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ribcage
12-04-2011, 08:26 PM
and it looks better. those inside lines tho, your overusing them, and some are in the wrong place. id take em out or only use 1 per letter. i used to try that shit and everytime i did it i regretted it...

dest1
12-04-2011, 08:29 PM
thanks mues..yah try cutting down on those inside cut lines,use them in spots where it comes to a point but not more than once a letter(or a bar)until u get a little more control in your letters.

MN Nice
12-04-2011, 08:32 PM
and it looks better. those inside lines tho, your overusing them, and some are in the wrong place. id take em out or only use 1 per letter. i used to try that shit and everytime i did it i regretted it...

I'm getting that feeling too. I just thought I'd give it a shot after seeing this Sufer piece like on his R, but I'll prolly just scrap it.

http://www.globalgraphica.com/main/archives/sufer.jpg

dest1
12-04-2011, 08:36 PM
I'm getting that feeling too. I just thought I'd give it a shot after seeing this Sufer piece like on his R, but I'll prolly just scrap it.

http://www.globalgraphica.com/main/archives/sufer.jpg

i looks dope, but notice he did it only once? not over-doing those things is the key. i make the same mistake all the time.

ribcage
12-04-2011, 08:38 PM
lol theres some major differences, and reasons why and why not to use those cuts. In your case, a straight letter, with no movement, you have no need for those cuts. The reason why he put that cut there is to imply the movent from the top of the curve bar to the kick, also making it all one bar ya dig?
the only reason why he use it once is becuase thats the only spot that called for it

dest1
12-04-2011, 08:39 PM
lol theres some major differences, and reasons why and why not to use those cuts. In your case, a straight letter, with no movement, you have no need for those cuts. The reason why he put that cut there is to imply the movent from the top of the curve bar to the kick, also making it all one bar ya dig?

truth..

SynOne
12-04-2011, 11:40 PM
Round 2. Still not even close to perfect. Crit it.

43855

ribcage
12-05-2011, 12:56 AM
top bar of E sucks, top bar of T is lackin on the left side, make it mirror the right, and make it the same width. K and W are obese looking, top bar of S is weird, and the W and T still sit lowe than the rest... theirs now a weird space in between the W's outside bars, make the middle part go up higher, and maybe make those outside bars at a sharper angle. peace

Hapa
12-05-2011, 01:17 AM
I realize how much of a toy I am but im just lookin for any feedback on a couple ideas

43860
43861

Hapa
12-05-2011, 01:18 AM
and i know how gay that arrow looks and the pencil hapa sketch is half assed

PETER
12-05-2011, 10:39 AM
Hapa that 3d one isn't bad dude. Add a light source and shadows and it's pretty solid. good practice.

ghostwriter
12-05-2011, 03:50 PM
happpa dat sque is lookin goood

PETER
12-05-2011, 03:53 PM
Naked exchange. crits for improvement?43676
bump for crits

SynOne
12-05-2011, 06:43 PM
Gone.

SynOne
12-05-2011, 07:24 PM
Lol'd.

ribcage
12-05-2011, 07:26 PM
well im not lol'ing. im disgusted, I try to help you, and this is how you do me? fuckin ridiculous

SynOne
12-05-2011, 07:29 PM
Lol Calm down Leonardo I took it down. It was more of just testing shit. I had absolutely no idea how to cover for all the dead space in the W.

ribcage
12-05-2011, 07:35 PM
you mean it was just bitting my shit and see how it would look on your sketch? IF you have no idea how to do something, you shoud ask, not bite.

SynOne
12-05-2011, 07:38 PM
Check ya pm's.

Phat 2
12-05-2011, 07:59 PM
I understand that u never post in here g but anyway that is a nice share n' on the real, good concept, unseen 2 me, nice touch
AYO Phat question for you since I gotchu readin n ish do mathematics ever come into putting up a piece?
I didn't really get that... what do you mean math? Like you sure need to know basic geometry... but if you're talking about actual algebra? what does that have to do with anything?

SkateJunt
12-05-2011, 08:29 PM
just fuckin around with throwies, crits?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7155/6463181221_743b4d8b54.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6463181221/)
Picture 125 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6463181221/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

Mr. November
12-05-2011, 08:45 PM
Better than your last sketches, but still very shitty/toy bro.

I like that you practice a lot though. That kind of determination will get you somewhere. Hopefully.

dave the pirate
12-05-2011, 09:02 PM
43940

Phat 2
12-05-2011, 09:37 PM
you seem like you got some cool stuff. but you always go extra nuts wtih the coloring. i say calm down a little and let your letters show for a change. honestly, whenever i see your flicks, i just scroll down them fast without stopping for fear of getting a headache because of the mess

SkateJunt
12-05-2011, 09:47 PM
nother one
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7010/6463434949_1727d60b3e.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6463434949/)
Picture 126 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6463434949/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

dave the pirate
12-05-2011, 09:54 PM
[QUOTE=Phat 2;1762535]you seem like you got some cool stuff. but you always go extra nuts wtih the coloring. i say calm down a little and let your letters show for a change. honestly, whenever i see your flicks, i just scroll down them fast without stopping for fear of getting a headache because of the mess[QUOTE]

Different strokes for different folks i guess dude

43943

Hapa
12-06-2011, 01:54 AM
Just some sketches with a different style..just tryin shit out. Crits?

43971
43972

and i know i should probably move that U in on the second one

Walt
12-06-2011, 02:04 AM
it was a battle for another forum. crits?

http://i627.photobucket.com/albums/tt354/bifflishus/DSCN1551.jpg

chen
12-06-2011, 02:42 AM
43974

centrysam
12-06-2011, 12:17 PM
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7144/6461092645_cef2c64537.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6461092645/)
Untitled (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6461092645/) by centrysams (http://www.flickr.com/people/70896708@N08/), on Flickr

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7142/6455105521_a6db46e079.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6455105521/)
Untitled (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6455105521/) by centrysams (http://www.flickr.com/people/70896708@N08/), on Flickr

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7030/6466903797_5ce7d67d04.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6466903797/)
Untitled (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6466903797/) by centrysams (http://www.flickr.com/people/70896708@N08/), on Flickr

spher
12-06-2011, 12:30 PM
i think after looking at these im more then toy ... :(

Strange Journeys
12-06-2011, 09:33 PM
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humr that first ones tight except for the R, it looks like down syndrome, and the left extens on the M, and that 3rd flick i dont feel at all
oats is aight nice and simple, i wouldnt vote for it in a battle though
hapa- idk what im looking at those skinny bars connecting everything should go away
kryl- keep practicing i guess, nothing really stands out

crit me yall, this is going on a prodo on saturday, pics later
i screwed up the 3d width in some parts, i know

MN Nice
12-07-2011, 12:19 AM
In my opinion, I think you should cut some negative space in your D and straighten out your T to flow with the rest of your letters. Interesting style though.

Tempo718
12-07-2011, 12:48 AM
this man wrote WORD lol

Tempo718
12-07-2011, 12:53 AM
I didn't really get that... what do you mean math? Like you sure need to know basic geometry... but if you're talking about actual algebra? what does that have to do with anything?
basically what I mean by that is when your looking at a spot and you see what your gonna write in your head, trying to picture it before comming out with the cans, does math come apart of
what goes in to when your peice.

MN Nice
12-07-2011, 01:00 AM
this man wrote WORD lol

What?

Strange Journeys
12-07-2011, 01:12 AM
In my opinion, I think you should cut some negative space in your D and straighten out your T to flow with the rest of your letters. Interesting style though.

yeah i feel you on the T, i feel like it has to have the bend though for it to flow, but ya it is weird looking, thansk though. i learned i cant really do traditional piecing styles, so imma fuck with this for a while

MN Nice
12-07-2011, 01:16 AM
Just a suggestion for the T maybe, Make it capital and have extensions on both sides coming down from the top bar that curve out. Like on the top of your DEB, when you change directions, the bars flush out so maybe it could make the T more uniform.

I feel as though I might have fucked up my thought but maybe not lol

Strange Journeys
12-07-2011, 01:19 AM
i get what your saying, ill try it on the nex one that sounds tight

dest1
12-07-2011, 11:49 AM
handy i been gettin up with..
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sketch im about to color (yellow/greens,white,grey outline)
43838

some other ishhh...
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43837


bumping for crits...

chen
12-07-2011, 11:52 AM
44074

Shit Outta Luck
12-07-2011, 07:00 PM
Just tried some guys name I saw up. K is a little small but the whole thing is kinda small so that's probably why.
44160

SkateJunt
12-07-2011, 07:32 PM
looking better?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7023/6474290033_9527ef8606.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290033/)
Picture 128 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290033/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7010/6474290137_3ce48a1229.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290137/)
Picture 129 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290137/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7145/6474290237_56c1f17bba.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290237/)
Picture 127 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290237/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7153/6474290375_2b071926e0.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290375/)
Picture 130 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290375/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
tried to come up with a one liner
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7015/6474290615_5feeac0e52.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290615/)
Picture 131 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290615/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

EWL24
12-07-2011, 09:51 PM
Sol - i like it, but the bottom bar of the E could have been smoother and i would have connected the two parts of the K
did this yesterday, i dont really like my E or W but i think the rest turned out ok
crits please
44170

PETER
12-08-2011, 08:46 AM
playing with ideas for an exchange. Just started doodling with a purple paint marker and liked it so I outlined in sharpie.
44198

freekofart
12-08-2011, 09:39 AM
4420444205
new "freek" sketches

SneeZ
12-08-2011, 04:00 PM
cant read the first one, and the second one needs more arrows, definitely.

sadgeh
12-08-2011, 04:31 PM
There is standing Freek on both sketches. But the second one is too hectic.

Beko
12-08-2011, 10:11 PM
44260
i kinda like the flares! what do yall think?

MN Nice
12-08-2011, 10:31 PM
What'd be nice is to make your E lower case, then have the tail flare up behind the loop. Yeahhhh.

Norfsuthr
12-08-2011, 11:41 PM
A bit too high to focus...
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7020/6480266739_b8ab3f3829.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/52108332@N02/6480266739/)
oie_953833LDXi6xxY (http://www.flickr.com/photos/52108332@N02/6480266739/)

H1P30N3R
12-09-2011, 12:43 AM
props norf big fan of your style

smokeitup
12-09-2011, 01:14 AM
44260
i kinda like the flares! what do yall think?

i dont

Tempo718
12-09-2011, 07:28 AM
I gots not alot of room 2 talk. anybody who dont understand what a bar is,
ask. You guys this site is a tool, use all the legit advice found here, crits
are cool i guess, but you'll get more from this site than just crits if you're
able to take the time and find whats useful. Bomb sci still beats the crap
out've facebook IMO. pz

SkateJunt
12-09-2011, 11:37 AM
better?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7144/6482379789_530c6b731e.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6482379789/)
Picture 136 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6482379789/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

sadgeh
12-09-2011, 02:22 PM
no.

Coleo
12-09-2011, 04:15 PM
lol

RES4
12-09-2011, 06:19 PM
yo phat does this piece read as "aspek"

44320

trying to do an arabic piece but not sure if it still reads correctly

Norfsuthr
12-09-2011, 06:23 PM
Looks like Illjal..

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7162/6484047367_fc7cca97f6.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/52108332@N02/6484047367/)
oie_1001719HoAesb2C (http://www.flickr.com/photos/52108332@N02/6484047367/)

Colors
12-09-2011, 06:54 PM
the 2 stickers of suck. crits on the naked and nak?
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Phat 2
12-09-2011, 09:19 PM
yo phat does this piece read as "aspek"

44320

trying to do an arabic piece but not sure if it still reads correctly

yes it does, although you messed up on the S... you should'nt have made it look as if it was 2 separated objects. get rid of the separation thingy so that the letter looks like one whole letter. the way it is now, it looks like 2 separate letters which a regular arabic reader would see as ADLPEK.
but I gotta give you huge props on that... you're getting it down pretty fast

Mr. November
12-09-2011, 11:52 PM
I mean I like the stickers.. But why would you put so much work into something that's just going to be peeled off the next day. If it's in a good spot it probably will.

Colors
12-10-2011, 12:39 AM
it didnt take that much time haha. and it might last who knows

EWL24
12-10-2011, 01:39 AM
Bumping for crits
44434

and stickers dont always get peeled off that fast. i have a sticker that has been up since 09, but i hope it gets peeled off soon cause thats about when i first started, so its fucking horrible haha :D

psykonaught
12-10-2011, 05:04 AM
Album of my black book

Here (http://flic.kr/s/aHsjxgCKK4)

RES4
12-10-2011, 05:39 AM
yes it does, although you messed up on the S... you should'nt have made it look as if it was 2 separated objects. get rid of the separation thingy so that the letter looks like one whole letter. the way it is now, it looks like 2 separate letters which a regular arabic reader would see as ADLPEK.
but I gotta give you huge props on that... you're getting it down pretty fast

thanks, the s is the u shaped thing and the bit to the right of it?

smokeitup
12-10-2011, 06:53 AM
Album of my black book

Here (http://flic.kr/s/aHsjxgCKK4)

http://www.flickr.com/photos/64489485@N04/6485923847/in/set-72157628356043581

hahaha i wouldnt post flicks with my face in them, but thats just me.

RES4
12-10-2011, 07:03 AM
^http://www.fempop.com/wordpress/wp-content/uploads/2011/05/Steve-Buscemi-8.jpeg
lol

psykonaught
12-10-2011, 01:15 PM
meh no scanner at 4 am.... ish happens lol

Phat 2
12-10-2011, 02:11 PM
thanks, the s is the u shaped thing and the bit to the right of it?

yeah exactly, it's what norfsuthr described as the J and A

centrysam
12-10-2011, 02:26 PM
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7009/6487870233_01218408ba.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6487870233/)
Untitled (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6487870233/) by centrysams (http://www.flickr.com/people/70896708@N08/), on Flickr

cwks
12-10-2011, 04:37 PM
4447944480

MTK
12-10-2011, 05:13 PM
U need to fix those faces a lil but that first one os pretty simple and good. Thar second one is the one I like nut work on hands cuz they looks like trash

Colors
12-10-2011, 10:35 PM
Crit this before i do anything permanant to it?
44571

kapi
12-11-2011, 05:55 AM
crits please.. few sketches in my black book, trying out different throwies etc.
tell me what i should fix.
44615446164461744618446194462044621446224462344624 4462544626

SkateJunt
12-11-2011, 11:02 AM
tryin to work out a new throw, heres a rough one, any crits on the general throw? i know the lines are rough, sharpies are a bitch, I was drawing in my bed, and i still need work.
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7034/6493039189_e74812a402.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6493039189/)
Picture 152 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6493039189/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

Beko
12-11-2011, 08:59 PM
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7022/6496373739_f3385d437a_z.jpg

the charo came out whack! but th eltters came out decent.... the colors bother me/: crits pleasee!

Coleo
12-11-2011, 10:18 PM
^ ehh

Krav
12-12-2011, 12:50 PM
Colors- like the stickers, but try branching into your own style
Cwks- Love the character and the letters in the first one, work on your letter structure in the second one though

Krav
12-12-2011, 12:53 PM
Kapi- love your work and your style. Keep it up.
SkateJunt- Looks pretty good, Just clean up the 3d effect a bit and your sig at the bottom looks a little forced, let it flow man

Krav
12-12-2011, 12:57 PM
Peter- That purple burns man, good job.
Freekofart (which i read as freako fart)- Hell yeah man, this is the stuff I like to see and inspires me to keep writing. I would just add some thickness to your sig because it kinda gets lost in the shuffle of awesomeness your shit puts out.

cwks
12-12-2011, 07:15 PM
Colors- like the stickers, but try branching into your own style
Cwks- Love the character and the letters in the first one, work on your letter structure in the second one though
the second one was my buddy doing a peacie for fun under my character

cwks
12-12-2011, 07:19 PM
4496744968449694497044971 crits on these ones plz

Beko
12-12-2011, 10:15 PM
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7022/6496373739_f3385d437a_z.jpg

the charo came out whack! but th eltters came out decent.... the colors bother me/: crits pleasee!

bump for crits! this is one of my cleanner ones! any feedback?

ribcage
12-12-2011, 10:20 PM
looks awful.

MN Nice
12-12-2011, 10:21 PM
When you're trying to advance your work, you may miss the fact that your bars get fucked up. Keep playing around with your straights and bars and work off what you excel at.

ribcage
12-12-2011, 10:29 PM
this fool has mad burners, listen to him

Beko
12-12-2011, 10:41 PM
i alwasy try to take in whatever anyone has to offer! well as long as it sounds correct! but i thought my bars were pretty acceptable? the k is a little off i thought.

MN Nice
12-12-2011, 10:42 PM
Nah, the letters were weak all around.

ribcage
12-12-2011, 10:42 PM
the K, E, and O all have fucked up bars. the B is the only letter that is acceptable as far as simps go

cwks
12-12-2011, 11:02 PM
4496744968449694497044971 crits on these ones plz any crits?

Phat 2
12-13-2011, 06:15 AM
boy I'm no meteorologist but I'm pretty sure it's been raining toys this month

PETER
12-13-2011, 12:19 PM
Beko: I suggest not bending the leg of your K like that it makes it look like a horrible B. That B is an improvement over your last one. You are getting a firmer grip on structure. Try going straight. No bend to your letters for a little bit (like the E and K anyway).

Phillip McDougall
12-13-2011, 12:28 PM
boy I'm no meteorologist but I'm pretty sure it's been raining toys this month
.

cwks
12-13-2011, 12:45 PM
45180

sadgeh
12-13-2011, 01:24 PM
Whats that by the T there?

sadgeh
12-13-2011, 02:05 PM
That it must be in the throwies thread! But its not very fine readable too much squares for a throw

PETER
12-13-2011, 03:19 PM
Ted Theodore Logan!

Colors
12-13-2011, 03:28 PM
Crit this
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sadgeh
12-13-2011, 05:09 PM
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45248
45249
45250

On the third i fucked up the 3D but how can i improve that under the O's?

Wonky
12-13-2011, 06:54 PM
So, I tried to do something less gay, but it's still pretty gay. I'll keep trying innit

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BigBend
12-13-2011, 07:24 PM
Wonky- might wanna go a bit simpler. Anyway heres a quick sketch i did today at work
http://i43.tinypic.com/rlb70h.jpg

Coleo
12-13-2011, 08:05 PM
nice^^^

mace2200
12-13-2011, 08:58 PM
the "oo" on the second to last one looks kinda weird but i like it

mace2200
12-13-2011, 09:04 PM
@ wonky, it would look sooo much better wit different colors, and its good.... i like the character
@bigbend, mind=blown

Norfsuthr
12-13-2011, 10:40 PM
Naked- I like your AK but the N is too open or too big idk and the E isnt sexy.

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7008/6508756089_13b5c305c0.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/52108332@N02/6508756089/)
oie_144378OTVIVGlW (http://www.flickr.com/photos/52108332@N02/6508756089/)

gemer
12-13-2011, 10:56 PM
freestyle pencil
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freestyle
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gemer
12-13-2011, 11:01 PM
@colors pretty good structure im diggen it nice simple just not diggen the color man
@rook not diggen them extensions man go more simple
@norfsuthr not really liken it man the seconed letter i cant even tell what it iss lol and the n' is alright until the extension at the end noo flow no affence just tryna help you out

BigBend
12-13-2011, 11:26 PM
yeah sick character man.
A sketch i done as a race against the clock to see how fast i could draw it and color
http://i43.tinypic.com/2en56s2.jpg

Norfsuthr
12-13-2011, 11:28 PM
^I posted it to get crits no worries. It says YZEN. The extension on the end isn't actually an extension, it's a capital N. Thanks I'll keep workin with it.

I think your A gets too fat for the other letters, and the R could be better.Really diggin your ME though.

Oh and work on those handstyles man..

MN Nice
12-14-2011, 12:06 AM
Nice char's!

Mr. November
12-14-2011, 12:28 AM
Dude Gemer you have some awesome skills. Loving those characters dude.

gemer
12-14-2011, 12:33 AM
^^haha thanx man
heres a freestyle i was doin kinda got off topic with the flow and just said fuck it
45322

gemer
12-14-2011, 12:33 AM
damn my letters got smaller too :/ fuck it ill keep postin

Coleo
12-14-2011, 12:34 AM
^nicceeeeeee

gemer
12-14-2011, 12:35 AM
thanks dude

SynOne
12-14-2011, 01:12 AM
Top of my S is awkward, and some of the 3D isn't perfect.. Other than that. Crit it.

45324

Strange Journeys
12-14-2011, 01:16 AM
bring those bastards closer and fix the w

EWL24
12-14-2011, 02:13 AM
gemer - those r sick, im really digging those chars

Shell703
12-14-2011, 07:12 AM
SYN - A whole lot better, those letters look real clean, and solid, keep trying to get the bars the same with, they're a little off in some places - like the K and R look a little small and the S a little big. The heights and spacing are good also. Try messing with connections a little, just don't sacrifice the letters and work on that handie, it'll help with the flow of the piece.

GEMER - I don't like the hook in the G, the first E's straight, the MER could be bigger and the thickness of the last R gets too small. Overall flow is decent but the ending E and R gets pretty plain. The right side of the M gets too small and leans too much to the bottom right.

Norf - work on straights, you don't understand letter structure

NAKE - Try using strong contrasting colors, the ones you used are too close in lightness and darkness which makes the piece illegible.

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/001.jpg

SVEZAJEZA
12-14-2011, 07:23 AM
SynOne - My only crit is have more fun it it, Isnt all about clear and read able its about having a bit of emotion on it. flare it out add some varibles in it. Yeah in all its good to get a base structure but the sooner you start experimenting on your style the quicker and easier you will learn.

BigBend
12-14-2011, 07:38 AM
SynOne - My only crit is have more fun it it, Isnt all about clear and read able its about having a bit of emotion on it. flare it out add some varibles in it. Yeah in all its good to get a base structure but the sooner you start experimenting on your style the quicker and easier you will learn.
Prob. the best advise i have heard on this site, well said SVEZAJEZA

SynOne
12-14-2011, 08:28 AM
Thanks for all the crits guys, I did try to have fun with it a while back. But I was told that I just cant do flairs because of my skill level. But I'll have some fun with it and post another after school.

Also that piece was more for something that I could actually paint. It's a easily paintable piece, which was what I was going for.

mace2200
12-14-2011, 10:12 AM
@gemer sick character dude

gemer
12-14-2011, 11:50 AM
thanks for the crits dudeess

Phillip McDougall
12-14-2011, 12:58 PM
Prob. the best advise i have heard on this site, well said SVEZAJEZA

it's actually just toy bait...
he DID say get a base structure... which is what you don't have

Rdoes
12-14-2011, 01:05 PM
45375

gemer
12-14-2011, 01:14 PM
@r does im likeen it just dont knowabout the o looks kinda like an e but the structrues good im diggen it
@shell 703 thanx man and yours is strait man not real;lt original but structures good and the color come on man get some better maekers

BigBend
12-14-2011, 02:07 PM
it's actually just toy bait...
he DID say get a base structure... which is what you don't have
And thats what i mean by this thread and you, you talk shit just like every other big headed ego person on here, instead of acually helping people all you do is down them and say some smart shit this whole website is about helping people not talk shit threw a damn keyboard

BigBend
12-14-2011, 02:12 PM
CRITTS! Says HAEC
http://i41.tinypic.com/r7nj0k.jpg
http://i43.tinypic.com/rlb70h.jpg
http://i43.tinypic.com/2en56s2.jpg

Phillip McDougall
12-14-2011, 04:19 PM
I'm not talking shit homie... I'm saying you should show us your letter structure. When we see good letter structure, then you take a step in the direction you want to go. After that, style development is up to you. Why do you think I continue posting in the toy thread? I don't have an inflated ego dude... haha.

The side bars of your H's are SINGLE BARS and should not bend halfway through

BigBend
12-14-2011, 04:50 PM
aight i gotcha phill well heres another one i just did the h bends downwards again but check the rest out bro!
http://i43.tinypic.com/beujk1.jpg

SynOne
12-14-2011, 04:55 PM
Tit's a little sloppy, and I didn't take enough time on my extensions, they are all fucked.

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gemer
12-14-2011, 04:57 PM
structures good but yea it tis a bit sloppy nice color combo tho

BigBend
12-14-2011, 05:05 PM
Gemer- only thing i see wrong is the spacing bro try working on that

DEXA
12-14-2011, 05:50 PM
45402

Coleo
12-14-2011, 08:25 PM
45465
crits please!

SkateJunt
12-14-2011, 08:59 PM
those letters are wonky as fuck!, stop all the drips and highlights n shit and learn some letter structure! a reason that I havent posted any of my attempts at style and piecing is cuz i know it looks wack, id only post it if i though it was dece and wanted someone elses opinion, do you honestly think thats good?anyway

fuckin around wit throws, see anything decent?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7174/6513639823_f11596a4ed.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639823/)
Picture 159 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639823/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7034/6513639567_74dc0e4198.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639567/)
Picture 161 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639567/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7011/6513639363_14d2e26e00.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639363/)
Picture 162 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639363/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7160/6513639143_49e5f4767d.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639143/)
Picture 160 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639143/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7166/6513638937_1c74ec1a61.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513638937/)
Picture 157 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513638937/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7034/6513638713_5c509f4521.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513638713/)
Picture 158 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513638713/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7154/6513638455_43f83e603f.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513638455/)
Picture 163 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513638455/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

gemer
12-14-2011, 09:15 PM
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gemer
12-14-2011, 09:16 PM
@ coleo work on structure no need for the waveyness go with more strait lines right now then move up

Coleo
12-14-2011, 09:17 PM
@gemer thanks ill work on it!

Coleo
12-14-2011, 09:19 PM
@SkateJunt i think the third one is the best outta the bunch

react70
12-14-2011, 09:24 PM
45467

Coleo
12-14-2011, 09:28 PM
^work on your R and put a shadow on it

BigBend
12-14-2011, 09:38 PM
CRITTS!
http://i43.tinypic.com/beujk1.jpg

BigBend
12-14-2011, 10:42 PM
Finished
http://i42.tinypic.com/ogdpx2.jpg

Jiska Matos
12-14-2011, 11:03 PM
454754547645477

some doodles i do at work

@BigBend- Love that 3D style keep it up

MN Nice
12-14-2011, 11:06 PM
@BigBend: Get a better camera asap then we'll crit it. Otherwise the only thing I can really say it distinguish the bars better from each other? Fuck if I know anything about 3d pieces though

@Jiska: Difficult to read but to me, it seems to have a shit ton of extensions on some. maybe tone it down?

Some bs. Bars are inconsistent and 3d is probably off a bit, but its just a concept I quickly did.

http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00493-20111214-2159.jpg?t=1323921843

Jiska Matos
12-14-2011, 11:12 PM
thks 4 the crits MN... this is just something i do at the studio in the dead hours, they have some cool markers and i just doodle a lot

BigBend
12-14-2011, 11:29 PM
haha thankx bro and will do.
jiska really digging the colors and pieces

ribcage
12-15-2011, 12:48 AM
45467

rob react.
45484
45489


not the only biting going down in these threads............ fuck the web, yall lil faggots cant comprehend not biting. I swear any one who comes here when they first start and or are "trying to learn" always are retarded. ALWAYS. ALWAYS RETARDED.

Tempo718
12-15-2011, 01:06 AM
45490
Did this in August but probobly never posted it cause I thought it sucked.

@ Jiska - that middle one is pretty nice wit the bear n' all that. It say AMOTE yeah?

@ Gemer - your letters are a lil inconsistent in size.

I got to say I got my work cut out too, but I will probobly stay with this general concept for letters i've been doin unless some1 convince me otherwise.

gemer
12-15-2011, 01:13 AM
45491

dankbudz
12-15-2011, 02:02 AM
that dudes creepin

crits?

Fain
12-15-2011, 07:01 AM
45497

Phat 2
12-15-2011, 07:40 AM
http://i.qkme.me/CHM.jpg

JUANASAUNA
12-15-2011, 07:50 AM
45505
45501

Shell703
12-15-2011, 10:21 AM
http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/001.jpg

Bump for crits...

GEMER - Yeah, I don't have any decent markers at the moment - did you say my shit is not real?

BigBend
12-15-2011, 01:07 PM
heres a better pic. i had to put laminate paper over it so it wouldn't smear so that's what you see that is wrinkled
HAEC
http://i44.tinypic.com/126db3o.jpg

Phillip McDougall
12-15-2011, 02:42 PM
getting better, keep it up. Learn how to shade cleaner.. I don't want to see any lines.

gemer
12-15-2011, 04:28 PM
agree^^ definatly gettin better with em big bend but fer sure shading is a bit down hill keep em comin tho there gettin better
@ shell703- nuttin to special man no ones critiqing it cuz its lamee no affence but it looks just like the A on my keyboard except sloppier and with color haha

SynOne
12-15-2011, 04:30 PM
On the bottom one my apple green was dead so the S didn't get colored correctly =/. Crit em.

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gemer
12-15-2011, 04:33 PM
@shell 703 no ididnt say it wasnt real haha i meant to put its not really* original
@synone liken the bottoms style but not really liken the k or e and maybe the r lol but still diggen them i guess keep em comin there gettin better

Wonky
12-15-2011, 04:40 PM
45536

dankbudz
12-15-2011, 04:44 PM
finished dis up

gemer
12-15-2011, 04:59 PM
@ wonky i like the bright colors idk about the lettering tho man wack extensions coming from no where and did you trace the bottom one or somethin cuz there both like theeeee exacttt same just different color haha the bubbles are even in the same spot.....go more simple man do tons of drawings not just one and then trace over it again and again just recoloring it gotta get better and you wont that way
@dankbuds looks pretty good for a simple structures all there just not diggen the D keep em comin tho man youll get better

Wonky
12-15-2011, 05:31 PM
oh I shoulda said I fixed that bottom one in Photoshop / tried different colours and straightened the image out. By the extensions you mean the sill arrows coming out all over the place?

SkateJunt
12-15-2011, 05:33 PM
any improvement?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7142/6517991109_c2df23f8f5.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6517991109/)
Picture 164 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6517991109/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

SkateJunt
12-15-2011, 05:55 PM
another one
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7141/6518077271_fdb392a57e.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6518077271/)
Picture 165 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6518077271/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

TastyMcNasty
12-15-2011, 06:13 PM
heres a better pic. i had to put laminate paper over it so it wouldn't smear so that's what you see that is wrinkled
HAEC
http://i44.tinypic.com/126db3o.jpg

getting better, like phil said, try to make none of the outer lines visible.
and as for smudging, invest in some of this, really worth it: http://www.krylon.com/products/workable_fixatif/

Mr. November
12-15-2011, 07:21 PM
Yo Skate I think the top picture straight letter might be the best straight letter I've seen you do. Real improvement, but you still need to be working on your letters.

Your tag and your throw need major renovation though. It doesn't really look like you've changed anything on your tag.

SkateJunt
12-15-2011, 07:24 PM
what do you think i need to change on my tag?

Mr. November
12-15-2011, 07:31 PM
You are trying to force style into your letters in a way that makes it not flow as well. the letter that needs the most work is your Y in my opinion.

SkateJunt
12-15-2011, 07:50 PM
thanks, yeah i dont know how to make my y work with the rest, ima screw around with my tag tonight and try to come up with something nicer.
some more straight fuckery
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7144/6518467785_b0e6b0dfdf.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6518467785/)
Picture 166 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6518467785/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

JUANASAUNA
12-15-2011, 09:27 PM
45551

MN Nice
12-15-2011, 09:58 PM
Yikes. ^

dankbudz
12-15-2011, 10:02 PM
thats what ur shit used to look like, mn nice...

MN Nice
12-15-2011, 10:06 PM
thats what ur shit used to look like, mn nice...

Emphasize on the "used to"


Some bs. Bars are inconsistent and 3d is probably off a bit, but its just a concept I quickly did.

http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00493-20111214-2159.jpg?t=1323921843

bump

Shell703
12-15-2011, 11:48 PM
MN - I think it'll look better if the loop on the U were on the outside of the U

Skate - Try keeping in mind bar width consistency throughout each letter

HAER - The bars on each of the letters are different, I don't know if that was deliberate or not and I don't think the C flows with the rest of the piece. I think it'll look better if there was some kind of consistent font style throughout the whole piece, or if you want to keep it varied like that I'd emphasize it more, like make it each letter drastically different, but each letter its self should have a consistent bar type throughout the individual letter. Also, the way the letters are set up, the H should be making a shadow on about half of the A ect., etc...

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/022.jpg

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/019.jpg

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/017.jpg

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/016.jpg

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/015.jpg

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/014.jpg

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/013.jpg

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/011.jpg

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/010.jpg

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/002-1.jpg

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/001-2.jpg

gemer
12-16-2011, 01:15 AM
like to see the freestyles shell nice simples there comin along

BigBend
12-16-2011, 01:42 AM
aight thankx shell ill keep it in mind next time and yes they were deliberality drawn different like that

Wonky
12-16-2011, 07:02 AM
Working on my structure - this is supposed to be a simple, but I still fucked about with it. Worth inking? I kinda like it (it's pay day today!)
45600

centrysam
12-16-2011, 08:10 AM
@shell. like the 3rd pic
@wonky.. nice. would be better if bars wasnt broken so much

crits?

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7161/6517605297_ce4f765b82.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6517605297/)
Untitled (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6517605297/) by centrysams (http://www.flickr.com/people/70896708@N08/), on Flickr


http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7027/6517823347_198ebed0c2.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6517823347/)
Untitled (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6517823347/) by centrysams (http://www.flickr.com/people/70896708@N08/), on Flickr

Wonky
12-16-2011, 09:09 AM
Too many chips and breaks? Maybe i'll cut a few back - do they break letter structure? I like yours there sir, the second one looks sweet but I can't read it.

PETER
12-16-2011, 10:41 AM
bigbend: Using a pencil make 12 1"x1" boxes that are connected in a row (very ligthly). Then starting at black fade to white. Try to have a smooth even fade from one to the next with no hard pencil lines. Try holding the pencil under hand so you get more surface of the graphite on the paper.

SynOne
12-16-2011, 10:52 AM
I really need to stop rushing these... =/

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Phillip McDougall
12-16-2011, 11:24 AM
No, you just need to make cleaner lines. It's all practice.

Wonky
12-16-2011, 12:29 PM
What do you reckon to my sketch Phil? Went back to simpler style, and really worked hard on structural integrity... Too many breaks?

(I also accepted my place as toy ;) )

Phillip McDougall
12-16-2011, 01:01 PM
It's not that there are too many, there's too much space between your breaks. Make them less exaggerated, and it'll look better. Make your P bend like the Y. The A should be completed on the bottom, or else it looks like some weird letter that doesn't exist. And try not to sketch your letters. Use single, clean lines. It'll help you when you're painting, too.

Wonky
12-16-2011, 01:16 PM
Yeh I made some adjustments already - it's sketched because I was trying really hard to get structure right. I'm gonna rub it right back and go again in clean single lines. I have fixed the a, I might have to do some work on the curves. There is so much more to getting this shit looking just right than I realised. I now realise what a fucking toy I am lol

Wonky
12-16-2011, 01:31 PM
You think the chip on the bottom of the a curl needs to go and that should link?



45602

Now I inked the outline, I realize what you were saying about the breaks. I fucked up the Y because it doesn't look like one anymore...


45603

always crushin
12-16-2011, 05:29 PM
for the battle thread
http://i33.photobucket.com/albums/d99/-syke-/skws37.jpg

Wonky
12-16-2011, 06:03 PM
Coloured it - made a pigs ear of it. Looks shit. Still, i learnt how to balls up decent structure with breaks. Onwards and upwards.


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Tempo718
12-16-2011, 06:07 PM
45627
lil ruff draft warm up today. need to do this type stuff more often na mean.

wonky - not bad bad bro, drop the extra stuff for now. keep the letters solid.

crushin - allways unique

syn - you might try getting consistant letters before adding on color and 3d

Tempo718
12-16-2011, 06:14 PM
45637
tryin to get this shit right side up... wtf

Simon
12-16-2011, 10:08 PM
457194572045721
crits?

Mr.Hater_666
12-16-2011, 10:22 PM
That last kirsty is fresh

m4rsh
12-16-2011, 10:54 PM
ok, so i literally started learning graffiti about an hour and a half ago so dont expect perfection (ive seen so many pretentious and arrogant posts here from 'eletists')

but yeah, its pretty generic but i aint done it long enough to adopt my own style and flow yet

http://i44.tinypic.com/21eyp6o.jpg

EWL24
12-17-2011, 12:56 AM
crits please
45730
45731
^^ work in progress

"PHYSH"
12-17-2011, 12:08 PM
45920
a little something from Lebanon.....

SkateJunt
12-17-2011, 12:29 PM
lovin fuckin around with straights lately, the shadinf on the y is fucked a bit, and the left bar of the y kinda fucked up too, but any crits?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7027/6526504725_7185d73986.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6526504725/)
Picture 167 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6526504725/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

Phillip McDougall
12-17-2011, 12:38 PM
The R fucks up the flow. Chicken bone nowison.

SkateJunt
12-17-2011, 12:55 PM
yeah im not gonna do that extension on the r anymore, i was just trying it out. how are my other letters though?

Wonky
12-17-2011, 02:43 PM
Chicken Bone?

MN Nice
12-17-2011, 03:04 PM
http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00494-20111217-1357.jpg?t=1324152244

Wonky
12-17-2011, 03:17 PM
Tight as fuck MN

Phillip McDougall
12-17-2011, 04:59 PM
get some flow in there now.

SkateJunt
12-17-2011, 06:41 PM
exchange i did for my friend, pretty wonky but still any tips?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7026/6475034577_87b15c97b3.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6475034577/)
Picture 134 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6475034577/) by Stewart Stevenson (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

Wonky
12-17-2011, 06:51 PM
Fitted in three sketches today, not going to bother inking or colouring anything else until I get some structure and legibility going. I would like to inject some flow too, not sure when flow is not just breaking structure atm so trying to cut the shit out. Yesterday's effort was wank - especially when coloured (I fucked that right up)....



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Phat 2
12-17-2011, 07:13 PM
mn nice, top one is where it's at. go roll that up on some highway or a heaven spot somewhere. maybe find a well visible rooftop.. but props. not a fan of the bottom one. you got very similar things going on with ribcage where you two have a lottta edges and not enough curves so all your letters look kinda stiff and lack motion or fluidity...

EWL24
12-17-2011, 09:18 PM
MN - i really like the top one, u should give it some 3d now
Wonky - the last one is the best, but the K to S connection is really bad

wtf, why am i not getting any crits on mine?? can i get some crits now

Mori
12-17-2011, 11:23 PM
MN dope on the top. Would be fire with an outline and 3d. Roller steeze

Lado
12-17-2011, 11:31 PM
46066

MN Nice
12-18-2011, 01:22 AM
mn nice, top one is where it's at. go roll that up on some highway or a heaven spot somewhere. maybe find a well visible rooftop.. but props. not a fan of the bottom one. you got very similar things going on with ribcage where you two have a lottta edges and not enough curves so all your letters look kinda stiff and lack motion or fluidity...

The reason why it may seem like my shit looks like ribs is because I like how his work has great structure to his letters, so I wanted to make sure that I get a solid understanding of my bars before I try to add some funk to it. And after doing that and posting it on here to get some crits, people just assume i'm trying to jack his work and make it mine. But its not like that at all, if you were to look at any other of my works you would see that I'm trying to get my own steeze rollin. It'd be completely different story if everything I posted was similar to his. but hey, I'm toy and I'm just trying to learn. All writers flourish off each other as well as inspire others.

But thanks for all the good looks on the upper one guys, I probably will throw some 3d and an outline on, but should I do white 3d and a colored outline?

@Lado - if you did both of those, you have good structure but your extensions are not working well. That Lest piece would be great if the the bottom bars weren't barely hanging on and the Dotch one would be better if your D was a bit bigger to match the T and the extension on the H is breaking the flow. Keep sketching.

EWL24
12-18-2011, 01:37 AM
MN - white 3d and colored outline sounds like it would look really cool on that, but make sure u outline it with a bright color so it really pops

cwks
12-18-2011, 03:53 AM
46089460904609146092 buddys peices

EWL24
12-18-2011, 12:26 PM
^^well you can tell your buddy to start doing Keyboard letters cause those suck

Phillip McDougall
12-18-2011, 12:55 PM
Yo wake, the second one is the only good one. Use the structure from that to start making other letters. Keep developing that, and you'll have a solid idea for structure in no time. I really recommend doing an alphabet to be well rounded, but a lot of people just focus on the letters in their name.

Lado
12-18-2011, 02:38 PM
@Lado - if you did both of those, you have good structure but your extensions are not working well. That Lest piece would be great if the the bottom bars weren't barely hanging on and the Dotch one would be better if your D was a bit bigger to match the T and the extension on the H is breaking the flow. Keep sketching.

Word! Thanks a lot man, I wasn't too hot with the D on the dotch piece, but I really appreciate this.

EWL24
12-18-2011, 03:10 PM
bump for crits
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^^slightly changed the E and A
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Phat 2
12-18-2011, 03:23 PM
y u mad tho?
the proportions in the first one are off
and you really took your revenge in the second one... kinda went overboard with the curves didn't you? lol, I mean it ruined allll the letters there, I'm seeing random e's and P's and g's and o's in places they shouldn't be

SkateJunt
12-18-2011, 06:03 PM
what does it say? some more straightsssssss
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7165/6534076121_fe524ced23.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6534076121/)
Picture 168 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6534076121/) by Stewart Stevenson (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7034/6534075781_6cb38dd8a5.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6534075781/)
Picture 169 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6534075781/) by Stewart Stevenson (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

SynOne
12-18-2011, 06:09 PM
I dig this one. Crit it.

Mues - That top one is boss.

Wonky - Forget your instincts and trying to make it look good, do straights. Shit like SkateJunt is doing.

Skate - You're getting better, you just need more practice is all. It looks like you have the eye for even bars, it's just you can't really outline it well with a marker (I do this in every piece). You'll get better. Keep it up.

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SkateJunt
12-18-2011, 06:19 PM
thanks man, i like how that extension on the s looks. and sharpies arent the best for outlining, they dont flow at all on paper, and theyr just horrible overall, but im not trying to make excuses, i just dont take that much time on drawing straights, im just trying to get some nice letters that i can go and paint

SynOne
12-18-2011, 06:21 PM
The one I posted is actually on copy paper, outlined with a sharpie. I understand completely.

SkateJunt
12-18-2011, 06:31 PM
yeah on copy its a lil nicer, but on lined and graph paper its nasty, and thats a sick colour of sharpie, whered you find it?\edit: nevermind haha i have that coulour it was just deep under alot of papers

SynOne
12-18-2011, 06:35 PM
^ Just the outline is sharpie dude, the colors are prismas. I hate sharpies, but my blacks on my prismas are both more deceased than JFK.

SkateJunt
12-18-2011, 06:46 PM
i need to grab myself some propper paint markers, maybe il buy some if i get any cash for christmas

gemer
12-19-2011, 12:54 AM
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Tempo718
12-19-2011, 01:18 AM
thas wassup

MN Nice
12-19-2011, 01:28 AM
Crits would be appreciated.

http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00499-20111219-0026.jpg?t=1324276064

Mori
12-19-2011, 01:56 AM
That's destine for a heaven spot mn. I'd say go grab some buckets and let's see it painted mate. but consider taking the white around it instead of having a black outline and black fill. I think that will give the letters a little more readability. Overall that's a solid piece imo

MN Nice
12-19-2011, 02:02 AM
I was talking for the top piece but thanks anyways. I havent even tried a roller yet but I've always been into them.

EWL24
12-19-2011, 02:12 AM
is there a reason im not getting any Crits?? :mad:

MN - notice how ur MU are both leaning in the opposite direction of ur ESR, it would look better if they were all leaning in the same direction. But every thing else about it looks good, ur stuff is looking better every time

Tempo718
12-19-2011, 08:02 AM
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lil practice this morning.

@ewl - be patient you'll get ur crits, keep on bro

@MN - I like it, is this something ur testing out or been doin?

@germer - I see ya, nice letters

MN Nice
12-19-2011, 08:27 AM
@Ewl - I tried doing that actually lol make it seem like the M and the R and pulling away from each other

TastyMcNasty
12-19-2011, 09:03 AM
http://i1239.photobucket.com/albums/ff518/TastyMcNasty/Graffiti/IMG_2526.jpg

for nark

SynOne
12-19-2011, 02:47 PM
This was big fucking fail, was testing some shit. Not even going to finish it. But any tips on somethings that worked/why it didn't work?

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PETER
12-19-2011, 03:06 PM
Syn: The 3d is a little off. The curve on the R is the worst part of the 3d. I think the K/E is a bit odd. I like the E, but I think having it curve at the bottom and lean on the K would have worked a little better. The R doesn't seem to fit the style. It looks a bit more plain and has a lot of dead space under it where the rest of the piece has none. I wouldn't say a complete fail. You're getting better that's for sure.

SkateJunt
12-19-2011, 04:07 PM
came up with a new throw today, any crits?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7167/6539819453_019bd31b47.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6539819453/)
Picture 170 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6539819453/) by Stewart Stevenson (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

Wreck-one
12-19-2011, 04:32 PM
This was big fucking fail, was testing some shit. Not even going to finish it. But any tips on somethings that worked/why it didn't work?

46341It looks good, i just think the W is whats throwing it off.

Phillip McDougall
12-19-2011, 05:21 PM
came up with a new throw today, any crits?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7167/6539819453_019bd31b47.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6539819453/)
Picture 170 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6539819453/) by Stewart Stevenson (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

Try making your letters a little less lifeless. Think of a throw as a gang sign. You want it to be thrown up looking like, "AW FUCK YEAH," not like a limp dick. When I have a day that I'm not doing anything, I'll come into the Toy thread and do quickies to help people develop throwies, because throws are the hardest thing to make for yourself when you're a toy. I sucked SO hard at throws. haha.

SkateJunt
12-19-2011, 05:41 PM
thanks man, yeah i realize i need to put more flow into them, heres another straight for crits
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7012/6540254243_b80b478fa6.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6540254243/)
Picture 171 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6540254243/) by Stewart Stevenson (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

Phillip McDougall
12-19-2011, 05:44 PM
your base bars in the K and R are too thick. You want consistency.

TastyMcNasty
12-19-2011, 05:57 PM
http://i1239.photobucket.com/albums/ff518/TastyMcNasty/Graffiti/IMG_2526.jpg

for nark

bottom page bump, for crits

poisn
12-19-2011, 09:48 PM
46366 its one of my first.....any tips? i would be thankful

Sync1
12-19-2011, 11:55 PM
A lil something... trying some new stuff out and I was bored. =/ Tell me what you guys think! Please if you can give me any tips on improving and getting better I'd much appreciate it. C&C please! Thanks!

http://img214.imageshack.us/img214/3875/syncnew.jpg

EWL24
12-20-2011, 03:03 AM
Skate - why do u never fully color in ur pieces? dont u think it would look better if u took some time to completely fill it
Tasty - i think u should start making ur letters fatter so it doesnt look so long and skinny
Poisn - use bars and work with simple keyboard letters

colored this in today, crits are always welcome
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gemer
12-20-2011, 04:39 AM
@tasty styles there and all and structures pretty good but i think its sloppyyyyyyyy
@poisn wowww work on structure more.....do nice block letter just like you see on your keyboard
@sync pretty sweet man im diggen but then again im not..not sure wut it is but overall pretty dope
@ewal not diggen the a' but the rest is alright man keep em comin

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Tempo718
12-20-2011, 04:59 AM
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Revised over a few things.

Gemer - Nice sketchin'

Skate - That mos' recent one keep up on that, big difference

Tasty - Not feelin' it son

Poison&Syn - Jump on the alphabet keyboard letters bandwagon ma dudez.



Ewl&Sync - Nice colors n' all that but your letters could flow in a differnt way na mean.