Blackbooks

[dankbudz]

upper90- practice simps more before you bend your bars, add extensions and shit. everything you did is practically in the wrong place. go slowly with tweaking yo letters.
i wouldnt waste any time outlining them, i would practice on printerpaper or something cheap then throw it in your black book if you got something you like, but its up to you.

rib- yo mean the style of the R or the whole piece? i understand for the R though, shit looks stiff and awkward. ill try some out next time.

Rasm- that XEROx doesnt look to bad too me. I would just fix that R and the middle of the E makes it look like a sideways M. but the Z O and X is lookin good. and bar width on that isnt bad, it just looks like a quicky pencil sketch. good practice man

[EWL24]

Rasm - i like the zerox one, the only thing i would do is give the R a line or some kinda whole

dank - i think rib is talking about the whole piece cause u have been doing that same style for a while now and u r good enough to move on

most recent stuff iv done.
im thinking about changing my name to one of these

crits please

[arsebanditskaelsucker]

dank- that last one of yours is tight buddy boy! again bottom leg of the s is a bit wack but its looking very noooice!

ewl- just that w bud, think if it was straight and not tryin to hump the e a little lol, but size and everything aint looking bad
upper 90- i preferred the last few sketches u put up on the last page or so....some of its fairly neat and then some of its a bit nutts like the last one on this page
rasm- love the zerox one, and the syar is pretty tidy too
squared that kayla...mmmmmm nice
messer- bit to much going on on those pages for me, like it all wants me to look at it at the same time...brain melt
evol- nice first one lovely n fluffy letters, but hows about some different letters than e and v
will attempt to post some more of my shit so you can rip me soon just too fucking tired right now.......

[ribcage]

@sed the style of it all, set that 1 aside and try branching out a bit with some different basis for letters and then go back to that one if you want. Trying different bases for letters can help you think of ways to change your other letters......if that makes sense... btw thanks for uploading them pics for me

[.Cuore]

Sick octopus dude. Hhahaa.

[dankbudz]

rib- no problem broski.
as for your pics, i already told you the top one was dope aha. Letter wise, they get smaller in height and barwidth and less snazzy (compared to the R). Im diggin the R, A, and H. Though i still thing you should open them vericle bars of the H more. The E is lookin like my lame E's and i know you can top my shit tenfold. Definitely diggin the style though.
Cant crit the bottom cause i can never read those style of pieces.

ewl- keep up the practicing. give some space on the bottom one.

[Rasm]

Ribcage, I'm digging the 3D work although I'm not completely sure what it says. That part down the bottom there on the right side might look better if it was going at a slightly different angle though. As for the Reach page with the octopus, I like the artwork but your bar widths are all over the place. I'd personally make the angels of the bends in your letters a little more consistent too.

[Shroomsh]

for the kids that get me through hard times ♥

["FrY"]

^^^Oooo thats sexy. I like it. Keep it up mate.

Since my camera was made in mexico, you can't see that there's an outline. I had trouble making the n's similar, but after a few attempts I got them to be somewhat close. You like?

[DaFugg]

The N bars are inconsistent in a bad way man, The E has a random tilt, like it had one too many to drink The bottom extention is uneeded as well as the top. I like the O but it doesn't match. The last N is much better but could still use more work.

There's a lot wrong with it but it's definately on to something. Try working a simpler version of that.

[dankbudz]

no one gives a shit about your lightning blue outline. last N wouldnt be THAT bad if it didnt have those random notches, but it still is smaller then the O. haha and i thought the second letter was a C. practice your simples, learn some letter structure.

Shroomsh- those names looking siick, i like that crazy hectic background you got going on.

FRY, dude, look at his letters, and notice how his are good and simple, but have style to it, because he tweaked them slightly and in the right places. he didnt add a shit ton of notches or extension connection wanna be wildstyle shit. practice your simples and itll pay off.

["FrY"]

cool, thanks for the tips guys (: ill start on something simpler in just a sec.

[dankbudz]

dont post it up right away. keep it. look at it. study it. ask yourself how you can improve it. Think, bar width, baseline, negativespace, consistency in letters basically. and post up once youve done ten hundred of them... haha nah, but do more then one. try to improve on your own a bit. you cant fuck up too hard if you just write it like NEON.

Edit:
god i am up way too late on this shit.

[DaFugg]

Haha you sound a bit cranky too haha.

["FrY"]

Alrighty then. Ill make a couple simple ones. The more I make, Ill try to improve on them. Thanks dank (holy shit i just rhymed).

[EWL24]

Shroomsh - thats sick i like the 2 Ts on trents name

dank- late? where do u live? for me its only 10

[Rasm]

@Shroomish, nice work man. What pens did you use on that? The S on the Hoeski one is slightly squished but besides that it's pretty dope. I'm sure your friends will be impressed.

@Fry, man you need to lose the extra bits and notches. It says NEON? You need to make the middle bar of the E much more defined because it looks like a C. Actually, it is a C.

It's past 1am here but I couldn't sleep at this hour if I tried.

Here's some random bullshit for talking.

[Shroomsh]

thanks everyone
Rasm- i just used a blue felt tip or fineliner whatever you wanna call them, would of used black but i did it in internal suspension and i couldnt resource one aha.
i like the kash piece, but the a needs work, the k doesnt really look the part. without the k would look like a dope "ash" piece aha

[ribcage]

this is just abstract broskis, yall cant read it because its not letters, just me fuxin around witta pencil... might do something piece related with it but I aint got the bars to paint somethin like this yet so it just playin for now

[DaFugg]

Think I did pretty good on this personally, Things I noticed and am going to fix though: I foorgot the blue around the top left star thing (I know what it's called, not how it's spelled) . I bit the O from that Xerox peice which BTW I thought was dope. But I fucked it up filling over the "Exchange" I wrote in it. Pardon the angle of the shot.

Just a side note, those recognition pens from micheals are fucking amazing.