the whole thing looks really awkward. try to be aware of how each bar effects the thing as a whole. also, the shading is horrible, you should try to be consistent with your lighting source. take more care in the craft as a whole, and it will show. eventually you will be able to bang out something solid in a few minutes, after you learn how everything relates to one another. i don't know. slow it down at first, to start, and really look at how the letters relate. your bar width consistency is almost there tho. i would try to lose all the unnecessary extensions, and all that, for now.
That "TOL" in the bottom one is an improvement. Still real messy n shit but that's expected, but you see how the L and the O are all "snug" at the top? It's because they're going the same direction and are pretty much the same sized bar. If you keep learning and making everything have the same general bar you'll start getting somewhere.
Going for a symmetry look, I see the countless flaws in this drawing myself, but what do you guys think of the concept of the lettering?
^make it simpler, practise keyboard letters for a while.. Here's another piece with the same concept as before, the 'A' is a little bit off, but I like it regardless
Actually Dolia, that's really fuckin bangin. Next time I want to see your I without the giant dot. I'm also glad that your O is different from your D this time. Nice work. Crits or whatever you feel like saying are welcome, it's just some recent shit. Sorry about the color, I don't have that great of markers at the moment.
^lol just noticed i am in your sig. that e is looking good. curious how it's going to look within a piece.
Working at getting a quick Philly style kind of thing. only been at this for a week so advice is always accepted. i have a few more different style but this is my favorite
^Your not ready for a philly style tag, Did you mean writing period for a week or playin with philly style for a week. Dont Even - I agree with what was said, your R's are your weak link, other than that i like your style, good solid simps with some funk. On the yellow orange and red one though your cross bars get lost being purple. And on the purple and green one i dont like the square on the S, i see what you were going for but i dont think it fit right.
Definitely need to improve the R's, but on the Red/Orange/Yellow I thought the purple would've dried lighter /: I knew that I should've chose a different color but Yellow contrasts Purple and yeah.. I'll get back to the books and see if I can rak shit from micheals.
Any crits gentlemen? @fred: not every letter has to Mach exact movements. Break out of that habit. @totesm: I read fok as in foking terrible structure. Get ya bars going. @dontcare: decent stuff just watch your bar widths. @tasty: e is dope, flame is kinda dumb tho. Arrow effect is pretty cool.