1st one- i would loose all them connections and make the N like "N" with steeeze. and take the extensions off the E and do work on it.
2nd- that flower is dope
3rd-thats a nice simple, digging th colors. the L, E, and R is a pretty weak. you are making your E's have too many bars. and that R shouldnt have that retard bend to it, ya dig? practice them simps homie!
Originally Posted by Mildstyles
@Glums, that two letter throw is dope. As for the piece, I feel like the way you have the legs of the M go outwards kills the flow a little bit. The M and the S are huge compared to the first 3 letters... watch for those bar widths. Other than that your shit is tight, and would look nice near some tracks.
@ER, like dank said, if you made the points on the bottom right side of the letters consistent, it could look dope. Also the underline doesn't look great because the width of it varies in the wrong places.
@Seder, your E's would look better if you made the bottom bar the same angle for both of them. The second one is too narrow because the bar is too steep. The D needs some help, but the R looks better than others that I've seen from you. You're definitely on a good path though.
@Went, #1 has pretty decent letter structure, but the W doesn't flow with the rest of the piece. Try making it taller and possibly making the two middle diagonal lines go higher or something. Even with the 3D there, there's still a lot of dead space. Keep working on the letters though; they're not bad but the E could use work and the N isn't super original either.
#2 is kind of blurry and is hard to read. The flow seems better and the flower is dope, but the extensions are bad. Also the D is both too high and too tall.
#3 needs some help too. The letters are really not that great... especially the E, A, R, and D. And the other letters are decent. Dank is right though, take his advice on this one. Some of your letters have too many bars and should be much simpler. And the L isn't great but for some reason I don't mind it. Also your handstyle needs tons and tons of work.
Last edited by Rasm; 06-28-2011 at 06:39 PM.
alright thanks bro will do, what do u use for an thin black out liner for ur stuff? the lines look consistent and smooth
thanks rasm, and ill work on my handstyle, ive been using the name pure, but my parents found out so i need to change my name or if the see my stuff theyll flip, would "went" be a decent name?
Last edited by Phat 2; 06-30-2011 at 06:52 PM.
i either use them sharpie pens or a fine tip sharpie. the fine tips sharpie marker bleeds more though so i tend to not use it as much.
it says EOS didnt feel like fuckin with the T and writin teos
I've been doing nothing but giving crits lately, so I'll drop a sketch. Made this for a friend to give to his friend, ha.
Still needs some minor adjustments. CRITS?
Edit: made some changes to it, but I'll flick it again in the morning if I remember.
Last edited by Rasm; 06-29-2011 at 01:24 AM.
jus some shit im messin wit right now.. still have to clean it up a bit and fix some bars n wat not then colour it and outline.
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feeling this dude! for sure keep that up and it will become a sick style.. maybe rock them trains once u get that shitI've been doing nothing but giving crits lately, so I'll drop a sketch. Made this for a friend to give to his friend, ha.
Still needs some minor adjustments. CRITS?
Edit: made some changes to it, but I'll flick it again in the morning if I remember.
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Kinda looks like EAS with the E's extension. Anyways, Sed, I got bored. did your name to try to show you what I mean with the R. Afterall, I think I fucked the entire thing up lol
your right^ you are way off on helping him brotha :P to the real seder.. keep doin what ur doing.. try bending them into rounded letters instead of so blocky ya kno
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@rasm that Y is steazy breh, the D and last A are super weak compared to the rest, they have no flavor
@dank yo your right each of those letters turned out retarded lol. Smooth trasitions bro, thats what you need to work on. On your good simps what made em good was the cleanliness i.e. bars matched up to each other and shit. Now when your adding extensions and all that you need to do the same. An extension is exactly how it sounds an extension, not just another chunk thrown onto a letter. Make sure your extenisons and bends of the letters make sense and keep consistancy. The shape of your R at the top where it bends is off, and it makes a huge difference to how the letter looks... apply that to the rest of your letters and think smooth,Take your time when you outline and the width of your bars will be better, and if you thicken them lines it will help tremendously, even tho it can be time consuming after a while it wont take long.
@oneevil more arrows
iunno if that was real talk or jokes but kk lol
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Dafugg- try and go simpler with your pieces, no extesions and stuff till you get them down smooth. then start trying to add them on.
also avoid things like you did with the R, the leg that went over the whole piece. but nice on them rasta colors man
i feel like i need to fix the bottom and top of the S a bit. are they extensions on the E's lookin good or wack? and what about the connections on the E to D, E to R? I dont like the S i feel like its too curvy and shit
Last edited by dankbudz; 06-29-2011 at 05:47 PM.
nice danks
quite like that hork too...not to sure bout the t arrow going across the middle of the o tho
da fugg.... loving the colour scheme its mental just the s is a bit sqwished
think am just nit picking again though mostly....post some more shit up soon kiddies!
yeah Os get annoying after awhile, thanks for the crits.. any is welcome if its real criticism not no hate crime shit haha :P
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It seems like each letter is just doing its own thing and isnt keeping at one theme. Know what i'm sayin?
yea i feel you i noticed that right as i painted it, shits booty
@Hork,You need to lose a lot of those extensions and arrows. The extension off the bottom of the H is especially bad, and the arrows off the tops of the H, O, and R are too forced and don't flow well with the piece. You seem to have a decent understanding of the letters but some adjustments do need to be made. Try pushing the R closer to the O and losing the arrow in between. I kind of like the extension off the bottom of the K but it doesn't work in this sketch. It's a little too big and goes too low. It seems like the sketch is angled diagonally up but then the K is completely flat and doesn't go with the rest. Keep it up, your shit isn't bad and it's definitely coming along. Thanks for the kind words by the way!
@DaFugg, Man you really fucked that Seder sketch up. The letters are trash and that extension off the R that goes along the top of the whole thing is quite terrible. It's obvious that you spent barely any time on it at all... the letters don't flow well and they're definitely not your best.
@Seder, You've been adjusting your R's a lot lately and they're starting to form nicely. I still don't know how I feel about the bottom bars on your E's but the extensions at the top are alright, partly because they're too small to throw the piece off. I don't really love the S either. It's mostly round at the top and then very straight at the bottom. You might want to try flipping it and playing around and see if you find something you like better.
@Toes, Like AceK said your piece has no flow or consistency. For now, lose the shit between the O and the E, and the E and the S, and make all the letters separate. Like I said last time, GO SIMPLE. The E is also too small, especially compared to the T. The top of the S is all fucked up (watch your bar widths) and for now you should lose that tiny extension you put on the lower end of the S and learn to make it look good on its own. That kind of shit comes with time.
Now it's my turn. I posted this the other day but I fixed a few things up since then. It still needs work but I'll probably re-do it on a separate page.
CRITS?
Last edited by Rasm; 06-30-2011 at 12:16 AM.
No crits... that's quailty in my book.
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