sear, both are fresh as hell, seconds my favorite.
no matta who ya familys are everybody needs familys yall.
sear, those balls had better be gobstopers a somethin close 2 a jawbreaker
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F.Y.E. KRU (Fuk You Expekt)
diggin that 1 tempo looks nice and clean keep it up man
crits please changed the o up like suggested and I know its a little sloppy
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Gettin there hype. id say drop the 3d for a drop shadow or just a bold outline, and id take those little cuts out of the inside of your letters where the top bar of the k conects and the bottom of the o and the p and r. and i don know how i feel bout the o looking fat like that. try a more old school looking o, kinda like a flat topped tear drop shape if that makes any sense.
word Ill try that out man ... as long as I am progressing atleast somewhat it helps. thanks for the crits man
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before u guys start telling me about structure u should know that this was just for fun
and yes, i know the letters r all wack,
hipe- i like your P and R but not really feeling the K. try to make the dip thing on top of your p more suttle like it is on the R. the 3d looks off at the bottum of your P and the bottum left leg of your R but it looks good elsewhere. you know with ur P and R how at the top it has the dips, maybe in the centre part of the 2 letters the 3d should have the dip too if you get what im saying, may look better but i donno, could fuck it up too but maybe try it out.
EWL- i think that looks dope haha its a cool idea for sure.
I'm not digging some of my follow through lines on my bars. It looked a lot better with pencil shading but fuck it. Drips are ugly too, can I get some critz on my letters?
"They say that most people can only dream in black and white
That's why he packs a knife and only reappears at night."
@Emune ^ He has a point. Also for your letters the bend in the bottom bar of the E looks wack. Those extra lines aren't playing into your flow at all, try to position them so they look more natural if ya get what i mean.
@Dank So clean, damn good work.
Freestyle messing around with some new colored pens.
Last edited by cred1384; 05-02-2012 at 01:32 AM.
@ sear - reminds me A LOT of Rime, still looks sick though
@ Hipe - not really feeling the lines that cut in, otherwise looks solid, on the right track
@ ewal - cool concept, looks like it was fun
@ dank - i feel like you've got your simples down pretty well, why not try mixing shit up?
@ emune - get rid of those lines cutting through
@ cred - looks great for a freestyle, do you even need to be posting in the toy thread anymore?
gotta start somewhere right? i get that this doesn't look great, but i do like the P tilted up and the E tilted down, crits appreciated
mike- ya don't simply move from simps to a wild.
n pay attention to spacing, and work on that S, watch which way your letters lean, keep up all straight tup, or all leaning one way. watch that E its fat, try a upper case, it'll look a lot better with your letters
cred- work on the top of your E, noticed its pretty off in every piece, not really feel in that R too, but it looks good for a freestyle
@sear, both are dope as fuck, props on all them faces in the 1st one and the hand in the corner, shits sick. The S in the second one is dope too
Damn dude lose the arrows and extensions. focus on simplicity. some really dope pieces are just plain letters with a little flair. work on doing the letters in bars first and then cut back with your eraser and finish it off. check 2 pages back for my first post. i've been drawing and painting for almost 6 months and my letters and style aren't crazy. is that piece supposed to say Ghost?
yeah it's supposed to say ghost and i usually write another name(maybe ill take some pics of walls and upload em next days)
my best advice on names is go to google images and type in "ghost graffiti" and if you see a pic of someone else who has done a piece with that name on a wall or wherever and it's better than yours, then you should pick a different name. I've gone through like 3 names already and i thought i had a good one with Goner but i met a dude at a local legal wall who's been painting for over 10 years and he knows the (or one of the) original Goner from back in Philly or something and his advice was change names cause if someone better than you sees you writing the same name as them then you got beef. i haven't seen another Enaml before so that's what i'm writing now. it's a long frustrating process but once you find a good one you feel so much better haha. that guy i met at the legal wall also said try to go for a 5 or 6 letter name cause almost everything with 4 letters has been done. he was writing Woems and he's pretty fucking good.
ah yeah checked it out.
maybe i should go on writing LARF but i would like to do something new