Blackbooks

[SynOne]

Cool you don't like the handstyle. Not what im wanting crits on. How about critting the actual work Ffs.

Dave - Nice work. On the top one that E needs work. The bottom one that last letter which I think is a R. You can't even really tell what it is because it is so covered by the extra detailing and drips. I wouldn't have put that many drips between the left and right leg. It makes it blend to much. Bolden up that outline. You can tell you are putting in time on the work. Keep it up.

[Takeiteasy]

Rib and Syn, fuck you guys. Hahaha. You two are my inspiration. I will be biting everything you do from here on. Lulz. Pics from my ne piece tomorrow night.

[Takeiteasy]

Colors, I'm digging that Week piece. Good shit. Bars look clean.

[ribcage]

putting me and syn in the same sentence is an insult. Unless the sentence goes something like "rib has waaay bigger cock than syn." or "Syn sucks muthafuckin donkey dicks, rib though, he okay."

[SynOne]

^ Ayo fuck you lol. My shits getting cleaner and better. I'm improving.

[ribcage]

...clean? HA!

[BennyBoii]

putting me and syn in the same sentence is an insult. Unless the sentence goes something like "rib has waaay bigger cock than syn." or "Syn sucks muthafuckin donkey dicks, rib though, he okay."
i lol'd

[SynOne]

^ Yeah no shit I lol'd pretty hard too.

Ribcage - As I said "Cleaner" not clean. I know my shit's not clean. But I'm trying. At least I apply crits when they're given.

Bump for crits.


Crit them. My coloring skills are that of a 5 year old.. sorry.

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[Takeiteasy]

Rib, sorry I hurt your ego. Haha. I like Syn's shit in the sense of how far he's come. Shits looking good and I hope to be as good some day. Rib, your shit has also improved, but you're nasty. You've certainly found yourself and your style. I'm envious and happy for you. I sure hope to some day be in your shoes. I've got drawing to do. Haha.

[MN Nice]

lol the man to man love is heavy tonight. Little kids on a big boy jock.

[Takeiteasy]

lol the man to man love is heavy tonight. Little kids on a big boy jock. Hahaha. Shut up before I bite your shit aka Ribs shit. J/k. Hahaha.

[MN Nice]

Fuck off. That shits dead and doesn't even involve you. Rib pointed it out and I fixed it.

[H1P30N3R]

these guys lol... man i miss all the cats that use to post when i first joined .This place is dead now days

[Takeiteasy]

Dude, I was seriously only joking. I don't mean to offend. Just being a ball buster. Just like its been said before, I know my place. Just trying to have some fun. That's all man.

[MN Nice]

Trolled :cool:

[Phat 2]

Hahaha. Shut up before I bite your shit aka Ribs shit. J/k. Hahaha.
rofl take it easy, takeiteasy

[SynOne]

^ Nah cmon mues we know you bit the Fuck outa him on purpose.

Wait this isn't toy chat. Let's get some crits n flicks rolling in this bitch so we can improve before we die.

[Takeiteasy]

For sure. Haha. Now piss off, I've got writing to do. Haha. Actually, I'm moving. I've got packing to do when I wake up. New shit to come soon.

[Takeiteasy]

^ Nah cmon mues we know you bit the Fuck outa him on purpose.

Wait this isn't toy chat. Let's get some crits n flicks rolling in this bitch so we can improve before we die. Point taken. Word.

[MN Nice]

^ Nah cmon mues we know you bit the Fuck outa him on purpose.

Wait this isn't toy chat. Let's get some crits n flicks rolling in this bitch so we can improve before we die.

lol like you should talk, you can't even get a clean tag yet.

pic for talk

http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00464-20111127-0209.jpg?t=1322381636

[Beko]

i realy like these colors! crits please!
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[pocket]

beko, either don't use the same silver for the 3D lines if you're going to use it for the letter outline, or just have less 3d lines.

[sadgeh]

Beko -thats many silver.

And more flicks instead of talking guys.

[knowtheledge]

http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/attachment.php?attachmentid=42574&d=1322388408

beko, try spacing out your letters by giving em some more room and not so much overlap..and as a generic crit keep the bar widths consistent and post more outlines first

tryna get more pics up in here since most of these toy threads are dead

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7147/6412901569_aed6f7d650_z.jpg

[Takeiteasy]

At first glance I thought you wrote "Nrike" Haha. Shit is sick.

[SynOne]

Knowtheledge - Drop some 3d on that. It'd look sick with a light colored fill.

Mues - I was messing with ya. But no doubt I haven't put any time in my tag. I should get one down instead of pieces and throwies.

[knowtheledge]

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7032/6415731117_9bda2bbc9f_z.jpg

my m looks like an st.. stuke yo!

[Strange Journeys]

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did a canvas with savek a while ago, didnt like what i did so i went over it with this Crits please!
i have some shitty bars and the extensions are wierd, maybe because of lack of space

beko do some simple fills for now, thats ugly
damn muke you got some weird stuff i dont even know what to crit, define your m i guess

[Mori]

that bottom one burns

[ribcage]

idk about burns, but it scrapes yours strange. too much negative space on your d and b

@knowledge, extension and add on look awful

[dave the pirate]

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[SynOne]

Crit them. My coloring skills are that of a 5 year old.. sorry.

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Yet again. Bump for some crits. And ffs. Don't crit the handstyle. I know it's bad.

[dave the pirate]

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[SynOne]

Dave that shit is nice. I'd say the arrows on the N do not work though. And on the character. Normally you seem to make your K a character or something. And I don't see it this time. Where is that K at bro?

[dave the pirate]

on the dudes hat

[spiltink]

this is the first time i ever done style like this

http://dl.dropbox.com/u/13341191/a/100_2564.JPG

[spiltink]

this is the first time i ever done style like this

http://dl.dropbox.com/u/13341191/a/100_2564.JPG

[always crushin]

http://i33.photobucket.com/albums/d99/-syke-/skws21.jpg

[SkateJunt]

any crits on these?
http://farm7.staticflickr.com/6223/6419456449_a7a001c63a.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6419456449/)
Picture 113 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6419456449/) by SkateJunt (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7011/6419456779_1da0021be2.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6419456779/)
Picture 115 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6419456779/) by SkateJunt (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7003/6419456635_2339176e75.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6419456635/)
Picture 114 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6419456635/) by SkateJunt (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

[always crushin]

dope shit in here
Just finished a sketched i started a few days ago.
http://i33.photobucket.com/albums/d99/-syke-/skws21.jpg
http://i33.photobucket.com/albums/d99/-syke-/skws23.jpg
older one
http://i33.photobucket.com/albums/d99/-syke-/skws24.jpg

[SynOne]

Crushing - Your style is ILLLL. But one thing I've noticed in all of your pieces. Your L always seems to be too hidden or crammed into the S to much.

Skate - Drop that R/K/Whatthefuckeverthatis. And look down at your keyboard. Draw those letters.

Dave - I see the K now. But that damn sure looks like a R. Probably just picture quality fucked that up.

[SkateJunt]

yup i know. I draw so many dam straights every day, no use in posting those, they all look almost the same, I like to experiment too. Il never get anywhere if i dont, for instance, I drew that R and i now know that doesnt work

[SynOne]

Do simples. Look at the way some of the users post pieces that are simple letters. And yet they still have flow and what not. Ribcage is by far the best in Toy Forums I've seen at simples. Start doing those. But make sure you understand how your letter structure works before you start them. Or they WILL look fucked.

[SkateJunt]

thanks, yeah ribcages simps are smoooth as hell, i see what your saying, I need to work on flow, i kinda forget that sometimes

[dave the pirate]

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[dave the pirate]

Diver

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[SynOne]

Got around to coloring this one. Crit it

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Dave - Nice fresh shit. Watch the 3D though. It's off in a couple spots.

[TBS]

Dave, im lovin that second piece. Just needs a lil tweakin in a few places. First piece is good too though a little too much going on for my liking.
Skewt, keep an eye on the width of your bars.

No pics im afraid. Spent all day playing with my new phone.

[Shit Outta Luck]

Just some sketch I did in class...I'm trying to understand some things, and trying to understand what I want to become.
And yeah, the 3d and all the other shit are supposed to be off like they are...I was messing around

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[Norfsuthr]

dave looking nice

http://farm7.staticflickr.com/6050/6428651651_90fdedfc94.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/52108332@N02/6428651651/)
oie_3041152OxG2iSgZ (http://www.flickr.com/photos/52108332@N02/6428651651/)

[knowtheledge]

illin ^

http://farm7.staticflickr.com/6227/6311575398_a20fbd6808.jpg

http://farm7.staticflickr.com/6236/6311052003_59c62389b6.jpg

http://farm7.staticflickr.com/6230/6314474928_6a9026db6a.jpg

http://farm7.staticflickr.com/6051/6313957329_2f5356dd4c.jpg

[SynOne]

Knowtheledge - Not feeling that last one. But the 2nd to last one. Needs to be finished.

[Tempo718]

yes, dont fuckin triple post.

said I wasnt gonna finish, but I did. fucked my sharpie freebie hella bad, couldnt fit an H, and the R and C are doodoo
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looks dope was your vagina moist after it was finished? jk

[Tempo718]

Tempo. You need to keep that shit simple or there's ganna be no improvement. O and yes use letter structure
cant face the truth is the tip of the iceberg

[pocket]

Got around to coloring this one. Crit it

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I like it man, the W is a little straight and boring compared to the others.

[ohsogreasy]

my black loptop counts as a blackbook right? here's something I did in a facebook battle recently, the 3d was done in photoshop, thats it. http://i1103.photobucket.com/albums/g468/funkyabstract/gotra.jpg

and here's this

http://i1103.photobucket.com/albums/g468/funkyabstract/zealot343jpg.jpg


**ALSO if anyone wants to do a full collab I'm looking for a partner to do like a black/white prodo with, so holler!

[SkateJunt]

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7142/6433309351_e319e7e4ed.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6433309351/)
Picture 116 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6433309351/) by SkateJunt (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7172/6433308579_0f0b9155aa.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6433308579/)
Picture 118 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6433308579/) by SkateJunt (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
this one wack as hell, but postin anyway, for my homie RESM, drew it in like 5 minutes in class
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7145/6433307739_b3fa8e0fbe.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6433307739/)
Picture 117 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6433307739/) by SkateJunt (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

[Beko]

crits please! the k's leg may need some shortening up on the bottom.
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[OctoVenom]

Props to everyone. Just keep at it dont give up. And your style will come natuarly trust me. Peace out whoop whoop

[sanberdoo]

http://i128.photobucket.com/albums/p197/SKECHBARRERA/CIMG5247.jpg
wazzah! ha

[SynOne]

Beko, your letters are overlapping to much, give them some room to breathe.

[Svc]

hey im back, been about a year or so since ive been here, heres some of the latest
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[PETER]

Beko. Take it easy, don't press so hard with the pencil. (it's easier to erase and fix, it doesn't leave "carbon copies" in the pages below it.) Your curved letters tend to get bulbous in parts for now try and keep them even. For example the bottom of the B and O. The center of the B where the two curved portions meet is a bit too thick. Try making it the width of the bar from the top. Keep it up.

[SkateJunt]

how are my straights lookin?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7035/6439216277_ab5174080b.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6439216277/)
Picture 120[/url[url=http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6439386953/]http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7024/6439386953_a8ec05f278.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6439216277/)
Picture 121 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6439386953/) by SkateJunt (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr] by SkateJunt (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

[sadgeh]

Looking like crap! The bar consistency is everywhere different, comon you must do straights like a real mafakka, check your keyboard.

[PETER]

Naked exchange. crits for improvement?43676

[SkateJunt]

more simps, didnt bother with 3d, and sadgeh ive been drawing my keyboard for the past 3 weeks, im trying to tweak the letters a bit
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7163/6443248599_6fb0a0bd19.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6443248599/)
Picture 122 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6443248599/) by SkateJunt (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

[Phat 2]

need some serious crits from the serious and respectable boys on here (you mans know who you are)
this baby's planned to go on a sweet highway spot i got this sunday, gonna be about 115 ft. long (letters are gonna be hand-reaching height) and filled in with chrome

https://fbcdn-sphotos-a.akamaihd.net/hphotos-ak-snc7/375252_323940257632890_100000507545549_1244831_147 8960100_n.jpg

hit me

[always crushin]

just posting here cuz i dunno give yall something to look at?
http://i33.photobucket.com/albums/d99/-syke-/skws28.jpg

[TBS]

Phat, just fuckin blast it out. Something that big's guna be awesome anyway. Only thing i'd say is space the letters out a little bit more. That is all!!

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[Lado]

need some serious crits from the serious and respectable boys on here (you mans know who you are)
this baby's planned to go on a sweet highway spot i got this sunday, gonna be about 115 ft. long (letters are gonna be hand-reaching height) and filled in with chrome

https://fbcdn-sphotos-a.akamaihd.net/hphotos-ak-snc7/375252_323940257632890_100000507545549_1244831_147 8960100_n.jpg

hit me

I'm not one of those guys, I don't think, but I think 'karma' could use a little tweaking to flow a little bit better, and the 'R' in 'Absorbing' can be defined a little bit more. Try making the look bigger and bring the leg back a little bit. These crits aren't too important, it'll look sweet no matter what. There was a huge highway piece in Jersey a while ago, I forget exactly but I think it was something like "Destroy-create-rebuild" or something like that. Looking forward to flicks of the finished product.

[ribcage]

dont bring the middle of the m to the ground, bring it up a tad like where that bar crosses the a, give it more negative space, and watch those bar widths (A's & K's particulary look bad). There arent enough cracks either, makes it look like just a bunch of fucked up lines imo, doesnt really give it that cracked effect unless you use the perfect amount

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[tra_kind_liar]

single "radical" vanishing point... i do not have color markers.. im waiting on jolly old saint consumerist (santa) to bring me some 43740

[askew]

I've recently started doing some handstyles and working on a name. I finally settled on ENDS, but made the mistake of showing people the sketches of them etc. I have a couple other names I have in mind, and am wondering if I should change my name. Also, I have a picture of a couple quick handstyles of 3 different names looking for crits, etc.43743

[tra_kind_liar]

I've recently started doing some handstyles and working on a name. I finally settled on ENDS, but made the mistake of showing people the sketches of them etc. I have a couple other names I have in mind, and am wondering if I should change my name. Also, I have a picture of a couple quick handstyles of 3 different names looking for crits, etc.43743

looks good.. go crazier + tie things together.. work out side your comfort zone...

[EWL24]

tra kind liar - im sorry but that looks horrible i cant make out one letter, u need to just work on Key Board letter right now
askew - do not go crazier, and those should be in the toy tags thread, not here.
both u guys should also go check out the new to graffiti forum since u are both just starting

[tra_kind_liar]

tra kind liar - im sorry but that looks horrible i cant make out one letter, u need to just work on Key Board letter right now
askew - do not go crazier, and those should be in the toy tags thread, not here.
both u guys should also go check out the new to graffiti forum since u are both just starting

wait wait... i was just doing random shapes, i didnt do letters..... well damn.. is this feed just for letters?

[MN Nice]

This is graffiti. Rarely you'll find 3d pieces but otherwise yes, its letter based. And hold back on giving advice.

[EWL24]

wait wait... i was just doing random shapes, i didnt do letters...
oh... well next time tell people it doesnt say anything

[TBS]

Couple unfinished things, crits would be appreciated...
http://i1181.photobucket.com/albums/x433/Stuedingwall4298/cc8f27de.jpg
http://i1181.photobucket.com/albums/x433/Stuedingwall4298/6f4d447a.jpg
http://i1181.photobucket.com/albums/x433/Stuedingwall4298/ebc3f156.jpg

[ribcage]

the B and E on the second one is the only thing I like. what happened to the steaz like form your last battle entries?

some bullshit
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[SynOne]

Phat I know I'm not one of those respectable men. So I'm not going to really crit it. But one thing I noticed was that the N in Absorbing seemed to be hidden to much.

[Colors]

tempo do simple things like this.
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[Phat 2]

haha syn, I didn't mean to say that you're not respectable, I was just referring to the guys that have a bit more experience in this stuff, coz their comments are usually more accurate and useful..
anyway, we painted that piece today and it was fucking exhausting, it's a highway spot, and the thing is MONSTROUS really. it's so big, I couldn't fit the whole thing in one photo despite the fact that I crossed the road to take the flick. I ended up taking a lotta consecutive flicks which I'm gonna stick together.
will post the thing once I get the patience and physical strength to use photoshop again...
thanks for the input though everyone

[dmot_snts]

looking for some feedback, much appreciated. Still a toy, but working hard.

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[SynOne]

I tried to do like a 3d crack ordeal in this. But I was so blunted I went with too many cracks so... I fucked that one up.

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[ribcage]

that T is garbage. and you've used it in the last 3 shits you posted

[dmot_snts]

syonone one 3d will look better, get rid of the 3d for the outline. The E and W look ok, play with those letters, just go crazy with them.
I tried to do like a 3d crack ordeal in this. But I was so blunted I went with too many cracks so... I fucked that one up.

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[Tempo718]

haha syn, I didn't mean to say that you're not respectable, I was just referring to the guys that have a bit more experience in this stuff, coz their comments are usually more accurate and useful..
anyway, we painted that piece today and it was fucking exhausting, it's a highway spot, and the thing is MONSTROUS really. it's so big, I couldn't fit the whole thing in one photo despite the fact that I crossed the road to take the flick. I ended up taking a lotta consecutive flicks which I'm gonna stick together.
will post the thing once I get the patience and physical strength to use photoshop again...
thanks for the input though everyone
wtf g that sig is comedy as hell lolz

smot dmot?- thazz kinah toy but at same time it like dope

[SynOne]

Looking for some crits on this before I ink it up. I think I need to make the K smaller. The 3d missing on the W is already fixed. Didn't notice before I posted.

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[Tempo718]

need some serious crits from the serious and respectable boys on here (you mans know who you are)
this baby's planned to go on a sweet highway spot i got this sunday, gonna be about 115 ft. long (letters are gonna be hand-reaching height) and filled in with chrome

https://fbcdn-sphotos-a.akamaihd.net/hphotos-ak-snc7/375252_323940257632890_100000507545549_1244831_147 8960100_n.jpg

hit me
I understand that u never post in here g but anyway that is a nice share n' on the real, good concept, unseen 2 me, nice touch
AYO Phat question for you since I gotchu readin n ish do mathematics ever come into putting up a piece?

[ribcage]

@syn lay down 2 horizontal lines before you sketch, cause the ewt is like a half inch higher than the rest. Then look at all your bar widths and make them consistant( whole T, top of E, top of S, bottom of S). Then look at the negative space of all your letters, the worst part is the space between the K and E at the top, find a way to get rid of that.

[SynOne]

Ribcage - Agreed with the letters being higher up. But one thing. The bars I purposely made them uneven. Like thin to thicker.

[ribcage]

looks like shit, it goes from thin to deformed, not thinner to thicker. that extension on top of the E also looks like shit. your 3d is also fucked up in some places

[MN Nice]

I like that syn. Your improving. Get a little more funk with your W.

Crits? Not so sure about the cuts in my bars.

http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00468-20111204-1648.jpg?t=1323043285

[ribcage]

erase the M, move it to the left, and then make it so your U isnt hidden. you got a bunch of space to the left on that page, so use it

[SkateJunt]

i like it but maybe make both parts on the bottom of the M the same
andy crits on this?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7158/6456191523_005c21444c.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6456191523/)
Picture 123 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6456191523/) by SkateJunt (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

[MN Nice]

Ok seriously. Are you outlining your letters in pencil and then going over in sharpie, or are you just doing it freestyle with a sharpie? I find it hard to believe for someone who can't even make straight letters. Break down your letters into bars.

[TBS]

the B and E on the second one is the only thing I like. what happened to the steaz like form your last battle entries?
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i'm guessing you mean the Kemos one? now that i look at it that Tiger one i sent you is rather shite.. Fuck knows to be honest.. just trying some new shit i guess. will blast out something half decent tomorrow. whole fucking day off! GET IN!

[ribcage]

thats sweet, day offs are always fun... i get to wake up @ 330. And yes, i meant the kemos one. o and its you vs extinct in the last round of the round robin, so hit him up and decide on a battle

[dest1]

sup guys, first time postin pics, just a quick sketch im playin wit, any crits are apreciated, ill be colorin it later tonight so sorry for the light pencil lines. (thinking of a limeish green fade to a yellow that ends about halfwayup but still has a yellowish inline around most the letter, with probally a grey letter outline..not really good with 3d yet so ill prolly leave that off.)

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[dest1]

handy i been gettin up with..
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sketch im about to color (yellow/greens,white,grey outline)
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some other ishhh...
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[MN Nice]

Moved my M over

http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00471-20111204-1920.jpg?t=1323048165

Good shit Des! All around skill on your stuff.

[ribcage]

and it looks better. those inside lines tho, your overusing them, and some are in the wrong place. id take em out or only use 1 per letter. i used to try that shit and everytime i did it i regretted it...

[dest1]

thanks mues..yah try cutting down on those inside cut lines,use them in spots where it comes to a point but not more than once a letter(or a bar)until u get a little more control in your letters.

[MN Nice]

and it looks better. those inside lines tho, your overusing them, and some are in the wrong place. id take em out or only use 1 per letter. i used to try that shit and everytime i did it i regretted it...

I'm getting that feeling too. I just thought I'd give it a shot after seeing this Sufer piece like on his R, but I'll prolly just scrap it.

http://www.globalgraphica.com/main/archives/sufer.jpg

[dest1]

I'm getting that feeling too. I just thought I'd give it a shot after seeing this Sufer piece like on his R, but I'll prolly just scrap it.

http://www.globalgraphica.com/main/archives/sufer.jpg

i looks dope, but notice he did it only once? not over-doing those things is the key. i make the same mistake all the time.

[ribcage]

lol theres some major differences, and reasons why and why not to use those cuts. In your case, a straight letter, with no movement, you have no need for those cuts. The reason why he put that cut there is to imply the movent from the top of the curve bar to the kick, also making it all one bar ya dig?
the only reason why he use it once is becuase thats the only spot that called for it

[dest1]

lol theres some major differences, and reasons why and why not to use those cuts. In your case, a straight letter, with no movement, you have no need for those cuts. The reason why he put that cut there is to imply the movent from the top of the curve bar to the kick, also making it all one bar ya dig?

truth..

[SynOne]

Round 2. Still not even close to perfect. Crit it.

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[ribcage]

top bar of E sucks, top bar of T is lackin on the left side, make it mirror the right, and make it the same width. K and W are obese looking, top bar of S is weird, and the W and T still sit lowe than the rest... theirs now a weird space in between the W's outside bars, make the middle part go up higher, and maybe make those outside bars at a sharper angle. peace

[Hapa]

I realize how much of a toy I am but im just lookin for any feedback on a couple ideas

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[Hapa]

and i know how gay that arrow looks and the pencil hapa sketch is half assed

[PETER]

Hapa that 3d one isn't bad dude. Add a light source and shadows and it's pretty solid. good practice.

[ghostwriter]

happpa dat sque is lookin goood

[PETER]

Naked exchange. crits for improvement?43676
bump for crits

[SynOne]

Gone.

[SynOne]

Lol'd.

[ribcage]

well im not lol'ing. im disgusted, I try to help you, and this is how you do me? fuckin ridiculous

[SynOne]

Lol Calm down Leonardo I took it down. It was more of just testing shit. I had absolutely no idea how to cover for all the dead space in the W.

[ribcage]

you mean it was just bitting my shit and see how it would look on your sketch? IF you have no idea how to do something, you shoud ask, not bite.

[SynOne]

Check ya pm's.

[Phat 2]

I understand that u never post in here g but anyway that is a nice share n' on the real, good concept, unseen 2 me, nice touch
AYO Phat question for you since I gotchu readin n ish do mathematics ever come into putting up a piece?
I didn't really get that... what do you mean math? Like you sure need to know basic geometry... but if you're talking about actual algebra? what does that have to do with anything?

[SkateJunt]

just fuckin around with throwies, crits?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7155/6463181221_743b4d8b54.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6463181221/)
Picture 125 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6463181221/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

[Mr. November]

Better than your last sketches, but still very shitty/toy bro.

I like that you practice a lot though. That kind of determination will get you somewhere. Hopefully.

[dave the pirate]

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[Phat 2]

you seem like you got some cool stuff. but you always go extra nuts wtih the coloring. i say calm down a little and let your letters show for a change. honestly, whenever i see your flicks, i just scroll down them fast without stopping for fear of getting a headache because of the mess

[SkateJunt]

nother one
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7010/6463434949_1727d60b3e.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6463434949/)
Picture 126 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6463434949/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

[dave the pirate]

[QUOTE=Phat 2;1762535]you seem like you got some cool stuff. but you always go extra nuts wtih the coloring. i say calm down a little and let your letters show for a change. honestly, whenever i see your flicks, i just scroll down them fast without stopping for fear of getting a headache because of the mess[QUOTE]

Different strokes for different folks i guess dude

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[Hapa]

Just some sketches with a different style..just tryin shit out. Crits?

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and i know i should probably move that U in on the second one

[Walt]

it was a battle for another forum. crits?

http://i627.photobucket.com/albums/tt354/bifflishus/DSCN1551.jpg

[chen]

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[centrysam]

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7144/6461092645_cef2c64537.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6461092645/)
Untitled (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6461092645/) by centrysams (http://www.flickr.com/people/70896708@N08/), on Flickr

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7142/6455105521_a6db46e079.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6455105521/)
Untitled (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6455105521/) by centrysams (http://www.flickr.com/people/70896708@N08/), on Flickr

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7030/6466903797_5ce7d67d04.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6466903797/)
Untitled (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6466903797/) by centrysams (http://www.flickr.com/people/70896708@N08/), on Flickr

[spher]

i think after looking at these im more then toy ... :(

[Strange Journeys]

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humr that first ones tight except for the R, it looks like down syndrome, and the left extens on the M, and that 3rd flick i dont feel at all
oats is aight nice and simple, i wouldnt vote for it in a battle though
hapa- idk what im looking at those skinny bars connecting everything should go away
kryl- keep practicing i guess, nothing really stands out

crit me yall, this is going on a prodo on saturday, pics later
i screwed up the 3d width in some parts, i know

[MN Nice]

In my opinion, I think you should cut some negative space in your D and straighten out your T to flow with the rest of your letters. Interesting style though.

[Tempo718]

this man wrote WORD lol

[Tempo718]

I didn't really get that... what do you mean math? Like you sure need to know basic geometry... but if you're talking about actual algebra? what does that have to do with anything?
basically what I mean by that is when your looking at a spot and you see what your gonna write in your head, trying to picture it before comming out with the cans, does math come apart of
what goes in to when your peice.

[MN Nice]

this man wrote WORD lol

What?

[Strange Journeys]

In my opinion, I think you should cut some negative space in your D and straighten out your T to flow with the rest of your letters. Interesting style though.

yeah i feel you on the T, i feel like it has to have the bend though for it to flow, but ya it is weird looking, thansk though. i learned i cant really do traditional piecing styles, so imma fuck with this for a while

[MN Nice]

Just a suggestion for the T maybe, Make it capital and have extensions on both sides coming down from the top bar that curve out. Like on the top of your DEB, when you change directions, the bars flush out so maybe it could make the T more uniform.

I feel as though I might have fucked up my thought but maybe not lol

[Strange Journeys]

i get what your saying, ill try it on the nex one that sounds tight

[dest1]

handy i been gettin up with..
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sketch im about to color (yellow/greens,white,grey outline)
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some other ishhh...
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bumping for crits...

[chen]

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[Shit Outta Luck]

Just tried some guys name I saw up. K is a little small but the whole thing is kinda small so that's probably why.
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[SkateJunt]

looking better?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7023/6474290033_9527ef8606.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290033/)
Picture 128 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290033/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7010/6474290137_3ce48a1229.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290137/)
Picture 129 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290137/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7145/6474290237_56c1f17bba.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290237/)
Picture 127 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290237/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7153/6474290375_2b071926e0.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290375/)
Picture 130 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290375/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
tried to come up with a one liner
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7015/6474290615_5feeac0e52.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290615/)
Picture 131 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6474290615/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

[EWL24]

Sol - i like it, but the bottom bar of the E could have been smoother and i would have connected the two parts of the K
did this yesterday, i dont really like my E or W but i think the rest turned out ok
crits please
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[PETER]

playing with ideas for an exchange. Just started doodling with a purple paint marker and liked it so I outlined in sharpie.
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[freekofart]

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new "freek" sketches

[SneeZ]

cant read the first one, and the second one needs more arrows, definitely.

[sadgeh]

There is standing Freek on both sketches. But the second one is too hectic.

[Beko]

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i kinda like the flares! what do yall think?

[MN Nice]

What'd be nice is to make your E lower case, then have the tail flare up behind the loop. Yeahhhh.

[Norfsuthr]

A bit too high to focus...
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7020/6480266739_b8ab3f3829.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/52108332@N02/6480266739/)
oie_953833LDXi6xxY (http://www.flickr.com/photos/52108332@N02/6480266739/)

[H1P30N3R]

props norf big fan of your style

[smokeitup]

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i kinda like the flares! what do yall think?

i dont

[Tempo718]

I gots not alot of room 2 talk. anybody who dont understand what a bar is,
ask. You guys this site is a tool, use all the legit advice found here, crits
are cool i guess, but you'll get more from this site than just crits if you're
able to take the time and find whats useful. Bomb sci still beats the crap
out've facebook IMO. pz

[SkateJunt]

better?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7144/6482379789_530c6b731e.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6482379789/)
Picture 136 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6482379789/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

[sadgeh]

no.

[Coleo]

lol

[RES4]

yo phat does this piece read as "aspek"

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trying to do an arabic piece but not sure if it still reads correctly

[Norfsuthr]

Looks like Illjal..

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7162/6484047367_fc7cca97f6.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/52108332@N02/6484047367/)
oie_1001719HoAesb2C (http://www.flickr.com/photos/52108332@N02/6484047367/)

[Colors]

the 2 stickers of suck. crits on the naked and nak?
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[Phat 2]

yo phat does this piece read as "aspek"

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trying to do an arabic piece but not sure if it still reads correctly

yes it does, although you messed up on the S... you should'nt have made it look as if it was 2 separated objects. get rid of the separation thingy so that the letter looks like one whole letter. the way it is now, it looks like 2 separate letters which a regular arabic reader would see as ADLPEK.
but I gotta give you huge props on that... you're getting it down pretty fast

[Mr. November]

I mean I like the stickers.. But why would you put so much work into something that's just going to be peeled off the next day. If it's in a good spot it probably will.

[Colors]

it didnt take that much time haha. and it might last who knows

[EWL24]

Bumping for crits
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and stickers dont always get peeled off that fast. i have a sticker that has been up since 09, but i hope it gets peeled off soon cause thats about when i first started, so its fucking horrible haha :D

[psykonaught]

Album of my black book

Here (http://flic.kr/s/aHsjxgCKK4)

[RES4]

yes it does, although you messed up on the S... you should'nt have made it look as if it was 2 separated objects. get rid of the separation thingy so that the letter looks like one whole letter. the way it is now, it looks like 2 separate letters which a regular arabic reader would see as ADLPEK.
but I gotta give you huge props on that... you're getting it down pretty fast

thanks, the s is the u shaped thing and the bit to the right of it?

[smokeitup]

Album of my black book

Here (http://flic.kr/s/aHsjxgCKK4)

http://www.flickr.com/photos/64489485@N04/6485923847/in/set-72157628356043581

hahaha i wouldnt post flicks with my face in them, but thats just me.

[RES4]

^http://www.fempop.com/wordpress/wp-content/uploads/2011/05/Steve-Buscemi-8.jpeg
lol

[psykonaught]

meh no scanner at 4 am.... ish happens lol

[Phat 2]

thanks, the s is the u shaped thing and the bit to the right of it?

yeah exactly, it's what norfsuthr described as the J and A

[centrysam]

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7009/6487870233_01218408ba.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6487870233/)
Untitled (http://www.flickr.com/photos/70896708@N08/6487870233/) by centrysams (http://www.flickr.com/people/70896708@N08/), on Flickr

[cwks]

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[MTK]

U need to fix those faces a lil but that first one os pretty simple and good. Thar second one is the one I like nut work on hands cuz they looks like trash

[Colors]

Crit this before i do anything permanant to it?
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[kapi]

crits please.. few sketches in my black book, trying out different throwies etc.
tell me what i should fix.
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[SkateJunt]

tryin to work out a new throw, heres a rough one, any crits on the general throw? i know the lines are rough, sharpies are a bitch, I was drawing in my bed, and i still need work.
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7034/6493039189_e74812a402.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6493039189/)
Picture 152 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6493039189/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

[Beko]

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7022/6496373739_f3385d437a_z.jpg

the charo came out whack! but th eltters came out decent.... the colors bother me/: crits pleasee!

[Coleo]

^ ehh

[Krav]

Colors- like the stickers, but try branching into your own style
Cwks- Love the character and the letters in the first one, work on your letter structure in the second one though

[Krav]

Kapi- love your work and your style. Keep it up.
SkateJunt- Looks pretty good, Just clean up the 3d effect a bit and your sig at the bottom looks a little forced, let it flow man

[Krav]

Peter- That purple burns man, good job.
Freekofart (which i read as freako fart)- Hell yeah man, this is the stuff I like to see and inspires me to keep writing. I would just add some thickness to your sig because it kinda gets lost in the shuffle of awesomeness your shit puts out.

[cwks]

Colors- like the stickers, but try branching into your own style
Cwks- Love the character and the letters in the first one, work on your letter structure in the second one though
the second one was my buddy doing a peacie for fun under my character

[cwks]

4496744968449694497044971 crits on these ones plz

[Beko]

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7022/6496373739_f3385d437a_z.jpg

the charo came out whack! but th eltters came out decent.... the colors bother me/: crits pleasee!

bump for crits! this is one of my cleanner ones! any feedback?

[ribcage]

looks awful.

[MN Nice]

When you're trying to advance your work, you may miss the fact that your bars get fucked up. Keep playing around with your straights and bars and work off what you excel at.

[ribcage]

this fool has mad burners, listen to him

[Beko]

i alwasy try to take in whatever anyone has to offer! well as long as it sounds correct! but i thought my bars were pretty acceptable? the k is a little off i thought.

[MN Nice]

Nah, the letters were weak all around.

[ribcage]

the K, E, and O all have fucked up bars. the B is the only letter that is acceptable as far as simps go

[cwks]

4496744968449694497044971 crits on these ones plz any crits?

[Phat 2]

boy I'm no meteorologist but I'm pretty sure it's been raining toys this month

[PETER]

Beko: I suggest not bending the leg of your K like that it makes it look like a horrible B. That B is an improvement over your last one. You are getting a firmer grip on structure. Try going straight. No bend to your letters for a little bit (like the E and K anyway).

[Phillip McDougall]

boy I'm no meteorologist but I'm pretty sure it's been raining toys this month
.

[cwks]

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[sadgeh]

Whats that by the T there?

[sadgeh]

That it must be in the throwies thread! But its not very fine readable too much squares for a throw

[PETER]

Ted Theodore Logan!

[Colors]

Crit this
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[sadgeh]

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On the third i fucked up the 3D but how can i improve that under the O's?

[Wonky]

So, I tried to do something less gay, but it's still pretty gay. I'll keep trying innit

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[BigBend]

Wonky- might wanna go a bit simpler. Anyway heres a quick sketch i did today at work
http://i43.tinypic.com/rlb70h.jpg

[Coleo]

nice^^^

[mace2200]

the "oo" on the second to last one looks kinda weird but i like it

[mace2200]

@ wonky, it would look sooo much better wit different colors, and its good.... i like the character
@bigbend, mind=blown

[Norfsuthr]

Naked- I like your AK but the N is too open or too big idk and the E isnt sexy.

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7008/6508756089_13b5c305c0.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/52108332@N02/6508756089/)
oie_144378OTVIVGlW (http://www.flickr.com/photos/52108332@N02/6508756089/)

[gemer]

freestyle pencil
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freestyle
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[gemer]

@colors pretty good structure im diggen it nice simple just not diggen the color man
@rook not diggen them extensions man go more simple
@norfsuthr not really liken it man the seconed letter i cant even tell what it iss lol and the n' is alright until the extension at the end noo flow no affence just tryna help you out

[BigBend]

yeah sick character man.
A sketch i done as a race against the clock to see how fast i could draw it and color
http://i43.tinypic.com/2en56s2.jpg

[Norfsuthr]

^I posted it to get crits no worries. It says YZEN. The extension on the end isn't actually an extension, it's a capital N. Thanks I'll keep workin with it.

I think your A gets too fat for the other letters, and the R could be better.Really diggin your ME though.

Oh and work on those handstyles man..

[MN Nice]

Nice char's!

[Mr. November]

Dude Gemer you have some awesome skills. Loving those characters dude.

[gemer]

^^haha thanx man
heres a freestyle i was doin kinda got off topic with the flow and just said fuck it
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[gemer]

damn my letters got smaller too :/ fuck it ill keep postin

[Coleo]

^nicceeeeeee

[gemer]

thanks dude

[SynOne]

Top of my S is awkward, and some of the 3D isn't perfect.. Other than that. Crit it.

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[Strange Journeys]

bring those bastards closer and fix the w

[EWL24]

gemer - those r sick, im really digging those chars

[Shell703]

SYN - A whole lot better, those letters look real clean, and solid, keep trying to get the bars the same with, they're a little off in some places - like the K and R look a little small and the S a little big. The heights and spacing are good also. Try messing with connections a little, just don't sacrifice the letters and work on that handie, it'll help with the flow of the piece.

GEMER - I don't like the hook in the G, the first E's straight, the MER could be bigger and the thickness of the last R gets too small. Overall flow is decent but the ending E and R gets pretty plain. The right side of the M gets too small and leans too much to the bottom right.

Norf - work on straights, you don't understand letter structure

NAKE - Try using strong contrasting colors, the ones you used are too close in lightness and darkness which makes the piece illegible.

http://i231.photobucket.com/albums/ee183/Whispem703/001.jpg

[SVEZAJEZA]

SynOne - My only crit is have more fun it it, Isnt all about clear and read able its about having a bit of emotion on it. flare it out add some varibles in it. Yeah in all its good to get a base structure but the sooner you start experimenting on your style the quicker and easier you will learn.

[BigBend]

SynOne - My only crit is have more fun it it, Isnt all about clear and read able its about having a bit of emotion on it. flare it out add some varibles in it. Yeah in all its good to get a base structure but the sooner you start experimenting on your style the quicker and easier you will learn.
Prob. the best advise i have heard on this site, well said SVEZAJEZA

[SynOne]

Thanks for all the crits guys, I did try to have fun with it a while back. But I was told that I just cant do flairs because of my skill level. But I'll have some fun with it and post another after school.

Also that piece was more for something that I could actually paint. It's a easily paintable piece, which was what I was going for.

[mace2200]

@gemer sick character dude

[gemer]

thanks for the crits dudeess

[Phillip McDougall]

Prob. the best advise i have heard on this site, well said SVEZAJEZA

it's actually just toy bait...
he DID say get a base structure... which is what you don't have

[Rdoes]

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[gemer]

@r does im likeen it just dont knowabout the o looks kinda like an e but the structrues good im diggen it
@shell 703 thanx man and yours is strait man not real;lt original but structures good and the color come on man get some better maekers

[BigBend]

it's actually just toy bait...
he DID say get a base structure... which is what you don't have
And thats what i mean by this thread and you, you talk shit just like every other big headed ego person on here, instead of acually helping people all you do is down them and say some smart shit this whole website is about helping people not talk shit threw a damn keyboard

[BigBend]

CRITTS! Says HAEC
http://i41.tinypic.com/r7nj0k.jpg
http://i43.tinypic.com/rlb70h.jpg
http://i43.tinypic.com/2en56s2.jpg

[Phillip McDougall]

I'm not talking shit homie... I'm saying you should show us your letter structure. When we see good letter structure, then you take a step in the direction you want to go. After that, style development is up to you. Why do you think I continue posting in the toy thread? I don't have an inflated ego dude... haha.

The side bars of your H's are SINGLE BARS and should not bend halfway through

[BigBend]

aight i gotcha phill well heres another one i just did the h bends downwards again but check the rest out bro!
http://i43.tinypic.com/beujk1.jpg

[SynOne]

Tit's a little sloppy, and I didn't take enough time on my extensions, they are all fucked.

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[gemer]

structures good but yea it tis a bit sloppy nice color combo tho

[BigBend]

Gemer- only thing i see wrong is the spacing bro try working on that

[DEXA]

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[Coleo]

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crits please!

[SkateJunt]

those letters are wonky as fuck!, stop all the drips and highlights n shit and learn some letter structure! a reason that I havent posted any of my attempts at style and piecing is cuz i know it looks wack, id only post it if i though it was dece and wanted someone elses opinion, do you honestly think thats good?anyway

fuckin around wit throws, see anything decent?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7174/6513639823_f11596a4ed.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639823/)
Picture 159 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639823/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7034/6513639567_74dc0e4198.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639567/)
Picture 161 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639567/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7011/6513639363_14d2e26e00.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639363/)
Picture 162 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639363/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7160/6513639143_49e5f4767d.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639143/)
Picture 160 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6513639143/) by akryllian through ya head (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
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[gemer]

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[gemer]

@ coleo work on structure no need for the waveyness go with more strait lines right now then move up

[Coleo]

@gemer thanks ill work on it!

[Coleo]

@SkateJunt i think the third one is the best outta the bunch

[react70]

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[Coleo]

^work on your R and put a shadow on it

[BigBend]

CRITTS!
http://i43.tinypic.com/beujk1.jpg

[BigBend]

Finished
http://i42.tinypic.com/ogdpx2.jpg

[Jiska Matos]

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some doodles i do at work

@BigBend- Love that 3D style keep it up