I've been doing nothing but giving crits lately, so I'll drop a sketch. Made this for a friend to give to his friend, ha.
Still needs some minor adjustments. CRITS?
Edit: made some changes to it, but I'll flick it again in the morning if I remember.
Last edited by Rasm; 06-29-2011 at 02:24 AM.
@rasm that Y is steazy breh, the D and last A are super weak compared to the rest, they have no flavor
@dank yo your right each of those letters turned out retarded lol. Smooth trasitions bro, thats what you need to work on. On your good simps what made em good was the cleanliness i.e. bars matched up to each other and shit. Now when your adding extensions and all that you need to do the same. An extension is exactly how it sounds an extension, not just another chunk thrown onto a letter. Make sure your extenisons and bends of the letters make sense and keep consistancy. The shape of your R at the top where it bends is off, and it makes a huge difference to how the letter looks... apply that to the rest of your letters and think smooth,Take your time when you outline and the width of your bars will be better, and if you thicken them lines it will help tremendously, even tho it can be time consuming after a while it wont take long.
@oneevil more arrows
Dafugg- try and go simpler with your pieces, no extesions and stuff till you get them down smooth. then start trying to add them on.
also avoid things like you did with the R, the leg that went over the whole piece. but nice on them rasta colors man
i feel like i need to fix the bottom and top of the S a bit. are they extensions on the E's lookin good or wack? and what about the connections on the E to D, E to R? I dont like the S i feel like its too curvy and shit
nice danks defo the s like you said but still clean as fuck
quite like that hork too...not to sure bout the t arrow going across the middle of the o tho
da fugg.... loving the colour scheme its mental just the s is a bit sqwished
think am just nit picking again though mostly....post some more shit up soon kiddies!
It seems like each letter is just doing its own thing and isnt keeping at one theme. Know what i'm sayin?
yea i feel you i noticed that right as i painted it, shits booty
@Hork,You need to lose a lot of those extensions and arrows. The extension off the bottom of the H is especially bad, and the arrows off the tops of the H, O, and R are too forced and don't flow well with the piece. You seem to have a decent understanding of the letters but some adjustments do need to be made. Try pushing the R closer to the O and losing the arrow in between. I kind of like the extension off the bottom of the K but it doesn't work in this sketch. It's a little too big and goes too low. It seems like the sketch is angled diagonally up but then the K is completely flat and doesn't go with the rest. Keep it up, your shit isn't bad and it's definitely coming along. Thanks for the kind words by the way!
@DaFugg, Man you really fucked that Seder sketch up. The letters are trash and that extension off the R that goes along the top of the whole thing is quite terrible. It's obvious that you spent barely any time on it at all... the letters don't flow well and they're definitely not your best.
@Seder, You've been adjusting your R's a lot lately and they're starting to form nicely. I still don't know how I feel about the bottom bars on your E's but the extensions at the top are alright, partly because they're too small to throw the piece off. I don't really love the S either. It's mostly round at the top and then very straight at the bottom. You might want to try flipping it and playing around and see if you find something you like better.
@Toes, Like AceK said your piece has no flow or consistency. For now, lose the shit between the O and the E, and the E and the S, and make all the letters separate. Like I said last time, GO SIMPLE. The E is also too small, especially compared to the T. The top of the S is all fucked up (watch your bar widths) and for now you should lose that tiny extension you put on the lower end of the S and learn to make it look good on its own. That kind of shit comes with time.
Now it's my turn. I posted this the other day but I fixed a few things up since then. It still needs work but I'll probably re-do it on a separate page.
Last edited by Rasm; 06-30-2011 at 01:16 AM.
My Sons initials, (due sept 17th). Some Self crits; I don't like how far my C was, . 3D is shit. My letters are still in a process to be perfected.
Last edited by DaFugg; 06-30-2011 at 02:21 AM.
Good bar width mostly. The J seems a bit lower than A and C.
As far as the rest of the sketch, I wouldn't have the top part of the S overlap the middle bar. That middle bar should take priority and have the top tucked behind it. Also I wouldn't let that bottom bar go so far up to the left. With the E's, the extensions on the top could work if you make them a nice consistent shape and size, and put them at the right angle. As for the bottom extension, I would just drop it completely. The D isn't anything special, it's just triangular and the bottom is unfinished. I'd drop the two small extensions at the top because they're doing nothing but crowding the piece. Just take your time with your lines and keep your curves smooth and clean, and your shit will start looking much better soon.