make your H wider, its too tucked in. dosent balance out with the width on the other letters
the middle bar of the e should go more towards the middle
i dont like the e of the black one and the f came got fucked on the flame peice
keep your bars the same width, have the ends of the bars going into the other ends rather than stacking them up on each other. the bottom of your T for example. check how you have a chunk sittin on top the extension, smooth it down an work it into the other bar.
do dads an shit, didnt alter it too much
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HELL YEA THANKS GUY! I have trouble building and constructing letters,ive always been a slow learner and sometimes reading isnt enough for me to fully comprehend ( i think im like dislexic or some shit ) so to visually see my mistakes was nice for a change.Your advice is always on point,thanks for the support man its really stepping up my game.
sall good homie, ive rocked a few nice sketches too lately. so i guess karmas helpin me back. any time. i woulda did that ms paint thing earlier but ive got serious adhd and i typically dont have patience to do so. but today i was able to with my morning coffee
guyer knows whats up.
i got fuckeddd up tonight and there is a flaws and messynes in the peice but overall i love how the letters looked..im looking foward to playing with them tomorrow when im not so fucked up..the t shouldnt have came out so skinny and some flaws here and there but fuck im really drunk ill have much more focus tomorrow
forcefield really determines how fucked up i really am,idk how it got that sloppy
Last edited by FlippingChickens; 05-30-2010 at 11:53 PM.
just keep working at it, parallel lines look very good if you use em well. the inside bar of your F needs work, same with the bottom of your F. the bottom of your T needs work. make the top bar of the T longer. and your E is much larger than the rest of your piece. make them all the size height. the top extension on your O make a bit shorter. try 2/3rds of what you have now.
but forreal, the bottom bar of your T. take that top line and make it go straight to that corner if you know what i mean.
an yo, check the bar use on this quick paint sketch. see how i run my bars through each other? on the T in particular. the bottom bars run into the ends of the other bars. by doing that you get good bar proportioning and it looks clean an whatnot. run the bars through the other bars so all your bars are even and flow well.
dont use the E in this sketch on your piece though, its the E i use on my ground ups.
Good looks guy,im gonna work on it now.
what i have so far...gonna work on it later
i aint feelin how the left of the O has a point and the right of it is smooth but eh ..
i think that O in your previous work (the green one) was better.
1. this looks bad.like you made a mistake.its not the same size as the rest of your piece
2. i dont like the thing at the end of this bar.
3. i think you should get rid of it or make it the same size as all the bars...
thats the best T youve done so far tofe. on your O try flipping the way the bar turns. it stretchs outwards right nopw, flip it so it stretches inwards. make it smooth on the outside. the spine of your E make it go up just like your T and F.
just keep sketchin outlines an workin at it bro. youve made a retarded amount of progression over the past 5 pages. youve got the raw talent, no doubt, you just need to do a lot of outlines. you know what your doing now too. so it wont be that hard anymore, just gotta get the flow down and small things liek bar proportioning.
youre starting to use smooth curves in your bars too, and its really sharpening them up. signifigantly. the top bar of your F and T look real good homie. keep it up
Kinda ran outta space but I think you get it. I did the spine of the F like this to kill some of the negative space under the horizonta bars of the F and so you wont have to curve the spine of the E in so close to the F. And i drew this before guyers crits, but I still kinda did the same things, haha. good looks.