i write both of these math and revive revi or re for short aint tha greatest just a couple quickies ill post more later!
phat i know i usually hate but thats prolly the best thing ive seen from u. Its well structured. The extenisons arnt all retarded the only thing i dislike is the arrow but i know u put it there to balance out the 2. over all nice though.
alright, here we go! thanks, I apreciate it coming from you. but still I need the negatives more than the positives. those are the useful ones. where's that fuck, phillip. come hate on my work please asshole.
good things: the fade as far as i can tell is good, pic isnt great though so dont know how it looks up close highlights in the 3d are nice as well bad things: 3d on the two isnt great the top of the two is fat and the middle bar is real thin in the middle but the rest of the piece has pretty consistent bar widths. Same for the P the left hand bar of the H looks shit the way it overlaps the P white highlights are a mess, i understand your using shit paint but if thats the case dont do them at all. if they werent there the piece would look a lot cleaner the arrow under the piece is gay, even gayer than a normal underline exclamation marks, why are they different on both sides? the second outline isnt even, for example left of the p and on the 2 and you dont need a third black outline, the whole point of the second outline is to make the piece pop, the third outline kills this would look better without all the tags at first it looks really clean but the more you look at it the more of a mess it looks. id like to see you do a black and white piece, no 3d, and work on making your bars even and cleaning up the outline
You look like you did a large version of your handstyle. Literally, it's right next to it and looks the exact same. You have much better structure on this piece than any of your others, but your flow is still off. That arrow is also facing the wrong direction, it's going in the opposite direction of your flow. Your 2 needs to work WITH your piece, not the other way around. The fade is pretty good for dollar cans. That A needs work, though. And the curve part of the P, the bottom especially, needs to be thicker. That's the only part of your piece with such a thin bar, and it's the wrong spot it would flair at. You're starting to get an understanding of structure, which is good, but you still need to work on flow and composition. Try making a piece that leans like this / / / \ \ \ \ with one of your addons at the bottom middle.
yeah I know. this is EXACTLY what I did. I thought it was clear that it's a large version of a handstyle. except with colors, 3D and an outline... I did it on purpose, that's the whole concept here. and this is how I'm starting to understand structure. by working with the regular tag and working my way up to doing the piece. for now, it's the same as the tag, next time, I'll probably play around with it.. and the fact that it's a chisel tip marker effect, and to keep the consistent stroke angle, it only makes sense that the middle part of the 2 be so thin, and the quotes on the right be different than the ones on the left. which should also answer your comments, phil, about the wrong flares. there actually are no flares in the piece. I aabsolutely agree on the part you mentioned regarding where the left bar of the H and the P overlap. it's the first thing I hated the most. though the purple border I used wasn't really popping out of the white background in real life, so I added the black second border. it looks better in this flick though hmm *shrug* ok, I guess I got what I needed. thanks for the comments and crits. real helpful. I'll stop hogging the thread now heh
either wany handstyle peice and you made it look clean as fuck. i like it no i loved it but still ..try turning your tag in to a piece.. add extensions nwhat not later.. it turns something simple into something great..
I haven't been on here very long, but that's the first time I've seen Phil give a ligit crit and not just talk shit. I also got a little bit of a sense of respect, but that could be due to the voice in my head reading it....
i dont think youll really learn structure just by outlining a tag, and the fact that you had to explain to us that it was a chisel tip effect means it doesnt work. plus if your going for a chisel tip effect then surely the horizontal bars on the A, T, 2 and the arrow should be thin?
yo i really like it man, try thickening up the barz and this would be a solid peice,atm it just looks like a handstyle with 3d. but i like it man, good work. mabe also close up the inside of the 2 aswell, so there is about the same amount of negative space as the P and bottom of the A. just my .02