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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

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  1. fonone

    fonone Senior Member

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    haha thanks man, yea first time doing an E like that :p
     
  2. Cyto Aka Son1c

    Cyto Aka Son1c Elite Member

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  3. wordsrlazy

    wordsrlazy Member

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    runchi, clean, sum dope pieces
     
  4. vowels

    vowels Senior Member

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    aimg.photobucket.com_albums_v332_jesseismessy_moveddd008.jpg

    the character is an influence from my friend bien's characters but it doesn't really look like his cause his are good hahahaha
     
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  5. Cyto Aka Son1c

    Cyto Aka Son1c Elite Member

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  6. JETPACK!!

    JETPACK!! Banned

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    kay honestly, you kids really really really need to crit when you post flicks. this is gettin ridiculous, 6 or 7 people have posted pictures without giving any crits.


    GIVE CRITS TO GET CRITS!!
     
  7. Cyto Aka Son1c

    Cyto Aka Son1c Elite Member

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    If your including me, I wasn't asking for any, I know the rules
     
  8. Techkanuck

    Techkanuck Senior Member

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    Quickie

    Zofism piece is nice, feelin the concept just needs some space and consistency

    pie- I always like this style, only thing i can say is it'd look better with the highlight in the 3-D imo

    the end- delete one of the posts and maybe fix up the M and resize the I next time

    fonone- i like them but i feel the N is weak on the big one, maybe make the extension smaller and the right leg taller a bit

    Rhyse- looks like a good start, it'll be interesting to see how you elaborate on that, there's a lot of potential in doing a person

    Aloha- It's got some really good parts, but some of it is kinda off, so idk, it's good at any rate.

    Cyto- A little more time checking the angles of the 3-D and keepin things cleaner would help it out a bunch

    Vowels- I like some of it but the letter structure is kinda week, the tag is nice but it's kinda off on the end with the L-S lookin like a K
     
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  9. vowels

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    aimg.photobucket.com_albums_v332_jesseismessy_moveddd011.jpg
    though I would add a little bit of like tattooish-ness to it lol
    aimg.photobucket.com_albums_v332_jesseismessy_moveddd009.jpg
    itchy and scratchy comic book, wooooooordd.

    MY CRITS, SO PEOPLE DON'T BITCH

    Duct Tape - The "ofi" are different than the z,s, and m but I still like it.
    The End - I like your handstyle but not how the m and a are facing upwards and the r and t are facing down.
    Fonone - I like it all except for the block letters on the first page. So sick though.
    Rhyse - King read says it's wack, but I love your shit, always. Rock band tn! hahah
    Aloha - Shit's bangin'
    Cyto - I'm not really feeling the SUPER simple letters but they are clean and look nice at least.
    Tech - It reminds me a lot of hepos because of the colours and the fact that the outline is similar to fill so it doesn't really pop out at you. Keep sketching though, I can see you being a west-coast style kind of person in the future.
     
  10. Techkanuck

    Techkanuck Senior Member

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    Bump
     
  11. JETPACK!!

    JETPACK!! Banned

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    nah, i was just throwing that out there in general. but, it would be cool if you threw one or two half ass crits even if your not lookin for any in return.

    vois, your letters are getting better. but id watch the red filling on the inside of your O and S, if your gonna fill up the holes with the same color as your outline, id add a shadow for the rest of it too, cuz what it kinna looks like to me is that the middle of your letters are shadowed while, the outside of your letters arnt. i'd also watch your flow just a lil bit, your OIS is cool but id bring up the left bar on your V a bit to match the flow

    good job on the amount of crits :)

    vowels, the only reason im bitch is cuz no one else is, an ive noticed the crits have been gettin mad wack an lazy.
    for your first sketch, id keep all the letters the same size , and i wouldnt make the bottom of all of your letters smaller than the top, that leaves you with a lot of deadspace on the bottom half of your piece, makes it lack if ya get what im sayin.
    your second sketch is much better, thats what you should be aiming for. decent concept on bars and lines, but with your O id put a hole in there. just to clarify that it is an O.
    EDIT: i fucked up lookin at your sketches, the first ones good, where the second one needs work. put it together from there:)
    good job with the critiqing too

    cheers
     
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  12. :RAVE:

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    im rave905 but my old account is fuct so idk
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    vois - i dunlike the scratch force

    vowels - that icey 1 is dope id like 2 c that painted but i think ur shine on the o shouldnt go under the w

    rhyse - nice pen charac love the lips but not that hair so much

    aloha - nah thats dope

    foneone - yeah i like the top one most
     
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  13. Cyto Aka Son1c

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  14. Techkanuck

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    Cyto- I like it but you might want to bring the A out some
     
  15. Cyto Aka Son1c

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    yeah fo sho, I think im going to make the A pop out instead of being overlapped by both the T and R

    vois- ok I like it, just make the bubble bars cleaner and fix the s
     
  16. Techkanuck

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  17. silentchaos14

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    vois- start over with straight letters, use bars. read the new 2 graff if u havent.

    ai186.photobucket.com_albums_x65_silentchaos14_Morne9.jpg
    most recent thing in my book, started sketching again.
    crits?
     
  18. seywhat

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    EXCHANGES!!! fuck 3d

    morne- i'm likin that, maybe just make the bottom leg of ur r come off of the top one more if u get what i mean
    vois- listen to morne
    cyto- really feelin that except for the squiggly line on the r, but other than that dope! i also just posted our exchange in the exchange thread
    raver- go even simpler, just like straight bars. alson work on ur structure cuz it lokks likt it says rayer
    vowels- i dig em both, just not the banner on the first one
    irekn- great use of bars, really fresh man
     
  19. JETPACK!!

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    see how much better it is when every crits everyone! we all improve! :D:D

    raver, work on keeping your lines and letters straight, your letters kinna bob up an down. keep them in a straight line, if you cant do that, than before you start sketching, grab a ruler an draw a faint line, an draw ontop of that. fix your V, it looks like a Y, take out that tail at the bottom. and id fix your last R, it dosent look as clean as the first. what markers do you use?

    tare, id take it a slight step backwards. dont add as much steeze, id work on your A and R the most. your T covers too much of the left bar on your A and id also bring the right bar of your A down a bit more. id also try bringing down the left bar on your R just a bit. your E's tight though.

    vois that looks better, but honestly, id start thinking outside the box a bit. your letters arnt making that much improvement because youve been chasing the same style. fuck curves until youve got nice lookin lines. keep your letters the same size, and start adding a drop shadow to it, workin on that will make your overrall sketch better.

    silentchaos, im not feelin the sharp edges, try smoothening them out and see how that will look. an loose those hook things you got on the bottom of your M, try making it more like the legs on your R. good job on the bars, you kinna fucked up the bars on the R a bit with the widths, but other than that it looks good.

    seywhat, that fable piece looks pretty ill, but imo you should sketch near the bottom cuz then it could cut off parts of your letters, like your B. also watch the height of your letters, the A is much shorter than the E.
    the camer piece is a nice set of simples too, if your gonna have one leg longer than the other though on your letters, make sure the right leg on all your letters is the same length, rather than different lengths.

    i rushed the camer crits cuz i need to shit

    one
     
  20. Mr. Octane

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    seywhat- damn bro...im really likin those fills...those r clean man
    morne- pretty dope structure u got goin, maybe u should try adding a lighter color around the outside tho to make it stand out better
    vois- listen to the guys above, start out simpler bro
    cyto- that sketch is DOPE man... definitely gotta see that when its done, the only thing i was thinkin is maybe changing the round top of the R to something that would match the rest of the letters a little better
    vowels- those r nice and clean, the only thing i would suggest is to make the letters on the second one closer to eachother

    anyway, heres a throwie-ish thing i jus did today...

    [Broken External Image]:http://i112.photobucket.com/albums/n188/HighOctane89/Dozin-1.jpg

    crits? thanks