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The Intermediate Thread

Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by (SoS)Viruz, Mar 14, 2009.

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  1. Strange Journeys

    Strange Journeys Senior Member

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  2. sadgeh

    sadgeh Senior Member

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    btw its not that i got that idea from flippingchickens, im tagging with the name ''to'' here in holland.
     
  3. Graff2k11

    Graff2k11 Member

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    reach.. try a straight letter c, bc it doesnt flow at all.
    but heres a quick simple i did lets get some crits
    ai1086.photobucket.com_albums_j454_graff2k11_IMG_0221.png
     
  4. 4menace2society0

    4menace2society0 Banned

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  5. Phat 2

    Phat 2 Elite Member

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    true colors ^
    btw, how can you bear painting over your own pieces? I could never do that, even if I was in fucking NY with 0 empty walls. too painful.
     
  6. extinct

    extinct Senior Member

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    now thats what im talkin bout dawg... that extension on the s is iffy but the eb is dope
     
  7. FlippingChickens

    FlippingChickens Banned

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    man doesnt everybody already know that,some people like me are trying to get good so they can rock some fly shit on walls. Stop worrying about everyone else and worry about ur SHIT.
     
  8. Bilnek

    Bilnek Senior Member

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  9. 4menace2society0

    4menace2society0 Banned

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    its actually a J i just put seb as the title by accident

    and ya it doesnt bother me to go over my ish just because at the rate i paint, it would kind of be impossible to find new spots to hit and also without pissing other heads off, also not everyone lives in a big city, walls a limited and chill spots get blown up quicker than an afgan on a plane
     
  10. Bilnek

    Bilnek Senior Member

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    i like the afgan part <3
     
  11. Phat 2

    Phat 2 Elite Member

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    ouch bilnek... papers yay, walls nay.
    practice your can control guy,
     
  12. sema

    sema Senior Member

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    cant quite work out 3d this ones for battle any tipps?
    33.jpg
    -bilnek i dig the style try some better paint itll come out 50x's better
    -seb strait is clean not much to crit
     
  13. seywhat

    seywhat Elite Member

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    bumpin this for sum crits................

    sema- looks like ur on the right track but ur letters got a lil to complicated i think, which in turn messed up ur 3d. work on ur structure a lil and keep it up!
    bilnek- not too bad, should stuck to the sketch a lil more cuz that was dope. stay up
    sear- thats wat the fuck im talkin bout! i seen the handy n i thought it said jeb. the e does get a lil wierd, n i think you should connected the eb like the je sum how but its all good. nice colors
     
  14. swae101

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  15. BlacktodaFuture

    BlacktodaFuture Elite Member

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    alright, so ima crit the shit out of this and you're not gonna listen to a single thing i say bc every single one of you is a complete e-thug that things that they know better than the last guy. but fuck it, here you go.

    Lets start with the J. Overall the J looks to have started as a simple regular J, although it's obvious that you kinda just went in without having too clear of an image in your head. This is obvious by the awkward-ness of the bottom part of the J that swoops up. There isn't anything wrong with it, it could be a style choice, although to me it just looks awkward and strange how it appears that you wanted the bar to get bigger causing a flair type thing but at the same time you didn't giving it that "awkward" look. The motion of it is going to about a 10 degree measure to the right which is a steady flow but then you gave it that part to kink to almost a 90 degree angle left, that works when you have a harder flow bc it gives it a kick back, this instead gives it a look of again, "im just gonna add this here bc that's what a gar-fee-tee writer do!" Then we look at the lean of the letter compared to the others which throws me off bc it originally looked like a bad "S" but since it's a "J" you have the top bar making it capital and you focused more on the left side of it since that's where it seems to center the letter off which is why it looks like an "S" at first glance. Then you have those extensions which frankly again come from "fuck it, im putting an extension, GARRR-FEEE-TTEEEEE DUDE!" And it's a spiky extension but on the bottom which goes against your curvy bottom of your "J" giving more of an awkward look to the letter. Then the conntector to the "E" starts curvy, flows down, hits a hard road bump, making the piece hard to flow through, and then just shoots up in a "E". Maybe that's just a style choice but me no likey so muchy. And so everyone doesn't ride my dick as hard, that's just my opinon. OH NO! now this whole shit doesn't matter. fuck it. you're still reading. bitches....

    Now the "E". Yes im really doing this. I'm nice tonight. Okay, so continuing the from the extension it rises up and connect to the flaring top of the E, i like this, this makes sense but then we look down expecting to see an "e" and we get one of those backwards "3" type "E's" And im like. Why the fuck. Since you have the star it's the new age keepsix bite to put in the middle of letters that round off likr "R's" "E's" and "P's" (I say keepsix bc he's one of the first i saw do it, and no im not asking for a history lesson on the origin of the fuckin' star) So. I can tell this is backwards "3" type "E" bc when we look down past the confusion we see the bar, (which is a little off on the curve fyi, not to be a douche but i feel like we're past that.) and it connects to a penis type thing. A bar that looks like it was turned into a spear, and it's a little wobbly. floppy penis i guess. but then curves following the flow of the J, i like that. good job, and up ending the awkwardness of that E.

    Now the B. this is actually your best letter. woot! nah... but for real. the top of the bar that swoops making the top of your E looks awkward at the end. The end of bars is a style preference but to me this one just looks too cut off and comes to not point and is kinda just there. I like how you used that extension to balance off the other extension of the J which is good for symmetry but the problem is the same bc it's spiky and just like the J it comes out at an awkward point. The J's made a little more sense but this one could of flowed better with the bending bar on the bottom of the B. The backbone of your B seems to be just placed there, this is the most important part of the letter and you should take more time with it bc then you would of make the connection of the bottom of the backbone and the swooping bottom part of the "B" better but now it just seems like the back bone stops and it looks like it will connect awkwardly since the backbone is so straight and a bending flow is coming at it giving it a crashing halt. And one last thing about the "B", the part where you make the cool little cut in the middle should be smaller bc since it's so big it's more of an eyesore than a cool addition, it again halts the flow of the bending part connecting to the middle.

    Im not even gonna start on the handstyle, we both know it's bad and freestyled.

    The 3-d is whatever, off in some spot but i wrote you enough shit for you to ignore. blah blah blah, i should go paint, what do i know, im prob just some loser 14 year old blah blah blah yeah yeah yeah, 8th grade, holla!
     
  16. sema

    sema Senior Member

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    best crit ive read in years
     
  17. thepekins

    thepekins Guest

    sear man you oughta work on your handies homie pieces aint all of it . errbody tells you but forreal listen up
     
  18. The Silent One

    The Silent One Member

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    sweaaaa, back from the dead with real improvement..

    where you from anyways? ii've seen some Shit around that looks like yours
     
  19. ierkpeople

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    ai1227.photobucket.com_albums_ee433_ierkpeople_IMG_20110731_00102.jpg ai1227.photobucket.com_albums_ee433_ierkpeople_Warwick_20110705_00072.jpg ai1227.photobucket.com_albums_ee433_ierkpeople_IMG_20110616_00039.jpg ai1227.photobucket.com_albums_ee433_ierkpeople_IMG_20110519_00085.jpg these are the only ones i have on my comp at the time
     
  20. Bilnek

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