Blackbooks

**Shell703** · 12-14-2011 06:12 AM

SYN - A whole lot better, those letters look real clean, and solid, keep trying to get the bars the same with, they're a little off in some places - like the K and R look a little small and the S a little big. The heights and spacing are good also. Try messing with connections a little, just don't sacrifice the letters and work on that handie, it'll help with the flow of the piece.

GEMER - I don't like the hook in the G, the first E's straight, the MER could be bigger and the thickness of the last R gets too small. Overall flow is decent but the ending E and R gets pretty plain. The right side of the M gets too small and leans too much to the bottom right.

Norf - work on straights, you don't understand letter structure

NAKE - Try using strong contrasting colors, the ones you used are too close in lightness and darkness which makes the piece illegible.

**SVEZAJEZA** · 12-14-2011 06:23 AM

SynOne - My only crit is have more fun it it, Isnt all about clear and read able its about having a bit of emotion on it. flare it out add some varibles in it. Yeah in all its good to get a base structure but the sooner you start experimenting on your style the quicker and easier you will learn.

**BigBend** · 12-14-2011 06:38 AM

Originally Posted by SVEZAJEZA

SynOne - My only crit is have more fun it it, Isnt all about clear and read able its about having a bit of emotion on it. flare it out add some varibles in it. Yeah in all its good to get a base structure but the sooner you start experimenting on your style the quicker and easier you will learn.

Prob. the best advise i have heard on this site, well said SVEZAJEZA

**SynOne** · 12-14-2011 07:28 AM

Thanks for all the crits guys, I did try to have fun with it a while back. But I was told that I just cant do flairs because of my skill level. But I'll have some fun with it and post another after school.

Also that piece was more for something that I could actually paint. It's a easily paintable piece, which was what I was going for.

**mace2200** · 12-14-2011 09:12 AM

@gemer sick character dude

**gemer** · 12-14-2011 10:50 AM

thanks for the crits dudeess

**Phillip McDougall** · 12-14-2011 11:58 AM

Originally Posted by BigBend

Prob. the best advise i have heard on this site, well said SVEZAJEZA

it's actually just toy bait...
he DID say get a base structure... which is what you don't have

**Rdoes** · 12-14-2011 12:05 PM

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**gemer** · 12-14-2011 12:14 PM

@r does im likeen it just dont knowabout the o looks kinda like an e but the structrues good im diggen it
@shell 703 thanx man and yours is strait man not real;lt original but structures good and the color come on man get some better maekers

**BigBend** · 12-14-2011 01:07 PM

Originally Posted by Phillip McDougall

it's actually just toy bait...
he DID say get a base structure... which is what you don't have

And thats what i mean by this thread and you, you talk shit just like every other big headed ego person on here, instead of acually helping people all you do is down them and say some smart shit this whole website is about helping people not talk shit threw a damn keyboard

**BigBend** · 12-14-2011 01:12 PM

CRITTS! Says HAEC

**Phillip McDougall** · 12-14-2011 03:19 PM

I'm not talking shit homie... I'm saying you should show us your letter structure. When we see good letter structure, then you take a step in the direction you want to go. After that, style development is up to you. Why do you think I continue posting in the toy thread? I don't have an inflated ego dude... haha.

The side bars of your H's are SINGLE BARS and should not bend halfway through

**BigBend** · 12-14-2011 03:50 PM

aight i gotcha phill well heres another one i just did the h bends downwards again but check the rest out bro!

**SynOne** · 12-14-2011 03:55 PM

Tit's a little sloppy, and I didn't take enough time on my extensions, they are all fucked.

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**gemer** · 12-14-2011 03:57 PM

structures good but yea it tis a bit sloppy nice color combo tho

**BigBend** · 12-14-2011 04:05 PM

Gemer- only thing i see wrong is the spacing bro try working on that

**DEXA** · 12-14-2011 04:50 PM

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**Coleo** · 12-14-2011 07:25 PM

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crits please!

**SkateJunt** · 12-14-2011 07:59 PM

those letters are wonky as fuck!, stop all the drips and highlights n shit and learn some letter structure! a reason that I havent posted any of my attempts at style and piecing is cuz i know it looks wack, id only post it if i though it was dece and wanted someone elses opinion, do you honestly think thats good?anyway

fuckin around wit throws, see anything decent?

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