Takeout: I hate to say it, because you are working at it, but those proportions still look off (to me...and I'm no expert of course) Horizontally the R looks a lot skinnier than everything, and the I a lot fatter.

 

so all the bars should be about the same size?
but thanks

 

Got your pm man, sent one back, hopefully you see this because I haven't been on here in a month or so. Go simple!!!

 

Lines are shaky, but I tried to work on the negative space and the R.

 

^ Take out the negative space on the N.
Noir - Fix the O hole. R is a little bit taller than it too.

 

do you understand what negative space means???

 

yea the only negative space is between the r and t

 

didnt know for the longest fucking time that they had forums on this site...
anyway heres my shit
DEK 2 FYC




more soon dont feel like taking more pictures of my book today haha

 

Noir - Your bar's lines are a bit shaky. Try to make bars same width and straight.
Sin- That is a good start. Your S looks a bit weird though and looks more 5 than S to me. Keep working on with bars and next time take out the dead space between letters.
Accidemos - Looks ill. I'm really feelin that character. Reminds me of one shirt in threadless.

Something I made a while ago:

And something I did today:

 

I forgive you for being a douche.
Remember when I owned your girl, owned you with my girl, then owned you with letters?
Good times... good times...

 

Zing !

 

bump from last page. Crits?

 

lolss

 

acid - looks sick bro
peck - nice n dope, i wouldn't waste your black on such an intense background tho lol.

 

i know the joke is over, but i found bome trying to hide his gf's gut on 12oz lol he shure learned his lesson
[Broken External Image]:http://img41.imageshack.us/img41/9258/bomefatbitch.jpg

 

Yeah, I thought that too but yellow just looks better with black background.

 

hey sin is takein by a guy in my citywhere do you live?

 

hey bome, im just curious why didnt you even say anything bout people making fun of your girl. even if it was maaad funny lmfao!..but idk man stand up for her.

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i lold so much at the whale pic hahahahahaha