If I was to "assume" I would say that the two bars are bending to connect to form a lowercase e? If that's not it, then I have no idea because that'd be one fubar'd capital E. Either way, it's not working. Those bends do not, and will not work. Straight bar it all out, get that down solid. Simples, if you're not familiar with the term go to the "New to Graff" section or Google that. Eventually you'll be bending bars and all that spiffy crap, but if you're totally warping the foundation/ structure of the letter then... [Broken External Image]:http://holycrapthatsfunny.com/wp-content/uploads/2008/06/doing-it-wrong.jpg
tezo- work on your tracing and bars Safe- i like everything but the S..dont put it so far behind the A View attachment 560132
tezo- work on your tracing and bars Safe- i like everything but the S..dont put it so far behind the A View attachment 560133
only thing i would say is revise the R. and make the bottom of the E look like the bottom of your C's
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separ- the a looks as if its just threw in. it doesnt really work with the rest of the letters. the rest are good tho especially the s stuff i did today just the outline for this so far, hopefully have it finished in a few days. it on really small paper too
Feelin' that style. Only problem is the S. Make the middle just a diagonal slant rather than a few bars.
See how it's just a diagonal line instead of a few horizontal and vertical ones? If that makes sense. View attachment 560308
safe- very nice, and original, only thing id say is to practice on your character but even then he's not bad either