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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

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  1. eng

    eng Senior Member

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    yo man if you want some real crits then you should go away and practise it 100 times before you post one. the guy is only giving you a bad crit cause you need to read up on posts or just go round your city checking graffiti to see what it actually looks like to understand what you're trying to do.

    Here's a good crit: Throwies are the essence of street graffiti - they embody the speed and precision you need to succeed on the street. The whole idea of a throwup is that you write your name - bigger than a tag - in just a few seconds longer. That means your lines cant look tight and careful like yours do, they gotta look speedy, energetic, rounded, fast. When a real graffiti writer sprays up a throwie he does it in 20-40 seconds, just search COPE2 in youtube. your sketches need to represent this speed and energy - and yours? well its just sittin there on the page like a fat kid on the sofa

    hope that helps
     
  2. eng

    eng Senior Member

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    can i get a real crit on this... i gave 6
    if you want crits then give them out too... unless you're real toy
     
  3. Stuck

    Stuck Elite Member

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    your bars look kinda sketchy and the areas around some corners like the top right part of ur e and top left part of ur z have weird lumps...fix those. the middle bar on the Z is to thin and the two middle bars on the M are weird....cant crit that cus i suck at M's
     
  4. eng

    eng Senior Member

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    i'll give a few more crits:
    HEIR - I really like the overall flow of the piece - especially in the top of the I - there really nice curves and angles - its tight right there. What i would say is that the bottom left bar of the H seems to bend inward awkwardly? consider a symmetrical extension to you R to balance the sketch out maybe? also not feeling the bottom half of your R - i think you should split the bars apart at the bottom
     
  5. eng

    eng Senior Member

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    decent crit man thanks alot
     
  6. Stuck

    Stuck Elite Member

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    yeah my R is a real killer but i dun get wat u mean about splitting the bar???
     
  7. eng

    eng Senior Member

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    i mean the right, zig-zagged bar of the R tucks under the straighter left foot of the R - i feel that if should kick out to the right a bit more so its less like a B (i know it doesnt look anything like a B but just for the sake of the R having more flow) (in my opinion)
     
  8. lord_plankton

    lord_plankton Elite Member

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    You really seem to struggle with the H alot , you keep bending its legs strangely , work on that,i like top of r too,

    referring to your last post ive to say that youve definately improved,on the one hand i feel the top of your r, but on
    on the other hand its a bit too curvy n smooth compared to the other letters, all the other bar endings extensions n stuff are way more sharp angle shaped...alos id open up the e a lil more cuz it looks squeezed give it room to breath, bottom middle e i is wired too, lots of little stuff goin on, not really contributing to the overall appearance, last but not least you should work on your i , its a bit too big n in your recent posts it looks like t. but still good job though
     
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  9. M3KA1!

    M3KA1! Elite Member

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    now in my professional expertise, what you all need to do is take a break and enjoy some french toast sticks
     
  10. Stuck

    Stuck Elite Member

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    trying a whole bunch of different things but with the similiar styles/conections
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    improving?
     
  11. 408Bomber

    408Bomber Senior Member

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  12. Elno

    Elno Senior Member

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    Looks dope, paint it much :D
     
  13. Trestoner707

    Trestoner707 Senior Member

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    no dont.. not talking down or nothing
     
  14. M3KA1!

    M3KA1! Elite Member

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    HAHA thisssss guy^^
     
  15. BlacktodaFuture

    BlacktodaFuture Elite Member

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  16. 408Bomber

    408Bomber Senior Member

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  17. 408Bomber

    408Bomber Senior Member

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    wo0pz my bad for the double post
     
  18. RemoZ

    RemoZ Senior Member

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    Weakfingers-That would make a sick burner, you really should paint that
    Rasta- The GEEK name is kinda whack, maybe like REEK? that could be alota good balance like backwards R and shit in a piece? Plus it would give more to work with
     
  19. Aktag

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    Dope piece, definitely a lot better H than before. Keep it up
     
  20. Mellowdrone

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