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Meph*
04-16-2010, 07:58 PM
redo- i like the styled on the redo on top but the drips on the E are wack, and the 2nd one is pretty sick but i agree, that E is to thin

redeyes- i see it too plain and you letters need help 3d effect came out ok though

http://i939.photobucket.com/albums/ad240/Meph_one/nothing.jpg

http://i939.photobucket.com/albums/ad240/Meph_one/mephme.jpg

http://i939.photobucket.com/albums/ad240/Meph_one/colorfull.jpg

crits please..

Zookyook
04-16-2010, 08:07 PM
is that a nissan silvia? lol noice!.... i think the structure in the first pic is the best, the second one has potential but itd look better with a perspective 3d instead of just all going one place... same with the last one but u just went a little nuts with the fill, makes it harder to read, also the connections are a bit shaky like the ME and PH, the EP one isnt bad though, i like the numbers in the bg... i dont like the quotes...

-Empty-Can-
04-16-2010, 08:18 PM
http://i713.photobucket.com/albums/ww131/pics4bscience/slanter003Medium.jpg
heres something i just freestyled, But I liked it so i went back and finished. has a few flaws but I'll re-draw it soon. crits.

bump 4 critique

Meph*
04-16-2010, 08:18 PM
lol yeah its a silvia didnt think anyone here would know that, but yeh i noticed the crazy fill in the last one as soon as i backed up n looked at it lol

RedEyes
04-16-2010, 08:33 PM
STOTR-Best ive seen from you, just work on that S and work on your consistency in your bars.

Zookyook
04-16-2010, 08:34 PM
empty i like the colors but the bars are really hurtin, on the S especially... and pull ur 3d down to the left instead of straight to the right, itll make the R easier cuz the 3d on a big circle is tough and it looks kinda jank

viseversa101
04-16-2010, 08:38 PM
akor-a different fill maybe? i suggest redo refill repost

meph-pimp shit bottom one needs a thicker outline

stotr-good, hate the dot in the r though

-Empty-Can-
04-16-2010, 09:07 PM
empty i like the colors but the bars are really hurtin, on the S especially...
Thanks. Like I said it was just some random doodle that I liked and went back to finish. I'm gonna redraw it and make it more consistent and better.

markingz.
04-16-2010, 09:50 PM
everything on this page is heat

One Evil
04-16-2010, 10:57 PM
zook that is fukin dope!
sinkilla u shulda have put them drips on every letter but other then that both sketches are legit! keep it up!

http://img27.imageshack.us/img27/3281/dscf5143y.jpg (http://img27.imageshack.us/i/dscf5143y.jpg/)
http://img691.imageshack.us/img691/559/dscf5141.jpg (http://img691.imageshack.us/i/dscf5141.jpg/)
ikno the S is kinda outta place in ways but crits wuld be dope

viseversa101
04-17-2010, 12:17 AM
sek-the bends are oddly placed
and for my taste i like letters fatter...thats me tho
then the background black isnt a shadow cuz of whats ontop the k
so i guess its a background? shoulda bubbled it off or sumthin

FlippingChickens
04-17-2010, 12:43 AM
http://i456.photobucket.com/albums/qq287/flippinchickens/DSCN3263.jpg

http://i456.photobucket.com/albums/qq287/flippinchickens/DSCN3260.jpg

http://i456.photobucket.com/albums/qq287/flippinchickens/DSCN3261.jpg

http://i456.photobucket.com/albums/qq287/flippinchickens/DSCN3259.jpg

viseversa101
04-17-2010, 12:56 AM
tofe-
good throwie
nice shading
im glad u got it where theres a band or a curve a little darker...adds so much more
i see that tag down there tho n it looks wack
u did good with the t's...but i see alot of shitty e's

gumOnShoe
04-17-2010, 10:06 AM
wooney wtf dawg u got worse ?/
bump cause i dont think anyone looked at it ^^
http://i42.tinypic.com/mhrswj.jpg

bump this.

shem
04-17-2010, 10:13 AM
thanks syne and vice for the ideas...

GASM!
04-17-2010, 10:17 AM
Yo' Zookyook I know it's a bit late but I just wanted to say I really dig what you posted. I'm pretty new so I don't have much crits for you, I'm sorry for that. I just wanted to give some credit, didn't think you had enough comments on it. I love how the blue "slime" or whatever does the \ for your N and the crosses for your A and T. I think it has really good flow man. I'd like to see it painted.

Zookyook
04-17-2010, 10:37 AM
thanks a lot gasm... ive been tryin to work out a style that works but isnt necessarily typical graff that everyone does... its hard to make it legible though but ill put out some fresh shit kinda soon, just recently got back into my markers so that ones kinda rusty

One Evil
04-17-2010, 10:39 AM
http://i931.photobucket.com/albums/ad159/datkewlkid09/graff001-19.jpg
juss a sketch i wont finish
shit waz way bette rin pencil but i got high and fucked it up with a black deco
http://i931.photobucket.com/albums/ad159/datkewlkid09/graff004-13.jpg

work on ur shit.. u said u think ur tags r dope.. they are garbage bro.. keep drawing and dont be so full of urself.

NICCSACC
04-17-2010, 10:39 AM
bob ross level

One Evil
04-17-2010, 10:48 AM
sek-the bends are oddly placed
and for my taste i like letters fatter...thats me tho
then the background black isnt a shadow cuz of whats ontop the k
so i guess its a background? shoulda bubbled it off or sumthin

nah no background.. just filled it all in for the 3d hah... ya the letters are pretty much mangled .. tryin to clean it more but word.....

what about the throw up.. dece throw or should i keep givin it some more. hah

Inlyn08
04-17-2010, 11:55 AM
http://i39.tinypic.com/347te14.jpg
Something I did on my break at work, not really too sure how I feel about it. Trying a new name from what I normally run with.
I know for sure I hate that R..
Crit it up. Need some feedback.

GASM!
04-17-2010, 12:17 PM
Thinking about painting this (or something similar - sort of like my last post) sometime this weekend. I got in some Ironlak and I'm dying to use it.

I know this is just all shades with a pencil, but I have a decent amount of colors to work with which I think will look good with it in the end.

I did take someone's advice (don't remember who) and changed the M around.

http://i414.photobucket.com/albums/pp230/RockstarLDG/photo3.jpg

Any crits appreciated.

Fury
04-17-2010, 12:23 PM
I'm going to do what all you guys need to do: GIVE CRITS.

Gasm - I don't like your fill, and your force field/splash is too thick. Also, the top of your S is too big and it's really hard to tell that's an A. The G looks pretty bad too. And the M's alright I guess.

Ares - I like your character, it reminds me of Twisted Metal for some reason haha. Your A and R are on point, but that E is ugly, and your S could use some work.

shem
04-17-2010, 12:57 PM
http://farm5.static.flickr.com/4069/4528237565_db10e5fefd.jpg


far from done..

CrustOner
04-17-2010, 01:13 PM
Bring the EM closer to the SH

W_G_O_N_E
04-17-2010, 01:23 PM
seems like the s is kinda small and compacted to me shem, but like the style furshur

Mr yarbles
04-17-2010, 01:54 PM
http://i42.tinypic.com/2exq8a9.jpg
http://i43.tinypic.com/2n7ic00.jpg

Shebang.

shem
04-17-2010, 02:43 PM
seems like the s is kinda small and compacted to me shem, but like the style furshur

agreed. lost all ability to scale shit...


bc i got high.

CrustOner
04-17-2010, 03:07 PM
Gruet?

Inlyn08
04-17-2010, 07:19 PM
Ares - I like your character, it reminds me of Twisted Metal for some reason haha. Your A and R are on point, but that E is ugly, and your S could use some work.
When I saw this, it made me hit the books.
Sadly, when I went to color I realized I had shit for markers. Less then what I thought, that is. So, at any rate.. not happy about the colors and I know it sure needs some tweaking.
Crits, suggestions, advice.
Thanks!
http://i39.tinypic.com/2a0cacy.jpg
The clown.. LOL
EDIT: OH SHIT LOL.. I forgot to color in the gums....

Inlyn08
04-17-2010, 07:21 PM
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y65/1TrueSledge/ironhide_facepalm2.jpg
^ Describes what I just did....

Zookyook
04-17-2010, 07:26 PM
Bring the EM closer to the SH
this is dead on... like i said maybe intertwine them bitches...

and gasm fury pretty much said it all... that outline is too much and distracting, and if u wanna do a bubble fill like that get some markers or somethin cuz it doesnt look right being the same color as the outline, go simpler thats all

ares the first char and letters were way better...

smokeitup
04-17-2010, 10:54 PM
http://i883.photobucket.com/albums/ac31/smokeitup421/Image116_12.jpg

http://i883.photobucket.com/albums/ac31/smokeitup421/Image004453542.jpg

Mr yarbles
04-17-2010, 10:59 PM
Gruet?

Yeah.

DirtyDozen520
04-17-2010, 11:12 PM
i dont really like the first flik but i like the k and E on the second one,.

ok so i changed my name to Evok or Evox (i know lol, no one asked)
juss messin around today
http://i137.photobucket.com/albums/q234/D12-Proof/Mobile%20Uploads/Photo0068.jpg
http://i137.photobucket.com/albums/q234/D12-Proof/Mobile%20Uploads/Photo0069.jpg

viseversa101
04-18-2010, 12:06 AM
smoke-nice work, keep it up
evok- i guarantee sum1 will fight with u over that name eventually lol
but nice so far none the less

cocacola
04-18-2010, 12:50 PM
http://farm5.static.flickr.com/4027/4530243740_42f7abde6f.jpg
http://farm5.static.flickr.com/4072/4526641017_e2e86e77fe.jpg
http://farm5.static.flickr.com/4002/4523601917_7c4c63e3d9.jpg
http://farm5.static.flickr.com/4044/4503395528_728b62f1bd.jpg

Zookyook
04-18-2010, 12:59 PM
the little SIT 3d one is pretty nice man.... and i cant draw shit on a computer so the bottom one is nice to me! hah... just looks like u need to smooth the bars out, the lines and thicknesses are kinda shaky

cocacola
04-18-2010, 01:00 PM
thanks man! and ok i do that!

Zookyook
04-18-2010, 01:03 PM
cool, the letter structure in the first sketch is the strongest so try to work in that direction

take2
04-18-2010, 02:25 PM
fuckaround I think I might have shrinkin letter syndrome ^_^
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/a12fffe9.jpg

shore 616
04-18-2010, 03:43 PM
coca - love that squirrel, R's need work but the rest is looking nice,
take - obviously a bit sloppy, but likes it
yarbles and smokeitup - lovely

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee278/backwards_halo/Photo6-2.jpg?t=1271623106

little ting

take2
04-18-2010, 03:49 PM
I'm feelin that S. Maybe bring the bar on the K up a bit? maybe not idk w/e you like. Definatley thicken parts of the G up and possibly tilt the top bar downwards the the one on the S

viseversa101
04-18-2010, 05:31 PM
steppin out of str8s to have sumthin else to color
lately ive been playin with blending colors and wanted sumthin different
first pic came from 2 pencils taped together
the 2nd was done with a sharpie...didnt realize how long that style takes if ur piky
3rd is a bubble version of the fourth that markings suggested
2 the fourth is what it is

i duno when il get around to coloring but figured id post to livin up this thread



http://i47.photobucket.com/albums/f185/viseversa101/Blackbooks/SDC11000.jpg
http://i47.photobucket.com/albums/f185/viseversa101/Blackbooks/SDC11001.jpg
http://i47.photobucket.com/albums/f185/viseversa101/Blackbooks/SDC11002.jpg
http://i47.photobucket.com/albums/f185/viseversa101/Blackbooks/SDC11003.jpg

take2
04-18-2010, 05:39 PM
mezzaround. A bit slopy cus I don't have finetipped paint markers.
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/2b1400f3.jpg
Lol toez^

gumOnShoe
04-18-2010, 05:43 PM
nice sandals, dude.

viseversa101
04-18-2010, 05:48 PM
daaam cut those toe nails

Inlyn08
04-18-2010, 05:49 PM
That one toe nail is starting to look huge..
LOL

gumOnShoe
04-18-2010, 05:54 PM
homie got those knives yo, lol.
i just noticed.

FlippingChickens
04-18-2010, 06:15 PM
http://i456.photobucket.com/albums/qq287/flippinchickens/DSCN3264.jpg

Vinnie Paz
04-18-2010, 06:23 PM
http://i369.photobucket.com/albums/oo137/CAN-KILLER/p_00014.jpg

Vinnie Paz
04-18-2010, 06:27 PM
http://i369.photobucket.com/albums/oo137/CAN-KILLER/SSPX7588.jpg
http://i369.photobucket.com/albums/oo137/CAN-KILLER/SSPX7499-1.jpg

take2
04-18-2010, 07:37 PM
thank for the crits guys ^_^ Ima cut em and postup

take2
04-18-2010, 08:15 PM
btw wrong thread vinnie

LIZARD
04-18-2010, 10:22 PM
http://img89.imageshack.us/img89/8712/photoon20100418at2318.jpg
i was doodlin and i actually like this,idk if ill keep the face though...crits?

viseversa101
04-18-2010, 10:27 PM
the g needs more flow with the rest of it, maybe draw it backwards
the bottom of the g fatter, add ur swipe to the top

LIZARD
04-18-2010, 10:29 PM
cant do it backwards...it would look like im writin core

viseversa101
04-18-2010, 10:34 PM
i meant start with e then r o n so on

CrustOner
04-18-2010, 10:41 PM
Just make the line at the bottom part of the G longer. Don't bring the circle part of the R so far in. That E needs work.

del4sel
04-18-2010, 10:54 PM
All I gotta say is change the rest of the letters to match the style of the G and go generic or give the G some funky style and match the rest accordingly, but try to make the style of each letter consistent with the one before it. Looks alright though, keep it up.

LIZARD
04-18-2010, 10:56 PM
i tried matchin every letter with the pointy flares on the top but i didnt put one on the top of the g its kinda in the middle of it

SicK-
04-18-2010, 11:46 PM
Gore- i agree with everyone else your G just doesnt really fit with the rest of the letters
http://i618.photobucket.com/albums/tt265/gzus1994/Dais3.jpg
crits please?

del4sel
04-19-2010, 07:25 AM
put more stress on symmetry than originality

NICCSACC
04-19-2010, 09:53 AM
http://i1036.photobucket.com/albums/a446/biggniccsacc/DSC00099.jpg

LIZARD
04-19-2010, 12:57 PM
http://i944.photobucket.com/albums/ad286/lad17/Photoon2010-04-19at1238-1.jpg
better G?

Zookyook
04-19-2010, 01:09 PM
try the G i gave u in the exchange thread ;-)

LIZARD
04-19-2010, 01:25 PM
thats what i ried with the first one biut i tried tweakin it so it wasnt a bite but everyone told me to change it

Zookyook
04-19-2010, 01:31 PM
ok, practice makes perfect.... best way to do my G is start in the middle, make an arrow pointing left and circle it.... should look like a G hah

LIZARD
04-19-2010, 01:34 PM
yeah its hard cuz my throw G's look like C's

gumOnShoe
04-19-2010, 02:36 PM
http://img89.imageshack.us/img89/8712/photoon20100418at2318.jpg
i was doodlin and i actually like this,idk if ill keep the face though...crits?

that face looks tough.
that a G? or a C at the beginning?

LIZARD
04-19-2010, 02:39 PM
its supposed to be a G.what G do u like better that one or the second one?

gumOnShoe
04-19-2010, 02:40 PM
yeah, the second one, keep at it man.

LIZARD
04-19-2010, 02:42 PM
hahaha yeah really doesnt answear the question

gumOnShoe
04-19-2010, 02:57 PM
doesn't it?
i figured picking which G i liked best, and telling you would answer the question of "which G do you like better?", but apparently that wasn't the way to properly answer the question...

take2
04-19-2010, 03:17 PM
fuckaround I think I might have shrinkin letter syndrome ^_^
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/a12fffe9.jpg

bump

take2
04-19-2010, 03:19 PM
mezzaround. A bit slopy cus I don't have finetipped paint markers.
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/2b1400f3.jpg
Lol toez^

bump again can someone give me crits that arent about my uncut toe nails

NICCSACC
04-19-2010, 03:22 PM
looks pretty sloppy. guess you get an A for effort. i kinda like that E tho. alot.

gumOnShoe
04-19-2010, 03:32 PM
http://i797.photobucket.com/albums/yy253/lolapples/Photo33.jpg

funhouseXcast
04-19-2010, 04:24 PM
I've been using Sate2 for over half a year now and today i decided it was time for a name change.

no idea what i want to use though.

viseversa101
04-19-2010, 04:27 PM
how good r u? post what uve done in the past

take2
04-19-2010, 04:35 PM
very legit snore...
Don't know if I like this it's sloppy but whats new
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/ee7dffcd.jpg

FlippingChickens
04-19-2010, 05:29 PM
Snore - diggin that throwy

take - looks dope

http://i456.photobucket.com/albums/qq287/flippinchickens/DSCN3266-1.jpg

http://i456.photobucket.com/albums/qq287/flippinchickens/DSCN3264.jpg

http://i456.photobucket.com/albums/qq287/flippinchickens/DSCN3259.jpg

http://i456.photobucket.com/albums/qq287/flippinchickens/DSCN3263.jpg

Zookyook
04-19-2010, 05:45 PM
take- the one with red bubbles is ok, the one with blue bubbles ur trying too hard and it just looks bad, i just dont like changing styles for each letter... the last one is good though, the gray just makes it look sloppy, use a bright color for the outline...

gumonshoe- it looks real nice, dope throw, but i thought of somethin to make the S match the O and E a little more, try somethin like this maybe? (but cleaner of course)
http://farm5.static.flickr.com/4001/4536352230_a86ec4814b_o.jpg

tofe that top one is ur best bet... just watch which bars are straight and which are curved... a few places one side of the bar is curved and the other is straight and that never looks right, u can mix the 2 (curves and straight) but not on the same bar u feel what im sayin?

LIZARD
04-19-2010, 05:52 PM
gum-for some reason when i read that the first time i dont think "the second one" came up or i just had a retarded moment...i was just way to confused for something so little

FlippingChickens
04-19-2010, 05:59 PM
zook - bro i dont get what u mean?

Zookyook
04-19-2010, 06:08 PM
its easy... im bored so ill take the time and explain hah... i circled a few spots where the bars just dont match up from one side to the other, and thats why the piece is lacking as a whole u know what i mean? when a line goes a certain direction then it only looks right if the other line on the opposite side of the bar is going in the exact direction (or at a defined, constant angle).... when it all matches up ur shit will look way better mayn...

http://farm3.static.flickr.com/2565/4536415476_ff82f58e02_o.jpg

if u look at the second pic u posted the bottom of the O is a prime example....

take2
04-19-2010, 06:55 PM
my socks and cakies are once again in a photo lol. re outheres another. I reoutlined the one in yellow and it looks cleaner. Ill post it up a bit later
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/facc1e8d.jpg

LIZARD
04-19-2010, 07:40 PM
lose that extension on the T or put it on the other side...it looks like JAKE

take2
04-19-2010, 07:43 PM
o yea lol

LIZARD
04-19-2010, 07:48 PM
i also just noticed that your A kinda looks like an M...put a hole in it to make it look like an A more

Freaker
04-19-2010, 08:38 PM
http://img208.imageshack.us/img208/2451/picture19c.jpg

Shay70
04-19-2010, 09:56 PM
tofe-watch the 3d (unless thats what your goin for)

crits on this

BlacktodaFuture
04-19-2010, 10:17 PM
http://i667.photobucket.com/albums/vv35/Snowmonkey117/DSC03588.jpg?t=1271733064

http://i667.photobucket.com/albums/vv35/Snowmonkey117/DSC03587.jpg?t=1271733167

http://i667.photobucket.com/albums/vv35/Snowmonkey117/DSC03586.jpg?t=1271733237

Crits:

To me: I'm iffy on the S bc of the extension on the bottom. The arrow is kinda big and the double extensions off that bar im not really feeling and they seem unnessary

Icon: Bars, not triangles.

Freak: That throw is busted. Go simpler.

Take: Just watch your bars but most of your shit is not half bad.

ZOOKYORK KNOWS HOW TO GIVE CRITS!

NICCSACC
04-20-2010, 09:35 AM
tofe-watch the 3d (unless thats what your goin for)

crits on this
yo man that shits kinda SICCCK bro the colors are pretty TIGHT id say. KEEP THAT SHIT UP MAN!

gumOnShoe
04-20-2010, 02:33 PM
http://i797.photobucket.com/albums/yy253/lolapples/Photo38.jpg

take2
04-20-2010, 03:14 PM
yo gum those throwies are fresh. Wanna exchange before I start bitin you ^_^

gumOnShoe
04-20-2010, 03:42 PM
you can bite all you want bro, no anger here.
but sure, PM me what you write, or if you're comfortable with posting it here, do so.

Edit: OH nevermind, i already saw what you write.
ok, i'll do take.
hook me up with an Ikue.

Edit#2: Ok, so i orginally was gonna' make the Top of the the T higher, cause it's short. sadly however, it didn't come out that way, and this green crayola marker i found on the floor on the street is almost dead, so i didn't want to use up more ink cause i like the dry effect this crayola marker gives...
http://i797.photobucket.com/albums/yy253/lolapples/Photo39.jpg

take2
04-20-2010, 04:15 PM
aight ima do a straight and post it in the exchange thread and I'll pm it to ya. I want a throwie though those are fresh

edit: aight thanks bro heres yours
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/c4b49a26.jpg
The trowie and hand suck but w/e

-Empty-Can-
04-20-2010, 04:42 PM
http://i713.photobucket.com/albums/ww131/pics4bscience/throwstraightpiece002Medium.jpg
a combination of a throw,straight and piece. Tried to give it that progressive feel if you know what I mean. crits

RustySpoon
04-20-2010, 04:53 PM
empty can- I understand what youre trying to do but it just doesnt work IMO, the S throws it off completely. Take off the extension on the bottom left of the R too.

BlacktodaFuture
04-20-2010, 04:58 PM
CRITS!?!?

gumonshoe: Really feelin those throws.
Stotr: the top of those T's are kinda big and that top of the S has too many bumps imo.

markingz.
04-20-2010, 04:58 PM
hey empty can thats dope man good job

FlippingChickens
04-20-2010, 05:05 PM
safe - the k is retarded,the bar coming out the c going to the left looks wierd next to the u,the dexter shit is good but im not fealing the arrows

gum - digging the throws especially that lower case a,the k is bad tho,like your e on the pencil one

empty - the s looks bad with everything else..the r looks bad on the bottom left

-Empty-Can-
04-20-2010, 05:08 PM
The S isn't supposed to match. Please refer to the caption under the photo.

FlippingChickens
04-20-2010, 05:16 PM
i dont like the thing poping to the left on the top part of ur s throw


http://i456.photobucket.com/albums/qq287/flippinchickens/DSCN3267.jpg

RustySpoon
04-20-2010, 05:39 PM
FlippingChickens - I'm diggin those throwies but the bottom letters seem like you're trying too hard.

I know I fucked up on the fill.
http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq212/BFP_Sticky/Picture212.jpg
crits?

Zookyook
04-20-2010, 05:45 PM
gotsta work on ur 3d tofe, many mistakes there... and remember what i said yesterday about the lines in ur bars not matching up...

stot it just doesnt look right, i see what ur goin for, and the S is slick for a throw, but im not diggin the style changes in the same piece

safer i like the S, but the arrow extension shouldnt be thicker than the bars in the letter IMO, and it looks too much like the shape of an A... the spot thats shattered might throw u off when u try to make out the S, so maybe shatter the extension part and itll fix both problems...... the fuck china just seems to start a bit small and get bigger on both words, bring the left bar of the F up, and the left bar of the H down and make the C a little bigger and it should look right... is that a thorough crit? hah

gumOnShoe
04-20-2010, 05:48 PM
gum - digging the throws especially that lower case a,the k is bad tho,like your e on the pencil one
left

E? those two E's are the same, only difference is that i messed up trying to put shadow in the middle of the E.

oh, and wann'a help me out with the K? never did like how the K's looked like when i did em'.

Zookyook
04-20-2010, 05:57 PM
the K is fresh gum... change the E though, dont put a 3d in the middle like that, just a simple horizontal line would work better

take2
04-20-2010, 06:05 PM
Heres a recent one crit pleasse
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/b1f3e278.jpg
TOFE- straighten up your bars dawg. The T, F, and bottom of the E are a bit wack (bad) I like your 3-d idea just straighten it up a bit
STOT- I see what your going for but its not really workin. The letters alone are nice, but put together it's not that good. Though I'M FEELIN THE TOT AND R (oops caps lock I'm not feelin them THAT much lol) Do some nice straights with those and what up wit the fill?
Ikue- thanks
Safe- S is good now finish that dawg

gumOnShoe
04-20-2010, 06:06 PM
@ Zookyook

well, idk. the 3d on the middle of the E was a mistake. D:
i was trying to give the E more personality by opening it up, cause that "horizontal line" thing is really suppose a backwards 3 lookin' E, y'know?
idk though, i hate the single horizontal line personally.

Freaker
04-20-2010, 06:07 PM
Tofe: FOR GODS SAKE LEARN 2 3D.

gumOnShoe
04-20-2010, 06:13 PM
aight ima do a straight and post it in the exchange thread and I'll pm it to ya. I want a throwie though those are fresh

edit: aight thanks bro heres yours
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/c4b49a26.jpg
The trowie and hand suck but w/e

i fucks wit' these straights, dude.
and the throw isn't that bad, the K is tough too.

Zookyook
04-20-2010, 06:18 PM
yea the E has been done over and over.... maybe kick out the bottom of it to match the kick on the K... u could do the same point at the top left of the T and i think itd come together nice

Myth603
04-20-2010, 06:42 PM
pretty much my first real drawing, critique me.

http://i317.photobucket.com/albums/mm362/mitchconley/myth02.jpg

take2
04-20-2010, 06:50 PM
Your kind off getting it. Letters are constructed out of bars which you use in the H and M.
Try to keep all bars the same size and don't do any add ons. Read the new to graffiti thread and don't try to make it look to much like graffiti at first

LeaksOne
04-20-2010, 08:53 PM
take work on cleaning it up just a bit. other then that the letters are straight

RustySpoon
04-20-2010, 09:03 PM
FlippingChickens - I'm diggin those throwies but the bottom letters seem like you're trying too hard.

I know I fucked up on the fill.
http://i449.photobucket.com/albums/qq212/BFP_Sticky/Picture212.jpg
crits?

Bump for crits

funhouseXcast
04-20-2010, 09:10 PM
i feel like that A and the K don't belong in the same piece. The A has curves and small extensions where the K is almost as basic as it gets. And i keep trying to post and it won't let me. I'm getting mod blocked </3

-Empty-Can-
04-20-2010, 09:11 PM
http://i713.photobucket.com/albums/ww131/pics4bscience/slanterunfinished002Medium.jpg

Re-draw of a previous piece. I'm gonna change up the R a bit and color it. Anyone have ideas for colors? I was thinking a blueish fade with a purple outline. dunno yet. Might add some half assed background too crits?

Take- I'm feelin that last one but I think the right leg of the A kicks out too much.
Tofe- Simpler. Learn proper 3d
Myth-Make the Y and T more like the M and H. Stay simple.

take2
04-20-2010, 09:19 PM
Yes! Empty! Finally something solid. I've been gone for a while so I haven't seen much but I like it. Fill it in

BlacktodaFuture
04-20-2010, 09:24 PM
empty getting better? since when? lol jk. good job.

-Empty-Can-
04-20-2010, 09:26 PM
I just haven't been posting work lately. lol

-Dank-DK-
04-20-2010, 09:45 PM
http://i41.tinypic.com/35ido1t.jpg

LeaksOne
04-20-2010, 09:52 PM
you really need to revise your letters and porportions

CrustOner
04-20-2010, 10:25 PM
Yeah, Dank does NOT take crits.. I gave up.

And Stot, looking solid, bring the leg of the R out of the circle part at the top right instead of the base bar.

-Dank-DK-
04-20-2010, 10:37 PM
wait what i do

NICCSACC
04-21-2010, 12:39 AM
[quote=RustySpoon;1602892]FlippingChickens - I'm diggin those throwies but the bottom letters seem like you're trying too hard.


quote]
you crazy, the bottom one is the icing on THAT cake. fresssh. i like that shit.

viseversa101
04-21-2010, 01:09 AM
meh shoulda earased the pencil it was freestyled neway


http://i47.photobucket.com/albums/f185/viseversa101/Blackbooks/SDC11014.jpg

LeaksOne
04-21-2010, 02:08 AM
wait what i do

ok then.

go back to simples and make all your letters the same width, height, and at he same level until you get a good grasp of your letters then go back to that style


meh shoulda earased the pencil it was freestyled neway


http://i47.photobucket.com/albums/f185/viseversa101/Blackbooks/SDC11014.jpg

from what i know freestyle does not involve pencil.....

and you need to work on your bar widths.

viseversa101
04-21-2010, 02:36 AM
other then the top right part of the v its mostly shadows i can recolor to help it
what i meant freestyle was just swirling letters lookin for sumthin to color
my color charts arent bad just coloring in general i cant grasp to my liking

Zookyook
04-21-2010, 07:36 AM
yea i was just bouta say freestyle means no pre-sketch hence no pencil lol

stot id work on the S a bit more, the bars on top look odd and too thin.... and listen to crust on the R, or just make the circle inside the R bigger to where the rounded bar looks the same size as the rest

dank do ur letters first then a 3d of the whole thing, dont put 3d on overlapping sections

NICCSACC
04-21-2010, 08:44 AM
...and i wouldnt fold the paper before a pic, yeah?

viseversa101
04-21-2010, 04:40 PM
i like the caligraphy style...1st try
http://i47.photobucket.com/albums/f185/viseversa101/Blackbooks/SDC11016.jpg
less shit more crits

gumOnShoe
04-21-2010, 04:45 PM
clean up your lines next time, they're shakey as fuck dude.
practice control with you hand before you move onto intricate things.

markingz.
04-21-2010, 04:45 PM
wow, thats pretty good for a first try,

Jwhite
04-21-2010, 04:58 PM
http://i39.tinypic.com/2ntz2wk.jpg

Crits ? yeah i know the K is fucked.

markingz.
04-21-2010, 05:00 PM
your letters dont flow right, keyboard font is best for you right now, also hold off on the characts in letters for a while

sezer
04-21-2010, 05:11 PM
Tofe: Are you doing the same thing and same thing over again? Everysome says keep the letter length the same and also the 3D and you aren't improving as much.

markingz.
04-21-2010, 06:41 PM
huge tip for all you newjacks, start simple then work up, that is the best advice anyone can give any one new to this subculture, being simple pays big time, also, the more you do this the more you will realize balance and proportions are so essential

LIZARD
04-21-2010, 07:08 PM
http://i944.photobucket.com/albums/ad286/lad17/Photoon2010-04-21at20032.jpg
quick sketch but i turned out to like it...i know the lines are gross and the shadow is off but i was stuck waiting in a car for a while and i got bored...crits?

FlippingChickens
04-21-2010, 07:12 PM
gum - everything is good beside the k,i think you should make it round instead of square like that

vise - dont do any cursive or crazy shit just do simple shit

sezer - i have done my throws over and over again..peices get changed very fast because i just get bored of doing the same set of letters

gore - the g has pottential the r and o need to be fixed

NICCSACC
04-21-2010, 07:20 PM
http://i944.photobucket.com/albums/ad286/lad17/Photoon2010-04-21at20032.jpg
quick sketch but i turned out to like it...i know the lines are gross and the shadow is off but i was stuck waiting in a car for a while and i got bored...crits?
realtalk, get a whole new "G" cuz that ione aint flowing at all. the face is cool but kinda played. IMO. you got the other letters looking pretty good tho just work on speed. speed + good letters = what you want. do it over and over and over again dude youll memorize the motions and youll be set trust me. i DO know what im talkin bout. hope that helps dude.

[actually, get all new letters] no biggie

FlippingChickens
04-21-2010, 07:27 PM
http://i456.photobucket.com/albums/qq287/flippinchickens/DSCN3268.jpg

Shay70
04-21-2010, 08:26 PM
crits on this, i plan on coloring it a bit later

IllLogic
04-21-2010, 08:54 PM
http://i790.photobucket.com/albums/yy190/beeazyy901/guru-1.jpg

IllLogic
04-21-2010, 08:56 PM
hand style is kinda fucked tho

CrustOner
04-21-2010, 09:09 PM
No, whole thing is kinda fucked.

IllLogic
04-21-2010, 09:14 PM
Alright thanks

chikkenbone
04-21-2010, 10:05 PM
the top of the z and e are a little to high for my liking but you get the picture, what do you think?
http://i621.photobucket.com/albums/tt300/2wayducttape/QUEAZ.jpg

tofe- not feelin the extensions on the t and e, i would think about loosen the bends at the bottom of those bars too. i like where its headed

ILLogic- your just lackin structure dude, bar up some bars and keep workin it

NICCSACC
04-21-2010, 11:26 PM
http://i1036.photobucket.com/albums/a446/biggniccsacc/DSC00103.jpg2006 shit.

NICCSACC
04-21-2010, 11:30 PM
http://i790.photobucket.com/albums/yy190/beeazyy901/guru-1.jpg
shits good for someone that just started. i just noticed that guru leanin on the letters haha nice stuff.

NICCSACC
04-22-2010, 12:48 AM
http://i1036.photobucket.com/albums/a446/biggniccsacc/DSC00103.jpg2006 shit.
is this any good its kinda old tho. it was my old name

viseversa101
04-22-2010, 12:52 AM
venon? i dig that more then nick or sack lol

NICCSACC
04-22-2010, 12:55 AM
venom... hahaha yeah niccsacc is my legit name. i think that the V looks like an upside down bitches thighs with nips on the knees. i used to do weird things with stuff.

viseversa101
04-22-2010, 12:58 AM
lmao i see it...venom could be dope, u got good characters to corporate into it

NICCSACC
04-22-2010, 12:59 AM
why thank you sir.

viseversa101
04-22-2010, 01:02 AM
i never seen ne1 with the name as of yet but faze would be a dope name

NICCSACC
04-22-2010, 01:03 AM
you crazy thats so gay.

i used to aspire to write around with the moniker "ANIL" or "LANA".
seriously. shit, i might do it now.

IllLogic
04-22-2010, 09:31 AM
the top of the z and e are a little to high for my liking but you get the picture, what do you think?
http://i621.photobucket.com/albums/tt300/2wayducttape/QUEAZ.jpg

tofe- not feelin the extensions on the t and e, i would think about loosen the bends at the bottom of those bars too. i like where its headed

ILLogic- your just lackin structure dude, bar up some bars and keep workin it

ight thanks

LIZARD
04-22-2010, 10:07 AM
iv seen at least 3 kids on this site writin faze before

NICCSACC
04-22-2010, 11:45 AM
who the fucc would write faze?? ROTF

StayHyE
04-22-2010, 03:39 PM
http://i42.tinypic.com/2irpw03.jpg


for the homies blog

KRE1
04-22-2010, 04:04 PM
http://img690.imageshack.us/img690/7051/019mw.jpg
eh. quick pen freestyle. stuck on my shite letters.

markingz.
04-22-2010, 04:14 PM
is this any good its kinda old tho. it was my old name
dode write that thats way better than niccsacc i think, you should also try writing lana or whatever

NICCSACC
04-22-2010, 04:17 PM
thx for the crit brahhh... da kine!
aloha!
mabye ill try LANA i might do some dumb shit like xovz or some difficult stuffys wit my lettaz brahh. aloha brudduh

Shay70
04-22-2010, 06:34 PM
kre1-just work on the letters, maybe do some simples based on your pretty sick handstyles
illlogic-make that Z look more like a Z, and maybe add an extention on the U
niccsacc-try putting some characters in your name, or develop into a piece

crits on this
http://i752.photobucket.com/albums/xx167/tredegar47/P1010518.jpg

NICCSACC
04-22-2010, 06:38 PM
Wildstyle throwie? Mabye ill make it happen

liquid dreams
04-22-2010, 08:59 PM
niccsacs- that venom is nice, but the M looks like its an N trying to fight itsself into an M, let that letter flow into its self alittle bit more.

-Empty-Can-
04-22-2010, 10:12 PM
http://i713.photobucket.com/albums/ww131/pics4bscience/stotter003.jpg
semi happy with it.

crits

ViniVidiVici
04-22-2010, 10:49 PM
First picture... kinda fucked it up but I was using some weird as markers the Characters are fucked I know.

http://img714.imageshack.us/img714/5759/46185839.jpg

StayHyE
04-22-2010, 11:23 PM
http://i713.photobucket.com/albums/ww131/pics4bscience/stotter003.jpg
semi happy with it.

crits

top bar of the S could be longer and some orange in that backround would set it off yellow is a bit bright by itself

markingz.
04-22-2010, 11:27 PM
http://i790.photobucket.com/albums/yy190/beeazyy901/guru-1.jpg
i really dont know what you take graffiti for no offense, but this shit isnt just a pastime, you need to work on bars for a long ass time or something

StayHyE
04-22-2010, 11:30 PM
http://i42.tinypic.com/2irpw03.jpg


for the homies blog

bizzibump

viseversa101
04-23-2010, 12:10 AM
quick simple sketch...reminds me of a shoe logo? i duno
http://i47.photobucket.com/albums/f185/viseversa101/Blackbooks/SDC11018.jpg

markingz.
04-23-2010, 12:12 AM
hah yo thats a good one, yeah man do straights it does remind me of a shoe logo though haha

take2
04-23-2010, 06:42 AM
Empty I think the s is finne maybe a little longer if anything. I like the style

fakiee
04-23-2010, 03:42 PM
what you think about it? first one is my name. (sorry about the strange thing on M - my scanner is dirty or something... )
any crits?
http://i232.photobucket.com/albums/ee170/teenageragainst/amoris-1.jpghttp://i232.photobucket.com/albums/ee170/teenageragainst/sun.jpg

devourtrend
04-23-2010, 10:07 PM
http://i962.photobucket.com/albums/ae102/gfxsheep/shinypiecething.jpg
obviously not too good, just working on a new style.
crits?

StayHyE, everything looks great except the PHOTOS text, way too distorted vertically. Also, the shadowing on IT IN is wayyyyy colorful.

viseversa101, you need to work on bars. none of the letters are made up of bars, but you really need to work with bars first. i think you know what those are. also, make sure the letters are next to each other, not that spaced apart.

fakiee, BARS, BARS, BARS. You have such potential, the A is really dope, but everything else just looks mooshed together. the Sun one is waayyyyyy off balance, you can't have one letter really big and the others smaller, it looks.. unbalanced. your 3D is good, just make sure all the letters are proportioned correctly, and USE BARS.

-Empty-Can-
04-23-2010, 10:09 PM
Honesty, it looks like it says shitty.

devourtrend
04-23-2010, 10:43 PM
fuck! i thought so too. lol

http://i962.photobucket.com/albums/ae102/gfxsheep/shinybars1.jpg

any better?

EDIT: I know I fucked up the Y.

funhouseXcast
04-23-2010, 11:02 PM
what the fuck man it doesn't let me post pictures here or intermediate.
and shiny that's much better.

devourtrend
04-23-2010, 11:03 PM
yeah i should probably just stick to simples.

fakiee
04-24-2010, 04:44 AM
fakiee, BARS, BARS, BARS. You have such potential, the A is really dope, but everything else just looks mooshed together. the Sun one is waayyyyyy off balance, you can't have one letter really big and the others smaller, it looks.. unbalanced. your 3D is good, just make sure all the letters are proportioned correctly, and USE BARS.

thanks man. i thought that im making bars, but obviously im not. ill try. :D

Zookyook
04-24-2010, 06:55 AM
http://i962.photobucket.com/albums/ae102/gfxsheep/shinypiecething.jpg
this does look like it says shitty lol.... but also looks a lot like MS's style to me, in a way

http://img227.imageshack.us/img227/4002/linedpaperkiller.jpg
^MS^

Inlyn08
04-24-2010, 09:17 AM
[QUOTE=devourtrend;1605555]http://i962.photobucket.com/albums/ae102/gfxsheep/shinypiecething.jpg
obviously not too good, just working on a new style.
crits?

That really doesn't look like an N. When I looked at it, no lie.. I thought it said SHITTY. Then I lol'd and said.. Noooo. Also, I looks like it said SIHY. But, then I looked at the hand. That N definately needs to be defined, or else you will have this misconception. The style has potential, and you know it needs work..
So.. Do work. With more progress that style can look dope. Keep at it.

Etcha
04-24-2010, 09:22 AM
crits?

http://img443.imageshack.us/img443/6428/87877655.jpg

funhouseXcast
04-24-2010, 09:54 AM
dumb it down a little. less extensions, focus more on the curves of your bars.

AND WHY THE FUCK WILL IT NOT LET ME POST PICUTRES.

essen
04-24-2010, 10:28 AM
hey shiny you might want to try angling the top bar of the n more, maybe make it completely diagonal at first and then work some style into it

ManikOner
04-24-2010, 12:36 PM
Hey guys, just got back, no pics my bad. been settin up a new blackbook for my tag. You guys will only be seein Manik.

StayHyE - I think its a pretty dope piece but i would keep your 3d all goin one way. dont switch it up. Diggin the fills on "Gel It In"

Vise - Nice simple, work on your S a little more, make it more bar like. the I can be bigger too.

Fakie - for the firs one, loos all the extensions and connections. start with simples like the one Vise just posted. as for the Sun one, you have extra 3d lines you dont need. for on your letter structure and dont try to go crazy with it all. the simpler it is the nicer it looks. youll get into the crazy stuff as you get better.

Shiny - i say the first is trash, the second is nice just watch your bar width in some places. looks nice though. just fix it up a bit

Pixels - thatws pretty ill, just make the P part bigger. what you did with your E and your L are kinda iffy too.

Emba? - i like the stile, your E needs to come up bigger and make the top not with the middle of the E.

take2
04-24-2010, 02:13 PM
bored...
http://i685.photobucket.com/albums/vv220/Taker2/c37d9bc2.jpg

RedEyes
04-24-2010, 02:35 PM
take- i like your shit just work on maken it look cleaner, it seems your stuff is just blobs, try using a sharpie to define your letters.

del4sel
04-24-2010, 03:15 PM
http://1.bp.blogspot.com/_hlbRqNY6Eag/S9NQAQQ2ZjI/AAAAAAAAAC4/Of_uEFvgo6w/s1600/TheFridge1.jpg

mond1
04-24-2010, 03:26 PM
critics please

Inlyn08
04-24-2010, 03:30 PM
[QUOTE=Zookyook;1605806]http://i962.photobucket.com/albums/ae102/gfxsheep/shinypiecething.jpg
this does look like it says shitty lol.... but also looks a lot like MS's style to me, in a way

You're right, it does.

del4sel
04-24-2010, 03:55 PM
http://2.bp.blogspot.com/_hlbRqNY6Eag/S9NaeUyH9lI/AAAAAAAAADA/RuHaFBc-feY/s1600/Sav+thro+1.jpg

del4sel
04-24-2010, 04:25 PM
http://1.bp.blogspot.com/_hlbRqNY6Eag/S9Nhc3u4_pI/AAAAAAAAADg/LaByS5IJB6U/s1600/Sav-watermelon.jpg

Crits, Please

SETRIXTER
04-24-2010, 05:13 PM
Your letter structure isn't great, the V on bottom pic is much smaller than the S and A, top one is... messey and the lines aren't straight and the outline blue thing is badly done. thats just my opinion.

LeaksOne
04-24-2010, 06:45 PM
write it just like this

SAV

no corny add ons.

and the S on that first one is HURTING. if thats a throw revise the entire thing and just do bubble letters

btw no offense but sav is such a cheesy name.

funhouseXcast
04-24-2010, 10:07 PM
can anyone think of a reason why the mod would be deleting my picture posts?

thepekins
04-25-2010, 09:46 AM
show me the crits

funhouseXcast
04-25-2010, 09:49 AM
chill with the arrows. first and fourth are the best. and calm down with the Z in your handy as well.

thepekins
04-25-2010, 10:03 AM
i been having trouble with z's in general

SirBigO
04-25-2010, 10:08 AM
http://img339.imageshack.us/img339/6862/bild0397b.jpg

seein sum nice shit..

did this 1 when i got home y'day.. was blazed as fuck!

any crits?

CareGr
04-25-2010, 12:30 PM
All the shit I've posted on PG before.

http://imgur.com/6KSuA.jpg
http://imgur.com/ZjijT.jpg
Then someone told me I should go simpler, so I did.

http://imgur.com/SXzvD.jpg Schoolbook piece.

Then some throws:
http://imgur.com/9jSY5.jpg
http://imgur.com/tUQba.jpg
http://imgur.com/7UQRd.jpg

Then I went simpler after I was told to do straight letters:
http://imgur.com/QgwHN.jpg

Deviated from simples again, and got scolded :P
http://imgur.com/oKVtU.jpg

And now I'm only going to do pieces like this:
http://imgur.com/Kms0o.jpg

Crits are very welcomed =)

ManikOner
04-25-2010, 01:23 PM
BigO - i think that looks sick! love the style

Sav - only one i kinda like is your first post bottom left. work on your letter structure and just do simples. Like Leaks said, just make it SAV with no buillshit on it. tryin to connect letters or add arrows. just start simple.

Care - yea it looks like your tryin to move WAY to fast. all your pieces are different and wacked. only one i like is your last. dont try crazy fills or connections. just do simple straight letters, add the 3d, give all the letters the same decent fill and itll look totally legit.

START SIMPLE! :D

CareGr
04-25-2010, 03:26 PM
Yeah, as I said, that's what I'm trying to move to now.

I only do some throwies and very simple letters.

Throwies to not get bored, simple letters for practice. Most of those are old, or rather something I've moved away from cause I noticed that I lacked structure.

Thanks for feedback.

StayHyE
04-25-2010, 04:43 PM
i been having trouble with z's in general

i see a lot of writers use a backwards S experiment with that

funhouseXcast
04-25-2010, 07:51 PM
Care i'll be honest, i can't color for shit, but from the looks of it, you're focusing on color too much. just do structure sketches. fuck the 3d, fuck the shadow, and fuck the color. get your structure down and then work on the other shit.

xenex
04-25-2010, 07:51 PM
http://sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-ash1/hs477.ash1/26139_116671471684173_100000239622384_209537_78556 38_n.jpg

first sketch, tips?

funhouseXcast
04-25-2010, 07:56 PM
that's not too ugly actually but what the fuck is it supposed to say. and top right corner that extension is too pointy. also, if you're using a ruler, stop immediately.

Jwhite
04-25-2010, 09:20 PM
http://i42.tinypic.com/b9j49i.jpg

can i has crits?
& cheezburger?

sinkilla1
04-25-2010, 09:23 PM
that names really over played some one from where i live delaware writes that and pretty shure like thousands of others do to

Jwhite
04-25-2010, 09:27 PM
as long as i dont see that shit in my area im fine with it.

Inlyn08
04-25-2010, 11:38 PM
All the shit I've posted on PG before.

http://imgur.com/6KSuA.jpg
http://imgur.com/ZjijT.jpg
Then someone told me I should go simpler, so I did.

http://imgur.com/SXzvD.jpg Schoolbook piece.

Then some throws:
http://imgur.com/9jSY5.jpg
http://imgur.com/tUQba.jpg
http://imgur.com/7UQRd.jpg

Then I went simpler after I was told to do straight letters:
http://imgur.com/QgwHN.jpg

Deviated from simples again, and got scolded :P
http://imgur.com/oKVtU.jpg

And now I'm only going to do pieces like this:
http://imgur.com/Kms0o.jpg

Crits are very welcomed =)

It's been said before, and it will be said again... Go simple. And, if that is simple to you.. make it even more simple. A well colored piece isn't shit if the letters are all screwed up. As well, having solid letters and throwing a fucked up fill will kill it too. Do letters. Get solid simple letters, practice.. practice practice those. Once you feel confident with those throw in 3D.. and so on. But, until you have your base/ foundation ( the letters ) you should slow your roll on all the other stuff. Truth is, if you're not careful you can totally destroy a good piece in one single action.

Keep at it.

CareGr
04-26-2010, 01:41 AM
Will do sir! Thanks for the feedback. As I've said, I'm trying to move away from the "over advanced" shit.
I draw probably 50% of my day, at least :P

I have a couple of sketches in the working which are at least as simple as the last one :)
Will post when they're done.

smokeitup
04-26-2010, 01:44 AM
ewwwwwww~!~

Zookyook
04-26-2010, 04:03 AM
care he pretty much said it all but in the 3rd pic ur concept of 3d is waaaay off... just do simple, capital keyboard letters and keep all the bars even so it looks right and ull get into the other shit later and know what ur doing and where extensions will look good and shit... if u draw as much as u say im sure ull progress fast

xenex
04-26-2010, 07:02 AM
that's not too ugly actually but what the fuck is it supposed to say. and top right corner that extension is too pointy. also, if you're using a ruler, stop immediately.

nope no ruler.

it says "sik"

SirBigO
04-26-2010, 01:04 PM
http://img339.imageshack.us/img339/6862/bild0397b.jpg

bumpin for crits!

soz.. normaly don't do this.

peace bro's

dont realy digg that shit CARE
diggin that shit JWHITE and XENEX

Meph*
04-26-2010, 04:45 PM
SirBigO- idk why but i like that shit...it looks different, keep it up

pleasedontstayr
04-26-2010, 05:33 PM
http://i44.tinypic.com/34hgfuw.jpg
crits? i dont like the R personally.

memphisbleak2133
04-26-2010, 06:56 PM
http://img39.imageshack.us/img39/5711/cam014.jpg

gumOnShoe
04-26-2010, 07:06 PM
i fucks wit' that sig you have, looks funny.
reminds me of an eagles face.

viseversa101
04-26-2010, 07:08 PM
memph u need to size down wtf ur posting, i wont bother next time
neway ur handstyle is completely wack n its a hot mess...no structure....good coloring i guess but thats it i cant tell wtf it is

memphisbleak2133
04-26-2010, 07:15 PM
viseversa101,u need to shut your fuckin mouth you dick pulin bitch.i bet im a hole lot fuckin better then u. you stupid fuck.and my fuckin handstyle too.ill fuckin rip your toe clean off

memphisbleak2133
04-26-2010, 07:19 PM
i fucks wit' that sig you have, looks funny.
Reminds me of an eagles face.

respected

Mister.Miyagi
04-26-2010, 07:23 PM
Viseversa, you have no room to talk at all.. i saw you exchange for zooyook or what ever.. i think memphis' is better than yours... but im not in this dumb e beef... Fuck Yinz

Fury
04-26-2010, 07:27 PM
Well that's one way to go big...
Phew, it got resized. For one thing, I can't read it or make out the letters. The handy's alright I guess, but you got a shaky hand. Clean it up.

memphisbleak2133
04-26-2010, 07:29 PM
Yo i checked out what mister.miyagi seid and woow.u fuckin suck so fckin mutch dude ahahahahahahh.my fuckin cat could draw better then u. My fuckin bird can draw better then u you fuckin scum bag.go play with your fuckin chode you fuck up

shem
04-26-2010, 07:47 PM
All the shit I've posted on PG before.

http://imgur.com/6KSuA.jpg
http://imgur.com/ZjijT.jpg
Then someone told me I should go simpler, so I did.

http://imgur.com/SXzvD.jpg Schoolbook piece.

Then some throws:
http://imgur.com/9jSY5.jpg
http://imgur.com/tUQba.jpg
http://imgur.com/7UQRd.jpg

Then I went simpler after I was told to do straight letters:
http://imgur.com/QgwHN.jpg\




Deviated from simples again, and got scolded :P
http://imgur.com/oKVtU.jpg

And now I'm only going to do pieces like this:
http://imgur.com/Kms0o.jpg

Crits are very welcomed =)

just stop now... http://miamigraffiti.com/writer.php?id=care&p=1

viseversa101
04-26-2010, 07:57 PM
give this kid Ritalin okay?

pleasedontstayr
04-26-2010, 08:10 PM
http://i44.tinypic.com/34hgfuw.jpg
crits? i dont like the R personally.

bumping myself because there was a big fuckin ethug fight right after my post

viseversa101
04-26-2010, 08:18 PM
stayr-
ur letters r gettin larger as they go on
and if i was u id keep workin on my letters and not bother highlighting the 3d
it doesnt look right, just do a 2d shadow instead imo

pleasedontstayr
04-26-2010, 08:30 PM
stayr-
ur letters r gettin larger as they go on
and if i was u id keep workin on my letters and not bother highlighting the 3d
it doesnt look right, just do a 2d shadow instead imo

i appreciate the crit but the only big letter i can see is the r. or the S is too small because the way its curved, the bars are all the same size.
and yeah i didnt wanna highlight it but i had to in order to get the effect i was first looking for.

kew1
04-26-2010, 08:56 PM
http://i616.photobucket.com/albums/tt250/slerk/April-26_0926.jpg

LeaksOne
04-26-2010, 10:10 PM
the U, K, and W are too hidden and the bottom of the U is kinda overkill. it shouldnt be on the K that much

RedEyes
04-26-2010, 10:33 PM
http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f327/olredeyes/Photo4-2.jpg
http://i50.photobucket.com/albums/f327/olredeyes/Photo1-2-1.jpg

BlacktodaFuture
04-26-2010, 10:56 PM
red eyes: you post the same pictures over and over again. do something new...

SicK-
04-26-2010, 11:36 PM
stayr- I think you need to work on your letters more, the a doesnt really look like an a it kinda looks like a backwards h
fukew- it looks pretty good except spread out your letters more, at first i thought it said fuken lol

http://i618.photobucket.com/albums/tt265/gzus1994/DIASSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS.jpg Well just been sketching alot need some crits please

LeaksOne
04-26-2010, 11:41 PM
your shadow is everywhere......work on your A, make the dot on your I smaller, and change either the D or the AIS to get some flow

SicK-
04-26-2010, 11:44 PM
thanks bro will do

fuckit
04-27-2010, 12:19 AM
new one.
http://i102.photobucket.com/albums/m85/Sohc94/DSCF8097-1.jpg

LeaksOne
04-27-2010, 01:54 AM
pretty decent until the KE.

you missed shadow to the left of the A.
maybe instead of slanting the tops of the M make it straight like the rest of the letters
dont add those extra blocks on the K. make it just like this. K. it will fit right in
and the E seems a little too spaced out being that everything else is close.

fuckit
04-27-2010, 02:06 AM
gotchya. i wondered about the A shadow. but didnt know exactly were the shadow would fall since its slanting away from being the shadow.
alright i see about that M.

KRE1
04-27-2010, 02:17 AM
eh. didnt bother cleaning it up at all. procrastinating on midterm studying.
http://img693.imageshack.us/img693/9316/022hxc.jpg

and the shit around it.. meh. jus fukn around.

smokeitup
04-27-2010, 03:59 AM
sloppy, whats the red shit at the bottom of the A supposed to be?

KRE1
04-27-2010, 04:43 AM
the O's hand and kicks.

i really coulda gave two shits bout this one im still just procrastinating i kno its sloppy but i like the M... pretty much all i like about it.

smokeitup
04-27-2010, 05:42 AM
ahhh yeah i see it now.

pleasedontstayr
04-27-2010, 06:31 AM
Moar. Simples and keyboards, just like this.
MOAR.