more like this?

 

also is this better?

 

damn when you give this kid crits he fixes it right away. good ambition. its already much better

 

that look better just keep doing them and youl find whats natural.

 

the only thing that really needs work on that throw is the K, but DAMN does it need some work.

 

And I think the 'a's stomach should be lower but that's guna be tricky seeing as the bubble on the M would probly block it but you gotta make it work somehow

 

thanks alot guys

 

Mask: Great progression, you throw looks alot better than it did, just that K is alittle off.


My E never comes out the way I want it to :/ crits on this?

 

could someone help me out with why my 1liners so shitty? its the first one ive ever tried. any detailed crits or examples would be helpful! thanks!

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does it say arsot??? oneliners are tricky, u gotta have the steez to pull em off right, usually the faster u do it the cleaner they look... but the biggest problem i see is the A, maybe u should start it in a different place (looks like u started in the middle) or just change the shape make it lowecase or something

 

Syne your n is sick

 

arkot.. ive tried lowercase 20 diff ways, im just not diggin it.

 

I think this is a better k...
crit

 

man i hate that K lol no offense but work out somethin else, same with the M... the a and s arent bad though

 

yo want me write somethin else?

 

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crits?

 

I have a friend name kane lol btw nice

 

the KA in the top one looks good... didnt u write kan before?