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    Quote Originally Posted by dankbudz View Post
    Thanks for the crits bra
    Im diggin both of those but on that aply piece im not really feeling the ly connection or much of the y. The A and P has alot more movement and the Y is that rigid style you were doin before.
    The broke piece is kinda the same, i like the BR but the leg of the R to the E looks too rigid for what you had first.
    The aply was a quick freestyle against mn nice, so the letters are kinda random, but yeah the P dont really fit the rest of the style.

    On the broke peice the R and K are practically the same, but it adds balance imo, I just should have made a curvier E.

    talk about balance... this the rough draft. gonna eat and go to work, prolly redo it tonight. no need to crit
    Last edited by ribcage; 09-21-2011 at 05:27 PM.

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    trying something new but i think i gotta put the lower part of the s under the curve instead of in front...crits

    ribs: i definitely like the idea but I'm not feelin the H

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    sevr. doesnt reach do that e with his throws? and not really feeling the V kinda looks like a y, and for the drop shadow to make sense you need to fill in the hole in the r

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    maybe he does idk i thought it was just a generic e

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    take the nub out of the bottom of the v
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    Quote Originally Posted by EWL24 View Post
    rib - those are nice, i really like that P

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    I really like the bottom one bro, but maybe make the E a little more curvy like the W and L are... just my 2 pence
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    Reach - I really dig the loopy piece other then the curves on the H not sure whats off lookin forward to seein next draft ill have ur exchnge piece up at the end of the week local writers borrowing my book broke simple is fire
    Sevr- try and make it so theres no deadspace in your throw think fat stylish marshmellows
    Ewal - feelin that first simple most
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    Quote Originally Posted by Spyder View Post
    Any crits for my piece? I want to get better at this.
    Every thing is good... except the letters. You are obviously a skilled artist, but your letters need work. For something like what you have there I think a clean script style would be more suitable. Keep working.

    Rib: that P does stick out in the Aply piece. I think if you stiffen up that A like the L and Y and use a different fill color for the P and make it stand out even more it would work better. One of my favorites from you. And with the swirly one I agree that the loops on the H are a little strange. Maybe a lowercase h would suit better, just make the right leg come up kinda high.

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    hey ribcage do me a kils. i dont have much to offer since i kinda suck, i dont wanna embarrass myself

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    Quote Originally Posted by PETER View Post
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    clean, raise the center hole in the a a bit, and possibly remove/choose a better color for the lines inside the letters, like a different/lighter shade of purple, or a bright solid white. other than that looking clean man. nice fade/blend
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    Quote Originally Posted by vems View Post
    clean, raise the center hole in the a a bit, and possibly remove/choose a better color for the lines inside the letters, like a different/lighter shade of purple, or a bright solid white. other than that looking clean man. nice fade/blend
    thanks man. should have kept them the same height. The lines inside are silver, doesn't really show... just working with what I got.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Fluffy Bunnies View Post
    hey ribcage do me a kils. i dont have much to offer since i kinda suck, i dont wanna embarrass myself
    im not a machine man, I got like 4 internet exchanges, 3 real exchanges, and a battle with ankr to do. If your on tonight around 10 or 11 I prolly be on lookin for some simp battles/exchanges or somethin

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    can you like do some "fuck Phat2" tags on every one of these exchanges and battles you're planning on doing dude? that'd be cool thanks

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    for the ones for this site, that can be arranged. Im afraid Id get a lot of shit if homies I know knew I was on this site tho

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    looking for some crits on this stuff. ithought i would post here before anywhere else, the last one is my more recent.





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    you need to practice your letter structure, cleanliness, flow, and bar consistency heaps before attempting to sketch something similar to these... you're about 10 steps ahead of yourself.
    main advice is take it real easy for now and practice the things I mentioned, even if you have to go about sketching loads of simples and straight letters (as boring as they might sound... I know all about it).
    good luck if you accept crits. and tough luck if you don't. (in that case you probably will go on thinking everyone's hating on you and that your style is fresh/doesn't need fixing and be king in your own mind's world)

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    Quote Originally Posted by ribcage View Post
    Im afraid Id get a lot of shit if homies I know knew I was on this site tho
    haha same

    ay cosmic, nto trying to harsh your mellow, you should keep working with aspects of those but simple some shit out yo, i like the yellow S, but everythin else is wackish, goin a little extension crazy mang

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    Quote Originally Posted by Phat 2 View Post
    you need to practice your letter structure, cleanliness, flow, and bar consistency heaps before attempting to sketch something similar to these... you're about 10 steps ahead of yourself.
    main advice is take it real easy for now and practice the things I mentioned, even if you have to go about sketching loads of simples and straight letters (as boring as they might sound... I know all about it).
    good luck if you accept crits. and tough luck if you don't. (in that case you probably will go on thinking everyone's hating on you and that your style is fresh/doesn't need fixing and be king in your own mind's world)
    funny you mention that i was looking for exactly that because i'm not confident in my letter structure those crazy looking pieces were from about 3-4 yrs ago. from what you see do you suggest going all the way back to block letters or only back to straight letters. i know i'm not good, i fugre if i keep seeing myself as not good i will push myself to improve more. by bar consistency do you mean the height of each of the letters? and flow you mean similar/matching letter style? cleanliness i can assume you mean simple things like crispier lines. I'm willing to take what ever is said into consideration except if someone says to stop.
    Last edited by shush4; 09-21-2011 at 07:32 PM.


 

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