first one although the f lookin like a E

 

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put my tag in that large bottom part of the e after takin this, can control needs work but lemme know what you think

 

kick on the right lefg of N needs to be proportionate to the rest, right now its way to big and looks awkward. also you a fat cap for the outlinte, you want thick lines to make it stand out, show people that you have real can control. Also throw up hollows/outlines and get em down, cause atm your just wasting paint on the fills

 

hey this is my first throw so crits please

 

P's not bad, the rest sucks, your U is the only letter that has negative space

 

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help please?

 

B's are such a bitch when starting a throwie... I recently changed my name to Bao lol so as far as the BA goes I like to do both upper case. Idk what to tell you about the y though. I hate that letter in general. Also check out boner for some badass B's. Yours isn't bad, but try to make your hand movements a little faster. Those lines are shaky and that makes it look bad anyway. I'm drunk atm so idk if that made any sense or helps at all, but there ya go.

 

hmmmmmm idk really how to help ya with that other than tell you to watch vids and look at a bazillion pictures of throwies, then maybe your brain will come up with ideas on how to make it less plain, Y's be hard for throws too mang. All in All that aint a bad start, just clean it up a bit

edit* o damn post ninja up here^ said almost exactly what i said lol

 

thanks for the crits, and i'll look that dude up, watch some vids, and study some pictures tomorrow
and see if i can apply some stuff without biting. gotta be up inna few hours for work. peaaaace

 

crits?

 

your throws would look 100 times better if their tops didnt converge to meet in that corner. give it a try and show us what it would look like.

 

i dont know what you mean by that.. .elaborate

 

think he means how all the tops flow up into the upper left corner....maybe?

 

ohhhh, thanks for elaborating lol... ill give it a shot

 

been super busy with school so i havent been doing anything at all the past month i hate the p and the r

 

Gotta make the P stand out more..... Make the top about half the height of the main stem.




for a friend

 

edit: im such a bleeding cunt.

dumb down the swoop thing you do on the upper right corner of your letters. it ruins the otherwise fine L, M, and O.

if the middle bar of the E was thicker, i think it would help out quite a bit. your L is fine except for the over exaggerated swoopthing. make sure the M comes over a little to the left to eliminate the akward space above the L. again, less swoopthing and your O is straight.


oh, and those tags? try keyboard letters at a slant. their like black. never go out of style.

 

Im new to the forums, been writing for 3 months now. Heres two pieces of my work.

A quick throwie i did.(Ran outta paint, thats why the arrow doesnt have an outline)


ash by Drez_DZ, on Flickr

My Penguin Character


ash1 by Drez_DZ, on Flickr

Thoughts?