Blackbooks

[tempest]

crit others

[jupsick]

every post i posted i crited others
and last 3 times i posted i didnt get even one crit -_-

[tempest]

*sighs* i shuldnt but.....
says mebzter right? i like the M. the flare on the rite leg adds pop to it. i like the sketchy fill too. mayb cuz it reminds me of spray paint? i dont kno. just looks good. after the m the letters loose their insane steez. it doent mean they're bad. they're better developed than mine by a long shot. its just that your m is far more advanced than the rest of the peice.
ok, things to fix: the slime on the right of your m and your t. from the top bit to the flared leg. just take it out. with the bottom e and r the circular top is hella different from the other letters. its just a diff style and it looks strange. i like the first e except for the sticky out bit at the end. mite look good in a more advanced peice as a prelude to a larger extension.
other than that its pretty sweet. reminds me of Eack. again, i really like the ballpoint fill. and i would tell you to get rid of the drips coming of your letters, but i think someone else will.

EDIT:forgot to say, i also like the solid white outline, works well with the smoggy cloud shit as a contrasting element.

[garbage down tha way]

Tempest you can't afford to be cocky yet..

[seywhat]

word^^^

jupsick, you should do a peice goin left to right. all your stuff i see is up and down, you got decent letters though, keep it up for sure

[jupsick]

geez dude thats the biggest crit i ever got here XD
anyways
hmm
the m most developed? dont think so...but all the other letters lame true XD
hmm well tnx yea and the drips uhg i dont know how to do drips ts like 2nd time tryin so ummm ok
well tnx for the crit mate

[whahappen?]

@wings

Hmm U got nice letters and a good style but I think U should use some colors man and it will be heeeeeelll yes


@RasaR

I Think it's a lil tooo simple for me don't like the style and work on the outline...

Mine:

that song is fucking creepy
like in a good way, but shit
neways
hands are pretty bad, the last d on died looks like a backwards r with a broken leg

[ESKiMO2]

Crits before I color it?
Canibus (Mic Club)



I'm getting rid of the quotes.

Jupsick- It's pretty nice for a freestyle.
Dank- Change the N and K. They still need work.
Queezy- I'm not really feeling it.
MareImbrium- SAVE THAT IN YOUR RECORDS and when you get really good letter structure look back to it and use the style (not completely).

[Dewster_OnE]

yoo the style is dope, its coming along nicely, you lost it on the u and s
maybe collab sometime?

[Dewster_OnE]

dank- personally i think you should thinkin about switching up your style completely, seems like your stuck on these letters that look exactly the same, maybe you should experiment with different styles and techniques until you develope one of your own

[-Wings-]

Dsub exchange.

Bump !

[Dewster_OnE]

crits

[ESKiMO2]

That flows real well but the a kind of interrupts the flow. Try to make the A out of 3 bars instead of 2 with one bent.

[Dewster_OnE]

i just havent figured out what to do with the bottom of the legs on the a

[ESKiMO2]

Dewster- You should try making the left leg go into the N.

[Dewster_OnE]

you shoulda fixed the u and s =[

[NoCanControl]

dewster im the only kansr around here....


anddddddddddd....

dank . stfu. and get straight bar letters. >

eskimo. your a looks like a h.

[ESKiMO2]

Yeah, I thought about connecting those bars. Seems like a good idea :/

[NoCanControl]

Yeah, I thought about connecting those bars.

WELL THINK AGAIN. hahah. jk man

[b SQUARED 08]

Eskimo: Looks pretty good overall, but as already said, connect that left portion of the A so that it isn't mistaken as an H, and make your U and S a bit bigger to match proportions.

Dewster: Make your C's look more identical and something about that R doesn't look right to me... can't put my finger on it...

Third sketch of my new name: