I'd say from what I can see just go simpler and drop the halo. Maybe try do small tags so you and a page with like 10 then post 10 in one photo. Maybe try writing at different speeds.
I know it's annoying to here. But I'm talking like this simple. All the curves and flicks aren't working. The problem is the tight corners and stuff. It's not really flowing. I'm still not great but I feel like I'm getting the basics. Just keep working on it.
Check these out and tell me what you think bro, I'm all for trying to master the basics I just get bored with it sometimes and fly back into trying shit I can't rock Crits?
Simple and basic. Don't curve your P like you did on the left side. Try leaning your letters to one side, might look good.
So by leaning it forward and back it forces my hand to retain some memory of what those angles look like in certain letters, like the A for example being both. If I should go back to doing a straight tag simply by leaning it around my hand doesn't shy away from particular motions like it would if I only got comfy doing a tag one way. Actually by doing this the bottom right tag is the best basic I put out. Thanks guys I really appreciate the help, I'm going to do this a shit ton.
I like that it's got a nice flow. Honestly I think there's not a lot to crit on. Maybe the tiny bit on the right of A, on the second one down in the middle pokes out (that's trying to find A problem) But like I think try experimenting with other styles.