jpg

Handy style... experimenting with letter flow..

http://i496.photobucket.com/albums/rr328/LuderAlex/IMGP0419.jpg

I think I got it this time!

[gumOnShoe]

the toss on the top of the 2nd last pic is tough.
the other ones look like BBPS.

[OOPS!]

Thanks man. Yeah that's my favorite one. I keep trying to make the O's dope but they end up being kinda exaggerated and don't even look like O's

[headsick123]

yeah yo O's are hard especially when they are the main part of your name, i tried writing BOOST for a little while, it was really fun to tag, but it was just so hard to do anything with i thought so i stopped.

[OOPS!]

Especially handies.. oops handies are impossible.

[suparjafar]

oops everything is sweet except i dont like that handie last one

here

retarded s handie i know i fucked up big time

[OOPS!]

Thanks bro. Tried to be creative while sober and miserably failed. haha. I'll work on it

[BigBlueViolence]

dawg if that shits hard than you're doing something wrong.

http://img194.imageshack.us/img194/6986/28447454.png

Fuck laptop button mouse.

[OOPS!]

Man that looks like some westcoast cholo back alley shit. haha

[cocacola]

ohhh, you cant wirte that. theres a writer in my city that has that name cus one time ive see it with the dots in os for eyes and the smiley grin and the p normal looked like oop to me tho

[OOPS!]

Well he's in your city. I like Oops.

[BigBlueViolence]

So?
Fuck that guy.

[cocacola]

o well. i really dont see much of his tags much cus ive only seen one and dats it

[OOPS!]

http://i496.photobucket.com/albums/rr328/LuderAlex/IMGP0461.jpg

http://i496.photobucket.com/albums/rr328/LuderAlex/IMGP0456.jpg

better look at the stickers.

http://i496.photobucket.com/albums/rr328/LuderAlex/IMGP0459.jpg

[KJay]

i just wanted to put extesnions all over the world it makes king right?
http://img44.imageshack.us/img44/3058/sdc10772y.jpg

graffy- i dont really care and im sure noone else does

juj

[faser]

ohhh, you cant wirte that. theres a writer in my city that has that name cus one time ive see it with the dots in os for eyes and the smiley grin and the p normal looked like oop to me tho

shutup you cocksucker

stupid down syndrome muthafuckers....

[Elno]

ohhh, you cant wirte that. theres a writer in my city that has that name cus one time ive see it with the dots in os for eyes and the smiley grin and the p normal looked like oop to me tho

@faser i agree ;)

Who cares as long as Oops isnt in your city and he isn't biting on his style it doesnt matter, also Oops go and put up something and post im keen to see your work.

[medacog1]

http://i38.tinypic.com/hvdyma.jpg

[OOPS!]

@faser i agree ;)

Who cares as long as Oops isnt in your city and he isn't biting on his style it doesnt matter, also Oops go and put up something and post im keen to see your work.

I will once I find a good spot to chill and throw some stuff up. Gonna walk down the railroad tracks tomorrow with my homie and see what we can find. Ordering some Ironlak as well. Should come out alright.

[RedEyes]

Oopsie- I dont like it cant give crits cuz it just doesnt look good.
Polar- work on your R and maken all ur lines in proportion.

[OOPS!]

Oopsie- I dont like it cant give crits cuz it just doesnt look good.
Polar- work on your R and maken all ur lines in proportion.

Hahaha I feel ya man

[l3monade]

medacog1- thats dope, im not the best to give crits but maybe bring ur lettera a little closer to take away some white space, nice though.

i've been writing for just over a month now, figured id start drawin up some simples crits please.
http://i896.photobucket.com/albums/ac170/icelemonade_photos/PIC_0331.jpg
http://i896.photobucket.com/albums/ac170/icelemonade_photos/PIC_0330.jpg
http://i896.photobucket.com/albums/ac170/icelemonade_photos/PIC_0328.jpg

[funhouseXcast]

keep the bottoms of your N's open a little more. just enough so that you can tell they're not closed.

[thatguy<~]

keep the bottoms of your N's open a little more. just enough so that you can tell they're not closed.

yeah in the first sketch the N looks like a D to me. otherwise i like the simplisty*

[<<Fathem>>]

still working on my tag, got bored and decided to try out the new pencil crayons with a full pager. its not done, and no doubt that the letters and stuff aren't going to please most. but w.e figured id throw it on here and get some crit.

[eel2]

your all fags, stop posting with out giving crits, actin all like ur the shit and everyonell just dickride on ur dopeness. fuck you motherfuckers

cept kjay thats legit bro

[BigBlueViolence]

http://i40.tinypic.com/21oneih.jpg

[headsick123]

POLAR-make your letters all the same size, the A is way fatter than the rest, also, either make all your letters open or closed, the O, which i think is meant to resemble a tooth, looks off. and like the dude said before, make em closer together, take away the white space.

KNEMO- diggin it, i agree, open the N up a little, and i dont know about that first fill, those cracks just look bad i think. the K in the second one is dope, the fill is good too. stick to the style on the second one. it looks the best.

[headsick123]

POLAR-make your letters all the same size, the A is way fatter than the rest, also, either make all your letters open or closed, the O, which i think is meant to resemble a tooth, looks off. and like the dude said before, make em closer together, take away the white space.

KNEMO- diggin it, i agree, open the N up a little, and i dont know about that first fill, those cracks just look bad i think. the K in the second one is dope, the fill is good too. stick to the style on the second one. it looks the best.

[PegCityBoy]

ignore the bottom of the s. i fucked with it for a good 15 minutes didnt get to finish it, the left bar on the a is shit an the m is fucked partially because i had to tape another piece of paper to the side i was gonna have the bottom of the s more pinched in but the rest of the letters are kinda blown out if ya know what i mean

http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2532/3974932901_ae5a1e68d7.jpg

as for crits

oops - on your hand in the top pick dont connect your p and s it looks like an R
pular - keep workin on your simps make sure u use bars

[faser]

spam - i like the S and P but the A and M need help, especially that M

[PegCityBoy]

the m looks super gimp cause i had to tape another piece of paper to the side but yea my m's are hurtin fur curtain

[headsick123]

SPAM- The M is way to wide, like not the bars, just the whole letter itself.

[headsick123]

the J is kinda fucked, and i know, my handy sucks, but whatever. just workin on the new word. also workin on a canvas for my boy. should be done within a couple days, its lookin dope cant wait to get crits for that. crit this please guys!!! thanks.- JOINS


http://i16.photobucket.com/albums/b32/headsick123/JOINS3.jpg

[headsick123]

and now i notice that i forgot to put a shaddow inside the O, holy shit im stupid.

[Elno]

and now i notice that i forgot to put a shaddow inside the O, holy shit im stupid.
Dw we all miss something sometime.
My crits is the keyline if that red is your key line needs to be closer. Thats the exact same way i used to do my S and try to close the legs on your N a bit. Just keep drawing and drawing. Find letters your good at.

[RedEyes]

716 eh? again i like the N and S but go simpler with the other letters, and just do a reg. O no need for extensions.

[headsick123]

yeah 716 reppp, but i cant stand to do a regular O, idk why i just look at them when i do them and cant stand it, its just too boring. but thanks dudes!

[suparjafar]

oops everything is sweet except i dont like that handie last one

here

retarded s handie i know i fucked up big time

been giving crits...any advice whatsoever is appreciated. ill post another in a bit. thanks in advance

[headsick123]

dude you gotta post pics to get crits, more pics you post, more crits youll get, make sense?

[faser]

^ no. we dont want the thread clogged with a hundred of someones shitty flicks or when they make 1 tiny change and repost....

[headsick123]

yeah i know that, but you gotta post pics to get crits, ive seen one thing posted by him, nobody wants to waste their time giving crits to someone who isnt sketchin a lot and isnt at least trying to improve.

[headsick123]

old ass word i was workin on. never really got the chance to paint it but got sick of drawing it, plus theres a big toronto writer gram. what yous think?

http://i16.photobucket.com/albums/b32/headsick123/gram2-24-091.jpg

[headsick123]

old ass word i was workin on. never really got the chance to paint it but got sick of drawing it, plus theres a big toronto writer gram. what yous think?

http://i16.photobucket.com/albums/b32/headsick123/gram2-24-091.jpg

[suparjafar]

yeah i know that, but you gotta post pics to get crits, ive seen one thing posted by him, nobody wants to waste their time giving crits to someone who isnt sketchin a lot and isnt at least trying to improve.

ive been posting in this thread alot as far as with pictures, which i guess i shouldnt have but if you meant you gotta post pics i guess it didnt come out the first time but whatever. im aware its wack i'd just like some criticism like anyone else posting pics.

[faser]

old ass word i was workin on. never really got the chance to paint it but got sick of drawing it, plus theres a big toronto writer gram. what yous think?

http://i16.photobucket.com/albums/b32/headsick123/gram2-24-091.jpg

cracks need work, character face needs work or get rid of it, lose the arrow on the M and straighten all the letters out flat.

[headsick123]

well its really hard to see that pic, even when i click the thumbnail, if you post it straight to the forum with the IMG link its eaiser, but as far as i can see, the E is really hard to read, and your highlights are kinda screwy, the one on the e is smaller than the rest and the one on the W is hard to see. also get rid of the drips, when you do drips you need to make sure they are all parralell, think of gravity, its always gotta fall straight down, some veer to the left and some to the right, and that outter outline is too far away, just like mine is. and some people dont think its a big deal, but as far as lettrs i think its better when they are all the same case. yours looks like two caps and two lowers, or even one cap and three lowers depending how you look at it, but thats all i got. hope that helps. oh i just zoomed in on it and now it looks like it says snaw, before it looked like enaw, the s needs to be more semtrical. forget anything i said about the E haha.

[headsick123]

thanks faser, i was just seein what people thought, i got those same crits quite a while back. i just never really cared much to change it seeing as i didnt want beef with the writer gram so i just gave up on it haha.

[PROJECT LINK]

yo i enterd this in the comp it was just a quicky its been a a while but im gettin back into it..just simple shit any crits?

http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/picture.php?albumid=86&pictureid=2529

[OOPS!]

That would be a dope ass mural Link.

[suparjafar]

link sexy piece.
bored shaky-lined hollow...fuck any tips for a shaky hand? i need smoother lines...just practice?
http://img96.imageshack.us/i/img0001.pdf/

[Elno]

ive been posting in this thread alot as far as with pictures, which i guess i shouldnt have but if you meant you gotta post pics i guess it didnt come out the first time but whatever. im aware its wack i'd just like some criticism like anyone else posting pics.

Crits alright. Do some kind of shadow to the picture its very plain, if those are highlights on the picture they are way off.

[PegCityBoy]

link sexy piece.
bored shaky-lined hollow...fuck any tips for a shaky hand? i need smoother lines...just practice?
http://img96.imageshack.us/i/img0001.pdf/

try an make sure you're s doesnt look like an 8 when you're doin simps i find myself doin it the odd time too as for the shaky hand not sure what to tell ya i guess jus keep practicing

[Elno]

That would be a dope ass mural Link.

I agree Link looks pretty dope :) keep it up

[RedEyes]

http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f327/olredeyes/sico1.jpg
http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f327/olredeyes/sick2.jpg
Crits on either of these?

[RedEyes]

Double post.

[funhouseXcast]

i like the second one alot better, try to round out the points, just a little.

[PROJECT LINK]

ey thanks for the crits.
but red eyes-i like the second one bro. its pretty clean and simple.the first one is a little sloppy, but if u work on the bars a little bit itll tightin up a little bitt.

[Fetusr]

Yeah man the only thing I could add to those crits is maybe take that line going into your s out, or just make it shorter, it looks good though man.

Drew this up last night, I fucking HATE 3d, crits on how I can make it cleaner or just overall better 3d techniques? thanks.
http://i827.photobucket.com/albums/zz194/Ilovebabiez/FUCK3D.jpg

[Fetusr]

Yeah man the only thing I could add to those crits is maybe take that line going into your s out, or just make it shorter, it looks good though man.

Drew this up last night, I fucking HATE 3d, crits on how I can make it cleaner or just overall better 3d techniques? thanks.
http://i827.photobucket.com/albums/zz194/Ilovebabiez/FUCK3D.jpg

[headsick123]

SICKO- likin the second one, you gotta make that S flow better tho, its the only letter thats got straight corners.

[LIZARD]

fetusr-for 3d just put a dot and make all of the line go towards it(vanishing point). your not going to be able t0o see 3d on every side of your letters and thats whats throwing it off

[OOPS!]

Sico, I think your O is a little big too. Make it fit the other letters. Nice basis though