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Tempo718
02-25-2011, 01:05 AM
cast?

chiefy
02-25-2011, 05:22 AM
jrone- try to keep the letters more straight
FuckTheFame- they all looking pretty dope apart fro 1 or 2 letters that need work like the top ones h but they are nice kiu
Tempo718- all the letters shouldnt be slanted like the P and E, the stuff you were doing yesterday and day before that was better

Isaac
02-25-2011, 11:07 AM
19184[ATTACH=CONFIG]19185
I know its shitty, but thats why its on the toy thread, i'd appreciate any input.thanks

ian
02-25-2011, 12:34 PM
this thread is really disappointing me lately...

SHUT
02-25-2011, 12:59 PM
cast?

Gast

Jigsaw
02-25-2011, 01:16 PM
@ian not trying to start shit but how is this thread disappointing you when ur one of the ones thats in here and needs help with ur shit if anything u should be happy they have this thread so people can help ur ass out!
@issac go simpler dude till u get some lettter structure
@gast cant giv ya any critts yet till i see some more stuff that i can break down for ya

FuckTheFame
02-25-2011, 01:47 PM
http://i53.tinypic.com/28ciwcw.jpg[/QUOTE]

bump because this is legit


isaac - try to get rid of those extra lines. they arent necessary

shut- done really well but there is a lot going on. try adding a fill to help the piece fit together

tempo - that M is dope. tweak it man

ian
02-25-2011, 02:04 PM
@ian not trying to start shit but how is this thread disappointing you when ur one of the ones thats in here and needs help with ur shit if anything u should be happy they have this thread so people can help ur ass out!
@issac go simpler dude till u get some lettter structure
@gast cant giv ya any critts yet till i see some more stuff that i can break down for ya



the last few pages are just flooded with new people who dont know what keyboard letters are, theres like 1 or 2 halfway decent things in the last few pages

ViniVidiVici
02-25-2011, 02:26 PM
^ what he said.... I think we need a new UBER-toy thread.....

ian
02-25-2011, 02:47 PM
thats what im sayin, we got the toys thread and intermediate, we need like a baby toy thread

Jigsaw
02-25-2011, 02:48 PM
yeah i know and i couldnt agree more but most people who first start out are hard headed and dont wanna go to keyboard letters
i know that this is what this thread is about but some of us are way past keyboard letters its time to move on but yeah most
people in this thread need to stick with keyboard letters for awile

FuckTheFame
02-25-2011, 02:52 PM
suggest a i just started and am learning how to do graffiti through bombing science thread
...but then again i suggested a RIP YNOT thread a little bit ago and that hasnt even gone through
who knows whats happening out there

ian
02-25-2011, 03:00 PM
^just submitted it, hopefully itll go through

FuckTheFame
02-25-2011, 03:44 PM
noice

TastyMcNasty
02-25-2011, 04:00 PM
yo thanks for all the crits.. haha and youth, i have plenty of markers i just wanted to get to get structure down first...

female- your getting better keep using those bars
youth- shits doopeee
tempo- keep that up, shits on spot
shut- simple it up

TastyMcNasty
02-25-2011, 04:04 PM
im thinkin most people here need to go a bit more simple

and can i have some fucking crits?!

Female
02-25-2011, 05:42 PM
Its crap but i was doodling on a water bottle
http://i56.tinypic.com/8xsm6a.jpg
Letters are ugly as hell but at least i tried. Any suggestions?
http://i53.tinypic.com/11rr5m9.jpg

Dcicfhbimv
02-25-2011, 05:51 PM
Kinda old just messing around.crits appreciated as always.


Gast really liking that 4th one
Tempo it looks like you've just reposted the same 3 or so pictures like 12 times. Are they any different? Not trying to rag on you it just seems I see them every time I log on.

Dcicfhbimv
02-25-2011, 05:53 PM
Just messing around kinda old. Crits appreciated as always.


Gast really liking the 4th one
Tempo it seems like you've been posting the same 3 or so pictures over and over again. not trying to rag on you or anything its just all I see when I log on

Dcicfhbimv
02-25-2011, 05:55 PM
Just messing around kinda old. Crits appreciated as always.


Gast really liking the 4th one
Tempo it seems like you've been posting the same 3 or so pictures over and over again. not trying to rag on you or anything its just all I see when I log on

ViniVidiVici
02-25-2011, 06:05 PM
^just submitted it, hopefully itll go through

Best thing I've seen today hahaha
hope it makes it....

ViniVidiVici
02-25-2011, 06:09 PM
Tasty - The way you leave your bars intact without erasing them gives me a headache on some of them, the bars are fine but I just wonder if erasing a little would help.

Sore - I like the throw, the R is messed up but all in all I think it is alright. On your piece I don't like how you overlapped the letters, it just doesn't look natural or normal. space the letters out more.

FuckTheFame
02-25-2011, 06:10 PM
http://farm6.static.flickr.com/5137/5477763240_266496a48e.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/55010972@N05/5477763240/)

sore - keep at it. your doing everything right. you might want to take a look at tastymcnasty if you want to start developing your bars.

tasty mc nasty - whats up with some colors? rack up some sharpies if you need to. shits clean

ChadWarden
02-25-2011, 06:15 PM
keyboard letters, bro.

Female
02-25-2011, 06:19 PM
Just started this one
http://i54.tinypic.com/14wcbrp.jpg
thinking of a pink fill. Blue force

ChadWarden
02-25-2011, 06:22 PM
try keyboard letters. i can't even read that.

FuckTheFame
02-25-2011, 06:25 PM
female - looks like it says sone. add some more style to it. that bomb is simple. make a new one if you are trying to be serious

Female
02-25-2011, 06:26 PM
Alright ima finish it and do another one with your advice

Dcicfhbimv
02-25-2011, 06:36 PM
Sure you fucking can get some crits. What does it say anyway? Soar? and the 2nd to last one I can't quite follow SHHDE? The S's are alright Can't say Im digging the whole bowling ball cube thing that is the "O" the extension on the "A" messes with me but the one on the "R" is alright all in all its pretty good just not digging the overall flow. Try fading your 3d into nothing " erase the back of it so it fades into the background. Just came to me it most likely will look good on your piece.


im thinkin most people here need to go a bit more simple

and can i have some fucking crits?!

Female
02-25-2011, 07:01 PM
@FuckTheFame Do you want me to style all the letters?

Gatsoi
02-25-2011, 07:51 PM
Tasty- Doesn't flow, try sharpening up some of your bars
Sore- Same letters everytime, I've seen no progression
Youth- Diggin the 3d

FuckTheFame
02-25-2011, 07:54 PM
@female - have some flair. but remember that less is more when your still new

Tempo718
02-25-2011, 08:39 PM
cant wait to get this keyboard letter thing on point. I'll keep trying an one of these days:rolleyes: it will get there.

SicK-
02-25-2011, 08:46 PM
^ the only reason people are telling you to do keyboard letters is so you can get down letter structure, its not bad to experiment its actually good.
My crits are to bring your letters closer and add a 3D or something

Tempo718
02-25-2011, 08:59 PM
ok sick i tried.

Isaac
02-25-2011, 10:08 PM
19250 i tried to make it simpler and have the letters more clearly look like the intended letters.input?

SHUT
02-25-2011, 10:27 PM
1:Gast
2:Gast
3:Gast
4:Gast
5:Late, Gast, Zerg, Break
6:Shut
7:old man

Gatsoi
02-26-2011, 01:10 AM
This whole page sucks.

http://i880.photobucket.com/albums/ac9/gatsoi/2-3.jpg
http://i880.photobucket.com/albums/ac9/gatsoi/3-2.jpg
A piece i did on my homie werm's desk
http://i880.photobucket.com/albums/ac9/gatsoi/4-3.jpg

chiefy
02-26-2011, 01:36 AM
Isaac - should try doing straigher letters
SHUT - there nice but i'd keep them simpler imo
Gatsoi - id say they all look really nice and clean apart from the one with an eye in the e which i aint feeling

Jigsaw
02-26-2011, 01:42 AM
@gats nice simps
@shut go simpler for awhile but u have got alot of potential
@issac yeah man back to the keyboard for you
and heres mine guys i was ina hurry so somthings are off but itll do prob. gonna go paint this soon so ill have the flick for yall!
http://i51.tinypic.com/30kq8o3.jpg

FuckTheFame
02-26-2011, 04:01 AM
gast is a beast...just gonna say it
jigsaw - nicely done on filling that in. lets see more man. a piece without chars would be refreshing

Female
02-26-2011, 04:12 AM
Tasty - The way you leave your bars intact without erasing them gives me a headache on some of them, the bars are fine but I just wonder if erasing a little would help.

Sore - I like the throw, the R is messed up but all in all I think it is alright. On your piece I don't like how you overlapped the letters, it just doesn't look natural or normal. space the letters out more.
http://i52.tinypic.com/a08nc1.jpg
Im gonna redo that one, cause i couldnt fit the E and where should the leg of the R come out.

ribcage
02-26-2011, 04:23 AM
@jigsaw first 2 letters are steezy, not diggin the last two, on the E i dont like that tongue thingy you put on it, and it looks like u through that N on there without takin the time to make 1 match... looks like a throw N to me. also not a fan of the shadow color change

http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0221111715.jpg
^i managed to fuck simple ass 3d up

chiefy
02-26-2011, 08:13 AM
http://i.imgur.com/mZ3vK.jpg
ignore top one
ribcage- you should keep it allone color it would look nicer

ViniVidiVici
02-26-2011, 10:09 AM
That S is in so much pain I hurt for him....

ViniVidiVici
02-26-2011, 10:14 AM
I'm just gonna say everyone on this page besides MEWN and REACH use bars and don't post your pics if your not gonna even attempt to make your bars good.

thepekins
02-26-2011, 01:04 PM
gast is a beast...just gonna say it


please tell me that was sarcasm. . . please.


@vinividivici - you said it man, this page got no bars

Tempo718
02-26-2011, 01:16 PM
wish y'all was wrong bout that. lol

Tempo718
02-26-2011, 01:17 PM
then again fortunately your not.

ribcage
02-26-2011, 01:26 PM
^did that really take 2 posts to say? I realize that this post is just as pointless, but fuck, 2 posts for something that is not constructive to the thread at all in a row 1 minute after eachother?! damn *****

Gatsoi
02-26-2011, 01:42 PM
Can I get some crits?

Tempo718
02-26-2011, 01:50 PM
lol my bad! didn't know it would get your panties

Tempo718
02-26-2011, 01:51 PM
in a bunch!

Tempo718
02-26-2011, 02:26 PM
having trouble getting a consistent width

ViniVidiVici
02-26-2011, 03:28 PM
Okay Tempo, when you do your bars don't just try to draw two straight lines and connect them, sketch the bars and then end it however you want.

ViniVidiVici
02-26-2011, 03:42 PM
Gatsoi - The First one I like but the E W overlap is sloppy looking I think don't do it. The second one don't do eyes and E looks a little strange and breaks the flow, fix that and it'll look nice. The third one the bars are a little shaky in areas on the M, some other bars are a little questionable.... The fourth and fifth are dope, and I really like the green/white/black one, but get rid of the eyes, I think it would make it look better.

Jigsaw
02-26-2011, 05:16 PM
wat about this s critts
http://i55.tinypic.com/v5e2gz.jpg

Dcicfhbimv
02-26-2011, 05:18 PM
Messing around while waiting for some food at a hibachi joint. Crits?
Tempo- try using a pencil it allows you to erase. I know its obvious but still it helps you adjust your work without making another piece altogether. and also no offense but I'm sick of seeing the same thing posted over and over again. Oh and pencil can help you out with shading. Try cross hatching by the way the technique works wonders.
Jigsaw- does it say TS? i kinda like it I'd lose the bits though the look forced. And the initial wave line on the end of the "T" goes in a different direction than the "S" so it feels like it obstructs the flow of the piece. But thats just me hope it helped.

Jigsaw
02-26-2011, 05:22 PM
go more simpler u have potential just need work on letter structer

leash
02-26-2011, 07:11 PM
just simple keyboard letters but ur coloring good

Dcicfhbimv
02-26-2011, 08:23 PM
thanks. I'll work on my lettering but to be honest I despise keyboard letters at this point. Is there any other way to improve my letters without making my piece ridicuously basic. I know it sounds weak but I've tried keyboard letters alot and they really haven't helped me out too much just kinda got me uber irritated.

arsebanditskaelsucker
02-26-2011, 08:35 PM
^^It looks good to me,maybe a bit squished up but its got character with the chefs hat and the knives, fuck keyboard letters draw what the fuck you want to......u do it for yourself right?, not to please other people?

leash
02-26-2011, 08:42 PM
but use the keyboard letters for basic and start to change them with bars then it will not look basic

thepekins
02-26-2011, 11:45 PM
EVERYONE ON THE LAST THREE PAGES SHOULD GO LOOK AT THE FIRST FUCKING PAGE OF THE NEW TO GRAFFITI THREAD AND READ THE WHOLE FUCKING THING. GO FUCKING LOOK AT IT AND DO SOME SIMPLES! THATS WHY THAT SHITS IMPORTANT.

No one no here understands the reason for doing straight letter simples. You do some boring keyboard letters, then erase some shit, add on some shit, and try to bend the letters and shit so they got some style. Its pointless to draw keyboard letters and leave it at that. You gotta advance them.
This is advice that all the power toys on this thread need to hear. All yall *****s come on here with your no structure garbo pieces, ask for crits, get told to do simples and then go and do the same wack ass shit cus they think simples are pointless.
shit you guys. Most people on this thread right now are trying to do complicated shit and cant even scribble a decent handie....

excluding tasty, youth, and mewn.

sorry for that long ass rant but damn. yall know its true

ViniVidiVici
02-26-2011, 11:54 PM
If he does it for himself and doesn't care about improving then he should not be using this site....

leash
02-27-2011, 12:15 AM
you just do simples to learn how the letters are formed after some time you know what the letters structures are then you can go change letters

arsebanditskaelsucker
02-27-2011, 12:33 AM
sorry for that long ass rant but damn. yall know its true

yup pekins its very true i even use bars and when back to block letters just like everyone does or needs to i suppose to realise were their going wrong....i just like to see people trying something different and trying to develop new shit it keeps it more interesting.... didn't mean to cause a riot my bad lol

H1P30N3R
02-27-2011, 04:24 AM
crits please ... rough draft
http://i1204.photobucket.com/albums/bb409/heyzues07/IMAG0013.jpg

SicK-
02-27-2011, 04:41 AM
Hipe dont do do connections between your letters, Take the connection off of the S and E and move the S closer

ribcage
02-27-2011, 05:54 AM
lol my bad! didn't know it would get your panties in a bunch

its annoying, you are annoying. peace

ViniVidiVici
02-27-2011, 06:21 AM
the bars on the P are hurting, and the E isn't doing much better....

ian
02-27-2011, 06:40 AM
EVERYONE ON THE LAST THREE PAGES SHOULD GO LOOK AT THE FIRST FUCKING PAGE OF THE NEW TO GRAFFITI THREAD AND READ THE WHOLE FUCKING THING. GO FUCKING LOOK AT IT AND DO SOME SIMPLES! THATS WHY THAT SHITS IMPORTANT.

No one no here understands the reason for doing straight letter simples. You do some boring keyboard letters, then erase some shit, add on some shit, and try to bend the letters and shit so they got some style. Its pointless to draw keyboard letters and leave it at that. You gotta advance them.
This is advice that all the power toys on this thread need to hear. All yall *****s come on here with your no structure garbo pieces, ask for crits, get told to do simples and then go and do the same wack ass shit cus they think simples are pointless.
shit you guys. Most people on this thread right now are trying to do complicated shit and cant even scribble a decent handie....

excluding tasty, youth, and mewn.

sorry for that long ass rant but damn. yall know its true


i love you for this. the past 10 pages have had maybe 5 decent posts. i hope bombingscience puts my thread through cuz this is gettin a little annoying. that being said, heres a quick straight i did, i know the bars are a little sloppy but i whipped this out in like 5 mins tops, would appreciate some crits

http://i.imgur.com/oRjxv.jpg

_Aristrocracy_
02-27-2011, 07:33 AM
Uhhhhhmmmm...... Name Change! ;D

ribcage
02-27-2011, 08:08 AM
@ian no one cares how long it took you lol, dont make excuses for sloppiness . On a lighter note i think you should move on from doin the same simps and take your time on something... The E on your tag is dope tho, make the rest of your tag the same style

http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0227111353.jpg
^might look better wit some color and 3d...crits?

Female
02-27-2011, 08:39 AM
http://i53.tinypic.com/9iaf4w.jpg
I dont like the extension from the A to the C looks weird to me but overall I like how it looks.
and i might fix up the O more

ian
02-27-2011, 09:14 AM
@ian no one cares how long it took you lol, dont make excuses for sloppiness . On a lighter note i think you should move on from doin the same simps and take your time on something... The E on your tag is dope tho, make the rest of your tag the same style

^might look better wit some color and 3d...crits?


word dude, appreciate the comments, the tag was quick too so its not one of my best but thanks. TBH i like your style its hella clean and your bars are just about perfect. that particular piece, i think the roundness of the R and the right side of that H and the top of the A kinda contrasts with the harder edges in the rest of the piece, and im not a huge fan of the way you did the right side of the R, i think that the top loop and the bottom leg should overlap, and maybe even keep em connected to the left bar. the way you have it now kinda looks like you were trying to bring the loop behind the left bar with that extension and i dont think you were going for that (its off if you were). I dont really like that extension on the left of the R anyway, and i think it looks kinda strange how you start the top loop of the R because it kinda looks like its meant to be the same bar as the left bar but at the same time theyre not really lined up. I would also lose the AC connection, its kinda funky, and the way you connected the middle of the H to the top is also kinda funky but overall, nice clean mostly consistent style, color it up

Gatsoi
02-27-2011, 10:05 AM
Sore don't use four bars for an O, just draw an oval. bring your letters closer together and try a drop shadow

ribcage
02-27-2011, 10:11 AM
@ian O yup the R is fucked, outlining mistakes were made. But all the extensions were just to kill the negative space ya digg? If i woulda used the whole page they most likely would have looked better and made more sense.

ian
02-27-2011, 10:28 AM
@ribcage yeah i got you, most dont look bad i just dont like the R and H ones on the outside, no real need to kill negative space on the edges of the piece yakno?

ViniVidiVici
02-27-2011, 10:42 AM
Ribcage - I like it, but I do think the AC connection is bad, and it really doesn't need it, give it a shadow/3d and some color.
Anek - I really like that just white and black one, I think it is the third one you posted, stick to pieces like those...
SORE - So people are now telling you to move your letters closer =/ Well I would say leave it how it is, fix the O (always just sketch a oval and put a hole in it) I think it will look fine with your letters how they are if you give it some 3d and make the 3d on the left side so it uses up any negative space caused by you spreading out the letters, but hey this is just one person's opinion.

Will have some new shit posted sometime soon hopefully, I changed my name so we'll see how it goes,
Classes are wrecking me and my sleep lately so I have no clue when I'll have pics up.

ribcage
02-27-2011, 10:44 AM
yee, i guess i like taking all the space

FuckTheFame
02-27-2011, 11:28 AM
@soar- dont try so hard. you could prolly do that without all those lines. try working off the bottom of the page. it helps build structure. lol and take what these kids say about straights with a grain of salt. most get mad because they cant do them correctly themselves and dont want to see others advance past them. haha not be a dick but you guys on bombing science are easy to analyse.
oh yah and soar...3D!!!!

Angel'Ik
02-27-2011, 11:57 AM
Crits welcome of course. I know it's not that good, I'm sort of stuck in throw up mode, I went for wildstyle at first then it just wasn't going anywhere good so it ended be a mostly simple piece, and flat panel at that. I don't feel my 3d is up to par yet, I will try it out on my next piece though.

NosE2
02-27-2011, 12:29 PM
try straight letters it just looks like a big throwie

ian
02-27-2011, 12:37 PM
took my time on this one lol

http://i.imgur.com/SkjIF.jpg

ViniVidiVici
02-27-2011, 01:05 PM
Noise - The N bars are off and the connections hurt the piece, I think it would look better if you rounded the edges of your letters instead of going for sharp jagged points.
Angel - lose those curly extensions they look bad... and it does kinda look like a throw but it looks like you have potential.

@FucktheFame - Are you really encouraging people to say fuck it to simps and bars and just 'get' better?!

ViniVidiVici
02-27-2011, 01:15 PM
Okay these were real quick simps, the first one is aweful, just changed my name so I'm still fucking around with the letters and seeing what works....

Crits would be nice

Female
02-27-2011, 01:32 PM
@ViniVidiVici like this How would i do the 3D on the S and O
http://i53.tinypic.com/34y1udt.jpg

ian
02-27-2011, 01:40 PM
Noise - The N bars are off and the connections hurt the piece, I think it would look better if you rounded the edges of your letters instead of going for sharp jagged points.
Angel - lose those curly extensions they look bad... and it does kinda look like a throw but it looks like you have potential.

@FucktheFame - Are you really encouraging people to say fuck it to simps and bars and just 'get' better?!

whats wrong with the N? i curved the left and center bars but i dont think they're off...the connections just kinda happened cuz i extended bars and they ended up on top of each other but ill work on that and ill try some rounded edges. your stuff looks pretty good, im not a huge fan of the 2nd H, and in the third one you should bring your letters closer and overlap them a little, i think they looks too spread out but overall you definately got the structures down and your bars are all on point

Jigsaw
02-27-2011, 02:15 PM
just saw the messup on the s but helpful critts please!
says soen and the o is gonna be like a 2 towned egg with fine detail in it
http://i55.tinypic.com/2z52o3r.jpg

ribcage
02-27-2011, 02:39 PM
picture mantage?
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0226112110.jpg
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0227111353.jpg
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0227111953.jpg
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0227112011.jpg
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0227112032.jpg

Jigsaw
02-27-2011, 02:48 PM
nice montage bro always good to have some diff in here

KRE1
02-27-2011, 03:54 PM
your A to C connect is fuggin stupid.

NosE2
02-27-2011, 07:49 PM
quit trollin *****. yo SORE actually do the 3d

Tempo718
02-27-2011, 08:12 PM
ya but uh wat do your a to c connections look like?

Gatsoi
02-28-2011, 01:42 AM
ViniVidiVici- make all the letters the same size and watch you're bar width consistancy

alre
02-28-2011, 01:58 AM
My first sketch

http://img826.imageshack.us/img826/9514/cpaz.jpg

Comment pls.

ribcage
02-28-2011, 02:28 AM
your A to C connect is fuggin stupid.

fasho breh, i was goin for a more retarded look, but stupid is good enough, good lookin

ViniVidiVici
02-28-2011, 02:32 AM
Soar make the S and O 3d like this, take it to your point and then follow the curve of your letter, excuse the calc shit.

Jigsaw, I like it, pretty nice
Reach, not bad
CPA - Use bars

alre
02-28-2011, 02:34 AM
bars? sry, i cant speak English very well.

ViniVidiVici
02-28-2011, 03:06 AM
Bars are what good letters are made from, at least when you are a toy, if you or anyone else does not know what they are read this, I would suggest reading all of it, there is a plethora of information in here.

http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/showthread.php?2185-New-To-Graffiti-Start-Here!

alre
02-28-2011, 03:54 AM
http://img690.imageshack.us/img690/9950/cpa002.jpg

so?

Jigsaw
02-28-2011, 04:15 AM
@ViniVidiVici thankx bro glad u like it
anyway figured id put this in here for some inspiration this is one of the sickest people in the graff world
POSE
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9InLKbbJL-g

Skope2
02-28-2011, 04:20 AM
CPA - I believe theres a graffiti starters thread on here somewhere. You'd probably be better off posting/reading there rather than here.

Crits would be appreciated for these two. The 'S' in SKOPE looks a bit shit.

ViniVidiVici
02-28-2011, 05:07 AM
CPA - That looks better already, graff is a slow process, don't expect to banging out crazy pieces anytime soon, it takes years, but if you keep doing it the way we tell you will progress very fast, keep working on those simps and making good bars, once your consistent with that we'll show you some 3d/shadows and how to manipulate your letters to develop your own style, but it all takes time and effort, just remember that.

Skope - Yes the S is messed up but that is fixable, but the K and O are bad, redo them, can't even tell that they are letters, I like the P and E though, for the second piece I like it overall but the first letter I don't know what it is, I think it is an R but you should redo it and make the far left bar of the R a continuous bar if ya know what I mean, that way it is not as confusing.

Female
02-28-2011, 06:23 AM
http://i53.tinypic.com/n4fdvp.jpg
Like this?

NosE2
02-28-2011, 07:48 AM
You're almost there...you just gotta learn what parts to make the shadow go into the letter if that makes sense...like on your s you messed up some parts..i tried, just somethin i did in 10 seconds though so just take it as a visual. couple weeks or so and you should have it down
http://img84.imageshack.us/img84/2158/imgp0106t.jpg

Female
02-28-2011, 09:36 AM
Yeah i gotta get used to doing 3D every direction and @above pic it looks like you did a different point perspective than me but that still helps.

H1P30N3R
02-28-2011, 10:28 AM
my backwards 4 p is killin me lol crits anyway
http://i1204.photobucket.com/albums/bb409/heyzues07/IMAG0019.jpg

ViniVidiVici
02-28-2011, 11:19 AM
Yo try not to have all the negative space between the P and the E.... Your are okay but negative space like that isn't good.

SeizeTheMoment
02-28-2011, 11:21 AM
picture mantage?
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0226112110.jpg
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0227111353.jpg
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0227111953.jpg
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0227112011.jpg
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0227112032.jpg

diggin the a

thepekins
02-28-2011, 11:51 AM
http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/showthread.php?2185-New-To-Graffiti-Start-Here!


everyone on this thread should look at this before they draw another thing

thepekins
02-28-2011, 11:58 AM
REACH - good shit. top of the r would look better if it wasnt so circular

PESO- the P is too far from the other letters the O blows. Maybe make it look less like a zero on a digital clock and more like an O

CPA- not bad for a first sketch. You should work on a handie and build your pieces from that

Skope- cant even really read that first sketch if i didnt know from your name. I would scrap the first piece completely. The second one is on the right track. The bars arent awful. Cant tell what tthe first letter is looks like a Z to me?

SORE- cant really crit you since its so simple. Try bending the letters a little bit now and fix the 3D on the S

Fube
02-28-2011, 12:01 PM
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/3-1.jpg
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/2-1.jpg
http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v330/fubar976/Document.jpg

elesdee
02-28-2011, 12:07 PM
quick simple, flooded the damn sharpie paint maker a few times =/
19358

Female
02-28-2011, 02:48 PM
@vok its vok right? connection to the V and K makes it look like a M

ribcage
02-28-2011, 03:41 PM
@thepekins@vinividivici@seizethemoment fasho *****s

Tempo718
02-28-2011, 03:47 PM
19370

Tempo718
02-28-2011, 04:39 PM
19373

Dcicfhbimv
02-28-2011, 07:09 PM
Getting better tempo
the 1st ones shadows is a bit off and I'm not a huge fan of the detail line things
the 2nd one I can't help but feel the "O" should be lower to continue the arch other than that they are looking much better then before.

KRE1
03-01-2011, 10:24 AM
yeah thats all bad^^

shading is off
bars are uneven
your O is way too small
you got a gay name

ViniVidiVici
03-01-2011, 11:28 AM
That's not a gay name.... But everything else he says is true, but this is better than what you had been posting, you can take that however you want.

ian
03-01-2011, 01:47 PM
yeah thats all bad^^

shading is off
bars are uneven
your O is way too small
you got a gay name


dude quit being such a faggot troll

whoknows
03-01-2011, 02:52 PM
First post on here, and if you ask yes I did use bars, you can even see me practicing with them in the upper left. Please ignore the silly fills / extension I got bored and just kept adding stuff, also the B should be bigger but this was my first time using bars. Undecided on a name as of now.

Sbal
03-01-2011, 03:17 PM
u used bars? MORE LIKE BONERS BAHAHBHAHABHAHWAHAHAH GUH

extinct
03-01-2011, 03:37 PM
bars are used for the actual piece not just practice.. in all actuality thats pretty weak...

whoknows
03-01-2011, 03:46 PM
Sbal- You forgot to crit, nice try though
extinct- I expect it to be weak for sure I'm new to this haha, I just took the bars and shaped them to something that looked cooler than "BE3" and erased the overlapping lines

extinct
03-01-2011, 04:02 PM
never expect it to be weak, make it better.... i'll do a piece for your name sometime this week

Dcicfhbimv
03-01-2011, 06:05 PM
And cmon guys give tempo a break. you can lay the truth on a little less brutaly ya know?

Yeah Be3 I dont see how you used bars I see no uniform width really, the connections between letters are frivalous and ugly, and the flow is non existant and please don't get me started on the arrows.It's not hopeless though try working your way up from simplicity in your work you have an eraser you can take your time tinker with it. Start with just the letters get something that looks presentable then add connections overlaps 3-d shading color force fields and whatever the fuck you want. Just don't try it all at once it comes out looking well like that.

FlatScank
03-01-2011, 06:07 PM
Crits please.

ViniVidiVici
03-01-2011, 06:57 PM
Whoknows - You see those bars you drew above? Do you see those anywhere in your piece? Your first task is to try to show us that you can actually do a Keyboard letter piece....

All-nighter for a midterm at 8AM this morning, decided to take a 20 minute break and did these, please don't judge to badly, I am sleep deprived, and only awake via adderal, coffee, and the desire not to fail miserably, both these were basically freehanded except for doing 3d, and yes I know the 'highlights' are way whack... Just haven't had time to sit down for an hour and sketch lately.....

FlatScank
03-01-2011, 11:13 PM
Crits always welcome.

leash
03-01-2011, 11:32 PM
-lose arrows
-do not cut all the bars

Sbal
03-02-2011, 12:45 AM
GiVe CrItS to get them

Skope2
03-02-2011, 12:46 AM
Yea flat your lettering would look alot better if you lost most of those cuts. Nice work though.
Vini the 'S' and 'H' in the second piece need some serious work. Remember the bars!

Pulled this up a minuite ago. The 'O' looks like utter fuckery. Crits welcome.

Tempo718
03-02-2011, 01:03 AM
GiVe CrItS to get them
I don't think certain members crits are as constructive as others.

ViniVidiVici
03-02-2011, 01:08 AM
Skope - Yeah, those bars were actually good when I drew them but when I inked it I cut into them thus destroying said bars hahaha happens to me to often. anyways as for your piece personally I don't like the idea of the whole heart arrow, and especially not on 3 outta the 4 letters, the O is whack, I think you should maybe just try doing a simpler O, not so much simpler I guess more just normal looking, without all those 4 leaf clover bumps all over it. I really like your R, except for the heart arrow hahaha.

Skope2
03-02-2011, 01:10 AM
Yea cheers pal. Was just messing around with something new there really. Appreciate the crits.

ViniVidiVici
03-02-2011, 01:18 AM
FLAT - first, you can't expect anyone to crit your stuff when you don't give crits, however I'll crit it cuz I don't want to see stuff like that on this forum to be quite blunt. First thing first, stop everything you are doing, you NEED to go back to much much MUCH simpler stuff, you are not ready in any way shape or form for what you are trying to pull off, you've got whack arrows/extensions/letters the whole shitbang. Wanna know how I REAAAALLLLY REAAAAALLLLY know your not ready for that stuff..... Your handy..... for realz, if you can't even make your tag look good how the hell are you supposed to make pieces look good. You start at the bottom and build your way up, Handy>Throw>Piece I feel like half of the toys on this forum have no fucking clue about the history and progression of graff or anything, because if you did you would know that the tag comes first and the rest follows. You need to know the history, because once you know the history, doing simple straights won't seem so boring when you see how the old school bombers used to put up dope straights.....

FlatScank
03-02-2011, 01:39 AM
FLAT - first, you can't expect anyone to crit your stuff when you don't give crits, however I'll crit it cuz I don't want to see stuff like that on this forum to be quite blunt. First thing first, stop everything you are doing, you NEED to go back to much much MUCH simpler stuff, you are not ready in any way shape or form for what you are trying to pull off, you've got whack arrows/extensions/letters the whole shitbang. Wanna know how I REAAAALLLLY REAAAAALLLLY know your not ready for that stuff..... Your handy..... for realz, if you can't even make your tag look good how the hell are you supposed to make pieces look good. You start at the bottom and build your way up, Handy>Throw>Piece I feel like half of the toys on this forum have no fucking clue about the history and progression of graff or anything, because if you did you would know that the tag comes first and the rest follows. You need to know the history, because once you know the history, doing simple straights won't seem so boring when you see how the old school bombers used to put up dope straights.....

if your going to crit other, based on how someones handy is, heres something you should watch, it applies to the handy's I've seen on your sketchs
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=me3DlEWwxWc

KRE1
03-02-2011, 01:41 AM
this entire TOY THREAD is full of pussies

"aw hey guys dont give him such a hard time... yeah man! hes uber duber good bro! yea hes trying really hard!"

FUCK you faggets. EXPECT to get knocked. jesus what the fuck is wrong with you kids this AINT no fuckin game

bombingscience has turned into a breeding ground for pussy ass wannabee kids.

Skope2
03-02-2011, 01:44 AM
Because theres nothing constructive about saying FUK NIGR U SHIT GO HOME BOY GO PUT DAT PEN DOWN AND STOP YO! Fact is people are going to write regardless of what you say, so you might aswell say something to help them to improve.
No need to get butthurt about it.

FlatScank
03-02-2011, 01:58 AM
it's called an opinion, you don't have to offended by it, cause chances are you are not in the same city as said writers, and it's even more improbable that you'll meet these writers in person. though I will agree with Skope that when someone says "just stop writing, right now" that it's not encouraging for them to try harder, it's just encouraging them to stop, and if you are someone that likes graffiti for an art-sake, you would want more writers out bombing/piecing/getting their work up.

Gatsoi
03-02-2011, 02:08 AM
Everybody in this thread sucks except vinividivici for giving good crits.
kre1 you're a bitch

http://i880.photobucket.com/albums/ac9/gatsoi/8-1.jpg

Tempo718
03-02-2011, 02:18 AM
<---- "sucks"
19423

Gatsoi
03-02-2011, 02:22 AM
^You don't have to post everything you do
do some sketches in pencil, no lame ass fill like that one
work on a drop shadow, get rid of negative space(Move your letters as close as possible to eachother without squishing them)

and then get back to us, k?

KRE1
03-02-2011, 02:28 AM
tempreezy your O is still fucked up

graffiti is not art dummies so NO i dont want every dumb mutherfucker with a pen to scrawl his gay ass name on the walls it heats up spots attracts unwanted attention and makes shit look retarded

by the way toys giving toys crits is a retarded idea, because NONE of you will grow.

i hate kids.

Skope2
03-02-2011, 02:38 AM
>implying this isnt a toy thread, inhabited by toys for the sole reason that it is a fucking toy thread

Svc
03-02-2011, 03:05 AM
Gatsoi- not shure if it'd be any help but try making your bars the same width throught the M, W and N.
Tempo- work on fill if your going to attempt it, as said before, fill negative space better.
Kre1- since when is graffiti not art? just because your blind, dont mean other toys can't spot out someone elses flaws, and help them improve, maby your just a self concious thug wanna be, just shut up, nothing you say helps noone but make you seem more like an asshole. thank you.


19424
crits please

Tempo718
03-02-2011, 03:20 AM
svc - i think thats clean from all angles kid. nice work
kre - I try an empathize with you
gat - thanks for your input an honesty
19426

KRE1
03-02-2011, 03:25 AM
know your history you faggets

graffiti is not art, aerosol art IS.

tempo, your O is still fucked

SVC your shit is really bad. Straight letters you fruit then get fancy wit that shit

no wonder no mods come in here this place is a fuggin mess.

Svc
03-02-2011, 03:42 AM
lmao why do you think your king shit bud? why the fuck are you even in here? all you do is complain

.he didnt forget his smokes in his coat but that fags still in the closet


tempo- work on makin your m less a giant brick blob and get and work with that shadow and work with the negative space between letters, otherwise good improvment

SicK-
03-02-2011, 04:24 AM
know your history you faggets

graffiti is not art, aerosol art IS.

tempo, your O is still fucked

SVC your shit is really bad. Straight letters you fruit then get fancy wit that shit

no wonder no mods come in here this place is a fuggin mess.

Shut the fuck up faggot.

FlatScank
03-02-2011, 04:36 AM
Tempo - you should try bringing your letters closer together, but keep them that fat, and keep doing the straight keyboard letters, also don`t focus so much on fills.
the sketches you've been posting would be alright if they were rollers.

KRE1
03-02-2011, 04:44 AM
hey sick

go fuck yourself fagget eat a dick good luck frontin like you someone worth noting

Gatsoi
03-02-2011, 04:47 AM
^Who the fuck are you anyway bitch? some scrandom mother fucker who doesn't even post pictures, go do something with your life hoe

Svc
03-02-2011, 04:52 AM
who the hell is this kid? nothin but bad language and grade school dissing,

ViniVidiVici
03-02-2011, 05:22 AM
if your going to crit other, based on how someones handy is, heres something you should watch, it applies to the handy's I've seen on your sketchs
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=me3DlEWwxWc

First off you cock sucking motherfucking tit-licker I will battle you any day of the week without any concern about losing because I could make a motherfucking piece outta just whack arrows and extensions and my piece would still be on the same shitty level as you. Second, I changed my name and still have a better handy then you, although I will admit it needs work, but the difference between me and you is I'm a wannabe who will take the time and put forth the effort to improve, and take other people's advice who are clearly better than me. It is kids like you that make this thread horrible. The fact that you were thinking of doing a fucking legal would have been the ultimate embarrassment on the graffiti community.

KRE1 - Your being a dick to all these kids in this thread, but I don't blame you when kids are trying to act like they are fucking ballin' when they can't draw for shit, let alone do anything with an actual paint can. I can understand why you hate some of thses kids, but realize that there are some kids out there that really do wanna learn and really wanna get better, but it is hard when no one good can give some helpful knowledge and crits.

FlatScank
03-02-2011, 05:34 AM
[QUOTE=ViniVidiVici;1703139]First off you cock sucking motherfucking tit-licker I will battle you any day of the week without any concern about losing because I could make a motherfucking piece outta just whack arrows and extensions and my piece would still be on the same shitty level as you. Second, I changed my name and still have a better handy then you, although I will admit it needs work, but the difference between me and you is I'm a wannabe who will take the time and put forth the effort to improve, and take other people's advice who are clearly better than me. It is kids like you that make this thread horrible. The fact that you were thinking of doing a fucking legal would have been the ultimate embarrassment on the graffiti community.

My comment was not ment to offend you, but apperently your easily offended. If you watched the full video, the main point was you don't need style in all your letters in a tag, to make it look good, like you have. Doing simple letters in a tag, and then ending it with a letter that has some style looks more clean, than trying to make every letter have style, and making it look like garbage. As for the battle-part of you claim/diss, I can accept, but on the grounds that it's only a pencil sketch.

Tempo718
03-02-2011, 05:37 AM
19430

ian
03-02-2011, 06:12 AM
alllllright everyone in here needs to calmm down.
@vinividivici keep doin what youre doing dude, youre giving some of the best crits ive seen in a loooong ass time
@flat stop tryin all the fancy shit till your letters are solid. youre pieces are clean as hell and the 3d and highlights look good, but the cuts arrows and extensions make your letters look like shit. PS that video is gay as hell. PPS keyboard letters with two lines comin off the bottom left and bottom right is not a fuckin tag, stop doing fancy shit, get a real tag, and learn letter structure
@tempo got a couple of things for you: 1. Stop with the fills and markers and 3d. do some pencil sketches of keyboard letters using bars, kinda like that last one you posted except make your bars the same width throughout the entire thing, your T bars are thin as hell, the top and bottom of the E are fat, the middle is thin and the left is medium, the bars in the middle of the M are totally nonexistent, the curve of the P has varying width, and your o is fatter on the left than the right. keep doin keyboard letters until you can do them consistently with even width throughout the whole thing. 2. do what i just said, but dont post the pictures on here. make a ton of em, keep going till you can do it second nature, but stop posting every single one here. once you get your keyboard letters down, THEN you can post a flick and it should show some improvement and you can move on from there. 3. you should also work on a tag, thats where everyone should start. if you can do a decent piece but your tag looks like a 5 year old did it youre still gonna look toy as hell
@Gatsoi that last piece you did, the MWN look good, the E, not so much. the hard corner at the top left doesnt fit with the style of everything else, so id say just cut that off, and the curved bottom bar is a little messed up. Other than that, your style is nice and consistent
@SVC you should take a step back dude, your bars are super thin and its giving you a shit ton of negative space and even though you filled it with 3d, it still looks back. also a lot of the bends you have are a little extreme and look bad, as well as some of your extensions
@KRE1 you're just a fuckin troll, youve posted nothin but fuck yous in just about every toy thread, just get outta here, you probably dont even know how to draw. idk where people like you get off to going on internet forums and yellin at people. maybe your dicks small, maybe your parents didnt love you, maybe you have no friends, but either way, comin on some forum and trashing everyone else just makes you look bad, youre no tough guy. in fact youre probably some butthurt 4 foot 9 13 year old with nothing to do with your life, so you act all tough on the internet because no one can actually beat the shit out of you for being such a dick

now i think thats everyone, can i get some crits? this was just done out of boredom in class

http://i.imgur.com/3zOG3l.jpg

NosE2
03-02-2011, 08:00 AM
kre why don't you post some of your shit kid, quit bein a bitch *****. you're probably some no name kid in the streets that gets crossed out and you still think you're the shit..

SicK-
03-02-2011, 08:55 AM
hey sick

go fuck yourself fagget eat a dick good luck frontin like you someone worth noting

Im the one frontin? shut the fuck up your a bitch i haven't seen you post SHIT hop the fuck off my dick faggot. No one wants to hear your opinion on graffiti being an art or not, you don't dictate if it is or isn't. oh and learn to spell illiterate fuck.

Skope2
03-02-2011, 09:34 AM
Ian im rating the 'I' and the 'S' there. Although i think that 'E' looks a little out of place. I think it wouldve fit the style a bit better if it was in lower case perhaps. Liking that throwie in the corner too.

Crits would be appreciated on these two. The 'O' in the top one i think was a bit too small. Also the fill in the top is shit because what i thought was red turned out to be brown.

thepekins
03-02-2011, 09:35 AM
dont write repo dawg

thepekins
03-02-2011, 09:38 AM
Everybody in this thread sucks except vinividivici for giving good crits.
kre1 you're a bitch

http://i880.photobucket.com/albums/ac9/gatsoi/8-1.jpg

bump this shit. only decent shit on the last forever pages

but yo mewn get of vini's dick he aint the only one who gives crits on this shit

oh yeah your E is too fat especially at the top. It doesnt really flow with the other letters either. looks like the bottom bar of the E had a mad boner but then came too much and is now all curled up and recovering

ribcage
03-02-2011, 09:45 AM
im on the last forever pages! wtf breh your hurtin my feelings

ian
03-02-2011, 09:59 AM
Ian im rating the 'I' and the 'S' there. Although i think that 'E' looks a little out of place. I think it wouldve fit the style a bit better if it was in lower case perhaps. Liking that throwie in the corner too.

Crits would be appreciated on these two. The 'O' in the top one i think was a bit too small. Also the fill in the top is shit because what i thought was red turned out to be brown.

whatchu mean you're 'rating'? also your stuff isnt bad, the second E is fucked up cuz you cant see the bottom left and the second O looks like a C the top of the first e is too big and tilted but overall theyre not horrible

Skope2
03-02-2011, 10:04 AM
Sorry its slang where im from. 'rating' means good, like "i rate that highly"
Cheers ill take that into consideration on my next piece.

ian
03-02-2011, 10:45 AM
haha word dude, just never heard that before

ViniVidiVici
03-02-2011, 10:51 AM
Tempo - Don't do 3d and fills yet, you still need to work on letters first
Ian - I'm not feeling those swirls in your S and N, the O is fine, the I is bad I think, I just usually dislike most lowercase Is in general though so..... The E is good but doesn't fit the piece
Skope - Your letters are all strong individually, but you should try to work on flow. The first piece the E just looks weird tilted like that and the O needs a few minor fixes. On the second one, the E needs work, it is more just that the R is covering it up that it barely looks like an E, if I didn't know your name was REPO I wouldn't know what that letter was. The O also looks like a C, maybe, since it looks like your trying to do that slice missing from the O thing, maybe take a slice out of your O and then just shift that slice outward a little bit, hard for me to explain what I mean.

Flat - Didn't mean to get pissed at ya, I guess I took what you said the wrong way and thought you were trying to start shit, and lately I have been so stressed and tired that I'm getting pissed instantly and am ready to fight a *****h or two, all I was saying is that you need to go more simple, you can't have a fortress without a foundation....

Gatsoi
03-02-2011, 10:58 AM
Skope I'm feelin the bottom one, Not so much the hard edges on the top of the r and p though

thepekins
03-02-2011, 11:49 AM
http://img851.imageshack.us/img851/3391/scan0001m.jpg (http://img851.imageshack.us/i/scan0001m.jpg/)
Quick pen freestyle. lol i know im not intermediate.

thepekins
03-02-2011, 11:50 AM
http://img851.imageshack.us/img851/3391/scan0001m.jpg (http://img851.imageshack.us/i/scan0001m.jpg/)
pen freestyle. the B is fucked. I gotta ton of other shit to put on here, just too lazy to do it all right now

Tempo718
03-02-2011, 12:43 PM
19436

Gatsoi
03-02-2011, 12:57 PM
Tempo, chill son.
Somber, Watch your bar width, the B,O, and R look good

http://i880.photobucket.com/albums/ac9/gatsoi/10-1.jpg

sevenways
03-02-2011, 01:07 PM
19439

shut the fuck up and post pictures.

Gatsoi
03-02-2011, 01:11 PM
Tempo, chill son.
Somber, Watch your bar width, the B,O, and R look good

http://i880.photobucket.com/albums/ac9/gatsoi/10-1.jpg

bump

ian
03-02-2011, 03:18 PM
http://i.imgur.com/3zOG3l.jpg

bumping for crits

water that looks pretty good, i dont like the weird extension on the e and the bottom of the w is kinda small. also your letters seem to get bigger as you go from left to right, work on that

mewn the E looks better but i still dont like that top left corner, just cut it like you did with the top left of the M and N and i think it would look better

extinct
03-02-2011, 03:59 PM
yo mewn your friends with werm... i can see style influences up on the w an m

Tempo718
03-02-2011, 04:06 PM
19439

shut the fuck up and post pictures.
this is so wavy . heh

NosE2
03-02-2011, 04:08 PM
that e doesnt fit

rockytherocker
03-02-2011, 04:09 PM
The post is very informative. It is a pleasure reading it. I have also bookmarked you for checking out new posts.

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FlatScank
03-02-2011, 05:17 PM
@Sevenways, thats a fresh sketch that should be on a wall

Gatsoi
03-03-2011, 01:44 AM
@Zewl You down to exchange?

Skope2
03-03-2011, 02:40 AM
Sevenways that piece is sick!

Looking for crits on these two.
Redid the 'O' on repo to make the cut look less like a 'C' the 'R' still covers too much of the 'E' though, will need to work on that.
And far too many connections and shit on SKOPE, will not be repeating that style, just looking for anything else you can spot for me to work on.

Phat 2
03-03-2011, 03:48 AM
i like the first one more
but you need to define your letters. it's illegible. very.

ribcage
03-03-2011, 03:54 AM
it's illegible. very.

what he said, 3d dont look that bad tho

TastyMcNasty
03-03-2011, 04:14 AM
skope- go simpler, but that 3D is looking pre good...

new shit, crits?

TastyMcNasty
03-03-2011, 04:53 AM
somber- your O and B dont really match everything else, but other than that its looking pre good...
safe- thats a pre clean style you got going on, i like it.
4menace- finish that! its looking doope

i know i dont belong here, but i like the crits i got... so here it goes... crits'd be nice, and the charac was just a result of boredom

thepekins
03-03-2011, 07:19 AM
http://img851.imageshack.us/img851/3391/scan0001m.jpg (http://img851.imageshack.us/i/scan0001m.jpg/)
pen freestyle. the B is fucked. I gotta ton of other shit to put on here, just too lazy to do it all right now

bump got no crits on the last pg except for mewn

thepekins
03-03-2011, 07:35 AM
idk if you write repo or not but theres already a repo

bomber boy
03-03-2011, 07:37 AM
bump got no crits on the last pg except for mewn

ye i like the letters but the first thing i notice is that in your first letter u only use straight bars like in most of ur letters i think it would look alot better if u kept the straight bar style for the u and the b

bomber boy
03-03-2011, 07:43 AM
letters looking gd although the direction of ur 3d has changed at the end i also like ur character and how u have ur tag in his smoke cloud its a good idea

Cl4sh
03-03-2011, 09:20 AM
Haven't posted on here in a minute. Heres some shit I did in class today. Trying to progress. Can't tell if I'm getting better or worse. My S's suck. My hands seem to be getting better at least...

19464
19465

ian
03-03-2011, 09:26 AM
ChASH lol, still no good

Cl4sh
03-03-2011, 09:35 AM
Funny that you said that. That's a joke between me and my friends that know I write. Love that L though for some reason. And what's still no good. The hand or the shitty piece?

TastyMcNasty
03-03-2011, 09:38 AM
clash- work on your bar consitancey, simple it up a bit more, dont connect the letters like your doing, and you should get better

Skope2
03-03-2011, 10:06 AM
idk if you write repo or not but theres already a repo
Ah right, yea i am. Ill start writing something else instead then. Cheers for the heads up.

ViniVidiVici
03-03-2011, 10:31 AM
Pretty nice, the O just looks funny though like that, although I don't know how else you should do it, watch your bar on the K, the main bar is off a little if you look closely, 3d is off on the S a little. the E is a little to extreme bar wise, I know you were going for bigger bars on it, but that is a little much, make it just a tad smaller, now you could actually make the 3D bigger at the E and then scale it back as you get close to the S, it would make it look like the S if further away and the E is closer to the viewer, it would be tricky to get it right but would be dope. Just some ideas.

Skope2
03-03-2011, 10:36 AM
thanks man. im really struggling with the O's at the moment.

ViniVidiVici
03-03-2011, 10:40 AM
Yeah it's hard to make unique Os....

jypsy
03-03-2011, 12:10 PM
((accidentally posted this in the wrong thread, moved it here))
Another design I sketched up last night:
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SicK-
03-03-2011, 12:23 PM
Lol jypsy you need to learn to color in between the lines bro

Sbal
03-03-2011, 12:46 PM
jypsy is a 22 year old girl from the south

Tempo718
03-03-2011, 04:25 PM
clash - i think the letters in ur name work well together, that should be a fun word to play around wit. peace

Dcicfhbimv
03-03-2011, 04:49 PM
Made this piece of junk a lil while ago I dont like it but maybe you could tell me if anything went right with it .
Jypsy-Yeah they kinda covered eberything already
Skope-Really like all but the "O" try layering your gray to make shadow on the 3-d thats just me but I think it would look real tight.

Fube
03-03-2011, 05:35 PM
sever huh? please dont write that. im hopeing your just fuckin around.

Tempo718
03-03-2011, 05:50 PM
my first sketch with pencil, in years. am i not pressin down hard enough or what. 19495
cop'd me a sketch pad & mechanical pencil one time yesterday. chinese lady got got. biyyytch. yeh

Skope2
03-03-2011, 08:10 PM
Tempo i suggest getting two pencils, one for sketching and keep the other real sharp for outlining.

Tempo718
03-03-2011, 09:08 PM
alright skope thats a good point, are mechanical pencils any better than regular pencils?

Skope2
03-03-2011, 09:41 PM
Jypsy - You should definately take a few steps backwards. It doesnt look like youre ready for the more complex stuff yet. I'd carry on hitting throwies and bubble until youve really nailed it, then it'll make getting into the bar-type lettering much easier.
Sever - That fill is sick but your letters are majorly lacking structure. Youve got to use bars!

Skope2
03-03-2011, 09:43 PM
oh yea tempo dont bother with mechanical pencils. just buy a shit load of the usual HB pencils and a half decent sharpener. theyre cheap as hell.

Tempo718
03-03-2011, 09:44 PM
haha even the monkey got swag son. thaswassup
alright then i need a few of those then. all i got is this mechanical one.

ntn
03-04-2011, 12:13 AM
tryin out different styles...

whatya think?

ian
03-04-2011, 01:36 AM
tempo please stop posting every single piece of shit you draw, sever you need to use BARS, Skope thats pretty sick except the bottom of the right bar in the P connecting to the left bar doesnt really fit the piece

Shofs17
03-04-2011, 01:39 AM
Not the best, but crits por favor

Skope2
03-04-2011, 01:55 AM
Abby theres way too many extensions in there that you dont need. I think it would look like a decent piece if you cut the extensions

PermanentMarkers
03-04-2011, 01:55 AM
Made this piece of junk a lil while ago I dont like it but maybe you could tell me if anything went right with it .
Jypsy-Yeah they kinda covered eberything already
Skope-Really like all but the "O" try layering your gray to make shadow on the 3-d thats just me but I think it would look real tight.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TQKHH28Ojg8

Listen to Fube.

alre
03-04-2011, 03:31 AM
http://img291.imageshack.us/img291/4199/snc00054z.jpg

Tempo718
03-04-2011, 04:04 AM
19519
Sorry bout my camera sux

ViniVidiVici
03-04-2011, 06:09 AM
That has lots of potential, only letter that is weak is the M but the rest are fairly good and you kept the same style throughout, not bad.

Phat 2
03-04-2011, 06:13 AM
that's cool tempo

Skope2
03-04-2011, 07:01 AM
CPA - You really need to take a look at how to use bars instead of going in like that. The letter proportions are all out of whack, the P extends into the A far too much.
Tempo - Thats a better improvement than your other shit! nice work.

Going with a new style here, not finished yet. Theres something wrong with it, but i cant quite put my finger on it. If i could get some crits that would be cool..

ViniVidiVici
03-04-2011, 07:08 AM
The E is messed up and the bottom of the S could look better, not gonna say anything about the whole KO deal I'm sure your gonna try to make it work.

Skope2
03-04-2011, 07:47 AM
Yea i blitzed that KO thing entirely. It was definately a shit idea. Hows this instead?

ViniVidiVici
03-04-2011, 08:02 AM
Looks better than before, but the S still needs something imo....

ribcage
03-04-2011, 09:20 AM
k looks like an r dont connect the 2 right legs

Phat 2
03-04-2011, 09:38 AM
i liked the first sketch almost a million times better

ViniVidiVici
03-04-2011, 09:58 AM
Eh I think they both are pretty good he just maybe fix each...

ViniVidiVici
03-04-2011, 11:02 AM
Did this during one of my classes, didn't know the name was taken, but whatever...

ribcage
03-04-2011, 11:09 AM
E is super plain and looks like a backwards 3, width of bottom bar of D is off as well. the middle bar of the N is lookin a little weird too

Skope2
03-04-2011, 11:27 AM
Vini - pretty much what ribcage said, the 3D looks decent though


Ended up with this, it was definately more hassle than its worth.

inthecity
03-04-2011, 11:52 AM
http://img683.imageshack.us/img683/3373/markmaskr.jpg

http://img841.imageshack.us/img841/292/markshit.jpg

ribcage
03-04-2011, 12:12 PM
@skope what happened to the P? its lookin pretty hurt. and it seems like your jumpin steps again puttin breaks and extensions in, they are wack

cut the nose off the P and start by makin it a circular P cause right now u have part squared off and part rounded. Work on having consistent bar width before you start putting breaks in your letters. Look at the O, the break in it doesnt match up width the rest of the O. Err body is gonna keep telling you to work on the basics until you got it down.

go simpiler and try to make sense with your letters before you start throwin in add ons, extensions, etc

Isaac
03-05-2011, 04:00 AM
weird robot stuff?1955219553

ribcage
03-05-2011, 06:26 AM
who wants to be the first to tell this ***** to go simpler?

FuckTheFame
03-05-2011, 09:44 AM
Isaac - keep at it. thats original. just learn where to place your layers a little better. develop that style

some structured stuff i been working on
cant really make a straight line tho
my hand shakes everytime i try to
thanks a lot east coast molly


http://farm6.static.flickr.com/5253/5500350077_75104191be.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/55010972@N05/5500350077/)

http://farm6.static.flickr.com/5100/5500945530_2d15d0e60d.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/55010972@N05/5500945530/)

Tempo718
03-05-2011, 09:46 AM
19560

Still practicing bars.

IMO that Y on the bottom look good. @ youth

FuckTheFame
03-05-2011, 09:51 AM
thanks man
whats up with those gaps between your letters tempo?
i think your stuff would look a lot better if you made your letters closer together

random ZEN i did to be calm haha

http://farm6.static.flickr.com/5054/5500945940_c37bd60ccc.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/55010972@N05/5500945940/)

pointman
03-05-2011, 10:05 AM
YOUTH second one down is fire just maybe needs tweaking not sure to what, maybe a smaller T extension but either way thats what im hoping to go for when i get my lettering down!

FuckTheFame
03-05-2011, 10:14 AM
yah man. been messing around with shit for a while.
you write sato right?
i been bored lately
care if try some sato stuff?

thepekins
03-05-2011, 10:16 AM
http://img577.imageshack.us/img577/6186/scan0002mi.jpg (http://img577.imageshack.us/i/scan0002mi.jpg/)
http://img11.imageshack.us/img11/1677/scan0003wf.jpg (http://img11.imageshack.us/i/scan0003wf.jpg/)
http://img703.imageshack.us/img703/3166/scan0004ww.jpg (http://img703.imageshack.us/i/scan0004ww.jpg/)
http://img577.imageshack.us/img577/8014/scan0005w.jpg (http://img577.imageshack.us/i/scan0005w.jpg/)
http://img96.imageshack.us/img96/5858/scan0006lt.jpg (http://img96.imageshack.us/i/scan0006lt.jpg/)
http://img189.imageshack.us/img189/9141/scan0007cf.jpg (http://img189.imageshack.us/i/scan0007cf.jpg/)

thepekins
03-05-2011, 10:19 AM
isaac- cant read that shit go simple

youth- the ZEN piece is mad wack sorry dude, seen way better from you. The second youth piece is dope. except for the bottom of the y. The U on the first one is dope

tempo- cant even really crit your shit its simple as fuck. just yeah at least its legible

weedeater
03-05-2011, 10:22 AM
http://farm6.static.flickr.com/5100/5500945530_2d15d0e60d.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/55010972@n05/5500945530/)

dope

inthecity
03-05-2011, 10:44 AM
http://img854.imageshack.us/img854/3637/markgreen.jpg

just some garbage

FuckTheFame
03-05-2011, 08:24 PM
inthecity - thats not really all that bad. looks good for the amount of effort you put into it. itd be cool to see all your letters have a slant like the M and A do

ribcage
03-05-2011, 08:32 PM
@pekins, diggin the S and the M on that last 1, u should post some shit you've sketched out tho most the ballpoint pen freestyles have the same base to em they all startin to look similar ya digg?

inthecity
03-05-2011, 09:18 PM
thanks for the input homie, gonna bang out some sketches tonight.

FuckTheFame
03-05-2011, 10:00 PM
some random stuff SATO
lol might help you with some inspiration if your having trouble
throw a youth at me if you got the time

http://farm6.static.flickr.com/5294/5500884047_940e90cf5b.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/55010972@N05/5500884047/)