i aint tryin to be defensive but give advise like you did not say shits garbage that really doesnt help me any
I told you to get your letter structure down. Learn letter structure.
Each letter is ugly individually. K has too many lumps, R has too many lumps, S needs work, D looks like an O.
something's lacking, i don't know what though. maybe it's just everything.
So, now that i know its give crits to get crits...
Krso, i think the hole in the S should be taken out. itd look better in my opinion.
Tak, id try different things intead of the + in the middle, y'know hollow holes or different symbols or something
and a newer sketch, any better?
Last edited by HORSEthefan; 08-02-2010 at 06:06 PM. Reason: pic problem
To Bek: The best way to learn letter structure is to start with basics. Draw block letters similar to the letters on your keyboard, but SEPARATE each bar. For example: The letter "A" has three bars (in this case). draw each section separately to make a good clean letter (this is similar to "starting with a circle" when drawing a cartoon character or something). Then start experimenting by bending your bars, changing the width of the bars, how your letter is going to balance, etc. It takes time, but you'll be a much better artist (not graffiti artist; artist) once you start practicing this.
Eros- I'd like for you to read the same crits as bek. You need to learn more about letters and how they're formed before you try to contruct throws. Maybe even work on handstyles for a while. That's really most of what I do. Handstyles and straight letters. I'm not a good graffiti artist by any standards (like Phil said, we all are in the toy forum), but I think I have enough respect with my handstyles to give crits. Making solid handstyle can help you later construct any aspect of graffiti (throws, straight letters, pieces, anything). Not to sound cheesy, but handstyles are the BASE of your artistic style. So, hey, it might not be terrible to work on those for a while.
Task- getting slightly better. I would still shy my eyes away if I saw that on the street. It might help to draw some throws on graph paper to make sure each letter is the same width and height (approximately, at least) And you just have ugly bars all around. No structure. I actually think your bottom throw has more potential. May just be me, though.
TAK- The K is awful. I think you need a block letter K rather than the bubble nonsense you have now. The TA aren't that great either, the bars are not consistent.
KRSD- Same advice as everyone else.
And I already got a few crits on this, but I'll post so the rest of you can share advice since I just wrote all of that shit. Sorry for the blur.
Umm... I think you dropped the K because you can't draw a K, which is fine. I do the same sometimes. Your S has the most potential. The important thing to note is that I do see improvement. Keep going with it.
No, you said you dropped the K because it doesn't matter in a throw up. I was just clarifying that you'll have to learn that K sometime, so you shouldn't leave it out. It's just a good habit to have. At least try one. You can change it later.
As for Bek's piece- (with the smurf) It looks like you were working with bars, which is crucial to constructing a piece. And you seem to have a decent understanding of the letter forms. There's not a lot of balance in your piece, and it looks like you threw in add ons to make up for that. You should lay off of extension until you can design letters and know when you need them. You're throwing on bells and whistles when you don't have a quality product to begin with (sales metaphors? gay). Also, your can control and color choice shows that you're not ready to take on a piece like that. Take it slow, homie. You got that basics, but don't get ahead of yourself.