Menu

Welcome!

By registering with us, you'll be able to discuss, share and private message with other members of our community.

Blackbooks

Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

Share This Page

  1. thepekins

    thepekins Guest

    flat-wack ass shit.... learn how to do a handstyle and also learn how to do a piece

    werm- ditch the thing in the W. Top of right bar, bottom of right bar on the R are wack. Top of S is also wack

    Skope- the top of both Es doesnt really flow with the rest. The clouds dont look to good
     
  2. weedeater

    weedeater Senior Member

    • Messages: 496
    • Likes Received: 0
    i dont think thats an S, i think its just an extension
     
  3. SicK-

    SicK- Senior Member

    • Messages: 447
    • Likes Received: 0
    Yeah no S i was just fuxin around nothing serious
     
  4. Sbal

    Sbal Elite Member

    • Messages: 770
    • Likes Received: 1
    Vadr, a couple of those are really sick, reminiscent of local styles around here.
    Denie- not feeling the cloud i or the bump in the middle of the D
    Flat- you should do simps again with some sick color schemes, i think those would look good.
    Werm- im feeling it mostly, but those little extinsions do need fixing

    can i get crits on this?
    DSC04624.jpg
     
  5. extinct

    extinct Senior Member

    • Messages: 364
    • Likes Received: 0
    AYO
    once upon a time i said "i only wanna do pieces!"... how toy i was...
    handstyle is everything... they are the building blocks for throwies pieces everything... just like how keyboard letters make simples.... and anyone can do a fancy fill and your cutoffs and random extensions make me angry... the way the cycle is suppose to go is handstyle throwies and then pieces... if you got calligraphy skip the first step... just felt like dropping knowledge cause 've watched so many graff videos and learned so much history bout newyork and my own city... know your knowledge before you play the game...
    before you comment on something really toy and say it is good... realize if ya wanna get better, know what better is... cause decent isnt enough to cut it...
    THIS IS A MESSAGE FOR ALL YOU NEW COMERS... you know who you are... no hate though
     
  6. extinct

    extinct Senior Member

    • Messages: 364
    • Likes Received: 0
    oh ya spane-your extension on the a is wack and the e could use a little work
     
  7. ribcage

    ribcage Banned

    • Messages: 2,534
    • Likes Received: 0
    @sbal fix your bar width, especially on the circular part of the P and the E. Take your time sketchin out your bars, look at the A, the crossing part you made extending isnt on the right bar isnt at the right spot, it should be higher making it all 1 bar. And your shadow is off at some places
     
  8. Sbal

    Sbal Elite Member

    • Messages: 770
    • Likes Received: 1
  9. madekdga

    madekdga Member

    • Messages: 20
    • Likes Received: 0
    yo, you should try some constructive criticism instead of "wack ass shit" or "learn how to do a piece"... these dudes are here to learn and get advice from people who might have something worth saying. if i was posting up my stuff when i was first learning and someone simply told me this and that is wack, i'd think to myself 'ya, i know' then id probably tell you to fuck off!

    even if you're right about those things, its a pretty weak approach to helping these cats out! you were there once, were you not? i sure was, my shit fuckin sucked at first, but i was fortunate enough to have a few people point me in the right direction, which paid off, and i give props to them now.

    aside from that, you guys should forget about extensions of any sort for the time being. there's nothin wrong with havin some cool ideas that you might think will look good, and im sure they do when you picture them in your mind, but putting them on paper is another thing, and its best to master the basics before attempting to throw those ideas into your peices or straight letters. and also, use a pencil !!!! that way you can sketch your letters out and make adjustments easily without starting over, if you notice something looks off on one of your letters, take a look at your keyboard and check out the basics of how that letter is formed and fix that bad boy up! structure is everything, stick with it and you will be mad thankful that you didnt become an ignorant fuck who tried to rock shit that was far out of his league! cheers y'all

    View attachment 601487
     
  10. cheese_dreams

    cheese_dreams Member

    • Messages: 22
    • Likes Received: 0
    a few piece ideas from the ol' sketchbook
     

    Attached Files:

    • bb2.jpg
      bb2.jpg
      File size:
      117 KB
      Views:
      124
    • bb1.jpg
      bb1.jpg
      File size:
      119.4 KB
      Views:
      127
    • bb3.jpg
      bb3.jpg
      File size:
      117.3 KB
      Views:
      119
  11. thepekins

    thepekins Guest

    @madekdga- i know what your saying dude. I mostly just said that cus Ive already told flat to work on his hands and go simple, so has everyone but hes still doing the same shit. I understand constructive criticism and sometimes i give good crits, sometimes im lazy and spend less time on them. It kinda depends on the person. Notice i specifically said which parts of the other two peoples pieces needed work. Its whatever ima do me :cool:

    @cheesedreams- definitely go simpler. idk what the first letter is supposed to be and the arrow coming off of it is wack. The P and U are the best. Go to the new to graffiti thread and look at some of the stuff about turning straight letters into pieces and shit. Use bars and maybe dont worry about doing the bg right now
     
  12. cheese_dreams

    cheese_dreams Member

    • Messages: 22
    • Likes Received: 0
    yeah fair call, (it's an F btw) I don't really like pieces that much atm, mainly cause I'm shithouse at them, just like the ideas behind them really, as in I would almost consider them advanced sketches or planning for future blackbook stuff
     
  13. Tempo718

    Tempo718 Elite Member

    • Messages: 612
    • Likes Received: 11
    192062_150581068336562_100001540101387_296069_6147014_o.jpg
    is this complete shit?
     
  14. Gatsoi

    Gatsoi Senior Member

    • Messages: 332
    • Likes Received: 0
    Flat- work on your hands
    Wem- Diggin the R, the E looks like dookie
    Sbal- Your 3d and Bar consistency is off
    cheese_dreams- Shits ugly. Bite your keyboard
    Tempo- Yes

    ai880.photobucket.com_albums_ac9_gatsoi_13_2.jpg
    I tried some new shit, Tell me what i should keep/scrap
     
  15. BoomSlang

    BoomSlang Senior Member

    • Messages: 140
    • Likes Received: 0
    mewn, keep basic letter structure and work from that, refine it till you can even out the bars on all the letters and make them consistent even in your sleep. scrap the arrow, the colors and the eyeball in the e, also sort the leading edge of the e out to get rid of that sharp point, looks a bit out of place also scrap the drop shadow as it is all over the place, compare front of the m with the bottom on the n, they arent even in the same hemisphere bud
     
  16. DarthMario

    DarthMario Member

    • Messages: 13
    • Likes Received: 0
    toy

    few sketches, just piecing together some letters
     

    Attached Files:

  17. Phat 2

    Phat 2 Elite Member

    • Messages: 2,721
    • Likes Received: 1
    roflmao @ the last charac... good stuff man :p haha
     
  18. Flawless Victory

    Flawless Victory Elite Member

    • Messages: 1,788
    • Likes Received: 1
    ai55.tinypic.com_21e9o35.jpg

    Those things on your F look mega bad dude, just cut those off.
    Make your letters more balanced and less "I closed my eyes and tried to draw the letter in one stroke" looking.
    Work on your hand, a lot.
    The superfat second outline with an added third outline is just goofy looking.
    Anarchy is a flawed theory, control and authority are natural inevitabilities, as are the people that stray from them.

    I'd also say pull your P out a little bit more.
     
    Last edited: Mar 8, 2011
  19. smokeitup

    smokeitup Elite Member

    • Messages: 794
    • Likes Received: 0
  20. cheese_dreams

    cheese_dreams Member

    • Messages: 22
    • Likes Received: 0
    thanks for all the crits on my work, I would like to eventually get better on putting letters together, I think I'll go back to pencils for a bit and work on that first