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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

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  1. Capo Izi

    Capo Izi Senior Member

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    New junk..

    Crits please.

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    Camer-nice shit there, good n simple..I like how you did the E in the last one.

    Ante-that W thing at the bottom is really cool looking, color would make it dope.
     
  2. atlok7

    atlok7 Elite Member

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    capo- i can tell your improving, but try not to make your letters so abstract. tone it down a little
     
  3. Backalley Abortion Doctor

    Backalley Abortion Doctor Elite Member

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    Capo, remove all the random curves and extensions
     
  4. NoCanControl

    NoCanControl Elite Member

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  5. NoCanControl

    NoCanControl Elite Member

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    understandable, the silver looks fucked on teh photos, it looks mor like lightning or something.

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    yea, do you think i should just work on letter structure more, am i going to abstract or...?
     
  6. JETPACK!!

    JETPACK!! Banned

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    work on your letter structure man, it took me a second to read the first one even WITH your red lines.

    your making the lines in your second sketch too short. its hard to tell where the bars are. your N kinna looks like a block with cracks.
     
  7. IWriteTame

    IWriteTame Member

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    I'm just letting you all know that I'm very new, so I'm just giving my opinions on your sketches. I'm sorry if I hurt any feelings or anything and if you don't like what I said then you can ignore me. I'm totally new to this and I know that you have to critique to get some critique of your own work. Well here goes. I'll post my sketch after my comments.

    Ante, you have some nice letters, but in the Wha2 sketch you seemed to do the same thing in each letter. Maybe you could change it up a little bit? The 3d "W" is just a little weird looking to me, no offense.

    Camer, I really like the last sketch you posted with the "cock roach" at the bottom. That one looks good and I like the "E" in it. I like your color choice too.

    Capo, I like your style, but it doesn't flow so much. Maybe you could try working on that a little. The color blending in the second isn't working out too great either, no offense.

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    Here is mine, if you have any comments please let me know. I just started, so I would appreciate any criticism.
     
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  8. hazetheone

    hazetheone Elite Member

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    dont worry about 3d yet
    just do straight letters
     
  9. NoCanControl

    NoCanControl Elite Member

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    shit is too warped, and i don't mean shit shit. but yea, its almsot like lit should be three dee, its wierd looking. the top one.
     
  10. NoCanControl

    NoCanControl Elite Member

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    thanks for the crits by the way.
     
  11. Fewer

    Fewer New Member

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    ok no longer mewter now fewer
     
  12. IWriteTame

    IWriteTame Member

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  13. renegade185

    renegade185 Senior Member

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    tame use bars to make your letters.
     
  14. IWriteTame

    IWriteTame Member

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    Could you explain bars please? Do you mean like overlaying the letters?
     
  15. SWIV3Lone

    SWIV3Lone Senior Member

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    make ur letters the same size
     
  16. IlikePie

    IlikePie Elite Member

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    I always like that kind of style on the second flick. Just make your lines a bit less wobbly.
     
  17. atlok7

    atlok7 Elite Member

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  18. JETPACK!!

    JETPACK!! Banned

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    im not feelin it as much as your other one. looks too rushed compared to your other izm. dont make the bar on your A so bar-ish. loose the lines that make it look rectangular. the horizontal bars on your I dont flow with the rest of your letters. i wouldnt put the "one" inbetween your I and S. it looks like CAIoneS. an im definatly not feelin those arrows. they seem too outta place. point the edges a bit. having your arrow a bar, seems wack.

    the only improvement i noticed is that you actually made the bottom half of your S.. S like, i never liked it before.
     
  19. atlok7

    atlok7 Elite Member

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    i disagree with the CAIoneS part. no one would b dumb enough to read it like that. i was just filling space.
     
  20. La Coka Nostra

    La Coka Nostra Elite Member

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    i love the shadow and the glares