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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

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  1. SageGSCnj

    SageGSCnj Member

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    Bottom page bump (regardless what haze says lol)

    And Gube the whole thing is they are bars sure but theyre not clean. Can you look at all those bars and honestly say those are straight and clean? Sometimes its not how much you do with a piece but how clean it comes out. I see basic pieces on bridges that are clean as hell and say wow thats sick
     
  2. Epoc

    Epoc Senior Member

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    I was typing a crit for you earlier, but then realized I pretty much said exactly what you did so tossed it....bottom of S, could be cleaner + 3d, not a fan of fill.
    glad you like the R more ;P
    But overall keep up the good work.
     
  3. jupsick

    jupsick Senior Member

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    wings you know why u cant read any of masses things? becouse your structure is way off!
    and yes its true if u dont undarstand how to build letters right u cant undarstand other peoples letters and how they did them
    so the point is keep doing solid simples
    cuz the simple u showed isnt much of a brag to you you know...
     
  4. MontanaPainter

    MontanaPainter Elite Member

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  5. white

    white Senior Member

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    skin - killer simple
    hazetheone - the 3rd pic down, nice style developing kinda look like mass's
    gube - simples simples simples man i had the same problem write your name like 100 times
    spec - nice fills and dots
    rays - great form, on the bottom one make the y the same size as the others and fix your 3D on your S on the right, it looks to crooked
     
  6. pandemik

    pandemik Senior Member

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    Ok so obviously this aint that good, but I submitted it to the throw up battle just to test the water, crit please?


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  7. MontanaPainter

    MontanaPainter Elite Member

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  8. pandemik

    pandemik Senior Member

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    yeah i know, still workin'

    the s doesn't bother, the y is ok I guess, maybe just outta place
     
  9. PegCityBoy

    PegCityBoy Senior Member

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    yo spec you from winnipeg?
     
  10. Epoc

    Epoc Senior Member

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    hannah montan - R and A start strong then (R especially) Y and S become limp and sloppy like impotency. what gives?
     
  11. MontanaPainter

    MontanaPainter Elite Member

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    idk man

    workin on the y and s now

    new peice good hella good flow

    old school ish


    post up tomorrooowwww
     
  12. MarOne...

    MarOne... Elite Member

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    Don't waste your time on the "OMGLOOK!" fills right now, but concentrate on your letter structure, it needs some work.
     
  13. smooth_nuts

    smooth_nuts Elite Member

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    muh name is dope but you can call me de!
     
  14. Kraft561

    Kraft561 Member

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    ^^^^^ yo thats sick
    new word i kno its kinda sloppy but i like it better than gube
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  15. SageGSCnj

    SageGSCnj Member

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    Thanks for the crits everybody. And no nowhere near winnipeg. Dirty Jerz actually.

    kant- Its gettin cleaner but theyre still not right. You gotta take the width of that first bar on the left of the K and copy that to every other bar in the piece. You started fat for that bar then just got really skinny for the rest. But you are doin better so take this advice and just keep goin. Maybe try a ruler till you get better with it.
    Smooth- Diggin it man. Ive only seen simples so far from you so im likin the change
    Rays- Just as you said I dont like the Y and S. But that R especially is sick.I like those drab colors on the other piece you posted just before. Looks gloomy haha. Only part I didnt like there was the 2nd extension jumpin out of the bottom of the A
    Slant- Not feelin it
    Kaer- I like your shit and its all clean but it looks like you bit Mass a little hard on the one piece. And on the throw it looks like you bit Smooth a little too much
     
  16. 7nationarmy

    7nationarmy Senior Member

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    dope..i like it
    rays.. i told u back at the oz

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    crits and hates are welcome :D
     
  17. 7nationarmy

    7nationarmy Senior Member

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    dope..i like it
    rays.. i told u back at the oz

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    crits and hates are welcome :D
     
  18. klic

    klic Elite Member

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    bump

    for a battle coming up

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    crits

    kant - keep all of the bars the same width

    smooth - looks fresh except the attachment on the bottom left of your d isnt really doing it for me

    rays - what montana said, focus more on the letters and not the coloring, and id thicken up your letters just a bit

    slant - keep all of the letters the same size and make surre the bars are the same width
     
  19. lawlcat

    lawlcat Senior Member

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    hot shit 7nation, middle one is my favorite.
    liking the new stuff smooth, only thing id change is how the E seems to like fold into itself? if that makes sense? try adding another letter and see how it looks.
    kant keep up with those simples.
    rays i always like your fills, but the Y and the S are sloppy and just seem to flail around.

    new outline, still working on the E.
    DOK
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  20. pandemik

    pandemik Senior Member

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    thamks for the crits guys I'll keep working.