this is for the piece battle if its still open
i dont really like the whole thing, especially the E and R cause they are so just lame. but hit me with crits if ya got any
this is for the piece battle if its still open
i dont really like the whole thing, especially the E and R cause they are so just lame. but hit me with crits if ya got any
Here's some weak shit.
Did it while on the phone with my boy James from Portland.. in under 10 mins easily.
Last edited by Rasm; 05-16-2012 at 02:18 PM.
just a little thing, the U is missing the 3D in the lower partOriginally Posted by dankbudz
this is for the piece battle if its still open
i dont really like the whole thing, especially the E and R cause they are so just lame. but hit me with crits if ya got any
yeep, caught that when i posted it, thanks for the crits though
kill me with crits I'm trying to move on from bars... sorry bout not criting but seems stupid considering my skill level...
i kinda like it better without all the useless crap
Rask- looks nice, i just wouldnt connect the J to the dot of the I
Rerun- work on smooth lines and either slightly overlap all the letters, like the O, or dont. i wouldnt untill you got them down, do it like the K and E.
also that C is way to covered and the bar width is pretty fat.
@Asocke, man you're nowhere near ready to move on from bars yet. Your bar width is very inconsistent (top part of the C vs. the top part of the E, for example). Your E is too wide too. Why is that top horizontal bar so long? Your O is round on the left side and not on the right. It's also overlapped by the S and it overlaps the C, but besides that none of your letters overlap, which kills the flow. Your drop shadow is off too in a lot of places and I'm really not feeling having it outlined in both orange and red. That handstyle isn't too good either.
You still have quite a bit to improve but nice shit anyways man, good stuff
far as his artistic ability what does he have to work on? Not trying to hop on his dick so back up Ribcage (jk) but he seems like he has his style down pretty well. what's he missing? I'm trying to develop my artistic eye better by asking cause his shit is flawless to me.
far as his artistic ability what does he have to work on? Not trying to hop on his dick so back up Ribcage (jk) but he seems like he has his style down pretty well. what's he missing? I'm trying to develop my artistic eye better by asking cause his shit is flawless to me.
got some new markers for fills 2day so had a lil mess around, now i can finish that sucker piece
The E and R in USER need some work, the styles look different and the middle bar of the E is far too stubby. The E in the second one wouldve fit better. The U and S are on point though. Dont really like the little triangle cuts in the letters either, but thats personal preference.
yeah thx man just messing with some freestyle shit atm think every sketch i do is a different style only thing thats usually the same is my painting
didn't have a ruler so the lines are off some. probably could have used a card or something but fuck it.
@Toopski, I agree with Skope2's crits for the most part. I don't mind the triangular cuts, but I think that the U is too small compared to the S and is too hidden by the S too. The S overlaps it in two places; you should have made the U overlap it in one of those instead. I guess that's personal preference though. But keep it up, it's looking solid.
@Aeso, man, don't start thinking about symmetry until you get your letters down because it will end up just hindering you. Keep doing simples and once you get some style/structure, then consider doing something symmetrical if you still want. And like you said, a bunch of the lines are off, especially down on the 3D.
don't use a ruler.
didn't have a ruler so the lines are off some. probably could have used a card or something but fuck it.
Tails and a sketch.
Exchange for SER, sorry it took forever, also looks like shit. top line above the E isn't effect. these shitty sharpie pens blow out a ton
@FlatScank, I'm digging the tails, but I'd lose the extensions on the F, L and T of the sketch. Or change them at least; for some reason I'm just not feeling them, but then again I can't place my finger on why and I guess it's personal preference. Also I hate seeing that shit you did with the bottom of the A. It's so overplayed and lacks so much originality. Fuck. But for the most part it is a pretty solid sketch and I like your style.
@DaFugg, I'm not loving it but if you keep working with that style, it will start looking good. It's also not your usual word. The E just seems awkward for some reason, and the top part of the S is the only real curved part of the whole thing... well I guess the right part of the R is curved too, but basically it lacks consistency. You made the top of the E and the R match, but the top of the S is completely different, which throws it off a bit.
Last edited by Rasm; 06-17-2011 at 01:41 AM.
Thanks guys, The curved bars were cause that's something that I feel I need to work on. My next goal is consistency, which seems to get me every time.
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