Haa funny that you writin prisma.. But right leg of the R needs to move to the right a bit, S shouldnt be so squished and top bar should be thicker, the A's not totally wack but the bubble part of the letter should be bigger. I like the P and the M though

 

thanks for the advice hugz

 

@hugz neeed to clean it up outline it in pen lookin to messy
@ante change the outline to black and the fill to yellow lookin pretty wack atm.

legit critz?

 

what the fuck happened in here?

 

top left of the R doesnt match up with the top right, like right above the hole thing, idk if you know what im talking about but i think that line should match up. also 3d looks a bit off in some places, like the bottom of the left leg of the R and it looks like you carried the bottom of the e a little far. the bottom of the S should be similar to the bottom of the e as far as the 3d goes, they have similar shapes. I may just be bull shitting (im new) but based on what i've seen other people say i feel like those are some legit points, hope i helped

 

jester- thats a decent little simple the 3d/shadow is off at some points like the the bottom left corner of the r, you could just fix it and then instead of have the dash lines just make it solid, but it look like just a skecth thats prolly gonna get thrown away so dont bother

 

eww crits

 

^ secind 1 shadow is inconsistent so it make, 1st 1 you gotta work on the bar width a bit

 

Logik-diggin the first, and the letters are decent for the second, but the 3d is waaaayyy off. your G's 3d is stright left, the L is like bottom leftish, the middile of the O and the side of the O are different, and if you can see the bottom of the K's bottom right leg, there is no way you could also see the top of the top leg. Try to use a vanishing point. pick a point in the direction you want the 3d, and then draw a line to it from every corner of your letters, then just connect them parallel to the letter structure and you should be solid. there's plenty of tut's about that, but i'd definately say work it out with a vanishing point for while until you get a decent feel for 3d before trying to just freehand it. Some people just dont have a good feel for 3d and others can do it no problem. just practice youll get it

 

i really like the K on the top but the second one the 3d seems dodgey to me. the 3d on the sticks of the k is wrong but like i said like some of the top letters

 

thanks guys this site is wayyy more active than pg lol im workin on a new sketch and i got a exchange for SEYO in the making

 

i like the char. but like theres a lot of emptiness in between the letters

 

Mogan that is reeaaaally nice. I know it probably doesnt mean much coming from me but i like that whole thing a lot. only thing that stands out to me is the way you did the bottom curve of the E with a straight line when all your other letters are curved. Just a thought

 

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PM me Logic... wad do you write btw

 

haven't posted in a little, been busy.. this is a quick sketch, really didnt try to keep lines strait etc. just brushed up writing than back to studying.

 

MONE diggin the SWAE, on the SELM though I feel like the horizontal bar of the S is at too steep an angle, and the rightmost leg of the M is too skinny. The subtle shading on the char is tight, looks like he's about to put a condom on his face though

LOGIK top looks like a failed euro style attempt, make everything cleaner and more consistent width. Bottom clean it up and make everything straighter, the sketchiness of your lines is distracting.

REWL coloring is better, though I don't like the amount of bubbles and 3d is just slightly off in just a few places. RE is too far from WL, awkward gap. I think it'll look better if you curve your WL a bit more too, if your RE are curved

REKS good ish keep it up. Put something on your S

Yall need to crit each other more..... and I'm stiiilllll lookin to know if that shit I'm tryin out is wack or not

 

New to graff so i started out basic Btw S is messed up
and this was quick

 

thanks mesk, and i like what your tryin out i really cant give crits since im trash, but just colour it and let me see it, really cant see what it looks like.
and yeah the gap is wierd but it was a quick sketch wasnt perfecting anything

Style, go way more simpler than that, bite your keyboard, dont do 3d, fills, shines, force's anything. just do pencil sketches of your keyboard.. you need to make sure every bar in the letter is correctly porportioned and all the abrs in every letter is same size