Leaving this one here. Had fun experimenting with colors on this. Really happy with how the static on the exclamation turned out
my first ever throw (sabotaz paint & shit caps it's not just me) i recognize it's messy as all hell, gimme harsh criticism i need it
You're trying a lot of different looks which is cool but you're missing your basics, the things that will give your pieces "the look" and make them pop. Crits/examples.... you did this piece twice and missed your outer in the negative space of the O and D, you need that yellow in there to help bring out the form of your letters. But then at the same ime, you would need to lose the yellow from your fill (for now) as it's the same color as your outer and that might take away a little from your piece. Personal opinion, painting dirty is for tags, throwies, and such. Always clean up your piece. Look where the top right bar of your I comes to a point over your D, but it's fuzzy overspray there. Just take your green and cut that to a nice sharp point. Look at that yellow piece w/ the red halo/arrow, at each place where your black outline comes to an end, I would take your yellow and just shave the end of the black back to a nice tapered point. Also go back with your yellow and clean up all those black drips. As your can control improves these issues will occur less.
Pretty toy, but seen worse. Look at the sketch you posted. Look at what you painted. The sketch looks better and that's mainly because of the 3D being on it- the piece needed that along with an outer outline or shell. All that purple is what people usually call bubbles or clouds. Yours looks like your piece stepped on gum and it's all smushed underneath. I'm assuming that you kind of tried to use that as your outer outline/shell which is why there's so much of it? Either way, I'd say less is more on that, you want your letters more visible and standing out. You could have gone dark purple clouds with the lighter purple as your outer/shell. Or you could have done the purple clouds and used white or some other color as your outer/shell.
Thanks for the honest critique. Been sketching in the black book for a while now and I think I bit off a bit more than I could chew (maybe that's why it looks like stepped on bubble gum haha) should have known the skills wouldn't transfer that easily. Getting some of those details are pretty tricky and I feel if I went for the 3d it would have been an even sloppier mess. Just glad to get a first experience and get an idea what to expect and what to work on.
It really needs to be there from now on. Also same thing I told someone above, clean up your piece as you go or at the end. All the places where your black oversprayed, or you overshot the line, use your other colors to trim that back. These are all small things that will automatically give your piece an upgrade. They're also beginner basics. For next time I'd also bring that O up more into the space between the L and S, maybe thin the back left bar of your S out a little to help the O show.
That's awesome man. I appreciate the advice! Seems like a lot of people have no problem throwing out "toy" without adding a bit of constructive criticism. We can't all have Master can control the first time around!
Ray of Today gave you some of the best advice I've seen in a while. I used to get crappy paint and just practice can control with those until I felt better with it. Then practice a lot. And learn how to use a color wheel. Get up and stay safe.
How long have you been doing graff? How long were you filling black books before doing walls? Let's hear it from anyone willing to share
Most good graffiti writers I've noticed from meeting them/ hearing stories did a balance of both graffiti and blackbooks during the beginning. Paper and walls are different worlds to conquer. A well rounded seasoned writer will have good blackbooks and graffiti. Get out there and crush shit but if you wanna stay fresh out here, hit your blackbook frequently trying new shit out and testing it. Sometimes I put up some questionable shit but that's natural with how often you should be trying new things, unless you're like a legend or someshit or you purposely go out and only do the same thing as your niche, but if not, try new shit and letter/color schemes out frequently. Imo your general routine should be blackbooks then test your shit whatever it was you practiced. Rinse and repeat. Some people just stay drawing shit and stay static like that, then you go try to bomb and your shits looking cooked. That shit be happening to me when I take breaks then go paint after the first few times. You gotta really be generally active to have that control over your tools out there when you paint. So thats why i think having a balance is good for writers starting out because you have the muscle memory from rocking shit outside and the creative drive to make a variety of pieces/characters
I see. I would have liked to build both skills simultaneously but in a smaller town like mine where there are no writers it's only a matter of time before you're busted, so the first wall I could hit was the one I finally built in my backyard. I guess if you're dedicated enough you find a way. Do you think most writers work their way up in the traditional tags-throw ups-pieces kind of growth structure? Or do they start based on their level of artistic skill? Throw ups can be cool but they are nothing compared to a well-done piece and I have almost no interest in developing that skill besides the desire to be versatile in all the different styles of graffiti.