Blackbooks

[BennyBoii]

haha lol ^^
i think i could of made the "b" a little bigger, and fix the last leg of the "m" near the top

[SneeZ]

He's juss tryin to say letter structure is important, lol.
c-sone i cant really give you any constructive crit on those, but i can drop ma dollar.
perspective is kind of wierd on first one, i know what u meant to do, but it didnt came out well, s si one level above the other two. I had troubles on finding letters in second one i can see the s and o, still didnt find n and e. And i think you aint planing to bomb that. I suggest you post it in the intermediate thread, there you'll get better crits.

@gemer shorten those arrow/extensions, try giving letters the same lean. Dont make m that "spacey" next time, you kill flow with that. Try to reduce this space with letter bars, also on down/right part of g. Overall nice work, its got potential.

[Tempo718]

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HELPFUL crits please!

yo that is raw do that.

[knowtheledge]

ill stuff gem your letters are ruude n sone your styles on point with that pen game. you guys wont get much qualitative input from most of the kats in this thread imo move it to intermediate

quick ting

[PETER]

absolutly horrible outline. playing with stuff for my end of a Slotr exchange.

[Beko]

i really like blue an yellow together! crits please!

[PETER]

Beko: Koto, Kote? T isn't bad. That K needs some work. And whatever is on the end needs medical attention. You're improving over all, but keep working on your straights and getting them to flow.

[Hick94]

ya beko that k needs some work..the charecter isnt bad, in my opinion lose the splashes coming off the charecter

[Wonky]

looks to me like theres a lot of rockin been going on....i had a few days off drawing... did these today

[Beko]

K's are super hard for me!

[Tempo718]

wonky I got 2 lady down after that one. good show

[PETER]

I suggest making your K with 3 straight bars at first. Bending them (especially the top bar) can be troublesome. I am going to use Wonky's pieces as an example here. His style is pretty straight up and simple, but they have some funk. Once you get your basic letter forms down you can start bending them etc. Here is a straight 3 bar K for example.

[Wonky]

Thanks I think Tempo. Any crits / comments?

[PETER]

Wonky: that blue piece is solid. Work on your S's though. The blue one isn't too bad, but the pink one is a bit rough. The E on the pink one needs some work. I like your blue E far better. If it where me I'd work on making it more circular on the far right side.... Just me.

[Wonky]

Straight up. Thanks Peter.

[KingKozmik]

[PETER]

Try to make your letters not look like Jell-o jigglers.

[Wonky]

King. Back to bars.

[Beko]

did this last night. kust something i didnt in like 5 minutes! and crits??

[Hick94]

king ever hear less is more? same applies to graff
simple i did today