Blackbooks

[Cro²k]

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Please comment and give me crits

[Cro²k]

These are on the school's desk so maybe it's not really well done !

[Colors]

crook i like the second piece the most, but the top of the R looks a little weird, you should just cut off the curved part of the R at the same height as the left side of the R. Id say thats a pretty good simple to start with, of course just clean it up a little more and keep the bars pretty consitent and your golden. Also, get rid of that little thing on top of the K.

[EWL24]

thotz - sorry but i agree with tasty, and that DRZ piece is not simple at all there is way to much extensions. also i thought i would let u know that ur Lee Quiñones quote is wrong,
what Lee really says is "Graffiti is a Art and if Art is a crime, let God forgive all"

[thotz.one]

actually, he says Graffiti is art and if art is a crime, please god, forgive me. get ur shit straight youngen.

i like it Colors. simple and to the point.

[Colors]

haha maybe next piece

[thotz.one]

bored. abstract thotz.
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[EWL24]

Colors - i like the two bottom ones there good, but the top ones kinda wierd the N looks cool though


actually, he says Graffiti is art and if art is a crime, please god, forgive me. get ur shit straight youngen.

my shit is straight, thats Fab 5 Freddy standing in front of Lee's Howard the Duck mural and look what the quote says
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[TastyMcNasty]

@ Tasty. What do you mean simple? For one there was nothing technical about the DRZ piece. Pretty simple lettering with a little flare, do yoj not agree?

i dont agree at all, you spammed the shit out of the pice with connections and extensions, and the placing of them does not compliment the piece at all. i literally mean simpler, as in go down to keyboard letters.

[thotz.one]

thats not what he actually says. he changed specifically for that tag. look it up, he says exactly what i have written.

[Tempo718]

no comment on tha whole quote thing but not for nothin ewl right.
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[ZETA]

@tempo, whats with the J and the ipod plug...?piece is alright though. I dont really like the top of the first E, and is there a letter after the second M? But other than thats its pretty nice and good color choice

[Tempo718]

yeah the 2nd M and O are sharing the same bar. I feel you on the E cause I'm planning on commin back and doin that over.

[thotz.one]

something i did for my homie steve o
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[TastyMcNasty]

needs more arrows!!!

[smokeitup]

something i did for my homie steve o
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ur friends with steve o? :O

[thotz.one]

haha my arrows are dope!
i actually did meet the real steve o after his comedy show in phoenix. hes a funny muthafucker.

[MN Nice]

Bumpin my shit.

http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00398-20111009-0154.jpg?t=1318828676
http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00372-20110928-1049.jpg?t=1317243890
http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00374-20110929-1501.jpg?t=1317326935
http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00371-20110927-2333.jpg?t=1317184557
http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00379-20111001-2315.jpg?t=1317529250

That last one I was just fuckin with, don't really like it.

@thotz - you're arrows are not cool. they're toy as fuck. your letter structure is wack and your extensions are reppin the downs syndrome. Cool your jets on that crazy ass burner shit and do a bunch of simples.

@Tempo - meh. I've seen worse from you, but this is bad too. That M-O connection is out of place and ugly. Do simples of keyboard letters. and postin a swisher in your pic doesn't make your shit not stink.

[thotz.one]

hahahahaha. you do you ill do me lil homie.

[MN Nice]

Good luck with that.

[ribcage]

thotz= queer toy who thinks hes decent. reminds me of nah! with his faggotry.

@mn your shit still dont look good, your not putting enough time and effoert to make things look good.

@tempo keep workin dude, thats prolly the best thing youve posted so far

[MN Nice]

New M on the throw look better than my older one?

[thotz.one]

lol.
ribcage= male prostitute who sucks dick for crack.

[ribcage]

^Im a male prostitute that sucks clit for cash. But on occasion ive been known to accept a check, or even payment in narcotics.

Unfortunately I dont take the dick like you do, sorry!

@mn whats different about? the legs arent proportionate and the middle part is kinda awkward

Am I the only one who thinks this fag thotz of cokz sucks fat ones? His shit is doodoo, but on some regular tot bb thread bullshit theres a bunch of fags feeding his toyness

[MN Nice]

Am I the only one who thinks this fag thotz of cokz sucks fat ones? His shit is doodoo, but on some regular tot bb thread bullshit theres a bunch of fags feeding his toyness

Nope


@thotz; regardless of what the last posts have said about your style, it's not good. you are trying too hard to achieve something that you will never get to until you have learned proper letter structure. so before going all crazy like that start of simple, and see where that gets you. then gradually build onto your style, and you will get better and better.

Tasty and I are the only ones who agree with you though

[thotz.one]

it doesnt even matter what you say my man. you sound like the rest of the forum junkies out there. i know my shit is toy, and i dont need a faggot ass little boy to tell me wats up. im postin my shit for ME not you.
fuck man.
your stressin me out. why cant people just chill.
if i thought i was decent i wouldnt be posting in the FUCKING TOY THREAD. fuckin idiot.

[MN Nice]

lol you're the one gettin mad over here. Givin your ass advice and you get all defensive n shit.

[dankbudz]

Hey dude youre hella good! You should post up in the intermediate, youll kill all them fools

[ribcage]

the funny thing is he posted in the picture gallery blackbook forum, got deleted, posted in the intermediate thread, got deleted and made a big fuckin stink about it. He even went as far as to say he is waaay better than me and that I had no room to talk about his shit being shit.

Now I call his shit shit again, and he admits hes a toy and calls me a little kid.

Well im not a little kid, and wether im older than you or not, I would shit on you using my left hand



Are you mad that im telling you the truth thotz? Cause I tell everyone here the truth, and im pretty sure Ive helped a good amount of toy heads on here.........

[EWL24]

Tasty, Ewl, and I are the only ones who agree with you though
^^ fixed that for ya

crits please
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[thotz.one]

lol well if you feel like you have to track my history and write a book about it, go ahead and do yo thang. like i said, im postin my shit for me not you.

[dankbudz]

You must hate yourself then, bro...

Ewl- make all the letters the same height, you are forgetin some basics everytime. The top of the E is crammed as fuck, lower it and straighten the horizontal bar. N make that A bigger and flow WITH your piece. Not against it.

[ribcage]

lol well if you feel like you have to track my history and write a book about it, go ahead and do yo thang. like i said, im postin my shit for me not you.

if your doin it for you why the fuck are you here?! O I get it, your doin it for your toy ego? Or your doint it for someone elses approvement?

[EWL24]

Ewl- make all the letters the same height, you are forgetin some basics everytime. The top of the E is crammed as fuck, lower it and straighten the horizontal bar. N make that A bigger and flow WITH your piece. Not against it.
thanks for the crits, is this any better?
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[thotz.one]

naw see where you got it twisted is that im not gonna change how i do MY shit cuz i got a couple haters in my fan club.
simple for all the bullshit talk.
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[dankbudz]

Yeeee the top bar on the E isnt lookin too hot though. But fixing that A made it look a whole lot better.

Yo Thotz thats bangin

[thotz.one]

added some shit. not sure if i want to color it or not. kinda diggin the black and white feel.
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[Mischuf]

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[Flawless Victory]

added some shit. not sure if i want to color it or not. kinda diggin the black and white feel.
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This piece is almost as shit as the Deftones are... ALMOST.

[thotz.one]

thats cool.
is it as shitty as ur moms twat hole?????

[ribcage]

you know, you might draw better if you take the dicks out of your mouth while your sketching

[Shit Outta Luck]

lmao rib

[thotz.one]

you know, you might draw better if you take the dicks out of your mouth while your sketching
im sorry man i cant help it, ur little sister wont stop suckin the nut from the tip of my dick for two seconds to let me draw.

[Shit Outta Luck]

I mean, talking from personal experience, I've been able to sketch pretty good while gettin a nut off lmao.

[Cro²k]

Ribcage please check my post in the page 5513 and tell me something about it !

[thotz.one]

I mean, talking from personal experience, I've been able to sketch pretty good while gettin a nut off lmao.
It's hard to concentrate when you have to watch someones little sister wipe your dick slobber of her chin.

[ribcage]

I dont have a little sister... that was prolly the tranny from around the block suckin you off...

That explains it though man, I would probably draw some shitty ass graffiti if I was gettin sucked off by a tranny too. im sorry I fucked with you

[thotz.one]

hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha.
you made me laugh.
lame mother fucker.
oh please please please mr ribcage look at my stuff and tell me how bad my stuff is!! So i can just keep posting more shit and sit back and laugh as i smoke my bud.

[ribcage]

yeah man your shit sucks dick.

Im gonna sit back all stressed out and type in to my computer that im smokin weed getting sucked offed riding a chopper with my ak resting on the handle bars on the fuckin moon, and then maybe, just maybe, I'll be as cool as you bro!

[thotz.one]

ok man. have fun with all that.
maybe if you just shut the fuck up you would be as cool as me.
your shit is extra fuckin shit idk why these fuckin toys feed into ur wackness in the first place.

[ribcage]

See the thing is, Im already cooler than you.

Which isnt saying much cause your a faggy loser, id say 95% of heads on here prolly cooler than you...

Maybe if you stopped suckin cocks and produced some decent art, you could get some brownie points... until further notice, your the toy forums fag jester, that I (or whoever else pleases) is obligated to make fun of your garbage

[thotz.one]

lol see the thing is i dont need brownie points.
like my shit or not, im gonna post it. friend.
so beat off to some pictures of your dead grandmothers body being gang raped by a group of aids infested homeless people.

[Mr.Hater_666]

Thotz, that "simple" was poop as shit, remindin me of when i first started.

[ribcage]

Lol I never told you not to post ya dumbfuck. God damn, no wonder your being such a tard, you comin up in here like a straight fag


faaaaaaaaaaaaggg vvvvvvvv

[thotz.one]

Thotz, that "simple" was poop as shit, remindin me of when i first started.
cuz i am just starting. so what about it?

[thotz.one]

added background and hand.
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bump on my other straight.
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[zero515]

Did these yesterday. Any thoughts?3730137302

[thotz.one]

i like that blue one alot. and i like the bar that runs through the middle of the first one.

[Tempo718]

wtf u riffen bout son... it mad worthless.
not enough time n a day 2 get into all that.
2 different opinions g drop it.
besides ya not gonna walk in the rain n' stay dry.
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[Strange Journeys]

so beat off to some pictures of your dead grandmothers body being gang raped by a group of aids infested homeless people.

how old are you like 13?

[thotz.one]

how old are you like 13?
what the fuck does that even mean am i i thirteen? how the fuck is what i said have to do with my age motherfucker? how old are you bitch 45? the shit is everyone so worried about me for.
lame dudes need to worry bout themselves.

[Z3BRA]

how old are you like 13?

either that or just a fag

[thotz.one]

either that or just a fag
like i said, LAME ass mother fuckers need to worry about themselves.

[Z3BRA]

like i said, LAME ass mother fuckers need to worry about themselves.
This is you:
"fucker fuckin motherfuckers are fuckin fuckers"

[thotz.one]

im pretty sure theres only one fucker in that sentence but ok.

[Tempo718]

dam g jus keep feeeding the fire everybody gonna burn you into bbq thotzone good thing I dont eat meat tho

[Phat 2]

thotz and co.
new page = subject change NOW !

all beef, flaming, shit talking, mockery, insults... anything after this post will result in an immediate ban.
3 pages is enough waste for you immature pieces of shit

you've been teh warned

[Tempo718]

squeaky radiator
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[PETER]

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Pen free style for crits please.

[MyNipsAreHard]

PETER- wow thats dope>for a freestyle. i cant freestyle for shit. i always mess up and there just a line in the middle of my letter haha. but props to that

[EWL24]

crits please
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changed the E and colored it in
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this last one i dont really know what to do with and i hate the L, but i cant think of a L that would fit with this

[Mr.Hater_666]

Ewal, fix your "e" in the last pic, and instead ofthe end of your "a" goin towards your "e", use your "L" instead.

[TBS]

Ewal i like that first one. sure it's not mad fucking crazy and shit but it's smooth and pretty clean. if you can tweak it in a few areas, get some cans and start blasting that shit everywhere.

[Jean Flocka Carlos Guzman]

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[TBS]

(went back a few pages before all the bullshit)

Thotz- that DRZ piece is way over complicated, if i hadn't read the other posts and the hand i couldn't have known what it said.. i think you had a good idea but didn't really pull it off. try and tine down the extensions and shit. the straight you did is pretty cool though. i like that. and the straight letter on this page is cool aswell
Crook- i really don't like the O's... also, take a bit of time when you add ink cause a lot of your lines are really shaky. just try and do each line in a clean, smooth motion. even if it's a straight letter or simple piece, if it's clean and sharp, it will look a lot better. also, K's and R's are great letters to work off of each other, doesn't matter what's in between them. those two letters can make a piece work well. don't exactly mirror them or anything but just bare in mind that the basic structure for them is roughly the same...
Naked- with the orange piece, the letters are actually really good. the character, not so much. letters work though. good work. also that black and yellow simps is cool. work with that. not too keen on the purple piece though.

also, Jean, i don't think you painted that..

massive apologies for all the talk and no flicks, i'm at work :(

[thotz.one]

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back of my big ass sketch pad for Art class.
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[tophaa]

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Yo wassup, this is my first attempt at a 'piece.' I've mainly just been drawing and hitting throwies/tags. It says Phishy, I kinda royally screwed up the P, last H and Y, but I still think that I have progressed. Please give me some input/opinions, thanks.

[PETER]

tophaa: please read the entire "New to Graffiti? Start here" thread please. It will address everything everyone would tell you.

Nips: Thanks a lot. Of course I only see the flaws in it, but I like the idea for it. I get a decent one every once in a while.

[thotz.one]

ow my eyes. need to go more simpler tophaa. get the handle on straight letters first.

[aaesoo]

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crits? i fucked up the 3d and dont really do colour schemes that often.

[Phat 2]

thotz, you dont say "more simpler"

[thotz.one]

be more simplistic. hows that mr moderator of english terms? lol.

[ribcage]

dont make fun of his speech impediment, hes got dicks in his mouth
http://i1099.photobucket.com/albums/g388/ribcage22/1019111130.jpg

VVVVVVV Ha, you frontin, youve never touched a clit in your life

[thotz.one]

no ur moms clit got stuck in between my teeth for a second.

ive touched more clits then youve seen at home jerkin off to black midget porn.

[aaesoo]

holy fuck can we all agree to just ignore thotz and not respond to him or something? seriously all the dude does is cause spam and post wack shit. if nobody replied to his posts he'd probably shut the fuck up.

[thotz.one]

lol spam. more like bombing! i will never shut the fuck up. especially since everybody is hatin on my shit for no reason haha. makes me want to post more.

[Tempo718]

dam g thotz i respect your will to be yourself an all that but homie your intense so how come you have difficulty focusing that intensity into your art or letters or wateva the fuk it is u do. dont waste that energy on pointless endevors put it into your letters so maybe one day people will respect your work. yamean any1 who read this an agree wit me in the same spot as me just wanting to be what others have created success with.

[thotz.one]

i dont have a problem putting it into my letters and art. i do graff for me. you should too.

[Tempo718]

of course g we all do it for us. but it seems to me your focusing your intensity in all the wrong places you dont agree?

[thotz.one]

all these lames are fuckin wit me. im not gonna back down and shut up cuz everybody got a problem with me for postin my stuff.

some old stuff.
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[Shit Outta Luck]

I DO! Now let's shut the fuck up and post some pictures, no disrespect. But do that shit. And thotz everyone's hating on you cuz you talk shit to em a little to much
and cuz you don't listen to anything they say. And lmao, this is just some throwup letters I'm workin on. I suck in general, but especially at throwies.

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[SynOne]

Pulled a reach, and ran out of paper.

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[tophaa]

ow my eyes. need to go more simpler tophaa. get the handle on straight letters first.

Thanks, I was just fucking around and doodling, looked decent while I was under the influence last night but when I awoke this morning I was like my God... I shouldn't have posted that.

[MyNipsAreHard]

Syn- that looks dope. still need to work on those handies though.
Shit- i like the S
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crits please

[tophaa]

Yo quick question, I've been messing around with it for the past few minutes. It just popped into my head, and I searched the forum members. Has the name vivid been used? It seems like it would have been but there were not really any active members with that name. thanks.

[aaesoo]

i'm bumpin this cause i never get crits on my shit.

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crits? i fucked up the 3d and dont really do colour schemes that often.

[tophaa]

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Feedback please.

[MyNipsAreHard]

aaesoo- i love that. love the colors and letters. dope job rockin the calender book
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Just finished this for a battle. got any crits?

[Tempo718]

topha - do all straight lines same wide width nemd the bars lef to right
nips your thro is decent tho

[toopski]

some cunts been telling me someone else writes izer/izar or smth where i live like omg everytime i write smth someone else pops up writing it but no biggy

http://img638.imageshack.us/img638/7479/dsc0001lu.jpg
http://img257.imageshack.us/img257/9560/dsc0002gc.jpg

i prefer the letter change anyway

[Flawless Victory]

aaesoo- i love that. love the colors and letters. dope job rockin the calender book
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Just finished this for a battle. got any crits?

This would look better with a capital E, and I think it looks a little weird that the purple fuckers have a shadow but the letters don't.


On another note, what's up with megatoys getting upset when they find out their shit is bad?
Of course your mom told you it was good, she has to.
Probably even put it up on the fridge.

[dankbudz]

Thotz- you draw like a PRESCHOOLER

for the tourny, wish i could redo it
http://i136.photobucket.com/albums/q168/matthew1o/Photoon2011-10-19at2200.jpg

[thotz.one]

for my buddy.
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[TastyMcNasty]

that has to be the smallest pinky i have ever seen. you really suck at drawing hands. or you just really suck at drawing, period.

[SneeZ]

Not hatin on u thotz, but this hand is a fucking shit. Learn anotomy if you want to draw hands.

Hers a doodle i did for you just now.
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self crit: palm is too big, muscle under the thumb, fingers are fine.

[Flawless Victory]

Yo, you guys must have been using some arthritic ass hands as a reference.

[thotz.one]

lol that hand is way more retarded then mine, i just fucked up on the pinky a little. wow, some people really drank there haterade this morning.

[knowtheledge]

Yo, you guys must have been using some arthritic ass hands as a reference.

haha word up

[knowtheledge]

grey sketch with my home girl medusa

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6156/6245242041_bfb7d6016e.jpg

[SneeZ]

yo, flawless give me crit, where did i fuck up? arthritic my ass.

and thotz hear me out: Look at the thickness of the thumb and compare it to the thickness of ring finger. pinky is deformaed. and what the fuck happened to the palm?

knowtheledge, eyes are fucked up, you missed some 3d under her chin, and arrows kind of doesnt fit, but liking it overall, keep it up!

[walter]

first post
WONDERFUL

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[dankbudz]

you fucked up most notably on the right part of the hand and fingers, the thumb doesnt look Bad, but it sure isnt good.
look at your hand, i really hope it didnt look like what you drew.

and ur self crits suck.

Knoledge, thats fuckin dope

[EWL24]

know - that is really sick

bump for crits
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[MTK]

i like SneeZ more just because it looks alot better and not like sh!t... yeeee diggg? and those self crits you gave your self are the one's iwould have givin you

[Flawless Victory]

Yo Thotz, you remind me of a cat that was around here a year or two ago.
He was just as fucking delusional as you were, but he eventually got with the program.
Your head is too big, homie. I'm assuming you live in the burbs, been painting.... no, sketching for well under a year.
Not a single spot hit, you don't know shit.


and sneez, I can start by saying that the index finger has no knuckle




Know, you should fill that shit

[MTK]

walter... i like it... but the L just was squished in. and im not diging the face in the U but thats just me... and welcome to BS.com lol

[Tempo718]

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[EWL24]

Walter - i think u have to many random extensions
Lizard - i like that, but i think it would look better with an outline and with the T straight

can i get some crits on my post now :)

[dankbudz]

Ewal- top of the E is too long, left bar on the W is a lil wonky at bottom. And that right bar on the A is really weak, fatten it up, keep your bars consistent.
Tempo- do what Ewal and Lizard is doin, hella simples, you are bending ur bars too much too fast and adding weird fuckim shit. Its better then some stuff before though so ups on that...
Lizard- that I is a floating away but other then that ita dope

[SneeZ]

dankbudz your crit sucks too. Didint do any good.

and its hard to draw bigger than natural/actual. Thats why i fucked up, but at least im tryin.
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And here is my hand studies from last friday. give me crit on ones that ain't bad. and its big, format A0.
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[dankbudz]

probably cause yo bitch ass doesnt know the difference between right and left..

[PETER]

shadow on the d needs some tlc and thicken up the !. All in all not a bad show. just noticed the shadow on the dot is going the wrong direction too. I like how you did the top portion of the E and feel the bottom should be a mirror of it. knock out some more.

[ZETA]

@know, REALLY clean. love it. the face looks kinda flat though..
@dank, eh the letters are reeeal simple and theyre kinda far apart, but i dig the colors and other than that bit above the D the shadow is correct. usually people mess that up

[SynOne]

Thot's, you need to even out your bars. Your structure is off. Do more simps.

Guy's.. He didn't mess up that hand. He just copied the man with the fucked up hand off of Scary Movie 2. Duh....

[thotz.one]

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[Norfsuthr]

Original style. Not feeling the V on top of the T's, H is bad and that connect to the O needs work to look right. Cool Z though. Keep doing simples like that, youll get it.

[thotz.one]

thanks for the crit man. that exactly what im shooting for is originality obviously with key graffiti elements. im looking around this forum, and with the exeception of a few, EVERYBODYS shit looks the same. fuck that.

[LIZARD]

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same pic just added lines, which one do u like better and some crits please

[Mr.Hater_666]

Yeah Maybe I'll Get Some Fucking Crits Please.
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[Norfsuthr]

Yes, yes it definitely needs more arrows. But only if they all go in the same direction and come out of nowhere.

Scrape off the arrows so we can see the letters and we'll talk.

[MTK]

what he said^^^^^^^^^ and outlline that shit so we can see it to

[MyNipsAreHard]

seeing no E. hahaha i see an A I and R. but maybe the R is an E. haha

[skinaone]

ight fuck the troll
now back to the pics
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pen freestyle exchage to sol, some old licker ? idk his name

[toopski]

http://img717.imageshack.us/img717/6281/dsc0001vt.jpg

quick lil sketch

[MyNipsAreHard]

Skina- props to the freestyle that shit look sick
toopski- looks good. gotta love the simple shit
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foook yahhh

[week101]

Something I did the other day o.O I liked the idea behind it.. Any thoughts?38061

[MTK]

heres a few38059380653806238063on the first sintar i fucked up by squishing the A and the R to close and overall it sucks. and i know im a toy thats why im in here

[ribcage]

wow fk me, not good enough for the intermediate thread? fuck this 1

[skinaone]

sup reach what you think of mine?

[Mr.Hater_666]

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Seeing some letters now?

[Mr.Hater_666]

Mtk- looks like shit i used to do in kindergarden. Did you just start like yesterday?

[knowtheledge]

mr. hater, you already posted those shitty phone pics and based on your most recent sketch it looks like those aren't even yours. draw something new n prove me wrong dude

[newbornsek]

some of my recent stuff
http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m154/newbornsek/IMG_00000124-1.jpg
http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m154/newbornsek/IMG-20111018-00194.jpg
http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m154/newbornsek/IMG-20111024-00220.jpg
http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m154/newbornsek/IMG-20110508-00518-Copy2-Copy-Copy.jpghttp://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m154/newbornsek/IMG-20110508-00519-Copy-Copy-Copy-Copy.jpg

[TastyMcNasty]

new stuff, mostly from a boring ass drivers ed class on the weekend. crits?
http://i1239.photobucket.com/albums/ff518/TastyMcNasty/Graffiti/IMG_2450.jpg

http://i1239.photobucket.com/albums/ff518/TastyMcNasty/Graffiti/IMG_2451.jpg

http://i1239.photobucket.com/albums/ff518/TastyMcNasty/Graffiti/IMG_2452.jpg

http://i1239.photobucket.com/albums/ff518/TastyMcNasty/Graffiti/IMG_2453.jpg

[Rdoes]

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[MN Nice]

I like that R on your second one.

[TastyMcNasty]

http://i1239.photobucket.com/albums/ff518/TastyMcNasty/IMG_2455.jpg

[newbornsek]

http://i1239.photobucket.com/albums/ff518/TastyMcNasty/IMG_2455.jpg

Dude called me out, i wanted to battle. and we did. word was aser..
http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m154/newbornsek/IMG-20111024-00221.jpg

[newbornsek]

http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m154/newbornsek/IMG-20111024-00222.jpg
http://i103.photobucket.com/albums/m154/newbornsek/IMG-20111024-00225.jpg

[Colors]

fear some of your stuff is pretty nice

[TastyMcNasty]

whoa, lets get this straight, i never called you out. i mistook this thread for the intermediate thread by mistake, and admitted my fault, mkay.

[Tempo718]

wadup guys
newborn - hey how come your not in the toy battles often?
tasty - I allways like ur work more wit color, do you ever do an outline?

[newbornsek]

OKOK my bad anyways good battle man, personally i just think you need to work on the flow of your letters a little more, the fundamentals are definitely there.

[TastyMcNasty]

block- make the letters the same size, and not scattered, then the piece will look better.
week- not bad, but dont focus too much on fills right now, until you get flow and structure down more.
mtk- those are bad, sorry man but its true. simplicity is the best way to go for now, so start off by doing keyboard letters, then see where you can go from there.
tempo- ya i occasionally do outlines, but i did not have the time.
and for those who havent noticed, me and newbornsek are in a little "beef battle", so go ahead and vote on your pick.


OKOK my bad anyways good battle man, personally i just think you need to work on the flow of your letters a little more, the fundamentals are definitely there.

and its all good man, my bad too. and i know what you're saying. your E in that last fear piece is on spot, but i think you;re trying too hard, putting too many extensions and stuff. oh and im thinking you may need some new markers ahah

[ribcage]

@fear F on your throw is steaz, except for the R your throw is nice. Everything else, not so much. keep on keepin on

[newbornsek]

newborn - hey how come your not in the toy battles often?
Good question... ill rip the one this week thats for sure.. gonna try to be a little more active around here as i improve my sketching and hopefully help some people and out get some help myself..

[TastyMcNasty]

anyone else got crits on mine? thatd be dope

[Tempo718]

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[. lewd]

wtf you dont do shit like this

[CliffJackson]

I fucked that R up like a prostitute, CRITS PLEASE!
@ tempo That e is a little weird, the m's are good tho.
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[. lewd]

you dont do shit like this either!!!

[CliffJackson]

damn that was informing

[Stigma02]

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[TastyMcNasty]

you went too crazy with extensions and crap, makes it look worse. and thats a real long nose for a ******

[Shit Outta Luck]

Fear I'd be diggin your shit if you could throw down a better R, work on it, good luck dawg.

[ribcage]

almost looks like an alts bite. not saying it is tho so dont get your panties in a bunch. you or anyone else.

[TastyMcNasty]

^now that you mention it, i can see why you'd say that.

now can someone crit my stuff? thatd be cool

[ribcage]

I can only give you the same crits ive been giving you. If you want to keep with that style, expirement. Cause all your doing is the same lettering every single solitary time. Thicken those bars up bro, expirement with different directional bends, everyone of your pieces follows the same structural formula, so I cant give you different crits

O wait, now that I look, all those R's are fucked up. the circle part needs to be attached to the right leg. Think of the circle part and the right leg as one bar, keep em connected for now

[TastyMcNasty]

aight. and i've tried the thickening of bars, but it makes my letters look goofy. and i know what you're saying with the R's, they were bugging me too. thanks

[SynOne]

Yeah, this piece, the bars and extensions were all even. Till I fucked it all up when coloring with shitty markers.

Crits, besides how bad my handstyle is.

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[CliffJackson]

@syn i dont like how the bottom bars flare out like that. maybe if you beefed everything else up it would look better, or maybe that was the markers, idk. Really liking the colors tho

[ribcage]

blaming it on the markers bro? cmon dude

[SynOne]

Yeah Lol Ribcage it's actually a small piece, and all I had was crayola fat markers. No fine tip. So I couldn't do the bars the right size because the outline is so huge.

[dankbudz]

so, you are the markers bitch?

get me crits on dis

[dankbudz]

i think that C is dope without the extension on top. H is pretty dope too, not feelin the lines inside the A and H though.


outlined it, imma crop my picture next time, haha half that photo is just white

[ribcage]

the bar I told you to slant is deformed lol.

And my favorite part of the 1 I posted is the lines inside the A and H. My C is suuuper top heavy, It was an accident. But I made at least one mistake on literally every letter

[dankbudz]

you talkin bout the R? i was fuckin with it, but ended up sayin fuckit, woulda had to of changed up the D and E hella, nothin was working. gunna go for something better next time. this shit has beens sitting in my book for a few weeks hah. and yo, i aint no tard, i learned how to use computer

[ribcage]

yea the R. Man I got a few books goin now, and theres like at least 2 pencil sketchs in each just waiting to be changed or inked. On days im drunk I just sketch real dirty, and then turn the page.

[thotz.one]

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[ribcage]

hey dude, you should really try doing the same thing everytime but with a different bg or something. itd be suuuuper ill man. You and saiko could be kings if yall keep doin what ur doin

[week101]

I did one like that a couple years ago sorta lol38292

[SynOne]

Thotz not feeling it. My advice, drop all the extensions. Go simpler and hell... Try a straight letter, they look better than some mess with extensions that don't make any sense.

[PETER]

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trying to work on dressing up letters, flow, and symetry (sp?)

[newbornsek]

not bad, i would say ditch the 3-d and just work letters for now. try some extensions outs between the letters.. and oh yah that A needs a lot of work

[PETER]

My goal was to make the a the same as the k just upside down it the bottom bar connection.... If that makes sense.

[week101]

I already see things wrong with this but I'm always to lazy to fix little shit but crits?
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[Stigma02]

ill work on the extensions. and yea for some reason i always draw some mofo wit a long ass nose any other advice?

[Rdoes]

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[CliffJackson]

@rdoes those feet are to fat, shorten them up.
Crits on this please
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[ZETA]

First full color 2 pager. What do you guys think? The word is EZAT. Looks weird cause some of the other lines from the trees cross over and make it look whack. Its also a new style anyway, so its sorta whack anyway. Crits though.


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[MyNipsAreHard]

Who buried the warriors gold?
thats what i wanna know

[Tempo718]

38451wat yall think bout my E

[Flawless Victory]

First full color 2 pager. What do you guys think? The word is EZAT. Looks weird cause some of the other lines from the trees cross over and make it look whack. Its also a new style anyway, so its sorta whack anyway. Crits though.


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It seems like you spent more time on your background than on your actual piece.. spice it up, man!

[gim]

@tempo try bring E slanted to the left as well, i think it'll look cool imo

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fucked up on the S can i get some crits don't really piece too much

[ZETA]

ATEZ (pure infected/bubbly type style)

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ZETA (infected robot type thing... took my old style and added the bubbly stuff to it)
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[Tempo718]

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trying on some extentions? and fills, I know the ink is a lil sloppy but anythots on some of those connections? thx!

zeta - its allways good to experiment bro, but I do believe in putting aside time to eventually trying some more simps

[knowtheledge]

Zeta dope linework
Tempo I'd say focus on letter structure before threedeez
been so busy lately but heres some sketches

muke
http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6234/6281663187_3e0cce637a.jpg

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6097/6281657787_c537f6f08e.jpg

gedi
http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6103/6270613701_e10d3979e4.jpg

bruzr
http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6058/6271138052_9e24723113.jpg

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6040/6271140620_80c1fcb5d7.jpg

[ribcage]

lol dudes boutta flip a pinner of some shwiggity shwag

[Tempo718]

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@knoledge- how did u begin wit a style to your first thoro thro

[Mr.Hater_666]

Likin that "Gedi"

[week101]

lol dudes boutta flip a pinner of some shwiggity shwag I was going to say the same exact thing lmao

[dankbudz]

"hey, lets put shitty weed and a cigar on my piece and maybe ill get more E-cred"


aand i realize this simp is pretty fucked

[PETER]

I second that. as well as the yellow ruzr

[SynOne]

"Hey, let's judge a writer based on how good his weed is." Fuck it, even if it's mids not dank. At least he smokes.

I love the Mukes and the Gedi. Nice work.

[Flawless Victory]

I'm about to start posing some of my shards next to my sketches

[knowtheledge]

"hey, lets put shitty weed and a cigar on my piece and maybe ill get more E-cred"

ahaha this ***** cracks me up! shoot

[ribcage]

I'm about to start posing some of my shards next to my sketches

tryin to? Ima post up some black tar and a pencil sketch

[Rdoes]

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@temp try to train your simpels like dank

[dankbudz]

Syn- yo im not hating on his writing, now you just sound like a cheerleader faggot

Rdoes- structures not thaaat bad, but thers alot of nonsense goin on with all your extension and and such.

[Rdoes]

extensions for filling up the page

[dankbudz]

if thats your goal...

[SynOne]

Dank - I wasn't saying you were, you just sound like a prick.

[dankbudz]

i know... its cause i am

[gim]

@tempo try bring E slanted to the left as well, i think it'll look cool imo

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fucked up on the S can i get some crits don't really piece too much
bumping for a crit

[thotz.one]

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[aiaw]

38612 im still workin on the letters a lil bit..especially the e. givin me some problems ha

[BRER]

Yo Thotz. Looks like it says ZHOr2. Do simples. You obviously do not understand letter structure and your pieces reflect that. Doing simples will help you understand proper structure and it will make your complex pieces look like something that other writers won't immediately write off as toy. I'm not trying to bash your work or anything (your lines seem clean and your ideas are different which is good), but what you need to do is take it one step at a time and not jump to burners when you cant do a proper simple.

[thotz.one]

Looks like it says THOTZ to me. try again.

[MN Nice]

You're fucking dumb. No shit it looks like thotz to you, you drew the fuckin thing. But its just human nature to think something looks good when you made it when actually is fucking garbage in other people's eyes.

[thotz.one]

hahahahaha.

[TastyMcNasty]

thotz- why do you suck so bad, and still not even try to get better?

[thotz.one]

i would probably have an answer for that if a gave a shit.

[Tempo718]

some cases require more of a visual affect

[TastyMcNasty]

i would probably have an answer for that if a gave a shit.

>implying you're posting for yourself and yourself only
>nope.jpg

[thotz.one]

what does it matter if i was or wasnt posting for myself?

[TastyMcNasty]

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[Tempo718]

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Ima begin 2 pull back on all my the dark colors an keep it on tha light side. those dark colors thend too not good if jr me

[dankbudz]

how have you not improved at all

[Tempo718]

idenital as fuckin twin bars... :mad:

[dankbudz]

huh

[Tempo718]

identical*

[dankbudz]

lemme get some crits on the DERS

S is still fucked

[dankbudz]

why is no one on...

[Tempo718]

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like ive all ways sed smooth clean bars, good width n heights any letters you despise?

[SneeZ]

you could define d bit better, give it more angle on the right ba. and the first vertical bar is not straight. you could also put r closer and over e, cuz thers no gap beetwin other letters. actually the top bar of s is bit too thick, thers nothing fucked about it.

[dankbudz]

i realize the vertical bar on the D isnt straight, thats what i meant to do, lol. i feel like it woulda looked too plain with a straight bar.
yeah i noticed that R as soon as i posted that shit up, was too lazy to move it and the S over.
and yea, i fixed the S, first one was maaad wobly and not a good curve.

[Shell703]

Temp, i'd add the yellow highlight to the middle bottom of the K leg just like you did with the N and make the stitch on the left leg of the N connect instead of being two separate small stitches

Laying Bricks!

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/Throws003.jpg

[dankbudz]

Tempos shit looks like a 2 year old scribbled on a piece of paper...

Shell- fix your D, that whole thing is mad sketchy

[week101]

Don't like the S or the E very much o.O

[Shell703]

im guessing youre talking about the 3d

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/Throws004.jpg

[Shell703]

one more for the books...

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/Throws005.jpg

[knowtheledge]

ruzr piece..aint feelin the r's much crits?

http://farm7.static.flickr.com/6039/6270614871_f7c170ff49.jpg

[CliffJackson]

looks a lot like RAZR, close the r off

[H1P30N3R]

shell keep at it your on the right path starting simple as it gets make your lines cleaner use a pencil so you can have 1 defined line rather than a bunch of lines.

[SynOne]

Not really feeling this piece, testing out these prismas I just got. I might need to do even more simples. Yes I know my W is fucked beyond belief.

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[ribcage]

take ur own crits, and these ones too. Start with teh S, gotta maintain the bar width bro, look how inconsistant it is on the curves, one of the main reasons it looks terrible. Then the K u gotta look at the same thing, like at the top of the left bar. Also, you gotta think of the 2 other bars of K as 1, you made a major fundamental error. THATS WHY WE DO SIMPLES. Bar width is off in spots on all the other letters too. The extended bar bottom of E is bad, and u already said adressed the W. The T has waaay too many extensions, looks awful, and so does the handy at the bottm

quit trying to exceed your capabilities and you'll start to realize the way your letters work.

[Tempo718]

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skewt-i like the t for my own reasons
dank- _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _
lil hang man action there any takers
razer- sharp lines bro >;l$

[thotz.one]

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[BRER]

Shell - Good job. Just keep doing simples like your last one, but work on bar consistency and making your lines not shaky.
Know - Your style is unique, but it's really hard to read. You should define the letters more, but once you can do that it will be cool I think.
Syn - The T in the piece is kinda ok. Dump the rest of the piece. You need to work on your bar consistency and your 3d is off in a few places. Try staying simpler for now
Tempo - It just looks so dirty, not in a good way. You need to clean it up a lot. Also your letters haven't seemed to have improved at all in a long time. I think you need to practice trying to clean your shit up as well as just doing simple letters until they look good.
Thotz - I already gave you crits. I wasn't shooting you down like everyone else does on this site, but you shot down my crits like you did everyone else. I now want to know where you are so that I can fucking cross out all of your wack shit because your never gonna get any better. You dis anyone that even tries to help you out. So. Fuck you.

[CliffJackson]

^ this shit is the truth.
@thotz that "t" looks like a z, why would you only tilt one letter?
this is what this reads like
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