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gumOnShoe
10-25-2009, 12:00 PM
Dunsy: Those characters looks really well done, that game that you posted a flick of was fun too. the N in Nova (last pic): the Right part of it is too thin. I'd also make the O a tad bigger. also, take out the thing off the V (top left), it looks it's an N with half of it tucked behind the O. try squishing you A closer to the NOV.
you have that same problem w/ your throw up, too.

on that Viewtiful Joe character, try making his left leg, and left arm a bit fatter, also, fix his crotch/belly, it looks like a fat person's. the Face was spot on, though. Not digging the Random extension one the O in ONE, take the thing off the N (top right), smooth out the top of the E also.

now, crit me.
http://i177.photobucket.com/albums/w203/_zEt_/Photo27.jpg

<<Fathem>>
10-25-2009, 12:14 PM
So i worked on a simple, and used a vanishing point...the letters could be closer together i think, also i think the L's 3d got mad fu*ked when i went around it with silver. but anyways, here it is....could people please give me some crits? sorry its a bit blurry, i couldnt hold it steady enough for some reason.

-PeaR-
10-25-2009, 12:25 PM
dont really do a lot ov writtin
but i tried a 3-d
wondered wat u think but im pretty happy with it
im expecting to be torn apart now lol =/
http://www.urbnfabrik.com/images/members/2722/fullsize/20091025171537Photo186.jpg

edit-omfg! viewtiful joe!! lol

gumOnShoe
10-25-2009, 12:27 PM
what's it say?

-Empty-Can-
10-25-2009, 12:32 PM
It doesn't actually look 3D. Just looks like pipes that are shaded.

Flawless Victory
10-25-2009, 12:36 PM
you *****s need to stop trying to do 3D.

Just assume that if you have to post in the toy thread, then you don't have the structure that it takes to pull off 3D.

b SQUARED 08
10-25-2009, 01:04 PM
b squared intresting shadowing, i like it really much ( is marjolein your name or your girlfriends name? sounds dutch :p)
Haha, good call. It is for a really close female friend of mine who's over in Belgium. Her birthday's comin' up, so I try to keep in touch with her and send her sketches here and there :) Thanks for the compliment too.

On your sketches, your characters are lookin' dope. I would just suggest that on your letters, you keep an eye on the thickness of your bars and I'd lose the spade on your i on the first one. On your colored 'one', all three of your letters have different thicknesses, so it makes them stand out from one another. I'd lose the extension on the o too. I'm not feelin' the colored 'nova', but I like all of the last 'nova' other than the right bar on the n- thicken that up and that'd be straight.

Thanks for the comments everyone, any more?

http://i86.photobucket.com/albums/k98/BBp8ntballaLP508/Photo4-1.jpg

gumOnShoe
10-25-2009, 01:10 PM
it looks ill, clean n' all that.
idk, maybe try leaning the L a tad to the right? (i tried)

DUNSY
10-25-2009, 01:27 PM
Haha, good call. It is for a really close female friend of mine who's over in Belgium.

thx for the crits, long live belgium ! (i live there too :p)

<<Fathem>>
10-25-2009, 01:28 PM
I filled my simp....crits?

gumOnShoe
10-25-2009, 01:31 PM
I filled my simp....crits?

give em' to get em', man....

c0ld
10-25-2009, 01:38 PM
Weakfingers-Screw it. Keep it like that. I like it.

Dunsy-sickness.

B-it looks awesome. Uhhhh. Straighten up the fill on your 3d a bit?

http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3478/4043581370_445f763071_m.jpg
Its not quite finished or colored yet but should be today sometime.

Crits?

<<Fathem>>
10-25-2009, 01:42 PM
give em' to get em', man....

huh?:s

<<Fathem>>
10-25-2009, 01:45 PM
Weakfingers-Screw it. Keep it like that. I like it.

Dunsy-sickness.

B-it looks awesome. Uhhhh. Straighten up the fill on your 3d a bit?

http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3478/4043581370_445f763071_m.jpg
Its not quite finished or colored yet but should be today sometime.

Crits?

straighten up my fill? like just clean it up?

suparjafar
10-25-2009, 01:47 PM
give everyone crits, and you'll receive them in return.

c0ld
10-25-2009, 01:49 PM
Like make sure they are all straight. Honestly I just can't find much wrong with it lol.

<<Fathem>>
10-25-2009, 01:57 PM
give everyone crits, and you'll receive them in return.

supar-but as a toy, and still just learnin all techniques and shit, id be giving crits that in the end might not make sense. basicly saying how can i teach if i havent learned?

cold-ok, ill redraw it and straigten up the 3d a bit. on the A bar extension the 3d is way off (i think). and the L's doesnt come to the edge the way it should.

c0ld
10-25-2009, 02:05 PM
Oh I thought I was replying to b my bad. Ignore what I said fathem.

No one asked if you were a toy or not. Its obvious you are or you wouldn't be in here asking for crits.

Give em to get em. Its the way things work.

Speaking of which.........

<<Fathem>>
10-25-2009, 02:09 PM
Oh I thought I was replying to b my bad. Ignore what I said fathem.

No one asked if you were a toy or not. Its obvious you are or you wouldn't be in here asking for crits.

Give em to get em. Its the way things work.

Speaking of which.........

oh haha. ok. well as i said, my crits arent going to be effective, know what i mean? cus like if i dont know the techniques and stuff to graff yet, i cant say something is good or not, just cus like if i say for ex that b's stuff is tight (wich it is) thats not completly right cus you guys can find stuff that needs improvement. but yeah. b's looks good, and i like the fill, and the blue 3d outlines.

c0ld
10-25-2009, 02:22 PM
Just give em. It'll be up to the receiver whether or not they listen. You'll get the hang of it.

gumOnShoe
10-25-2009, 02:32 PM
Dunsy: Those characters looks really well done, that game that you posted a flick of was fun too. the N in Nova (last pic): the Right part of it is too thin. I'd also make the O a tad bigger. also, take out the thing off the V (top left), it looks it's an N with half of it tucked behind the O. try squishing you A closer to the NOV.
you have that same problem w/ your throw up, too.

on that Viewtiful Joe character, try making his left leg, and left arm a bit fatter, also, fix his crotch/belly, it looks like a fat person's. the Face was spot on, though. Not digging the Random extension one the O in ONE, take the thing off the N (top right), smooth out the top of the E also.

now, crit me.
http://i177.photobucket.com/albums/w203/_zEt_/Photo27.jpg

Bump.

Neon_M@
10-25-2009, 02:46 PM
hey pear, i cant really tell if your piece says anything, but nonetheless good job with the shading!

btw just a few scetches...trying to be simpler than before

||BREAD||
10-25-2009, 03:17 PM
i like the idea of the e stacked on the o but you still need to work on your letters. keep it up

c0ld
10-25-2009, 03:46 PM
http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3478/4043581370_445f763071_m.jpg
Its not quite finished or colored yet but should be today sometime.

Crits?

Bump

Neon_M@
10-25-2009, 04:41 PM
thanks bread, i love having 2 n's too, im trying to figure out a cool way to mirror the piece, or put a syymetry line down the middle.

btw when you say work on letters, do you mean just make them cleaner? just better looking?

||BREAD||
10-25-2009, 04:52 PM
both lol

and try to make this look better and into a piece, mirror effect. . .
http://i154.photobucket.com/albums/s270/kanoop/xdfghfdhg.jpg
something like that....make the e inside the o or something, i think that would look sweet if you could pull it off

Neon_M@
10-25-2009, 05:01 PM
yeah thats basically what im going for, but i might have to save that for later once im better.


back to the drawing boards

graffdabusup
10-25-2009, 05:17 PM
http://i489.photobucket.com/albums/rr259/graffdabusup/Mobile%20Uploads/Image0-13.jpg
http://i489.photobucket.com/albums/rr259/graffdabusup/Mobile%20Uploads/Image0-14.jpg

suparjafar
10-25-2009, 05:47 PM
once again reep, first ones lookin good.

Inlyn08
10-25-2009, 08:37 PM
you *****s need to stop trying to do 3D.

Just assume that if you have to post in the toy thread, then you don't have the structure that it takes to pull off 3D.

Contrary to this post.. 3D isn't difficult. By "Not doing something" you don't learn something. See, the statement I quoted I wanted to touch on. Practice makes perfect. And if you are going to practice you may as well go all or nothing. I'm not the type of person who believes statements like.. "If you can't read well.. you should stop reading for a bit."

If you have to, make extremely simple letters.. and use a ruler to guide them to your vantage point. Then as your bend you letters keep the same idea, erasing the lines to the vantage point as you clean up your sketches. Or you could even practice making boxes, and other shapes and using the vantage point etc.. etc. Until you become more familiar with it. 3D essentially stays the same. However, objects.. letters and so forth are what makes it seem different. I'm sure if you searched on Google, it would give a nice descriptive set up. Or, check out art tutorials. They have break downs on 3D.

||BREAD||
10-25-2009, 08:41 PM
look at this haha i guess the weed had me dazed the other night, this is me attempting something called graffiti haha
http://i154.photobucket.com/albums/s270/kanoop/DSC_0008.jpg

-Empty-Can-
10-25-2009, 08:46 PM
http://i713.photobucket.com/albums/ww131/pics4bscience/MIchael-Random-pics774.jpg

Bump 4 crits..

Inlyn08 - I completely agree with you. You can't get good at something if you don't try. Who knows maybe you just might be good and understand 3D.

Bread- Go simpler. Work on your shadow.

Reep - the first one is nice

PegCityBoy
10-25-2009, 08:58 PM
http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2778/4044462065_ca903795d9.jpg

started out simple then i got carried away kept fuckin with S's and nothing looked right still workin on it

i originally had the horizontal bar under the a under the P too but it was off center and didn't seem right

klic
10-25-2009, 09:20 PM
Weekly Toy Handstyle Battle #35
Word: Trick
Deadline: Friday, October 30, 2009
Rules: One entry per person

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Weekly Toy Throwie Battle #12
Word: Treat
Deadline: Friday, October 30, 2009
Rules: One entry per person


spam - each letter individually is good. but they dont really go together as a whole

PegCityBoy
10-25-2009, 09:52 PM
http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2778/4044462065_ca903795d9.jpg

started out simple then i got carried away kept fuckin with S's and nothing looked right still workin on it

i originally had the horizontal bar under the a under the P too but it was off center and didn't seem right

bottom page bump

also
reep- work on your E on that blue an pink one
gumonshoe- dont split up the word and jus work on that R
otherwise both look good

goonzatwork
10-25-2009, 09:54 PM
yo flawless...dope signature, smash your enemies is a hard fucking band.

and Taker, im feeling your simple shit...not saying you should stop writing Taker but there was a dude Take/taker that got up quite a bit around Erie a long time back.

-Empty-Can-
10-25-2009, 09:56 PM
.
http://i713.photobucket.com/albums/ww131/pics4bscience/MIchael-Random-pics774.jpg
bottom page bump 4 Crits

Spam- Make your P a little larger. Lose the bar on the bottom of A and maybe on the S. Make your letters overlap a little

-Empty-Can-
10-25-2009, 09:56 PM
double postt...

<<Fathem>>
10-25-2009, 09:59 PM
Peg city- that is a sick simple, but id tilt the s to the right a bit, so its more in line with the rest of the work.
Graf- Im digging the first ones fill and style. the second one flows nice, i jsut dont really like the style.
cold- i like that, maybee make the word buble completly around the "cold!".

-Empty-Can-
10-25-2009, 10:01 PM
You could have just edited one instead of posting again.

Flawless Victory
10-25-2009, 10:07 PM
Just like you could have deleted your double post instead of editing it?

c0ld
10-25-2009, 10:08 PM
Bump

Bump again. Seriously. I gave critz. Can I have some?

<<Fathem>>
10-25-2009, 10:21 PM
cold-maybee fatten up the L's lower bar? just a though, but im thinking if you kept bar consistency on that L the piece would look a tad better
emptycan- i like that simple, but the left side of the last t bar, should continue the 3d over top the o. to me the way it looks now is that the 0 i coming out of the 3d.

zennegen
10-25-2009, 10:31 PM
http://i35.tinypic.com/335dpux.jpg

for the lolz.

oaph_ezork
10-26-2009, 12:03 AM
spam: i think you should try to change the p so it fits in with the style your using.

some of mine, not that good, crits?
7404

and one thats not finished
7405

StayHyE
10-26-2009, 01:06 AM
http://i36.tinypic.com/2ezh34k.jpg

Keso
10-26-2009, 08:25 AM
http://i35.tinypic.com/335dpux.jpg

for the lolz.

For fuck's sake man! Stot keep on working. Your 3D is alright but your letters are pretty bad... You lack style and letter structure. Ask yourself if you think your work is good before putting it up. By the way, it's "for the lulz."

Keso
10-26-2009, 08:28 AM
http://i489.photobucket.com/albums/rr259/graffdabusup/Mobile%20Uploads/Image0-13.jpg
http://i489.photobucket.com/albums/rr259/graffdabusup/Mobile%20Uploads/Image0-14.jpg

damn reep! I'm feeling the style! Keep it up. I can't wait to see what a burner of yours looks like.

Sorry for the double...

-PeaR-
10-26-2009, 08:38 AM
u guys told me 2 stop doin 3d but i caried on and came up with this
http://www.urbnfabrik.com/images/members/2722/fullsize/20091026102457Photo188.jpg

Keso
10-26-2009, 09:02 AM
What do you guys think?? http://c3.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images02/85/l_3e49bcd2eaca45d98309c13520381cfe.jpg

-Pear- that is good for like art. Quit trying things that are way out of your league. That's advanced shit youre doing....

mawks
10-26-2009, 09:54 AM
For fuck's sake man! Stot keep on working. Your 3D is alright but your letters are pretty bad... You lack style and letter structure. Ask yourself if you think your work is good before putting it up. By the way, it's "for the lulz."

take some of your own advice ^

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 11:31 AM
u guys told me 2 stop doin 3d but i caried on and came up with this
http://www.urbnfabrik.com/images/members/2722/fullsize/20091026102457Photo188.jpg
Yeah?
It still looks like shit.

c0ld
10-26-2009, 11:57 AM
Pear-it looks good. Nice shading. But that border is way too thick. I think adding a nice color fill in those letters could look good too. I like what you're trying to do, but its kind of advanced. Try doing some simpler letters, but with 3d.

Keso-lose some of the extensions and serifs. Its got some potential underneath all that.

http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2634/4046407083_11a9d181fa_m.jpg

I'm not too happy with the 3d fill. But oh well.

http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3496/4046499005_a9a63797bd_m.jpg

Simple is good.

JMANN.23.HTK
10-26-2009, 12:01 PM
What do you guys think?? http://c3.ac-images.myspacecdn.com/images02/85/l_3e49bcd2eaca45d98309c13520381cfe.jpg

-Pear- that is good for like art. Quit trying things that are way out of your league. That's advanced shit youre doing....

Nice man, you gonna 3d it ? or yah leaving it as this ? Good work though, needs a few tags and it'd be sorted...

cocacola
10-26-2009, 12:20 PM
=
http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2801/4047314150_8202168242_o.jpg

StayHyE
10-26-2009, 12:27 PM
http://i37.tinypic.com/ilxbbr.jpg
http://i36.tinypic.com/zj9pp3.jpg
http://i38.tinypic.com/aovsz6.jpg

oaph_ezork
10-26-2009, 01:43 PM
cocacola: Nice i really like it

heres mine, just going simple
7410

crits?

GOATHEAD
10-26-2009, 01:49 PM
cold-i dont like how the o is so much bigger.
cocacola- i like it but i think the s should be bigger would make it more proportionate, and i would bring the e out from under the t some. im diggin it though.
StayHyE- keep up the simples.

zennegen
10-26-2009, 01:58 PM
For fuck's sake man! Stot keep on working. Your 3D is alright but your letters are pretty bad... You lack style and letter structure. Ask yourself if you think your work is good before putting it up. By the way, it's "for the lulz."

what the fuck are you talking about. i don't write stot. i just wrote it. there is no 3D on it either, who are you talking to?

-Empty-Can-
10-26-2009, 02:02 PM
For fuck's sake man! Stot keep on working. Your 3D is alright but your letters are pretty bad... You lack style and letter structure. Ask yourself if you think your work is good before putting it up. By the way, it's "for the lulz."

I didn't even draw that.

I write stot not zennegen.

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 02:03 PM
You know that a stot is a castrated bovine, right?

-Empty-Can-
10-26-2009, 02:08 PM
Nope.

I searched my name and it said it means a worthless horse.

c0ld
10-26-2009, 02:11 PM
http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2634/4046407083_11a9d181fa_m.jpg

I'm not too happy with the 3d fill. But oh well.

http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3496/4046499005_a9a63797bd_m.jpg

Simple is good.


Bottom of page bump.

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 02:13 PM
Nope.

I searched my name and it said it means a worthless horse.
That's an obsolete definition.

stot1n Dialect1. (Life Sciences & Allied Applications / Animals) a bullock
2. (Life Sciences & Allied Applications / Animals) a castrated male ox

http://www.thefreedictionary.com/stot

-Empty-Can-
10-26-2009, 02:17 PM
lol. Pretty cool name...

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 02:19 PM
Really?
An ox with no balls is cool?
Seems like a weak name to me.
Kind of like your hoeing yourself.

-Empty-Can-
10-26-2009, 02:23 PM
Sarcasm... :rolleyes:

I'm pretty sure most people don't know what a Stot is anyway...

StayHyE
10-26-2009, 02:27 PM
whats with all the talk post pics faggots

zennegen
10-26-2009, 02:31 PM
shut up, fag. you criticized a non-existant 3D on a simp, and you think you know what your talking about?lol.

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 02:34 PM
Stay- Your 3d is MAD fucked up in the first and last simple.

You have to make sure it's all going in one direction.
You can't have the bottom going down and the top going left.

RESToners
10-26-2009, 02:38 PM
http://http://i260.photobucket.com/albums/ii3/xopenyoureyesx33/restpeice1.jpg first peice ever so yea. crits?

RESToners
10-26-2009, 02:40 PM
http://i260.photobucket.com/albums/ii3/xopenyoureyesx33/restpeice1.jpg first piece ever so yea. crits?

StayHyE
10-26-2009, 02:45 PM
Stay- Your 3d is MAD fucked up in the first and last simple.

You have to make sure it's all going in one direction.
You can't have the bottom going down and the top going left.
thanks for the crit brah

shut up, fag. you criticized a non-existant 3D on a simp, and you think you know what your talking about?lol.

why dont you go die in a grease fire you son of a whore....who said i knew what i was talking about you faggit i just said shut the fuck up and post more pics.....go back to blowing your bf there

StayHyE
10-26-2009, 02:46 PM
.edit on no wonder youre from detroit...why dont you find the nearest building and base jump without a chute you welfare collecting chump

RESToners
10-26-2009, 02:50 PM
so yea.. any crits on that piece?

zennegen
10-26-2009, 02:51 PM
lmao, welfare collecting chump? its funny as fuck to me how you have no grasp on any form of graffiti, and all you can do when you get called out on it is throw some half-assed come backs at me. just quit graff now, it's not like you have the balls to paint anyway.

the internet is serious business.

StayHyE
10-26-2009, 02:55 PM
http://i37.tinypic.com/ilxbbr.jpg
http://i36.tinypic.com/zj9pp3.jpg
http://i38.tinypic.com/aovsz6.jpg


http://i260.photobucket.com/albums/ii3/xopenyoureyesx33/restpeice1.jpg first piece ever so yea. crits?

E looks really crammed in there...try and space out your letters so they are all basically the same size..you dont want some letters bigger then others...and the extention on the bottom part of the T isnt working for me...try simple letters off your keyboard then you can add extentions, bits...whatever

zennegen
10-26-2009, 03:01 PM
your sketches make me fucking LOL.

TheToy
10-26-2009, 03:04 PM
lmao, welfare collecting chump? its funny as fuck to me how you have no grasp on any form of graffiti, and all you can do when you get called out on it is throw some half-assed come backs at me. just quit graff now, it's not like you have the balls to paint anyway.

the internet is serious business.

You don't even paint.

zennegen
10-26-2009, 03:06 PM
did i say i did? and neither do you. you paint your backyard and chill spots, probably legal walls for all we know. like 0% chance of getting caught. hop off, nig.

KRE1
10-26-2009, 03:09 PM
zing!

EST2007
10-26-2009, 03:11 PM
please don't call someone out for "not painting" if you don't paint either. its lame.

if you both don't paint. gtfo and do something about that. none of this "i'm waiting to get better before i paint" bullshit either.

you're either doing work, or you're not.

/rant

StayHyE
10-26-2009, 03:12 PM
your sketches make me fucking LOL.
your stot brings the lulz...learn2sketch then flame faggit
typical toy faggot who thinks he's a king.....why dont you go lick a chainsaw faggit




You don't even paint.

he's busy getting his grades up for mommy and daddy or he'll never go to the prom

-Empty-Can-
10-26-2009, 03:13 PM
Anion actually posts pics of paint. How can he not paint? Doesn't matter if's a chill spot or not. Zenne iv'e never seen you post pictures of your work other that slaps and those pics that you posted in the Detroit thread. You talk alot for not doing alot.


your stot brings the lulz...learn2sketch then flame faggit
typical toy faggot who thinks he's a king.....
I'm the one who writes stot....

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 03:17 PM
Stot you're a fucking clown, you live in the burbs and are 14.
You take pictures of shit from your mom's car when you go to hockey practice.
Stay the fuck out of it.

Zenne catches tags in a REAL city,
not the boonies and burbs like you *****s.
Other writers see his shit without the help of the internet.

<<Fathem>>
10-26-2009, 03:27 PM
Restoners- sorry but that last one is sh*t, no letter structure, and i cant make out what it says AT ALL.

Stayhye- im digging the simps. on the second one (blue and red) try to keep more R structure, it appears as though its AAmen instead of ARmen.

Here's a simple I did, I posted it erlier, but got no crits...could someone plz give me some crits on this?

gumOnShoe
10-26-2009, 03:27 PM
Bump.

Bump.
http://i177.photobucket.com/albums/w203/_zEt_/Photo27.jpg

Keso
10-26-2009, 03:33 PM
shut up, fag. you criticized a non-existant 3D on a simp, and you think you know what your talking about?lol.

Man shut the fuck up. I'd whip your ass in a battle.

gumOnShoe
10-26-2009, 03:36 PM
//hoyLY SHIT, homie over here called you out...^^^

Keso
10-26-2009, 03:38 PM
I was talking about a different stot piece.

StayHyE
10-26-2009, 03:39 PM
Anion actually posts pics of paint. How can he not paint? Doesn't matter if's a chill spot or not. Zenne iv'e never seen you post pictures of your work other that slaps and those pics that you posted in the Detroit thread. You talk alot for not doing alot.


I'm the one who writes stot....
my bad didnt mean you..was talking to that zenne fagit

Restoners- sorry but that last one is sh*t, no letter structure, and i cant make out what it says AT ALL.

Stayhye- im digging the simps. on the second one (blue and red) try to keep more R structure, it appears as though its AAmen instead of ARmen.

Here's a simple I did, I posted it erlier, but got no crits...could someone plz give me some crits on this?

thanks for the crits...you should connect the B....also there is a lot of dead space between the A and the F try closing the gap a bit

Keso
10-26-2009, 03:44 PM
I was talking to zenne too. Quoted the wrong pic.. Either way zenne is a fag.

zennegen
10-26-2009, 03:51 PM
LOL im a fag cause i don't catch tags in the suburbs like you guys? good one. you can whip my ass in a battle? OH NO! guess what? i can whip your ass in real life. empty can, you write a word that means a bitch ox, and your mom buys your paint. seriously, fuck off.

-Empty-Can-
10-26-2009, 04:05 PM
empty can, you write a word that means a bitch ox, and your mom buys your paint. seriously, fuck off.

I never knew what it meant. I'm pretty sure nobody else knows what it means either. Beside it's a fucking name. Dude, my mom doesn't buy my paint for me. If she did I would actually have cans to do shit with.

StayHyE
10-26-2009, 04:05 PM
lol e thug why dont you battle him then homo

zennegen
10-26-2009, 04:15 PM
because unlike you, i don't give a fuck what some fags on the internet think. i get my shit done, and thats all that matters. empty can, if i ever saw you paint anything on the street, assuming your mom would let you out late enough to do it, i would go over your shit every time. your a clown. so is anion, and stayhye. i don't have to post pictures of anything to prove myself. once again, the internet is serious business.

StayHyE
10-26-2009, 04:17 PM
typical detroit faggot enjoy your rabies and poverty faggot

take2
10-26-2009, 04:18 PM
lol you said fag 2wice

StayHyE
10-26-2009, 04:31 PM
shoulda been a comma after the poverty :D

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 04:31 PM
Haha, the burbs.

Empty, stay painting in the burbs,
it's for your own good.

Keso
10-26-2009, 04:44 PM
Let's battle zennefag. I write keso. keso doesn't mean ox or whatever the fuck. You are probably a suburb kid actin all hood. Just because you live in Detroit doesn't mean everything but Detroit is not the hood. There's hoods everywhere.. Enjoy your poverty. I'll make your shit look like a retarded toy did it.

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 04:55 PM
No,
Zenne paints Detroit.
That kid Empty your sticking up for does not.


By the way, y'all *****s is on the internet.

No mater who wins a battle, it doesn't mean shit.
Do you realize what would happen if you told some kid that you won a battle on the internet?
The answer to that is absolutely nothing

Do you realize what it means that you are better than some kid on the internet?
Absolutely nothing.

Empty Can and Zenne live in the same state.
If Empty Can painted in Detroit instead of the burbs, then it could get handled.

You guy's live who the fuck knows where, nothing about your opinion means shit.

ScAmeretoLme
10-26-2009, 04:58 PM
http://i150.photobucket.com/albums/s114/scameretolme/jbb.jpg

zennegen
10-26-2009, 05:02 PM
for real, man. if empty can is such a bad ass, he should come down and "battle" face to face. i forgot, though. his mom doesn't let him go to detroit :o

.nolove.
10-26-2009, 05:03 PM
Zenne catches tags in a REAL city,
not the boonies and burbs like you *****s.
Other writers see his shit without the help of the internet.

that hurt earn.i live in kansas and i still SMASH shit.well not really.but i do paint trains every once in a while...

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 05:04 PM
Yeah, but your shit's dope.
Painting dope trains is straight in my book, just not my style.

.nolove.
10-26-2009, 05:05 PM
lol i wouldnt say dope shit my stuff is hurting imo.i do what i can tho...

zennegen
10-26-2009, 05:10 PM
painting trains is dope as fuck. nolove, post some recent shit, i don't even know what you write, ha.

.nolove.
10-26-2009, 05:12 PM
ill post some sketches or some throws maybe.ive been getting harrassed by the cops so im trying not to put to much shit out right now.hence the screenname change.

gumOnShoe
10-26-2009, 05:14 PM
can't we just get this thread back on track, damnit?
it's the internet, WHO GIVES A FUCK..

TheToy
10-26-2009, 05:15 PM
for real, man. if empty can is such a bad ass, he should come down and "battle" face to face. i forgot, though. his mom doesn't let him go to detroit :o

You won't even e-battle anyone from these forums. Like you're gonna' do something 'tough' in real life...

Oh c'mon now...

.nolove.
10-26-2009, 05:16 PM
apparently you seeing as you made the effort to post a reply to this silly e beef.

-Empty-Can-
10-26-2009, 05:18 PM
Empty Can and Zenne live in the same state.
If Empty Can painted in Detroit instead of the burbs, then it could get handled.
Well sorry I live just outside Detroit. I don't even paint alot here in the suburbs. I catch tags in some places and maybe a few bombs but I don't wreck the place.
I'm gonna start painting freights because thats all there is here and theres a yard less than 1 mile from where I live.

gumOnShoe
10-26-2009, 05:19 PM
apparently you seeing as you made the effort to post a reply to this silly e beef.

well, i didn't really reply to anyone in particular, it's just annoying seeing pics get drowned out by e-beef..

.nolove.
10-26-2009, 05:20 PM
i know what your saying but this is the toy thread where hormones run rampant so its bound to happen and i find it hilarious most of the time...

gumOnShoe
10-26-2009, 05:22 PM
i gotta admit it's annoying, but i find myself LOLing at some stuff said here. like sometimes i just lurk around and watch shit unfold.

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 05:25 PM
I don't even paint alot here in the suburbs. I catch tags in some places and maybe a few bombs but I don't wreck the place.

Then why are you calling out Zenne for not painting?



You won't even e-battle anyone from these forums. Like you're gonna' do something 'tough' in real life...

Oh c'mon now...
I fail to see how the way you act on the internet reflects the way you act in real life.
You don't know shit about anyone on this site besides their internet persona.
You can't even try to act like you know.

.nolove.
10-26-2009, 05:26 PM
exactly.yall fools need to mind your business and stop hating...unless its for the lulz.

-Empty-Can-
10-26-2009, 05:27 PM
Im not calling him out for not painting, but for not posting pictures and talking shit.

Graffyk
10-26-2009, 05:31 PM
http://img3.imageshack.us/img3/6218/p1000611ya.jpg
i usually can't fit my Es... Is that the right symbol above the A for a long a?

armen-you're putting some effort into your pieces, coloring them and all, keep it up. Make your Rs look more like Rs instead of A, and the 3D is a little messed up.

scameretolme-i like the fill, but im not sure what it says. it looks nice, but i can't tell if it's crappy letter structure, or if it's actually good..still working on reading graffiti. Try going to the intermediate and see what people say there.

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 05:32 PM
So you need to put yourself on blast in order to make fun of someone?

TheToy
10-26-2009, 05:38 PM
Then why are you calling out Zenne for not painting?



I fail to see how the way you act on the internet reflects the way you act in real life.
You don't know shit about anyone on this site besides their internet persona.
You can't even try to act like you know.

Are you the official Bombing Science psychologist?

You love beef. Get a life, go paint more.

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 05:40 PM
You are really trying to start shit with me again, kid?

If you want hit up Detroit and try to start problems then dope, I'd be down as fuck for that.
But if all you are going to do is be mad on the internet, then keep me out your thoughts, kid.

.nolove.
10-26-2009, 05:41 PM
earn will eat you goddamnit.he's big enough...SERIOUSLY.




















this nigghas is like 8 feet tall.dont fuck with that fool

zennegen
10-26-2009, 05:41 PM
*****, you are a fucking clown. your shit is god-fucking-awful. empty can, will you shut the fuck up? your dumb ass posts some shit you drew in your room, i have flicks of my shit on the streets, man. that beats anything you have. wanna talk some shit? meet me up, man. take a fucking bus somewhere, we can talk this out.

.nolove.
10-26-2009, 05:42 PM
and by talk he means beat you with a shovel and bury you in a field outside of detroit somewhere...

PegCityBoy
10-26-2009, 05:46 PM
http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2439/4048273242_f22e72e389.jpg
needs twekaing, first sketch of it. ill fuck with it later

http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2442/4047532959_0784943146.jpg
sall about the simps *the curved one is shitty i know

zennegen
10-26-2009, 05:46 PM
with a shovel? what the fuck? thats some rapist shit, man. nah, i roll with the fists. i'll beat him with his own cans.

.nolove.
10-26-2009, 05:50 PM
but they're empty....how will you inflict any damage?

suparjafar
10-26-2009, 06:03 PM
^^lol clever

TheToy
10-26-2009, 06:35 PM
You are really trying to start shit with me again, kid?

If you want hit up Detroit and try to start problems then dope, I'd be down as fuck for that.
But if all you are going to do is be mad on the internet, then keep me out your thoughts, kid.

You're so full of yourself. You're a fuckin' instigator/troll.
If you put the same amount of effort into paintin' as you do your wise ass comments and manipulative ass behavior; you wouldn't be 3 years deep on BS and still in the Toy Forum.

c0ld
10-26-2009, 06:39 PM
Bottom of page bump.

Ok, so it got lost under a pile of space wasting trash talk.


Crits plz?

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 06:40 PM
Feeling the "Bottom of",
but not so much the "page bump"

c0ld
10-26-2009, 06:49 PM
http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2634/4046407083_11a9d181fa_m.jpg

I'm not too happy with the 3d fill. But oh well.

http://farm4.static.flickr.com/3496/4046499005_a9a63797bd_m.jpg

Simple is good.


Heh. Didn't bump anything in that last post. Here we go.

zennegen
10-26-2009, 08:14 PM
i love how neither me, nor flawless victory give a fuck about anything that happens here, and all you fucks are all worked up about it. keep going, it just gives us shit to talk about when we're out taggin' shit up.

<<Fathem>>
10-26-2009, 08:14 PM
Pegcity- I like the first throwie simp. but fill the letters completly, might look that much nicer. the pencil simps are sick, although id loose the extension on the M, that makes it confusing on wether its an M or W.

Graffyk- Thats sick man

I tried movin the f a bit to fill the dead space in between the a and f, also i tried a different vanishing point...crits?

PegCityBoy
10-26-2009, 08:24 PM
Pegcity- I like the first throwie simp. but fill the letters completly, might look that much nicer. the pencil simps are sick, although id loose the extension on the M, that makes it confusing on wether its an M or W.

yea i tried but the the empty space left between the the A and M needs to be filled somehow an that seems to do it

also loose the unnecessary curves, don't force flow. and make the bars on your B connect so it's not like a 13.

suparjafar
10-26-2009, 08:28 PM
way better bafl. fix that b

Inlyn08
10-26-2009, 08:34 PM
i love how neither me, nor flawless victory give a fuck about anything that happens here, and all you fucks are all worked up about it. keep going, it just gives us shit to talk about when we're out taggin' shit up.

Cool story bro.
LOL..

zennegen
10-26-2009, 08:53 PM
your a winner.

Inlyn08
10-26-2009, 09:01 PM
your a winner.Glad you think so. I hope you "talk about me" next you're out taggin'..
LOL.

But seriously.. If you didn't give a fuck, you wouldn't have said shit in the first place. Follow?
Now we should probably stop wasting everyone's time with our asshole banter.

zennegen
10-26-2009, 09:06 PM
i just think it's funny, personally. i really don't care about it, seeing how it is the internet after all.

funhouseXcast
10-26-2009, 09:07 PM
how about you fucking cocksuckers take this shit to the battle thread so you can get off eachothers god damn dicks and let the whole purpose of this website (that would be graffiti) decide who's a faggot and who's not.

zennegen
10-26-2009, 09:12 PM
hahahaha

<<Fathem>>
10-26-2009, 09:23 PM
way better bafl. fix that b


yea i tried but the the empty space left between the the A and M needs to be filled somehow an that seems to do it
and make the bars on your B connect so it's not like a 13.

Ok so I fixed the B...now B not 13....also tighten the letters a bit closer. I kinda f'd the 3d, started to ouline with a "gel pen" but it didnt write over shit, then when i tried my classic silver, it just got fucked. not to mention the white out L...this ones just shit lmao. anyway, could i get some crits please?

-Empty-Can-
10-26-2009, 09:29 PM
Your 3D needs alot of work. Make the top bar of your F a little shorter and bring your L closer. Keep working on your letters.

Graffyk
10-26-2009, 09:36 PM
http://img3.imageshack.us/img3/6218/p1000611ya.jpg
i usually can't fit my Es... Is that the right symbol above the A for a long a?

armen-you're putting some effort into your pieces, coloring them and all, keep it up. Make your Rs look more like Rs instead of A, and the 3D is a little messed up.

scameretolme-i like the fill, but im not sure what it says. it looks nice, but i can't tell if it's crappy letter structure, or if it's actually good..still working on reading graffiti. Try going to the intermediate and see what people say there.


middle of argument bump :rolleyes:


bafl, i agree, much better. but you need to work on the 3D part. the shadow on the B isn't connected well to the letter, and overall a lot of parts are missing. the way i look at what parts need the 3d is you need to keep it consisitent. like think the shadow will be going to the bottom left, so a shadow belongs anywhere to the bottom of the letter and to the left of the figure. it really helps. keep practicing

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 09:45 PM
i love how neither me, nor flawless victory give a fuck about anything that happens here, and all you fucks are all worked up about it. keep going, it just gives us shit to talk about when we're out taggin' shit up.
Dawg,
you just said "taggin' shit up"

http://i34.tinypic.com/4jmf05.jpg

Keso
10-26-2009, 10:13 PM
your a winner.

Oh goddamn it! It's not that hard to put a god forsaken E at the end of you're! Which means you are. You're a winner. Ass.

<<Fathem>>
10-26-2009, 10:15 PM
bafl, i agree, much better. but you need to work on the 3D part. the shadow on the B isn't connected well to the letter, and overall a lot of parts are missing. the way i look at what parts need the 3d is you need to keep it consisitent. like think the shadow will be going to the bottom left, so a shadow belongs anywhere to the bottom of the letter and to the left of the figure. it really helps. keep practicing


Your 3D needs alot of work. Make the top bar of your F a little shorter and bring your L closer. Keep working on your letters.

Ok, letters closer again, umm F bar shortened, (i like it shorter). and i shadowed this using the left side, so everything on the left side. (forgot a bar). also now my bars are getting inconsitent sizing(going too fast)..so im prob done for the night, but could i get some crits on this simp?

suparjafar
10-26-2009, 10:15 PM
Dawg,
you just said "taggin' shit up"

http://i34.tinypic.com/4jmf05.jpg

ily.

zennegen
10-26-2009, 10:23 PM
why did you post a cartoon version of empty can? come on, man.

Keso
10-26-2009, 10:33 PM
why did you post a cartoon version of empty can? come on, man.

Excuse me Mr. Faggot,

We would would all greatly appreciate it if you would stop with your unintelligent comments because they are most certainly not amusing me nor anyone else. Battle or nothing. You are indeed very correct about this being the Internet. I would think that a Detroit rat didn't know what the internet was! Also you started all of this by talking shit. In conclusion I would like to kindly say shut the fuck up, so we can end this.

Thank you,

Mr. Keso2

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 10:37 PM
BAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW WWW
http://blogs.okayplayer.com/amandadiva/files/2008/11/jesse-crying.jpg

NlGGA, YOU MAD.

Keso
10-26-2009, 10:42 PM
NlGGA, YOU MAD.

pretty lulzy. I'll give you that.

zennegen
10-26-2009, 10:53 PM
dear ms. keso2, i would (would) like to inform you that saying "would would" in a statement that attempts to make you look somewhat intelligent makes you sound like you have no grammatical skills and/or sentence structure. furthermore, your ignorant comments about me living in detroit are not amusing, and make you look even more ignorant than before.

thank you,
Zennegen.

Flawless Victory
10-26-2009, 11:02 PM
I would love to see any of these kids say something bad about Detroit while actually in Detroit.

Inlyn08
10-26-2009, 11:08 PM
LOL...

All it takes is one troll to get the ball rollin'!
So, if the "pattern" stays true.. that other dude will post in here again talking about everyone being faggots..
And again.. he'll be the only one talking about dick riding.. and all that other Gay shit.

Ice packs for the butt hurt..
Invest.
http://i62.photobucket.com/albums/h85/popperahtzee/Retard-Girl-Butt--Hurt.jpg

SONE.
10-26-2009, 11:14 PM
wrrd keso. im diggin Ket's "K" in ur picture

LeaksOne
10-26-2009, 11:30 PM
where are the pics at? if you tag fags would shut your trap we could get back on track here.

drOping
10-27-2009, 01:24 AM
good call leaks

http://img193.imageshack.us/img193/5721/1003123x.jpg

boodah
10-27-2009, 01:32 AM
simpler, and don't overlap your letters so much. What does that handy say?

JMANN.23.HTK
10-27-2009, 05:09 AM
good call leaks

http://img193.imageshack.us/img193/5721/1003123x.jpg

Letter structure's weak, chocie in colours is odd, but like the pattern you got going on at the bottom, handy's not too bad, just don't overlap to much in future maybe make the letters a lot 'less higher' and a bit 'fatter', less shadow, better choice in colour, few more tag's and 'handy's' and it should work...

Keso
10-27-2009, 08:23 AM
good call leaks

http://img193.imageshack.us/img193/5721/1003123x.jpg

yeah work on your letter structure and straighten those lines up.. Dont use too much color for simps. If it is a simp...

Fetusr
10-27-2009, 08:35 AM
Yeah True I'm not really feeling that small e in between your letters either, try an upper case E and make it the same size as the other one, and take it easy on the fills for now.

Quick sketch I did last night, sorry for the shitty flick I should have scanned it but Im lazy.
http://i827.photobucket.com/albums/zz194/Ilovebabiez/quiksketch.jpg

provinT13
10-27-2009, 12:32 PM
^^ The stuff inside where the shadow is looks strange, and the shadow or 3d or whatever on the T is fucked up, i'm also not likin' the thingy on the F

Well I haven't sketched in months, finally got some free time, a simple throw

http://i25.photobucket.com/albums/c81/provinT13/Video200000-01.jpg

<<Fathem>>
10-27-2009, 01:12 PM
droping- yeah i like the fill but as everyone has said, letter structure, and i agreE with an upper case e.

Fetusr- I like it, but maybee extend the U right bar, just to keep it a little more structured.

Provin- I like the overall look of that sketch...but the hell if i could figure out what it says...maybee start with simpler?

I got this one from last night, my bars were starting to get un-even, im going to redo it tonight, any crits on this though?

gumOnShoe
10-27-2009, 04:21 PM
Bump.
http://i177.photobucket.com/albums/w203/_zEt_/Photo27.jpg

bump.

thatguy<~
10-27-2009, 04:45 PM
Gum on shoe- why the fuck did you repost that shit. looks like something any one person could do. style please.

gumOnShoe
10-27-2009, 05:04 PM
so it lacks style?
don't you think i already knew that? maybe some crits would help?? "anybody could do that", pfft.

zennegen
10-27-2009, 05:14 PM
Gum on shoe- why the fuck did you repost that shit. looks like something any one person could do. style please.

why don't you shut the fuck up and post something?

suparjafar
10-27-2009, 05:19 PM
^^ this

and snore it doesnt look bad. not a fan of that handies e though, just sayin

zennegen
10-27-2009, 05:42 PM
to be honest, though, i don't see the point in posting pics of really super basic sketches like that snore, even in the toy thread. it's good to see some type of attempt at progression from basic bubble letters, because anybody can do those, and doing them over and over again really won't make you any better...

just my own opinion.

gumOnShoe
10-27-2009, 05:47 PM
well, i think practicing simples does help, look over at the progression thread in a few...

provinT13
10-27-2009, 06:13 PM
http://i25.photobucket.com/albums/c81/provinT13/Video200000-01.jpg



Provin- I like the overall look of that sketch...but the hell if i could figure out what it says...maybee start with simpler?


For real dude? I think the only letter that's a bit off is the M, because I forgot to put a little curve for the middle part of it.

Bump for more...constructive crits.

Gum idk what to say about style, take a look at some real simple bubble letters, those look like bubble letters 5th graders draw in class when they're bored, not trying to insult, but there needs to be some definition of style and graff in the letters. Maybe look at the pops cereal logo and try that. Make your letters bigger and more poofy I guess might be one way to say it. I agree practicing simple helps, but your letters don't seem like a good platform to start. I'm trying to find the words for crits but I just can't lol, sorry, hope this helps.

take2
10-27-2009, 06:19 PM
I like the snore. Modify the S and the e to make them a little more than plain simple and it will look pretty nice.
Nems fix that m it doesnt look like one. maybe make the e more complex but the n is not soo bad. s is oke maybe you could add i little more too it

gumOnShoe
10-27-2009, 06:44 PM
For real dude? I think the only letter that's a bit off is the M, because I forgot to put a little curve for the middle part of it.

Bump for more...constructive crits.

Gum idk what to say about style, take a look at some real simple bubble letters, those look like bubble letters 5th graders draw in class when they're bored, not trying to insult, but there needs to be some definition of style and graff in the letters. Maybe look at the pops cereal logo and try that. Make your letters bigger and more poofy I guess might be one way to say it. I agree practicing simple helps, but your letters don't seem like a good platform to start. I'm trying to find the words for crits but I just can't lol, sorry, hope this helps.

well, the point of that sketch was to see how i can pull off basic letter structure, i wasn't trying to blow anybodies mind, i wasn't trying to do an ultra complicated wildstyle. i was just trying to fix up my structures before i start pulling off crazy ass shit. i do appreciate your opinion, though.

Fury
10-27-2009, 06:47 PM
gum - Your shit isn't hardcore enough.
Nems - lose the spots, work on every letter. The e looks okay. The N and S are both better than that M, but not as good as the e.

gumOnShoe
10-27-2009, 06:49 PM
hardcore enough for what?..

Fury
10-27-2009, 06:54 PM
For this board. If it ain't fucking wildstyle with hella MSK arrows all over the god damn place, then gtfo!

Inlyn08
10-27-2009, 07:25 PM
For this board. If it ain't fucking wildstyle with hella MSK arrows all over the god damn place, then gtfo!

LOL..
Man. Tough crowd.
Nems: I agree, that M needs some work. Doesn't really look like an M.. kind of looks like a weird K.
With like.. down syndrome. Or a saggy right side.. something.

What do I know.

take2
10-27-2009, 07:32 PM
Messin with patterns and simples. Which do you think is better????
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/53afd48d.jpg
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/0b56d908.jpg

Hepatitis
10-27-2009, 07:32 PM
Crits?
http://i869.photobucket.com/albums/ab260/hepatitis_M/Photo32.jpg?t=1256689872
http://i869.photobucket.com/albums/ab260/hepatitis_M/Photo31.jpg?t=1256689889

gumOnShoe
10-27-2009, 07:36 PM
Edit: @ Take2

the 2nd one looks better imo, they both look good, though..
one thing i don't like about both of them, and almost all of your pieces, is that you keep on cutting the piece off at the bottom, try doing it as a whole.

take2
10-27-2009, 07:37 PM
Learn letter structure and don't try to make things look "cool" cus it will make them look toy.

Hepatitis
10-27-2009, 07:39 PM
thanks, yeah sorry i know it kinda messes them up but i have other writing down there like school work and shii

Hepatitis
10-27-2009, 07:41 PM
what are you talking about like the drips and shit cuz they are just for shits and giggles and burns up more time man

take2
10-27-2009, 07:41 PM
The first one has potential if you fix the k and take that bump off the c. But the second one looks kinda dumb with the extending L

Inlyn08
10-27-2009, 07:43 PM
Messin with patterns and simples. Which do you think is better????
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/53afd48d.jpg
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/0b56d908.jpg

That's some pretty nice wood.. Mahogany?
I like the second one better, although..
The first one reminds me of some "Saved by the Bell" type of shit. LOL.. http://doasiwrite.files.wordpress.com/2009/04/zack.jpg

take2
10-27-2009, 07:45 PM
lol

Hepatitis
10-27-2009, 07:46 PM
why the fuck is the first one coming out an explosion and you say i try and make it cool haha

Hepatitis
10-27-2009, 07:47 PM
but yeah the second one is better in my opinion also

take2
10-27-2009, 07:49 PM
what are you talking about like the drips and shit cuz they are just for shits and giggles and burns up more time man

nah the drips are ok i meant the arrow from the l joining the k

take2
10-27-2009, 07:51 PM
Messin with patterns and simples. Which do you think is better????
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/53afd48d.jpg
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/0b56d908.jpg

bumpio

Hepatitis
10-27-2009, 07:52 PM
yeah i guess, thats what everyone says. i thought it looked nice but fuck do i know the only shit i am practiced at is stenciling

Graffyk
10-27-2009, 08:14 PM
http://img691.imageshack.us/img691/5307/p1000613.jpg
start of a sketch with a new stlye..


take- looking good, i like the second one better, but im not really liking the middle part of the e. it's barely connected. that's just me. and i yeah, you should try putting it in the middle of the page instead of at the bottom.

locke- the first one is a lot better. That C is looking awkward though.

take2
10-27-2009, 08:17 PM
Pinkie freestyle messaround
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/c7017c4c.jpg

RedEyes
10-27-2009, 08:37 PM
Take-Work on maken your letters flow n not so stiff.

http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f327/olredeyes/Photo19.jpg

||BREAD||
10-27-2009, 08:57 PM
i dont really like that last one take, to thin imo but the others are pretty sweet, like graffyk said "but im not really liking the middle part of the e. it's barely connected."

<<Fathem>>
10-27-2009, 10:16 PM
For real dude? I think the only letter that's a bit off is the M, because I forgot to put a little curve for the middle part of it.

Bump for more...constructive crits.

Gum idk what to say about style, take a look at some real simple bubble letters, those look like bubble letters 5th graders draw in class when they're bored, not trying to insult, but there needs to be some definition of style and graff in the letters. Maybe look at the pops cereal logo and try that. Make your letters bigger and more poofy I guess might be one way to say it. I agree practicing simple helps, but your letters don't seem like a good platform to start. I'm trying to find the words for crits but I just can't lol, sorry, hope this helps.

ok yeah, change the m then i read it. i just looked at it for a bit.

Darkeist
10-27-2009, 11:07 PM
http://i86.photobucket.com/albums/k100/skateaholic_2006/Snapshot_20091027_1.jpg

suparjafar
10-27-2009, 11:11 PM
maybe make those two o's a u, like snuz. lol but it looks good, z is a little fat compared to the s

RedEyes
10-27-2009, 11:54 PM
Dark-thats a waist of paper and a post, try actually sketching before you even begin to flick ur shit.

<<Fathem>>
10-28-2009, 01:10 AM
take- Id say A structure, either then that, diggin the simps.

sico- ill man. just nice.

gum on shoe- lose the fancy star, shove the letters overr, so they are inbetween but underneth. SNO...kinda thing.
.................................................. .................................................. .................................................. ..RE

Dark-try bigger?

Graffyk- just not feelin that random bottom right extension 3d type thing, either then that it looks good on my end.

Hepatitis- letter structure, and size consistency.

And could i please get some crits on this?

take2
10-28-2009, 06:26 AM
Bafl follow your own crits. Learn letter structure, don't give the letter random bends and connect the middle bar of the b to the rest of the letter

provinT13
10-28-2009, 11:58 AM
Graffyk I think you're getting ahead of yourself

Redeyes I like it, espically how the S and the C go together from top to bottom, and the i and o go together.

Fathem Listen to take2

http://i25.photobucket.com/albums/c81/provinT13/Video100000-03.jpg

take2
10-28-2009, 03:02 PM
Bring the middle bar of the e in farther and mess with the s cus i'm not really diggin it

Fetusr
10-28-2009, 03:02 PM
http://i827.photobucket.com/albums/zz194/Ilovebabiez/quiksketch.jpg

Can I please get some decent crits on this?

take2
10-28-2009, 03:03 PM
the top left thing on the f is kinda dum. And bottom of the e is wierd. Cool 3d. Pretty nice simple

boodah
10-28-2009, 03:21 PM
If you ask me, the 3d makes no sense. All your letters need some work. The bottom of the F needs to be longer, and yeah take that extension off. Bend the vertical bar of the T to make it flow with the rest of your letters. It looks out of place. The extension of the horizontal bar on your U is unnecessary. The S needs to be more like an S and less like a backward Z. The R is nice, but the top could be better. If you ask me, and again this is my opinion, you are cutting the end of the bars too much. The piece just doesn't flow in general.

weakfingers
10-28-2009, 03:24 PM
^^^What that dude said




Can I please get some decent crits on this?

Your 3-d Is wrong its going to all the wrong directions keep it going to one point

<<Fathem>>
10-28-2009, 03:34 PM
Bafl follow your own crits. Learn letter structure, don't give the letter random bends and connect the middle bar of the b to the rest of the letter

yeah lol, i have some that are further back in the forum that are just simps with full letter structure...but the bend in the f is because there was ALOT of dead space between it and the a....and the l is same thing, between it and f.

hpir
10-28-2009, 03:55 PM
Fetusr- your bars are pretty good
http://i605.photobucket.com/albums/tt133/hpirrung/grinoneee002.jpg
crits?

provinT13
10-28-2009, 03:58 PM
Your N is way to big compared to the other letters, and it might just be me, but there is something strange about the 3d on the I in the first one.

KRE1
10-28-2009, 03:59 PM
hpir i saw the rest of those u was working on i think that super simp that u did was legit. the bottom one that u posted rite here is pretty good imo tho i would either follow thru with the wavy shit or drop it... half nd half seems a lil goofy.

Neon_M@
10-28-2009, 04:43 PM
grin, are you gonna color that out? you have good 3d a balanced letters (besides n a little near the bottom right). color every piece, even if it is bad, pracctice is practice.

a piece i did yesterday

take2
10-28-2009, 05:01 PM
For shits and giggles. Messin around all done during school.
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/b07d6d10.jpg
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/36cf76c0.jpg
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/5d056712.jpg

KRE1
10-28-2009, 05:11 PM
diggin that second one take.

neon... i dont want to be harsh but i would suggest that you rethink everything ur doing.

Cranium
10-28-2009, 05:11 PM
Crits?
http://i26.photobucket.com/albums/c141/Tek9259/lastscan34.jpg

http://i26.photobucket.com/albums/c141/Tek9259/Iron.jpg

http://i26.photobucket.com/albums/c141/Tek9259/lastscan3.jpg

funhouseXcast
10-28-2009, 05:38 PM
take, the last one is fresh,

iron, copy keyboard letters and watch others so you know what bends what ways and what doesn't.

funhouseXcast
10-28-2009, 05:38 PM
take, the last one is fresh,

iron, copy keyboard letters and watch others so you know what bends what ways and what doesn't.

sinkilla1
10-28-2009, 05:50 PM
try at a new style of peice i know its sloppy i had no thin black marker
http://img3.imageshack.us/img3/5863/1028091845.th.jpg (http://img3.imageshack.us/i/1028091845.jpg/)

sinkilla1
10-28-2009, 05:51 PM
try at a new style of peice i know its sloppy i had no thin black marker
http://img3.imageshack.us/img3/5863/1028091845.th.jpg (http://img3.imageshack.us/i/1028091845.jpg/)

sinkilla1
10-28-2009, 05:51 PM
double post my bad....

take2
10-28-2009, 05:54 PM
Finished! I messed up on the yellow back graound thing. but w/e. crits???
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/eb016a4a.jpg
Sinkilla. Dont make arrows from a bar itself and touch up on letter structure.

sinkilla1
10-28-2009, 05:56 PM
take what kinda marker u use for the green up top and middle

take2
10-28-2009, 05:58 PM
prismas

sinkilla1
10-28-2009, 06:00 PM
im loving that top green and i made a sketch in school same style i think better im just fillin it right now

suparjafar
10-28-2009, 06:01 PM
take i actually do like that, good job except a doesnt flow imo

ceje go simple

sinkilla1
10-28-2009, 06:34 PM
http://img28.imageshack.us/img28/9475/1028091930.th.jpg (http://img28.imageshack.us/i/1028091930.jpg/)
pretty simple no?

Neon_M@
10-28-2009, 06:37 PM
where exactly is a good place to "start"???

im lost in this whole graffiti world. but it doesnt really help that im new to drawing and graffiti altogether (drawing class will hopefully help my hands).

suparjafar
10-28-2009, 06:46 PM
ceje yeah that looks 100X better than the other piece you posted.

sinkilla1
10-28-2009, 06:50 PM
well u got put in fact that that otehr one was my first try

KRE1
10-28-2009, 07:45 PM
sin that J is a bit too big imo if u sized down the top to make it level with the rest of the letters i think it would look really good. nice job.

to the other dood that said was new to graffiti... try practicing your handstyle. work on that until u dont want to do it anymore. then do some more. everyone says that handstyles are the foundations for graffiti, and i tend to agree.

Neon_M@
10-28-2009, 07:55 PM
handstyle, like messing around with letters?
like practice making letters look cool? (like not 3d or a piece just the alphabet)

ive tried wrighting out the alphabet in cool letters, some arent bad, but sometimes its just like i have no idea what im doing.
but i guess i would get better after i morph the letter e millions of times. plus cleaner.

KRE1
10-28-2009, 07:59 PM
dont try so hard to make them "cool." you first need to practice your own handwriting skill. then you tweak it slightly to formulate your own style. fill a couple books up with handy stuff, practicing different letter combos and words, and you will get it.

and yeah. not 3d. not pieces. not even throwies. just handys.

but hey thats my opinion but i think a few people on here would agree with me on this one.

-Empty-Can-
10-28-2009, 08:02 PM
A handstlye is your signature. Not like bubble letters but letters you write with. Handwriting

KRE1
10-28-2009, 08:05 PM
A handstlye is your signature. Not like bubble letters but letters you write with. Handwriting

there we go.

take2
10-28-2009, 08:16 PM
Simple
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/c102525f.jpg

KRE1
10-28-2009, 08:18 PM
i liked ur other one take

the top bar of the K looks outta whack imo

take2
10-28-2009, 08:21 PM
i liked ur other one take

the top bar of the K looks outta whack imo

Ya ik the k bar sucks a little. Doin simps cus i need a little inspiration.

Hepatitis
10-28-2009, 08:22 PM
yeah but if its gonna be a simple should be clean... those lines are trash

Graffyk
10-28-2009, 08:32 PM
grin-nice work, but the N is too big.


take- i like the third one of those three the best.

iron- use barsssss! it needs lots of work before you start using stickers


http://img202.imageshack.us/img202/24/p1000614.jpg

S

cocacola
10-28-2009, 08:39 PM
im about to do a watercolor piece this week
and bers ima hit you up when im done with yours

suparjafar
10-28-2009, 08:40 PM
take just clean it up.

http://i563.photobucket.com/albums/ss72/suparjafar/PIC-0140.jpg
http://i563.photobucket.com/albums/ss72/suparjafar/PIC-0141.jpg

take2
10-28-2009, 09:27 PM
critttssss
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/20cb0b33.jpg

rush2
10-28-2009, 09:31 PM
much better

zennegen
10-28-2009, 09:40 PM
iron- use barsssss! it needs lots of work before you start using stickers


http://img202.imageshack.us/img202/24/p1000614.jpg



take your own advice.

idk401
10-28-2009, 10:02 PM
http://i532.photobucket.com/albums/ee326/urboynoe93/225707.jpg

idk401
10-28-2009, 10:03 PM
http://i532.photobucket.com/albums/ee326/urboynoe93/163237.jpg

a quick battle with some kid.