Yeah you should move the hole more left and up.

 

Heres a throwie I painted a while ago. Painted on a old trailer in the woods over some old paint tests and crap. It's not very good I know, say what you want I can take it.

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Yeah man your really going to want to work on that Z and clean up the A
Crits on these?

 

I like that middle on sbal, I think the B & L are good the rest need minor tweeks

 

I like the S on the white one, and the L on the red one, B and A are pretty good to, cept the B looks kinda funky on the orange. But thats just my opinion.

 

No, whole thing is wack. Start over. Start observing throws and learn how to construct a good one.

 

sball all that shiet is whack, i agree with him
i suggest going like to page 51 and going onto from there, or start studying other people's throwies that are up and get on from there.

 

Thanks for the crits guys. I sketched these throws up before I read Flask and Crust's comments so tell me whatcha think. Now, I'm goin into a deep study sesh.

 

Your lines look maaad shakey, your border is way out of proportion.

The a and l are to big in the first and the a also looks like an r.

 

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igrnore the shaky lines, shitty p and not too great e hah. i did this on my lap with a wobbly notebook and shit goin on.

crits specifically on the R/r? I want to get them down, badly. Just don't know which direction to go in.

 

the A need to be as wide as the Z. lose the squiggle for now. my .02

@ RYPE I like those 2. they are not hella OG but then again who is? I think the Y is my fave tho. I ACTUALLY think the E is ur weakest letter. the r's both look fine to me. peace.

 

Thanks for the crits man.

 

yeah, looking at the capital R again tho maybe it should have the little triangle thingy like the E has and the Y shapes too. knawmee?

 

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pick a style any style, crits always appreciated.

ignore the lines inside the top p, in the last picture they were already there.

 

top two are my faves, the right hand side the y dividing line comes down to far.

 

Rype- I like those two with the fatty outlines
New style not really feelin the B on SB

 

Sbal your shadows need some work, but thats all i can see
i shouldnt really be talking though because i fucked up on my 3d real bad lol

 

i would twist ur A counter clockwise a little. so the bar comes over the top and down a bit. also make ur S more like the BA combo, it should have holish sorta spaces in it, so it matches. my .02

 

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