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Tempo718
08-07-2011, 05:26 PM
29374
hey yall wadup can I get some advice here?
I kno I dont do many crits, reason is I am not too good at pointing the weak points out yet.
Maybe after I begin to understand the mechanics of how things go I could be more helpfull. Peace

dankbudz
08-07-2011, 05:47 PM
dont puts so many edges n shit, you gotta go back to basics and write it out like BRI or BAI, none of that other lame stuff


3d got a bit messed up
http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q168/matthew1o/YO-1.jpg

Skeletor1134
08-07-2011, 05:52 PM
your character is badassz

aaesoo
08-07-2011, 07:14 PM
pen freestyle
29389

TastyMcNasty
08-07-2011, 07:50 PM
https://fbcdn-sphotos-a.akamaihd.net/hphotos-ak-snc6/228863_260846967275553_100000507545549_1008014_419 983_n.jpg

sick.

Beastizm
08-07-2011, 11:42 PM
Damn Reach im really feeling that style bro, would you like to exchange

Tempo718
08-08-2011, 09:13 AM
29398
watchu think...

Mc Satan
08-08-2011, 09:45 AM
^ right bottom bar of the R should have been consistently fat, not the weird thin to fat back to thin look you gave it. your E looks a bit awkward to me but i honestly can not pinpoint why. other than that i like your piece and the fill, allthough the swirly bit on the V needs a better connection to the rest of the green , that should be a very easy fix though.

sadgeh
08-08-2011, 11:04 AM
Tempo. I like the fill. The middle bar of the E should have been higher more in the exactly middle, now it looks weird.

sadgeh
08-08-2011, 11:09 AM
http://img444.imageshack.us/img444/8472/sjonge.jpg

Rasm
08-08-2011, 11:50 AM
@Seder, good work man, you've come a long way since you started. Keep it up.

@Aeso, that's pretty fresh for a quick freestyle man!

@Tempo, The E looks awkward because the middle bar is too low, and it's too curvy in the wrong places. Your bar widths are all over the place, and your letters are spaced out too much and at inconsistent intervals. Also, your 3D is off, most noticeably on the E.

@sadgeh, looks like that took you about 10 minutes. I'd like to see a sketch that you took your time one. The letters are very square, throw some curves in there, especially in the E and the R. Also keep your bar widths consistent as well as the height and width of your letters.

sernobil
08-08-2011, 02:34 PM
@butters...really like the SCANK in general, has a nice flow to it and I just really like b&w. Though I have to agree with ribcage that the extension on the s is a bit to much. The extension going from the bottom C to the bottom s might have looked better if you would have let it come out of the C(sorry it's hard to explain what I mean in english). Really like the shape of that K, original(atleast to me it is). Your handstyle really needs some work though :)

@Aeso...nice pennage...nice handstyles asfar as I can see, I don't think I would have put that little extension thingy on left side of the A though.

@Rave...try and make your letters overlap...it will become more solid as a whole.

@Sadgeh Maak je letters wat breder, maakt het hele inkleuren ook wat makkelijker. Er zitten hier en daar wel wat leuke vormen tussen maar volgens mij loop je te ver op jezelf vooruit. Het is al moeilijk genoeg om simpele letters zonder extension er goed uit te laten zien. Ik hoop dat je hier iets aan hebt, zo niet...nou dan niet :) ps. staat er nou "kanker of hoer"?

peace

zemune
08-08-2011, 03:12 PM
http://imageshack.us/f/18/dsci0004l.jpg/
http://imageshack.us/f/841/dsci0014j.jpg/

tell me your opinions.

arsebanditskaelsucker
08-08-2011, 05:47 PM
^^^My opinion is upload the image here so i don't have to go there to look at it lol :)
erm personally quite like the shape of you letters myself reminds me a shyne but like at the beginning needs alot of work to pull of that style though,but hell why not try someones got to :)
Tempo-yeeesssssss!!! those fat letters look beaut!
Aeso- tight! nice and easy on the eyes noting out of place there
Danks- thats just fucking awesome mate i love the little guy and the 3d on the letters really looks like their being pulled back by a vacuum or something and the detail on the green mold on the letters...u just keep doing what your doing :)
Reach- never been around to comment but been looking at your sketches for a while...nice i likes!
Scank- like everything think the c is a little weird/ skinny but still likes it alot
atak-like it but it looks like its been chopped in half down the bottom of the page
sadgeh- slow down a little bit bud....generally i can make out the letters and some bits don't look bad but its a bit to extreme (like the last r) for me and like i keep telling tempo fatten your letters up abit :)
had a little play about with this from a song i heard while i was doodling sooo.......not quite so sure on the fill lol :)
http://img585.imageshack.us/img585/6619/1005467.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/585/1005467.jpg/)

nah!
08-08-2011, 06:15 PM
dont flair the bars

lol saw some aesop tags near me

sadgeh
08-08-2011, 06:31 PM
that fill is kinda space, or i have smoked to much weed.
But what markers should i use to get better fills, cause that ''kankerzooi of hoer'' sketch was kinda old, but my camera is broke and the scanmachine is also broke, fuck.

sernobil
08-08-2011, 09:02 PM
I've got "on the run twin markers".
example(not a very good one but oh well):
http://img845.imageshack.us/img845/2496/bek1qb7.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/845/bek1qb7.jpg/)

peace

arsebanditskaelsucker
08-09-2011, 03:20 AM
^^^ i don't know sernobil that looks pretty fucking sweet to me! damn was looking at them on the run markers yesterday myself holy shit i'm guna have to go mug a granny or something because them colours are fresh as fook! i needs some of them pens
nah- u reckon lave it more blockbuster then??
sadgeh- lol, spaced, it could be :) i just doodled on my letters first cuz i was bored :)

Shit Outta Luck
08-09-2011, 02:28 PM
29583
29584

emace1
08-09-2011, 03:54 PM
http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6196/6024421793_68a2679ec5.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/60576921@N02/6024421793/)
http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6150/6017587967_8a18f8e0e2.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/60576921@N02/6024421793/)
http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6128/6014702797_f4f6204e57.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/60576921@N02/6017587967/)
photo (http://www.flickr.com/photos/60576921@N02/6014702797/) by

Phat 2
08-09-2011, 08:19 PM
1st one sucks, second one sucks less, third one's letters suck even less, but the characs are dawp

MN Nice
08-09-2011, 09:00 PM
Edit: Updated version. Crits?

http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00221-20110809-2235.jpg?t=1312947388

Beastizm
08-09-2011, 10:37 PM
just messing around
http://i1234.photobucket.com/albums/ff404/Sce161/IMAG0013.jpg
i know im missing 3d and everything and Swae this is not my entry, this is just a fuck around

Beastizm
08-09-2011, 11:09 PM
just checking if my signature shows up

Shit Outta Luck
08-09-2011, 11:09 PM
MN Nice, work on your drop shadow a bit. It looks off in some places...and at the top of the S dont let the bar touch the middle of the S, cut it shorter. And Beastizm, that 3d is bad and shit blah blah you sound like you know haha. If that says Kasc your good, maybe fix the bar width (especially on the S) and the 3d. If it says Kast do that stuff + fix that fucking T. Good luck

Beastizm
08-09-2011, 11:21 PM
yeah it says kasc, thanks for the crit

Beastizm
08-09-2011, 11:28 PM
other shit is 2 big

sema
08-10-2011, 01:17 AM
that bek piece is tight bro ....crits?29645

MN Nice
08-10-2011, 02:21 AM
Get a better camera^

Finished this one.

http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00223-20110810-0216.jpg?t=1312960870

Shit Outta Luck
08-10-2011, 11:35 AM
That looks clean and better. Nice haha

Fury
08-10-2011, 12:36 PM
http://i.imgur.com/8eVEc.jpg
Drew this while bored.

ESCE - Make your middle bar come out more in your E's
sema - I can't even see that.
KAST - Work more on your bars before you push shit outwards and do different stuff. Also, take off the highlights.
EMACE - Some of it is kinda sloppy, like the first A. It's alright.
SOL - The only letter I can make out is the S. Don't connect letters yet.
BEK - I don't like your extensions on the B or how it connects to the E. Otherwise it looks decent.
2LIVES - L is too tall, and I overall don't really like it, but nothing specifically I don't like about it.

sir.to.you.
08-10-2011, 07:42 PM
@emace- makes me feel all fuzzy inside. lol
havnt really sketched in forever. the hand was a joke. crits?
http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6194/6030442065_753f1ea764_z.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/58969092@N06/6030442065/)
Photo 242 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/58969092@N06/6030442065/) by ripmb (http://www.flickr.com/people/58969092@N06/), on Flickr

ATAK!:3
08-10-2011, 09:25 PM
29686
thinking about entering this for the reflect throw battle

MN Nice
08-10-2011, 09:28 PM
Take that chode off the top of the R.

upper90daynnight
08-10-2011, 09:42 PM
2968729688
havent posted in awhile so heres some new shit, im really feelin reuse, recap, repeat pieces some more on the way

ribcage
08-10-2011, 09:43 PM
@mn nice take that chode out of your mouth

upper90daynnight
08-10-2011, 09:44 PM
296892969029691
heres the rest

upper90daynnight
08-10-2011, 09:45 PM
also im really feeling the handy on the wiz piece

MN Nice
08-10-2011, 09:49 PM
@mn nice take that chode out of your mouth

Lol you have such the little crush on me, huh?

sir.to.you.
08-10-2011, 10:07 PM
that hand looks like a impatient girls handwriting

ribcage
08-11-2011, 12:01 AM
@mnnice I dont like you.

yeah.
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0810112020.jpg
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0810112030.jpg
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0810112045.jpg
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/08101121511.jpg

Mc Satan
08-11-2011, 12:16 AM
^ your C seems bit to rounded,all your letters have straight lines pointy corner. the C stands out a lot in that. add to that the fact that its way fetter than your other letters, i think it makes it stand out too much. I know i shouldnt be saying much, but thats just my opinion

ribcage
08-11-2011, 12:23 AM
The C is supposed to stand out. It breaks the standard charachteristic of the piece. I should have colored it a different color or smaller or something for yall to pronounce that it was on purpose. Anyways its a work in prgress. I did one with a bunch of extensions and shit last night but got shitface and fucked the outline up supremely. The R and the E were hella steazy and the ACH sucked cock, and on this one its the opposite for me, Ifucked the R and E and did okay with the rest.

MN Nice
08-11-2011, 12:27 AM
^ your C seems bit to rounded,all your letters have straight lines pointy corner. the C stands out a lot in that. add to that the fact that its way fetter than your other letters, i think it makes it stand out too much. I know i shouldnt be saying much, but thats just my opinion

Quoting for truth. Who would've thought?

sir.to.you.
08-11-2011, 01:12 AM
"they always said god is perfect and man is not, well guess what, man made boose and god made pot.so why not,im not fuckin wit needles or smokin a rock. cannabis, my medicine so i focus alot."
http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6197/6031653642_d16f50ba1c_z.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/58969092@N06/6031653642/)
Photo 240 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/58969092@N06/6031653642/) by ripmb (http://www.flickr.com/people/58969092@N06/), on Flickr
fucked up the bar in the middle good!FUCK
http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6062/6031097853_410aeb8726_z.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/58969092@N06/6031097853/)
Photo 239 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/58969092@N06/6031097853/) by ripmb (http://www.flickr.com/people/58969092@N06/), on Flickr
Train tracks from nowhere!haha bullshitin

.Cuore
08-11-2011, 01:24 AM
296892969029691
heres the rest

did you really do a wiz khalifa simp........ smh
and that handy looks like walt disney got shitfaced and try to graff
finally, get rid of the gay arrows that curve around the bottom of your shit. all of them. on handies, simps, everything.

Beastizm
08-11-2011, 01:31 AM
@reach that usually works better if you do it with the middle letter, as in the "a"

TastyMcNasty
08-11-2011, 01:55 AM
i wish i had my camera, shitty laptop flick does it no justice...
29697

ribcage
08-11-2011, 03:28 AM
lol you drew a dragon and shit. You best color it before you take another pic.

toopski
08-11-2011, 03:55 AM
http://img189.imageshack.us/img189/4863/dsc0017aw.jpg
http://img215.imageshack.us/img215/4090/dsc0029nm.jpg
http://img27.imageshack.us/img27/5919/dsc0032qr.jpg
http://img26.imageshack.us/img26/1223/dsc0033wv.jpg

Tempo718
08-11-2011, 06:07 AM
2969929698

sema
08-11-2011, 08:58 AM
reach= if u wanna do the c try doin the e too
toop= i like the 2nd n 4th real clean nice structure

sadgeh
08-11-2011, 09:00 AM
tempo - to pointy, dont like it
reach - hmm i like it cause everyone is expecting that you did the A.

Graff2k11
08-11-2011, 09:01 AM
http://i1086.photobucket.com/albums/j454/graff2k11/IMG_0221.png

just a simple... crits

sema
08-11-2011, 09:08 AM
29702

Graff2k11
08-11-2011, 09:14 AM
sema.. youve posted that bottom piece before.
but try outlining your top piece with black, see how that looks, should make that teal really pop

toopski
08-11-2011, 09:14 AM
reach= if u wanna do the c try doin the e too
toop= i like the 2nd n 4th real clean nice structure

thx man usually the stuff i paint turns out nothing like that tho lol since i freehand all painted shit unless its legal

aaesoo
08-11-2011, 10:11 AM
@sekn work on keeping all your letters on one angle if you're gonna lean them to the left or something. it kinda seems like they're starting to straighten up as the piece progresses. your shadows off in some places too. good keyboard letters tho, but your S and N look a little disproportional
@acer that piece is sick although i don't really like the c just because the extentions kinda make it look like a G. and like the other dude said throw a black outline on the top piece
@reach that C should be straight its too rounded off for the rest of the piece. the extensions kill it too, especially on the H
@sir2you i like the fade and teos pieces on top, only thing i can say is the F seems a little too Far away from the rest of the letters. i like the bottom piece too i'd say thicken up the t tho and the K seems xrushed between the pedestal and O

sir.to.you.
08-11-2011, 10:25 AM
thanks homie, i was lookin for crits and got no one gave me any, so its appreciated.

TastyMcNasty
08-11-2011, 11:25 AM
i'll colour it later, looks like a laptop flick is as good as it gets at the moment >.>

29735

fucked up the R and the I >:[

sema
08-11-2011, 11:32 AM
thanks for crits outline n a few scattered bubbles from behind set it off, i know i posted the 1 be4 its just same page. ill post the flik of the black when i fix this fkn scanner.
-sekn try given the letters some motion in the next one
-nasty shts tight like the vanishin point to the dragon some colourin will def make it pop

nah!
08-11-2011, 12:50 PM
i don't write this i saw a tag on the street and used the letters in a piece
http://dl.dropbox.com/u/13341191/a/100_2415.JPG

Fury
08-11-2011, 01:45 PM
http://i.imgur.com/8eVEc.jpg
Drew this while bored.

ESCE - Make your middle bar come out more in your E's
sema - I can't even see that.
KAST - Work more on your bars before you push shit outwards and do different stuff. Also, take off the highlights.
EMACE - Some of it is kinda sloppy, like the first A. It's alright.
SOL - The only letter I can make out is the S. Don't connect letters yet.
BEK - I don't like your extensions on the B or how it connects to the E. Otherwise it looks decent.
2LIVES - L is too tall, and I overall don't really like it, but nothing specifically I don't like about it.

bump fo' crits

arsebanditskaelsucker
08-11-2011, 03:32 PM
^^ thanks for the crit on the 2 lives fury :)
ok i can't tell what half of those letters are but i do like the general shape to them and the flares on the ends of them...well you do them better than i do put it that way :)
i think minor details like bar thickness/thinness in places and the characters tooth that is higher up and a bit off on the right handside it kinda draws my attention to it not being level
maybe i have obsessive.complusive.disorder i'm not sure lol :)
nah- noice!! 1's a bit pap though arrrh kid! :)
tasty- i really like that actually, nice style on the letters
graff 2k- you see how nice it looks when you first look and then you see the s trying to hump the e a little bit more than the k and the n, i reckon a bit more even space on the first two would be banging or alternatively tighten it up and pull the k and the n back in as close as the s and e :)
sema-i like it overall, but i think you slightly have the same problem i have as you get in to drawing a word or whatever the letters get bigger as you go along...watch out for doing that and yes take a less blurry one next time :)
think i'm getting like lush in my old age more decrepied and perverted lol, i know its shit but i like to share my cock drawings:
http://img37.picoodle.com/i58b/potts/16fq_c80_u905z.jpg (http://i.picoodle.com/2bdiiijn)

sema
08-11-2011, 03:47 PM
^^^ someone watchin superbad bahaha jus playin thanks for crits

Phat 2
08-11-2011, 04:03 PM
^^^ someone watchin superbad bahaha jus playin thanks for crits

OHHHHHHH hahahaha that was MEAN !!!
I'm not sure he got it though

nah!
08-11-2011, 04:09 PM
http://img37.picoodle.com/i58b/potts/16fq_c80_u905z.jpg (http://i.picoodle.com/2bdiiijn)

hmm i think it would of looked better if each letter was a single PENIS or the whole piece was a single PENIS

kinda like this

http://vimeo.com/10840515

arsebanditskaelsucker
08-11-2011, 04:22 PM
^^ oh i'm so glad...i fucking love lush! he's my style of bansky, and thanks sema lol :)
and nah i'll bear that in mind the next time i do any penis related shit haha :)

.Cuore
08-11-2011, 06:52 PM
uncolored, plan on coloring it somehow. looking for crits on cracks / ideas for extensions. my letter game is decent so I'm trying to delve into the process of learning extensions.

http://i872.photobucket.com/albums/ab283/xMILANISTA4LYFEx/56dbb07d.jpg

sema
08-11-2011, 07:06 PM
same-no cracks, dont connect your letters, get a clean smooth line n structure before you try to overstep your means

Tempo718
08-12-2011, 06:49 AM
29788
ran out a space so

Shroomsh
08-12-2011, 02:09 PM
Cant tell you guys enough, practice and self evaluation is the key, you are all pointing out each others mistakes whilst the piece you just posted have the same problems, if you can crit others you can crit yourselves. Proud to say all of you have great potential, just keep woking on letter structure, sit down with one word and adapt to the letter forms how they work with each other, the word shape as a whole ya dig?
Once you got how to teach yourself down, all you need is time and effort

ATAK!:3
08-12-2011, 08:42 PM
29870298712987229873
some stuff ive been working on, crits?

Beastizm
08-13-2011, 12:41 AM
my last fuck around sketch with this name, gonna start writing kasc, the word i chose for my battle wit swae
http://i1234.photobucket.com/albums/ff404/Sce161/Mobile%20Uploads/1313121381.jpg

sema
08-13-2011, 01:09 AM
^ shakey lines take ur time or try usin a roller point pen, i would also straiten the t out n extend the bottom hook of s to fill dead space the lean thros it off

.Cuore
08-13-2011, 01:24 AM
bar width on the T is thicker on da top than on da bottom. and try making your E regular before adding bends etc

Tempo718
08-13-2011, 03:47 AM
29899
jus a few minor changes nothin special

arsebanditskaelsucker
08-13-2011, 04:10 AM
^^ fattening up is working in'it tempo :) not to sure on the two little joint lines on the t but the shape and the sort of sway of the letters looks well bud :)

blameitonthewhiteboy95
08-13-2011, 04:51 AM
29901299022990329904

Tempo718
08-13-2011, 06:21 AM
29905
arse ur comment made me want to do some changes to the fill, i like it but what yall think good or bad.
29907
finishing touches

sema
08-13-2011, 07:57 AM
haha all of em look the same to me just diff lighting i dunno maby im goin blind
29910

Tempo718
08-13-2011, 09:41 AM
yo it was crazy how I was unable to take off that bottom one.. its on there wit some internet super glue or suttn lol but the 1st two there is a difference cause I had added some shaddow to tha one in the middle but thas all.

ATAK!:3
08-13-2011, 10:48 AM
29914299152991629917
crits?

ribcage
08-13-2011, 02:13 PM
uh theres someone on here who writes jest... He been gone for like a month tho...

ATAK!:3
08-13-2011, 02:41 PM
really? i honestly just made it up on my own, oh well hope he doesnt care too much, but can i get some crits?

Shit Outta Luck
08-13-2011, 05:10 PM
Jest, fix your tag haha. Try not to use arrows and make it more simple if you can. And I like that second sketch of yours the best, but that character makes it look like Jist instead of Jest.

sadgeh
08-13-2011, 08:54 PM
29959

wtf why is mine gone.

btw crits?

paintfaceVT
08-14-2011, 09:02 AM
yo tempo, honestly the simplicity of this is correct, its not that bad, it needs work, but compared to what else I have seen in here, the structure is descent, my favorite letter is the "E" work on the "T" a bit more and the "P" and this will look better dont do 3 force fields, and get ride of the cross hatching on the bubbles, get rid of the bubbles all together, one force field would look best, I would choose the yellow, those colors look dope together, black, green, and yellow. keep it up kid, glad to see some kids still start off basic, how I started.

Tempo718
08-14-2011, 11:33 AM
thanks that mean alot to me

paintfaceVT
08-14-2011, 11:38 AM
No problem!

EWL24
08-14-2011, 01:25 PM
sadgeh - that looks sick

29993
crits please

sema
08-14-2011, 08:52 PM
ewal 3d is off on w if thats wat you were goin for, i would just drop ll 3d strait back to left like a shadow do it like a roll out jam if ur gonna have it on a lean like that
30004

VeX'D
08-14-2011, 09:40 PM
@Sadgeh, sick man, lovin' it

PETER
08-15-2011, 09:44 AM
[QUOTE=toopski;1738001]http://img215.imageshack.us/img215/4090/dsc0029nm.jpg
http://img27.imageshack.us/img27/5919/dsc0032qr.jpg
QUOTE]
I LIKE THESE A LOT. MIND IF I USE THE A FROM THAT BLUE ONE TO TOY AROUND WITH?

PETER
08-15-2011, 10:02 AM
cant tell you guys enough, practice and self evaluation is the key, you are all pointing out each others mistakes whilst the piece you just posted have the same problems, if you can crit others you can crit yourselves. Proud to say all of you have great potential, just keep woking on letter structure, sit down with one word and adapt to the letter forms how they work with each other, the word shape as a whole ya dig?
Once you got how to teach yourself down, all you need is time and effort
and people wanna say you do this or that wrong.... Its fucking art there is no right or wrong way about it, does some stuff work better than others sure, and learning the basics is vital, but your opinion is just that yours. Suggest changes rather than pretending you have some rightous graffiti commandments in hand and trying to force someone to write the way you want.

sadgeh
08-15-2011, 11:44 AM
30024

Can i have some crits, please? With sick and loving it, i cant make further steps.

PETER
08-15-2011, 02:49 PM
30040
30024

Can i have some crits, please? With sick and loving it, i cant make further steps.
Personally I would have gone uniform with the ribbion effect. Either changing width etc like the top of the T or completely the same witdth like much of the rest. Also if it where me I would work on the shape of the E. I think using something like the bit at the top left of the T on the end of the E going down would give it a good flow. diggind that rasta as well. I don't much care for seeing weed and such in graffiti unless it's a field of bad ass trees in a fx crew type mural. it just seems childish to me unless your are using it to make a statement for legalization or something. (just an opinion) My turn.30039

ribcage
08-15-2011, 02:54 PM
but your opinion is just that yours. Suggest changes rather than pretending you have some rightous graffiti commandments in hand and trying to force someone to write the way you want.

My opinion is fact!!!!! Your graffiti will only be exceptd if you do exactly as I say!

PETER
08-15-2011, 03:05 PM
My opinion is fact!!!!! Your graffiti will only be exceptd if you do exactly as I say! then how am I doing? Pen and paper and paint on wood?

ribcage
08-15-2011, 03:15 PM
the top pic piece at top is actually pretty cool, if it was cleaned up a tad and way bigger in size id like it more. Your handies suck tho.
And I dont like the wood.

EWL24
08-15-2011, 06:26 PM
no need to crit the top piece, but crits on the bottom piece will be appreciated
30072

sadgeh
08-15-2011, 07:36 PM
Peter - im from holland, its allready legalized. But your toppiece looking good, maybe some 3d on. The purple thing is nice, make the lines cleaner.
Ewal - no crits, its simple, the 3d is nice with that colors.

Shit Outta Luck
08-15-2011, 11:21 PM
30081
Characters are from a 60s or 70s cartoon, Inki and the Minah Bird. Or something like that. Show was funny, the bird is fucking awesome.

PETER
08-16-2011, 08:32 AM
Peter - im from holland, its allready legalized. But your toppiece looking good, maybe some 3d on. The purple thing is nice, make the lines cleaner.
Ewal - no crits, its simple, the 3d is nice with that colors. lucky basterd! I was thinking a one point perspective in the center would give a nice shape. That was my first attempt at painting.... I am still learning the brushes and such I need to thin out the paint a lot more. It was going on like cake icing.

pointman
08-16-2011, 03:10 PM
30092

panal sketch

shadyloc420
08-17-2011, 02:22 AM
http://i51.tinypic.com/2ik9im9.jpg

arsebanditskaelsucker
08-17-2011, 01:27 PM
peter- yeah i like all of that on this page :) especially the one above the painting
Sadgeh-nice, you need some blending pens tho, think the twists are a bit too much but i do likes it
s.o.l- nice but top of that is is a bit too short for my liking
ewal- the 2nd one shape of the letters reminds me of like wild west style writing don't know why lol, liking the 3d on the 1st one if not the colour :)
pointman- welcome hi, not seen you for a while lol :) goms now is it?? , only thing i dont like is the little kick off the top of the G, and m's a tiny bit porky..but i'm just being picky for no good reason ha
here's a random one i've just done....... kinda had the joined up letters idea in my head and just went for it
http://img204.imageshack.us/img204/4789/1005536c.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/204/1005536c.jpg/)

PETER
08-17-2011, 02:40 PM
no need to crit the top piece, but crits on the bottom piece will be appreciated
30072
It does have a wild west feel to it. A wood grain fill with nails would be sick if you can pull it off.

aaesoo
08-17-2011, 03:39 PM
30157
another pen freestyle, because i dont own any colours atm.

Shit Outta Luck
08-17-2011, 11:36 PM
Aeso thats looking fresh, if anything tilt the S and O just a tiny bit. To fit a LITTLE better with the A and the E.

TastyMcNasty
08-18-2011, 10:58 PM
forgot to fill in some of the 3D. whatever :p
30313


sadgeh: fresh, keep that up.
peter: that canvas is dope
ewal: both are good, nice and simple, stick with that style.
aeos: letter sizes are weird
2lives: dont connect your letters
aeso: thats good, but your handstyle is hurting bad.

ribcage
08-18-2011, 11:08 PM
howd you get it to host? send it to phat...
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0818111502.jpg

.Cuore
08-18-2011, 11:23 PM
forgot to fill in some of the 3D. whatever :p
30313



really feelin it, although i also feel it might have been a bit better if you incorporated a capital E

TastyMcNasty
08-18-2011, 11:45 PM
howd you get it to host? send it to phat...
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0818111502.jpg

i use the stupid site uploader :p. doesnt work in pm's

Beastizm
08-19-2011, 03:38 PM
A quick rough sketch I did while I rode into Virginia
http://i1234.photobucket.com/albums/ff404/Sce161/Mobile%20Uploads/1313601159.jpg

alby
08-19-2011, 04:23 PM
30390
Crits?

Strange Journeys
08-19-2011, 06:11 PM
widen up letters, drop that T, make the S less curvy, M is tight. make other letters similar to M

dankbudz
08-19-2011, 07:13 PM
for the tfrrt
http://i1204.photobucket.com/albums/bb420/knowledgebornwisdom/securedownload.jpg

sadgeh
08-20-2011, 05:20 AM
make your letters even big.

centrysam
08-20-2011, 10:49 AM
@ dank buds... nice flick ..looks good

few flicks
http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6004/6003238467_d76b1d98b0.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6003238467/)
hhhh (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6003238467/) by grinder13 (http://www.flickr.com/people/humrone/), on Flickr

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6127/6019669282_f392597821.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6019669282/)
Snapshot_20110807_1 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6019669282/) by grinder13 (http://www.flickr.com/people/humrone/), on Flickr

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6184/6030326405_f30b73876d.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6030326405/)
Snapshot_20110810_1 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6030326405/) by grinder13 (http://www.flickr.com/people/humrone/), on Flickr

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6195/6033339617_1acc1a4671.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6033339617/)
Snapshot_20110811 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6033339617/) by grinder13 (http://www.flickr.com/people/humrone/), on Flickr

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6199/6043803164_d2fdfcdb6e.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6043803164/)
Snapshot_20110814 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6043803164/) by grinder13 (http://www.flickr.com/people/humrone/), on Flickr

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6187/6043254221_83b71b206f.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6043254221/)
Snapshot_20110814_1 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6043254221/) by grinder13 (http://www.flickr.com/people/humrone/), on Flickr

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6076/6050829945_80534961f0.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6050829945/)
Snapshot_20110816_2 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6050829945/) by grinder13 (http://www.flickr.com/people/humrone/), on Flickr

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6189/6057453140_9aefa2c4af.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6057453140/)
Snapshot_20110818 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6057453140/) by grinder13 (http://www.flickr.com/people/humrone/), on Flickr

Phillip McDougall
08-20-2011, 11:11 AM
Keep practicing!

MN Nice
08-20-2011, 12:49 PM
Humr your throws are pimp.

centrysam
08-20-2011, 01:39 PM
thanks

KnoxIn
08-20-2011, 02:43 PM
http://img200.imageshack.us/img200/4476/img20110820133117.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/200/img20110820133117.jpg/)

Uploaded with ImageShack.us (http://imageshack.us)
Amen, i haven't written in forever my lines are shaky and my fills kinda whack im tryin to figure out my prismas again on the 3-d but anyways crits always appreciated

centry- you got your own style which is good but it seems like you need to slow it down a little and get some structure make it more legible
dank- shits clean looks really good
alby- simples man you gotta learn bars make all your lines proportional

Skope2
08-20-2011, 04:01 PM
Knox - A few things I dont like about it. The letters seem to get smaller as it goes through (maybe youve taken the picture at an angle) and theres a few extensions that aren't working. The one at the bottom left of the A and the bottom right of the M, they just make it look alot less clean that it could be.

That E is fucking fresh though. Same with the A if it didnt have that extension.

fruitfulanomie
08-20-2011, 06:59 PM
30390
Crits? like that style it's raw and has an oldschool feeling to it
something that would be good to start up on walls

http://pic100.picturetrail.com/VOL587/2397355/23754133/398171278.jpg

http://pic100.picturetrail.com/VOL587/2397355/23754133/398171275.jpg

MoF.
08-20-2011, 09:43 PM
yea i like dat fruite looks real tight, nice colours aswell

TastyMcNasty
08-20-2011, 11:22 PM
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0820112106.jpg
.......drunk highlighter freestyles......ima be doin em for a minute...
Tasty, dank, shrooms, exchange?

ya bro i'll hit you up

ribcage
08-20-2011, 11:23 PM
chunky

http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0820112145.jpg

-Sinn-
08-21-2011, 03:21 AM
Humr - coming here and seein that kinda work bein put in is what inspires me.
Dank looks like ur piece is torn between having bends and being round
Ribcage im diggin those simples nice and clean
http://i145.photobucket.com/albums/r231/zinkery90/Artsy%20Shit/Picture337-1.jpg
http://i145.photobucket.com/albums/r231/zinkery90/Artsy%20Shit/Picture338.jpg
http://i145.photobucket.com/albums/r231/zinkery90/Artsy%20Shit/Picture330.jpg

Phat 2
08-21-2011, 06:26 AM
the fill in the chris piece is real nice. keep it up.

centrysam
08-21-2011, 07:30 AM
@ sinn nice flicks man first one is dopee

sema
08-21-2011, 02:54 PM
fruit- if ur gonna do somethin on a curve like that give the letters some motion but work on structure more
sin- keep it up showin alota potential
amen- dig the style i like the m the a is alittle too big tho draws off the focal point
30522old sketch

pointman
08-21-2011, 04:36 PM
30539

Look alright to paint??

ribcage
08-21-2011, 07:37 PM
all but the S, yes.

.Cuore
08-21-2011, 08:06 PM
agreed

EWL24
08-21-2011, 08:06 PM
pointman - that looks good, u should definitely paint that. and Im sorry if I sound stupid but who is that Char? ive seen it a million times but ive never known what it came from

dankbudz
08-21-2011, 09:45 PM
id say fix the O a little bit too, could use a bit more funk on the bottom right.

Discovery
08-21-2011, 10:08 PM
that character is dope

Beastizm
08-22-2011, 12:26 AM
pointman - that looks good, u should definitely paint that. and Im sorry if I sound stupid but who is that Char? ive seen it a million times but ive never known what it came from
its a mark bode char, he collabs wit graffiti artist from time to time and everybody uses his chars, i dont kno much about them but i kno theres the lizard and some orangey red guy with a wizard looking hat covering most of his body

MN Nice
08-22-2011, 01:10 AM
Feel free to crit the fuck out of this. I'm having some trouble with more technical style.

http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00276-20110822-0100.jpg?t=1313992945

EWL24
08-22-2011, 01:24 AM
its a mark bode char, he collabs wit graffiti artist from time to time and everybody uses his chars, i dont kno much about them but i kno theres the lizard and some orangey red guy with a wizard looking hat covering most of his body
oh ok, ive seen both the lizard and wizard guy a bunch of times, so its nice to finally know were they came from. thanks man

MN Nice - there is to much negative space between the M and U and the E and S. also if u flipped the M it would look better

crits please
30568

KnoxIn
08-22-2011, 02:00 AM
http://img233.imageshack.us/img233/6458/img20110822005058.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/233/img20110822005058.jpg/)

lines aren't clean and whatnot but just want crits about letter structure and style, i think my N looks retarted but crit the hell out of it any advice would be appreciated

Ewal- i like it its pretty clean, would like to see it with a fill to add some flavor its plain, but like i said its clean so i like it
Mues- i think your E needs some work, it looks out of place to me with the rest of the letters i think its just cuz how theres not too much to it, but i really like the style, i would just keep at it

SEKA24
08-22-2011, 02:25 AM
i like the a and m but I'm not sure about that e if thats what it is
but yea the rest of the letters look good in my opinion

Slip709
08-22-2011, 11:52 AM
knoxln that A is banggging.
As for the N, its pretty simple. But if you had those lines a little sharper i think it would look dope.
Maybe try to encorporate a wave in one of the legs or somthing similar to what you did with the A

Just my 2 cents, by no means am i "good" hah

Beastizm
08-22-2011, 12:05 PM
yea bro i agree on the 'a' shit is fresh but the fat part coming off the middle of your 'e' is what looks wierd ,make that part skinnier to look like the rest of the letter

Phillip McDougall
08-22-2011, 01:01 PM
http://img233.imageshack.us/img233/6458/img20110822005058.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/233/img20110822005058.jpg/)

lines aren't clean and whatnot but just want crits about letter structure and style, i think my N looks retarted but crit the hell out of it any advice would be appreciated

mogan- your shits fire nothin i see that needs any crit

All those letters need work.

dankbudz
08-22-2011, 01:17 PM
mn nice- dont flare the bars so much and bring those letters together. and that U is retarded.
Ewal- thats gettin there. work on the E, its pretty weird. but if you fattened teh W a lil and lost the extension and made the horizontal bar on the L not a bubble it would look pretty dope.
Knoxin- practice those M and N's you got, and it could turn to something good. but you gotta start over on that E.

bored on an airplane... aha, hit me with usefull crits
http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q168/matthew1o/securedownload-4.jpg

sadgeh
08-22-2011, 06:17 PM
a woman of the police sucked my cock!
But damn Dankbudz i like your letters, clean and simple.

killamanilla
08-22-2011, 08:14 PM
http://i455.photobucket.com/albums/qq278/floridagraff/P1000601.jpg
http://i455.photobucket.com/albums/qq278/floridagraff/P1000600.jpg
http://i455.photobucket.com/albums/qq278/floridagraff/P1000599.jpg
http://i455.photobucket.com/albums/qq278/floridagraff/ester3.jpg

.Cuore
08-22-2011, 08:56 PM
diggin the last one.

ribcage
08-22-2011, 10:04 PM
hell yeah, that last one is dope

KehmONE
08-23-2011, 02:04 AM
http://i51.tinypic.com/2vv16k0.jpg

Shitty pic.

Beastizm
08-23-2011, 03:07 AM
fixed up but unfinished
http://i1234.photobucket.com/albums/ff404/Sce161/Mobile%20Uploads/1314085886.jpg

sadgeh
08-23-2011, 07:44 AM
aight Ster like it, the last one is dopest

PETER
08-23-2011, 09:13 AM
30662 What do you guys think?

sadgeh
08-23-2011, 01:44 PM
30679

crits?

Peter - like it more than the one before, lines can much cleaner and the handies are bad, but overall it looks good. Nice colours is it only paint or also markers or something

KehmONE
08-23-2011, 01:54 PM
http://i51.tinypic.com/2vv16k0.jpg

Shitty pic.
Bottom page bump.

PETER
08-23-2011, 02:15 PM
indeed the hadies are super bad... I was getting super lazy. I can paint over it and do it again. It's spray paint on canvas and the details are paint marker. My other one was brush with some pasty ass acrylic. I have a few others I am working on I'll post up soon. Thanks. As for you piece I like the direction you're going. I would drop the arrow on the bottom of the T and the way this flows I might make the o, r, e in a cursive fashion. The direction of the E looks promising to me but the execution needs some work keep working on it. It creates a big gap where the BS is. This is a close up of a really bad attempt to conveigh what I had in mind. I should have tilted the O and R to give it a little more cursive feel among otherthings. Keep it up. 30680

PETER
08-23-2011, 02:29 PM
@Beast> not a bad start. You're missing 3d on the top of the S, in the hole of the A, and the top of the K. Your 3d seems to change directions a bit too. Put a dot somewhere and use a ruler if you have to. Take your time with it and attention to detail. Keep it up.

Kasc-One
08-23-2011, 03:14 PM
Before and After
http://i1234.photobucket.com/albums/ff404/Sce161/Mobile%20Uploads/1314061245.jpg
http://i1234.photobucket.com/albums/ff404/Sce161/Mobile%20Uploads/1314085886.jpg

always crushin
08-23-2011, 05:46 PM
http://a4.sphotos.ak.fbcdn.net/hphotos-ak-snc7/298355_10150764589545244_539650243_20343471_522574 2_n.jpg

KehmONE
08-23-2011, 07:01 PM
lol no comment or crits?

IlikePie
08-24-2011, 03:05 AM
30699
Shitty shit shit. I suck at graff again!
Been a long time since I've sketched or even looked in these threads.

ipaint.
08-24-2011, 04:59 AM
30704
cover bommb
30701
hit up in my mini book
30702
all crooked, and scrappy
30703
corner of a pagge
30700
exchange i did for the homie aokay
http://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm173/ohhhyeah22/DSCN3094.jpg
My D is hella ugly here,
these are all pretty old, camera broke, so no knew flicks:((

PETER
08-24-2011, 11:02 AM
@KEHM keep it simple for now. letters are jumbled and hard to make out at all with a bunch of extra nonsense that doesn't help.

sema
08-24-2011, 12:53 PM
old bs battle not sure if it polled
30713 i paint go simpler dont do bends or lean

sema
08-24-2011, 01:02 PM
30714few 1 liners i was messin wit, kasc work on ur 3 d it sould be one solid piece echoing ur letters keep the width consistant

smack1one
08-24-2011, 01:10 PM
30716

any crits?

thetruth818
08-24-2011, 01:14 PM
30717

KehmONE
08-24-2011, 01:40 PM
It's not meant to be extremely legible. It says Invok btw.

smack1one
08-24-2011, 01:55 PM
30719

crits

xflare
08-24-2011, 02:06 PM
heres the sketch and 2 other pieces i did yesterday 307203072130722

PETER
08-24-2011, 02:10 PM
It's not meant to be extremely legible. It says Invok btw. which I understand. I'll say it, and it goes for Smack1 too, steer clear of any of the graffiti creator type letters. For one they suck ass to begin with and look like total shit if not done well. As with all graffiti webforums there is a "new to" page. Read it. it's gospel. I know it seems lame to write square ass letters, but for real you don't build a house from the roof down. Build your foundation and make it strong. Each repetition is a brick. This goes for handstyle, throws, the whole nine. Good luck and fill books!

smack: the squared letters are a far better show. the 3d looks pretty good and proportions are good. If I do a piece like this I'll cheat and use a straight edge to make sure my lines are completly straight and my 3d is perfect. I suggest going lighter with your pencil. To the point it's almost hard to see. It erases easily and can play with structure and shape easily and even over the same letter with out ruining it and then just darken the parts you like. (and it wont leave huge lines in the sheets below like in the bottom left of your page)

truth: not bad I like the C and E. Personally I would have bent the loop of the p down. The A needs work too. Practice the hell out of 3d. Not trying to be a dick, but the 3d on your E is completely fucked. http://www.artgraphica.net/free-art-lessons/wetcanvas/basic-perspective-for-artists/basic-perspective-for-artists.htm http://www.khulsey.com/perspective-drawing-basics.html

xflare
08-24-2011, 02:33 PM
holla my sketch will ya?

PETER
08-24-2011, 03:00 PM
heres the sketch and 2 other pieces i did yesterday 30720
this one is my favorite of them. best display of structure and shape. I would stick with these letter shapes, drop the arrows and chips, and work on stretching/elongating/fattening them to see what works for you. Don't just slap arrows on there willy nilly. Learn to make them flow with your letters, but learn to make your letters flow first.

PETER
08-24-2011, 03:01 PM
it was the first one....

xflare
08-24-2011, 03:18 PM
this one is my favorite of them. best display of structure and shape. I would stick with these letter shapes, drop the arrows and chips, and work on stretching/elongating/fattening them to see what works for you. Don't just slap arrows on there willy nilly. Learn to make them flow with your letters, but learn to make your letters flow first.

cool lol the sketch i was just experimenting but im glad you like them so by stretching and elongating them you mean without the add ons like arrows but stretch the bars and maybe a few connections?

Rezume_or_die
08-24-2011, 03:36 PM
30724
phone broke so webcaming it, makes it look like shit tho, those are the three graboids from the tremors movies

smack1one
08-24-2011, 03:53 PM
30726

crits? anything to fix before color?

xflare
08-24-2011, 03:55 PM
REZUME OR DIE:

1. get a camera or fix it or what ever
2. what markers were you using?
3. the first 2 R and E letters are ok the rest are wack because you did the letters going across the page like that also next time draw guidelines
4. draw guidelines then do simple block letters this help you get better at letter structure also BARS
5. love the characters and the dragon lol

SMACK 1:

bin it its wack

then draw block letters use a ruler if it helps but you need letter structure also another tip work on your lines

sema
08-24-2011, 03:58 PM
the letters...there chopy and have alot of dead space dont be afraid to tuck ur letters behind the last like the top bar of ur e behind the s try thicker bars^^^^, i personaly am done postin pieces cause noone even acknoledges em

aaesoo
08-24-2011, 05:19 PM
first colour piece i've done in while.

30728

xflare
08-24-2011, 05:41 PM
cool good simple start trying to bend your bars a bit more because the e and s look a bit crooked and the top of the o is a bit wack but everythings great apart from that

ipaint.
08-24-2011, 06:23 PM
30704
cover bommb
30701
hit up in my mini book
30702
all crooked, and scrappy
30703
corner of a pagge
30700
exchange i did for the homie aokay
http://i296.photobucket.com/albums/mm173/ohhhyeah22/DSCN3094.jpg
My D is hella ugly here,
these are all pretty old, camera broke, so no knew flicks:((
BUMMMPP
I wannt feed back!

centrysam
08-24-2011, 07:16 PM
@aeso looks good man i like that flick .. keep sketchin man
crits plz

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6187/6075033202_e73806580a.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6075033202/)
Snapshot_20110823_2 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6075033202/) by grinder13 (http://www.flickr.com/people/humrone/), on Flickr

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6083/6077479529_35558339eb.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6077479529/)
Snapshot_20110824 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6077479529/) by grinder13 (http://www.flickr.com/people/humrone/), on Flickr

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6206/6077764841_7e9dca9634.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6077764841/)
Snapshot_20110824_2 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6077764841/) by grinder13 (http://www.flickr.com/people/humrone/), on Flickr

HRbN
08-24-2011, 07:34 PM
and dont write esoe or esoes, and start simpler. its apparent you are working off some one elses style or letters. And you needa work on keeping your bars the same width, and the extensions on the s's are to big in my opinion

sema
08-24-2011, 08:14 PM
aeso= work your letters together its not a crime to overlap there just floatin around
humr- the r in the yellow one looks more like an a and the r in the light purple can be an e without the ex mark keep workin on it
give crits to get crits

KehmONE
08-24-2011, 10:46 PM
Haha, it's funny because I went completely freestyle and used zero inspiration for the letters.

Stigma02
08-25-2011, 12:09 AM
30747 SWAG for some girl

EWL24
08-25-2011, 01:35 AM
this my friends piece. he wanted me to put it up for him
crits would be appreciated
30753
it says S.S.V.A

sema
08-25-2011, 05:15 AM
tell ur friend to start over I get a headache lookin at it. way too busy with no structure at all

Stigma02
08-25-2011, 06:56 PM
crits?

HRbN
08-25-2011, 11:32 PM
kehm, well if your gunna try and rock a 5 letter word with only 3 different letters its gunna have to be clean as yell because all imperfections between letters will show.

LIZARD
08-26-2011, 12:03 AM
this my friends piece. he wanted me to put it up for him
crits would be appreciated
30753
it says S.S.V.A

u need to go waaaaay simpler . i can maybe see an s but other then that it hurts my eyes looking at it lol

Stigma02
08-26-2011, 02:13 PM
COME ON any advice.

sema
08-26-2011, 02:29 PM
^^ya lose the arrow bits lose everything in purple work on structure alot more basicly go back to the drawlin board n go simpler its too busy with no direction

603Bombsquad
08-27-2011, 08:08 AM
30922

crits?

Kasc-One
08-27-2011, 11:26 PM
http://i1234.photobucket.com/albums/ff404/Sce161/Mobile%20Uploads/1314393550.jpg
workin on simples cus i wanna get it correct. crits
http://i1234.photobucket.com/albums/ff404/Sce161/Mobile%20Uploads/1314495612.jpg

for a girl
http://i1234.photobucket.com/albums/ff404/Sce161/Mobile%20Uploads/1314508321.jpg

sema
08-29-2011, 04:50 AM
old design for my boys tshirt company
30971
kasc id just try to make sure your bar lines up all the way up like on the second p, n i cant tell if thats 3d or 2d in the middle of the last n second one

KNS13
08-29-2011, 09:35 AM
burr
http://i654.photobucket.com/albums/uu261/Kema13/Photo0013D.jpg

Kasc-One
08-29-2011, 03:11 PM
2nd is 2d, last is 3d, this is unfinshed, yea i see the mistakes but thats why its in pencil, any crits
http://i1234.photobucket.com/albums/ff404/Sce161/Mobile%20Uploads/1314647378.jpg

Jiska Matos
08-29-2011, 03:59 PM
30991 something new just to say im alive LOL
crits ppl?

ribcage
08-29-2011, 04:49 PM
The S is tight, wish I could say the same about the rest... too many nonsense extensions and add-ons

sir.to.you.
08-30-2011, 09:21 PM
fuckin round workin on extensions and shit random ass word didnt like it.
http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6207/6098265503_5f5954af6d_z.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/58969092@N06/6098265503/)
Photo 238 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/58969092@N06/6098265503/) by ripmb (http://www.flickr.com/people/58969092@N06/), on Flickr

Mc Satan
08-30-2011, 10:23 PM
suggestions and crits on this while i can still fix it? no idea what to do with the E was thinking since it stands out i could do the fill different from the rest
http://i133.photobucket.com/albums/q64/Mc-Satan/DSC00245.jpg

SicK-
08-30-2011, 10:58 PM
burr
http://i654.photobucket.com/albums/uu261/Kema13/Photo0013D.jpg

Jhiz. i havent been here in a while bro but honestly it looks like youve gotten worse

Shit Outta Luck
08-31-2011, 08:23 PM
Quick sketch. Bored in class
31161

NOSEO
08-31-2011, 08:38 PM
31162 Crits.

aaesoo
08-31-2011, 09:25 PM
those colours are burning my eyes man. and it'd probably be better if you closed off the holes in the ltters like using a line or something rather than have those little triangles, which you missed the 3d on.

Mc Satan
08-31-2011, 11:29 PM
ok done with this i need crits please. first time for a couple things, coloring with markers, eye-ing the 3d instead of ruler, and also first time i try these really fat letters. so please crit
31164

dankbudz
09-01-2011, 12:17 AM
wtf

Kasc-One
09-01-2011, 12:43 AM
http://i1234.photobucket.com/albums/ff404/Sce161/Mobile%20Uploads/1314393550.jpg
workin on simples cus i wanna get it correct. crits
http://i1234.photobucket.com/albums/ff404/Sce161/Mobile%20Uploads/1314495612.jpg

for a girl
http://i1234.photobucket.com/albums/ff404/Sce161/Mobile%20Uploads/1314508321.jpg

Sneaker
09-01-2011, 03:17 AM
Am i good enough to be in the inter thread? ive been on puregraffiti since '08 but it seems there forum is down alot..
311963119731198311993120031201312023120331204

Skeletor1134
09-01-2011, 03:27 AM
31205
sketch of Aztek

Skeletor1134
09-01-2011, 03:28 AM
oh and jiska. i think that shit is tight. all of it. extensions be fine

Mc Satan
09-01-2011, 02:31 PM
ok done with this i need crits please. first time for a couple things, coloring with markers, eye-ing the 3d instead of ruler, and also first time i try these really fat letters. so please crit
31164

bottom page bump crit please

PETER
09-01-2011, 02:51 PM
ok done with this i need crits please. first time for a couple things, coloring with markers, eye-ing the 3d instead of ruler, and also first time i try these really fat letters. so please crit
31164 The 3d isn't bad for a first time eyeball. good color selection. I suggest putting a gap in the mouth of the E. Keep working on it.

Shit Outta Luck
09-01-2011, 07:35 PM
Quick sketch. Bored in class
31161
Bumpppp disss critsss dawggg

centrysam
09-01-2011, 07:49 PM
sol i like that flick its solid . maby try spacing letters out just a little more , other then that i think its a nice flick ..

quicky ,,, just fuckin around

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6082/6104154873_bebeec98e5.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6104154873/)
Snapshot_20110901_1 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6104154873/) by grinder13 (http://www.flickr.com/people/humrone/), on Flickr

crits welcome

Mc Satan
09-01-2011, 07:49 PM
SOL not criting due to it being a quick sketch, i feel like any crit i have are things that you would otherwise not do were it not just a quick sketch

.Cuore
09-01-2011, 08:58 PM
sol i like that flick its solid . maby try spacing letters out just a little more , other then that i think its a nice flick ..

quicky ,,, just fuckin around

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6082/6104154873_bebeec98e5.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6104154873/)
Snapshot_20110901_1 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6104154873/) by grinder13 (http://www.flickr.com/people/humrone/), on Flickr

crits welcome

nice piece, putrid handies.

EWL24
09-01-2011, 09:44 PM
Centrysam - thats tight

crits please
31280

LIZARD
09-01-2011, 10:15 PM
i like it but for some reason the top extension on the A looks weird to me...good shit though keep it up

.Cuore
09-01-2011, 10:48 PM
good improvement, ewal

ribcage
09-01-2011, 11:19 PM
this counts as ur exchange btw...
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0901112113.jpg
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0901112052.jpg

.Cuore
09-01-2011, 11:26 PM
okay well I haven't been sketching .. so to fill up for all the jabbering I do on all the threads I'll post some doodles I did today in class. First is abstract, sortof, you can make out the letters though somewhat. Second is not that great, was a quick one, I know the A is retarded, need to work on that. As for crits, I'd like suggestions as to how to fix the A in the second one. Oh and I know the middle extension on the M in the second one is retarded as well. Basically shitty pix for talkin.

http://i872.photobucket.com/albums/ab283/xMILANISTA4LYFEx/cf9985f0.jpg

http://i872.photobucket.com/albums/ab283/xMILANISTA4LYFEx/4e5cbea3.jpg

edit: A probably would have worked well with triangular bottom instead of rectangular and I like the S though.

MN Nice
09-02-2011, 12:06 AM
just did this tonihght 3d sucks but im drunk so it aint no thang

rib lets throw battle and good shit skeletor i liek your style

http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00293-20110902-0001.jpg?t=1314939765

centrysam
09-02-2011, 07:00 PM
@ ewl nice flick .. thats good work .. i think the A is the only problem .. like lizard sayed ..
to me it looks like u might have been tryin to fill empty space. next time just just make it the same as the rest the tops of the letters .
jut my opinion ..
good work

cuore . i like them sketchs but maby drop extetions on last one

Boar 1
09-02-2011, 07:13 PM
@Mues i like that your doing straights, thats definetly the best way to improve, but i wouldnt use such sketchy lines.... And after you can rock a perfect simple start using cutbacks on your letters
@Cuore I cant even tell what the first one sais, its a total mess... The second one is a bit better, but the third letter is way to sloppy... Also dont use those little floating bits, they look really toy (imo)
heres some shitty shit...
http://i52.tinypic.com/2lneh5c.jpg
http://i52.tinypic.com/2e3r3mq.jpg

.Cuore
09-02-2011, 10:23 PM
this counts as ur exchange btw...
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0901112113.jpg
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0901112052.jpg

lol down for an exchange throw? i like the one paser got.

LIZARD
09-02-2011, 10:52 PM
31322

trying something new..jerm,germ lmk what ya think, its been a while since iv drawn anything

FIRST hand style(if u can even call it that lol) with that name

Shit Outta Luck
09-02-2011, 11:28 PM
McSatan feel free to crit dude. All are welcome haha and Boar 1, that top half of you B on the top sketch is iffy. Too big it feels too disproportionate. And Cuore I'll try and space my letters a bit differently! And on that second piece you posted, I think the top of the S is a little small. It looks off. And I really like the E but that top left extension type thing kinda sticks out a little too much.

Flick for talking...quick pen freestyle in classsssss
31324

ribcage
09-02-2011, 11:54 PM
@cuore I coulda sworn we already exchanged throws...

.Cuore
09-03-2011, 12:18 AM
don't think so, bud, hahaha. I think a simp maybe but no throws.

ribcage
09-03-2011, 12:29 AM
we did a simp and throw exchange, and I didnt do the the simp till yesterday...
all shit
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0902112221.jpg
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0902112217.jpg

http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/0902112233.jpg

.Cuore
09-03-2011, 12:48 AM
i'll get yours up soon.

yo yo yo..

Here is your free throw.

http://i872.photobucket.com/albums/ab283/xMILANISTA4LYFEx/cc8c8192.jpg

and while I'm at it, and cuz the other one was quite shitty,

http://i872.photobucket.com/albums/ab283/xMILANISTA4LYFEx/b9581ff0.jpg

ribcage
09-03-2011, 04:47 AM
delete it all

CyphOne
09-03-2011, 10:02 AM
nice simples Cuore./


http://img839.imageshack.us/img839/1571/img0603e.jpg (http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/839/img0603e.jpg/)

Fluffy Bunnies
09-03-2011, 12:58 PM
and then i said "oatmeal? are you crazy?!"

Sherri Reny
09-03-2011, 01:26 PM
31328
if you think this sux, you should see the other attempts. i know the 1st 2 letters don't match. ok so. yeah. i'm ready to get my ass kicked now.-crutch.

Sherri Reny
09-03-2011, 01:41 PM
31333



ok wow, i must be a glutton for punishment. here's another. i know. too many colors.

Anthony Locklear
09-03-2011, 01:44 PM
Oh, wow Sherri, don't bother with color right now practice your letter structure.

Shit Outta Luck
09-03-2011, 01:50 PM
McSatan feel free to crit dude. All are welcome haha and Boar 1, that top half of you B on the top sketch is iffy. Too big it feels too disproportionate. And Cuore I'll try and space my letters a bit differently! And on that second piece you posted, I think the top of the S is a little small. It looks off. And I really like the E but that top left extension type thing kinda sticks out a little too much.

Flick for talking...quick pen freestyle in classsssss
31324
Crits? Anybody... :(

centrysam
09-03-2011, 03:20 PM
@ cyph .. thats nice man ..i like it
http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6082/6110186952_535291f5f1.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6110186952/)
Snapshot_20110903_1 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/humrone/6110186952/) by grinder13 (http://www.flickr.com/people/humrone/), on Flickr

.Cuore
09-03-2011, 03:35 PM
likin it cyph, and likin the WORK piece, humr. btw is your name humr as in hummer or as in humor.

ribcage
09-03-2011, 03:53 PM
hes a hummer
http://www.wasteofheels.com/wp-content/uploads/2010/06/tranny.jpg

centrysam
09-03-2011, 03:55 PM
@ rib dont post pics of ur older brother on here

umm i donno its just the letters i like wasnt really goin for anythin there lol but i guess humor

ribcage
09-03-2011, 04:27 PM
thats you bruh, I dont have no brothers nigguh

Shit Outta Luck
09-03-2011, 11:55 PM
Humr I'm really diggin that page, and that Always throw. Although I think the top of the Y is a bit too big, almost looks like an M haha. And I dig that piece, but I don't really like the top of the R and the K. Maybe it's just me haha