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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

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  1. HAK530

    HAK530 Member

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    Your piece shows no evidence of having bars. The lines are all over the place, your letters are 3 different sizes, there's no structure and no discipline in your stuff. Practice and listen carefully man.
     
  2. bugs-one

    bugs-one Elite Member

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    Don't get mad at what people say. If you're gonna post your stuff then learn to take all critique and apply it to your improvement. That being said...
    First off , your letter proportions are way off you need to make your letters the same size. They're gradually getting bigger. The C and R are way smaller then the rest and the K is bigger the others. Also your bars, meaning the width of your letters is off, you've to keep your letters the same width or they're not gonna look good.
    Second, your letter structure is off. That P is horrible, the T, E and K don't follow the little flow of the other letters. As far as flow there is no overall flow to the letters. The pointy ends you did might have worked if they flowed and were consistent.
    Try to do simple basic letters so you can get the hang of proportions, this means height and width. I hope you don't take this in a negative way. This is criticism to help you improve. Keep practicing.
     
  3. Themysciran

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    I wasn't mad at all, just didn't understand. I appreciate your comment! When I looked at it when I was done, I wasn't happy with how the letters got bigger and did note that to myself the first time. Appreciate it very much. It's hard to resist the pull of making it more complex, you know? :) Ill put up a simple one probably tomorrow.
     
  4. loonaii

    loonaii Elite Member

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    Bunch of random shit from my lunch breaks.

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  5. noad215

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  6. bugs-one

    bugs-one Elite Member

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    ^^^ Seriously? Still the same stuff bro. Don't you listen to all the crits on here?
     
  7. SuburbanTurban

    SuburbanTurban Elite Member

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    Loon, 3rd one down and the straight letter loon in second is nice but angle is kinda off, keep messing around with more straight letters like that and maybe some angle pitches, just keep it simple for now man, keep at it

    Noad the d doesn't look like a d and I think your o and a would look better if u did a simple vertical or horizontal line instead of having the negative space gaps in there, keep practicing man

    2 felt pen doodles I did Saturday, crust always welcomed and appreciated image.jpg image.jpg
     
  8. noad215

    noad215 Senior Member

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    i do and i really appriciate it, i just dont know how to progress. that d is being worked on im just not happy with the attempts.
     
  9. noad215

    noad215 Senior Member

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    so my attempt with the crits, i hate the "d" 20150127_011538.jpg
     
  10. SuburbanTurban

    SuburbanTurban Elite Member

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    Noad best way to progress is draw draw
    Draw! We all start somewhere and take the crits pple give u cuz if not they will eventually stop. Just keep practicing man!
    That's looking better, just need to work on the d, maybe put a short line just off of the back side and make it a tighter corner
     
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  11. HAK530

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  12. SuburbanTurban

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    Nice stuff dibs, cool word too I like it. I like 3rd one down the most. D woulda been better if u did it more like in the pic above it. Just keep messing with it
     
  13. HAK530

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    Funny because that one I felt like I couldn't get anything right but nailed the s. Lol
     
  14. zoup

    zoup Elite Member

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    @dibs imo think it would look cool if you use the D, in your second sketch. Use the I from your fourth Sketch, Use the B from your second sketch and use that S! from your third sketch, exact same style. That S, looks nice.
     
  15. loonaii

    loonaii Elite Member

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    Keep it up dibs. Here's some more quickies from lunch.

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  16. eido777

    eido777 Senior Member

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    Getting there loon, soon your going to look back on your old sketches and you will see a massive difference.

    Had fun playing around with your letters dibs, Spent way too much time than i should have though.
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  17. HAK530

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    Looks amazing. I'm honored dude. It's a fun one ain't it? Haha
     
  18. loonaii

    loonaii Elite Member

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    Thanks eido that dibs sketch is dope bro. I liked the little penstyle I did on lunch sketched it out at home.
     

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  19. SuburbanTurban

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  20. HAK530

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