i think the reason it failed is cause you tried too hard and didn't pay attention to basics. it lacks structure and the bars are inconsistent in size. also i don think those connections will help develop a good style right now. the fill is a cool idea but not ideal for a simp like this, should of left it all silver.
i think you should retry this but lean it all to the left, and not wiggle the bars so much, reduce it about half as much and make the bars the fatness of the O and bottom of the M.
its not your best, but its something to learn from definitely. hope this helped at all
crit to urs down there \/ \/
there is too much added to every letter. E is hidden and i really don't feel the NOM connection, i would make the O is own letter.
your round robin entry was on point. go off that.