good flow.
the top t bar is a little big.
but other than that, i like it.

 

First Sketch crits please?
Sorry for it being unclear

 

dank - that is fresh as fuck, i think ur ready for the intermediate thread

i know its kinda late, but i just finished it

 

thanks mang, and its never late for halloween! i still gotta get my halloween page done just cause i want it in my book and I've been lazy. those characters came out nice but the frankensteins neck should not connect at the bottom of the jaw like that, it should be higher up behind the head, if you open your mouth your head doesn't raise. ya kno? nice page though shoulda thrown a black drop shadow and maybe something like a green outline on the letters

 

i never even thought about that, but yeah ur right haha

so more like this right?

 

More or less.

 

Havnt posted for a bit changed word and been trying to get it working i am deffinetely improving if you see my old stuff this first pic i did in class straight with pen no rubbing out haha so its a bit messd and me and mate got bored added all random stuff as a joke like the sun and the ! everywere but yeh crits please?
just messing with styles etc some better then others
didnt notice double of the throwie and messd it up a little with the U
Muse one.

 

Mecessary to post 3 pictures of the same thing? Keep practicing

 

sorry bout that haha
but nice your getting dope bro @ Dankbudz

 

Dank you need to work on your bgs

 

DankOner, please, crop and resize your pictures. and for the love of God don't sketch outlines, put it in the copy machine and post the same thing a million times, just with different colors. That's not going to get you anywhere but the toy threads.

oh, and use single lines, not a line built up out of 20 little ones.

 

crits on this quick joint

 

cleaned it up

 

Im working off of bars. I still have two more letters to write.
I'm trying to create a few extensions and hold the style throughout, I still want to change a few things, but am curious about what people have to offer in terms of advice, for this style of piecing.

Cheers

 

remove the bits from the ends of the letters.
keep it simpler.

 

That is what I was thinkin' too. Thanks.

 

that okult piece is too sick. glad to see you're always progressing

 

thanks mang

bio99- work off a baseline, and shoulda filled it with the pink and outlined with black or something.
cost of love- that "style" of piecing is shit... no offense. kick it real simple.

 

Digging that page dank.