Blackbooks

[TheFedexGuy]

http://i1148.photobucket.com/albums/o568/Thefedexguy/2012-03-06100641.jpg
http://i1148.photobucket.com/albums/o568/Thefedexguy/2012-03-06170518.jpg Not real happy with this one S is fucked among other things

[sadgeh]

Neus - this looks like nothing read the new to graff thread and do bars and think of bar consistancy. Maybe check out some tuts about 3D would be also a good idea

[cred1384]

Went all the way back to super simple!
http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_51324782x-1.jpg

[SynOne]

^ I like it keep doing that.

Meh I suck at this whole fading shit.

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[MASTAH_RIBCAGE]

change your name to sharkie

[dankbudz]

straighten that R, cred

skewr... how bout you bust out some nice simples

[MASTAH_RIBCAGE]

57103 another boring day at work
THIS!!!! first one of yours thats clearly legible, good job jiska, looks pro

[Jiska Matos]

THIS!!!! first one of yours thats clearly legible, good job jiska, looks pro thkx RIB, i still need to add the char, tomorow i will post the result

[killroywashere]

skewer thats ill
seder i like your highlights

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7043/6960615571_40a490f2d6.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/76420947@N05/6960615571/)

[kwu]

that seder is perf, minus the r... lol I like it tho its dope as hell
skewr you were progressin' nicely what happened? that skewr is dece, work on that EWR cause it kills your flow
nice cred try a capital e in that stee keep those bars the same girth throughout n then try leaning the letters i think you'd have something dope

[Shit Outta Luck]

mugen is nice, kinda decreases in size though
I kept thinking that when I was drawing it. I just couldn't tell lol
And dank that's dope

[Bean!]

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[Bean!]

Nasty

[TastyMcNasty]

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lol nope

[cred1384]

More simple stuff
http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_52308452x.jpg
Messed up the leg of the R on this one
http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_99812982x.jpg

[MN Nice]

You don't understand shines lol. They're all inconsistent.

[Vergz]

Haven't graffed in a min
http://i43.tinypic.com/654ms1.jpg
http://i42.tinypic.com/2cg0dw4.jpg
http://i43.tinypic.com/5490js.jpg

[kwu]

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7051/6814753988_a1773671f1_z.jpg

[MASTAH_RIBCAGE]

I think you went a little extension/add on happy on that one

[cuesto1]

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what u guys think?

[cuesto1]

Haven't graffed in a min
http://i43.tinypic.com/654ms1.jpg
http://i42.tinypic.com/2cg0dw4.jpg
http://i43.tinypic.com/5490js.jpg
props on the top an bottom

[kwu]

hah i think so too rib its mainly to compensate for the negative space

[R3bel1995]

You don't understand shines lol. They're all inconsistent. i know right?? you have pick one side, and stick with it, that is always hard for me, especially on a very large, complex pieces

[DEMPO]

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[MASTAH_RIBCAGE]

@kwu I can feel it, but some of em look real bad. The one i dislike the most in the little breaks to the left of the middle of your G... it doesnt make sense to put those there.

ill upload some doodles of the night after i finish this last one

[cred1384]

Played around with bending my bars. fucked up the E bigtime with that lean. Oh welll.
http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_35837302x.jpg

[dankbudz]

which to paint mañana?

Cred- thicken them bars and if you try to bend them do gradual bends... keep practicing simples and learn them letters.

[notmikegiant]

personally feeling the bottom one, but the E's seem inconsistent - same with the top one.

but, do what feels right

[DEMPO]

I like the top one 2 paint sed

[PETER]

I like the top one 2 paint sed
both are damn good. I like the top one, but feel it's missing something. paint both

["PHYSH"]

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crits please... little throw i played around with.....

[s33on3]

Thank you Skrillex and Rhymesayers crits please?

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[MN Nice]

Bottom one flows better sede.

[Asis13]

Asis13 - that monkey is tight and i agree with phat and cred

Thanks dude. it actually turns out as a pretty sick piece that you can even keep to a small sheet if necessary.

[Jiska Matos]

57409 it's done

[PETER]

Jiska: Came out dope as fuck.

S33on3: Get on some Chestplate records shit. Props on Rhymesayers though. The top one is cleaner. The bottom one is a good concept, but need a little work. Just needs some cleaning up. I want it licking an icecream cone with that box by it's tounge and the truck above it.

[Asis13]

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[cred1384]

@Asis Too hard to read.

Finally got my new markers
fucked up when trying some highlights then my white marker dripped on the C, just ignore that if possible

http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_4899182x.jpg

Edit: and another
http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_41705042x.jpg

[Jiska Matos]

57413 as cred said, its too hard 2 read, it dosen't realy flow, and the letters r round and u did your shadows square?

[snear]

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New to Bombing Science, heres a throwie ive been working on, let me how you think it can be improved, peace.

[Jiska Matos]

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New to Bombing Science, heres a throwie ive been working on, let me how you think it can be improved, peace. make the arrow lines all flow in the same direction, make the cut on the "S" round not straight and do the shadow on the exclamation point...but nice work, like the style. keep posting

[TheFedexGuy]

Bored yesterday started messing around with another name MERSAhttp://i1148.photobucket.com/albums/o568/Thefedexguy/2012-03-07143039.jpg http://i1148.photobucket.com/albums/o568/Thefedexguy/2012-03-08062501.jpg

[Asis13]

@ cred and @ jiksa - thanks guys. ill keep goin with it..been tryin some different things with it lately at work. have new flicks posted once I get home

[TastyMcNasty]

make the arrow lines all flow in the same direction, make the cut on the "S" round not straight and do the shadow on the exclamation point...but nice work, like the style. keep posting

i say, don't do the arrows. they make it look even more toy

[s33on3]

Jiska: Came out dope as fuck.

S33on3: Get on some Chestplate records shit. Props on Rhymesayers though. The top one is cleaner. The bottom one is a good concept, but need a little work. Just needs some cleaning up. I want it licking an icecream cone with that box by it's tounge and the truck above it.


thanx man that bottom one was actually used with pen ink and a brush it was a technique that i used for school. I got the ice cream truck from the Bangerang Skrillex music video thanks for the advice

[cred1384]

@Asis Yeah don't sweat it man, just keep sketchin away.

[PETER]

ink and a brush it was a technique that i used for school. hhmmmm interesting. I'm really interested in doing handies with brushes at the moment....

[cred1384]

Workin' on making my lines clean. Lost the flow in this one unfortunately. Crits?

http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_2_939402x.jpg

[dankbudz]

tits

["PHYSH"]

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a few attempts crits would be appreciated............

[Mildstyles]

Been gone a while. I would like some good ass crits

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[Shit Outta Luck]

I like that K on the last one for some reason haha

[kwu]

Naked that second flick is tight I think its one of best yet. I like the cap A n all those letter flow pretty well too. Let that E breathe and it would be perf

[cred1384]

@Naked I'm liking the bottom 2, good shit man

Trying stuff, again struggling with flow haha
http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_92208542x.jpg

[Coleo]

^ lookin alot better than some other ones you have posted... but i wouldnt do that thing with the "D" where it over laps connect it

[cred1384]

Yeah I didnt know what else to do, if i didnt do that it looked like an O. Oh well next time.

[GOHARDGRAFF]

wel u should check my profile if u can see my pics

[GOHARDGRAFF]

tight man

[Coleo]

Yeah I didnt know what else to do, if i didnt do that it looked like an O. Oh well next time.
well straighten the left bar out a lil more on the "D"

[Norfsuthr]

Didn't really focus. Came out ok thouhg i guess.
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7189/6966181197_f3d4140aae.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/76434462@N08/6966181197/)
photo-51 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/76434462@N08/6966181197/)

[MN Nice]

Hahaha High On Govt $

looks like somebody spent their tax return on something useful like myself.

[SHEARZ.]

Meh, bored as I know over crowded and stuff but felt like posting something, give us some pointers please?

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[Dossbog]

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[PETER]

Please see the new to graffiti thread please. Read Every page.

[Zookyook]

well straighten the left bar out a lil more on the "D"
what he said cred....

physh (and others) u gotta work on ur color balance... just use the rule light dark light etc.... if ur fill is light, then ur outline should be dark, and ur shell or final outline needs to be light again... if ur fill is dark the outline should be light and the final outline should be dark... the more contrast the more ur shit will pop... i see lots of people doing like dark purple or green fills and using black to outline... makes everything look like a blob... go here...

http://colorschemedesigner.com/


this site should help a lot of people when ur choosing what colors ur gonna use, click the "complement" tab and choose a color, and itll show u which color will have the most contrast against the color u chose.... and for more than 2 colors theres other tabs u can click thatll show u the same thing with more colors...

and i gets high on govt money er-day!!!! unemployed *****s know whats up! lol

[HipsterPunks]

@PHYSH - that rhino throw was more characters than letters and it distracted me from the word. Your characters are awesome tho just maybe use like one or two haha. I was feeling the physh throw just maybe stretch the letters upward alittle more, your progressing tho bro
@CRED - the R and D are bothering me on that last flick, pull out the top right of the R so its not dented inwards, and dont ever do that overlap with the D. your looking better than last week tho so keep it up
@DANK - loving the seders
@NAKED - your straight on the ditto looks exactly like NARK AIDS, with the NAK in your name i would stay away from that style. everything else looks good
@DOSSBOG - more detail on the bubble letters i cant make out what ur throwing up

[Dossbog]

@DOSSBOG - more detail on the bubble letters i cant make out what ur throwing up

What do you think of the style though?

[Dossbog]

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I'm not even going to fill these in until I get tips/approval

[cred1384]

Tried some shit. Need to go a bit simpler. Meh
http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_9197872x.jpg

[Strange Journeys]

rzst, lose that face, that z and s is ugly
cred- thats pretty cool, Bottom right leg of the R comes off too low though
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7039/6965880867_6467f66d2a.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/75328747@N06/6965880867/)

[Coleo]

@cred looking good really liking the shading... but the "R" is looking kinda weird to me ...

[Mildstyles]

@NAKED - your straight on the ditto looks exactly like NARK AIDS, with the NAK in your name i would stay away from that style. everything else looks good

School me because I'm not familiar

[Kinger79]

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some newish blackbook stuff... trying to find my style and stuff. constructive critisism is totally wanted.

[Kinger79]

more smooth lines and improve your shadow... cuz right now its sucks ass. its to uneven in spots.

[Kinger79]

make it bigger... and ur style looks like you got it off graffiti creator...

[Kinger79]

dont let the sides of he letters be so wavy and stuff. and the shadow is totally off. its supposed to be a drop shadow right?

[toys.r.us]

still learning
right side is a bit congested
any other crits would be sick
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y79/Ragley/photo8.jpg

[TastyMcNasty]

everyone on this page, except cred, is doing it wrong. you all need to go simpler

[toys.r.us]

you learn from challenging yourself
but i feel it

[TastyMcNasty]

you learn from challenging yourself
but i feel it

thats true. but you wont get anywhere without learning your basics first

[toys.r.us]

word
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y79/Ragley/photo9-1.jpg
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y79/Ragley/photo12-1.jpg
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y79/Ragley/photo10-2.jpg
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y79/Ragley/photo11-1.jpg

[toys.r.us]

lines need some work

[Shit Outta Luck]

everyone on this page, except cred, is doing it wrong. you all need to go simpler
this

[Dossbog]

Dear Good Writers on this Site,

Not to be the defiant toy but nobody wants to hear someone on the internet tell them that they can't draw worth shit....instead of "go simpler" as hard as this may seem, how about just giving tips to improve current styles? Every time i try and take people seriously on here and go simpler i end up over thinking all of my sketches and give myself the yips. My point is, just as we all like to defy the law and vandalize, we all like to defy other people, especially when their advice doesn't actually contain any tips or guidelines.

Go ahead, call me a fag or a loser or even the dreaded "TOY" for trying to point this out.....all i know is I'm going to put paint on peoples walls no matter what you think and that for me is what this is all about.

^obviously this doesnt apply when people are going way out of their league but when i can't get some tips for improvement on a simple simple style, theres a problem

[cred1384]

They are telling you to go simpler for good reason, if you don't like it than ignore it. Think about the benefit of simples this way. If you attempt a piece with extensions, crazy letter forms, and all that jazz, but your basic letter form is not perfected, than obviously adding extensions and all that other stuff isn't going to fix it. You can't polish a turd. By starting simple you can learn the best ways to attain flow and bend your letters. That's like trying to backflip a motorcross bike before you've even learned to shift gears. If you want to ignore people who are good writers advice, than that's your choice nukka. All of my progression (if you can call it that) is from listening to the advice iv gotten from here.

Also tits.

[cred1384]

^Such a negative nancy

Edit: Also @Kinger who the fuck are those 3 posts directed at?

[Dossbog]

I am not in any way interested in piecing. I want to bomb and tag.

[SHEARZ.]

Feedback please?

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[notmikegiant]

@shearz - some of the ideas are nice but i dont think its working overall. I didn't realize that was a Z until i kept staring intensely, and those wavy bar - vein things connecting letters looks awkward. hate to say it but, try some simples.

@ cred - i wasn't feeling that as much as your other stuff, i think its all starting to get super super clean though

@ doss - i kind of get what you mean, but just ignore it if you don't care, no need to bring it up.

@ kinger - from seeing some of your other posts i can only say, take everything you know - and completely forget it.

@ toys - the shading and detail looks nice on that first post, but you should try more simples - or do whatever.

[PETER]

but when i can't get some tips for improvement on a simple simple style, theres a problem
There is an entire thread dedicated to this very thing (new to Graffiti). No one is going to hold your hand while you try to figure out your own shit.... I'm not gonna help you climb the ladder I'm too busy climbing mine type shit. You might get some tips as to why something doesn't work etc, but when you haven't even tried to grasp the basics and it stands out like a blind man at a nude beach and talk about wanting tips and then about not giving a shit what people say no one is going to take you seriously and frankly your drawing should be deleted at that point or you should just stop posting. If you want tips take them and take the time to educate yourself. CRED is doing it and shows like a mother fucker.

Best tip you will ever get. SHUT THE FUCK UP AND DRAW.

[Dossbog]

@PETER aside from my little alcohol induced ledge moment, i can't agree more with your final statement.

[killroywashere]

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7037/6824171468_5d27c412fa.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/76420947@N05/6824171468/)
anybody help me with a name that starts with an A?

@shears - try gaining some structure. some of your swoops look off. the shading is kind of all over the place. think of a light source and direction. like have it all on one side. not imploding everywhere. just my 2 cents

[dankbudz]

drunk fill and freestyle

[killroywashere]

@seder - try adding some funk to your letters. get some more style going in there. those fills are sick tho

[Mildstyles]

Seder the bottom ones pretty cool, im not so sure about the top one haha. But its still good. The only thing is the right leg of that R got wicked fat on the bottom one

[HipsterPunks]

failure for the NOLA battle, character doesnt fit at all, gonna drop characters for a little while and concentrate on letters and better connections http://i1222.photobucket.com/albums/dd488/chadhipster/nola.jpg

[Panic519]

Shears Ir shading and 3d are off.
Area dope letters but the r looks a bit small.
Seder that first one is sick why not try something a lil harder u make that look 2 easy.
Hipsterpunk u r to good for toy section IMO advance

[Mildstyles]

For the ladies!
Got some weird junk goin on in this one...but it was a quickie

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[dankbudz]

your K is weird

[Panic519]

Naked the squares in the bg look weird waste of space.

Mario is dope, packing a 6 shooter nice

[SHEARZ.]

Thanks for feedback, looking back, I am hating that piece so much, it was like 1 in the mourning so oh well, thanks.

[SHEARZ.]

Ahh trying different styles, is this one better then the last? When markers come I might colour this one..

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[gemer]

go more simple ^^^ way to many wack extensions
@hipster shits nice man thumbs up

[dankbudz]

yo

[Rzarector]

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Quickies
crits?

[Shit Outta Luck]

Crits anyone?
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[Panic519]

Shears ur second wildstyle is better I would outline it.
Seder u post to many pics to crit
Rec I don't like the second ones c looks like t
Shitbouta luck looks like sdg

[stien]

its an inside joke. i know that is mr. miagi57912

[Shit Outta Luck]

Here's some old shit, except the Goes piece. I tried to add the one effect on it...but I fucked it up. And panic I could see the D maybe but that L hella ain't a G.
And the L on the third picture is really that much smaller, it's just how I took the picture.

http://s14.postimage.org/moxlndxfh/goes.jpg (http://postimage.org/image/moxlndxfh/)

http://s14.postimage.org/cswinqrnh/oldsol.jpg (http://postimage.org/image/cswinqrnh/)

http://s14.postimage.org/jxebwrywt/solshit.jpg (http://postimage.org/image/jxebwrywt/)

http://s14.postimage.org/6uipdi8ot/soluglyshit.jpg (http://postimage.org/image/6uipdi8ot/)

[dankbudz]

@panic, i don't need your crits
Stein- that asian dude is dope, the left side of the face could have a bit more detail though. work on your hands and your letters, looks like you try too hard
Sol- the Goes looks aight, gets sloppy at the ES, and the GO kinda resembles Norfs Gowj...

[Mildstyles]

Seder your piece a page back that is all cut up, the s is dope.

[Cole_Flood]

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[TastyMcNasty]

failure for the NOLA battle, character doesnt fit at all, gonna drop characters for a little while and concentrate on letters and better connections http://i1222.photobucket.com/albums/dd488/chadhipster/nola.jpg


yo
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bump worthy

[stien]

Dankbuds- thaks for the help or what ever you call it and the hands thing where did you get that from my hands suck I know but did you read my mind or something. I wanted to do hands and have him like karate choping that shit but just couldn't do it

[MN Nice]

Awh jeez. Facepalm. By hands he means handstyles. Like tags.

[stien]

I haha cool then

[Shit Outta Luck]

Sol- the Goes looks aight, gets sloppy at the ES, and the GO kinda resembles Norfs Gowj...
I fucked up the E and the S, looked better without that effect. And the Gowj? Whats it look like?

[dankbudz]

just got its similarities.
i wouldn't have done that E to S connection. thats what kills it. I like that effect, could be refined in some places though

Thanks for the bump, Tasty

[Willis1989]

Sup guys, could I get crits on these? Ill give some crits where I can but dont think ill be much help.

http://i815.photobucket.com/albums/zz72/willis1690/2012-03-12095333.jpg?t=1331549993

http://i815.photobucket.com/albums/zz72/willis1690/2012-03-10173942.jpg?t=1331549957

http://i815.photobucket.com/albums/zz72/willis1690/2012-03-12095321.jpg?t=1331550020

[aaesoo]

if you hadn't fucked with the right bar on the W on the first one it would've been the best one by far. the left bar is fairly well done do that for the right too just flip it horizontally. other than that work on 3d with vanishing points etc. and keep doin straights.

[Willis1989]

Thanks, but what do I do to develop my simps? Ive been doing keyboard letter for a while now and want to try to develop it a bit more, do any of you guys have any advice? Or should I keep just doing simps and it will eventually work itself out?

[SynOne]

Willis it sort of works itself out, but what you will eventually start doing is italicizing, then start bending bars slightly. I would stay with straight letters, maybe even make them italicized.

Don't like the bottom one on this one, only the S. Trying to get some fills in.

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[sadgeh]

Skewr - the K on the first sketch the right down leg is not in proportion compared the other letters. The SKE from the second and the WR from the first sketch and it will look dope imo

[dankbudz]

skewr, stop biting. its fairly obvious

[Beko]

^ yes it is!

but i love the fills skewr

[dankbudz]

"Ladies, you know what time it is"

[ven0m]

its tool time !

[MASTAH_RIBCAGE]

skewr, stop biting. its fairly obvious

obvious and annoying. I doubt it will ever end, I just wish he would do it to some1 else already

[DEMPO]

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heres 1 for sed . Wish i neva filled it after the outline :\

EDIT: had 2 go back on a few things.

[sadgeh]

You can do much better man, this is wack.

[Kinger79]

@cred, i clicked reply... didnt work i guess o.0 so to be "simple" should i just mess with straight letters more?

[ven0m]

need some proper crits on this:

https://fbcdn-sphotos-a.akamaihd.net/hphotos-ak-ash4/p480x480/432319_341278382585259_100001093005637_1007194_379 214556_n.jpg

tried going a bit further creatice-wise with my letters than the usual straights and simps... turned out, according to the intermediate counsil, I failed.

so hit me with some crits

[DEMPO]

i think venom is a good name to practice wildstyle with.

[joezilla1]

Nice style Venom!Maybe add some color to the 3d that might create some definition and make your letters pop.

[dankbudz]

i think the reason it failed is cause you tried too hard and didn't pay attention to basics. it lacks structure and the bars are inconsistent in size. also i don think those connections will help develop a good style right now. the fill is a cool idea but not ideal for a simp like this, should of left it all silver.

i think you should retry this but lean it all to the left, and not wiggle the bars so much, reduce it about half as much and make the bars the fatness of the O and bottom of the M.

its not your best, but its something to learn from definitely. hope this helped at all :p


crit to urs down there \/ \/
there is too much added to every letter. E is hidden and i really don't feel the NOM connection, i would make the O is own letter.

your round robin entry was on point. go off that.

[ven0m]

and this?

http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/attachment.php?attachmentid=55548&d=1329939261

[TastyMcNasty]

need some proper crits on this:

https://fbcdn-sphotos-a.akamaihd.net/hphotos-ak-ash4/p480x480/432319_341278382585259_100001093005637_1007194_379 214556_n.jpg

tried going a bit further creatice-wise with my letters than the usual straights and simps... turned out, according to the intermediate counsil, I failed.

so hit me with some crits

the V and the E are the best. The left leg of the N is way too squished, as is the middle of the M. And the N to O to M connection is fairly wack. But the coloring is pretty dope.


and this?

http://www.bombingscience.com/graffitiforum/attachment.php?attachmentid=55548&d=1329939261

this one is just overall wack. Not much else here i can crit.

[malto]

http://i803.photobucket.com/albums/yy314/lachyw/029.jpg
http://i803.photobucket.com/albums/yy314/lachyw/024.jpg
http://i803.photobucket.com/albums/yy314/lachyw/028.jpg
http://i803.photobucket.com/albums/yy314/lachyw/025.jpg

[dankbudz]

the M killed me

[toopski]

feel like your moving a bit backwards phat you've done way better

[PETER]

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crits yo!

[Panic519]

That first venom looks sick structure and colorS are dope

[RaWs3kz]

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crits please?

[dankbudz]

seks, you're just butt hurt... get over it bruda

[RaWs3kz]

ok ok ... mayb ur right...i am pissed... but ur gunna tell me that that venom is anything less than garbage? lmao...

[dankbudz]

he doesn't have a cocky attitude like you. he is willing to improve. now shut up, fool

[toys.r.us]

yo were all here doin the same shit. chill

[Mildstyles]

Hahahaha.
Dank looks good, in that seldom I like it just make the OM lean like the seld
Sek keep practicing...go back to simples
Phat those 2 aren't that good, but agreed your tfrrt lemon was dope do more like that

[SynOne]

My K is royally fucked on the top one. I fucked up the outline, was correct on the sketch =/

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[newincognitowindow]

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crits please?

" i get up....gotta move this ice!"

[toys.r.us]

diggin the bottom on

simple
smudged the O and gotta keep the color in the lines
crits?
http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y79/Ragley/photo13.jpg

[notmikegiant]

@ syn - 3d looks really clean

@ toys.r - youre joking right? but that connection at the bottom is kinda jarring. not feeling the bottom right of the K

first simple, can already see issues with bar size and letter inconsistency, but, more practice is a good thing. crits are always appreciated.

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[DEMPO]

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Can I plz get a few crits. what type of 3d should go.

[Willis1989]

Skewr - The bottom one is much nicer
Dempo - Make it more simple, i think the 2 main bars on your A are good so stick with them and use less extentions etc

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[PETER]

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bump for crits

toys-r-us: you're obviously on the internet. find out.

[SynOne]

Toys - Do straight bars, don't flare them yet. It's pretty uneven and flares awkwardly.

Mike - Try to keep your hand more steady when outlining. I advise doing more straight letters like Willis does.

Will - Getting cleaner, the 3D has improved a lot, keep it up.

Tempo - Looks like you going backwards, drop those connections. On the tag try to separate your P and O, looks like TEMB

Peter - Liking this style, the L's leg bar seems to be a little smaller than the rest of the bars.

I don't like my R on the Orange one, otherwise. Crits

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[PETER]

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this is solid. I suggest making the loop of your R a reverse of the top of your S (mirrored if you will)

[WeAreZombies]

582645826558266
blackbook work, let me know what you all think?

[sez.]

58283^^ shits looken tough

[ven0m]

we are zombies, the ninja turtle karak in the second flick is maaaaaaaaaaad killer dude. props on that. for real
but all your letters are bad. scrap em all and start over fresh according to the 'new to graffiti' thread

[DEMPO]

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ninja turtles go hard.

[WeAreZombies]

we are zombies, the ninja turtle karak in the second flick is maaaaaaaaaaad killer dude. props on that. for real
but all your letters are bad. scrap em all and start over fresh according to the 'new to graffiti' thread
you think the letters are just to dated? It would make sense, this is my first black book work in around 10 years.

[ven0m]

well im sorry my friend but it looks like those of someone who started 10 minutes ago rather than years... if youve been around for this long you'd at least have a basic grasp of bars...
no beef though. just take a breather and slow your pace down. climb that ladder a step at a time slowly or else you'll fall

[WeAreZombies]

ya for sure i didnt take it that way , I was actually agreeing with you. This last week is the first time I have attepted anything graff realated since my early 20's. I am looking for hrlp/ critics so I can get back into it.
Thanks for the thread Im reading it all through now.

[dankbudz]

crits?

zombies- i don't think the letters would look half bad if you took away all the add ons, extensions, etc. and left to to bars. the tek shows a bit of potential. just keep practicing, stick it to bars with some flavor for now.
sez and dempo- scrap that

[DEMPO]

showin ur true colors

[eFx!82]

58381 just starting out

[Coleo]

What the hell does that even say?

[MN Nice]

Your sig. Really? ^ C'mon man.

[MASTAH_RIBCAGE]

yall like dick. we get it

[PREA672]

Lol I think its upside down?

[Coleo]

i have no clue

[EWL24]

eFx - try going a lot simpler, just do keyboard letters for now

did this today in class crits please
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[dankbudz]

try and not make the 3d so long, looks good though. A should be standing straight.

lookin for crits on the SELDOM..

[DEMPO]

wide awake here bro. looking good, seder what size book u got there.

[dankbudz]

8.5 by 10 i think... idfk

[SHEARZ.]

582645826558266
blackbook work, let me know what you all think?

Liking the Ninga Turtle one or whatever, but your bottom one with red outline, hating. Purely because this font is of the internet, which you have copied.. If you say it not, I got proof dude ;) But yeah liking the turtle character.

[Willis1989]

Zombies - Really like the characters and the fill
Sez - I like the E but I think the whole piece would look nicer without the spikes at the top
Decay - 3d is nice, I wouldve kept the A more straight

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[AstoK]

WeAreZombies- your stuff looks like its all from graffiti creator
Dank- im glad that you are still doing simples, you have the nicest simple in the toy forum, i would love to see what you could do if you tried a semi-wildstyleish piece, because you clearly have your letter structure down
skewr- you also have a decent simple style, i like what you do with the colours, and the overall shape of your pieces make them look like you know a bit about your graff.
spex- learn how to hold a pen and go simpler.

pic for talking
sketch for a mate
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[Shit Outta Luck]

Your N is off ^ and the W is a bit to small. The leg of the R is a little too imo. It's clean as hell though

[dankbudz]

thats looking fresh, nice style, digging that tag too.
only thing id say is it could do without the keyhole on the N, which could let you beef up that middle bar. and beefin up that W up wouldn't hurt too.

don't really like how this N or W turned out, but can't say i tried too hard.

[SynOne]

Dank on W's I would make the middle bars ever extend past the outer main bars it seems to always make it look goofy. I like that E though.

Crits appreciated.

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[SkateJunt]

testing out some new markers, decided to try painting it, and as always it turned out way worse on the wall then in the sketch
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7200/6985664479_9c5d03b17f.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6985664479/)
Picture 258 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6985664479/) by Stewart Stevenson (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7209/6839476418_f7c7997861.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6839476418/)
Picture 254 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6839476418/) by Stewart Stevenson (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

[TastyMcNasty]

http://i1239.photobucket.com/albums/ff518/TastyMcNasty/Graffiti/IMAG0021.jpg

[dankbudz]

tasty thhats lookin dope, although i think thats a bit too many bars on the bottom of the left leg of the A. maybe pull it in farther and kick that bar more under the D without the lil extra one.
i think your shit will look tough once you start bringing it in tighter. oh and that E is looking a bit big.

[TastyMcNasty]

thanks dank, it;s only a rough sketch, so i'll fix that on the finished piece.

[Mildstyles]

Seder the seldom is working for you! the top simple(last page) was bangin and that seldom you reposted was pretty dope,

[Yawn89]

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drew myself there too lol

[Bushido Graffiti]

i'll throw up some stuff i did recently :)

[MASTAH_RIBCAGE]

mad burners, but whats with that silver dick above the last one?

[TastyMcNasty]

http://i1239.photobucket.com/albums/ff518/TastyMcNasty/Graffiti/IMAG0021.jpg

bottom page bumpski

and lol @rib

[Bushido Graffiti]

mad burners, but whats with that silver dick above the last one?

lol was doing a free hand crown , but ididnt meld well

[MASTAH_RIBCAGE]

oooo shit. Well, it looks like a dick going backwards into a gapey loose vagina

[Bushido Graffiti]

very sexy description lol

[Bushido Graffiti]

one i did today

[Shit Outta Luck]

you need more arrrrrrows!

[SkateJunt]

its hard to get used to these new markers, they bleed like hell. i know the bottom orange one it wack but i was just trying something out and testing my new markers. second pic is a bump from last page
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7186/6986273965_cdfb1f0a5f.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6986273965/)
Picture 259 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6986273965/) by Stewart Stevenson (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7200/6985664479_9c5d03b17f.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6985664479/)
Picture 258 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6985664479/) by Stewart Stevenson (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

[DEMPO]

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not enuf arrows yo. arrows are so dope.

[ven0m]

broken rock around your piece as if it was coming out of the wall
youre doing it wrong

[WeAreZombies]

58549working on lettering, bigger version of my handwrighting. better or worse?

[PETER]

better

[Norfsuthr]

Keep the z, straighten up the W, straight bar across the A for now. And you did those scroll thingys nice, but not just yet bud.

[illegal_drugs]

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[Mildstyles]

This thread needs more me! haha just kidding, but crits would be cool on this. Already know the leg of the K is awkward as well as left leg of the n...
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[SHEARZ.]

Yeah that left leg of the N I not liking, plus the K like you said, also the middle bit of the e is to fat.. Nice one though =)

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Crits?

[Mori]

mad burners, but whats with that silver dick above the last one? hahahaha

[dankbudz]

^^ give me your pens and 360 controller... now

naked- keep em comin, just do another and fix what you thinks wrong.

[cred1384]

Trying to work with my bars. Made this shit too condensed I know. any crits other than that?

http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_72053652x.jpg

[SHEARZ.]

Yeah that left leg of the N I not liking, plus the K like you said, also the middle bit of the e is to fat.. Nice one though =)

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Crits?

Not spamming, just bottom of page so no one really see's, bumped to this page for more crits hatred tips etc..

[Mori]

^Boooooo

[cred1384]

@Shearz Kinda lacking in letter structure. Clean as hell though.

Kinda got too wild with this one, need to simple it down.
http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_41778802x.jpg

[SHEARZ.]

Thanks man, I love your highlights on that one, there clean, most people go over the top, yours are nice =)

[dankbudz]

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[Mildstyles]

try thicker outlines^^

[MN Nice]

round robin

http://i126.photobucket.com/albums/p104/skier46/IMG00706-20120316-1702.jpg?t=1331936318

[SeeM²]

Man, I was gonna put up some shit. Then I realized how bad it would look compared to literally everything I've seen in this thread.
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Screw it, I don't know you people.

[SkateJunt]

just a simp, ignore the 3d on this one, i know its shit, any crits on the letters?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7044/6844088966_8b1c26102d.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6844088966/)
simppp (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6844088966/) by Stewart Stevenson (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

[Axil]

^Not that bad Seen Worse
___________________________

Any Crits on mine ?
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[cred1384]

@Gerb Try to keep your bars even on that one.
@Seem Dont worry about comparing your stuff to others just use that as motivation to improve. Lose the extra stuff on that one and try to make a clean simple sketch first.
@MN Nice Dope as hell, not sure about the capital I that's also a lower case i. it kinda works though.
@Anil Not bad, The A came out nice, make the I a bit thicker and flatten the point on the L so it looks like the bottom left corner of the A.

Was gonna scrap this but decided to try to clean it up a bit, oh well.
http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_79835492x.jpg

also bump for crits on my last 2, I like the third one best, second one the bars came out looking skinnier than i want. Damn noodles flappin around.
http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_41778802x.jpg
http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_72053652x.jpg

[dankbudz]

naked- ya man, for some reason the black sharpie was making hella thin lines.
cred-top ones best, curve the top of the C and make the vertical bars straight and make the D connect at the bottom of the bar.. and stop those highlights. you are starting to go backwards with those last two, you gotta keep it simple with structure.youre doing weird noodle shit, stick with what you have on the top.

[SHEARZ.]

@ Seem - You need to simple yours down.. Try a simple one then slowly start adding extensions etc.

[SkateJunt]

this any better?
http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7070/6990938295_6b73c69425.jpg (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6990938295/)
Picture 263 (http://www.flickr.com/photos/69411978@N04/6990938295/) by Stewart Stevenson (http://www.flickr.com/people/69411978@N04/), on Flickr

[cred1384]

@Gerb Much better man. Looks pretty good, keep it up.

[Mildstyles]

@ Seem - You need to simple yours down.. Try a simple one then slowly start adding extensions etc.

You need to take your own advice, but dont add extensions any time soon. Do only simples for a while

[SHEARZ.]

You need to take your own advice, but dont add extensions any time soon. Do only simples for a while

Ok thanks heaps for advice =)

[cred1384]

Middle bar on the E came out looking out of place, Any crits?

http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_33409862x-1.jpg

[MN Nice]

Best thing you've done yet. Keep working with that.

[dankbudz]

.

[MASTAH_RIBCAGE]

imi pretty sure dude already has cancer...

[Mildstyles]

OMG i changed it up for once and i actually like this. Crits?
UPloading with and without 3d cuz i sorta like without the 3d more but idk
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[Axil]

@Naked Try getting different colored markers so the coloring will look smoother and try do the 3d from the right it looks better in my opinion other than that its not bad.

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CREDS PLEASE!

[Mildstyles]

use bars, go read the new to graffiti thread

and my coloring is "unsmooth" because i used the markers for bars, a freestyle so it gets darker where the bars met up.

[cred1384]

CREDS PLEASE!

Everyone must now call "crits" "CREDS"

@Azil keep your bar size relatively consistent with each letter, the A is thickk but the x is skinny.
@Naked I can't find anything i don't like about those letters, spot on negro.
@Dankbuds Your characters are cool as fuck. The teeth on that germ are so good.

[Axil]

@creds lol i fail any way i tried to make my bars the same size on this one P.S. My name is Axil :)

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Crits please :)

[Mildstyles]

I dont see bars in that.^
Do keyboard letters, maybe you didn't see my last post? Use bars check the new to graffiti thread.
Do letters like the ones you see on the screen, AXIL. <<< like that.

[cred1384]

^ What he said.

an attempt to stray from my flat baseline.
http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_58318382x.jpg

Edit: Redid basically the same thing just with thicker bars.
http://i1051.photobucket.com/albums/s424/cred1384/preview_image_1_53512372x.jpg

[Axil]

@Cred Very nice

Is this any better?

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[sadgeh]

No, bar concistany is off look at Cred he's doing it good. Make bars the same size and height

[SynOne]

Cred I think your E had a little to much Mickey Dees.

[cred1384]

Yeah i rushed the last one and it came out a little Beef-Ey...

get it..
Thats funny i'm funny

[Bushido Graffiti]

trying dif color combos

[MN Nice]

You should be trying letter structure instead.

[thekoolaid]

im lost, need some help. crits please
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[gemer]

on the sqaure thing u got up there i would defintaly fix the p' becasue it doesnt go with the rest i would minus the little check thing u got next to the p'..for the h' a' and t' i wouldnt have those chunks missing u need to practice more on ur letter structure and not trying to add style to them right now and ur throwup the t' needs mad work and the a' and everything else u need to just draw it more and more

[thekoolaid]

on the sqaure thing u got up there i would defintaly fix the p' becasue it doesnt go with the rest i would minus the little check thing u got next to the p'..for the h' a' and t' i wouldnt have those chunks missing u need to practice more on ur letter structure and not trying to add style to them right now and ur throwup the t' needs mad work and the a' and everything else u need to just draw it more and more
word thanks,

[kwu]

that kancr, skore and naked are nice. yall other lil *****s should take notes

http://farm8.staticflickr.com/7036/6994159201_982c868747_z.jpg

[Axil]

@ kwu good


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[SynOne]

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VVVVVVVVV ^ Cut that shit out.

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[Bushido Graffiti]

this is the style of lettering i like need to work on it more, diggin the piece KWU

[upper90daynnight]

Dank Budz....In response to the seldom piece, The piece is real clean, but you have some letters that are angular and some that are smooth like the style of the S and the style of the E also i wud go with making the E lowercase and making it about the size of the O and make the curve at the top of the S smaller then the curve on the bottom of the S if u get what im saying, but its real dope man keep it up