that middle bar in the h is too skinny that thing that hangs of the side on the rightis too much. same in the i. your p goes in too much making it look like an e. your e should be more distinct e looking on the bottom to middle part. heres the bottomline your trying to hard with this whole edgy and smooth combo on your letters, i know what you want it to look like but your just no where close to actually make it look like what you want. dumb your style down, dont doo too much aggresive lines on the outside of the letters, remember its a toss that shit is bubble letters. i know i might sound slightly hypocritical here but its like starting with simps and bars. you dont get to aggressive edgy throws without starting with basic round ones first
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thanks I get what your saying Im trying to jump ahead of my skill level. so for now I will just keep it super simple and make my moves more gradual rather than jumping ahead.
Go kill your parents. [Broken External Image]:http://i1004.photobucket.com/albums/af170/DirtyBed/Photo69-1.jpg
Because they don't love you. [Broken External Image]:http://img804.imageshack.us/img804/2443/dsc04414.jpg gum i cant read yours, the tag says snote but it looks like snune to me. I like the S and the E.