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let me know what ya think , what could i do better

 

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Simply put, have the A look more like an A?
Right now with the two bubble type things at the top it looks like it used to be an H to me. It's not really defined itself as the letter A. If you insist on doing the bubble twirl thing off the letters, perhaps you should have the A come to a point at the top and pick a direction for that single bubble twirl thing to come off of. Kind of like the P?

Other then that, I don't know.

 

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It looks like a shit load of boomerangs

 

l o l

 

I see what youre saying, but i reckon sometimes its better just to jump right in and try out loads of different styles and just see which one(s) stick. Dont be afraid to make mistakes..

 

kilts you got the right idea, get some good solid letters before you start doing wildstyle shit dont listen to 4HER although exploring some cant hurt just keep doing what your doing and if might look a lil better if you reducded the bar length of the bottom of the L just a tiny bit

 

kilts- your on the right track definately
yap- its not awful but i hate that style
zewl- that second one has potential but simplify it a bit. a lot of the add ons are pointless. make the middle two bars of the W thicker. it makes it have too much negative space otherwise

 

Excellent pen work, dude. You've got some nice letters. Just try and bring that extension between the P and the K down a little bit so it's not too much higher than the other letters. Tuck it if you have to.

I think that second one is ready for painting. No doubt about it.

 

hopefully i will get painting a bit in a few weeks. exams are over on the 24th of june so hopefully i'l get some painting done then

 

I hear ya, man. Get your grind on, then get your shine on.

You got a solid head on your shoulders.

 

thanks man

the top one is another i might paint

 

been writing for a couple of months now, new on bs

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Kezu

 

your not gonna like to hear this but...

its awful

 

Jenkem.

 

i wont blame it on my pens or some shit, but can you tell me what I could improve with them? and if they are both complete shit, I can handle that too, can only make me better.