That's pretty cool man

 

Crits?

 

HH<MMMMHHMMMMMM. uuuhhh. make a solid color, like a fade. idk. i think its cool

 

Flow- you have the right idea with tge bars but make them consistently tge same width. Your curved bar on the left is wonky. See how its not thr same width all the way through? Its one thing if its intentionally and correctly done, but you dont need to be doing that yet. In the beginning its all about bars and letter structure. With that said that us better than some of the other As in the battle, but dont go getting an ego hah just keep practicing bars. And get them down solid before you start bending them.

 

Yea i just realized that the curved bar was a bit weird lol thanks bro appreciate it.

 

Crits please. Put a little more time into this one.

User I like the colors on your second one

Stuk- maybe this is just me but I would stick with black and white while you work out the basics of structuring letters just so you can do more faster. That a is looking much nicer than the stuff I e seen you post here though. But yeah it gets a little too skinny on the bottom left leg

 

^that looks pretty cool man. Structurally I don't notice anything wrong with it. The only thing I don't like is your serifs. They seem to be off to me like there's too many unnecessary bends in them. Other than that I think the coloring is cool and I really dig your color choice on your 3D.

And your line coming down from the very tail of the Y is crooked so it makes it look like the 3D isn't finished there. But I think it's solid.

Another little thing to me is that there's not much negative space in your piece, except at the S. There's this huge gap. You probably could've tweaked the structure a little more to minimize some of that space and between the left leg and center drop of your M there's a little sliver of yellow there, if you brought that leg up just a hair, as well as tweak the S, there's be no negative space in that piece. Just my thoughts.

 

Thank you for your time! I will consider those things on my next piece

 

Nice throws and that on the right is sick. ^

 

Nice shit Nochna.

 

Thought the fancy tag came out ok

 

That looks pretty good funhouse. I like the tag. It would have looked sweet if you tucked the tag into that negative space below the A.

 

The letter B

 

Nice shit. That B looks dope as hell man.

I did this before, it says PHAKS... I like it but I could do better. It's kinda eh.. I am developing my shit at the moment. So I'm still working on stuff. Just did this and it's my best peice at the moment but I will try do better ones soon.

 

Nom, illin ass throw.
Herb, that B is stupid fire.

 

Thanks, heres a work in progress, i keep changing and tweaking stuff. Cant decide on what to do with the bottom of the A.