Blackbooks

[thepekins]

@madekdga- i know what your saying dude. I mostly just said that cus Ive already told flat to work on his hands and go simple, so has everyone but hes still doing the same shit. I understand constructive criticism and sometimes i give good crits, sometimes im lazy and spend less time on them. It kinda depends on the person. Notice i specifically said which parts of the other two peoples pieces needed work. Its whatever ima do me

@cheesedreams- definitely go simpler. idk what the first letter is supposed to be and the arrow coming off of it is wack. The P and U are the best. Go to the new to graffiti thread and look at some of the stuff about turning straight letters into pieces and shit. Use bars and maybe dont worry about doing the bg right now

[cheese_dreams]

@cheesedreams- definitely go simpler. idk what the first letter is supposed to be and the arrow coming off of it is wack. The P and U are the best. Go to the new to graffiti thread and look at some of the stuff about turning straight letters into pieces and shit. Use bars and maybe dont worry about doing the bg right now

yeah fair call, (it's an F btw) I don't really like pieces that much atm, mainly cause I'm shithouse at them, just like the ideas behind them really, as in I would almost consider them advanced sketches or planning for future blackbook stuff

[Tempo718]

is this complete shit?

[Gatsoi]

Flat- work on your hands
Wem- Diggin the R, the E looks like dookie
Sbal- Your 3d and Bar consistency is off
cheese_dreams- Shits ugly. Bite your keyboard
Tempo- Yes


I tried some new shit, Tell me what i should keep/scrap

[BoomSlang]

mewn, keep basic letter structure and work from that, refine it till you can even out the bars on all the letters and make them consistent even in your sleep. scrap the arrow, the colors and the eyeball in the e, also sort the leading edge of the e out to get rid of that sharp point, looks a bit out of place also scrap the drop shadow as it is all over the place, compare front of the m with the bottom on the n, they arent even in the same hemisphere bud

[DarthMario]

few sketches, just piecing together some letters

[Phat 2]

roflmao @ the last charac... good stuff man :P haha

[Flawless Victory]

a few piece ideas from the ol' sketchbook

Those things on your F look mega bad dude, just cut those off.
Make your letters more balanced and less "I closed my eyes and tried to draw the letter in one stroke" looking.
Work on your hand, a lot.
The superfat second outline with an added third outline is just goofy looking.
Anarchy is a flawed theory, control and authority are natural inevitabilities, as are the people that stray from them.

I'd also say pull your P out a little bit more.

[smokeitup]

CRITTTTTSSSSSSSSSSSSSS...?

[cheese_dreams]

thanks for all the crits on my work, I would like to eventually get better on putting letters together, I think I'll go back to pencils for a bit and work on that first

[FACTone]

@smoke lose those spike addons. also you E is way to big.

i will color it. critz...

[ribcage]

yo dont color it yet, middle crossing bar of F looks like u ignored, its just a dinky little bar, change it. The little extensions/kicks you put on the bottom of the F and left bar of A need to look like the ones you did on the T. Right bar of A looks a little skinny compared to the rest, but that aint as big of deal as the kick/extension on the bottom of it, its too skinny, make it fatter. hoped that helps in someway

[cheese_dreams]

another attempt, I know the P is a little off size compared to the D
I tried using bars this time

[FACTone]

yo dont color it yet, middle crossing bar of F looks like u ignored, its just a dinky little bar, change it. The little extensions/kicks you put on the bottom of the F and left bar of A need to look like the ones you did on the T. Right bar of A looks a little skinny compared to the rest, but that aint as big of deal as the kick/extension on the bottom of it, its too skinny, make it fatter. hoped that helps in someway

tanks mate

[cheese_dreams]

some more attempts, 1 basic, one inked, one with some extras

[Skope2]

Smoke - that fill is too much for me, hurts my eyes looking at it. Think it'd be a decent throw without the top half of that fill.
Fact - thats pretty nice but the T is just a bit higher than the other letters, you might want to bring the bottom half downwards a touch
Fedup - you need to work on your outlines alot, its real fucking messy, the F and E in the bottom two are much smaller than the rest, you should try and get all your letters roughly the same size.. Id straighten up that P aswell, i know youve got it tilted as part of your thing, but it would look alot better if it wasnt tipped so much. I'd reccomend taking a look at the 'New to graffiti, start here!" thread, it'll help you out with your letter structure ALOT.

Went for something a bit different here, looking for crits please.

[ViniVidiVici]

Change up the N and I, they kinda break the flow I think, but it looks pretty good so far

[ViniVidiVici]

Besides the A I think the E has a few slight problems, the main bar (left bar) doesn't seem to line up with the top and bottom parts, I hope that makes sense, and the tippity top bar looks a little to thin.

[ribcage]

idk what you mean by not lining up wit "top and bottom parts" elaborate, and lookin at it now the curve in the left bar(hidden by G) isnt on the same level that all the letters curve at, and yeah top bar is too thin...fasho breh

[FACTone]

@skope2 i like it make a bigger-one i only think the I wont flow.

finally done.
i only hate that my on the run markers die so fast someone got the same problem?