smuk- straighten out those letters a bit, kinda looks sloppy. make your 3d a little more even...your on the right track.
Havek-I think that shits tight. maybe make the stuff to the left of the T a little smaller, i feel like its stealing the T's space kinda. Looks like you kind of ran out of room.
Lein-the I looks like an F
Im working on a new name, Slek (sounds like sleek). Tell me what you guys think, which one you like better? (i'm over sharpies, wish i could afford something else)
Any more crits would really help me out
Dunsy: As clean as all of your coloring looks, you still need to work on your letters. For example, I don't even know what the first letter on that first sketch is. The E in that same sketch is hurtin' too. Try using straight bars, then gradually work in bends, then proportional changes once you've got those down. You've got the coloring down well, but that's the easy part. Now start sketching in pencil only and putting more practice into your letters.
wish i'd planned this one out on a bigger bit of paper
crits on the simples plz??
Trek- i like that style keep trying it
drop- i think your e looks too sqwashed on the the green on but a fat bit of 3d and a bit mor spacing it'd be cool beans man
dunsy- love the yellow and orange ones and your monkey is cool but i think he'd be better a bit lighter brown so you could give his boby more shape..but i dig the bubbly shizzle yo lol
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SHIT on a STICK!
l ONLY HAVE ONE ENTRY FOR THE HANDSTYLE BATTLE (THE WORD IS "PREMIUM RECYCLED" AND I DON'T HAVE ANY ENTRIES FOR THE THROWlE BATTLE (THE WORD IS "MONEY"). SO GET ON IT
Slek im feeling the one on the left side in ur book
Its been awhile, gonna roll with the tots till I'm back on track again. Yah, my lines are raw, and my proportions are kinda fucked in the second one, but my colouring seems to have improved with neglect.
NEED ADVICE ON A "I". Can't seem think of anything to do with it.
same: Shits weird, son. With that out of the way the 3d is really messed, I think you should hit up classic simples. Imitate a font, learn how to use bars. I like the top line better then the name. You'll work it out, man.
Dunsy: Second picture, top throw. Roll with that, mad potential. Other stuff is meh.
Snuk: Stop. Drop. And Roll on over to simples and bars.
Trek: Just nit picking... Trim it down a little, show off the structure of the letters more. Make the T give the R a little space, and the E is feelin' pretty crowded to. Pretty solid though, keep it up.
Neet: Feels way forced, man. Relax, make it your own.
Lein: Hit the simples, work plain letters until they are so boring it hurts to do them. Bending is like puberty, you can't force that shit to happen on your schedule.
I am not really Geski.
geski- love that style i think the i fits in just fine your first e is better then your second same with your k
I was Born Ready Mother Fucker...
Telos - use bars to even it out and make all letters the same size. please fix the O
Telos- Try and get those bar withs consistent throughout the piece, try and get the letters about the same size (the L is mad tiny while the S is huge)
Scotchtape- I really like how the bubbles came out on the second one- the letter forms are really creative.
Strange- Thats a really unique style, it looks good as regular letters, I suggest trying to play around with those letters a little bit-tweek them, bend them whatever add some flavor into them
Dunsey- I really like that monkey and the background/forcefields you have there, I'd suggest working on the letters a little more since those(characters/Background) Grab the most attention compared to the letters
Snuk- I'd have to agree with the others- beat the hell out of those solid keyboard letter for a while
Trek- That's an ill piece but while the TRE are all leaning to the right I feel the K is leaning more straight up or to the left more which kinda thorws the flow of the piece off a little bit--IMO
Squared- The 3D and coloring is really nice- I don't know if it is a style choice but I think the E and N are smaller then the L and I (I think it is)- that and the L seems to heavily overlap the second letter more so than the rest of the letters
NEET- again imma have to go with the others the N is huge and the E's both look squished inbetween the N and T. The letter forms themselves are goos but if you take apart each letter individually I think you'd find they'd be different sizes compared to one another.
geski i dont like your G not one bit. your E looks more like a G to me.
Telos work on evening up your bars and keepin all your letters the same height
shell i dont really know what that says. the tag does it no justice either. hwis? get workinonit
That shits nice- You just gave me new ideas to work with, I never thought of combining characters or objects within the piece- Hole? Is he a writer?
Leaks- Imma keep workin on it, make it more legible- it says HWIS-
combining letters with characters or objects can be tough because if you dont get it right then it looks awful, but yea i like that one "the strange one"
ahahah are you guys joking?? that shit is so gay
that shits tight dude, i like it alot but im not really feelin that arrow at the top of the K
Last edited by MeDiCfOoL; 09-05-2009 at 01:36 PM.