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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

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  1. Rasm

    Rasm Senior Member

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    Very unhappy with this one. Not feeling most of the connections. Oh well.
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    Crits are welcome.
     
  2. Rasm

    Rasm Senior Member

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    @KASR, I feel like there's so much going on in that one that there's no real letter structure, just extensions galore.
     
  3. dave the pirate

    dave the pirate Senior Member

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    Dont like this photo it looks weird cuz part of the peice is in the middle of two pages what eves just posting

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  4. dave the pirate

    dave the pirate Senior Member

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    i dont live in nj in fact i live in a whole differnt country
     
  5. SHUT

    SHUT Senior Member

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    I know what you mean man. i still am really toy. thats my new throw btw. I tested it a few times down the road on some shit bridge and it came out pretty good. I feel like my sketches always look better painted. i'll get some flicks of it painted soon. i am pretty good with bars and simple things, but i just hate using them because they're easy. i try to progress as fast as possible too much. which is good (in the potential idea of it) but i do need to use basics more. thanks for the crits and battle. looking forward to more in the future.
     
  6. SHUT

    SHUT Senior Member

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    Picture0009.JPG I did this yesterday. KASR
     
  7. Graham

    Graham New Member

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    camera photos 1 258.jpg camera photos 1 258.jpg camera photos 1 258.jpg

    ok guys here are my new throwies, tell em what you think, i need constructive criticism.
    Thanks
     
  8. Graham

    Graham New Member

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    @ampt, are you talking about the top of the M? And if you are got any tips on how to fix it besides just making it more narrow. The only reason i ask is because if i do make the top more narrow it will look pinched/ squeezed, got any tips ?
     
  9. SHUT

    SHUT Senior Member

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    Picture0013.JPG simpler structure. sloppy letters though.
     
  10. DaFugg

    DaFugg Senior Member

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    SHUT you need to go back and work on simple letters. your letters are way out of portion in a bad way. There's no real flow your bars are Eh. The extensions and stuff on them looks accidental and sloppy like you didn't think it out. the top of the R is HUGE and doesn't work. the S fill kinda screws with its flow and makes it look ugly the right leg of the A gets all skinny and weird for no reason and the k is just tiny at top, huge at bottem and none of it flows right. Start completely over, start simple and bar that shit carefully. You can progress from there but you got a long way to go
     
  11. SHUT

    SHUT Senior Member

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    Picture0015.JPG yeah, i honestly spent no time on the last one. I shouldn't have posted it.
     
  12. RERUN3

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    crits? I'm well aware of its shittiness I just wanted some specific pointers from some real writers.... Photo on 2011-06-13 at 23.06 #2.jpg
     
  13. dankbudz

    dankbudz Elite Member

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    those last few pages made me laugh

    self crits, I dont like the extension on the E's and the R needs some work.
    If yall got any crits im down to hear what you think
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  14. Skope2

    Skope2 Senior Member

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    Dank your style looks alot like ribcages..
    Finished piece from before, and a cholo!
     

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  15. lawlcat

    lawlcat Senior Member

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    Skope the only thing I can really see is that T in the first one isn't really working. Definitely stick to the second one.
    Dank you have your simples down for sure, should try adding some flare.
    Everyone else on this page, go back to simps.

    Shit that got doodled up yesterday. That T is driving me fucking insane. Even worth doing a fill?
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  16. nah!

    nah! Banned

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  17. Skope2

    Skope2 Senior Member

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    Are you using oil pastels to fill?
     
  18. dankbudz

    dankbudz Elite Member

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    gotta go over it again with a fine liner and maybe the dark brown once more to make it a bit darker.
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  19. nah!

    nah! Banned

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    no stadelerefdsgsgf fineliners (0.3mm)
     
  20. dankbudz

    dankbudz Elite Member

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    Skope- hows my style look like ribs? i dont even think i got style yet and nothin close to his. but hit me up with why you think so.