ima redraw it to do a bigger piece with colors...crits and tips are DEEPLY appreciated!!!
mfatik- top one lose the awkword bend in the right leg of the a and bring the middle bar over and connect it.
bottom one you got more unneccessary extenstions and you need to make the left leg of the a connect to the right one at the top.
Meph-my tip, dont mess it up
kew- dude that shit was like one the top of the last page, i didn't not get crits because nobody saw it...we all saw it it didn't get crits cause nobody was tripping face on mushrooms. Im gonna go with whoever said it just looks like a bunch of boomerangs shaded at diffrent levels...thats my crit.
^ is that a compliment or an insult
its definitely an overkill. i saw the S and after looking HARD i saw the G.
Yeah, kew, you're definitely trying to hard on that one. The structure just isn't there. Stick to working with bars until you understand proportions, then shoot for a more advanced style.
Meph, I'd definitely rework your E on the top one and play around with the layout of the pieces around your letters before you make a final colored one. The car looks pretty good, but I'd work on getting the letters in the smoke to be the same sizes too.
Mfatik, on the top one, those kinks in your letters make the entire thing look kinda awkward, but nice job keeping the letters proportionate. I'd stay away from overlapping like you did on your F and on the left side of your M though. On the bottom one, stay away from disconnecting portions of letters like your A and also don't connect your letters like you did on your M and F. Aside from that, I'd bring your letters closer together and don't be afraid to overlap.
Here's a sketch I finished last night for a buddy of mine (his idea lol):
thats kinda gay
DIRTIER THEN YOUR DAD'S BROWSING HISTORY
Haha true that. That's not really graffiti... the only thing that makes it resemble it is the drop shadow you put on it, which you kinda fucked up hard on.
I circled just a few places. Sorry if it's hard to see. I probably messed up a few places anyways.
And yeah, I might be toy, but I can still see when something isn't right.
You already posted this before when it was pretty simple with basically just the letters and character,
did you expect to receive respect on a graffiti forum for the shit in the background or something?
No hate to you or what you did.. I just don't get why you posted it here on this forum, or why on this thread?
Last edited by 2FNK?; 06-16-2010 at 05:01 PM.
out of all those you circled i see 1 true mistake.
cool your ego and work on your own shit.
My ego is cooled Leaks.
My bad for being a dick B SQUARED.
Just been in a shitty mood today.
Last edited by 2FNK?; 06-16-2010 at 05:39 PM.
Nice character man haha.
Yeah, I know I fucked up the bars.
Last edited by 2FNK?; 06-16-2010 at 11:56 PM.
2FNK?- you have to many crooked lines going..i suggest making your letter thicker and getting your 3d together.
Yeah, I was thinking that too. Thanks for the crits.