THat outline is terrible. You should make your letters closer. Make the line in the R shorter. Lose those things on the inside of the M. The I should be bigger or made uppercase because it doesn't fit like that.

 

^^thanks for the advice..

 

messed up a little u can probbly tell where..
critt please

tones- work on drop shodow, maybe make ur o a little bigger to cover white space under the t

 

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this is one with the two comments put into it crits?

knemo- needa fix up the n and e i think u already know that but just saying it again xD

 

knemo- im guessing that K is silent or that would be a weird name... try to slant your N a bit more to match the lines all parallel in it, fix the bottom of that E, try to thin out the M and K a bit.. just keep workin at it and try to clean it up, it looks sloppy

edit: thatguywhodrinkstea - that shit looks mad better then before, clean the S up a bit, looks dankyyy

 

knemo - the shape of the M makes the O look like a D. Maybe space the O out more or change the shape of the M. And your K looks like it says RI. the whole thing looks like RINEMD

 

thanks thatguywhodrinkstea, and milk boxx
thatguywhodrinkstea- try to do the the drop shadow on the t like the rest of ur letters

 

thanks empty can

 

exchange with destroyLA..
crits on it..
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criticism appreciated

 

^ what the fuck are you doing?

 

I dunno, I was bored so I just kinda went too far with it lol, whatcha got stuck up ur ass breh?

 

breh? what...

oh yeh crits... burn it with fire

 

first pic upload so sorry if it goes wrong, and im still quite new to graff so sorry if it sucks lol

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I was gonna do some shadow on it but I always fail at it

not good with crits yet but

Firm- take away some of the black outline and move the letters closer and let them flow

bezar - I quite like that man, really like your B

 

^^seriosly? Use one color for now. Make your letters simple and more bubbly. Learn to make shadows and maybe try to find a better name than bar.

 

It says LOE i made this throw because its fast and efficient.
crits please

 

^^If you were to fill that in it wouldn't look right, it doesn't look right at all...
Just try a different style, the E looks like a baseball glove, the O is like a motorcycle cop, and the L..... Don't put your letters on top of each other, but make sure there close.

 

alright I tried again, tips and crits appreciated

 

nice, fuck what that kid said that shit is very paintable and more original than 75 precent of toys on here. nice ish keep it up!

i would add some splashes to the end though