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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

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  1. Hulk

    Hulk Member

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  2. upper90daynnight

    upper90daynnight Senior Member

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    spray.jpg okay its kinda slopy besides the bar lines on the 3D and the bar width on certain parts any crits?
     
  3. Rask Wsk LA

    Rask Wsk LA Senior Member

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    spray, you got the basics of width and all the hieghts and shit, but the letters dont look so good, try simpler shit and work off a simp slowly building it into a monster

    tempo, the key is to not expect it to look like what you want, just do that shit, dont put much of an expectation on it
     
  4. Lado

    Lado Senior Member

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    bump
     
  5. pez 1794

    pez 1794 Member

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    Hulk - I think it's a lot better.The top right of the D doesn't look right tho.

    Upper90 - The style of it looks good. The added parts on the A and Y don't fit as well as the P one tho.

    Lado - Idk maybe try bending the vertical part in towards the other letters to fill the space. The way you have it makes the L and A work pretty well but the D looks out of place.

    Here's some more of mine.

    Toy 1 Small.jpeg

    Not to bad?

    Caoz 1 Small.jpeg

    Not that great. Tried to expand the letters into each other more but I think I overdid it. And the top corner of the Z is jacked up.

    Besides what I already said any crits?
     
  6. ChronicKush

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    PEZ- fistone...dont keep the lines inside the letters and i think the 3d is off.
    second...no good. just keep doin simples and stick with 1 word till you get better

    Got kicked out of intermediate =/ .... with no crits
    anyone got some?

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  7. LeanOne

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    Pez - what kush said.
    Tempo - ima hit your name next, to show you what i think you should try and do.
    Hulk - With the E, it should be straight like DOP and not rotated.
    Chronickush - i think you should try and straighten up the J, it looks kinda out of place skewed like that, and you see how you kinda flick the tops of the R and D, do that on the top left end of the top bar on the J.

    havent drawn for a while, i think ive improved.

    [Broken External Image]:http://img30.imageshack.us/img30/4589/img00248201104231244.jpg

    Was gunna enter this in the last piece battle but i missed the deadline

    [Broken External Image]:http://img12.imageshack.us/img12/8909/img00249201104231244.jpg

    any crits ? ill crit back.
     
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  8. Tempo718

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    @dope - next one do w/o color, focus on the critical aspects of structure more.
    @spray - I don't feel it would B as sloppy if you slowed down or had a way to erase.
    @Kush - stand your ground don't allow those guys to feel superior. your good yo.
    @lean - I write on and off 2 but w/e I comeback I feel stronger and wiser.
    Looking forward to seeing your concept of my name too.
    @Ian - is there any1 around for you to paint with? I respect goin dolo but sometimes
    When there is someone who has your back it's easier to relax.
     
  9. FlatScank

    FlatScank Banned

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    @ Tempo: try to not rotate the letters so much, i.e: your E and P
    @ Hulk: don't focus on fills, those will come later, and fills are alot easier to do that actual letter structure, but theres a good way to do a fill, and a terrible way.
    @ Spray: you got the right idea of bar width, but it doesn't mean that the width has to the same all around, thats when you noodle-like letters.
    @ Jordan: I like it, the drips are a nice touch.
    @ Lean: pretty decent, seems like something I'd see as a burner for a public train.
    My friend and I are gonna do a vs on a wall pretty soon, prob gonna paint something similar to this, plus a character, I expect this to get dissed, but I'm gonna still paint it either way.
     

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  10. Hulk

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    I know My E and D are a little off, But i work with what i had, thanks for crits. And my fill. yeahh its not the best either, I use crayola nigggga!
     
  11. LeanOne

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    lol atleast you got colours brother, all i got is the mighty hb
     
  12. upper90daynnight

    upper90daynnight Senior Member

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    thanks rask ill post some more stuff real soon
     
  13. ribcage

    ribcage Banned

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    @Flat yo on the real for real the less shit you put on your letters the better it turns out. The little curvey/hook extensions you put on it look terrible(like on the top of the F, or the bottom of the T) your extension going out of the bottom of the F to the left is bad. The T looks like an E or an F waaay more than it looks like a T. your A would be dope if it didnt have those little hook extensions.

    Yo you got can control on your painted shit but your letters are wack, you got to break out of the same formula of sketching, cause instead of changing you letters all your doing is changing wack extensions. On this one instead of wack arrows coming out of nowhere its wack hooks coming out of nowhere. Its frusturating when you see someones sketchs go to the wall and after people tell him his letters are wack he does the same damn thing everytime but different fill or 3D...don't waste your painting skill with wack lettering. Peace
     
  14. upper90daynnight

    upper90daynnight Senior Member

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    04-23-2011-15-08-29-47_edited-1.jpg the scanner made the bars look skinnier then they really are so with that in mind, crits please?
     
  15. Tempo718

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    The E was pissin me off. soo i left it out this time. crits
     

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  17. Phat 2

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    ribcage, save your breath, you know he doesn't listen and doesn't give a fuck. give crits to those who deserve them/want them homie.
     
  18. ribcage

    ribcage Banned

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    ^the thing is dude/kid gots decent can control, and seemingly paints with *****s that got skill, so its a shame that he aint gone listen... It dont take much to change a fuckin drawing... one these days hes gone listen to somebody right?
     
  19. Phat 2

    Phat 2 Elite Member

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    yeah... when it's too late and when he'll have only himself to blame
     
  20. LeanOne

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    why does he even post here if he dont want crits. i personally dont wanna see the same shit over and over and over with a different fill / set of funky arrows or hooks.